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This Brokeback Mountain spinoff has it all: the word 'fuck' used 103 times, 'transmasculine' cowboys, and fucking in a barn. It was also beta read by Rekki, the friend of MGCraig, who wrote that one fic while she was stuck in Vancouver. Get your spurs and boots ready, we're going cattle prodding.
> Jayce was not a jealous man
> Give all the reasons as to why he's actually a jealous man
Kek.
> She had a particular fondness for men like Viktor - small, pretty, and looking just submissive enough to break in
This hits twice as hard because Viktor is just 'transmasculine', AKA a woman just on testosterone who is trying to pass as male. All this talk about being 'smaller and prettier' just outs him even more - and highlights the stark difference between him and Jayce, the actual male. This will become more apparent when the smut comes in.
> It wasn't that he thought that Viktor couldn't handle himself
Ah, the classic "He can handle himself but I need to be there to save him" cliché. Also, I have to laugh at all the descriptions of Ambessa being a territorial predator: she, the big black woman, is trying to stake her claim on the smaller, twinkier white (wo)man. But it's not a stereotype, it's character development.
He knows, she knows, everyone but Viktor knows - and you'll never guess who outs him to everyone.
Wow, it's almost as if you're treating the uwo smol trans boi as your property rather than a person, all because a Big Black Bitch was into him. No niggers in trans porn, period!
It's crawling in your skin, but is it a wound that cannot heal?
> The city boy aesthetic somehow making the damn hat look better on him
That female skull and Kermit the Frog voice sure does sell it when he looks like the human representation of a muppet.
> Had known him through years of hoodies and too-big coats
Now, is that for convenience or is it to cover up his female form? Pooners love hoodies and plaid because it muddies depth perception and makes them harder to clock. In this case, though, it only highlights how small he actually is compared to other males. They can't even gain a win in their sexual fantasies, lmao.
> Wrapped up in a lean frame
Which further cements my case.
That's right: it's Vi, who sounds like Clarice Starling for some reason, who outs Viktor to this custom and to the rest of the bar, humiliating him. Naturally, he takes it horribly (as is within his right) and there's a spat.
I'm with Viktor here for once. Jayce did it because he didn't want Ambessa claiming Viktor as hers - because there are no niggers in slash - and so humiliated him by claiming him as if he was property. Of course, this could have been solved outside of the bar had Vi not said anything. Leave it to the lesbian to out the trans man, lmao.
> Like a live thing
*Like a living thing
> You knew about my feelings, and you decided to - what? Play with them?
Indeed he did - and then Viktor acts shocked when Jayce confesses he feels the same way later on. As if he forgot the two had any lingering feelings between each other.
> You, all - tall and broad and fucking perfect - and then me, the joke? The scrawny, disabled city boy
I mean, you ARE a joke - you're a woman pretending to be a man, and all you can do is compare yourself to a man's body, a man's anatomy, and a man's identity. You have all that and you STILL feel inadequate. Says a lot more about you than anyone else.
> Far too-tall pickup
I'd make a dick joke, but this is probably going to involve Hispanic Hog Jayce so it's a rare case of the truck matching the junk.
Also, if you think this outburst sounds rather female in nature...it is. I sympathize with Viktor here, but that reaction is utterly female-brained. Hell, a proper Southern woman would be throwing fists. That beer jug ain't just used for drinkin'!
> You don't get to say that, Vik
He does, because you decided to claim him as your property in front of others. That's a pretty inhumane thing to do.
> Viktor went rigid
Why? Jayce knows about his feelings, right? Is he just shocked Jayce is confessing the same thing?
You already answered your own question: it's a sexual innuendo and it's a way of claiming someone as yours. Vi already laid out the basics (as well as outing Viktor) so what else is there to explain? That Jayce didn't want a nigger claiming his (wo)man?
> Heart between them
*Heat between them. This is fucking betaed and the bitch still messed up.
> The stead
*The steady
Imagine if he DID get pulled over by the cops and had to explain that he was off to fuck his pooner in the barn. Golden Boy here would also get a DUI because he downed a few beers AND shots before he got into his truck. Smart man. You're lucky they're abandoned country roads.
So, all that bitching about Jayce not caring was just a ruse; Viktor knew all about the meaning of the hat and knew Jayce would be upset enough to make it up to him. Clever. And it's ten fucking minutes - this man nearly lost his shit when the Black Beast nearly claimed you as her own.
Dumb thing to ask given all the foreplay. It's clearly not a fancy massage.
I wonder if Viktor will get hay tangled in that Tarzan bush he's bound to have. Maybe a field mouse will jump out of there.
Imagine if he did fucking drop Viktor. I would actually laugh at loud because that boy would go down like a sack of rocks and would start crying. What a way to set up the sex scene.
He's gonna wrangle you like you're a wild horse, and he's going to do it with that cowboy cock. Yee haw!
Wearing satin fabric while it's still hot (I know it's said that this takes place in autumn, but if the cicadas are still out it's still hot) is guaranteed to make you smell like shit. But since Jayce is into that, and this is cowboy country, I guess it doesn't matter much up down there.
Forget the 103 uses of 'fuck'. Count how many times 'gonna treat you right, baby' or just 'baby' is used.
> His fingers brushing against Viktor's dick
Compared to the Hispanic Hog, that dick - which, as is known by now, 1-2 inches - will be nothing. It's miniscule. A pale imitation. A joke. Anything to avoid any female connotation of the word 'clit'.
> I'll take care of you
Now count how many times that is used. I count two. Add four for 'baby' and 'make you feel good' again.
> Alabaster skin
Because anything darker is the Family Guy meme of 'good' and 'bad'.
Add five for baby.
> Thumb dragging over his cock
The pad of his thumb is bigger than that roid clit. Something to mull over.
> A sob catching in his throat
I get the feeling this is going to happen a LOT.
> Hole clenching
Le sigh. Entrance or opening works just as well, and they're not nearly as insulting as 'hole', which is not what the vagina is. A reminder that these authors will use the 'correct terms' and then use 'squirting and vaginal ejaculation' as tags no problem. You just aren't supposed to notice.
Don't worry, the rest of this is pure smut so no corners are cut. Get ready for those Tarzan pubes.
Look at that: Tarzan pubes! Just as I predicted. Also, you're going to see a lot of 'throbbing cocks' and 'flushed and dripping cunts' among other diminutives - as well as a lot of fucks.
> He could feel the heat coming off Viktor's cunt, the smell of him thick and musky, making his head spin
Now in truly cowboy fashion, are you going to write a song about that or are we just going to assume he smells like tractor leather and hay?
> Making his cock throb
This happens a lot. Keep a counter on you now.
> Lips lingering on the little mole on his labia
So labia can be used, but not clit. When it is used, it is used sparingly, almost as an afterthought, in favour of 'cock', because this is a True and Honest Man remember.
> His cock ached
For a moment, I went, 'which one'? Jayce or Viktor's?
> Practically sobbing with pleasure
Oh, you can add 'sobbing' to the list, too. There's a fuckton of that.
> Tongue dragging over his cock
Really leaning into the 'so long as I use all variations, no one can ever call me offensive' schtick, eh? It still isn't a cock, and it's pathetic compared to the actual male's.
> A choked sob
Take a drink - that's number two.
> His voice cracking
Add this as well.
> Viktor sobbed
Round three.
> A gush of clear fluid soaked Jayce's beard, dripped down his neck, seeped into his shirt
And as it turns out, Viktor has never squirted before - the hot cowboy managed to do it for him. Imagine that. Really leaning into the female fantasy of the hot cowboy (or any sexy man you can think of) knowing how to make a woman come. Country doods make do.
> His tongue dragging over his clit
> Lingering kiss over Viktor's cock
Pick one.
> He looked utterly wrecked, and the sight of him - so beautiful, so vulnerable, so perfect
Just a reminder this Viktor still has his breasts and has only been on T for a short while. It's basically a woman with a roid clit that hasn't gotten cystic acne yet - notice how that's missing from fics like these? Can't have people know the truth - or massive weight gain. All we have is the Kermit the Frog voice and the peat bog T smell.
The sexy giving the woman her first mind-blowing orgasm is also female-coded, btw, because males don't have the orgasm gap that women do. Something to note down.
Jayce's cock throbs for the third time, and notes that Viktor is spread out twice. He's ready to dive into that trans pussy - and Viktor is ready for that tractor ride.
> All he could think about was getting Viktor on top of him, about feeling him hot and tight around his cock
Yes, that's how it normally goes for fics like this: big dick in a tiny pussy. You've seen one, you've seen them all.
> About burying himself inside Viktor and fucking him until he was crying out and clawing at his chest
In case you're wondering, yes there is a belly bulge, and I'd wager he's around 10 or so inches big, putting that 't growth' to complete and utter shame. It's like the Charlotte Clymer 4chan meme at this point.
His cock has throbbed four or five times already. It's thumping like a second heart.
> Need to have you inside me
Of course. One belly bulge coming right up!
> Viktor took a moment to thank the universe for tight jeans and Jayce's thick, muscular thighs
Indeed. We can also thank the universe that these fics are not true to form - otherwise Viktor would be 350 lbs + and would crush Jayce like a sow.
> He could feel Viktor - soaking wet, dripping onto his cock, the heat of him driving him crazy
What men will do for white pussy, especially one that produces enough liquid to fill the Hoover Dam.
> Don't buck, you're not a stallion
He's hung like one, he might as well BE one.
> Do I need to restrain you?
Hey, you know what happens when a man is strangled.
> H was tight and wet and so fucking hot - it was like nothing Jayce had ever felt before
What, has he not tried vaginal sex before this? Or was it nothing compared to 'man pussy'? I wager it's the latter.
> One hand sitting on the slight bulge of his belly
Knew it. Too hard to resist - not when you have the Hispanic Hog.
> His gaze locking on where his cock disappeared into Viktor's cunt
I wonder if they'll find David Bowie's Goblin King up there.
> His cock twitching
This has gotta be the fourth, fifth, or sixth time of it doing that. It twitches like it's its own vibrator.
> You're so - fuck. You're so perfect, so beautiful
He's already said that twice.
> Mm
Now, count how many times Viktor says that. It's well over 5-6 times.
> He was the most beautiful thing Jayce had ever seen
You just said that.
> Viktor ground his clit into the thatch of hair above Jayce's cock
Huh. Imagine that. Jayce is the one with the Tarzan pubes, not him. I wonder if he's got ticks up there.
> You seemed pretty mad
Probably because you're the one who outed him in the first place. Otherwise, it could have been done in private. She was the one who none-too-kindly explained the tradition and this pissed Viktor off - well, sorta. He ended up forgiving him because it was a ruse anyways. Who knew?
> Did Jayce apologize
He's apologizing with his dick right now. Also, Vi acting disgusted as if she wouldn't do the same with Caitlyn is pretty damn ironic. Does she find it gross because Jayce has an actual dick, or...?
> Each bounce caused Viktor's tits to jiggle slightly
I wonder if, if there is indeed a sequel, he'll get the zippertit scars because his tits cause him dysphoria. You never know with these 'transmasculine' people, who are just women who want to get dicked down by hot men.
> His cock throbbing
What the - ENOUGH ALREADY.
> He was perfect, so fucking perfect
You've said this four times already.
> I'll take care of you
> Let me take care of you
What if I told you he said the exact same thing earlier before they started the barn bang? Word for word. The 103 uses of fuck ain't nothing compared to this - though it does get annoying after a while.
Enough with the fucking crying. Suck it up like a real man.
> I've got you
CTRL + F reveals this to be written seven times. Baby is 15 times. Beautiful is five. Mm gave me 55 but that's with every word with two ms in it. It's got to be almost ten.
> His cock pistoning in and out of him
I would have never known he was doing that given how calm he's speaking.
> I've got you
SHUT UP AND FUCK
> His thumb pressing against his cock, rubbing slow, lazy circles
It isn't a cock if you can do that.
> Cum gushed out of him, soaking Jayce's cock, his stomach, the blanket below
Least you have a portable fire retardant right there. You'll never need to worry about the barn burning down.
> You're perfect
Yes, you've said that seven times already.
> His pace picking up, his cock slamming into him
I thought he was already 'pistoning' into him? You would have never known, because Jayce doesn't shut the fuck up.
> It only took one, two more thrusts before Jayce was shuddering
Weak! Tormund Giantsbane would go much further.
Viktor says 'Mm' three times here; he says it a lot more in the fic. It gets fucking annoying real fast.
> Are you still mad at me for staking my claim in the bar?
After such a good dicking, who can stay mad? Not with the Hispanic Hog on the job.
> Ambessa Medarda can suck on that
Yeah, drop kick that nigger back to Nigeria! This white pussy is for La Raza!
> I would've never taken her up on her advances. I'm gay
This is where the author lost me. I can somewhat forgive trans fics because they are regular straight fics in disguise, but the moment these dumb bitches start calling themselves actual gay men is where it irks me. You are 'transmasculine', aka a woman not even COMMITTED to the bit, and only just started T. You are not, and never will be, male. Homosexuality is same sex attraction, and while troons want to say that's a homophobic term, that's exactly what it is: males loving males, or females loving females. Homo meaning 'the same'.
> I thought you were bi
It would have been better if he was.
> I'm a raging homosexual. My dick has only been interested in men, and that's not going to change
You are not a homosexual, because you are not male. You do not have a penis, you have a testosterone enlarged clitoris - and it is so pathetically small compared to the male's actual penis that it is a constant source of mockery. Gay men routinely refuse people like this and make them cry on apps like Grindr; the only men fucking them are confused bisexual men or men knowing these women are 'easy meat'.
OK, MATI rant over. Can't believe these people made me support flaming homosexuals. Wew, lass.
He'll get out faster if she threatens to call ICE. They're in the south, after all.
Now, the drama in this with the lying over 'staking his claim' and whatnot was just pointless. It didn't bother me at all and it just outed Viktor's female socialization. There are actual gay cowboy AUs with a lot of work put into them; this isn't it. The smut was OK for what it is, but I would have expected it to be raunchier, given that they are in a barn. Jayce is, as always, the polite sweetheart (we love him for that) but Viktor just flipflops on what he wants. If he was an actual man, he would have known what Ambessa was doing and the meaning of that hat; he's exactly the sort of character to research the culture of his significant other to see what stuff means. The fact he didn't even bother to defend himself when even your basic female Southerner would is very telling.
The author might put this into an AU, so if there is a full-fledged Trans Brokeback Mountain, it'll show up here.
This work got quite a few comments, including one who is literally LARPing as Troy from High School Musical:
> Jayce was not a jealous man
> Give all the reasons as to why he's actually a jealous man
Kek.
> She had a particular fondness for men like Viktor - small, pretty, and looking just submissive enough to break in
This hits twice as hard because Viktor is just 'transmasculine', AKA a woman just on testosterone who is trying to pass as male. All this talk about being 'smaller and prettier' just outs him even more - and highlights the stark difference between him and Jayce, the actual male. This will become more apparent when the smut comes in.
> It wasn't that he thought that Viktor couldn't handle himself
Ah, the classic "He can handle himself but I need to be there to save him" cliché. Also, I have to laugh at all the descriptions of Ambessa being a territorial predator: she, the big black woman, is trying to stake her claim on the smaller, twinkier white (wo)man. But it's not a stereotype, it's character development.
He knows, she knows, everyone but Viktor knows - and you'll never guess who outs him to everyone.
Wow, it's almost as if you're treating the uwo smol trans boi as your property rather than a person, all because a Big Black Bitch was into him. No niggers in trans porn, period!
It's crawling in your skin, but is it a wound that cannot heal?
> The city boy aesthetic somehow making the damn hat look better on him
That female skull and Kermit the Frog voice sure does sell it when he looks like the human representation of a muppet.
> Had known him through years of hoodies and too-big coats
Now, is that for convenience or is it to cover up his female form? Pooners love hoodies and plaid because it muddies depth perception and makes them harder to clock. In this case, though, it only highlights how small he actually is compared to other males. They can't even gain a win in their sexual fantasies, lmao.
> Wrapped up in a lean frame
Which further cements my case.
That's right: it's Vi, who sounds like Clarice Starling for some reason, who outs Viktor to this custom and to the rest of the bar, humiliating him. Naturally, he takes it horribly (as is within his right) and there's a spat.
I'm with Viktor here for once. Jayce did it because he didn't want Ambessa claiming Viktor as hers - because there are no niggers in slash - and so humiliated him by claiming him as if he was property. Of course, this could have been solved outside of the bar had Vi not said anything. Leave it to the lesbian to out the trans man, lmao.
> Like a live thing
*Like a living thing
> You knew about my feelings, and you decided to - what? Play with them?
Indeed he did - and then Viktor acts shocked when Jayce confesses he feels the same way later on. As if he forgot the two had any lingering feelings between each other.
> You, all - tall and broad and fucking perfect - and then me, the joke? The scrawny, disabled city boy
I mean, you ARE a joke - you're a woman pretending to be a man, and all you can do is compare yourself to a man's body, a man's anatomy, and a man's identity. You have all that and you STILL feel inadequate. Says a lot more about you than anyone else.
> Far too-tall pickup
I'd make a dick joke, but this is probably going to involve Hispanic Hog Jayce so it's a rare case of the truck matching the junk.
Also, if you think this outburst sounds rather female in nature...it is. I sympathize with Viktor here, but that reaction is utterly female-brained. Hell, a proper Southern woman would be throwing fists. That beer jug ain't just used for drinkin'!
> You don't get to say that, Vik
He does, because you decided to claim him as your property in front of others. That's a pretty inhumane thing to do.
> Viktor went rigid
Why? Jayce knows about his feelings, right? Is he just shocked Jayce is confessing the same thing?
You already answered your own question: it's a sexual innuendo and it's a way of claiming someone as yours. Vi already laid out the basics (as well as outing Viktor) so what else is there to explain? That Jayce didn't want a nigger claiming his (wo)man?
> Heart between them
*Heat between them. This is fucking betaed and the bitch still messed up.
> The stead
*The steady
Imagine if he DID get pulled over by the cops and had to explain that he was off to fuck his pooner in the barn. Golden Boy here would also get a DUI because he downed a few beers AND shots before he got into his truck. Smart man. You're lucky they're abandoned country roads.
So, all that bitching about Jayce not caring was just a ruse; Viktor knew all about the meaning of the hat and knew Jayce would be upset enough to make it up to him. Clever. And it's ten fucking minutes - this man nearly lost his shit when the Black Beast nearly claimed you as her own.
Dumb thing to ask given all the foreplay. It's clearly not a fancy massage.
I wonder if Viktor will get hay tangled in that Tarzan bush he's bound to have. Maybe a field mouse will jump out of there.
Imagine if he did fucking drop Viktor. I would actually laugh at loud because that boy would go down like a sack of rocks and would start crying. What a way to set up the sex scene.
He's gonna wrangle you like you're a wild horse, and he's going to do it with that cowboy cock. Yee haw!
Wearing satin fabric while it's still hot (I know it's said that this takes place in autumn, but if the cicadas are still out it's still hot) is guaranteed to make you smell like shit. But since Jayce is into that, and this is cowboy country, I guess it doesn't matter much up down there.
Forget the 103 uses of 'fuck'. Count how many times 'gonna treat you right, baby' or just 'baby' is used.
> His fingers brushing against Viktor's dick
Compared to the Hispanic Hog, that dick - which, as is known by now, 1-2 inches - will be nothing. It's miniscule. A pale imitation. A joke. Anything to avoid any female connotation of the word 'clit'.
> I'll take care of you
Now count how many times that is used. I count two. Add four for 'baby' and 'make you feel good' again.
> Alabaster skin
Because anything darker is the Family Guy meme of 'good' and 'bad'.
Add five for baby.
> Thumb dragging over his cock
The pad of his thumb is bigger than that roid clit. Something to mull over.
> A sob catching in his throat
I get the feeling this is going to happen a LOT.
> Hole clenching
Le sigh. Entrance or opening works just as well, and they're not nearly as insulting as 'hole', which is not what the vagina is. A reminder that these authors will use the 'correct terms' and then use 'squirting and vaginal ejaculation' as tags no problem. You just aren't supposed to notice.
Don't worry, the rest of this is pure smut so no corners are cut. Get ready for those Tarzan pubes.
Look at that: Tarzan pubes! Just as I predicted. Also, you're going to see a lot of 'throbbing cocks' and 'flushed and dripping cunts' among other diminutives - as well as a lot of fucks.
> He could feel the heat coming off Viktor's cunt, the smell of him thick and musky, making his head spin
Now in truly cowboy fashion, are you going to write a song about that or are we just going to assume he smells like tractor leather and hay?
> Making his cock throb
This happens a lot. Keep a counter on you now.
> Lips lingering on the little mole on his labia
So labia can be used, but not clit. When it is used, it is used sparingly, almost as an afterthought, in favour of 'cock', because this is a True and Honest Man remember.
> His cock ached
For a moment, I went, 'which one'? Jayce or Viktor's?
> Practically sobbing with pleasure
Oh, you can add 'sobbing' to the list, too. There's a fuckton of that.
> Tongue dragging over his cock
Really leaning into the 'so long as I use all variations, no one can ever call me offensive' schtick, eh? It still isn't a cock, and it's pathetic compared to the actual male's.
> A choked sob
Take a drink - that's number two.
> His voice cracking
Add this as well.
> Viktor sobbed
Round three.
> A gush of clear fluid soaked Jayce's beard, dripped down his neck, seeped into his shirt
And as it turns out, Viktor has never squirted before - the hot cowboy managed to do it for him. Imagine that. Really leaning into the female fantasy of the hot cowboy (or any sexy man you can think of) knowing how to make a woman come. Country doods make do.
> His tongue dragging over his clit
> Lingering kiss over Viktor's cock
Pick one.
> He looked utterly wrecked, and the sight of him - so beautiful, so vulnerable, so perfect
Just a reminder this Viktor still has his breasts and has only been on T for a short while. It's basically a woman with a roid clit that hasn't gotten cystic acne yet - notice how that's missing from fics like these? Can't have people know the truth - or massive weight gain. All we have is the Kermit the Frog voice and the peat bog T smell.
The sexy giving the woman her first mind-blowing orgasm is also female-coded, btw, because males don't have the orgasm gap that women do. Something to note down.
Jayce's cock throbs for the third time, and notes that Viktor is spread out twice. He's ready to dive into that trans pussy - and Viktor is ready for that tractor ride.
> All he could think about was getting Viktor on top of him, about feeling him hot and tight around his cock
Yes, that's how it normally goes for fics like this: big dick in a tiny pussy. You've seen one, you've seen them all.
> About burying himself inside Viktor and fucking him until he was crying out and clawing at his chest
In case you're wondering, yes there is a belly bulge, and I'd wager he's around 10 or so inches big, putting that 't growth' to complete and utter shame. It's like the Charlotte Clymer 4chan meme at this point.
His cock has throbbed four or five times already. It's thumping like a second heart.
> Need to have you inside me
Of course. One belly bulge coming right up!
> Viktor took a moment to thank the universe for tight jeans and Jayce's thick, muscular thighs
Indeed. We can also thank the universe that these fics are not true to form - otherwise Viktor would be 350 lbs + and would crush Jayce like a sow.
> He could feel Viktor - soaking wet, dripping onto his cock, the heat of him driving him crazy
What men will do for white pussy, especially one that produces enough liquid to fill the Hoover Dam.
> Don't buck, you're not a stallion
He's hung like one, he might as well BE one.
> Do I need to restrain you?
Hey, you know what happens when a man is strangled.
> H was tight and wet and so fucking hot - it was like nothing Jayce had ever felt before
What, has he not tried vaginal sex before this? Or was it nothing compared to 'man pussy'? I wager it's the latter.
> One hand sitting on the slight bulge of his belly
Knew it. Too hard to resist - not when you have the Hispanic Hog.
> His gaze locking on where his cock disappeared into Viktor's cunt
I wonder if they'll find David Bowie's Goblin King up there.
> His cock twitching
This has gotta be the fourth, fifth, or sixth time of it doing that. It twitches like it's its own vibrator.
> You're so - fuck. You're so perfect, so beautiful
He's already said that twice.
> Mm
Now, count how many times Viktor says that. It's well over 5-6 times.
> He was the most beautiful thing Jayce had ever seen
You just said that.
> Viktor ground his clit into the thatch of hair above Jayce's cock
Huh. Imagine that. Jayce is the one with the Tarzan pubes, not him. I wonder if he's got ticks up there.
> You seemed pretty mad
Probably because you're the one who outed him in the first place. Otherwise, it could have been done in private. She was the one who none-too-kindly explained the tradition and this pissed Viktor off - well, sorta. He ended up forgiving him because it was a ruse anyways. Who knew?
> Did Jayce apologize
He's apologizing with his dick right now. Also, Vi acting disgusted as if she wouldn't do the same with Caitlyn is pretty damn ironic. Does she find it gross because Jayce has an actual dick, or...?
> Each bounce caused Viktor's tits to jiggle slightly
I wonder if, if there is indeed a sequel, he'll get the zippertit scars because his tits cause him dysphoria. You never know with these 'transmasculine' people, who are just women who want to get dicked down by hot men.
> His cock throbbing
What the - ENOUGH ALREADY.
> He was perfect, so fucking perfect
You've said this four times already.
> I'll take care of you
> Let me take care of you
What if I told you he said the exact same thing earlier before they started the barn bang? Word for word. The 103 uses of fuck ain't nothing compared to this - though it does get annoying after a while.
Enough with the fucking crying. Suck it up like a real man.
> I've got you
CTRL + F reveals this to be written seven times. Baby is 15 times. Beautiful is five. Mm gave me 55 but that's with every word with two ms in it. It's got to be almost ten.
> His cock pistoning in and out of him
I would have never known he was doing that given how calm he's speaking.
> I've got you
SHUT UP AND FUCK
> His thumb pressing against his cock, rubbing slow, lazy circles
It isn't a cock if you can do that.
> Cum gushed out of him, soaking Jayce's cock, his stomach, the blanket below
Least you have a portable fire retardant right there. You'll never need to worry about the barn burning down.
> You're perfect
Yes, you've said that seven times already.
> His pace picking up, his cock slamming into him
I thought he was already 'pistoning' into him? You would have never known, because Jayce doesn't shut the fuck up.
> It only took one, two more thrusts before Jayce was shuddering
Weak! Tormund Giantsbane would go much further.
Viktor says 'Mm' three times here; he says it a lot more in the fic. It gets fucking annoying real fast.
> Are you still mad at me for staking my claim in the bar?
After such a good dicking, who can stay mad? Not with the Hispanic Hog on the job.
> Ambessa Medarda can suck on that
Yeah, drop kick that nigger back to Nigeria! This white pussy is for La Raza!
> I would've never taken her up on her advances. I'm gay
This is where the author lost me. I can somewhat forgive trans fics because they are regular straight fics in disguise, but the moment these dumb bitches start calling themselves actual gay men is where it irks me. You are 'transmasculine', aka a woman not even COMMITTED to the bit, and only just started T. You are not, and never will be, male. Homosexuality is same sex attraction, and while troons want to say that's a homophobic term, that's exactly what it is: males loving males, or females loving females. Homo meaning 'the same'.
> I thought you were bi
It would have been better if he was.
> I'm a raging homosexual. My dick has only been interested in men, and that's not going to change
You are not a homosexual, because you are not male. You do not have a penis, you have a testosterone enlarged clitoris - and it is so pathetically small compared to the male's actual penis that it is a constant source of mockery. Gay men routinely refuse people like this and make them cry on apps like Grindr; the only men fucking them are confused bisexual men or men knowing these women are 'easy meat'.
OK, MATI rant over. Can't believe these people made me support flaming homosexuals. Wew, lass.
He'll get out faster if she threatens to call ICE. They're in the south, after all.
Now, the drama in this with the lying over 'staking his claim' and whatnot was just pointless. It didn't bother me at all and it just outed Viktor's female socialization. There are actual gay cowboy AUs with a lot of work put into them; this isn't it. The smut was OK for what it is, but I would have expected it to be raunchier, given that they are in a barn. Jayce is, as always, the polite sweetheart (we love him for that) but Viktor just flipflops on what he wants. If he was an actual man, he would have known what Ambessa was doing and the meaning of that hat; he's exactly the sort of character to research the culture of his significant other to see what stuff means. The fact he didn't even bother to defend himself when even your basic female Southerner would is very telling.
The author might put this into an AU, so if there is a full-fledged Trans Brokeback Mountain, it'll show up here.
This work got quite a few comments, including one who is literally LARPing as Troy from High School Musical:
A commenter praises the 'controlled writing' and wonderful descriptions...even when most of it takes place in a barn.
An equestrian and cowboy admirer gives her thanks:
Mediocre Wallflower states that this fic was the only one that stood out to her, and wishes to commission the author for more:
And yes, that's Rekki herself, the Vancouverite. Don't step on any junkie needles, now.
An equestrian and cowboy admirer gives her thanks:
Mediocre Wallflower states that this fic was the only one that stood out to her, and wishes to commission the author for more:
And yes, that's Rekki herself, the Vancouverite. Don't step on any junkie needles, now.
I wager it's something to do with environmentalism, probably hands-on stuff, because as Petrusha pointed out, a lot of ecology involves hard sciences, especially if you want to work in the field. Hell, I'll never forget when Emil Kirkegaard, HBD statistician, pointed out that a microbiologist's data was wrong because she hadn't bothered to run the numbers. Turns out, a fucking LOT of them don't know basic stats when that should be a required field for entry to any science - at least, it is where I am. Or if it isn't, you should learn it anyways. I also saw a math major posit that stats weren't important for measuring real world things either...when they map real world data to make it understandable. These people are supposed to be our intellectual superiors.
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Yeah, that's what's so confusing. The fun hands-on stuff that everyone wants to work is what demands proficiency in the hard sciences the most. Unless you're literally getting hired to shovel shit at a breeding center for some endangered animal, and even then those are usually volunteer positions that you can count as an internship for college credits at best.
Maybe I'm just biased (I did go to an especially good school for ecological studies) but I really can't wrap my head around treating ecology and STEM as different things, let alone going into ecology while saying you don't really "do" STEM. The best I can come up with is that they're studying some kind of regenerative agriculture thing, which often incorporates the humanities. You could probably get pretty far in that field by just babbling about "indigenous ways of knowing" (my regenerative agriculture courses also focused heavily on pre-Columbian agricultural techniques), though even then, real farmers want some hard stats about how regenerative practices improve the yield and/or health of their crops.
Also, not gonna lie, but I would be delighted if I got a comment from someone larping as a High School Musical character, that's hilarious.
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Is it really a gay panic if it involves a woman in a skirt? Is it gay sex if it's penis-in-vagina sex? According to this author, that's a yes to both:
I don't think your classmates are what you need to worry about - it's general society and the rich scions whose opinions matter. They're the ones funding you and the ones with influence; what they say actually goes. Snarky questions from your fellow classmates should be the last thing on your mind.
But don't worry, Jayce doesn't actually off himself - he just indulges in the fantasy of fucking his 'best friend's' clothes - and that's real, btw.
A man bun? Pathetic. That would only highlight his female skull. The sweetbreads and tarts sound good, though.
You'll never guess what his 'house clothes' are.
Normally, it's MTFs who love skirts and knee high socks, not pooners. The pooners who DO like wearing clothes like these want both worlds: they want to embrace their femininity, and to be treated as men. He's wearing a medical corset, a black skirt, and grey knee socks, something you'd see a troon programmer wear. Viktor is aiming for the sexy goth maid aesthetic here, and it drives our big Mexican lad wild.
And, of course, we have to have the zippertits - it wouldn't be a proper gay panic without it.
Viktor, when he is an FTM, is usually written with an absurdly small waist that would make tight lacers blush. This is done to make him look far more sexually appealing, but all it does is highlight the size difference between him and Jayce, the actual male. The uwu trans boi and the big yaoi hands, name a better duo.
Nice lampshading. I wonder if Ximena reads FTM novels, too. I wager she likes the same shit that all pooner authors do: big, hunky men slamming their big ole man meat into a tiny, tight vagina. It's not vanilla, it's ~art~ you rube.
