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Monostar Leatherknuckles said:
Hello everyone, I was informed by various commenters that apparently my proposal wasn’t enough to convince people that Red Mist is something I’m making and still in development. I opted not to really post any of the art of it on here so no one could steal my hard work and claim it as their own but after so many comments (not really so many) kept asking me to do. I decided to give them what they want. If you enjoy what you see and want to be part of the community then DM me on discord at monostar_leatherknuckles for more information.
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First of all, you get an A for Ambition.
One that I shared until I read Ohba and Obata's Bakuman (2008 ),
a work I suggest you read complete before engaging further with potential audiences.
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Every single manga that has been published has been made
by somebody with an abnormal obsession to tell stories.
Such people don't -or rather, can't- waste time looking for feedback online.

Kishimoto's Schedule.jpg

They believe their work is good, they believe they will be published
and they believe they will make it. And so, if they work as they believe, they get where they want.
No exceptions.
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Thing is, for Shonen Jump standards, the work quality you shown here falls short.
Not a single page or image you posted is up to them.

It is clear you still haven't read enough manga considering the deficiencies
shown in page breakdowns, angles and, of course, anatomy and perspective.

It is clear you still haven't got out your 20.000 ugly drawings off of you
if you think this you have shown here is up to publishing standards.

Courage is commendable and worth modelling into antifragility,
especially for a young content creator of traditional media.
But you can drop off the bravado act, because it only adds up negatively
to the current amateurish state of your work, and The Farms knows it.

I won't even comment on the plot when your art is at this level.
If you want to get useful audience feedback, start developing your story in Webtoon.
You will have to do it eventually if you are really set on becoming a pro.

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TL;DR: At least 6 years too green. Read Bakuman. Practice more. Do Red Mist in Webtoon.
 
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Monostar Leatherknuckles said:
Also the person here has posted child pornagraphy of Elliot. He is 17 years old this is still a minor and you’re drawing graphic sexual art of him you repulsive mother fucker.
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Monostar Leatherknuckles said:
I appreciate the advice but am I really supposed to just ignore that people are now drawing lewd images of an underaged student?
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Oh hey! I thought you were gone for good, friend. How's your comic coming along? Have you made any more progress since Sunday?
 
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Monostar Leatherknuckles said:
But it’s not sexualized and nothing essentially happens.
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I know it's already been posted, but come on.
Panel 63
*Elliot covered Bai Ara’s mouth to keep her quiet*
Panel 64
Elliot: Sshh! You can’t be that loud. I'm not even supposed to be talking to you right now.
Panel 65
*Bai Ara was moving herself and Elliot closer to his bed*
Panel 66
*she pushed him on the bed*
Panel 67
Elliot: Ara what are you doing?
Panel 68
*Bai Ara was unbuttoning Elliot’s sleep shirt revealing his chest making Elliot blush like crazy*
Panel 69
Bai Cho: Ara stop hogging him all to yourself! *She said in a pouted expression*
Bai Ara: Back off I was in here first!
*She said as she held Elliot’s head tightly*
Panel 70
Elliot: Guys!
Panel 71
*Dong-suk loudly knocked on Elliot’s door*
Panel 72
Bai Dong-suk: Stop making that racket boy and go to sleep!
*Meanwhile Ara and Ma-Ri were playing tug of war using Elliot’s arms as ropes and his shirt
was off completely*
Panel 73
Bai Ma-Ri: Go find your own!
Bai Ara: He’s my knight! He would want no interest in a filthy pig like you!
Panel 74
*Ma-Ri and Ara started fighting*

[...]

Panel 84
*Bai Ara hugs Elliot from behind*
Bai Ara: Don’t worry about daddy let us handle that.
Bai Ma-Ri: Now where did we leave off.
Panel 85
*Elliot sighed*
Elliot: This is gonna be a long night…
What's the obvious conclusion that anyone would have about this scene and what would occur if not interrupted by (our hero) Bai Dong-suk? That Elliot and the two girls would just have a nice relaxing game of baduk?

I just realized the second daughter's name was originally Bai Cho, but he changed it to Bai Ma-Ri. Rather than rewrite, he did a half-assed find and replace, giving us:
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JFC son you're almost 30 yet you draw like this? and write this shlock?
A Wumpa Fruit said:
If people thinks/considers that this site is the new 4chan....Is good or bad news? serious question 🤔
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Bad news, most 2023 accounts are subpar and clearly refugees from the altistic-right. If the farms goes mainstreams we're gonna be overrun by migaboomers, gay nazis, unrepentant coomers and all the other crap you see in 4chon nowadays.
 
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