Brianna Wu / John Flynt - DEAGLE NATION STILL LIVES

[Solzhenitsyn]

....I just finished reading the third segment, and uploading it to the Wiki.

It's the worst one yet. Allison Holiday beating up armed bodyguards, implied lovescenes, and so much description of the girls' bodies.

I've found that having the right accompanying music makes it more tolerable, though.

Oh God...Every time I think it's hit rock bottom, it just keeps going.

Brea’s glance went back to Michael’s. Her brown eyes met his delicious blue ones and she felt her heart melt. She could not believe her luck, she could tell from his face he thought Brea’s nervousness was cute. “I’m Michael. I have to say I like Breana better. It’s very pretty.”

That was when Lani said the following. ”Michael, I have a bit of alcohol in my system which has resulted in me saying the following. I am going to get alcohol because I want to leave you alone with my friend Brea. She is so fabulous and available that you would be well advised to spend every effort to go out with her at a future date because she’s new in town and will undoubtedly have guys better than you chasing after her before long.” And with that, Lani walked off.

I'm reaching my limit. I'm becoming increasingly convinced that Wu isn't actually trans, he's just living his own fetish. It's like if Chris underwent surgery to become an Electric Hedgehog.

 

[AnOminous]

and the only expert who's several years late getting their 'basically finished' game finished.

Funny how this "expert" is completely incapable of doing anything the moment the swindled kickstarter money runs out and the people who actually did the work leave.

Dissent in the ranks? (link)

Not really. It was pretty out of context. I saw it and they were exchanging quips. That was a joke that had unfortunate implications that Maher immediately jumped on. Of course, I'm sure he did because he is aware of the Bernie Bro bullshit and was quite possibly prepared for that line.

 

[SteelPlatedHeart]

Oh God...Every time I think it's hit rock bottom, it just keeps going.



I'm reaching my limit. I'm becoming increasingly convinced that Wu isn't actually trans, he's just living his own fetish. It's like if Chris underwent surgery to become an Electric Hedgehog.

Jesus H fucking Christ, that hurt to read.

 

[ln18]

To me the biggest distinction is that Election Eve is cynical, sexist and severely materialistic, while Sonichu is so crude and baffling that you can have some affection for it.

Wu's not putting together mindfucks like "My wooden badge is delicious" or "In the stone age" or "Junior bacon and orange juice", she's talking about how she's (he's) the coolest greatest smartest biggest socialite in the world with the hottest bod and this and that and you want to stab yourself.

 

[Jaimas]

To me the biggest distinction is that Election Eve is cynical, sexist and severely materialistic, while Sonichu is so crude and baffling that you can have some affection for it.

Wu's not putting together mindfucks like "My wooden badge is delicious" or "In the stone age" or "Junior bacon and orange juice", she's talking about how she's (he's) the coolest greatest smartest biggest socialite in the world with the hottest bod and this and that and you want to stab yourself.

Chris also knew how to at least pretend that a given antagonist was effectual.

 

[zedkissed60]

Enjoy.

"I believe this book could be a minor cultural phenomena is that I am the world’s biggest political junkie."

"As an agent, I can assure you, you will not get any author ego bullshit from me. To be honest, the writers I’ve met that have been published have needed to get over themselves, but that’s just me."

"I am fundamentally a people person, and can makes friends with virtually anyone. Also, I am very good on TV."

"I’ve never been afraid to think big, so I apologize if this seems grandiose for a first time publisher, but I do think the Soccon series could be like Harry Potter for adults."

"I am first and foremost a marketing guy."

"Socially Unconscious is not the only book I have in my system, I'd love to tackle nonfiction as well. I've had some very intresting life experiences that I would like to write about. For instance, last year I lost 103 pounds, I'd love to write a book on how I did it."

 

[Francis York Morgan]

What's killing me with these drafts is how unlikable Brianna's characters are. In all of this writing, I keep hoping that she would accidentally give one of them something resembling a positive quality but it never comes. It's like she expects the narrator continuously talking about how great and pretty these women are to be enough to make anyone care about them.

 

[Hodor]

Enjoy.

"I believe this book could be a minor cultural phenomena is that I am the world’s biggest political junkie."

"As an agent, I can assure you, you will not get any author ego bullshit from me. To be honest, the writers I’ve met that have been published have needed to get over themselves, but that’s just me."

"I am fundamentally a people person, and can makes friends with virtually anyone. Also, I am very good on TV."

"I’ve never been afraid to think big, so I apologize if this seems grandiose for a first time publisher, but I do think the Soccon series could be like Harry Potter for adults."

"I am first and foremost a marketing guy."