Also note that male characters turned pooner are always written with perfect, flawless white skin - can't have them getting cystic acne or rashes, now.
There's a joke hidden in here: Viktor is too weak to massage his own muscles, and I wonder if that has anything to do with FTMs having poorer grip strength than men. All that T and you still can't open that pickle jar or massage your own muscles. Sad!
I like a good old fashioned massage, too...but I can't get over on how this is happening in the first chapter, while Viktor is dressed in something he considers fetish gear, and while Jayce just 'offered' to do it and Viktor accepted. Give me some more chemistry, ffs.
I mean, you ARE one. You 'offered' something Viktor couldn't refuse, and now you're getting off on his pleasure that isn't sexual for once. Man, I can't wait to see what the 'gay sex' entails.
> It hurts so good there
Hurts so good, or feels so good?
> Spitting in his palm, sliding his back down the front door with his cock in his hand, pumping hard
Damn, son. You rushed home faster than your hombres rush the US border.
Just imagine this for a moment: a 6'2 man masturbating, on all fours, next to his front door and ejaculating into his partner's clothes. He jerks off so fast and so hard his eyes roll back into his head, resembling a zombie, and he has to use said clothes because he needs to remember the feel of Viktor's body.
Under normal circumstances, this would be creepy as fuck, but I guess it's fine here because he's that crazy over trans pussy. Imagine if his mother came home and saw him humping his clothes like a dog. I'd be calling animal control and bringing out the flipflop.
Indeed. Amazing what a gothic maid skirt can do.
Does the lottery include a barely there fetish of taking pleasure when your partner is in pain so you can see them in a skirt? If Viktor was written as a normal woman, this would be seen as predatory. You are not 'possessive' or 'protective', Jayce, you're a future John Wayne Gacy.
> What he daydreamed about as home was completely separate from his work, and also nobody's goddamn business
I don't know, masturbating into your friend's clothes because they were wearing a short skirt and have your smell on it really shows you're having difficulty separating the two.
You seem to be hedging your bets on this, eh Jayce?
> Jayce was lying if he said he wasn't praying to Janna right now that Viktor would walk back out in that flowing, black cotton skirt
And I'm totally sure he's wearing them to be comfortable and not as an Asking For It invitation.
> It's only slightly shorter than the black one, by a couple of inches
That's not 'slightly' that's quite a lot. Even if the OG skirt went to his knees, a 'couple inches' would put it mid-thigh. Semantics but you get the point.
> Only noticeable to Jayce because he's got an unhealthy obsession brewing
The skirt thing doesn't bother me as much as the 'fucking into your best friend's clothes and ejaculating in them' thing.
> Allowing even more skin to peek out
Yeah, he's asking for a fuck.
> It's tied slightly at the side of Viktor's waist, in a small bow
Very manly. Trans men want to be treated as men, yet want all the attractions of femininity. You can only choose one.
> His socks are knee high again, but they're black and fuzzy
Fastest way to slip and break something if you have hardwood floors. If Viktor thinks he's disabled now, wait until he decides to do an impromptu roller skate session to the kitchen.
He's also missing the quintessential cat ears, but I assume that is next.
> Parlor of Viktor's skin
*Pallor of Viktor's skin. I bet this was beta read and she got a lazy bitch as one.
Of course Viktor smokes weed here, too. I bet we'll have a trippy scene with them smoking and fucking like that one fic I read back in July. It's weed, not LSD bro.
I bet you you can clock him from that giggle. It's uwu so feminine and cute!
You're lucky he's high, because otherwise that's a barely disguised assault right there. Viktor didn't ask you to touch there. You just decided to do it because you could. Not to mention, if this Viktor was male, he'd fucking notice and say something. Only FTMs seem comfortable with this.
> Viktor's socks have kitty paw print designs on the feet
Yeah, this is really leaning into the cat maid thing, which is popular in anime. Those sounds also sound cheap as fuck, uncomfortable on the skin, and would be slippery all to hell. Just get a fursuit and commit, already.
> Imagining putting those kitten paws up to the ceiling
What he means is that he'll fuck Viktor so hard, Viktor's legs will stick up in the air, mating press style. Literally, it makes it sound like Jayce wants to throw him up on the ceiling and walk on it, Spiderpig style.
> The other is flying up and down on his cock, lewd squelching noises accompanying his breathing
Did he not spit into his hand this time, or what?
> Until he can allow himself pretend it was Viktor's torso
That's right: he's fucking Viktor's own vest into a pillow. In normal fiction this would be fucking creepy, but hey, it's a trans fic so it's unrestrained passion on Jayce's part. He dindu nuffin.
And on a silk fucking cushion no less. Imagine trying to get the cum stains out of that.
So I was right: the OG skirt went to his knees, now it's up to mid-thigh. And Jayce has miraculously not clocked him with what he's wearing, either.
> He's wearing those fucking kitten socks again
Oh, he's wearing more than that, too. You'll see what I mean.
> He might actually go through with killing himself
Please do - especially when you read what he does later in the chapter
> Can't risk ruining this, whatever it is
You come in your best friend's clothes when you're horny. You already ruined it, you fucking bum.
> Tugs at a strand of Viktor's hair before sprinting down the hall
Very brotherly. Very affectionate.
That's right: Viktor, the True and Honest Man, has a sparkly dildo that Jayce does not conclude is not made for men. Men's dildos have that base at the end so it doesn't get sucked up their ass. That said, this sex toy is unwashed and still sticky, and Jayce, under the impression that Viktor is actually male, sticks a dildo that would have gone up his ass into his mouth. Not only is Viktor a disgusting pig, Jayce is even more disgusting if the original premise was true and Viktor was actually a man. You are supposed to wash your goddamn sex toys after using them. Viktor leaves his with his vaginal fluid lying around and Jayce is gobbling it down thinking it's rectal mucus. Disgusting.
Not only that, you didn't wash your fucking hands, either. He stuck what he thought was a dildo that had gone up Viktor's ass in his mouth. I hope you enjoy gonorrhea and other nasty STDs from doing that.
The sparkly dildo should have given it away. Even actual gay men who buy the fancier shit always go for the discrete, simple coloured ones. It's usually women buying the sparkly shit; gay men want things that work.
> Particularly flirty for a straight man
Let me guess. We're going to have a talk on how Jayce is 100% a true and honest gay man and that fucking vagina doesn't change his sexual orientation. Calling it now.
> He's never outright said that he's straight
No, you just have sexual feelings for what you THINK is a man. Just wait until you read the twist.
> He's beginning to think girls may not be the only thing he's interested in, after all
Cute, but Viktor IS one of those girls. He's female. But keep telling yourself you're not interested in women.
> Kneading the pale flesh
As if the skin would be any darker.
Viktor is wearing lace panties with a bow in the front of it and Jayce STILL doesn't think Viktor is female. If he was wearing that cut, you would have seen his balls from the back. Jayce doesn't. I don't think the author knows how balls on men work.
Yep, and that's how Jayce finds out that Viktor is actually a woman: by him wearing lace panties and seeing a wet spot. You'd think the hips and Q angle would give it away, but nooooo.
In any case, the smut is in the next chapter, the 'first of many', and Jayce decides that he's still a gay man despite liking pussy. That won't erase the fact he sucked on a used dildo that he thought went up a man's ass.
> He can't stop thinking about what's between Viktor's legs, even now, after stroking himself until he pulled a muscle in his arm
Is he thinking he's still gay, or that he's a spicy kind of straight? The type that's 'willing to explore', but won't dare say he's bisexual?
> He doesn't know how he didn't put two and two together
Because he's a retard. The scars would be completely visible and the hips would have given it away. The sparkly dildo and the dried ejaculate on it should have been a clue as well, but no. He acts surprised Viktor is trans and then decides that's totally fine because a pussy is easier work.
> He can't fucking ruin this
Watch how he ruins this.
Yeah, this is totally normal behaviour. I suppose it had to escalate after the 'cumming on your partner's clothes' thing. He's also freakishly possessive and doesn't want anyone fucking that pussy except for him. That's for the Hispanic Hog.
> Don't come crying to me just because you are having some sort of crisis about touching a transgender person and liking it!
In Jayce's defense, he didn't know Viktor was trans. He thought he was an actual man - evidenced by the dildo sucking and hoping it was his ass juice - not a woman. Though the signs were clearly there - the shape of the hips and waist, the legs (remember the one fic where Jayce clocked Viktor as a woman due to his leg length), and of course, the zippertit scars - but he chose to ignore him. Viktor is using the classic 'you just hate us because you want to fuck us' trans cope, but it's solely on Viktor here. He never disclosed that he was trans. Jayce just discovered it thanks to your 'masculine' lace panties.
He's more than just obsessed: he outright stalks you and ejaculates into your clothes. He's 100% a normal man and not someone who would get arrested for sex crimes.
> Wearing a ripped up sweater and a fucking miniskirt
And you STILL couldn't clock him.
> He might actually start crying if Viktor's wearing that for someone else
He's not your property, and he thinks you're a transphobe. Your tears mean absolutely nothing.
Context: Lest is a MTF trans Vastaya. Viktor, the 'gay man' is fucking another transgender person who has a penis. 100% gay indeed.
He's mad that Viktor is fucking...what? Another man? A woman? If Viktor was fucking a woman would Jayce think that was icky straight sex and he couldn't handle that? Hm.
> Towering over the man, ready to pounce
Always gotta highlight that stark size difference.
> You don't even understand just how fucking badly I want you
Indeed, the stalking and dirty dildo sucking shows how far that obsession goes.
> I was afraid of losing complete control
Imagine he decided to throw hands and ended up getting beat by the MTF tranny. That would be fucking hilarious: the Hispanic throws hands over his smol trans boi, ends up getting rocked by the fellow 6'2 bunny man.
> You've been teasing me, Vik
On that we can agree. There was no reason to wear those miniskirts; he was baiting Jayce.
Ah, so this Viktor is the longer haired Viktor seen at the commune. That explains the manbun, and would lend more towards the 'feminine' look.
The smut starts right after this. Get ready for some gay sex.
> Then it will not surprise you that I am dying to suck your dick
Well, if the Hispanic Hog is eight inches long and three inches wide, I suppose that most would be eager to suck it. Size queens abound.
> He's moaning like a slut around Jayce's length
Yes, and he would be a bisexual slut, because he was about to do it with an MTF tranny fox.
> Does sucking dick always make you so wet?
> He's such a fucking cock slut
Interesting how the cocks he goes after aren't his size, but all record breakers. Also, need I remind you that you deepthroated a used dildo, Jayce? If Viktor is a cock slut, what does that make you?
> Inside his hole with one finger
Which one?
> Ahhh ah fuck mmm
When when I eat hot chili
> Jayce can't wait to find out if he's that same shade of pink in any other places
You didn't sneak a peak while fingering him? That would've told you straight up what shade his vulva was.
> His panties are so fucking drenched, they're clinging to his pussy lips and slight growth
And yet, Jayce had no idea he was a woman. In any case, 'slight growth' here means absolutely nothing to the eight inch Jayce here.
> Small cock is swollen
"Small" is right.
> Dark pubic hair glistens with slick
The classic Rapunzel pubes. Maybe it really is time to make a wig out of 'em.
> It's the same scent he recognizes on the dildo
Funny how he couldn't differentiate that smell from the smell of a dildo that would be up someone's ass. That was not anal lube you smelled, Jayce, you fucking pervert.
> Hole to clit
Le sigh. Why is labia fine, but vagina isn't?
> The smaller man is singing for him again
He wouldn't be singing, 'Come my lady, come come my lady' would he?
> Sucking at Viktor's cock
Nothing you wrote will ever convince me that's a real dick compared to how big Jayce is. That is a rule. It's not even close.
> I'm on birth control. I prefer raw, Talis
Good that you're taking birth control, which has estradiol in it. You should've saved it for Lest.
Fellas, is it gay when your partner's pussy claims your penis so hard it's like a vice, and you fellatioed a dildo you thought went up your ass (okay, fine, that IS really gay)? But then it's extra gay when you find out it went inside a vagina?
> You like it hard, you fucking slut?
He's saying this because another tranny was going to claim his 'man'. Man, we really lost out on great scene where Lest knocks out Jayce Francis Ngannou style.
Hoo boy, can't wait to see how the other smutty chapters go on. We'll probably hear more slut talk and how Jayce wasn't a creep for sucking on a used dildo he thought went up another man's ass.
I am not getting over that. That's just one of those bizarre things these authors write that they think is sexy and ends up being a fucking American Pie parody. Unless you want some nasty gonorrhea/herpes/pus sores on those lips, WASH YOUR GODDAMN SEX TOYS.
I don't think your classmates are what you need to worry about - it's general society and the rich scions whose opinions matter. They're the ones funding you and the ones with influence; what they say actually goes. Snarky questions from your fellow classmates should be the last thing on your mind.
But don't worry, Jayce doesn't actually off himself - he just indulges in the fantasy of fucking his 'best friend's' clothes - and that's real, btw.
A man bun? Pathetic. That would only highlight his female skull. The sweetbreads and tarts sound good, though.
You'll never guess what his 'house clothes' are.
Normally, it's MTFs who love skirts and knee high socks, not pooners. The pooners who DO like wearing clothes like these want both worlds: they want to embrace their femininity, and to be treated as men. He's wearing a medical corset, a black skirt, and grey knee socks, something you'd see a troon programmer wear. Viktor is aiming for the sexy goth maid aesthetic here, and it drives our big Mexican lad wild.
And, of course, we have to have the zippertits - it wouldn't be a proper gay panic without it.
Viktor, when he is an FTM, is usually written with an absurdly small waist that would make tight lacers blush. This is done to make him look far more sexually appealing, but all it does is highlight the size difference between him and Jayce, the actual male. The uwu trans boi and the big yaoi hands, name a better duo.
Nice lampshading. I wonder if Ximena reads FTM novels, too. I wager she likes the same shit that all pooner authors do: big, hunky men slamming their big ole man meat into a tiny, tight vagina. It's not vanilla, it's ~art~ you rube.
Also note that male characters turned pooner are always written with perfect, flawless white skin - can't have them getting cystic acne or rashes, now.
There's a joke hidden in here: Viktor is too weak to massage his own muscles, and I wonder if that has anything to do with FTMs having poorer grip strength than men. All that T and you still can't open that pickle jar or massage your own muscles. Sad!
I like a good old fashioned massage, too...but I can't get over on how this is happening in the first chapter, while Viktor is dressed in something he considers fetish gear, and while Jayce just 'offered' to do it and Viktor accepted. Give me some more chemistry, ffs.
I mean, you ARE one. You 'offered' something Viktor couldn't refuse, and now you're getting off on his pleasure that isn't sexual for once. Man, I can't wait to see what the 'gay sex' entails.
> It hurts so good there
Hurts so good, or feels so good?
> Spitting in his palm, sliding his back down the front door with his cock in his hand, pumping hard
Damn, son. You rushed home faster than your hombres rush the US border.
Just imagine this for a moment: a 6'2 man masturbating, on all fours, next to his front door and ejaculating into his partner's clothes. He jerks off so fast and so hard his eyes roll back into his head, resembling a zombie, and he has to use said clothes because he needs to remember the feel of Viktor's body.
Under normal circumstances, this would be creepy as fuck, but I guess it's fine here because he's that crazy over trans pussy. Imagine if his mother came home and saw him humping his clothes like a dog. I'd be calling animal control and bringing out the flipflop.
Indeed. Amazing what a gothic maid skirt can do.
Does the lottery include a barely there fetish of taking pleasure when your partner is in pain so you can see them in a skirt? If Viktor was written as a normal woman, this would be seen as predatory. You are not 'possessive' or 'protective', Jayce, you're a future John Wayne Gacy.
> What he daydreamed about as home was completely separate from his work, and also nobody's goddamn business
I don't know, masturbating into your friend's clothes because they were wearing a short skirt and have your smell on it really shows you're having difficulty separating the two.
You seem to be hedging your bets on this, eh Jayce?
> Jayce was lying if he said he wasn't praying to Janna right now that Viktor would walk back out in that flowing, black cotton skirt
And I'm totally sure he's wearing them to be comfortable and not as an Asking For It invitation.
> It's only slightly shorter than the black one, by a couple of inches
That's not 'slightly' that's quite a lot. Even if the OG skirt went to his knees, a 'couple inches' would put it mid-thigh. Semantics but you get the point.
> Only noticeable to Jayce because he's got an unhealthy obsession brewing
The skirt thing doesn't bother me as much as the 'fucking into your best friend's clothes and ejaculating in them' thing.
> Allowing even more skin to peek out
Yeah, he's asking for a fuck.
> It's tied slightly at the side of Viktor's waist, in a small bow
Very manly. Trans men want to be treated as men, yet want all the attractions of femininity. You can only choose one.
> His socks are knee high again, but they're black and fuzzy
Fastest way to slip and break something if you have hardwood floors. If Viktor thinks he's disabled now, wait until he decides to do an impromptu roller skate session to the kitchen.
He's also missing the quintessential cat ears, but I assume that is next.
> Parlor of Viktor's skin
*Pallor of Viktor's skin. I bet this was beta read and she got a lazy bitch as one.
Of course Viktor smokes weed here, too. I bet we'll have a trippy scene with them smoking and fucking like that one fic I read back in July. It's weed, not LSD bro.
I bet you you can clock him from that giggle. It's uwu so feminine and cute!
You're lucky he's high, because otherwise that's a barely disguised assault right there. Viktor didn't ask you to touch there. You just decided to do it because you could. Not to mention, if this Viktor was male, he'd fucking notice and say something. Only FTMs seem comfortable with this.
> Viktor's socks have kitty paw print designs on the feet
Yeah, this is really leaning into the cat maid thing, which is popular in anime. Those sounds also sound cheap as fuck, uncomfortable on the skin, and would be slippery all to hell. Just get a fursuit and commit, already.
> Imagining putting those kitten paws up to the ceiling
What he means is that he'll fuck Viktor so hard, Viktor's legs will stick up in the air, mating press style. Literally, it makes it sound like Jayce wants to throw him up on the ceiling and walk on it, Spiderpig style.
> The other is flying up and down on his cock, lewd squelching noises accompanying his breathing
Did he not spit into his hand this time, or what?
> Until he can allow himself pretend it was Viktor's torso
That's right: he's fucking Viktor's own vest into a pillow. In normal fiction this would be fucking creepy, but hey, it's a trans fic so it's unrestrained passion on Jayce's part. He dindu nuffin.
And on a silk fucking cushion no less. Imagine trying to get the cum stains out of that.
So I was right: the OG skirt went to his knees, now it's up to mid-thigh. And Jayce has miraculously not clocked him with what he's wearing, either.
> He's wearing those fucking kitten socks again
Oh, he's wearing more than that, too. You'll see what I mean.
> He might actually go through with killing himself
Please do - especially when you read what he does later in the chapter
> Can't risk ruining this, whatever it is
You come in your best friend's clothes when you're horny. You already ruined it, you fucking bum.
> Tugs at a strand of Viktor's hair before sprinting down the hall
Very brotherly. Very affectionate.
That's right: Viktor, the True and Honest Man, has a sparkly dildo that Jayce does not conclude is not made for men. Men's dildos have that base at the end so it doesn't get sucked up their ass. That said, this sex toy is unwashed and still sticky, and Jayce, under the impression that Viktor is actually male, sticks a dildo that would have gone up his ass into his mouth. Not only is Viktor a disgusting pig, Jayce is even more disgusting if the original premise was true and Viktor was actually a man. You are supposed to wash your goddamn sex toys after using them. Viktor leaves his with his vaginal fluid lying around and Jayce is gobbling it down thinking it's rectal mucus. Disgusting.
Not only that, you didn't wash your fucking hands, either. He stuck what he thought was a dildo that had gone up Viktor's ass in his mouth. I hope you enjoy gonorrhea and other nasty STDs from doing that.
The sparkly dildo should have given it away. Even actual gay men who buy the fancier shit always go for the discrete, simple coloured ones. It's usually women buying the sparkly shit; gay men want things that work.
> Particularly flirty for a straight man
Let me guess. We're going to have a talk on how Jayce is 100% a true and honest gay man and that fucking vagina doesn't change his sexual orientation. Calling it now.
> He's never outright said that he's straight
No, you just have sexual feelings for what you THINK is a man. Just wait until you read the twist.
> He's beginning to think girls may not be the only thing he's interested in, after all
Cute, but Viktor IS one of those girls. He's female. But keep telling yourself you're not interested in women.
> Kneading the pale flesh
As if the skin would be any darker.
Viktor is wearing lace panties with a bow in the front of it and Jayce STILL doesn't think Viktor is female. If he was wearing that cut, you would have seen his balls from the back. Jayce doesn't. I don't think the author knows how balls on men work.
Yep, and that's how Jayce finds out that Viktor is actually a woman: by him wearing lace panties and seeing a wet spot. You'd think the hips and Q angle would give it away, but nooooo.
In any case, the smut is in the next chapter, the 'first of many', and Jayce decides that he's still a gay man despite liking pussy. That won't erase the fact he sucked on a used dildo that he thought went up a man's ass.
> He can't stop thinking about what's between Viktor's legs, even now, after stroking himself until he pulled a muscle in his arm
Is he thinking he's still gay, or that he's a spicy kind of straight? The type that's 'willing to explore', but won't dare say he's bisexual?
> He doesn't know how he didn't put two and two together
Because he's a retard. The scars would be completely visible and the hips would have given it away. The sparkly dildo and the dried ejaculate on it should have been a clue as well, but no. He acts surprised Viktor is trans and then decides that's totally fine because a pussy is easier work.
> He can't fucking ruin this
Watch how he ruins this.
Yeah, this is totally normal behaviour. I suppose it had to escalate after the 'cumming on your partner's clothes' thing. He's also freakishly possessive and doesn't want anyone fucking that pussy except for him. That's for the Hispanic Hog.
> Don't come crying to me just because you are having some sort of crisis about touching a transgender person and liking it!
In Jayce's defense, he didn't know Viktor was trans. He thought he was an actual man - evidenced by the dildo sucking and hoping it was his ass juice - not a woman. Though the signs were clearly there - the shape of the hips and waist, the legs (remember the one fic where Jayce clocked Viktor as a woman due to his leg length), and of course, the zippertit scars - but he chose to ignore him. Viktor is using the classic 'you just hate us because you want to fuck us' trans cope, but it's solely on Viktor here. He never disclosed that he was trans. Jayce just discovered it thanks to your 'masculine' lace panties.
He's more than just obsessed: he outright stalks you and ejaculates into your clothes. He's 100% a normal man and not someone who would get arrested for sex crimes.
> Wearing a ripped up sweater and a fucking miniskirt
And you STILL couldn't clock him.
> He might actually start crying if Viktor's wearing that for someone else
He's not your property, and he thinks you're a transphobe. Your tears mean absolutely nothing.
Context: Lest is a MTF trans Vastaya. Viktor, the 'gay man' is fucking another transgender person who has a penis. 100% gay indeed.
He's mad that Viktor is fucking...what? Another man? A woman? If Viktor was fucking a woman would Jayce think that was icky straight sex and he couldn't handle that? Hm.
> Towering over the man, ready to pounce
Always gotta highlight that stark size difference.
> You don't even understand just how fucking badly I want you
Indeed, the stalking and dirty dildo sucking shows how far that obsession goes.
> I was afraid of losing complete control
Imagine he decided to throw hands and ended up getting beat by the MTF tranny. That would be fucking hilarious: the Hispanic throws hands over his smol trans boi, ends up getting rocked by the fellow 6'2 bunny man.
> You've been teasing me, Vik
On that we can agree. There was no reason to wear those miniskirts; he was baiting Jayce.
Ah, so this Viktor is the longer haired Viktor seen at the commune. That explains the manbun, and would lend more towards the 'feminine' look.
The smut starts right after this. Get ready for some gay sex.
> Then it will not surprise you that I am dying to suck your dick
Well, if the Hispanic Hog is eight inches long and three inches wide, I suppose that most would be eager to suck it. Size queens abound.
> He's moaning like a slut around Jayce's length
Yes, and he would be a bisexual slut, because he was about to do it with an MTF tranny fox.
> Does sucking dick always make you so wet?
> He's such a fucking cock slut
Interesting how the cocks he goes after aren't his size, but all record breakers. Also, need I remind you that you deepthroated a used dildo, Jayce? If Viktor is a cock slut, what does that make you?
> Inside his hole with one finger
Which one?
> Ahhh ah fuck mmm
When when I eat hot chili
> Jayce can't wait to find out if he's that same shade of pink in any other places
You didn't sneak a peak while fingering him? That would've told you straight up what shade his vulva was.
> His panties are so fucking drenched, they're clinging to his pussy lips and slight growth
And yet, Jayce had no idea he was a woman. In any case, 'slight growth' here means absolutely nothing to the eight inch Jayce here.
> Small cock is swollen
"Small" is right.
> Dark pubic hair glistens with slick
The classic Rapunzel pubes. Maybe it really is time to make a wig out of 'em.
> It's the same scent he recognizes on the dildo
Funny how he couldn't differentiate that smell from the smell of a dildo that would be up someone's ass. That was not anal lube you smelled, Jayce, you fucking pervert.
> Hole to clit
Le sigh. Why is labia fine, but vagina isn't?
> The smaller man is singing for him again
He wouldn't be singing, 'Come my lady, come come my lady' would he?
> Sucking at Viktor's cock
Nothing you wrote will ever convince me that's a real dick compared to how big Jayce is. That is a rule. It's not even close.
> I'm on birth control. I prefer raw, Talis
Good that you're taking birth control, which has estradiol in it. You should've saved it for Lest.
Fellas, is it gay when your partner's pussy claims your penis so hard it's like a vice, and you fellatioed a dildo you thought went up your ass (okay, fine, that IS really gay)? But then it's extra gay when you find out it went inside a vagina?
> You like it hard, you fucking slut?
He's saying this because another tranny was going to claim his 'man'. Man, we really lost out on great scene where Lest knocks out Jayce Francis Ngannou style.
Hoo boy, can't wait to see how the other smutty chapters go on. We'll probably hear more slut talk and how Jayce wasn't a creep for sucking on a used dildo he thought went up another man's ass.
I am not getting over that. That's just one of those bizarre things these authors write that they think is sexy and ends up being a fucking American Pie parody. Unless you want some nasty gonorrhea/herpes/pus sores on those lips, WASH YOUR GODDAMN SEX TOYS.
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Preaching to the choir: this cancels out!
This is huge pooner wish fulfillment--there are so many of them who will state outright that they're waiting for testosterone to have its magical effects so they can "wear dresses and makeup again," but be seen as a man in drag. (How that wouldn't go back around to an MtF who also mustn't be misgendered, I don't know.) And there are even more who post photos dressed as over the top scene girls but, uh-uh, sweetie; read the bio.
I would tip the author's ko-fi for a 2k word essay on how she decided to write a woman who looks like a woman and dresses like a woman and has sex like a woman being called male.
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The point would be making her figure that out. Although I guess I'd pay a smaller sum if she reads out @AMHOLIO 's recent thoughts on the matter.
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You can often gauge the quality of a work based on what music artist inspired them: Hozier, Chappell Roan, Taylor Swift, or troon artist Ethel Cain. This T4T work was based on the second artist, and if that doesn't show you these authors all share the same social circles and taste, this fic surely will.
You didn't even need to tag this as a T4T because I could clock Jayce right away. The obsessive self-doubt, the bouquet of flowers, the fussiness, all of that smacks of a feminine mentality. Sure, men can be fussy, they can have self doubt, but this is almost TOO self-aware, and the constant fussing for what is perceived to be male attention is a dead giveaway.
Then we have the typical trans reflection scene, where Jayce talks about how he's so much better now as a person and how it's great that he's seen as a True and Honest Man now due to him working out. Of course, muscle mass and gains differ between the sexes and settle differently on the body. Most famously, and something I've mentioned repeatedly, is grip strength: despite all that testosterone, FTMs have lower grip strength than actual males. The smaller weight and frame is another giveaway.
Of course his mother was his biggest supporter: women are always expected to either support their husbands or take their kids to all of their appointments, if they aren't munchie moms themselves. In this case, Jayce was the one lecturing his mother on how he was a 'real boy' and she relented and got him all his shots and surgery. Note it's always women taking care of their family like this, and never men.
> Man or not, Jayce would always be, at his core, a little bit of a disaster
1. You aren't a man, and you just confirmed you weren't with that 'not' and 2. Yes, you are a disaster indeed.
> Self-confidence preferred the other explanation
Self-confidence is not the term I'd use for Jayce, since he never acts like he has confidence at all. He's an anxious mess through and through, and this does not change one bit as the fic progresses.
Haha get it? It's a reference to post nut clarity. But he doesn't have any nuts!
> It took Jayce eight hours to work up the courage to actually ask Viktor out
If this Jayce was actually a man it'd probably take him eight minutes. He'd just do it, fuck it up, and still succeed. LoL Jayce would not have given a single damn; he'd just start kissing Viktor.
> Gods, he must sound like such a presumptuous jerk
Far from it. You honestly sound like a skittish, whiny bitch.
> Was this just what he did now? Psyched himself up in a way that would sound absolutely batshit to an outsider?
You already sound absolutely batshit. Doesn't help that you're a neurotic.
> Claimed brought out the green flecks in his eyes, whatever that meant
OK that's just fucking dumb to write. Women have a greater range of colour than men; if you have hazel eyes, as Jayce does, certain colours and saturation will bring out the gold or green of your eyes. If he doesn't know what that is, it means his eyes are fried by T (which does actually happen) or he's never actually dressed himself. I'll let you decide.
> He'd never been to Akali's, and for all he knew, it was a super casual place
Jayce may not be super rich, but he should know his way around. He's the kind of guy to do research on random restaurants and read the reviews to make sure they're the best one. The fact he doesn't know his own city is something authors normally do to make him cute and relatable, but it just makes him look like a dumbfuck.
> It didn't have to be for sex, though Jayce certainly wouldn't say no to that
I really wonder how they're going to react once they find out both of them are trans.
> He kind of wanted to say fuck it and kiss him immediatly
But he won't, because this 'himbo' would have a panic attack at a goddamn bee.
> Is that your way of saying you expect me to pay?
You're supposedly a man, Jayce, and you asked Viktor out, so the rule normally is that men pay. But you can meet him 41% of the paycheck if you like.
> Jayce blushed. He was doing a lot of that lately
Indeed he does. He panics a lot, too.
> Was that Viktor's way of saying he was reading a smut book? A kinky smut book?
Aha get it? Breaking the fourth wall! But it also clocks Viktor as well: men are more visual, so they will watch actual porn, vs women, who will read porn. They can't even get male behaviour right. Sad!
> Viktor was really carrying this whole thing, huh?
I'll say. He's a lot more stable than Jayce is.
> Jayce was still having heart palpitations
...over what? You're having a panic attack over leaving your date at their apartment?
> He hoped Viktor didn't think he was too much of an idiot
That ship has sailed, homie. You nearly fainted at the door because you were overwhelmed at the prospect of fucking him.
> Jayce tried very hard to get his blush under control
Not bad when he would've been pale from that panic attack. That mutt would've been whiter than a Norwegian.
The apples and oranges bit is meant to show Viktor as not understanding idioms, when it's obvious that while apples and oranges are both fruits, they are not the same because they grow in completely different climates. Oranges need a tropical climate while apples do not; apples are hardier and oranges are more valuable as they are not. Even a sped like me gets that.
"Umm actually their evolutionary trajectories were completely different so they really aren't the same"
> Suave things. Sexy things. Cool things
You gonna quote me an Enrique Iglesias song?
If you haven't gotten secondhand embarrassment from how Jayce is acting...you're going to get it now.
> He could feel a slight bulge in Viktor's pants
Hint: that's not a bulge. I'll be damned surprised if that's a Frankendong.
> The blood filling his dick
You don't have one.
> He seemed almost nervous, all of a sudden
Because you're about to find out that he's a woman, too.
> I was not born a man, and I have not had any, eh, surgeries. I am sorry for not telling you sooner
The reason why he's not missing any teeth is because Jayce is one, too, and would probably have an anxiety attack if you told him he used the wrong gel.
> He ground down slightly on what he now realized must be a packer
Yes, Viktor is using a small silicone dick as a means of fooling others he actually has one. Now, is it a STP (stand to pee) one or just for show?
> It took a very conscious effort on Jayce's part not to launch himself onto the mattress
This is the second fic I've read where Jayce nearly performs a WWE move on Viktor. You won't need a reason for surgery after Jayce performs an Undertaker move.
> He kind of felt like an idiot?
Kind of? You ARE one. You're an emotional wreck and I'm already sick of you.
> Fingers tracing over his abs and making them clench
What, you referring to those Elliot Page abs? Weak.
> Jayce tried not to preen at the reverent mapping of his muscles
Muscles that will never reach the same muscle fibre density of a male, btw.
That's an interesting admission; most FTMs don't have any sensation after getting the tits yeeted. The nerves there are shot and the nipples end up looking like detached pepperonis. Of course, Jayce would never admit that to a cissy; that's for other trans people to know. Thankfully, they can never stop talking about it online and posting their results, so we get ALLLL the tea.
> It's fairly effective as a binding mechanism. My chest is not exactly large anyways
Nothing like rotting those A-cups further.
> Mine definitely was
Which means that your nips are probably going to look even weirder. Guaranteed he's got the dog ears. It's also interesting that Jayce admits he didn't even tell OTHER trans people about his procedure; I guess the paranoia really does run deep.
> Viktor had been right about his chest being small. Were he more muscular or broad, they could easily be passed off as pecs
No, they wouldn't, because the nipples would be placed differently. Even a smaller male chest is wider than a female one.
>His hands were larger enough to cover Viktor's entire breasts
Looks like those yaoi hands got nerfed because Jayce is a pooner, lmao. What, no 'so big they could cover his entire middle'? That's new.
> Trailing his fingers over Viktor's cock
All this talk about dicks, cocks and fucking, and you don't even have the equipment to actually break that headboard. Instead, Jayce fantasizes more about a strap-on than about the 'dick' he allegedly has.
See what I mean? If you already had a penis, you wouldn't need that bit of silicone. You'd already do the job yourself.
You mean to tell me that Jayce was fingering Viktor with the packer in his underwear? Amazing. He's that dysphoric he can't go without it, eh?
> I don't like penetration though
Figures the pooner doesn't like dick even though she desires a dick, thinks a dick is what makes a man (true), and wants to top others with a strap-on.
> Most of my experience has been with men with eh, different anatomy
Oh, so ACTUAL men. Men with cocks, not roid clits.
> I know it tastes different than a dick
"It's just the mouthfeel, bro"
Teasing cocks here, throbbing dicks here...you don't have enough material for it to throb, homie. You have to wear a fucking silicone packer to compare to actual men, LMAO
> Or my face fucked
Do you enjoy it more with actual dicks or with that 1-2 inch on your - ahem - boytoy? I think I know which one I'd pick.
> Fantasies of fucking Viktor's mouth with his strap rose unbidden
Too bad you can't have an actual functioning dick, but hey, that's the price of being born female.
> The odds that Jayce died here in this bed rose exponentially
I'm surprised you aren't dead yet from that anxiety attack you had in his doorway.
> Moan around his cock
What cock?
There's nothing there to suck. You'd have more fun at a hotdog eating competition; the wieners there at least have girth.
There's nothing to ram with because you don't have the 'correct male parts'. That of course implies you don't have an anxiety attack over doing it. Funny how penetration sets him off, yet he wants a pseudo dick to penetrate others with. There are no underlying psychological issues there, oh no. The incessant need to top to cover up abuse or inadequacy, oh no. Pardon me while I chuck out Freud: you sure you didn't want to become your own father? Become someone's 'fuck daddy', with the power of a true and honest dick and a secure masculine identity? Who knows. The fic is almost self aware, but not quite. Least you got some Chappell Roan lyrics.
This fic got rather popular, and has a sequel, which will be reviewed later. For now, enjoy a bunch of trans conversations. Ends up reading like it's an exploration of dementia.
> I'm not doing this because I'm drunk, I got drunk so I'd have the courage to do it
So you're doing this because you're drunk.
> Wet-dog-eyed, lolling-headed, pat-my-head nervous
If you think this is bad, you have yet to see how this devolves. It goes from first stage dementia writing to end stage dementia, right down to how the sentences abruptly change subject and the characters change thoughts mid-sentence. It's fucking crazy.
> The bad one, on his brace
Ouch.
> It is in the way a butterfly is part of a tornado
They'd get torn apart by the vortex and wind pressure.
> Anxiety whether he's going to leave, anxiety whether he's going to make Viktor stand up
ANOTHER anxious Jayce fic? Get this man some Xanax. He clearly can't handle public speaking events, or private ones at that.
> Misdemeanours
He only got away with it because he had rich connections, btw. If he was any poorer or darker he'd be put in a cage.
> if I let this happen I won't have any space left to think about anything else
So basically your entire life would revolve around this man and you would not have any independence. Funny, that.
Is this fucking English? Sounds like Joe Biden on a bad day.
> Obviously Viktor knew
Knew what? That Jayce knew he was actually female?
> It doesn't compare with hearing it
This is the first time you're hearing it.
> Viktor wasn't sure Jayce thought
You already discussed this
> But just how aware - but now, he knows
He must've clocked you from your leg length like Jayce did in that one fic. Dumb author couldn't even grasp what she just wrote, lmao.
> He's fairly sure it doesn't translate exteriorly
Neither does this. What the fuck?
> Lack of oxygen, or too much oxygen
Hypoxia, and that is a lack of oxygen, you rube.
> I want your dick
He doesn't have one.
> He wonders if Jayce can smell it, like an animal in heat
But does it smell like a Yankee candle?
> He feels the texture of molten iron
YOU feel like molten iron, or do you FEEL LIKE molten iron? Talk about taking a simile literally.
> Just talking. Would I make you hard?
He doesn't have a dick, so no.
> Jayce says. Fuck
And no quotation marks here, either.
> Stiff cock big in his tight trousers
Well, at least SOMEONE has one!
Looks like the queercatfan curse hit this fic too, because I cannot fucking stand this goddamn dialogue. It reads like a dementia patient wrote it, and absolutely sounds like a speech impediment put to writing. It's awful. And 'getting shot in the gut' is a metaphor, you fucking retard.
> Never been at ease with variables. As a scientist, they are an impediment
They're integral to science itself, you fucking retard.
> He was the perfect height to put his head on Jayce's shoulder, once
Well, at least she got the height correct.
> he smells nice, of his laundry which always seems to smell cleaner that Viktor's
ENGLISH MOTHERFUCKER, DO YOU SPEAK IT?!
> Relived honest like himself, his man
What?
> Love hearts in Jayce's eyes
He's going to have Oberyn's (lack of) eyes once I'm done.
> You look like a cartoon dog.
He is one.
> Do not make that face it is good. It is good, Jayce
What the fuck is this? It sounds like AI wrote it.
This dialogue is about to make me get a shotgun mouthwash. I despise how this is how this fandom ended up after everyone read queercatfan's work. Nice going, bitch. You're our version of Colleen Hoover.
> The infinite variables reducing to a single possibility
I thought he hated variables?
> Nuzzling Viktor's hairy belly
Yep, we've got the Rapunzel pubes.
> The tip of his tongue finding Viktor's hard prick
It isn't a prick, and it's nothing compared to Jayce's when he eventually flips it out.
I thought that clit was already a cock? Are you admitting here that it isn't?
> In his crotch hair
I bet we can find Jack the Ripper in there.
> Yesjayceyes
Can't even capitalize his name in a stutter, wow.
> Can we fuck. Can I fuck you. Do you like being fucked.
Are you an Indian? Because this is how pajeets talk.
> In the ass or cunt?
Finally, some flavour!
> He's not thinking straight
Neither was the author. This is supposed to be a hot, electric moment and all I can think of is a dementia patient trying to recall their memories. It's so fucking bad I cannot take it seriously.
> Jayce letting him like Viktor is stronger than he is
Last fic had that Jayce nearly WWE him into the bed, what is this Jayce capable of?
> I'm clean
Oh, well, glad you don't have HPV but you're willing to accept pregnancy.
> Jayce returns to his arms, where he belongs, Viktor thinks, cockily
This abrupt POV change makes me think this author is ESL, but even ESL authors don't normally do this. This bitch writes like a Neanderthal.
> Some things are just - it's healthy, isn't it
Stuff. Thangs.
> It pokes at his prick
You're comparing a pen cap to a fucking flashlight, dawg.
> Almost a sob, then screws himself into him
Men when they discover they didn't hammer down the roof right.
Yes, Viktor decides to finger Jayce's ass. Does he wash those hands? Hell no. Have a helping of these run on sentences instead.
I'm glad that once Joe Biden is done reading this out, Viktor can wipe his hands on Jayce's leg. Jayce didn't clean himself out, mind you. Hope he didn't decide to 'cut the ribbon' of his lunchtime bowel movement.
Fucking hell. Queercatfan did a number on these people. She's like the Dobre Brothers but for AO3: everyone copies her style, and everything goes downhill because of it.
You didn't even need to tag this as a T4T because I could clock Jayce right away. The obsessive self-doubt, the bouquet of flowers, the fussiness, all of that smacks of a feminine mentality. Sure, men can be fussy, they can have self doubt, but this is almost TOO self-aware, and the constant fussing for what is perceived to be male attention is a dead giveaway.
Then we have the typical trans reflection scene, where Jayce talks about how he's so much better now as a person and how it's great that he's seen as a True and Honest Man now due to him working out. Of course, muscle mass and gains differ between the sexes and settle differently on the body. Most famously, and something I've mentioned repeatedly, is grip strength: despite all that testosterone, FTMs have lower grip strength than actual males. The smaller weight and frame is another giveaway.
Of course his mother was his biggest supporter: women are always expected to either support their husbands or take their kids to all of their appointments, if they aren't munchie moms themselves. In this case, Jayce was the one lecturing his mother on how he was a 'real boy' and she relented and got him all his shots and surgery. Note it's always women taking care of their family like this, and never men.
> Man or not, Jayce would always be, at his core, a little bit of a disaster
1. You aren't a man, and you just confirmed you weren't with that 'not' and 2. Yes, you are a disaster indeed.
> Self-confidence preferred the other explanation
Self-confidence is not the term I'd use for Jayce, since he never acts like he has confidence at all. He's an anxious mess through and through, and this does not change one bit as the fic progresses.
Haha get it? It's a reference to post nut clarity. But he doesn't have any nuts!
> It took Jayce eight hours to work up the courage to actually ask Viktor out
If this Jayce was actually a man it'd probably take him eight minutes. He'd just do it, fuck it up, and still succeed. LoL Jayce would not have given a single damn; he'd just start kissing Viktor.
> Gods, he must sound like such a presumptuous jerk
Far from it. You honestly sound like a skittish, whiny bitch.
> Was this just what he did now? Psyched himself up in a way that would sound absolutely batshit to an outsider?
You already sound absolutely batshit. Doesn't help that you're a neurotic.
> Claimed brought out the green flecks in his eyes, whatever that meant
OK that's just fucking dumb to write. Women have a greater range of colour than men; if you have hazel eyes, as Jayce does, certain colours and saturation will bring out the gold or green of your eyes. If he doesn't know what that is, it means his eyes are fried by T (which does actually happen) or he's never actually dressed himself. I'll let you decide.
> He'd never been to Akali's, and for all he knew, it was a super casual place
Jayce may not be super rich, but he should know his way around. He's the kind of guy to do research on random restaurants and read the reviews to make sure they're the best one. The fact he doesn't know his own city is something authors normally do to make him cute and relatable, but it just makes him look like a dumbfuck.
> It didn't have to be for sex, though Jayce certainly wouldn't say no to that
I really wonder how they're going to react once they find out both of them are trans.
> He kind of wanted to say fuck it and kiss him immediatly
But he won't, because this 'himbo' would have a panic attack at a goddamn bee.
> Is that your way of saying you expect me to pay?
You're supposedly a man, Jayce, and you asked Viktor out, so the rule normally is that men pay. But you can meet him 41% of the paycheck if you like.
> Jayce blushed. He was doing a lot of that lately
Indeed he does. He panics a lot, too.
> Was that Viktor's way of saying he was reading a smut book? A kinky smut book?
Aha get it? Breaking the fourth wall! But it also clocks Viktor as well: men are more visual, so they will watch actual porn, vs women, who will read porn. They can't even get male behaviour right. Sad!
> Viktor was really carrying this whole thing, huh?
I'll say. He's a lot more stable than Jayce is.
> Jayce was still having heart palpitations
...over what? You're having a panic attack over leaving your date at their apartment?
> He hoped Viktor didn't think he was too much of an idiot
That ship has sailed, homie. You nearly fainted at the door because you were overwhelmed at the prospect of fucking him.
> Jayce tried very hard to get his blush under control
Not bad when he would've been pale from that panic attack. That mutt would've been whiter than a Norwegian.
The apples and oranges bit is meant to show Viktor as not understanding idioms, when it's obvious that while apples and oranges are both fruits, they are not the same because they grow in completely different climates. Oranges need a tropical climate while apples do not; apples are hardier and oranges are more valuable as they are not. Even a sped like me gets that.
"Umm actually their evolutionary trajectories were completely different so they really aren't the same"
> Suave things. Sexy things. Cool things
You gonna quote me an Enrique Iglesias song?
If you haven't gotten secondhand embarrassment from how Jayce is acting...you're going to get it now.
> He could feel a slight bulge in Viktor's pants
Hint: that's not a bulge. I'll be damned surprised if that's a Frankendong.
> The blood filling his dick
You don't have one.
> He seemed almost nervous, all of a sudden
Because you're about to find out that he's a woman, too.
> I was not born a man, and I have not had any, eh, surgeries. I am sorry for not telling you sooner
The reason why he's not missing any teeth is because Jayce is one, too, and would probably have an anxiety attack if you told him he used the wrong gel.
> He ground down slightly on what he now realized must be a packer
Yes, Viktor is using a small silicone dick as a means of fooling others he actually has one. Now, is it a STP (stand to pee) one or just for show?
> It took a very conscious effort on Jayce's part not to launch himself onto the mattress
This is the second fic I've read where Jayce nearly performs a WWE move on Viktor. You won't need a reason for surgery after Jayce performs an Undertaker move.
> He kind of felt like an idiot?
Kind of? You ARE one. You're an emotional wreck and I'm already sick of you.
> Fingers tracing over his abs and making them clench
What, you referring to those Elliot Page abs? Weak.
> Jayce tried not to preen at the reverent mapping of his muscles
Muscles that will never reach the same muscle fibre density of a male, btw.
That's an interesting admission; most FTMs don't have any sensation after getting the tits yeeted. The nerves there are shot and the nipples end up looking like detached pepperonis. Of course, Jayce would never admit that to a cissy; that's for other trans people to know. Thankfully, they can never stop talking about it online and posting their results, so we get ALLLL the tea.
> It's fairly effective as a binding mechanism. My chest is not exactly large anyways
Nothing like rotting those A-cups further.
> Mine definitely was
Which means that your nips are probably going to look even weirder. Guaranteed he's got the dog ears. It's also interesting that Jayce admits he didn't even tell OTHER trans people about his procedure; I guess the paranoia really does run deep.
> Viktor had been right about his chest being small. Were he more muscular or broad, they could easily be passed off as pecs
No, they wouldn't, because the nipples would be placed differently. Even a smaller male chest is wider than a female one.
>His hands were larger enough to cover Viktor's entire breasts
Looks like those yaoi hands got nerfed because Jayce is a pooner, lmao. What, no 'so big they could cover his entire middle'? That's new.
> Trailing his fingers over Viktor's cock
All this talk about dicks, cocks and fucking, and you don't even have the equipment to actually break that headboard. Instead, Jayce fantasizes more about a strap-on than about the 'dick' he allegedly has.
See what I mean? If you already had a penis, you wouldn't need that bit of silicone. You'd already do the job yourself.
You mean to tell me that Jayce was fingering Viktor with the packer in his underwear? Amazing. He's that dysphoric he can't go without it, eh?
> I don't like penetration though
Figures the pooner doesn't like dick even though she desires a dick, thinks a dick is what makes a man (true), and wants to top others with a strap-on.
> Most of my experience has been with men with eh, different anatomy
Oh, so ACTUAL men. Men with cocks, not roid clits.
> I know it tastes different than a dick
"It's just the mouthfeel, bro"
Teasing cocks here, throbbing dicks here...you don't have enough material for it to throb, homie. You have to wear a fucking silicone packer to compare to actual men, LMAO
> Or my face fucked
Do you enjoy it more with actual dicks or with that 1-2 inch on your - ahem - boytoy? I think I know which one I'd pick.
> Fantasies of fucking Viktor's mouth with his strap rose unbidden
Too bad you can't have an actual functioning dick, but hey, that's the price of being born female.
> The odds that Jayce died here in this bed rose exponentially
I'm surprised you aren't dead yet from that anxiety attack you had in his doorway.
> Moan around his cock
What cock?
There's nothing there to suck. You'd have more fun at a hotdog eating competition; the wieners there at least have girth.
There's nothing to ram with because you don't have the 'correct male parts'. That of course implies you don't have an anxiety attack over doing it. Funny how penetration sets him off, yet he wants a pseudo dick to penetrate others with. There are no underlying psychological issues there, oh no. The incessant need to top to cover up abuse or inadequacy, oh no. Pardon me while I chuck out Freud: you sure you didn't want to become your own father? Become someone's 'fuck daddy', with the power of a true and honest dick and a secure masculine identity? Who knows. The fic is almost self aware, but not quite. Least you got some Chappell Roan lyrics.
This fic got rather popular, and has a sequel, which will be reviewed later. For now, enjoy a bunch of trans conversations. Ends up reading like it's an exploration of dementia.
> I'm not doing this because I'm drunk, I got drunk so I'd have the courage to do it
So you're doing this because you're drunk.
> Wet-dog-eyed, lolling-headed, pat-my-head nervous
If you think this is bad, you have yet to see how this devolves. It goes from first stage dementia writing to end stage dementia, right down to how the sentences abruptly change subject and the characters change thoughts mid-sentence. It's fucking crazy.
> The bad one, on his brace
Ouch.
> It is in the way a butterfly is part of a tornado
They'd get torn apart by the vortex and wind pressure.
> Anxiety whether he's going to leave, anxiety whether he's going to make Viktor stand up
ANOTHER anxious Jayce fic? Get this man some Xanax. He clearly can't handle public speaking events, or private ones at that.
> Misdemeanours
He only got away with it because he had rich connections, btw. If he was any poorer or darker he'd be put in a cage.
> if I let this happen I won't have any space left to think about anything else
So basically your entire life would revolve around this man and you would not have any independence. Funny, that.
Is this fucking English? Sounds like Joe Biden on a bad day.
> Obviously Viktor knew
Knew what? That Jayce knew he was actually female?
> It doesn't compare with hearing it
This is the first time you're hearing it.
> Viktor wasn't sure Jayce thought
You already discussed this
> But just how aware - but now, he knows
He must've clocked you from your leg length like Jayce did in that one fic. Dumb author couldn't even grasp what she just wrote, lmao.
> He's fairly sure it doesn't translate exteriorly
Neither does this. What the fuck?
> Lack of oxygen, or too much oxygen
Hypoxia, and that is a lack of oxygen, you rube.
> I want your dick
He doesn't have one.
> He wonders if Jayce can smell it, like an animal in heat
But does it smell like a Yankee candle?
> He feels the texture of molten iron
YOU feel like molten iron, or do you FEEL LIKE molten iron? Talk about taking a simile literally.
> Just talking. Would I make you hard?
He doesn't have a dick, so no.
> Jayce says. Fuck
And no quotation marks here, either.
> Stiff cock big in his tight trousers
Well, at least SOMEONE has one!
Looks like the queercatfan curse hit this fic too, because I cannot fucking stand this goddamn dialogue. It reads like a dementia patient wrote it, and absolutely sounds like a speech impediment put to writing. It's awful. And 'getting shot in the gut' is a metaphor, you fucking retard.
> Never been at ease with variables. As a scientist, they are an impediment
They're integral to science itself, you fucking retard.
> He was the perfect height to put his head on Jayce's shoulder, once
Well, at least she got the height correct.
> he smells nice, of his laundry which always seems to smell cleaner that Viktor's
ENGLISH MOTHERFUCKER, DO YOU SPEAK IT?!
> Relived honest like himself, his man
What?
> Love hearts in Jayce's eyes
He's going to have Oberyn's (lack of) eyes once I'm done.
> You look like a cartoon dog.
He is one.
> Do not make that face it is good. It is good, Jayce
What the fuck is this? It sounds like AI wrote it.
This dialogue is about to make me get a shotgun mouthwash. I despise how this is how this fandom ended up after everyone read queercatfan's work. Nice going, bitch. You're our version of Colleen Hoover.
> The infinite variables reducing to a single possibility
I thought he hated variables?
> Nuzzling Viktor's hairy belly
Yep, we've got the Rapunzel pubes.
> The tip of his tongue finding Viktor's hard prick
It isn't a prick, and it's nothing compared to Jayce's when he eventually flips it out.
I thought that clit was already a cock?
Are you admitting here that it isn't?> In his crotch hair
I bet we can find Jack the Ripper in there.
> Yesjayceyes
Can't even capitalize his name in a stutter, wow.
> Can we fuck. Can I fuck you. Do you like being fucked.
Are you an Indian? Because this is how pajeets talk.
> In the ass or cunt?
Finally, some flavour!
> He's not thinking straight
Neither was the author. This is supposed to be a hot, electric moment and all I can think of is a dementia patient trying to recall their memories. It's so fucking bad I cannot take it seriously.
> Jayce letting him like Viktor is stronger than he is
Last fic had that Jayce nearly WWE him into the bed, what is this Jayce capable of?
> I'm clean
Oh, well, glad you don't have HPV but you're willing to accept pregnancy.
> Jayce returns to his arms, where he belongs, Viktor thinks, cockily
This abrupt POV change makes me think this author is ESL, but even ESL authors don't normally do this. This bitch writes like a Neanderthal.
> Some things are just - it's healthy, isn't it
Stuff. Thangs.
> It pokes at his prick
You're comparing a pen cap to a fucking flashlight, dawg.
> Almost a sob, then screws himself into him
Men when they discover they didn't hammer down the roof right.
Yes, Viktor decides to finger Jayce's ass. Does he wash those hands? Hell no. Have a helping of these run on sentences instead.
I'm glad that once Joe Biden is done reading this out, Viktor can wipe his hands on Jayce's leg. Jayce didn't clean himself out, mind you. Hope he didn't decide to 'cut the ribbon' of his lunchtime bowel movement.
Fucking hell. Queercatfan did a number on these people. She's like the Dobre Brothers but for AO3: everyone copies her style, and everything goes downhill because of it.
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- Sep 9, 2021
This Valentine's Day, I present to you sequels, one-shots, one night stands, and chapter updates. The first one is an update to a fic I reviewed earlier ITT, one where Viktor threw out his birth control and aimed to baby trap Jayce. This fic currently has 209 bookmarks.
In the first chapter, Viktor got upset that Jayce didn't want children, so he proceeded to bitch and moan and use that pussy power to get him to relent. Now, after multiple rounds of fucking, Viktor ends up using his female anatomy and does what every other female mammal is capable of: gestate a fetus.
> Could it really be? So soon?
He already asked that. And if Viktor is already getting a baby bump, it's well into the first trimester and almost the second, as you usually don't start showing until 12-16 weeks. Since Viktor is so thin, it would probably be even more visible.
> Pregnant partner
Anything to avoid the word 'woman', even when you have him engage in the most female thing ever.
> They're so having a baby
Yes, that is the end result of penis-in-vagina sex. Why are you shocked?
> I do not understand
Viktor, the genius, is wholly unaware of his own female body and doesn't know why he gets pregnancy cravings. Ho hum.
> If Jayce could live in his skin, he would
Would he get white privilege or trans privilege this time?
> Again. He can't be blamed.
Look at that, it's the queercatfan sentence structure, where everyone talks like Joe Biden. So glad her curse is everywhere.
Feel free to count how many times Jayce's hands or body are written as 'large' - there are a lot of instances of that. Always have to establish who the real male is in the relationship. If you remember the TERF skeleton meme, well, these pooners fit it to a T.
In any case, I do not know if this fic is a modern AU or not, because Viktor does not go to any doctors or OB/GYNs to get ultrasounds. He just rolls with the pregnancy as is, unaware or uncaring if there will be any risks to the fetus or if it will be a dangerous pregnancy. This fic was tagged as 'crack treated seriously', but nearly all women will go out of their way to make sure the pregnancy is fine. Pooners, for some reason, do not.
> Pregnancy hormones are no joke
You'd know if you were smart and did some reading on them. In the first chapter, Viktor was the one who wanted the pregnancy, states he doesn't understand why anyone would endure more than one pregnancy, and then recants it and decides his entire life's work is to live barefoot and pregnant at Jayce's side.
The pooner yearns for the big cock and the kitchen.
> We don't know what they will be, and we won't know until they are born
So, there really are no ultrasounds or other such equipment to make sure the pregnancy is going well and that the fetus is positioned in the right spot (can't have a breech birth, you know) and they just 'don't know' what sex the fetus is. Interesting how Isha only goes to one of two options - male or female - and not a third or a fourth. Viktor decides it'll be a theybie and that's it.
> In just about six months we will know for certain
Oh? I thought genitalia didn't determine sex? But we can do it for babies, still?
> I find myself reaching for them often
So, what gender neutral name will the theybie have? The fact you aren't even taking vitamins for this makes me think this is the Medieval era, despite them being in a city where they have literal rail guns. You can't even get a palm reader to tell you what sex your baby is? C'mon!
Look at that, another mention of how large Jayce's hands are. I've said this many times, but every time I read this, I think Jayce is going DK mode a la Goldeneye style: enormous head, short legs, long arms and big ass hands. They're really not helping me with my imagination here.
That was fast. Turns out, he LOVES being pregnant because that is his foremost duty and 'role in life' and 'who he is meant to be'. You'd never know he was a scientist. You'd think he was a woman with a pregnancy fetish - oh, wait.
> Can't complain about his pregnancy symptoms so far
You say that now, wait until the birth actually begins and the baby ends up coming out with a Hapsburg jaw.
> Viktor was not expecting as the sudden increase in his libido
Pooners not only yearn for those white and pale-skinned babies, they yearn to be fucked. Observe.
> Even thinking about Jayce makes him throb
Makes WHAT throb? You don't have a penis.
> It's outright dangerous, the way he needs to be taken care of - so incredibly ridiculous
Thank you for the lampshading. If this was a normal het fic, people would be asking if Jayce was abusive or had a need to dominate and control Viktor. It's a 'crack fic' when it involves a pooner, because men would never be treated like that, right?
> Has been so forbearing about every single pregnancy symptom
Wanna know who hasn't? An actual doctor.
> What will he do when he inevitably keeps growing for the next three months?
You're already in the third trimester, yeah? You're going to get bigger and then you have to deal with all that leftover pregnancy flap. Luckily Jayce is Mexican and he can pretend its pita bread.
> His fingers find his cock, hard and wet already
This is a fic about pregnancy, and yet, the author cannot even be bothered to ever mention female anatomy. It all has to be male, because male is the default and doesn't cause them dysphoria.
> Circling his tip
I'm surprised you can find it. This also implies that Viktor has stopped T as well; if he hasn't, watch that baby come out fucked up even more.
> His hands are so soft and fingers so thin
How dainty and manly. I could never tell which one of you is the woman.
> He is so large, strong, just so much muscle
AKA every woman and pooner's wet dream, no matter how hard they try to deny it. They will never escape the simple fact that all they want in life is for a hunky man to show them their place and breed them like cattle. Those are their words, not mine.
> Covered in coarse, dark hair
Well at least you won't freeze in the winter with your portable Yeti right there.
> He needs beyond reason
You are a female getting aroused by an attractive male, and you desire to be bred by him. It's the most heterosexual thing imaginable, but we're to believe it's gay.
> To fuck him. Senseless.
Learn how to merge your sentences together, retard.
> Craving Jayce's hardening cock, his sweet mouth, his large hands
Whenever these pooners want to complain about vanilla sex, point out to them that this is how they write their porn. They are more vanilla than your basic homemade woman with three kids trying to have a work-life balance. They make EL James seem like a genius - which they fucking hate.
Also, as this is a fic about pregnancy - retire the use of 'hole'. The vagina is not a fucking hole and you are going to push a baby out of it.
> Gonna keep you like this. Pregnant and greedy for me, always
If I read this without context, people would think the man saying this was a controlling asshole. Turns out, no: it's sex talk from a trans fic, where a woman pretending to be a man gets pregnant and has to be reminded of their true place in life. It ain't offensive now, is it?
> Starting with his hole and then teasing his cock
Interesting how they will always write the clit as a male equivalent, but as there is no male equivalent to the vagina, they just use 'hole'. That word is like saying a devil's real name to them.
> Jayce eats him relentlessly, like it's the best thing he's ever tasted
Don't take him to a hotdog eating competition, then.
> His sweet pussy can't get enough, huh?
Thanks, I'll write that down as a future pick up line. It's from a trans fic so it's bound to be a winner.
> Cunt
> Cunt
> Hole
Pick one.
> Think you can take my cock. I wanna give it to you
The head is already inside?
> Full of my baby, full of my cock. You're mine, Viktor
Another line to add to my repertoire of 'insane things you read in fanfic'.
> Their bodies are so close together as Jayce pounds into Viktor
You already wrote that he was 'fucking him properly', so he was already doing this
Fucking Christ, they're already sobbing and crying during sex. Do I need a tissue box?
> Hips circle around Viktor's sensitive cock
Considering Viktor could not reach it himself thanks to his baby bump, it's mighty convenient that Jayce can. Guess you don't need that 2x4 fuckstick.
> Panting like beasts
You said it, not me.
> Because even as unable to form words as Viktor is
Yeah, this doesn't make sense. 'Viktor is unable to form word' is fine.
> If his huge frame wouldn't crush him and the baby
Just in case you didn't know who the actual man was.
I don't know how long this fic is going to be, but I'm looking forward to how the author is going to explain how Jayce and Viktor know what sex their baby is despite allegedly there being no way to tell. What name will they give their theybie? Hopefully not 'tar baby' like that one author did.
This fic was written for the author's fiancé, and she plans to write more as the days go by. Let us read this touching romance for her love most dear.
I wonder if these authors realize that by writing trans men - who are women - as utterly dependent on male approval and existence as hopelessly misogynistic? Or do they think that self identity really does free you from the constraints of your sex? He feels aimless and hopeless without his man, with no personality or drive of his own...and this is supposed to be angst?
Along with Mel, Viktor has an unnecessary hatred for Sky. She has done nothing wrong here aside from ask if he is okay, and he is seconds away from snapping at her. One must wonder if he's ready to call her a nigger at the rate he's going. But note that he accepts Jayce's apologies without question. Hmm, there's not a trend here at all...
Viktor doesn't actually hate Mel canonically, but it's a fandom thing to make her the scapegoat. If you didn't know any better, you'd think you entered the Stormfront forums based on how much they hate her for merely existing. Someone pointed out that she is hung with the same leash that male characters get let loose from, and I agree. It holds a double entendre here: she's hung because she's a woman, and because of her race.
But the half-white, half-Hispanic man gets all the accolades and forgiveness, and he's the one Viktor fingers himself to every night, so what's the problem?
> He looked so beautiful
Better that he's with you and confessing his love for that white pussy than black pussy, right?
Oh yes, lust over this big muscles and big hands and big male body...tell us who the real woman is.
Three days and he's acting like it's the end of the world. I thought trans men were independent and didn't need male approval?
"Let me guess, that fucking nigger kept you away from ME, the True and Honest Man, and corrupted you with her BLACK thoughts and BLACK existence" - Viktor, probably
> His words were soothing, but something still festered inside him
Like what? Like your bronze-skinned baddie tainting his lineage by drilling for oil? You can be honest with me, homie. I can see what you truly think.