"Socially Unconscious is not the only book I have in my system, I'd love to tackle nonfiction as well. I've had some very intresting life experiences that I would like to write about. For instance, last year I lost 103 pounds, I'd love to write a book on how I did it."

Those fucking pictures and 'side notes' on that sample, holy shit. It makes the book worse.

 

[Henry Bemis]

Enjoy.

"I believe this book could be a minor cultural phenomena..."

Please, don't sell yourself short.

 

[wheat pasta]

"I am a game developer, an expert in Unreal"

Then someone helps her and she tells them they're mansplaining and need to back the fuck off.

 

[SteelPlatedHeart]

So when Wu supposedly got stabbed in the head and got amnesia pre-transition, did she just come out of that suddenly thinking she was her Original Character, Do Not Steal? Because that would explain a lot.

 

[A Random]

It would explain EVERYTHING.

 

[Peace and Harmony]

Game finished, then?

 

[Francis York Morgan]

The last 200 pages are a lot more fun to read than the first 100, because I have to first explain the character’s complicated relationship and back story.

God, no wonder these drafts are a chore to get through. They are written by an idiot who has never read a real book.

Yes, your book should be more gripping to the reader as they go on but there should be something at the beginning to draw them in. I know it's about as fair as a toddler fighting GSP, but compare the prologue for Election Eve to A Game of Thrones. Or even the first chapters of both. There's a lot of information that George RR Martin needed to get across to the readers in there but his characters are active. They are interacting with each other, we hear their thoughts, they are doing shit. All we get at the beginning of Election Eve is one of the main characters making a bad plea to keep reading and then a bad exposition-filled prologue.

The CWC comparison continues to be apropos because, just like Chris, Brianna seems to be incapable of understanding that she is the only person who cares about these "grrlpower" cliches she calls characters.

 

[Sarcastic Username]

What that means in actual English is that this game is never coming out ever.

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Who the fuck calls a look-up table an LUT table?

 

[Ti-99/4A]

Who the fuck calls a look-up table an LUT table?

An expert and professional in her field or the head of the department of redundancy department.

 

[Peace and Harmony]

Your mom is bloatware

 

[AnOminous]

Who the fuck calls a look-up table an LUT table?

Saying "LUT table" is redundant as fuck.

Probably Wu doesn't even know what the acronym means.

 

[Gentleburd]

Who the fuck calls a look-up table an LUT table?

The same kind of person who says 'ATM machine'.

 

[GleamingTheQ-Bert]

Enjoy.

"I believe this book could be a minor cultural phenomena is that I am the world’s biggest political junkie."

"As an agent, I can assure you, you will not get any author ego bullshit from me. To be honest, the writers I’ve met that have been published have needed to get over themselves, but that’s just me."

"I am fundamentally a people person, and can makes friends with virtually anyone. Also, I am very good on TV."

"I’ve never been afraid to think big, so I apologize if this seems grandiose for a first time publisher, but I do think the Soccon series could be like Harry Potter for adults."

"I am first and foremost a marketing guy."

"Socially Unconscious is not the only book I have in my system, I'd love to tackle nonfiction as well. I've had some very intresting life experiences that I would like to write about. For instance, last year I lost 103 pounds, I'd love to write a book on how I did it."

Some thoughts:

Socially Unconscious all started with a job I took as a houseboy at a Southern Sorority.

Could you imagine a sorority of sexy co-eds letting the male proto-Wu that is Crazy J. Flynt into their private living quarters? This is a man who, by all accounts, was so bizarre people were still recalling how freaking weird he was years later. I suppose we should take for granted by now that everything Wu claims as bona fides is bullshit, but I would bet my bottom dollar that Wu was never closer to a sorority than peeping thru a window or jerking in the bushes.

I will guarantee to you crazy sales from anyone that has attended the school, and incredible free press coverage on news, television, and radio. It’s a message that definitely has an audience.

Again, as above: Wu seemed to be hated and feared by his classmates. This is as far from a selling point as possible. Also, like OPL, Wu makes the mistake of thinking that because he enjoys something and would buy it, everyone would find it equally compelling. This seems to be a common trait with lolcows, actually.

My background is in DC politics and stand-up comedy

OK, there's simply no way this is true; if Isometric has taught us anything, which has been underlined by the "jokes" in Rev60, its that Wu has an awful sense of humor. If this were true, it would put A-Log's work in this arena to shame, no doubt. Also: given how often Wu brags on his "DC politics" connection.....I'm starting to get the sneaking suspicion its ALL BULLSHIT. I think all us kiwis have gotten a taste for this sort of thing, the way Wu treats his self-aggrandizing lies, and this talk of political connections has all the earmarks of yet another fraud. just sayin'.