> I still missed you. It still hurts
IT WAS ONLY THREE DAYS. FUCKING TAKE A BREAK AND TOUCH GRASS YOU OBSESSIVE BERK
Good to know that all it takes to erase his incessant nigger hatred is for a sexy hunk to say he loves him. Damn, we really DID fix racism!
I am so glad Jayce realize his place was between Viktor's white thighs and white pussy. We don't do that black shit around here. Jayce realizes that white TRANS pussy is the best, and he is going to colonize that shit very soon - or would it be considered reverse colonization? You decide.
> Viktor was keenly aware of just how small he was
Of course, because you're female. We have to highlight how small you are because how else could people tell? You're a smol uwu trans boi who can't wait for that big ole Hispanic Hog. Let's colonize this shit right away.
Gotta have that uwu smol midriff dwarfed by those big man hands...and you know what they say about big hands, right? Jayce is going to test the limits and new possibilities when he decides to go muff diving in the whitest, palest, hairiest trans pussy imaginable. No blacks needed or wanted here.
Stay tuned for that trans pussy colonization. It's a real Valentine's Day treat!
Feeling ill this Valentine's day? Luckily I've got something better than chicken soup for your soul.
People normally have allergies in the spring and summer because that's when tree pollen is released. It's obvious that they are in cold and flu season, so it's only normal that Jayce has the flu.
The talk about galas and asshole investors is brought up at least three times - fair warning. It's like the author forgot she already wrote it like she did that allergies don't really occur in the winter (unless they're food allergies then they can happen whenever and wherever).
Usually, it's Viktor's apartment that is a shithole and Jayce's apartment that is clean, so it's interesting to see this reversed.
So, after talking about investors for the third time, Jayce decides to liplock Viktor even though they're absolutely hammered. Despite that, they go to bed together and do not sleep together, and Viktor is both relieved that they did not sleep together and upset that they did not (frankly, I'd be happier with the former, as it means Jayce did not take advantage of him when drunk). Make up your mind.
> He has had his fair share of sexual escapades
Of course. Pooner Viktor is usually a slut, and knows his way around all sorts of cocks. That's why he's an expert.
> He would be sorely disappointed
You were disappointed you weren't dicked down rather than a man taking responsibility and NOT sleeping with you while you were both drunk? Sounds like Jayce is the better man here and you aren't.
> Viktor did read about a particularly strong flu that was spreading all over the city
And yet, Jayce still wants to pass it off as allergies. OK, bud.
> You're sick like a mutt
Hey, I was told Hybrid Vigour was a thing!
> Viktor hates this part of their job, the constant need to appease investors
You've already spoken about this more than once.
> It's counterintuitive to their workflow, and he doubts they even understand the amount of craftsmanship he and Jayce put into their inventions
They are paying for it, and you don't have as great of an output if A) you're sick with the flu and B) you're fucking all the time.
> Things Viktor can only roll his eyes at
He grew up poor, surely he knows all about these 'home remedies' when he wasn't able to access proper medicine. Vitamin C helps a lot.
> Silently curses Jayce's large frame, because his spindly fingers can barely around both the man's wrists
Just in case you needed to know who the trans person was, based on how uwu smol they are. Also, you are supposed to have sex before you get ill, not during or after. If anything, you will spread the infection to your partner. Nice close reading of the papers there, Viktor.
> Twirling their tongues together
And those tongues are coated in influenza virus.
> The vapors are visible thanks to the cold air in Jayce's bedroom
Does he not have central heating? That is only going to make his illness worse. Turn up the heat and wear warmer blankets! You should not be seeing your own breath in your own goddamn room! Jesus.
> Strong, rough and calloused hands
Because we really need to know who the real man is.
> Viktor could already feel the veins pulsating in his grip
Oh, he's a thick and veiny one, eh? I wonder what would happen if you took a pen to it?
> Moves him like he weighs nothing
In fairness, Viktor is both small due to his illness and a pooner, so it's the equivalent of waving around a porcelain doll. There are probably human-sized dolls that weigh more than him.
> Viktor would be opposed to the idea of being treated like he was frail, but Jayce never did that
He does, but he gets away with it because he's got and has a big dick. Such privileges will let you do anything.
> Their dicks rubbed together
One of them is the 1/4 of the size of that dorsal head, and the other is so thick you could probably stuff it into a Pringles can. They are not the same.
> Swollen cock
You keep telling yourself that, lad.
> A second thick finger into his slicked hole
Just a reminder that the tag 'vaginal fingering' is used, but never used in the body of the fic. They hate the term, but love the tag - and then go right back to using cunt a sentence later.
> Push into his hole, lapping him up like he was thirsty, and Viktor was all the water he could drink
So he's like a beer tap at Yankee's game, gotcha.
> Viktor's swollen cock
You can keep using that term because it won't give you dysphoria, but it will never compare to the thing Jayce has between his legs.
> Breeches into Viktor's sex once more
I don't know why but I heard 'OVER THE TOP, LADS' when I read this.
> Right into his cunt
No 'hole' this time? Oh look: 'weeping slit' is right there.
> Jayce looks almost to the point of tears
Here, have a Kleenex.
> The girth of Jayce's dick still managed to stretch Viktor out even further
What did I say? This man has a Pringles can waving around and the author wants to compare that roid clit to it. The difference cannot even be more stark; Viktor has to 'take a break' taking it, while he couldn't even dream of penetrating Jayce with it.
> Steady but brutal pace
> Slow pace is torturous for both of them
Eh? I thought they were doing it at a 'brutal pace'? He's later 'pistoning' out of Viktor, so how the hell was he going slow?
> It's like he's pressing down on a hard rock
Careful, there may be a fic out there where he does just that - just like the Monster can one.
> Viktor's poor cock, still too sensitive and overstimulated
Homie, that roid clit ain't nothing compared to that thing that's literally hard as a rock inside you. If there is no greater example of sexual dimorphism, that is it.
> Breed me, and make me yours
The pooner yearns for this as men yearn for the mines. RETVRN
> Viktor swears he could feel him pounding into his cervix
It's the Hispanic Hog, so chances are he is.
> Could taste his come in the back of his throat
Does it taste better since he's sick with the flu, or...?
> Effectively drilling his cock in and out of Viktor's swollen cunt
> Gonna pump you so full of me, Viktor
You're already making him a human Twinkie.
> Continues to milk Jayce of the last of his spilled seed
Just as Nature planned.
> Eventually Viktor finds the strength to shove Jayce's weight off of him
Yeah, I doubt that. He's 6'2, likely over 200 lbs of muscle, and you are a barely 100 lb woman with T injections. You are NOT going to move him.
> Miraculously, his fever has come down to a manageable temperature
Sure, but now you're also infected with the flu. You just got a mouthful of that viral load at the expense of that white load.
I could have told you that. You should have skipped that day and just chugged some orange juice or some chicken soup. Save the fucking for another day, yeah?
I don't even want to know what this is. Google Translate helped with this one.
Sometimes the Chinese fics are the most fucked up ones. Not surprised bugmen have a natural inclination for weird shit.
And then you have the white women going with the 'white girls fuck dogs' thing. Christ, they're really living up to that meme, eh?
There's also been an influx of new stuff because it's Valentine's day, and I'm going to be in a snowstorm tomorrow, so we'll see what sort of leftover chocolates and romance there are on the table. Don't worry about your Valentine's Day cards - I've got extra.
Edit: just when I was about to give it a rest, THIS popped up on my feed. Get your lint brush and/or vacuums ready.
Oh yeah, there's DEFINITELY going to be cleaning that needs to be done after this fic. You'll see what I mean very soon.
Nice bathtub. All you're missing is the orchid plants and the Spotify playlist with Chappell Roan singing in the background.
> Less medicinal and more spicy
...what kind of medicinal shampoo are you using, Jayce?
> The familiar scent of eucalyptus
Nice, you'll smell of Vick's vapour rub. Also highly flammable.
> They're so unique, distinctive, how one rises slightly higher than the other
...because of his leg. He has to compensate. Also, there are sex differences in the human shoulder, and women have weaker shoulders than men, so...
Huh, look at that. Viktor doesn't have layered armpit hair like he did in that one MGCraig fic. Instead, all the growth went to his pubes instead.
> Massage complete
You call that a massage?
> Slight swell of Viktor's stomach
Another thing to clock Viktor as female: women have that little lip of fat on our stomachs, even while thin. Whoopsie.
> Carding his fingers through Viktor's pubic hair
Here is where the plot really begins: Viktor's Rapunzel pubes. This is something that is so prevalent in these fics that I coined the term for it, and now, there's a fic about trimming the damn thing. It's so thick I'm surprise you can even see his labia through it (and I am amazed the author uses that term without a hiccup) and no, Jayce, pubic hair is not the vulva. It borders the vulva. You can dislike the hair while liking the vulva.
> The fact it's grown so long must mean something
The fact you need Jayce to return to his landscaper roots means something, too.
> Engulfing it its entirety
That's not the only thing he engulfs - HEYO
> Like this, he can see all of Viktor's pussy - or as much as he can see behind the wild bush that grows between his legs
I bet it's Jurassic Park in there and you can find your very own Utahraptor in there.
> The tip of his clit barely visible behind the fluffy hair
And yet, you want to tell me that that is a cock.
> It connects with the hair on his thighs, a small trail leading up to his belly button
Oh, he's got the racing stripes, too. Should've asked me for the wax warmer.
> I look like an animal
You have enough hair to survive Mt. Everest. What does that tell you?
> Masculine
Both men and women have hair. You having body hair does not make you male, and males can wax and shave their bodies, too. Even Muslim men wax their armpits.
> Bush angled in his, the hair rubbing up against Jayce's belly, all mixed up until he can't tell where one person begins
What the fuck? If you have that much hair where you can get tangled in each other like stuffed lint in an air dryer, both of you need a fucking shave. Not even fucking SHEEP have that problem.
> The dark hair of Viktor's cunt
You mean around his vulva?
> Frames his pink pussy perfectly
Before you couldn't even SEE his genitalia. Now you can because Jayce the hedgetrimmer saved the day.
> Frilled edges of his plump, inner lips
Is the author describing her own genitalia?
> His hole, then lower, the fuzzy part between front and back
Oh, you mean the perineum? Because 'hole' here can mean anus or vagina. Oh, you meant the 'front hole', bitch.
> Pointed tip grazing against his clit
In which Jayce decides to commit to Allah and snip off Viktor's clit FGM style.
> Revealing Viktor's weeping hole
I thought you could already see it based on what he trimmed?
> Spreads his puss wider
That's going in my list of 'shit fanfic authors say'.
> Full shaft of Viktor's cock is visible, fat and swollen
It's not that full if it was entirely hidden by his pubic hair, now is it?
> Kisses the tip of Viktor's cock
With a mouthful of pubes, might I add.
> Tongues Viktor's hole
Which one? Not the one you just trimmed, right?
> Like a starving man
Ah, this cliché again.
> Tongue flicking the rubbery tip
Interesting description. Did his clit go from cock to clit to rubbery tip like it's Transformer made of silicone? You tell me.
That's right: Jayce fucks Viktor on the hard tile like he is a human mop, hard enough to where he nearly bangs his head off the bathroom door. I'm glad Viktor's disability isn't acting up here because he is taking this like a champ.
> It doesn't take much force to bend Viktor in half
Of course not, he's an uwu smol trans boi
> Thighs touching his belly as Jayce holds his feet with one hand
Damn, along with tiny lady hands, Viktor has lady feet, too. I'm surprised trans authors don't mention feet more, because you can clock someone based on their feet, too.
> Near his cute asshole that Jayce loves to finger and fuck
Does it have hair as well, or does it magically escape the Yeti curse? Looks like Jayce is also packing in the hair department as well, sporting enough fur to be a caveman from 10,000 BC.
> Cock bumping up against Jayce's tip
His tip is bigger than yours will ever be, dood.
> How the muscle strain to accommodate for his size
Always our boy, the Hispanic Hog.
> How his fat folds spread to make room for his throbbing cock
Least you can see them now.
I wasn't joking about Viktor being used as a human mop. This man is being dragged across the floor as if he weighs nothing. Too bad the only thing he absorbs is Jayce's semen.
> It's so big as it batters against his cervix
OK, ouch
> Balls slapping against his asshole with every thrust inside him
So, we talking 10 inches or more? 3 inches wide? Toss me some numbers.
> Just two men chasing after their own pleasure
Well one of you isn't a man because the vagina isn't male genitalia, but whatever.
> He thinks about how good it feels with Viktor's pussy trimmed, how he can feel all the slick skin against his lower belly instead of the tufted, tangled hair from before
You are a hairy motherfucker yourself; take your own advice and start trimming and waxing. I can't imagine having your foreskin accidentally snipped would be nice, eh? I'm feeling a little Jewish.
Hmm, that's another fic that uses that verbiage. Too bad you can't sell it; imagine how many Hispanic Hogs would be born from sperm banks!
Be sure to fill that bath with extra hot water; being treated as a human mop can't be good for your back.
TL;DR Jayce returns to his landscaper roots, almost performs FGM on his dood boyfriend. Gets used as a human mop. The end.
In the first chapter, Viktor got upset that Jayce didn't want children, so he proceeded to bitch and moan and use that pussy power to get him to relent. Now, after multiple rounds of fucking, Viktor ends up using his female anatomy and does what every other female mammal is capable of: gestate a fetus.
> Could it really be? So soon?
He already asked that. And if Viktor is already getting a baby bump, it's well into the first trimester and almost the second, as you usually don't start showing until 12-16 weeks. Since Viktor is so thin, it would probably be even more visible.
> Pregnant partner
Anything to avoid the word 'woman', even when you have him engage in the most female thing ever.
> They're so having a baby
Yes, that is the end result of penis-in-vagina sex. Why are you shocked?
> I do not understand
Viktor, the genius, is wholly unaware of his own female body and doesn't know why he gets pregnancy cravings. Ho hum.
> If Jayce could live in his skin, he would
Would he get white privilege or trans privilege this time?
> Again. He can't be blamed.
Look at that, it's the queercatfan sentence structure, where everyone talks like Joe Biden. So glad her curse is everywhere.
Feel free to count how many times Jayce's hands or body are written as 'large' - there are a lot of instances of that. Always have to establish who the real male is in the relationship. If you remember the TERF skeleton meme, well, these pooners fit it to a T.
In any case, I do not know if this fic is a modern AU or not, because Viktor does not go to any doctors or OB/GYNs to get ultrasounds. He just rolls with the pregnancy as is, unaware or uncaring if there will be any risks to the fetus or if it will be a dangerous pregnancy. This fic was tagged as 'crack treated seriously', but nearly all women will go out of their way to make sure the pregnancy is fine. Pooners, for some reason, do not.
> Pregnancy hormones are no joke
You'd know if you were smart and did some reading on them. In the first chapter, Viktor was the one who wanted the pregnancy, states he doesn't understand why anyone would endure more than one pregnancy, and then recants it and decides his entire life's work is to live barefoot and pregnant at Jayce's side.
The pooner yearns for the big cock and the kitchen.
> We don't know what they will be, and we won't know until they are born
So, there really are no ultrasounds or other such equipment to make sure the pregnancy is going well and that the fetus is positioned in the right spot (can't have a breech birth, you know) and they just 'don't know' what sex the fetus is. Interesting how Isha only goes to one of two options - male or female - and not a third or a fourth. Viktor decides it'll be a theybie and that's it.
> In just about six months we will know for certain
Oh? I thought genitalia didn't determine sex? But we can do it for babies, still?
> I find myself reaching for them often
So, what gender neutral name will the theybie have? The fact you aren't even taking vitamins for this makes me think this is the Medieval era, despite them being in a city where they have literal rail guns. You can't even get a palm reader to tell you what sex your baby is? C'mon!
Look at that, another mention of how large Jayce's hands are. I've said this many times, but every time I read this, I think Jayce is going DK mode a la Goldeneye style: enormous head, short legs, long arms and big ass hands. They're really not helping me with my imagination here.
That was fast. Turns out, he LOVES being pregnant because that is his foremost duty and 'role in life' and 'who he is meant to be'. You'd never know he was a scientist. You'd think he was a woman with a pregnancy fetish - oh, wait.
> Can't complain about his pregnancy symptoms so far
You say that now, wait until the birth actually begins and the baby ends up coming out with a Hapsburg jaw.
> Viktor was not expecting as the sudden increase in his libido
Pooners not only yearn for those white and pale-skinned babies, they yearn to be fucked. Observe.
> Even thinking about Jayce makes him throb
Makes WHAT throb? You don't have a penis.
> It's outright dangerous, the way he needs to be taken care of - so incredibly ridiculous
Thank you for the lampshading. If this was a normal het fic, people would be asking if Jayce was abusive or had a need to dominate and control Viktor. It's a 'crack fic' when it involves a pooner, because men would never be treated like that, right?
> Has been so forbearing about every single pregnancy symptom
Wanna know who hasn't? An actual doctor.
> What will he do when he inevitably keeps growing for the next three months?
You're already in the third trimester, yeah? You're going to get bigger and then you have to deal with all that leftover pregnancy flap. Luckily Jayce is Mexican and he can pretend its pita bread.
> His fingers find his cock, hard and wet already
This is a fic about pregnancy, and yet, the author cannot even be bothered to ever mention female anatomy. It all has to be male, because male is the default and doesn't cause them dysphoria.
> Circling his tip
I'm surprised you can find it. This also implies that Viktor has stopped T as well; if he hasn't, watch that baby come out fucked up even more.
> His hands are so soft and fingers so thin
How dainty and manly. I could never tell which one of you is the woman.
> He is so large, strong, just so much muscle
AKA every woman and pooner's wet dream, no matter how hard they try to deny it. They will never escape the simple fact that all they want in life is for a hunky man to show them their place and breed them like cattle. Those are their words, not mine.
> Covered in coarse, dark hair
Well at least you won't freeze in the winter with your portable Yeti right there.
> He needs beyond reason
You are a female getting aroused by an attractive male, and you desire to be bred by him. It's the most heterosexual thing imaginable, but we're to believe it's gay.
> To fuck him. Senseless.
Learn how to merge your sentences together, retard.
> Craving Jayce's hardening cock, his sweet mouth, his large hands
Whenever these pooners want to complain about vanilla sex, point out to them that this is how they write their porn. They are more vanilla than your basic homemade woman with three kids trying to have a work-life balance. They make EL James seem like a genius - which they fucking hate.
Also, as this is a fic about pregnancy - retire the use of 'hole'. The vagina is not a fucking hole and you are going to push a baby out of it.
> Gonna keep you like this. Pregnant and greedy for me, always
If I read this without context, people would think the man saying this was a controlling asshole. Turns out, no: it's sex talk from a trans fic, where a woman pretending to be a man gets pregnant and has to be reminded of their true place in life. It ain't offensive now, is it?
> Starting with his hole and then teasing his cock
Interesting how they will always write the clit as a male equivalent, but as there is no male equivalent to the vagina, they just use 'hole'. That word is like saying a devil's real name to them.
> Jayce eats him relentlessly, like it's the best thing he's ever tasted
Don't take him to a hotdog eating competition, then.
> His sweet pussy can't get enough, huh?
Thanks, I'll write that down as a future pick up line. It's from a trans fic so it's bound to be a winner.
> Cunt
> Cunt
> Hole
Pick one.
> Think you can take my cock. I wanna give it to you
The head is already inside?
> Full of my baby, full of my cock. You're mine, Viktor
Another line to add to my repertoire of 'insane things you read in fanfic'.
> Their bodies are so close together as Jayce pounds into Viktor
You already wrote that he was 'fucking him properly', so he was already doing this
Fucking Christ, they're already sobbing and crying during sex. Do I need a tissue box?
> Hips circle around Viktor's sensitive cock
Considering Viktor could not reach it himself thanks to his baby bump, it's mighty convenient that Jayce can. Guess you don't need that 2x4 fuckstick.
> Panting like beasts
You said it, not me.
> Because even as unable to form words as Viktor is
Yeah, this doesn't make sense. 'Viktor is unable to form word' is fine.
> If his huge frame wouldn't crush him and the baby
Just in case you didn't know who the actual man was.
I don't know how long this fic is going to be, but I'm looking forward to how the author is going to explain how Jayce and Viktor know what sex their baby is despite allegedly there being no way to tell. What name will they give their theybie? Hopefully not 'tar baby' like that one author did.
This fic was written for the author's fiancé, and she plans to write more as the days go by. Let us read this touching romance for her love most dear.
I wonder if these authors realize that by writing trans men - who are women - as utterly dependent on male approval and existence as hopelessly misogynistic? Or do they think that self identity really does free you from the constraints of your sex? He feels aimless and hopeless without his man, with no personality or drive of his own...and this is supposed to be angst?
Along with Mel, Viktor has an unnecessary hatred for Sky. She has done nothing wrong here aside from ask if he is okay, and he is seconds away from snapping at her. One must wonder if he's ready to call her a nigger at the rate he's going. But note that he accepts Jayce's apologies without question. Hmm, there's not a trend here at all...
Viktor doesn't actually hate Mel canonically, but it's a fandom thing to make her the scapegoat. If you didn't know any better, you'd think you entered the Stormfront forums based on how much they hate her for merely existing. Someone pointed out that she is hung with the same leash that male characters get let loose from, and I agree. It holds a double entendre here: she's hung because she's a woman, and because of her race.
But the half-white, half-Hispanic man gets all the accolades and forgiveness, and he's the one Viktor fingers himself to every night, so what's the problem?
> He looked so beautiful
Better that he's with you and confessing his love for that white pussy than black pussy, right?
Oh yes, lust over this big muscles and big hands and big male body...tell us who the real woman is.
Three days and he's acting like it's the end of the world. I thought trans men were independent and didn't need male approval?
"Let me guess, that fucking nigger kept you away from ME, the True and Honest Man, and corrupted you with her BLACK thoughts and BLACK existence" - Viktor, probably
> His words were soothing, but something still festered inside him
Like what? Like your bronze-skinned baddie tainting his lineage by drilling for oil? You can be honest with me, homie. I can see what you truly think.
> I still missed you. It still hurts
IT WAS ONLY THREE DAYS. FUCKING TAKE A BREAK AND TOUCH GRASS YOU OBSESSIVE BERK
Good to know that all it takes to erase his incessant nigger hatred is for a sexy hunk to say he loves him. Damn, we really DID fix racism!
I am so glad Jayce realize his place was between Viktor's white thighs and white pussy. We don't do that black shit around here. Jayce realizes that white TRANS pussy is the best, and he is going to colonize that shit very soon - or would it be considered reverse colonization? You decide.
> Viktor was keenly aware of just how small he was
Of course, because you're female. We have to highlight how small you are because how else could people tell? You're a smol uwu trans boi who can't wait for that big ole Hispanic Hog. Let's colonize this shit right away.
Gotta have that uwu smol midriff dwarfed by those big man hands...and you know what they say about big hands, right? Jayce is going to test the limits and new possibilities when he decides to go muff diving in the whitest, palest, hairiest trans pussy imaginable. No blacks needed or wanted here.
Stay tuned for that trans pussy colonization. It's a real Valentine's Day treat!
Feeling ill this Valentine's day? Luckily I've got something better than chicken soup for your soul.
People normally have allergies in the spring and summer because that's when tree pollen is released. It's obvious that they are in cold and flu season, so it's only normal that Jayce has the flu.
The talk about galas and asshole investors is brought up at least three times - fair warning. It's like the author forgot she already wrote it like she did that allergies don't really occur in the winter (unless they're food allergies then they can happen whenever and wherever).
Usually, it's Viktor's apartment that is a shithole and Jayce's apartment that is clean, so it's interesting to see this reversed.
So, after talking about investors for the third time, Jayce decides to liplock Viktor even though they're absolutely hammered. Despite that, they go to bed together and do not sleep together, and Viktor is both relieved that they did not sleep together and upset that they did not (frankly, I'd be happier with the former, as it means Jayce did not take advantage of him when drunk). Make up your mind.
> He has had his fair share of sexual escapades
Of course. Pooner Viktor is usually a slut, and knows his way around all sorts of cocks. That's why he's an expert.
> He would be sorely disappointed
You were disappointed you weren't dicked down rather than a man taking responsibility and NOT sleeping with you while you were both drunk? Sounds like Jayce is the better man here and you aren't.
> Viktor did read about a particularly strong flu that was spreading all over the city
And yet, Jayce still wants to pass it off as allergies. OK, bud.
> You're sick like a mutt
Hey, I was told Hybrid Vigour was a thing!
> Viktor hates this part of their job, the constant need to appease investors
You've already spoken about this more than once.
> It's counterintuitive to their workflow, and he doubts they even understand the amount of craftsmanship he and Jayce put into their inventions
They are paying for it, and you don't have as great of an output if A) you're sick with the flu and B) you're fucking all the time.
> Things Viktor can only roll his eyes at
He grew up poor, surely he knows all about these 'home remedies' when he wasn't able to access proper medicine. Vitamin C helps a lot.
> Silently curses Jayce's large frame, because his spindly fingers can barely around both the man's wrists
Just in case you needed to know who the trans person was, based on how uwu smol they are. Also, you are supposed to have sex before you get ill, not during or after. If anything, you will spread the infection to your partner. Nice close reading of the papers there, Viktor.
> Twirling their tongues together
And those tongues are coated in influenza virus.
> The vapors are visible thanks to the cold air in Jayce's bedroom
Does he not have central heating? That is only going to make his illness worse. Turn up the heat and wear warmer blankets! You should not be seeing your own breath in your own goddamn room! Jesus.
> Strong, rough and calloused hands
Because we really need to know who the real man is.
> Viktor could already feel the veins pulsating in his grip
Oh, he's a thick and veiny one, eh? I wonder what would happen if you took a pen to it?
> Moves him like he weighs nothing
In fairness, Viktor is both small due to his illness and a pooner, so it's the equivalent of waving around a porcelain doll. There are probably human-sized dolls that weigh more than him.
> Viktor would be opposed to the idea of being treated like he was frail, but Jayce never did that
He does, but he gets away with it because he's got and has a big dick. Such privileges will let you do anything.
> Their dicks rubbed together
One of them is the 1/4 of the size of that dorsal head, and the other is so thick you could probably stuff it into a Pringles can. They are not the same.
> Swollen cock
You keep telling yourself that, lad.
> A second thick finger into his slicked hole
Just a reminder that the tag 'vaginal fingering' is used, but never used in the body of the fic. They hate the term, but love the tag - and then go right back to using cunt a sentence later.
> Push into his hole, lapping him up like he was thirsty, and Viktor was all the water he could drink
So he's like a beer tap at Yankee's game, gotcha.
> Viktor's swollen cock
You can keep using that term because it won't give you dysphoria, but it will never compare to the thing Jayce has between his legs.
> Breeches into Viktor's sex once more
I don't know why but I heard 'OVER THE TOP, LADS' when I read this.
> Right into his cunt
No 'hole' this time? Oh look: 'weeping slit' is right there.
> Jayce looks almost to the point of tears
Here, have a Kleenex.
> The girth of Jayce's dick still managed to stretch Viktor out even further
What did I say? This man has a Pringles can waving around and the author wants to compare that roid clit to it. The difference cannot even be more stark; Viktor has to 'take a break' taking it, while he couldn't even dream of penetrating Jayce with it.
> Steady but brutal pace
> Slow pace is torturous for both of them
Eh? I thought they were doing it at a 'brutal pace'? He's later 'pistoning' out of Viktor, so how the hell was he going slow?
> It's like he's pressing down on a hard rock
Careful, there may be a fic out there where he does just that - just like the Monster can one.
> Viktor's poor cock, still too sensitive and overstimulated
Homie, that roid clit ain't nothing compared to that thing that's literally hard as a rock inside you. If there is no greater example of sexual dimorphism, that is it.
> Breed me, and make me yours
The pooner yearns for this as men yearn for the mines. RETVRN
> Viktor swears he could feel him pounding into his cervix
It's the Hispanic Hog, so chances are he is.
> Could taste his come in the back of his throat
Does it taste better since he's sick with the flu, or...?
> Effectively drilling his cock in and out of Viktor's swollen cunt
> Gonna pump you so full of me, Viktor
You're already making him a human Twinkie.
> Continues to milk Jayce of the last of his spilled seed
Just as Nature planned.
> Eventually Viktor finds the strength to shove Jayce's weight off of him
Yeah, I doubt that. He's 6'2, likely over 200 lbs of muscle, and you are a barely 100 lb woman with T injections. You are NOT going to move him.
> Miraculously, his fever has come down to a manageable temperature
Sure, but now you're also infected with the flu. You just got a mouthful of that viral load at the expense of that white load.
I could have told you that. You should have skipped that day and just chugged some orange juice or some chicken soup. Save the fucking for another day, yeah?
Sometimes the Chinese fics are the most fucked up ones. Not surprised bugmen have a natural inclination for weird shit.
And then you have the white women going with the 'white girls fuck dogs' thing. Christ, they're really living up to that meme, eh?
There's also been an influx of new stuff because it's Valentine's day, and I'm going to be in a snowstorm tomorrow, so we'll see what sort of leftover chocolates and romance there are on the table. Don't worry about your Valentine's Day cards - I've got extra.
Edit: just when I was about to give it a rest, THIS popped up on my feed. Get your lint brush and/or vacuums ready.
Oh yeah, there's DEFINITELY going to be cleaning that needs to be done after this fic. You'll see what I mean very soon.
Nice bathtub. All you're missing is the orchid plants and the Spotify playlist with Chappell Roan singing in the background.
> Less medicinal and more spicy
...what kind of medicinal shampoo are you using, Jayce?
> The familiar scent of eucalyptus
Nice, you'll smell of Vick's vapour rub. Also highly flammable.
> They're so unique, distinctive, how one rises slightly higher than the other
...because of his leg. He has to compensate. Also, there are sex differences in the human shoulder, and women have weaker shoulders than men, so...
Huh, look at that. Viktor doesn't have layered armpit hair like he did in that one MGCraig fic. Instead, all the growth went to his pubes instead.
> Massage complete
You call that a massage?
> Slight swell of Viktor's stomach
Another thing to clock Viktor as female: women have that little lip of fat on our stomachs, even while thin. Whoopsie.
> Carding his fingers through Viktor's pubic hair
Here is where the plot really begins: Viktor's Rapunzel pubes. This is something that is so prevalent in these fics that I coined the term for it, and now, there's a fic about trimming the damn thing. It's so thick I'm surprise you can even see his labia through it (and I am amazed the author uses that term without a hiccup) and no, Jayce, pubic hair is not the vulva. It borders the vulva. You can dislike the hair while liking the vulva.
> The fact it's grown so long must mean something
The fact you need Jayce to return to his landscaper roots means something, too.
> Engulfing it its entirety
That's not the only thing he engulfs - HEYO
> Like this, he can see all of Viktor's pussy - or as much as he can see behind the wild bush that grows between his legs
I bet it's Jurassic Park in there and you can find your very own Utahraptor in there.
> The tip of his clit barely visible behind the fluffy hair
And yet, you want to tell me that that is a cock.
> It connects with the hair on his thighs, a small trail leading up to his belly button
Oh, he's got the racing stripes, too. Should've asked me for the wax warmer.
> I look like an animal
You have enough hair to survive Mt. Everest. What does that tell you?
> Masculine
Both men and women have hair. You having body hair does not make you male, and males can wax and shave their bodies, too. Even Muslim men wax their armpits.
> Bush angled in his, the hair rubbing up against Jayce's belly, all mixed up until he can't tell where one person begins
What the fuck? If you have that much hair where you can get tangled in each other like stuffed lint in an air dryer, both of you need a fucking shave. Not even fucking SHEEP have that problem.
> The dark hair of Viktor's cunt
You mean around his vulva?
> Frames his pink pussy perfectly
Before you couldn't even SEE his genitalia. Now you can because Jayce the hedgetrimmer saved the day.
> Frilled edges of his plump, inner lips
Is the author describing her own genitalia?
> His hole, then lower, the fuzzy part between front and back
Oh, you mean the perineum? Because 'hole' here can mean anus or vagina. Oh, you meant the 'front hole', bitch.
> Pointed tip grazing against his clit
In which Jayce decides to commit to Allah and snip off Viktor's clit FGM style.
> Revealing Viktor's weeping hole
I thought you could already see it based on what he trimmed?
> Spreads his puss wider
That's going in my list of 'shit fanfic authors say'.
> Full shaft of Viktor's cock is visible, fat and swollen
It's not that full if it was entirely hidden by his pubic hair, now is it?
> Kisses the tip of Viktor's cock
With a mouthful of pubes, might I add.
> Tongues Viktor's hole
Which one? Not the one you just trimmed, right?
> Like a starving man
Ah, this cliché again.
> Tongue flicking the rubbery tip
Interesting description. Did his clit go from cock to clit to rubbery tip like it's Transformer made of silicone? You tell me.
That's right: Jayce fucks Viktor on the hard tile like he is a human mop, hard enough to where he nearly bangs his head off the bathroom door. I'm glad Viktor's disability isn't acting up here because he is taking this like a champ.
> It doesn't take much force to bend Viktor in half
Of course not, he's an uwu smol trans boi
> Thighs touching his belly as Jayce holds his feet with one hand
Damn, along with tiny lady hands, Viktor has lady feet, too. I'm surprised trans authors don't mention feet more, because you can clock someone based on their feet, too.
> Near his cute asshole that Jayce loves to finger and fuck
Does it have hair as well, or does it magically escape the Yeti curse? Looks like Jayce is also packing in the hair department as well, sporting enough fur to be a caveman from 10,000 BC.
> Cock bumping up against Jayce's tip
His tip is bigger than yours will ever be, dood.
> How the muscle strain to accommodate for his size
Always our boy, the Hispanic Hog.
> How his fat folds spread to make room for his throbbing cock
Least you can see them now.
I wasn't joking about Viktor being used as a human mop. This man is being dragged across the floor as if he weighs nothing. Too bad the only thing he absorbs is Jayce's semen.
> It's so big as it batters against his cervix
OK, ouch
> Balls slapping against his asshole with every thrust inside him
So, we talking 10 inches or more? 3 inches wide? Toss me some numbers.
> Just two men chasing after their own pleasure
Well one of you isn't a man because the vagina isn't male genitalia, but whatever.
> He thinks about how good it feels with Viktor's pussy trimmed, how he can feel all the slick skin against his lower belly instead of the tufted, tangled hair from before
You are a hairy motherfucker yourself; take your own advice and start trimming and waxing. I can't imagine having your foreskin accidentally snipped would be nice, eh? I'm feeling a little Jewish.
Hmm, that's another fic that uses that verbiage. Too bad you can't sell it; imagine how many Hispanic Hogs would be born from sperm banks!
Be sure to fill that bath with extra hot water; being treated as a human mop can't be good for your back.
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V Day Plus One has brought a few new treats, namely this one where our resident landscaper realizes that he is, indeed, not just a catcher, but a receiver.
Well, that was fast. Speedrunning a romance, eh?
> If they'd been in a movie, Jayce would've swept his arm across the nearest desk so he could lay Viktor out and fuck him right there
Breaking the 4th wall AND realizing that such a hard surface is bad for a disabled person's body? You don't say. Most of these fics just involve them fucking anywhere, spinal screws be damned. Imagine that this one actually considers the logistics of it!
> How Jayce ended up with one of his hands closed around both of Viktor's slim wrists
Just in case you needed to know who the woman was.
> He looms over his partner, his broad shoulders blocking out the pale light
Just in case you needed to know who the male was.
> If this is the only time this ever happens, he wants to be able to say he made the most of it
As it turns out, Jayce has fucked up his earlier relationships, mostly because despite his size and huge cock, he's a total fuckboy, and doesn't know how to use it. He's an utter trainwreck and that's cute, apparently.
> It's a show, one that Viktor doesn't even realize that he's in
Oh I'm sure he knows. He's very perceptive.
> It would be fair to say that Jayce is not at all great at improvising
Then you aren't meant for the stage. If you can't improvise, you aren't a well-rounded actor. Ad-libbing is usually responsible for a lot of famous lines and performances.
>There's no need for a discussion about what you're into or what your preferences are when you're built like a six foot tall brick shithouse
That might be true, but as it turns out (x2), Jayce doesn't know how to work himself sexually. I assume he just stuck his dick in someone and thrusted madly, without bothering to care for his partner's pleasure. Jayce strikes me as someone who MIGHT be a little naïve but is a quick learner and is always willing to try - he isn't called a service top for nothing.
> When the people who are attracted to you tend to be smaller, submissive, looking for somebody to throw them around
How convenient that Viktor, a woman, fits that bill, as there aren't many six foot tall women. This also means he doesn't go after many men because even though some men are going to be shorter, not all of them are going to be the stereotypical subs. Is he going after 'meek' women or what?
> Sex doesn't come naturally to Jayce
Oh, so you ARE a fuckboy.
How nice: you discovered where all the G-spots were; all the safe words and all the kinks and every bit of Kinsey you could get your hands on and you are still a fuckup. Why? Spoiler: despite being a brick shithouse, all Jayce wants is the 5'0 pooner to top him with a strap. Saved you a lot of trouble.
> Pulls the fabric apart
A literal bodice ripping scene, eh? He better have money for a new shirt.
> It's almost scarily easily for him to move Viktor around
You do hard, manual labour and Viktor is A) sickly and thin and B) a natal female. He is not going to be as big as you even if he was roided up. Jayce can pull his own body weight in his arms; 'brick shithouse' is right.
> It's not as if he could put up much of a fight if he didn't
See point above.
> Pale, freckled skin
We love our white skin and pussies, don't we?
> The result is the obscene sight of Jayce's cock lying thick and heavy against a not-insignificant portion of Viktor's face
There's our Hispanic Hog. Is he veiny this time around, or...? Guess he's packing in the girth department, too.
> Your cock is massive! You win!
Having a big package means nothing if you don't know how to use it. Even the guy with the world's largest penis can attest to that (and he actually sounds like a wholesome guy!).
> His cock is massive
Hmm, I'm placing bets on 10 inches, maybe 3 inches wide. And bam, we're right into the deepthroating.
Huh, I would have imagined the deepthroating scene to be longer, but maybe that will be later on in the fic. Usually authors will spend paragraphs on a character servicing that thing.
I wouldn't have known that he spent that much time on it, because the author didn't spend much time on it herself. Jayce just shoved it in there, made Viktor gag, and that was it.
> Spear himself on Jayce's cock
I've seen this a lot. Reminds me of Moby Dick - get it?
No 'cock' for the clit this time? Oh I bet that'll change as this continues.
And just like that, Jayce is done with the first smut scene, and he later goes into an existential crisis on whether what he did was right and whether he was a good lover.
> Everything is okay now
> Jayce is safe here
You know this is a woman writing this because men do not place nearly as much emphasis on 'safe spaces'. They just don't.
> There's no quietly sneaking away from Jayce
Oh? You're sounding a bit like a stalker there, homie. Going back to your MS-13 roots?
> Jayce may never recover if it turns out he's so bad at sex that his best friend gave up his entire career just to get away from him
Who would have thought that merely shoving your cock inside someone doesn't always do the job, and you have to put effort into it? Someone needs to do some more kink reading.
> Maybe this is what the mornings could look like, ideally with the addition of buttered toast and sleep kisses
You know a woman wrote this, because the men would be out and back into the party scene before the night ended. All this angst over whether Jayce fucked this man properly when he couldn't even find the clit the first time is its own answer. If you're disappointing ALL of your so-called 'subs', that's a reflection on you, not them.
> Are you listening
What every man hears from a woman, because they are prone to tuning out. We all know the feeling.
> The cubicle is a pretty generous size. Unfortunately, so is Jayce
Horizontally, or vertically?
> Uncomfortable. Almost sad, sometimes
So the people he sleeps with are taking advantage of him, expecting him to be the domineering dom who will stick his dick in them and then be done with them, only to discover he's actually rather sensitive and cares about their feelings. That's rather touching, coming from a man.
> He thinks about how wet Viktor got from gagging on his cock
And yet, you still wonder whether he enjoyed it or not.
> Want me to bend you over and fuck you here, V?
There's literally no room for you to do that.
> Pin you up against the tiles? Give you more bruises?
You'll squash him into the grout if you do that.
> Jayce is reeling
This definitely is a man who can't handle rejection. No wonder people can't stand him. Hell, I can't stand him.
> Fuck, has he been washing his hair wrong this whole time?
Imagine that: a man doesn't know how to clean his hair. Hope that asshole is cleaner.
> Does he have uniquely disgusting hair
Do you not comb it, you slob?
> He just went along with it
And that is the problem.
> Maybe his panic about whether he knows how to have a shower properly has blown a fuse somewhere in his brain
OK, this is ridiculous. This is a grown-ass man. He's been showing nearly his entire life. If he doesn't know how to wash his hair, but knows how to comb and style it, he's a retard.
But as it turns out, he actually has a fetish for being catered to and cared for because he's a big ole baby, and 'moans like a whore' when he gets his hair shampooed. Typical.
> Jayce doesn't have time to reflect on what that means in this situation
Yes you do, and you just did. Viktor knows you're actually a sub, and he's going to take advantage of it.
> Receiving
Foreshadowing.
> Maybe this is sex
Maybe to you, but it's non-sexual intimacy.
> Presses his thighs against Jayce's body, enveloping Jayce within himself
When did he get a growth spurt? Was he not boxed in by Jayce's size at the beginning of this fic?
> He doesn't process jack shit, as it happens
I'll say. He's a bit retarded in this.
> Obviously, he enjoys sex. Everyone enjoys sex
Not everyone. Some people are legitimately sex repulsed, due to lack of attraction or trauma. Maybe you should read more, Jayce.
> He doesn't dislike sex
You already said that.
> The feeling only comes afterwards, not during the act itself
AKA post nut clarity hits and he discovers he doesn't feel 'whole'. This is because his innate sub is talking and he wants to get a dick up his ass.
> Is it that obvious he's doing something wrong?
Yes, because your previous lovers have told you as much, and you admitted it; you fucked up so badly they never wanted to see you again, despite your beautiful body and big cock. Clearly, what you pack down there isn't enough for them to keep coming back.
> Were the others just pretending?
Not pretending, because they outright told you you sucked at sex. Reading BDSM novels and papers clearly wasn't enough to improve your game.
> Have you ever tried bottoming?
And this is where Jayce's 'internalized homophobia' or whatever you want to call it, comes in. He's not actually a homophobe, but he has all these expectations placed on him that he, as the big muscular man, should know how to fuck. He doesn't, and hasn't found someone who could top him. Instead of another man, it's a woman with a strap-on - because it is every trans man's dream to top an actual man.
> Not that it was ever going to happen anyways
Shut up, you thought this before you fucked Viktor. I'm frankly tired of the indecision.
Well, you have avoided the fact you're a spicy straight due to the fact you're still fucking vagina, so might as well come clean about your other fetishes.
> People who are into me want me to hold them down and fuck them and hurt them
And you agreed to do it. You could have refused their advances, if you actually wanted a different relationship. Despite that, you still fucked them and were so bad at it they didn't bother coming back. What does that tell you?
> You don't have to pretend to be somebody else
Oh, the fucking IRONY of Viktor, a natal female, saying that. Wew, lad.
> He could continue to insist that he's the world's most dedicated top if he wanted
Go to a P. Diddy party and we'll see who carries the baby oil at the end.
You already noted that, thanks.
Another WWE move coming from Jayce. Careful you don't break your pale boy, there.
> Mental image of Heimerdinger
Hey, there are yordles who wear bondage gear. You sure that's not a turn on?
> Sucks at his clit
Surprisingly, this is a trans Viktor fic that does NOT focus too much on Viktor being trans; it's centered on Jayce this time, even if he appears like he's missing a chromosome. There isn't any use of 'hole' or 'cock' in reference to Viktor's female genitalia, which is a rare sight.
Can you see because you're fucked blind, or because you're between Viktor's legs?
> Viktor is in his element
Which is surprising, because most men do not take pooners seriously when it comes to their demands in bed - and that is from their own confessions on social media. It's ridiculous when you think on it a bit. In any case, Jayce isn't THAT sexually inexperienced if he's had around five people - that is near the average - but what's notable is that he failed every one bar Viktor. It seems trans pussy is that insatiable.
You mean his blasé response, knowing he'd get a better reaction out of you? Because I don't know what exact response you're referring to. Being pliable? Being good? Throw me a bone, here.
I thought reading those BDSM pamphlets were supposed to help? Did you just lie around and do nothing? Leave it to a woman to take the lead.
I'm surprised Jayce doesn't crush Viktor doing that, but he somehow manages. A shame Viktor can't feel a damn thing with that silicone, though.
> This is exactly where he should be
Indeed, the mutt getting put in his place by the white (wo)man. Just as Nature intended.
> There's no disappointment, no guilt, no shame, no confusion
But he isn't confused as to what his dick gets hard for. Does he declare himself bisexual, or a true and honest gay man despite still liking vagina? He had a problem with wanting to get penetrated because he wanted to be dominated - and the only way to achieve that was with a strap. My man should've been at a circuit party instead - he would have found plenty of bears.
TL;DR Jayce, who sucks at sex and thinks having a big dick is all that matters, gets humbled when he discovers he's a bottom and is shown his place by a white pooner, who still ends up appearing smarter and more competent than he is. Surprisingly is not as annoying as most trans fics, but is forgettable. Only memorable part is that Jayce sucks at sex and is a retard. A Valentine easily thrown away.
This was a gift fic for MGCraig. Someone gets plastered drunk and plenty of hand-rubbing ensues. This one will have an epilogue posted at a later date, probably tomorrow, so I'll add it here.
And that doesn't set off any alarms, for some reason. I'd be suspicious if my guy had a Hannibal Lecter set up in his apartment. Spoiler: it's where the Alternate Jayce has been holed up.
> Began to rub at his clit through the fabric
Just like the other fic, this one does not use 'cock' for the clit, but it does use 'hole' once.
> Firm press of large fingers
> Tender button
I have read the clitoris being referred to as a button several times in several different stories; it's used twice in this one. It's not the worst I've read, but it is rather silly.
> Jayce made it so easy to capitulate
I wonder why that is?
> Viktor tried. Often. To stamp down the eager need to please him
Oh? That wouldn't have anything to do with your sex, would it?
The word you are looking for is 'presumptuous'. Please tell me this was not betaed.
As it turns out, S1 Jayce was setting up this meeting with Viktor and S2 Jayce for a Jayce sandwich, without Viktor being coherent enough to understand what's going on. While he does enjoy the sex, it can't really be said consent is 100% there. It's just one of those 'just so' fics you are meant to excuse.
> This unbearable need
Indeed, the pooner years for the big dicked male - double points if it's a double dipping!
A light dusting of hair? That's quite something from the Tarzan jungle we usually have to wade through. So many surprises!
I have to say this, though: 'My stars' reminds me of that Looney Tunes episode where Bugs Bunny is dressed as a woman giving Elmer Fudd a haircut. It's so dramatic and drag-queen-y that I snicker every time I remember it.
>There was a light rutting him
You mean there was a light rutting BEHIND him, or is the light actually rutting him? Fucked by the light, imagine that. That could be a wicked punk band name.
> The Other was thicker, the girth of him ever so slightly wider
...this is the same Jayce, albeit S2 Jayce is from the future. Did Jayce take some male enhancement pills? Did he find his universe's version of Alex Jones and bulked up? How come two different versions of Jayce have two different sized dicks?
> Pressed between the large frames of these massive men
Every pooner's wet dream in one sentence.
> The hollow cough
Is he becoming General Grievous?
> Gravity's cold pull held on to him, pulling him to a crashing climax
Why would gravity be cold? Do you have your own gravitational pull like Jupiter? ARE you Jupiter? Sailor Jupiter?
> The hole between his legs pulsed
Which one?
> His tummy bulged with the fill the cock buried in him pulsed with
This reads weird. And it sounds weirdly childish. I don't even know what the other Jayce is doing. Is he fucking Viktor's thighs, or is he watching like a cuck? I think he IS getting cucked. And there isn't even enough material for us to really 'feel' that belly bulge anyways.
"You can't kill your future self! You'll create a time paradox! But me fucking your boyfriend won't!"
I wholeheartedly support what S1 Jayce did here. He stabbed S2 Jayce, who was going to fuck Viktor without his knowledge or his consent, and skinwalk him to 'change the future'. I fail to see how this is going to benefit the timeline if you're going to rape your future boyfriend, bud.
> What a waste
S1 Jayce just prevented your rapist ass from touching Viktor. The fuck you mean 'what a waste'?
"I can't tell you anything because there's no time, but I'll tell you when I have the time, but you also can't kill me because that will collapse the universe, but me skinwalking you and fucking your pooner without consent or knowledge is OK because I am saving the world"
Cool. Now you have to deal with angry investors and another exile, as well as refusing to actually improve it and change the future for the better. Mages are OK because they're natural and Born that Way; using magitech is wrong because science is le heckin' wrong. Love wins!
God. I wonder what the epilogue is going to be like.
Well, that was fast. Speedrunning a romance, eh?
> If they'd been in a movie, Jayce would've swept his arm across the nearest desk so he could lay Viktor out and fuck him right there
Breaking the 4th wall AND realizing that such a hard surface is bad for a disabled person's body? You don't say. Most of these fics just involve them fucking anywhere, spinal screws be damned. Imagine that this one actually considers the logistics of it!
> How Jayce ended up with one of his hands closed around both of Viktor's slim wrists
Just in case you needed to know who the woman was.
> He looms over his partner, his broad shoulders blocking out the pale light
Just in case you needed to know who the male was.
> If this is the only time this ever happens, he wants to be able to say he made the most of it
As it turns out, Jayce has fucked up his earlier relationships, mostly because despite his size and huge cock, he's a total fuckboy, and doesn't know how to use it. He's an utter trainwreck and that's cute, apparently.
> It's a show, one that Viktor doesn't even realize that he's in
Oh I'm sure he knows. He's very perceptive.
> It would be fair to say that Jayce is not at all great at improvising
Then you aren't meant for the stage. If you can't improvise, you aren't a well-rounded actor. Ad-libbing is usually responsible for a lot of famous lines and performances.
>There's no need for a discussion about what you're into or what your preferences are when you're built like a six foot tall brick shithouse
That might be true, but as it turns out (x2), Jayce doesn't know how to work himself sexually. I assume he just stuck his dick in someone and thrusted madly, without bothering to care for his partner's pleasure. Jayce strikes me as someone who MIGHT be a little naïve but is a quick learner and is always willing to try - he isn't called a service top for nothing.
> When the people who are attracted to you tend to be smaller, submissive, looking for somebody to throw them around
How convenient that Viktor, a woman, fits that bill, as there aren't many six foot tall women. This also means he doesn't go after many men because even though some men are going to be shorter, not all of them are going to be the stereotypical subs. Is he going after 'meek' women or what?
> Sex doesn't come naturally to Jayce
Oh, so you ARE a fuckboy.
How nice: you discovered where all the G-spots were; all the safe words and all the kinks and every bit of Kinsey you could get your hands on and you are still a fuckup. Why? Spoiler: despite being a brick shithouse, all Jayce wants is the 5'0 pooner to top him with a strap. Saved you a lot of trouble.
> Pulls the fabric apart
A literal bodice ripping scene, eh? He better have money for a new shirt.
> It's almost scarily easily for him to move Viktor around
You do hard, manual labour and Viktor is A) sickly and thin and B) a natal female. He is not going to be as big as you even if he was roided up. Jayce can pull his own body weight in his arms; 'brick shithouse' is right.
> It's not as if he could put up much of a fight if he didn't
See point above.
> Pale, freckled skin
We love our white skin and pussies, don't we?
> The result is the obscene sight of Jayce's cock lying thick and heavy against a not-insignificant portion of Viktor's face
There's our Hispanic Hog. Is he veiny this time around, or...? Guess he's packing in the girth department, too.
> Your cock is massive! You win!
Having a big package means nothing if you don't know how to use it. Even the guy with the world's largest penis can attest to that (and he actually sounds like a wholesome guy!).
> His cock is massive
Hmm, I'm placing bets on 10 inches, maybe 3 inches wide. And bam, we're right into the deepthroating.
Huh, I would have imagined the deepthroating scene to be longer, but maybe that will be later on in the fic. Usually authors will spend paragraphs on a character servicing that thing.
I wouldn't have known that he spent that much time on it, because the author didn't spend much time on it herself. Jayce just shoved it in there, made Viktor gag, and that was it.
> Spear himself on Jayce's cock
I've seen this a lot. Reminds me of Moby Dick - get it?
No 'cock' for the clit this time? Oh I bet that'll change as this continues.
And just like that, Jayce is done with the first smut scene, and he later goes into an existential crisis on whether what he did was right and whether he was a good lover.
> Everything is okay now
> Jayce is safe here
You know this is a woman writing this because men do not place nearly as much emphasis on 'safe spaces'. They just don't.
> There's no quietly sneaking away from Jayce
Oh? You're sounding a bit like a stalker there, homie. Going back to your MS-13 roots?
> Jayce may never recover if it turns out he's so bad at sex that his best friend gave up his entire career just to get away from him
Who would have thought that merely shoving your cock inside someone doesn't always do the job, and you have to put effort into it? Someone needs to do some more kink reading.
> Maybe this is what the mornings could look like, ideally with the addition of buttered toast and sleep kisses
You know a woman wrote this, because the men would be out and back into the party scene before the night ended. All this angst over whether Jayce fucked this man properly when he couldn't even find the clit the first time is its own answer. If you're disappointing ALL of your so-called 'subs', that's a reflection on you, not them.
> Are you listening
What every man hears from a woman, because they are prone to tuning out. We all know the feeling.
> The cubicle is a pretty generous size. Unfortunately, so is Jayce
Horizontally, or vertically?
> Uncomfortable. Almost sad, sometimes
So the people he sleeps with are taking advantage of him, expecting him to be the domineering dom who will stick his dick in them and then be done with them, only to discover he's actually rather sensitive and cares about their feelings. That's rather touching, coming from a man.
> He thinks about how wet Viktor got from gagging on his cock
And yet, you still wonder whether he enjoyed it or not.
> Want me to bend you over and fuck you here, V?
There's literally no room for you to do that.
> Pin you up against the tiles? Give you more bruises?
You'll squash him into the grout if you do that.
> Jayce is reeling
This definitely is a man who can't handle rejection. No wonder people can't stand him. Hell, I can't stand him.
> Fuck, has he been washing his hair wrong this whole time?
Imagine that: a man doesn't know how to clean his hair. Hope that asshole is cleaner.
> Does he have uniquely disgusting hair
Do you not comb it, you slob?
> He just went along with it
And that is the problem.
> Maybe his panic about whether he knows how to have a shower properly has blown a fuse somewhere in his brain
OK, this is ridiculous. This is a grown-ass man. He's been showing nearly his entire life. If he doesn't know how to wash his hair, but knows how to comb and style it, he's a retard.
But as it turns out, he actually has a fetish for being catered to and cared for because he's a big ole baby, and 'moans like a whore' when he gets his hair shampooed. Typical.
> Jayce doesn't have time to reflect on what that means in this situation
Yes you do, and you just did. Viktor knows you're actually a sub, and he's going to take advantage of it.
> Receiving
Foreshadowing.
> Maybe this is sex
Maybe to you, but it's non-sexual intimacy.
> Presses his thighs against Jayce's body, enveloping Jayce within himself
When did he get a growth spurt? Was he not boxed in by Jayce's size at the beginning of this fic?
> He doesn't process jack shit, as it happens
I'll say. He's a bit retarded in this.
> Obviously, he enjoys sex. Everyone enjoys sex
Not everyone. Some people are legitimately sex repulsed, due to lack of attraction or trauma. Maybe you should read more, Jayce.
> He doesn't dislike sex
You already said that.
> The feeling only comes afterwards, not during the act itself
AKA post nut clarity hits and he discovers he doesn't feel 'whole'. This is because his innate sub is talking and he wants to get a dick up his ass.
> Is it that obvious he's doing something wrong?
Yes, because your previous lovers have told you as much, and you admitted it; you fucked up so badly they never wanted to see you again, despite your beautiful body and big cock. Clearly, what you pack down there isn't enough for them to keep coming back.
> Were the others just pretending?
Not pretending, because they outright told you you sucked at sex. Reading BDSM novels and papers clearly wasn't enough to improve your game.
> Have you ever tried bottoming?
And this is where Jayce's 'internalized homophobia' or whatever you want to call it, comes in. He's not actually a homophobe, but he has all these expectations placed on him that he, as the big muscular man, should know how to fuck. He doesn't, and hasn't found someone who could top him. Instead of another man, it's a woman with a strap-on - because it is every trans man's dream to top an actual man.
> Not that it was ever going to happen anyways
Shut up, you thought this before you fucked Viktor. I'm frankly tired of the indecision.
Well, you have avoided the fact you're a spicy straight due to the fact you're still fucking vagina, so might as well come clean about your other fetishes.
> People who are into me want me to hold them down and fuck them and hurt them
And you agreed to do it. You could have refused their advances, if you actually wanted a different relationship. Despite that, you still fucked them and were so bad at it they didn't bother coming back. What does that tell you?
> You don't have to pretend to be somebody else
Oh, the fucking IRONY of Viktor, a natal female, saying that. Wew, lad.
> He could continue to insist that he's the world's most dedicated top if he wanted
Go to a P. Diddy party and we'll see who carries the baby oil at the end.
You already noted that, thanks.
Another WWE move coming from Jayce. Careful you don't break your pale boy, there.
> Mental image of Heimerdinger
Hey, there are yordles who wear bondage gear. You sure that's not a turn on?
> Sucks at his clit
Surprisingly, this is a trans Viktor fic that does NOT focus too much on Viktor being trans; it's centered on Jayce this time, even if he appears like he's missing a chromosome. There isn't any use of 'hole' or 'cock' in reference to Viktor's female genitalia, which is a rare sight.
Can you see because you're fucked blind, or because you're between Viktor's legs?
> Viktor is in his element
Which is surprising, because most men do not take pooners seriously when it comes to their demands in bed - and that is from their own confessions on social media. It's ridiculous when you think on it a bit. In any case, Jayce isn't THAT sexually inexperienced if he's had around five people - that is near the average - but what's notable is that he failed every one bar Viktor. It seems trans pussy is that insatiable.
You mean his blasé response, knowing he'd get a better reaction out of you? Because I don't know what exact response you're referring to. Being pliable? Being good? Throw me a bone, here.
I thought reading those BDSM pamphlets were supposed to help? Did you just lie around and do nothing? Leave it to a woman to take the lead.
I'm surprised Jayce doesn't crush Viktor doing that, but he somehow manages. A shame Viktor can't feel a damn thing with that silicone, though.
> This is exactly where he should be
Indeed, the mutt getting put in his place by the white (wo)man. Just as Nature intended.
> There's no disappointment, no guilt, no shame, no confusion
But he isn't confused as to what his dick gets hard for. Does he declare himself bisexual, or a true and honest gay man despite still liking vagina? He had a problem with wanting to get penetrated because he wanted to be dominated - and the only way to achieve that was with a strap. My man should've been at a circuit party instead - he would have found plenty of bears.
TL;DR Jayce, who sucks at sex and thinks having a big dick is all that matters, gets humbled when he discovers he's a bottom and is shown his place by a white pooner, who still ends up appearing smarter and more competent than he is. Surprisingly is not as annoying as most trans fics, but is forgettable. Only memorable part is that Jayce sucks at sex and is a retard. A Valentine easily thrown away.
This was a gift fic for MGCraig. Someone gets plastered drunk and plenty of hand-rubbing ensues. This one will have an epilogue posted at a later date, probably tomorrow, so I'll add it here.
And that doesn't set off any alarms, for some reason. I'd be suspicious if my guy had a Hannibal Lecter set up in his apartment. Spoiler: it's where the Alternate Jayce has been holed up.
> Began to rub at his clit through the fabric
Just like the other fic, this one does not use 'cock' for the clit, but it does use 'hole' once.
> Firm press of large fingers
> Tender button
I have read the clitoris being referred to as a button several times in several different stories; it's used twice in this one. It's not the worst I've read, but it is rather silly.
> Jayce made it so easy to capitulate
I wonder why that is?
> Viktor tried. Often. To stamp down the eager need to please him
Oh? That wouldn't have anything to do with your sex, would it?
The word you are looking for is 'presumptuous'. Please tell me this was not betaed.
As it turns out, S1 Jayce was setting up this meeting with Viktor and S2 Jayce for a Jayce sandwich, without Viktor being coherent enough to understand what's going on. While he does enjoy the sex, it can't really be said consent is 100% there. It's just one of those 'just so' fics you are meant to excuse.
> This unbearable need
Indeed, the pooner years for the big dicked male - double points if it's a double dipping!
A light dusting of hair? That's quite something from the Tarzan jungle we usually have to wade through. So many surprises!
I have to say this, though: 'My stars' reminds me of that Looney Tunes episode where Bugs Bunny is dressed as a woman giving Elmer Fudd a haircut. It's so dramatic and drag-queen-y that I snicker every time I remember it.
>There was a light rutting him
You mean there was a light rutting BEHIND him, or is the light actually rutting him? Fucked by the light, imagine that. That could be a wicked punk band name.
> The Other was thicker, the girth of him ever so slightly wider
...this is the same Jayce, albeit S2 Jayce is from the future. Did Jayce take some male enhancement pills? Did he find his universe's version of Alex Jones and bulked up? How come two different versions of Jayce have two different sized dicks?
> Pressed between the large frames of these massive men
Every pooner's wet dream in one sentence.
> The hollow cough
Is he becoming General Grievous?
> Gravity's cold pull held on to him, pulling him to a crashing climax
Why would gravity be cold? Do you have your own gravitational pull like Jupiter? ARE you Jupiter? Sailor Jupiter?
> The hole between his legs pulsed
Which one?
> His tummy bulged with the fill the cock buried in him pulsed with
This reads weird. And it sounds weirdly childish. I don't even know what the other Jayce is doing. Is he fucking Viktor's thighs, or is he watching like a cuck? I think he IS getting cucked. And there isn't even enough material for us to really 'feel' that belly bulge anyways.
"You can't kill your future self! You'll create a time paradox! But me fucking your boyfriend won't!"
I wholeheartedly support what S1 Jayce did here. He stabbed S2 Jayce, who was going to fuck Viktor without his knowledge or his consent, and skinwalk him to 'change the future'. I fail to see how this is going to benefit the timeline if you're going to rape your future boyfriend, bud.
> What a waste
S1 Jayce just prevented your rapist ass from touching Viktor. The fuck you mean 'what a waste'?
"I can't tell you anything because there's no time, but I'll tell you when I have the time, but you also can't kill me because that will collapse the universe, but me skinwalking you and fucking your pooner without consent or knowledge is OK because I am saving the world"
Cool. Now you have to deal with angry investors and another exile, as well as refusing to actually improve it and change the future for the better. Mages are OK because they're natural and Born that Way; using magitech is wrong because science is le heckin' wrong. Love wins!
God. I wonder what the epilogue is going to be like.
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> He lays in the air like gravity's his cushion
Technically he'd be defying gravity, and he's sitting yoga-style, not laying down.
> With every breath he breathes in is Viktor
So he's literally oxygen now. OK.
> He's a lone insect exploring a vast nervous system
This doesn't even make sense. Why would an insect be in someone's brain unless you decided to eat a slug on a dare?
> Hammer like weapon tighter
It isn't 'hammer like' - it IS a hammer. An Arcane corrupted one, but it is still a hammer.
> Dialogue
Technically it'd be a monologue.
Along with the spelling errors - and there are a LOT, they only get worse from here on out - the author has decided to use those uwu squiggles like we're in a manga rather than a *cough* professional smut.
> The bullet of sorts ricochets of the immovable ground
First, it's not a bullet, it's a beam of light - a fancy laser, if you will. It's concentrated energy.
> Monsterus like growl
This bitch can't even spell 'monstrous', look at that.
> Pulling him the ground
He pulled the ground to him? OK.
> Like measly moth in a spider's web
Hope it's not Charlotte's Web.
> Think think think. How can he survive this?
I am reminded of that skit from Demo Disk where the 2017 gang played a pornographic Lara Croft game. Same line, same level of humour. Except it doesn't involve a minotaur.
> This is going to be embarrassing, especially if it doesn't work
Spoiler: it's still embarrassing (to read, that is) and it still works. Magic!
> Both of Viktor's strong hands tighten
And they're still smaller than Jayce's, lmao
> Viktor continues to tighten both of his hands
They were already tightened.
> He destroyed his only hope of ending this physically with it
Don't say that, you still have your dick, bro.
> Just had to outsmart Viktor
Turns out, all you need is a kiss and a BJ and you can get this pooner to become a blushing maiden. Huzzah!
I also love how the dialogue is in ALL CAPS, BECAUSE WE NEED IT TO GET OUR POINT ACROSS.
And here I thought S2's end dialogue between these characters was bad - this bitch comes in here with My Immortal style dialogue that should have been retired in 2007. Jayce is taking a page out of Shia LaBeouf's 'don't let your dreams be dreams' for his love confession and holy fuck is it bad.
Indeed, you are definitely exclaiming something by saying 'Stop it.' Truly a 'Dumbledore said calmly' moment.
> Quickly developing into years of need released in the intensity
*Quickly developed. This girl doesn't just need a beta - she needs a fully sentient autocorrect.
> Jayce kissed Viktor like a man starved
This cliché again?
> Jayce used his thumb to pull Viktor's jaw open with force, tonguing inside
...OK? You don't actually need to do that? He's not a fish.
> Ffffuck
Someone's NPC programming is malfunctioning.
> Christ
Jesus does not exist in Runeterra.
> Large hands warp around Viktor's thin waist
Now, when the author says Jayce has large hands...he has fucking huge hands. He is in full DK mode right now.
> I'm going to fuck you until you change your mind
Turns out this argument works.
> The pudge of Viktor's stomach
A lil dainty feminine pudge, that is.
>You were going to join me
What, as a corpse? You nearly broke his neck there, Viktor. It was only until The Power of Love broke through and you crumbled like a stack of Pringles.
> Slowly pushing the inside of his thigh down near Viktor's ribs
Interesting anatomical positioning you got there. Are you pushing his thigh UP TOWARDS his ribs, or are his ribs down towards his thighs?
> Using you til your reeling
This dumbfuck can't tell the difference between your and you're. This reads like a teenager or college student who decided to try her hand at trans smut for the first time.
> Teasing at the soft peaks on his chest
Viktor, for some reason, has fully functioning breasts and nipples despite being a biomechanical machine at this point. The author would also like to remind you that Viktor is NOT female and NOT a woman but a True and Honest trans man.
> Rough pressure against his clit
No 'cock' this time? Count my lucky stars, then.
> Viktor brats
That's an attitude, not a dialogue.
> Jayce can't believe how well this is working
Me neither. 80s porn movies have more believable plots.
> Just minutes ago, Viktor nearly killed him, and now he's already pliant in his arms, begging to be fucked
Nice lampshading. Indeed, all it took to change Viktor's mind was a kiss and a Shia LeBeouf confession. Maybe more people should try that tactic.
> How long have you been thinking of me fucking you?
Around five minutes or so.
> Jayce would be lying if he said the size difference didn't make his heart skip
Of course. Even with a new body, Viktor is always smaller than Jayce, with tinier hands, a tiny waist, a tiny body, a tiny head, tiny fingers, tiny everything...as if he's 5'0 and dwarfed by the brick shithouse that is Jayce and not a 5'8 grown ass man. But at least that sexual dimorphism is on display, and you can tell who the real woman is despite these authors' repeated insistence there is no such thing. Do as I say, not as I do.
> Jayce takes some time irritating the flesh
You don't want to irritate your nipples. At all. It isn't fun. Does this author even have nipples, or...?
> Biting a licking with fever
This isn't English.
> Feeling the pebbling under his tongue
Nipples are smooth rocks now, cool!
Too bad your brain couldn't hit a hard reset and learn what proofreading was. My IQ drops further the more I read this.
> His weakening body shaking
Weakening from what? This shitty dialogue?
> That is why I'm planning to take over
This is a bad deal, the worst deal in the history of deals, you need a better deal.
> But he has to convince Viktor first
You already said. I guess your tongue fucking Viktor's skin wasn't enough, eh?
> Squishing his face
Is he a Squishmellow now?
> Jayce squishes his cheeks into a kiss
You're already squishing him, boy.
> Wiping the slobber off on Jayce's skin
Eww. I had no idea Jayce kissed like a St. Bernard.
> My very molecules changed
Yet you still have a female body, with a fully functioning clitoris, vagina, and breasts. You could have any body you want, any genitalia you want, and you stick with the genitalia that (allegedly) gave you dysphoria to begin with. OK.
> Kinda sugary? Honey-y? But saltier
In which Viktor's new flesh tastes like beef jerky.
> You're sweet on the inside
With a touch of Arizona iced tea.
> Oh my
Who invited George Takei?
> He looks incredibly fucked out
Who knew tongue-fucking his beef jerky anatomy would do that?
> Thick hot gelatin-like liquid on the inside
Oh, so his anatomy is made up of purple Jell-o.
> It's so intensely sweet, like a drug
Keep him away from fatties, otherwise you'll know what it's like to actually be consumed like you're a Dunkin' Donut.
> Before he cums in his pants like a teenager
And then he later does just that, because Viktor, along with healing him, gave him a teenager's stamina. She actually writes this.
> Viktor snits impatiently, "I'm not some virgin"
Correct. A virgin wouldn't give up that pussy so easily. You gave up yours cheaper than an OnlyFans THOT did.
> When's the last time you took anything more than your own fingers?
Luckily, DK Mode Jayce is here to help.
> Viktor's not too small of a man, especially with the new developments, but compared to Jayce's overwhelmingly large hands, Viktor's are dwarfed
So he is a small man, because their hands are not that hugely different. Guess I need to whip out the tape measure like Jayce whips out his dick just to compare.
> Pummel into any reasonably not-horny thoughts
So...did you become more coherent or not? Because the way this was written, your brain 'pummeled' into not-horny thoughts, meaning you became sober OR you are having second thoughts. Or did you mean, 'they pummeled his not-horny thoughts'?
> Viktor's purple skin fades to a pastel pink
Viktor's vagina has the qualities of a lava lamp, where it changes colour based on his moods. He's a living cuttlefish, neat.
> Even changing how his genitals can react
Which IS an interesting premise, but so few actually take it the whole nine yards because it makes them uncomfortable. He just gets a cuttlefish pussy instead because, uh, trans rights?
> Hah, I can't
Shia LaBeouf says you can, so you will.
Is his clothed dick pushing against the thigh that's close to his ribs or nah?
> Viktor can't believe he'd make such a silly mistake
I can, because the moment Jayce kissed him it was over, and all those pesky emotions came through as well as his innate desire to get fucked. All that talk about evolution and metal and you still couldn't buck those female evolutionary traits to be bred by a male HEYO
> How infuriating the way his mind and body still tried to melt around Jayce
Oh, so you're saying you can't live without him; your entire life revolves around him, and you can't function without him because, as you say, your 'emotions get the better of you'? Sounds like...a female trait you were never able to shed.
> It wasn't originally to cover this display
He's talking about the roof, btw
> More to spare the commune the sight of a forced joining
Viktor originally only converted those who were WILLING to join his commune. This suggests he was literally mind-raping them - and to be fair, he IS. But at least he gave the illusion of choice at first.
> If Viktor's followers saw this, by choice, their god writing on the ground under a brutish stranger, he doesn't know what they'd think
You control their minds; you can start an orgy. Show them your cuttlefish vagina and breed a new generation of mind slaves. It'll be like Jonestown but with Jell-o instead of Kool-Aid.
> His dick is burrowing inside his head down
It's doing what to what now?
> Come on, Viktor~
I am *this* close to introducing Dick Cheney to this commune.
> Eyes wondering up his thin waist and neck
I'm wondering why he still keeps his 'thin and small' body and didn't bother to get a glow up. What was he doing that entire time? He could've been getting massive gains.
> Tickling at Viktor's teeth like he's studying the grooves
Are you a mantis shrimp now, cleaning offal of his teeth to keep them clean?
> Viktor's weakened knees
All that and his transformation just gave him the same shitty body. Sad!
> Squishing his cheek against the ground
Yeah I'm sure you'll convince him of the error of his ways with some rape play, there.
> Lifting Viktor's torso up by the collarbones
This confused me, and took me a few tries to decipher it. He has one hand pinning Viktor's hands behind his back, and the other slips to his front, grabs his collarbone, and lifts him up, which would mean that Viktor's back is going to bend the wrong way. Why not grab his neck, instead?
> Viktor's fucked out mind is tripping over itself
My mind is already doing that trying to decipher this English.
> Viktor's sob comes out weak and small
But is it sugary sweet?
Why does he need Plan B? He doesn't menstruate. He doesn't produce eggs. If all the molecules of his body changed, why does he retain the molecules and cells of his FEMALE body? Shouldn't you be free of all human constraints now that you have a biomechanical body? Why should a contraceptive even matter, let alone work, in a body that does not abide by human reproductive function anymore? And who produces Plan B in this universe, anyways?
I guess we're not supposed to know or ask. The author wants a sequel to this, and based on how fucking awful this one was written, you, too, can be thrown back to 2007 based on how people can't seem to grasp the basics of the English language despite AO3 being widely hailed as the better archive because 'the stories are written better'. Someone must've kicked this bitch out of the cool kid's club, because what the fuck did I just read?
Suppose it could be 'hot', if it didn't read like Ebony Darkness D'mentia Raven Way didn't write it.
This one was beta-read by capyshota, the same beta reader for MGCraig. When I said these authors are all in a clique, I wasn't lying. This author is a mixed Chinese-Australian, who draws herself much whiter than she actually is. Her strawpage is the most feminine thing I've ever seen.
As it turns out, she has a tweet where she mentions that Queercatfan has an epilogue to her fic - the most kudosed fic in the entire Arcane fandom - and now sits at 700k hits. In another month, it will likely reach 1 million hits. That will have to be covered in increments as it is an 18k oneshot. For now, though, here is the work of one of her fans.
Get it? It's a not-so-subtle-critique against capitalism. I wonder who inspired that - oh.
> Privately, Viktor finds it a small comfort that even Piltover's golden boy doesn't have a Valentine of his own
Thank God Mel isn't in this, else the Slav here is going to whip out the white hood and racial slurs.
> It's nice to know that there's no one else to steal his secret crush away
He isn't your property; he is free to love who he pleases. Just because YOU didn't make your crush known doesn't give you the right to feel jealous. You don't own him. He's a grown ass man and so are you. Act like it.
> Despite the numerous sexual partners Viktor has had in his time at Piltover's Academy
Oh good, the Pooner Slut trope. These doods really know their way around a dick, eh?
> He has never felt like this about someone
Guaranteed it's because of the Hispanic Hog. That Pringles can is ready to be whipped out.
> Feels suddenly feels furious at Jayce for leaving him alone
Again, you don't own him. He is not your property, you BPD bitch.
> he hopes
Looks like the beta reader forgot that this sentence was meant to be capitalized. Oops.
> They've been trying and failing to stabilize the Hextech gemstones
They already did that - the trick is now to do it on a larger platform with more power. But they are on the right track.
> Traces of Jayce are everywhere
You're never going to imagine what he does with Jayce's stuff.
> Bitterly, he thinks of what Jayce might be doing right now with someone else
See my point above x3.
Uh oh, we've got the Token getting in the way of a gay ship. Go away, you lil nigga, the light-skinned Hispanic and the white pooner are talking.
Indeed - wait until you read what happens.
Yes, he's masturbating on Jayce's shirt and is coating Jayce's poster with his ejaculate. Very creative. Oh, and Jesus Christ does not exist in Runeterra.
Yes, Jayce, you just watched your True and Honest boyfriend masturbate. What the fuck do you think it changes?
> Back to his clit
And we go right back to 'cock' a few paragraphs later, because as we all know, the two are completely the same. Forget the fact it isn't even bigger than Jayce's nostril on that t-shirt.
> Jayce has gotten hard in the lab from Viktor's presence and proximity more times than he can count
...and he didn't notice a single time? With that pecker, you'd expect him to announce the Indianapolis 500.
> Rides the t-shirt with his cock
You just used clit earlier, so just stick with that.
> Brought out a dark ugly jealously
Le sigh. See what I said earlier x4. He doesn't belong to you - hell, he wasn't even aware of your feelings. And what were you planning on doing with those 'dark feelings', hmm? Attack someone? Key a car? A set of stairs will do you in.
> Each press of his fingers against his swollen cock
And it's still smaller than Jayce's thumbnail.
Viktor masturbates in front of Jayce, taunts Jayce, is insanely jealous whether Jayce is dating someone else...and is now self-conscious? Give me a fucking break.
This is also the first fic I've read that discusses a refractory period. They're usually able to go at it back-to-back.
> Flicking his tongue over his cock
Still smaller than Jayce's t-shirt nostril.
> Lapping hotly at his cunt
No 'hole' this time?
> Like a man starved
But this cliché pops up again.
> As though he didn't just eat Viktor out
It was a poor attempt, if I do say so myself. Other ficcers go really in depth about that muff diving.
> Huh, on the table. Now that's an idea
Worry about your back, first.
> A sloppy pantomime of the blowjob Viktor wishes Jayce could give him
Whoa whoa whoa! What do you mean ''pantomime'? I thought the clit WAS a cock? You mean to tell me they aren't the same thing and you can't give a BJ to it?
> Feeling that thick cock bottom out inside him is a kind of fulfillment Viktor really doesn't have the vocabulary to describe
And just a sentence later, he compares him to his exes: his dick isn't that big, he's not that skilled, and the others are just FWBs. Guess that's one gender affirming thing you've got there: always comparing your current BF to your exes and how they were better.
> Rather than getting caught up in the things that Viktor lacks
Like a dick?
> Pretty eyes right on course
Get it? It's a reference to 'The Line'.
> Each grunt as he pounds into Viktor is almost animalistic, frenzied and carnivorous
So he's volunteering to do an audiobook of Jurassic Park, cool!
> He couldn't...he isn't jealous, is he?
Yes, Sky's purpose there was to act as the Bitch in the Way and for her to get humiliated by a man. She simply exists and just wants to give Viktor some chocolates (shame she doesn't know he's not actually a man) and Jayce wants to rub it the fuck in that he's fucking Viktor and she isn't. Her innocent crush has to be smeared over and mocked because Jayce, the man, and the mutt, can do whatever the fuck he wants.
> Is it horrible that I want her to walk in right now?
Yes. And I would say this if you were two actual men, a straight couple, or a pair of aliens. That's a shitty thing to do to someone who has no idea their crush isn't reciprocated and is your inferior by way of rank. She was hired by them to act as another perfect example of Zaun, only to find out she's being used as target practice.
Who knew half-Asian Aussies could be so racist? Must be those Chinese grandmothers speaking through them.
> Know that I'm the only one who gets to do this
Well she couldn't anyways, as she doesn't have a dick. You do, and make use of it because this totally isn't straight sex. It's also apparently fine for Viktor to mock Jayce himself for not living up to the standards of his other lovers, but he doesn't dare say a word because Jayce would get upset and who knows how an upset Jayce would react? Sky can be treated like shit, though. You'll seldom find a JayVik fan who likes her.
And please. If your Chinese grandmother can channel her hatred of niggers through you, she can also channel her disdain at the fact that Viktor's 'cock' isn't even bigger than a rooster's toe - and has the same texture as it.
Poor Sky. Even if I found her to be a wasted character, I'd still take her chocolates. Justice for my girl.
TL;DR Half Chinese Aussie channels the wisdom of her grandmothers and rages against the token black girl while said pooner compares former boyfriends to his current fucktoy. Happy (late) Valentine's day.
Here was a comment from the beta reader herself:
The current number of trans Viktor fics has reached the AMERICA number:
Alright, time for a break from my incessant postings - that queercatfan epilogue is calling. I have to prepare for the Strangulation Sentences again.
> He lays in the air like gravity's his cushion
Technically he'd be defying gravity, and he's sitting yoga-style, not laying down.
> With every breath he breathes in is Viktor
So he's literally oxygen now. OK.
> He's a lone insect exploring a vast nervous system
This doesn't even make sense. Why would an insect be in someone's brain unless you decided to eat a slug on a dare?
> Hammer like weapon tighter
It isn't 'hammer like' - it IS a hammer. An Arcane corrupted one, but it is still a hammer.
> Dialogue
Technically it'd be a monologue.
Along with the spelling errors - and there are a LOT, they only get worse from here on out - the author has decided to use those uwu squiggles like we're in a manga rather than a *cough* professional smut.
> The bullet of sorts ricochets of the immovable ground
First, it's not a bullet, it's a beam of light - a fancy laser, if you will. It's concentrated energy.
> Monsterus like growl
This bitch can't even spell 'monstrous', look at that.
> Pulling him the ground
He pulled the ground to him? OK.
> Like measly moth in a spider's web
Hope it's not Charlotte's Web.
> Think think think. How can he survive this?
I am reminded of that skit from Demo Disk where the 2017 gang played a pornographic Lara Croft game. Same line, same level of humour. Except it doesn't involve a minotaur.
> This is going to be embarrassing, especially if it doesn't work
Spoiler: it's still embarrassing (to read, that is) and it still works. Magic!
> Both of Viktor's strong hands tighten
And they're still smaller than Jayce's, lmao
> Viktor continues to tighten both of his hands
They were already tightened.
> He destroyed his only hope of ending this physically with it
Don't say that, you still have your dick, bro.
> Just had to outsmart Viktor
Turns out, all you need is a kiss and a BJ and you can get this pooner to become a blushing maiden. Huzzah!
I also love how the dialogue is in ALL CAPS, BECAUSE WE NEED IT TO GET OUR POINT ACROSS.
And here I thought S2's end dialogue between these characters was bad - this bitch comes in here with My Immortal style dialogue that should have been retired in 2007. Jayce is taking a page out of Shia LaBeouf's 'don't let your dreams be dreams' for his love confession and holy fuck is it bad.
Indeed, you are definitely exclaiming something by saying 'Stop it.' Truly a 'Dumbledore said calmly' moment.
> Quickly developing into years of need released in the intensity
*Quickly developed. This girl doesn't just need a beta - she needs a fully sentient autocorrect.
> Jayce kissed Viktor like a man starved
This cliché again?
> Jayce used his thumb to pull Viktor's jaw open with force, tonguing inside
...OK? You don't actually need to do that? He's not a fish.
> Ffffuck
Someone's NPC programming is malfunctioning.
> Christ
Jesus does not exist in Runeterra.
> Large hands warp around Viktor's thin waist
Now, when the author says Jayce has large hands...he has fucking huge hands. He is in full DK mode right now.
> I'm going to fuck you until you change your mind
Turns out this argument works.
> The pudge of Viktor's stomach
A lil dainty feminine pudge, that is.
>You were going to join me
What, as a corpse? You nearly broke his neck there, Viktor. It was only until The Power of Love broke through and you crumbled like a stack of Pringles.
> Slowly pushing the inside of his thigh down near Viktor's ribs
Interesting anatomical positioning you got there. Are you pushing his thigh UP TOWARDS his ribs, or are his ribs down towards his thighs?
> Using you til your reeling
This dumbfuck can't tell the difference between your and you're. This reads like a teenager or college student who decided to try her hand at trans smut for the first time.
> Teasing at the soft peaks on his chest
Viktor, for some reason, has fully functioning breasts and nipples despite being a biomechanical machine at this point. The author would also like to remind you that Viktor is NOT female and NOT a woman but a True and Honest trans man.
> Rough pressure against his clit
No 'cock' this time? Count my lucky stars, then.
> Viktor brats
That's an attitude, not a dialogue.
> Jayce can't believe how well this is working
Me neither. 80s porn movies have more believable plots.
> Just minutes ago, Viktor nearly killed him, and now he's already pliant in his arms, begging to be fucked
Nice lampshading. Indeed, all it took to change Viktor's mind was a kiss and a Shia LeBeouf confession. Maybe more people should try that tactic.
> How long have you been thinking of me fucking you?
Around five minutes or so.
> Jayce would be lying if he said the size difference didn't make his heart skip
Of course. Even with a new body, Viktor is always smaller than Jayce, with tinier hands, a tiny waist, a tiny body, a tiny head, tiny fingers, tiny everything...as if he's 5'0 and dwarfed by the brick shithouse that is Jayce and not a 5'8 grown ass man. But at least that sexual dimorphism is on display, and you can tell who the real woman is despite these authors' repeated insistence there is no such thing. Do as I say, not as I do.
> Jayce takes some time irritating the flesh
You don't want to irritate your nipples. At all. It isn't fun. Does this author even have nipples, or...?
> Biting a licking with fever
This isn't English.
> Feeling the pebbling under his tongue
Nipples are smooth rocks now, cool!
Too bad your brain couldn't hit a hard reset and learn what proofreading was. My IQ drops further the more I read this.
> His weakening body shaking
Weakening from what? This shitty dialogue?
> That is why I'm planning to take over
This is a bad deal, the worst deal in the history of deals, you need a better deal.
> But he has to convince Viktor first
You already said. I guess your tongue fucking Viktor's skin wasn't enough, eh?
> Squishing his face
Is he a Squishmellow now?
> Jayce squishes his cheeks into a kiss
You're already squishing him, boy.
> Wiping the slobber off on Jayce's skin
Eww. I had no idea Jayce kissed like a St. Bernard.
> My very molecules changed
Yet you still have a female body, with a fully functioning clitoris, vagina, and breasts. You could have any body you want, any genitalia you want, and you stick with the genitalia that (allegedly) gave you dysphoria to begin with. OK.
> Kinda sugary? Honey-y? But saltier
In which Viktor's new flesh tastes like beef jerky.
> You're sweet on the inside
With a touch of Arizona iced tea.
> Oh my
Who invited George Takei?
> He looks incredibly fucked out
Who knew tongue-fucking his beef jerky anatomy would do that?
> Thick hot gelatin-like liquid on the inside
Oh, so his anatomy is made up of purple Jell-o.
> It's so intensely sweet, like a drug
Keep him away from fatties, otherwise you'll know what it's like to actually be consumed like you're a Dunkin' Donut.
> Before he cums in his pants like a teenager
And then he later does just that, because Viktor, along with healing him, gave him a teenager's stamina. She actually writes this.
> Viktor snits impatiently, "I'm not some virgin"
Correct. A virgin wouldn't give up that pussy so easily. You gave up yours cheaper than an OnlyFans THOT did.
> When's the last time you took anything more than your own fingers?
Luckily, DK Mode Jayce is here to help.
> Viktor's not too small of a man, especially with the new developments, but compared to Jayce's overwhelmingly large hands, Viktor's are dwarfed
So he is a small man, because their hands are not that hugely different. Guess I need to whip out the tape measure like Jayce whips out his dick just to compare.
> Pummel into any reasonably not-horny thoughts
So...did you become more coherent or not? Because the way this was written, your brain 'pummeled' into not-horny thoughts, meaning you became sober OR you are having second thoughts. Or did you mean, 'they pummeled his not-horny thoughts'?
> Viktor's purple skin fades to a pastel pink
Viktor's vagina has the qualities of a lava lamp, where it changes colour based on his moods. He's a living cuttlefish, neat.
> Even changing how his genitals can react
Which IS an interesting premise, but so few actually take it the whole nine yards because it makes them uncomfortable. He just gets a cuttlefish pussy instead because, uh, trans rights?
> Hah, I can't
Shia LaBeouf says you can, so you will.
Is his clothed dick pushing against the thigh that's close to his ribs or nah?
> Viktor can't believe he'd make such a silly mistake
I can, because the moment Jayce kissed him it was over, and all those pesky emotions came through as well as his innate desire to get fucked. All that talk about evolution and metal and you still couldn't buck those female evolutionary traits to be bred by a male HEYO
> How infuriating the way his mind and body still tried to melt around Jayce
Oh, so you're saying you can't live without him; your entire life revolves around him, and you can't function without him because, as you say, your 'emotions get the better of you'? Sounds like...a female trait you were never able to shed.
> It wasn't originally to cover this display
He's talking about the roof, btw
> More to spare the commune the sight of a forced joining
Viktor originally only converted those who were WILLING to join his commune. This suggests he was literally mind-raping them - and to be fair, he IS. But at least he gave the illusion of choice at first.
> If Viktor's followers saw this, by choice, their god writing on the ground under a brutish stranger, he doesn't know what they'd think
You control their minds; you can start an orgy. Show them your cuttlefish vagina and breed a new generation of mind slaves. It'll be like Jonestown but with Jell-o instead of Kool-Aid.
> His dick is burrowing inside his head down
It's doing what to what now?
> Come on, Viktor~
I am *this* close to introducing Dick Cheney to this commune.
> Eyes wondering up his thin waist and neck
I'm wondering why he still keeps his 'thin and small' body and didn't bother to get a glow up. What was he doing that entire time? He could've been getting massive gains.
> Tickling at Viktor's teeth like he's studying the grooves
Are you a mantis shrimp now, cleaning offal of his teeth to keep them clean?
> Viktor's weakened knees
All that and his transformation just gave him the same shitty body. Sad!
> Squishing his cheek against the ground
Yeah I'm sure you'll convince him of the error of his ways with some rape play, there.
> Lifting Viktor's torso up by the collarbones
This confused me, and took me a few tries to decipher it. He has one hand pinning Viktor's hands behind his back, and the other slips to his front, grabs his collarbone, and lifts him up, which would mean that Viktor's back is going to bend the wrong way. Why not grab his neck, instead?
> Viktor's fucked out mind is tripping over itself
My mind is already doing that trying to decipher this English.
> Viktor's sob comes out weak and small
But is it sugary sweet?
Why does he need Plan B? He doesn't menstruate. He doesn't produce eggs. If all the molecules of his body changed, why does he retain the molecules and cells of his FEMALE body? Shouldn't you be free of all human constraints now that you have a biomechanical body? Why should a contraceptive even matter, let alone work, in a body that does not abide by human reproductive function anymore? And who produces Plan B in this universe, anyways?
I guess we're not supposed to know or ask. The author wants a sequel to this, and based on how fucking awful this one was written, you, too, can be thrown back to 2007 based on how people can't seem to grasp the basics of the English language despite AO3 being widely hailed as the better archive because 'the stories are written better'. Someone must've kicked this bitch out of the cool kid's club, because what the fuck did I just read?
Suppose it could be 'hot', if it didn't read like Ebony Darkness D'mentia Raven Way didn't write it.
This one was beta-read by capyshota, the same beta reader for MGCraig. When I said these authors are all in a clique, I wasn't lying. This author is a mixed Chinese-Australian, who draws herself much whiter than she actually is. Her strawpage is the most feminine thing I've ever seen.
As it turns out, she has a tweet where she mentions that Queercatfan has an epilogue to her fic - the most kudosed fic in the entire Arcane fandom - and now sits at 700k hits. In another month, it will likely reach 1 million hits. That will have to be covered in increments as it is an 18k oneshot. For now, though, here is the work of one of her fans.
Get it? It's a not-so-subtle-critique against capitalism. I wonder who inspired that - oh.
> Privately, Viktor finds it a small comfort that even Piltover's golden boy doesn't have a Valentine of his own
Thank God Mel isn't in this, else the Slav here is going to whip out the white hood and racial slurs.
> It's nice to know that there's no one else to steal his secret crush away
He isn't your property; he is free to love who he pleases. Just because YOU didn't make your crush known doesn't give you the right to feel jealous. You don't own him. He's a grown ass man and so are you. Act like it.
> Despite the numerous sexual partners Viktor has had in his time at Piltover's Academy
Oh good, the Pooner Slut trope. These doods really know their way around a dick, eh?
> He has never felt like this about someone
Guaranteed it's because of the Hispanic Hog. That Pringles can is ready to be whipped out.
> Feels suddenly feels furious at Jayce for leaving him alone
Again, you don't own him. He is not your property, you BPD bitch.
> he hopes
Looks like the beta reader forgot that this sentence was meant to be capitalized. Oops.
> They've been trying and failing to stabilize the Hextech gemstones
They already did that - the trick is now to do it on a larger platform with more power. But they are on the right track.
> Traces of Jayce are everywhere
You're never going to imagine what he does with Jayce's stuff.
> Bitterly, he thinks of what Jayce might be doing right now with someone else
See my point above x3.
Uh oh, we've got the Token getting in the way of a gay ship. Go away, you lil nigga, the light-skinned Hispanic and the white pooner are talking.
Indeed - wait until you read what happens.
Yes, he's masturbating on Jayce's shirt and is coating Jayce's poster with his ejaculate. Very creative. Oh, and Jesus Christ does not exist in Runeterra.
Yes, Jayce, you just watched your True and Honest boyfriend masturbate. What the fuck do you think it changes?
> Back to his clit
And we go right back to 'cock' a few paragraphs later, because as we all know, the two are completely the same. Forget the fact it isn't even bigger than Jayce's nostril on that t-shirt.
> Jayce has gotten hard in the lab from Viktor's presence and proximity more times than he can count
...and he didn't notice a single time? With that pecker, you'd expect him to announce the Indianapolis 500.
> Rides the t-shirt with his cock
You just used clit earlier, so just stick with that.
> Brought out a dark ugly jealously
Le sigh. See what I said earlier x4. He doesn't belong to you - hell, he wasn't even aware of your feelings. And what were you planning on doing with those 'dark feelings', hmm? Attack someone? Key a car? A set of stairs will do you in.
> Each press of his fingers against his swollen cock
And it's still smaller than Jayce's thumbnail.
Viktor masturbates in front of Jayce, taunts Jayce, is insanely jealous whether Jayce is dating someone else...and is now self-conscious? Give me a fucking break.
This is also the first fic I've read that discusses a refractory period. They're usually able to go at it back-to-back.
> Flicking his tongue over his cock
Still smaller than Jayce's t-shirt nostril.
> Lapping hotly at his cunt
No 'hole' this time?
> Like a man starved
But this cliché pops up again.
> As though he didn't just eat Viktor out
It was a poor attempt, if I do say so myself. Other ficcers go really in depth about that muff diving.
> Huh, on the table. Now that's an idea
Worry about your back, first.
> A sloppy pantomime of the blowjob Viktor wishes Jayce could give him
Whoa whoa whoa! What do you mean ''pantomime'? I thought the clit WAS a cock? You mean to tell me they aren't the same thing and you can't give a BJ to it?
> Feeling that thick cock bottom out inside him is a kind of fulfillment Viktor really doesn't have the vocabulary to describe
And just a sentence later, he compares him to his exes: his dick isn't that big, he's not that skilled, and the others are just FWBs. Guess that's one gender affirming thing you've got there: always comparing your current BF to your exes and how they were better.
> Rather than getting caught up in the things that Viktor lacks
Like a dick?
> Pretty eyes right on course
Get it? It's a reference to 'The Line'.
> Each grunt as he pounds into Viktor is almost animalistic, frenzied and carnivorous
So he's volunteering to do an audiobook of Jurassic Park, cool!
> He couldn't...he isn't jealous, is he?
Yes, Sky's purpose there was to act as the Bitch in the Way and for her to get humiliated by a man. She simply exists and just wants to give Viktor some chocolates (shame she doesn't know he's not actually a man) and Jayce wants to rub it the fuck in that he's fucking Viktor and she isn't. Her innocent crush has to be smeared over and mocked because Jayce, the man, and the mutt, can do whatever the fuck he wants.
> Is it horrible that I want her to walk in right now?
Yes. And I would say this if you were two actual men, a straight couple, or a pair of aliens. That's a shitty thing to do to someone who has no idea their crush isn't reciprocated and is your inferior by way of rank. She was hired by them to act as another perfect example of Zaun, only to find out she's being used as target practice.
Who knew half-Asian Aussies could be so racist? Must be those Chinese grandmothers speaking through them.
> Know that I'm the only one who gets to do this
Well she couldn't anyways, as she doesn't have a dick. You do, and make use of it because this totally isn't straight sex. It's also apparently fine for Viktor to mock Jayce himself for not living up to the standards of his other lovers, but he doesn't dare say a word because Jayce would get upset and who knows how an upset Jayce would react? Sky can be treated like shit, though. You'll seldom find a JayVik fan who likes her.
And please. If your Chinese grandmother can channel her hatred of niggers through you, she can also channel her disdain at the fact that Viktor's 'cock' isn't even bigger than a rooster's toe - and has the same texture as it.
Poor Sky. Even if I found her to be a wasted character, I'd still take her chocolates. Justice for my girl.
Here was a comment from the beta reader herself:
The current number of trans Viktor fics has reached the AMERICA number:
Alright, time for a break from my incessant postings - that queercatfan epilogue is calling. I have to prepare for the Strangulation Sentences again.
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I wonder what this author was thinking when he thought, you know what would go well with a Kakegurui fanfic? How about some troon characters and transphobia?:
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This writer also writes only Kakegurui fanfics, and clearly can't take criticism, according to his (unless it's an FTM) profile:
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Summary:
While going to the bathroom..Naoe has a fight with some other girls...
Notes:
I'm hella projecting in this fic....sorry not sorry...
TRIGGER WARNING: transphobic slurs ahead.
Transmale Midari/ Transfemale Naoe
In this fic: students dont wear uniforms...they wear whatever they want.
Also the beautification committee is instead called the "Beautiful Manji gang." Their job is basically the same in the school, but they are violent outside of the school as well and engage in various crimes such as theft, arson and aggravated assault.
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Naoe was always nervous as she entered the bathroom. There thankfully appeared to be no one around. Sitting down she sighed as her cock twitched. She had been getting better at doing this. Still too young to get surgery she had settled for this. Being sure to dry really well when she was done.
Hearing some girls enter, Naoe stayed completely still. Not daring to move a muscle.
Hearing two stalls near the far end flush and the door open, Naoe carefully walked to the sinks. Washing her hands and turning to leave she was brought out of her thoughts by three girls entering. They stared at her before frowning.
“Oi….you lost?” One said.
Naoe clenched her fists, careful not to show any retaliation. They want her to fight back.
Dont do it…dont do it…dontdoitdontdoitdon’t-
“Oh thats right….You’re just a filthy she-male…”
One girl pinned Naoe to the sink, a hand between Naoe’s legs….cupping her sex and making Naoe shake in fear.
“Disgusting….a chick with a dick….”
The other two girls laughed. One of them ripping off the locket on Naoe’s neck.
A locket midari had given her. Growling Naoe shoved the other girl off.
“Leave me alone!”
“Why? You chose this by coming into the womans room. This is for REAL women, pathetic tranny..”
The first girl, a tall blonde slapped Naoe in the face. Naoe fell and curled in a ball to protect her face.
The other two girls kicked Naoe’s back and side as the blonde held Naoe’s head down with her foot.
“Yeah, Stupid tranny fake girl. Get your ass up faggot!”
The other two girls held Naoe on her feet. The blonde smirked as she slammed her fist into Naoe’s stomach, resulting in Naoe coughing up blood. Before choking her. Naoe couldnt fight back due to the friends holding her arms.
“Pathetic boy. You’ll never be a real girl. Not now or ever. Let me show you why!”
The girl kicked in between Naoe’s legs. Naoe did her best not to scream but kneeled in pain, silent tears down her eyes.
“That’s what i thought! You newhalf piece of trash!”
Hearing the door slam open the group looked up in curiosity. Someone was leaning against the doorframe.
“OOOOIIII…..Whats good with y’all?”
“Who the hell are you? And what the fuck are you doing?!” The blonde asked as her two friends shook.
“This is really bad….That’s Midari Ikishima…..leader of the "beautiful Manji gang".” One of the friends said.
Midari walked into the bathroom. She had come here for one of her usual "breaks" after a rather intense “meeting” with Sayaka. Sayaka looked rather flustered when Midari left but she had known better than to push her friend for sex.
“I could be asking you the same.” Midari said looking down at Naoe. Naoe looked up and the blonde noticed. She slapped naoe in the face. Midari uncrossed her arms and took a deep breath.
“Just making sure this BOY stays out of the girls bathroom.” the blonde said.
“Shut the fuck up! Your voice is SO annoying.” Midari said.
The blonde growled.
“Hmm?” Midari laughed. “Boy i tell you, all you bitches are so ugly. Fuck ya’ll supposed to be? A fish?”
“You wanna fight bitch?!” The blonde said. “Fine, get her.”
The two other girls charged at Midari. Midari easily caught the girls’ fist before shoving one of the girls off. Twisting her captive’s arm she heard the satisfying sound of bone snapping. The girl screamed in pain and kneeled.
The blonde growled and ran out of the bathroom with her other friend.
“Oi Naoe…Stay your ass right the fuck there. I’ll come back for ya.”
Naoe nodded. Terrified by what she just saw. Deep in her thoughts she didn't notice Midari had given Naoe her vest. Looking up she saw midari had on a simple black t-shirt with the words “He/Him” on it in large white letters. She also noticed Midari had on pants today. Black joggers.
Naoe looked up at Midari’s face, confused for a minute. Midari smiled looking down at Naoe and handing her back the locket.
“Be a good girl for daddy.” Midari said, walking away with her hands in her pockets.
Panting once they got outside. The blonde girl and her friend looked around.
“I think we lost her.”
“Yooooo…hooo….What's good bitches?” Midari appeared from behind a tree. “It’s him by the way.”
“What? are you a tranny too?! Fucking pedo rapist!” the blonde said.
Midari just frowned. “No…I’m not a rapist…but…I WILL violate you. You pathetic excuse of a girl.”
The girls stood petrified. Midari slowly walked up to the friend first. The girl pulled out a switchblade and aimed for Midari’s neck. However Midari placed her hand out and got stabbed in the hand instead. Backing up, the friend laughed at Midari who smiled.
Midari smirked and slammed the friend on the ground by her face.
“Oh come on the fight just started and you’re already on your back?” Midari teased.
Looking down she stomped her foot onto the girls stomach before kicking her in the face, knocking several teeth out and knocking the girl out cold.
She then looked at the blonde. Noticing the girl holding a can of pepper spray. Pulling the knife out of her hand and throwing it away, Midari slowly walked up to the blonde.
“You got a lot of nerve fucking with someone precious to me. Now it's time to beat your sorry ass.” Midari said, her hands in her pockets as she got right in the blondes face.
Screaming the blonde spayed Midari in the face with the pepper spray, who screamed in obvious agony from her eye being burned.
Backing up and closing her eye, she felt tears coming down her face.
Hearing the other girl laughing before running away, Midari spoke to the escaping girl.
“The fuck you laughing for bitch?! You think shit is sweet or something? Well i’ll show you something sweet….”
She felt cold metal on her fingers. Opening her eye, despite the pain, she smirked.
“Fuck out of my face.” Midari said, quietly.
BANG!
The blonde collapsed. Shot square in the back of the head. Dead before she even hit the ground.
Naoe sat quietly in the bathroom. The other girl had ran away to the nurse, her arm completely snapped in half.
Nuzzling the vest Naoe was lost in her thoughts. She often got glared at or heard whispers when she came in here but noone had ever been violent with her. She cried, taking it as a sign she didnt pass. She had noticed the door being kicked open, Midari stumbling and crying as she gripped the sink. She had frantically washed her face with soap and water. Desperately rinsing out her eye for over 20 minutes, grunting in pain and cursing under her breath.
“President? Are you ok?”
After taking off her shirt (also stained with pepper spray) Midari turned to Naoe and tried to catch her breath. Pulling herself together she finally stood fully and smiled.
“I’m fine baby”…Midari wet a paper towel and wiped the blood off of Naoe’s mouth. Then wiped the blood of her injured hand. Using the bandage on her left arm to wrap it.
She noticed Naoe had begun to sniffle.
“I…I just wanted to go to the bathroom…” She said to herself. “Was that really too much to ask?”
“Don't worry Naoe, no one will ever question you again… I promise.”
Naoe didn't like the dark tone on the word promise…but let it go.
Carrying the crying Naoe on her back, Midari decided her "break" could wait. Right now they had to visit the nurse.
“I’m here Naoe. Lets go get ya looked at…My pretty girl.”
“I’m sorry for all the trouble i caused…Thank you….My handsome strong man.”
“It’s no trouble at all…Girlie…Now rest. Its a long walk to the nurse.” Midari simply smiled as she walked down the hall. Shirtless but happy.
Naoe closed her eyes as gentle tears slid down her face.
While she’d like to avoid another fight…she knew the world would still hate her for simply existing. However Midari and the committee accepted her…fully and truly…..in the end….that's all she really needed.
While going to the bathroom..Naoe has a fight with some other girls...
Notes:
I'm hella projecting in this fic....sorry not sorry...
TRIGGER WARNING: transphobic slurs ahead.
Transmale Midari/ Transfemale Naoe
In this fic: students dont wear uniforms...they wear whatever they want.
Also the beautification committee is instead called the "Beautiful Manji gang." Their job is basically the same in the school, but they are violent outside of the school as well and engage in various crimes such as theft, arson and aggravated assault.
Work Text:
Naoe was always nervous as she entered the bathroom. There thankfully appeared to be no one around. Sitting down she sighed as her cock twitched. She had been getting better at doing this. Still too young to get surgery she had settled for this. Being sure to dry really well when she was done.
Hearing some girls enter, Naoe stayed completely still. Not daring to move a muscle.
Hearing two stalls near the far end flush and the door open, Naoe carefully walked to the sinks. Washing her hands and turning to leave she was brought out of her thoughts by three girls entering. They stared at her before frowning.
“Oi….you lost?” One said.
Naoe clenched her fists, careful not to show any retaliation. They want her to fight back.
Dont do it…dont do it…dontdoitdontdoitdon’t-
“Oh thats right….You’re just a filthy she-male…”
One girl pinned Naoe to the sink, a hand between Naoe’s legs….cupping her sex and making Naoe shake in fear.
“Disgusting….a chick with a dick….”
The other two girls laughed. One of them ripping off the locket on Naoe’s neck.
A locket midari had given her. Growling Naoe shoved the other girl off.
“Leave me alone!”
“Why? You chose this by coming into the womans room. This is for REAL women, pathetic tranny..”
The first girl, a tall blonde slapped Naoe in the face. Naoe fell and curled in a ball to protect her face.
The other two girls kicked Naoe’s back and side as the blonde held Naoe’s head down with her foot.
“Yeah, Stupid tranny fake girl. Get your ass up faggot!”
The other two girls held Naoe on her feet. The blonde smirked as she slammed her fist into Naoe’s stomach, resulting in Naoe coughing up blood. Before choking her. Naoe couldnt fight back due to the friends holding her arms.
“Pathetic boy. You’ll never be a real girl. Not now or ever. Let me show you why!”
The girl kicked in between Naoe’s legs. Naoe did her best not to scream but kneeled in pain, silent tears down her eyes.
“That’s what i thought! You newhalf piece of trash!”
Hearing the door slam open the group looked up in curiosity. Someone was leaning against the doorframe.
“OOOOIIII…..Whats good with y’all?”
“Who the hell are you? And what the fuck are you doing?!” The blonde asked as her two friends shook.
“This is really bad….That’s Midari Ikishima…..leader of the "beautiful Manji gang".” One of the friends said.
Midari walked into the bathroom. She had come here for one of her usual "breaks" after a rather intense “meeting” with Sayaka. Sayaka looked rather flustered when Midari left but she had known better than to push her friend for sex.
“I could be asking you the same.” Midari said looking down at Naoe. Naoe looked up and the blonde noticed. She slapped naoe in the face. Midari uncrossed her arms and took a deep breath.
“Just making sure this BOY stays out of the girls bathroom.” the blonde said.
“Shut the fuck up! Your voice is SO annoying.” Midari said.
The blonde growled.
“Hmm?” Midari laughed. “Boy i tell you, all you bitches are so ugly. Fuck ya’ll supposed to be? A fish?”
“You wanna fight bitch?!” The blonde said. “Fine, get her.”
The two other girls charged at Midari. Midari easily caught the girls’ fist before shoving one of the girls off. Twisting her captive’s arm she heard the satisfying sound of bone snapping. The girl screamed in pain and kneeled.
The blonde growled and ran out of the bathroom with her other friend.
“Oi Naoe…Stay your ass right the fuck there. I’ll come back for ya.”
Naoe nodded. Terrified by what she just saw. Deep in her thoughts she didn't notice Midari had given Naoe her vest. Looking up she saw midari had on a simple black t-shirt with the words “He/Him” on it in large white letters. She also noticed Midari had on pants today. Black joggers.
Naoe looked up at Midari’s face, confused for a minute. Midari smiled looking down at Naoe and handing her back the locket.
“Be a good girl for daddy.” Midari said, walking away with her hands in her pockets.
Panting once they got outside. The blonde girl and her friend looked around.
“I think we lost her.”
“Yooooo…hooo….What's good bitches?” Midari appeared from behind a tree. “It’s him by the way.”
“What? are you a tranny too?! Fucking pedo rapist!” the blonde said.
Midari just frowned. “No…I’m not a rapist…but…I WILL violate you. You pathetic excuse of a girl.”
The girls stood petrified. Midari slowly walked up to the friend first. The girl pulled out a switchblade and aimed for Midari’s neck. However Midari placed her hand out and got stabbed in the hand instead. Backing up, the friend laughed at Midari who smiled.
Midari smirked and slammed the friend on the ground by her face.
“Oh come on the fight just started and you’re already on your back?” Midari teased.
Looking down she stomped her foot onto the girls stomach before kicking her in the face, knocking several teeth out and knocking the girl out cold.
She then looked at the blonde. Noticing the girl holding a can of pepper spray. Pulling the knife out of her hand and throwing it away, Midari slowly walked up to the blonde.
“You got a lot of nerve fucking with someone precious to me. Now it's time to beat your sorry ass.” Midari said, her hands in her pockets as she got right in the blondes face.
Screaming the blonde spayed Midari in the face with the pepper spray, who screamed in obvious agony from her eye being burned.
Backing up and closing her eye, she felt tears coming down her face.
Hearing the other girl laughing before running away, Midari spoke to the escaping girl.
“The fuck you laughing for bitch?! You think shit is sweet or something? Well i’ll show you something sweet….”
She felt cold metal on her fingers. Opening her eye, despite the pain, she smirked.
“Fuck out of my face.” Midari said, quietly.
BANG!
The blonde collapsed. Shot square in the back of the head. Dead before she even hit the ground.
Naoe sat quietly in the bathroom. The other girl had ran away to the nurse, her arm completely snapped in half.
Nuzzling the vest Naoe was lost in her thoughts. She often got glared at or heard whispers when she came in here but noone had ever been violent with her. She cried, taking it as a sign she didnt pass. She had noticed the door being kicked open, Midari stumbling and crying as she gripped the sink. She had frantically washed her face with soap and water. Desperately rinsing out her eye for over 20 minutes, grunting in pain and cursing under her breath.
“President? Are you ok?”
After taking off her shirt (also stained with pepper spray) Midari turned to Naoe and tried to catch her breath. Pulling herself together she finally stood fully and smiled.
“I’m fine baby”…Midari wet a paper towel and wiped the blood off of Naoe’s mouth. Then wiped the blood of her injured hand. Using the bandage on her left arm to wrap it.
She noticed Naoe had begun to sniffle.
“I…I just wanted to go to the bathroom…” She said to herself. “Was that really too much to ask?”
“Don't worry Naoe, no one will ever question you again… I promise.”
Naoe didn't like the dark tone on the word promise…but let it go.
Carrying the crying Naoe on her back, Midari decided her "break" could wait. Right now they had to visit the nurse.
“I’m here Naoe. Lets go get ya looked at…My pretty girl.”
“I’m sorry for all the trouble i caused…Thank you….My handsome strong man.”
“It’s no trouble at all…Girlie…Now rest. Its a long walk to the nurse.” Midari simply smiled as she walked down the hall. Shirtless but happy.
Naoe closed her eyes as gentle tears slid down her face.
While she’d like to avoid another fight…she knew the world would still hate her for simply existing. However Midari and the committee accepted her…fully and truly…..in the end….that's all she really needed.
This writer also writes only Kakegurui fanfics, and clearly can't take criticism, according to his (unless it's an FTM) profile:
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Did the author lift these lines straight off of a pornhub video?
Also, starting the fic with the troon character going into a girls' bathroom and immediately hitting us with "Sitting down she sighed as her cock twitched." seems like some 4d TERF chess tbh.
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Queercatfan, in her epilogue for her wildly popular fic, had this to say:
There are quite a few problems I have with this. One is that she is known (through personal experiment) to delete any and all negative comments, as she hovers over her email like a hawk. She will delete said comments within minutes of seeing them, and then block you. Second, she admitted in her original work that she did no research and 'cannot be bothered to', especially in regards to business or science, and then has the gall to say that she is 'growing' on this 'silly archive'.
You do not grow when you block and delete critical comments. Before S2 came out, this fic had maybe 100 or so bookmarks, and now it has over 8k. She gained around 3k Twitter followers (before said in the end author's note that she 'doesn't hang out there much anymore', which is a lie) and is one of the larger Twitter accounts belonging to a popular AO3 author. She became famous here for her 'Strangulation Sentence Structure', where she could not fuse related sentences together, giving the appearance the the characters were choking while speaking. This happened throughout her fic, and no one but myself ever commented on it or noticed it. It is clear her editing leaves much to be desired.
Lastly, she makes a note on how she may write characters OOC and that it's 'okay to be cringe' and that it is freeing - just don't apply that same mentality to her. Call her cringe and she just might cry.
For now, I'll be addressing this monster of an epilogue, and it will be divided into sections for easier reading. Let's see if she ever fixed her Strangulation Sentences, or if they remained the same.
Just as a summary: her previous fic was a masterclass in gaslighting and emotional manipulation. Jayce sold out Viktor's IP against his will and consent, while he was terminally ill, and then 'won him back' thanks to the incessant demands of his mother and Caitlyn. Viktor eventually relents, they make up, and they, the true and honest socialists, find a nice house with a white picket fence to fuck in.
For a recap: Viktor in this series is the all-too-aware socialist who hates capitalism while working for a private university while patenting inventions he later never sells. This line just confirms what I already knew: despite claiming to be the all-knowing socialist who is aware of class issues, he's really just a shut-in who can't deal with other people. Which is a perfectly fine character flaw on its own - in this case, though, it just makes him look more like a Redditor than an actual person. The classic, 'I support the working class but ew don't fucking touch me you dirty redneck' trope.
> Amber and vanilla
Nice, where'd he get the amber from?
> Stars don't start as black holes
They become black holes at the end of their life. Are you a black hole, son? It would explain why you drain the life out of everyone.
> Impeccable etiquette. A phony way of speaking and behaving. Polished, prim, and proper
I regret to inform you that Beth is still fucking writing like this, which means that I have to do the editing job for her and fix her sentences so they can become more legible. If I wrote like this, even here, people would be asking why the fuck I was typing like a sped.
> Viktor had only the brains
Viktor absolutely has charisma; he's actually a little shit in the canon. He knows his worth; he just doesn't like presenting it in front of huge crowds as he believes he can spend that time working. I have always hated when authors strip away his natural charisma to make him look more of a victim, and there's no bigger culprit than this bitch right here.
> Vitkor rarely thought in metaphor
Funny, so does the author.
> With every smile, every casual touch
This bitch is STILL allergic to commas and it is going to drive me nuts. She absolutely needs a hardline beta to tell her how bad it looks.
> It's just...you're kind of like...my best friend?
He's 25, not a teenager. I hated reading this in the main fic and I hate reading it here. It's just awful.
> So you...what? You have a hookup buddy?
The word you're looking for is 'Friends with Benefits'. And the person in question is Gregory, the physics TA - he was retconned to be an astrophysicist here - who was mentioned in the dinner scene in the previous fic and set off Jayce as a result.
> What
What indeed.
> He struggled to understand it: affection without expectation
You are going to see me autocorrect a lot of sentences, so bear with me. This curse still persists and Beth here has never once been told she's been doing it wrong.
> So is this one...Oh! These flowers...very nice...donations! Yes. The whales would appreciate this - if they had the sentience to.
Whales are sentient, as we are. The word you are looking for is 'self awareness'. AKA the mirror test.
> Let's see...Ah!
I already captured Heimerdinger's personality better in just a few sentences and I am shitposting. Pathetic.
> Bouquets, boxes of chocolates, gift baskets with wine and cheese
Literally how hard is it to use commas?
> The chocolates were from his casual sex partner, Gregory
This is the same Grindr Greg Jayce was willing to fight over, btw. Viktor, in the previous fic, kissed him and teased Jayce with him as a means to 'get back' at him. It was shitty then, it's shitty here.
> If life were far simpler, he could go up to Jayce right at that moment
Nothing is stopping you. Go for it. But we need the ~drama~
> Those big hands of his
Yes, the yaoi hands.
> Long
Beth still capitalizes random words and I have no idea why she does this. It's not even a proper noun, either.
> The Science
Excuse me, it's The Science TM. Respect Fauci, motherfucker.
> He couldn't do this, while being so tempted by such small, soft gestures
This author is also allergic to 'when, but, and' as well. Conjoining words are anathema to her.
> Never waning to stop for anything, Viktor admired that about him. He was always so dedicated
> The second Gregory went in for a kiss, Viktor immediately thought of how Jayce would kiss him
I am trying very hard to make this legible because this bitch is STILL ALLERGIC TO COMMAS, FUCK
> When Gregory put a hand on his waist, he couldn't help but think of how Jayce's hand would be bigger, gentler warmer
Bigger hands, bigger knives to stab you with. And all it takes to win you back is a pair of puppy eyes and a demanding abuela.
> A brilliant yet spoiled man from old money
He didn't sound so bad. He was a Grindr pickup, after all.
> He felt that black hole remain, heavy and ceaseless
You are a mood killer, that's for sure.
> Especially that night, especially when he kept thinking of -
> Gonna make you wear a fucking collar.
You see, sex talk, even dirty talk, sounds better when you don't add random fucking periods everywhere. You are one Regina that definitely needs to be knocked down a few pegs.
> No, don't be. I liked it. It was...hot, that's all.
Look at that. I'm making them sound like normal people.
> He just needed an out. He didn't know where: out of this city, back in the lab, into a shower.
> Who's they, Viktor? There's no they. There's no grand conspiracy against you!
> Ugh, you're so...ugh!
Stop acting like a moody teenage girl. You are a grown ass man. Don't make me toss that wine bottle over your head.
> Viktor did not look at him, and could not see the expression on Jayce's face
Yeah, because you aren't looking at him. It's obvious Jayce is drunk here, and saying things that he doesn't mean to say - but alcohol is also a truth serum of sorts. Will this get addressed? Yes and no.
> Jayce would cut him out of his life for this
Why? You weren't in the wrong. He was. He was drunk and said stupid shit. You were far more clear-headed despite drinking whisky. Jayce is just a moody bitch - and always has been.
> Because Jayce was so tall it made him feel uneasy
Jayce is 6'2, but these fics make it seem as if he's 6'7 as a means to get him towering over Viktor for that size difference tag. He's big, but come on.
> Jayce got ugly last night. Viktor also got ugly
Jayce started it, Viktor ended it. Don't drink in the lab, homie.
> And I completely took it out on you
Indeed you did. You're not a happy drunk, are you?
> I took a very reasonable concern of yours - about being respected - and I belittled it.
You should have hired me as your editor. I'd need a fuckton of red Sharpies for the amount of shit I'm finding.
> Oh. Umm I'm sorry
Stop with the uh umm uhhh uhhhh it makes you sound like a knuckledragger. Are you a human? Act like it.
> Viktor got the distinct impression that if he tried talking, he would cry
Whatever the fuck for? Jayce was the one who got drunk and said that shit, not him. HE was the one who was jealous. Why does Viktor have to do all the emotional labour for him?
> I think it's good to talk about things. I want to remember. I want to learn
Learn not to drink around sharp objects, you mutt.
> But apologies were hard; they were also an admission of being wrong. Being right about most things was all he really had
You admitted you were wrong about Jayce right in the beginning. Jesus, these characters are absolutely neurotic and I hate them.
> It starts to pour rain because it's incredibly warm out - in February
Jeez, take me there. I'm buried in two feet of snow.
> Not sickening at all, nope.
I hate this 'quirky and relatable' type of writing. You are not on TikTok. Shut up.
> Dude, I've seen worse. Besides, I got my free samples.
Wanna know why he has cake on his pants? The reasons will shock you:
> he gets so overwhelmed that he forgets how to act human
I'll say. Viktor has a panic attack in a cake shop because he cannot differentiate the flavours and knocks the display case over. He's that much of an absolute fuck-up and social pariah he does shit even most autists dread to do in real life. This is meant to be funny and relatable, but honestly sounds like a skit out of American Pie. It's someone who literally cannot function in society that they freak out over cake tasting for a wedding that doesn't even need to have a venue. You can have a private ceremony, you know.
Wedding venues are a pain in the ASS to book; any wedding planner can and will tell you this. You sometimes need to plan a year in advanced. If you don't want a fancy cake, bake one yourself, or consider recipes you know you'll like. Wedding cakes are expensive as hell; one has to wonder why a so-called socialist is so anal on something as 'traditional' and 'Western' as a wedding. Rules for thee but not for me.
> He walks up to Viktor. Opens his mouth, closes it.
Is he Billy Bass, now? Is he gonna sing me a tune?
> I was horrible at the bakery. I'm so sorry.
If you can't handle yourself in public, and smashed a display case you won't be paying for, because you're a good socialist, then stay home. Bake the cake yourself.
> Dram
*Drama. Get a fucking beta.
> His butterfly project with Jinx has hit a safety snag
Because the concept itself is not 'safe'. She created butterfly drones that can shut down weapons - though how they manage to shut down gas powered weapons is not said or explained (I don't even think Beth knows how guns work AT ALL) - that was going to be bought by Mel's company for weaponization purposes. No shit it's going to hit a snag!
> Their new battery design is failing its tests because they haven't been able to properly design the cathode
Skill issue. Literal skill issue. These are supposed to be geniuses and yet they can't seem to use the Internet when it exists in this world. They just got their patent for said battery back - and now they don't know how their own fucking technology works. The actual worldbuilding for this universe is God awful and God forbid you are a sperg like me who likes additional details. It all comes apart once you actually pay attention.
> The vet bill made him want to set the clinic ablaze
Look at that, the socialist wants to destroy shit because his pet ate some copper wiring. Get a better job; and why don't you have pet insurance, buddy? Too bourgeoise? Why didn't you take it to the animal hospital on campus?
> The colour schemes and the cakes and the venue seem ridiculous
So? You don't need to have a venue at all. Marry in a court and have a private party. You're having a panic attack because the fucking cakes taste the same. Calm the fuck down.
> He's still found things to be upset about
Me too. I did have a chuckle at Jayce 'nearly dying' after falling off the roof - IIRC, it's barely two stories, and my man tried to fix it without a watcher on the ladder. Skill issue.
> We need to get our roof fixed
Don't do it in bad weather, and have a spotter by the ladder. How big is your goddamn roof, anyways?
> Larry, his therapist
Of course we have basic bitch soyboy LARRY being the therapist. Of course Jayce needs therapy - my man stabbed by boy Viktor in the face and faced no consequences. Are we going to get some treatment for the serial narcissist here?
> Which tangentially means he feels the same about Viktor, seeing their work and lives are the same
> Surprisingly, Jayce doesn't seem to want to go to bed with him
Uh oh. Trouble in paradise already? You already fucked twice and proposed marriage. What else is wrong? Is Jayce watching porn?
> The man is entitled to his privacy
If he's being sneaky, chances are he's a cheater. He may still be into that brown sugar.
> Viktor suddenly feels horrible for rejecting this idea of a break
Viktor apologizes a LOT, especially for Jayce's mistakes and attitude. Not only is he the stand-in for the emotional labour, he has to be the support and unconditional love both for a man who sold him out because 'his contract demanded it.'
Why is 'volunteering' capitalized?
> Cozy
Oh God, are we gonna see the Ralphamale in TV?
> The next few days, hell, they might even get as far down as here."
> Surely you know that the northern lights are incredibly hard to predict
While this is true, they CAN be tracked if you are following NOAA or solar activity, which is what Jayce is doing. The Kp index is what measures geomagnetic activity; the author would know had she done her research. Looks like I'm the one doing the heavy lifting for her.
> He gets horribly bored
No way, man. Same!
> It's...well. It's terrible
Nice lampshading.
> They laugh and make snide comments
Funny, that's exactly what I'm doing to you.
> Can we pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeease take a picture?
Can you pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeease shut the fuck up?
> They say things like 'slay' and 'awww'
Fucking hell, we've already got teenage IG models on this trip!
> Viktor met Jayce halfway on the size of the wedding. If it were up to Viktor, he'd have it small enough to be in the backyard and have it there
Imagine that. The socialist sticking to his principles - until his bourgeoise, capitalist boyfriend has a say. Then he gets anxiety attacks over frosting and cake.
> They compromised at 50 guests
Now, had you read the first fic as I did, you'd learn that Jayce wasn't even liked by his fellow faculty members at all. If he's talking about his graduate cohort, it's still weird to invite people you don't actually know outside of a professional setting for an intimate event. Instead, Jayce for some reason loves everybody and wants to invite everybody even though he knows Viktor hates crowd. Some couple!
> But Jayce, Loris is a no-bullshit guy. No incidents like that at the bakery.
Give Viktor some weed and he'll be eating those cakes rather than destroying them. Still, I find it fucking ridiculous that he had a mental breakdown over how the cake tastes. How autistic can you get?
> It makes him start to think of their battery
The same battery you got back miraculously due to a company's collapse, even though you already sold the rights to said battery? You must've had some good lawyers.
> Carbon nanotubes and making changes to the cathode's catalyst layer
Now, you can tell this girl is Googling stuff and picking up terms that sound the most science-y to her. What she doesn't realize is that there is a market for advanced cathodes for said electric vehicles, and one of the issues are the cost and poor power output of these devices. But no...they're aiming to use the same tech and processes as a home microwave, and they're still sucking at it.
> It's not necessarily in his wheelhouse of skills, but he needs to give him something, at least
How about some dick?
> Jayce is so good to him, so expressive
I still don't like this sentence.
> His therapist asked him all sorts of invasive questions, which he did not appreciate, even if it was the point
...That literally the point. You can get your gaslighting, neurotic soon-to-be husband into therapy, but you can't? You should be opposed to it on the basis of Big Pharma, anyways, but noooooooo.
> Focusing a bit too aggressively on a very contrived, very heterosexual love triangle between three equally insufferable characters
The author is trying to be tongue in cheek here, but it comes off as breathlessly arrogant. This is an author who wrote a massively contrived, idiotic as fuck fic where the two mains are neurotic, insufferable characters who broke up because one of them sold out his rights when the other thought he was dying. That entire plot point was dropped and not a single one of those 8k comments pointed that out.
I would not say this is a moment of self-awareness or self-mockery, but one of those, 'See? I can write better stories than those trashy heterosexual pulp books. Aren't I better?' This bitch really needs some humility- and a goddamn mirror.
> A more porous diaphragm could -
Then it's not going to absorb the material. This is your air filtration project, right? Invest more on more nanoparticle output.
> If she doesn't get her priorities straight soon, I'm going to turn this whole thing off
Wish I could say the same. Masochism pushes me forward.
> It is not, in fact, 'just getting good'
Funny, I could say the same about your work, Beth.
> He's sure Jayce will take anything Viktor will give him
Even your dick?
> Better not find out anyway
Shame. I want to see it unfold. See that 'contrived heterosexual romance' fall to pieces.
> It has too many amenities to call a hotel, but it doesn't seem luxurious enough to call it a resort
It has private cabins, private whirlpools and springs, and a mountain view. It's a fucking resort.
> Who is he to take a break when he could be using his time to better lives?
He objectively hasn't improved anyone's lives. I don't know what patents he has developed, what inventions he has invented, which people he has helped. By their own admission, their scrubbers won't be out for years (despite said tech already existing; it's the electrical components and power output and catalyst layers that can be improved), etc. All he's done is teach. WHAT, exactly, has he done?
> A cozy living area with a fireplace and a slightly too large sectional sofa, and a little deck out back with a hot tub
Yeah that's a resort, buddy. That ain't no hotel.
> He can tell Jayce has the mind to explore, but Viktor is sore and tired
I thought he got PTSD from the snow? Now he wants to go exploring? Make it make sense.
>Jayce's touch can feel so consuming; electrifying yet soothing at the same time
> Jayce sits at the edge of the bed, and runs a hand through his hair
> How did they not bring pencils? They must have hundreds
This guy is allergic to pens because what? It's an American thing? You can get a fancy ink pen from France like ye olde days or get an inkwell. Motherfucker doesn't even have a MECHANICAL pencil, what a rube!
> Thinks, and thinks, and thinks, and -
Me too, man, me too.
> Viktor supposes the woman felt like she had quite the handsome knight in shining armor. He tries not to let that settle strangely in him
A random woman exists and you're already acting petty because she dared ask for help. Who the fuck are you?
> Comforting. Warm.
Stuff. Thangs.
> Hydrogels themselves
I pointed this out in the prior fic, but Beth here has no idea how hydrogels work. They are mostly used in biomedical engineering and environmental engineering, not as batteries. She is confusing the tech for her static scrubbers for a replacement for the combustion engine.
> But this is what they do
And apparently you can't tell the difference between said combustion engine and what a hydrogel is because it's the wrong application. You're fusing two different technologies together! Not to mention, these batteries were supposed to operate on bacteria before it was retconned to algae, two separate kingdoms!
> What we do can't be all we are, or we'll go insane
You already drove your would-be husband insane by having him have a mental breakdown over a goddamn cake. Maybe it's time to take a look in the mirror.
> But if Viktor isn't devoting every second to it, he feels like a waste
What were you doing for most of your life in the previous fic? Sitting around and bitching and moaning about a guy who sold you out and ruined your life. This man literally did NOTHING and still thinks he's helping people. He couldn't even fight the cops, FFS.
> Dotted with so many stars they seem to take up more of the room than the empty space; faded stars and bright ones (still reads weird because it feels like an incomplete sentence)
> He never understood how the night sky makes people feel small
OK, this is a retcon of what the author wrote in her prior fic. Viktor always wanted to see the night sky and worked tirelessly to invent tech that would clean Zaun's air so he could see it. There was an entire plot point about how Jayce hoped to clean said air with him so he could 'see his soulmate in the moon'. Funny how I can remember all that, and the author, who created it, doesn't.
>a silky soft
Either it's 'silky soft' or 'a silky smoothness'. Pick one.
> The heat and gentle pressure
...? OK? This seems incomplete?
> Opinions on the papers of their peers into conversations about death and legacy
You're not going to lecture about medical costs and how you bitched at Mel for daring to pay for the experimental medicine that saved your life and allowed you to exist thus far? Strange, that.
> Like I'll never do a 'net good'
He didn't. He sold out Viktor's side of the patent because 'it was in his contract' to do so, and Viktor rightfully hated him for it. Instead of a proper confrontation, Jayce never actually addresses his privileges or the consequences of his actions; Viktor did and does all the emotional labour and was expected to forgive him by Jayce's family and peers. It's pretty twisted when you look at it critically.
> They only get out of the tub hours later, near two in the morning
> Jayce is the first to wake, but he's right in front of Viktor, asleep on his side
> Viktor stares, studies the strong curves of his face
> Like looking at the Milky Way from his little spot on Earth
Too bad an asteroid can't be hurled your way to cure your neuroticism.
> Viktor tries to catalog this sight like he would a breakthrough; stores it and preserves it.
> He looks almost gold where the sunlight hits it, messy and misshapen
Jayce's hair is nearly black, so that light must be strong as hell to make it go gold.
> He is a scholar, he has written thousands and thousands of words on subjects most people couldn't even begin to understand
Despite that, you haven't improved anyone's lives with your genius. Not a single one.
> How much research he had to do
Nice lampshading.
> The very idea makes his heart rate pick up. Husband, Husband. Not yet
Eight months, and hopefully you won't knock over the cake this time.
> Oh um, he just gushed about you the whole time
And Viktor automatically hated your guts because his man dared help a dirty woman.
> He's. Been. Working
Uh oh, drama alert! The man telling him not to work has been working, the hypocrite!
> Viktor doesn't know if he should be enraged or feel terrible for the man
That's the entire struggle session in the first fic. And it should always be the first point. That is a necessary reaction.
> Freshly showered with a towel around his waist, hair still dripping. Some water he didn't catch drips down his chest, that lovely soft stomach and to -
In the previous fic, all Jayce had to do was give Viktor doe eyes to get him to do whatever he wanted and drop any and all grudges. In this one, it's him showing off his body. How shallow do you have to be just to be swayed by a good looking body and a dick?
> smirk gone
Uh oh, someone didn't capitalize, here.
> You...Jayce Talis...have been working
Ellipses really do some heavy lifting here.
> He crumbles a bit, in a way Viktor really didn't expect; a way that chips away at his anger piece by piece
> I just...I couldn't help myself. I couldn't do it.
> Not at this, not when he understands his stress so intimately
So why is the man who gets PTSD over snow, going to a snowed-in resort, with a guy who gets PTSD over wedding cakes?
> Jayce nods fervently, almost comically
> His voice cracks, his eyes shining
> The nape of his neck, his lower back
And here we start with the spicy stuff.
> Viktor tries to catalog all he can see with more light: all those moles and divots and scars.
> Perhaps he's just being mean, but the way Jayce immediately tries to go pliant and breathes
> He takes his time, he takes a lot of time. Half sadistic, half-caring; every time Jayce tries to get more friction, Viktor steadies him
I will give the author this, out of all the shit that tanks her work and skills, she doesn't use the typical 'bottom Viktor' and 'top Jayce' thing, but makes them switches. Too often Viktor is the stereotypical moody bottom who 'needs' Jayce to fuck him to keep him happy. Here, they both top and bottom, which does introduce a little bit of equality. The writing is still shit, but I can give credit where credit is due.
> Accepting the time he's taking, accepting what he's given
> He could do this to Jayce forever; unravel him, unwrap him, tease him, and give him more and more and more.
> I've been ready for like...15 minutes?
> Stay nice and still. He enters him slowly, the heat intoxicating. The sheer pleasure of it rolls through him like a wave. They have nowhere to be, nothing to concern themselves with.
> The oil from the massage gets all over Viktor's chest and stomach, messy and slick
Why does that remind me of crab meat for some reason?
> Completely safe
You know a woman wrote this when:
> There you go...close your eyes. Just focus on my voice.
> Viktor lets that hit him, let himself feel the weight of it
Too bad it doesn't hit the rational part of your brain. You're marrying a neurotic.
> He craves Jayce's pleasure so much that it's both feeding his own want and more important than it
This doesn't make sense at all. :He craves his pleasure so much' works fine on its own.
> Viktor gets an idea, a diabolical one
> Always, always...that's why I'm making you my husband
> Then he plops back down onto the mattress as if completely boneless
He was already laying on his back.
> Jayce looks like a wreck, panting like he just ran a marathon. His eyes are bloodshot, hair a mess.
> He almost feels in a trance with it, watching as his cheeks move under Viktor's touch. His eyelashes flutter, and he runs his fingers through Jayce's hair, trying to smooth it.
> All of this - you, here, the whole trip
> He pulls Jayce closer, because he made it difficult. He almost refused to go. He never would have done this for himself
You still found it within yourself to forgive a neurotic, so...anything is possible, I guess.
Viktor hating saunas when hot tubs involve the same concept is not lost on me. Why does he hate saunas? Is it because he has to wear a towel, or sit on a painful wooden bench? Just write that!
> The water feels incredible - warm and welcoming.
> How on earth did Talis rope you into it?
Gaslighting. Lots and lots of it. And a very nosey, needy Hispanic mother. And a lesbian half-Asian half-sister.
> No the fuck you didn't
Love how the author is trying to make me hate Grindr Greg here when I actually kinda like him. He's saying all the shit Viktor needs to hear; he's literally me but a rich gay man.
> Yes, actually...a tiger is what you're looking for
Both of them have stripes, you asswipe. Tasmanian tigers had them, too.
> I'm just saying, it's a surprise! I thought for sure you'd marry your career, but congrats Viktor
I'm surprised he doesn't bring up what happened between Jayce and Viktor for them to split in the first place. Spoiler: he never does.
> What has happened to this man? He seems...empty
You talking about your former fucktoy or yourself, buddy?
> Do I know you?
Yes, he met him at the restaurant when Viktor was using Greg as a tool to make Jayce jealous.
> It's all ridiculous behaviour. Jayce is a renowned inventor. He's in his mid-30s
If these people actually acted like rational, decent men we wouldn't be there. They are just bitchy gay men diving headlong into the Wall without realizing it.
> Why would you be so childish about a man who I used to sleep with in grad school?
I seem to recall you weaponizing this man in that restaurant as a means to make Jayce jealous after his mama's attempts to get you two together didn't work just yet. It is 100% childish indeed, and I don't think the author knows how men work in general. These people are just stereotypical gay drama queens.
> Jayce has nothing to be jealous of
Clearly he is, because he's afraid of Grindr Greg and his plans to steal his cake-destroying hubby-to-be away. Funny how they focus more on this than the actual crimes Jayce committed against Viktor. Yes, selling away someone's patent against their knowledge can land you in court.
> I gave you the idea to see someone that night, which was the opposite of what I wanted to happen.
> I'm fairly deep in the bottle, and Sky comes in looking for you...Remember, I was young, drunk, and very upset. And I told her, 'Sky, he's gay. He doesn't like you that way. Give it a rest'.
This poor girl. It doesn't have to be JUST Mel, who was the biggest Black Bitch in the previous fic. Sky has to be humiliated because that white dick only gets turned on by fellow dicks. Good on her for talking back to him, though.
> Stoooooop
Stop fucking talking like you're on TikTok. You're in your mid-30s. You aren't a 'cool kid' anymore.
> Jayce and Sky always seemed a bit at odds in a way he couldn't place until they randomly became friendly
Just a sprinkle of that race war, eh? All that for white cock. Damn, that really does make the world go round, eh?
> They go on a scenic drive, where Jayce takes pictures of everything.
> There's a moose outside
Moose don't traverse high altitudes. If you're that high up where you can see the Northern Lights, you would likely see elk or caribou.
> Viktor talks about green hydrogen
Funny how this is the one tech that actually makes sense, vs using hydrogels for the wrong purpose and using outdated static scrubber tech where the weaknesses and limitations of said tech is where they can base their patent on. Someone must've given Beth a tip.
> It's a beautiful day despite the cold, one of the best he's ever had.
> Viktor laughs until his sides hurt, laughs until Jayce silences him with little pleading kisses.
> It's one of the first times he's felt joy without fear; joy without lingering suspicions of its futility.
You should still be suspicious, because this is the guy who ruined your life by stealing a patent while you were ill. I will never stop bringing that up because the author forgot that was a major plot point and the main foil for their relationship. It was the cause for their 'divorce' in the first place.
> He knows it'll return again like Mars is in orbit
Mars isn't in Earth's orbit.
> He knows they'll tend to each other in the meantime; that his bed will never be cold.
>He feared Jayce would get upset; beg him to change his mind
A lot of this universe is based on Viktor not wanting to upset Jayce when Jayce is the fuckup. Funny how that works.
> A little sad but still genuine
Why is he sad? It's the Current Year. People don't need to take on patronymic lineages. Spanish people use both the names of their mother AND father, you uncultured swine.
> Viktor doesn't need to be a Talis
Note the use of the word NEED vs 'want'. Viktor NEEDS to take that last name because otherwise he will never be part of that family or lineage; him refusing it would be him sticking to his roots and Jayce does not like that. His name carries weight and Viktor's doesn't - just look at how the publishing world treats the two of them. IF Viktor even publishes, that is.
> The ridiculous cartoon cats
I thought they were loaves of bread and the caption was, 'You are all I knead'?
> Yes, though I quite enjoyed last year.
> Jayce was a nervous wreck, and it made Viktor feel oddly cared for.
Can you not take care of yourself, or do you need to base your entire life around a neurotic piece of shit? It's definitely the latter.
> Viktor wonders why sometimes you have to do less of what you love in order to keep loving it, but he understands a bit more now.
Well you are a workaholic; why would you ever take a break? The few times you take breaks you smash cake displays, so it might be better if you stick to your job.
> He remembers the characters were in an office, and they were not happy about it.
Was it 'The Office'? How the turns have tabled.
> He hates social media. He's never on it, but it appears Jayce wants to show him off regardless.
That sounds like something that was never properly communicated to your partner. Besides, even if you DO hate social media, he is an inventor and professor so he has to have a LinkedIn. Everyone has an Internet footprint, even (and especially!) hypocritical leftists.
> The other photos make him tighten all over each time.
> Jayce had a panic attack and almost fell into the fountain in the hotel lobby
These people have panic attacks so much I wonder if the author is even capable of writing normal, stable people. 'Cringe' is the nicest word I'd use for them; 'fucking pathetic' is what I'd use on a normal day. They're just a thinly veiled excuse for the author to project her mental illnesses on, and it shows.
> Looks like he's on stimulants (more than what's prescribed)
So he's a hopeless depressive fuck who only gets interesting when you give him the good shit like ketamine and meth - and the former can actually be used to treat the worst forms of depression. Jayce himself does appear to be a guy who'd take it, so go for it. (But the author won't, because hard drugs are a big no-no; we're good girls here.)
> This was one of the best days of his life, right before everything changed.
That was also the day Vi couldn't stop mocking Viktor for being a sap, and the day when Ximena basically egged him to forgive Jayce. Viktor never forgave Jayce on his own; he was forced to do it by other people. That's what makes this so shallow.
> He remembers waking up on Jayce's shoulder, feeling for a moment like it was completely normal before remembering their circumstance.
"We're supposed to be enemies but we're wearing ugly sweaters? OMG Besties!!!"
> Like something had shifted; like he was done hiding, or maybe he just couldn't anymore.
Done hiding not from his crimes against Viktor, but because he 'saw his soulmate in the moon' (this was real, btw) and went full puppy-dog eyes on him.
> Pulled in by something bigger than themselves
Well asteroids are chunks of rock thrown out of orbit to hit other planets; perhaps it's fitting that your destructive tendencies lend to your comparison to one.
> It's packed with couples; loud, dimly lit.
> Small lights hang around the windows, and there are roses on every table. There's candlelight and soothing piano.
I thought this was a hotel and not a resort, but they have entire towns with restaurants like this? Lmao.
> Staring at him like he put the earth into orbit himself
So he's blinding like the sun?
> Yes, yes! Oh my God, Viktor. Senselessly.
I hate how these people talk. They don't even sound like men, but YAAAAAAAAS KWEEEEEN audience members on Dress to Impress.
> He tells Viktor of his mother's various ex-boyfriends with a hint of disdain
Eh? A Catholic woman taking random men home without marrying them? Blasphemy.
> Desert
She still confuses 'dessert' with 'desert'.
> Not a complete truth. Really, he just wanted to see Jayce squirm
OK, that's a lie. That woman openly called you Jayce's husband because she assumed you were, and that was because Jayce couldn't stop talking about Viktor. Not only did the author forget what she wrote earlier, she's saying it's a lie when it clearly was not. He definitely was not squirming when that random woman called him Jayce's husband, btw.
> A little flustered but mostly content, his shoulders relaxed and his smile easy.
> He...he doesn't get it. He doesn't get why this is so bad.
First it was the mental breakdown over the wedding cakes, and now it's a mental breakdown over a Valentine's Day card. He is freaking out more over that than he did Jayce stabbing him in the back and selling out his half of the patent while he was ill and under duress. Priorities.
> I couldn't sense how much you needed a break. I wasn't in tune with it at all
Uh, you could tell he was stressed? You were stressed? He nearly died (your words, not mine) after falling off the roof trying to fix a leak? You didn't want a break because you felt like you could be servicing (lol) others with your time and effort? You weren't 'in tune' because you were a workaholic, not because you were ignorant.
> With the wife
Ah, there's that comparison of the token heterosexual dream and the true and honest gay love. They still end up with the house and the white picket fence. How socialist.
> No, listen. You didn't know I needed a break this badly
Remember how he was being sketchy with the laptop? Jayce was the one who planned this entire trip and tricked Viktor into going. Why is he making it seem as if it's Viktor's fault?
> You say it to me every time you kiss me...or when you hold me in bed, or when you make me my favourite soup with just the right amount of spice.
> Viktor would have found it deeply condescending not two years ago
It's still condescending, mostly because the author is trying to convince the audience that their breakup wasn't as serious as it actually was. Hell, not even Beth herself remembers.
> And - look at me
> It's amazing how much weight someone can carry without realizing it
As I've said before, note how it's Viktor, not Jayce, who has to do all the emotional labour around here. He feels pressured to take Jayce's name and Jayce's lineage without keeping his own, which really begs the question of whether the author remembers Viktor's socialist bent and why he even believes in this ancient cultural practice anyways. Why should he feel pressured, when JAYCE was the one who wanted him back?
> Hey - for real!
> Viktor's come to realize over the past year that he can't make everything about what he does and does not deserve
Funny, the moment you stopped prioritizing that is when you lost your agency and became a literal cocksucker for this man. Incredible how this man became a wet towel as soon as Jayce fluttered his eyelashes. If Viktor was a woman, everyone would be calling this out for how toxic it is.
> You're treating it like you're going to get a grade, or some sort of fucked up peer review
> He won't be judged
This entire fic is about you being judged, homie. You can write whatever you like, but you can't SAY whatever you like.
> He's clearly excited about the gifts - he has his on the coffee table.
> I am sorry I cannot show more enthusiasm for color schemes and cakes
Reminder that Jayce is the one who wanted a big party and a big guest list; Viktor did not. Viktor wanted a private ceremony and Jayce overruled his wishes. Funny how that doesn't get brought up as a character flaw but as a 'quirky' thing that Jayce is so good on.
> I am aware that the gravitational pull of a black hole is relatively small
...black holes THEMSELVES are small - their gravitational pull is not. They are among the densest things in the universe; they are so dense light itself cannot escape. This girl could not even Google basic facts about space, ffs.
And there's that bit about the multiverse and the 'you and I meet in every timeline' bullshit. Canonically this isn't true - they do not meet in the timeline where Vi dies and Overton confirms this - and even in this one it is better if they didn't meet at all. Jayce, again, was the one who ruined Viktor's life and he never faced consequences for it. Instead, he emotionally manipulates his way out of it, which you will see below.
> He's afraid to give it to him, but at least it's done - at least he has something.
> It's five pages long
Jesus Christ.
Now, Jayce here says he doesn't like to think of the years Viktor was away and said nothing because he didn't want to upset him, but then goes right into a tangent into how it upset him and ruined his life. Me, me, me. He never once considered how Viktor would feel about having his own patent stolen from him as a co-inventor and being fucked over while he was ill - he just goes ' Whoops, sorry about that, have you thought about how I was so sad and cried about your absence?' It's the most selfish thing I've ever read, and people in the comments were crying and shitting themselves over this. It's incredibly manipulative.
> It gave me the thought to invent scrubby
That tech already existed - you just stole it and made a shittier copy.
> It gave me time to understand why you had to go
No, it didn't. You never addressed that. Viktor doesn't bring it up, either; in the main fic, he blames Mel instead for daring to pay for his medical treatment. She gets all the heat while Jayce, who stole his invention, gets loved in return. The gall of this author.
> I smelled your hair when you walked past me
That's weird, bro. You betray him and THAT is the first thing you think of?
> I know you and I don't see eye to eye on multiverses, but I feel I'm with you in every universe
Oh, fuck you. Maybe Vi should have died in this one after all to spare us this Godawful sappy writing.
> They said the same thing in their cards, the exact same concept
OMG THEY WERE SOULMATES ALL ALONG!
>You are my sun, moon, and stars
I need Khal Drogo to come in here with some boiling gold stat, so Jayce can get a golden crown for that cringe.
> To have my inventions change lives
They don't; in fact, their batteries in their cars are causing accidents that have killed up to four people. So no, you've actually TAKEN lives rather than improved them.
> His hands are shaking. He needs him right now, so badly.
> He laughs. It sounds wet, like he's on the verge of tears
When are they not?
> He pointedly looks at his hands, notices a frayed edge of one of his fingernails. He tries to stop his heart from racing.
> It feels like minutes pass, but he's sure it's less than.
> I uhh - I promise I didn't read yours
Didn't he already read his card? He made a whole show of it.
> Before Viktor knows what's happening, they're colliding
They do this twice, btw.
> He's insatiable, he's all over him
> Of course, it's okay - it's Jayce.
> Jayce is the one who taught him how to forgive
This is what pisses me off - that 'taught him' part. Viktor had no reason to forgive Jayce and Jayce did not EARN his forgiveness; Viktor was the one who had to go through the trials and tribulations of accepting a man who fucked him over and objectively ruined his life. HE had to do the emotional labour and HE was the one who had to be convinced by others because Jayce felt bad and probably would have killed himself. It was never about centering Viktor's emotions, but Jayce's.
> ...too ill to breathe without help, who know rests his head on Viktor's chest before they fall asleep just to remind himself he's alive
Maybe it would have been better if he was dead, after all.
> Jayce has never been openly ravenous - not rough, but not soft.
> Jayce groans and stands back to take off his pants, giving Viktor time to do the same
I swear, this bitch's allergy to commas is going to kill me.
> Wanna be - wanna be close
God, I hate this dialogue so much.
> Viktor nods; same with him. (Why is this repeated?)
> ...pulling him closer, feeling the heat of Jayce's breath on his cheek
> So sweet, always so, so sweet
> Jayce knows, ruthlessly now, the exact spots he needs to reach to give him the most pleasure
> Jayce looks at him, nodding frantically
> The position is so deep, so intimate. He gasps the stretch
I suppose one consolation is that the smut isn't that graphic. Imagine if it really was a balls-to-the-wall fucking with that dialogue.
> Viktor's never felt more alive, more human, more stripped of pretense and laid bare
You had your entire character stripped for a good dicking. How about them apples?
> Viktor puts his thumb on Jayce's lower lip and dips it into Jayce's mouth, just to see how eagerly Jayce welcomes it
I swear, this woman needs an editor. I am metaphorically running out of red Sharpies for this.
> Viktor moves with him, taking his thumb out of Jayce's mouth and wraps an arm around the back of his neck
> He rolls his hips until he finds the perfect angle, until Jayce is brushing up against that spot inside him
> He kisses away the salt, but Jayce doesn't mind. Not one bit.
> Viktor feels the heat of their mingling breaths between them, of their bodies
> He's in a stellar collision, fusing and melting - before slowly coming down.
This is the third use of 'collision' I've read.
> He wants Jayce to take him still, wants Jayce to use him. Jayce kisses him, rocks into him. It's so, so much. But it's him - and it's always so much.
She should have hired me as her beta. I would have fixed this.
> They've never felt anything quite like that, quite as open or unguarded. It's as if something's been unlocked, opened up for them
Would it be the cake shop they ruined?
For the love of God, merge your sentences together. I am at the end of my rope.
> Afraid of underwhelm, ashamed how much something so childish could mean to him
> It's not the brilliant vibrancy one might experience at higher latitudes
THE NORTHERN LIGHTS ARE EASIER TO SEE AT HIGHER LATITUDES, YOU DUMB FUCK
> When Viktor was a boy, he dreamed of an open sky, of fresh air, of living in a world he could help shape for the better
This was established in the prior fic, and was buttressed between Jayce's speech on how he could find his soulmate in the moon and Viktor was his soulmate and how cleaner air in Zaun would make it easier to always find his soulmate. As for Viktor actually improving the lives of others...that remains to be proven. He's objectively never saved or improved anyone's lives, aside from fucking random gay men and being gaslit into accepting the man who destroyed his dreams.
> The kind of sight one might remember on their deathbed, multiple dreams in one view
I am not getting over Beth here not knowing that the Northern Lights are more visible at higher latitudes. Really, nigga?
> Partly because he's cold, but mostly because it's him
> Saying it doesn't feel hard
So it was hard the other times you said it? Did you feel guilt tripped into saying it? Do you not actually love this man, as it was based on deception and gaslighting from a pushy Hispanic mama and a nosey Hapa half-sister? That would actually make for some interesting drama, but no. We get an 18k word fic on Valentine's Day cards, a resort that isn't a resort, panic attacks in cake shops, and a socialist who got bullied into having a big wedding against his will. Very, very bourgeoise. And very cringe, thank you author!
> He doesn't feel fixed. Perhaps he never needed to be
You're alive because of Mel, you dumb fuck. Maybe it would have spared everyone here if you took your socialist leanings to heart and just died. Your fellow Czechs would be pleased that you were gone. And I don't think anyone here appreciates the 'you're beautiful because of your cancer'
theme you still chose to keep from the show. Give it a rest already.
TL;DR Viktor has a mental breakdown over Valentine's day cards, has another breakdown in a cake shop, is bullied into having a big wedding he doesn't want, and this relationship is still being sold as nice and wholesome despite being based around gaslighting and neuroticism. Also, Jayce is seeing Larry the Therapist, is on meds - and stimulants! - and the author doesn't know how the gravity of black holes work or that the Northern Lights are visible at higher latitudes. Still gets hundreds of bookmarks and comments and legions of people crying and shitting themselves at the 'beautiful romance'.
Beth, AKA queercatfan, still writes in her Strangulation Sentence style, and reminds me of this kid:
There are quite a few problems I have with this. One is that she is known (through personal experiment) to delete any and all negative comments, as she hovers over her email like a hawk. She will delete said comments within minutes of seeing them, and then block you. Second, she admitted in her original work that she did no research and 'cannot be bothered to', especially in regards to business or science, and then has the gall to say that she is 'growing' on this 'silly archive'.
You do not grow when you block and delete critical comments. Before S2 came out, this fic had maybe 100 or so bookmarks, and now it has over 8k. She gained around 3k Twitter followers (before said in the end author's note that she 'doesn't hang out there much anymore', which is a lie) and is one of the larger Twitter accounts belonging to a popular AO3 author. She became famous here for her 'Strangulation Sentence Structure', where she could not fuse related sentences together, giving the appearance the the characters were choking while speaking. This happened throughout her fic, and no one but myself ever commented on it or noticed it. It is clear her editing leaves much to be desired.
Lastly, she makes a note on how she may write characters OOC and that it's 'okay to be cringe' and that it is freeing - just don't apply that same mentality to her. Call her cringe and she just might cry.
For now, I'll be addressing this monster of an epilogue, and it will be divided into sections for easier reading. Let's see if she ever fixed her Strangulation Sentences, or if they remained the same.
Just as a summary: her previous fic was a masterclass in gaslighting and emotional manipulation. Jayce sold out Viktor's IP against his will and consent, while he was terminally ill, and then 'won him back' thanks to the incessant demands of his mother and Caitlyn. Viktor eventually relents, they make up, and they, the true and honest socialists, find a nice house with a white picket fence to fuck in.
For a recap: Viktor in this series is the all-too-aware socialist who hates capitalism while working for a private university while patenting inventions he later never sells. This line just confirms what I already knew: despite claiming to be the all-knowing socialist who is aware of class issues, he's really just a shut-in who can't deal with other people. Which is a perfectly fine character flaw on its own - in this case, though, it just makes him look more like a Redditor than an actual person. The classic, 'I support the working class but ew don't fucking touch me you dirty redneck' trope.
> Amber and vanilla
Nice, where'd he get the amber from?
> Stars don't start as black holes
They become black holes at the end of their life. Are you a black hole, son? It would explain why you drain the life out of everyone.
> Impeccable etiquette. A phony way of speaking and behaving. Polished, prim, and proper
I regret to inform you that Beth is still fucking writing like this, which means that I have to do the editing job for her and fix her sentences so they can become more legible. If I wrote like this, even here, people would be asking why the fuck I was typing like a sped.
> Viktor had only the brains
Viktor absolutely has charisma; he's actually a little shit in the canon. He knows his worth; he just doesn't like presenting it in front of huge crowds as he believes he can spend that time working. I have always hated when authors strip away his natural charisma to make him look more of a victim, and there's no bigger culprit than this bitch right here.
> Vitkor rarely thought in metaphor
Funny, so does the author.
> With every smile, every casual touch
This bitch is STILL allergic to commas and it is going to drive me nuts. She absolutely needs a hardline beta to tell her how bad it looks.
> It's just...you're kind of like...my best friend?
He's 25, not a teenager. I hated reading this in the main fic and I hate reading it here. It's just awful.
> So you...what? You have a hookup buddy?
The word you're looking for is 'Friends with Benefits'. And the person in question is Gregory, the physics TA - he was retconned to be an astrophysicist here - who was mentioned in the dinner scene in the previous fic and set off Jayce as a result.
> What
What indeed.
> He struggled to understand it: affection without expectation
You are going to see me autocorrect a lot of sentences, so bear with me. This curse still persists and Beth here has never once been told she's been doing it wrong.
> So is this one...Oh! These flowers...very nice...donations! Yes. The whales would appreciate this - if they had the sentience to.
Whales are sentient, as we are. The word you are looking for is 'self awareness'. AKA the mirror test.
> Let's see...Ah!
I already captured Heimerdinger's personality better in just a few sentences and I am shitposting. Pathetic.
> Bouquets, boxes of chocolates, gift baskets with wine and cheese
Literally how hard is it to use commas?
> The chocolates were from his casual sex partner, Gregory
This is the same Grindr Greg Jayce was willing to fight over, btw. Viktor, in the previous fic, kissed him and teased Jayce with him as a means to 'get back' at him. It was shitty then, it's shitty here.
> If life were far simpler, he could go up to Jayce right at that moment
Nothing is stopping you. Go for it. But we need the ~drama~
> Those big hands of his
Yes, the yaoi hands.
> Long
Beth still capitalizes random words and I have no idea why she does this. It's not even a proper noun, either.
> The Science
Excuse me, it's The Science TM. Respect Fauci, motherfucker.
> He couldn't do this, while being so tempted by such small, soft gestures
This author is also allergic to 'when, but, and' as well. Conjoining words are anathema to her.
> Never waning to stop for anything, Viktor admired that about him. He was always so dedicated
> The second Gregory went in for a kiss, Viktor immediately thought of how Jayce would kiss him
I am trying very hard to make this legible because this bitch is STILL ALLERGIC TO COMMAS, FUCK
> When Gregory put a hand on his waist, he couldn't help but think of how Jayce's hand would be bigger, gentler warmer
Bigger hands, bigger knives to stab you with. And all it takes to win you back is a pair of puppy eyes and a demanding abuela.
> A brilliant yet spoiled man from old money
He didn't sound so bad. He was a Grindr pickup, after all.
> He felt that black hole remain, heavy and ceaseless
You are a mood killer, that's for sure.
> Especially that night, especially when he kept thinking of -
> Gonna make you wear a fucking collar.
You see, sex talk, even dirty talk, sounds better when you don't add random fucking periods everywhere. You are one Regina that definitely needs to be knocked down a few pegs.
> No, don't be. I liked it. It was...hot, that's all.
Look at that. I'm making them sound like normal people.
> He just needed an out. He didn't know where: out of this city, back in the lab, into a shower.
> Who's they, Viktor? There's no they. There's no grand conspiracy against you!
> Ugh, you're so...ugh!
Stop acting like a moody teenage girl. You are a grown ass man. Don't make me toss that wine bottle over your head.
> Viktor did not look at him, and could not see the expression on Jayce's face
Yeah, because you aren't looking at him. It's obvious Jayce is drunk here, and saying things that he doesn't mean to say - but alcohol is also a truth serum of sorts. Will this get addressed? Yes and no.
> Jayce would cut him out of his life for this
Why? You weren't in the wrong. He was. He was drunk and said stupid shit. You were far more clear-headed despite drinking whisky. Jayce is just a moody bitch - and always has been.
> Because Jayce was so tall it made him feel uneasy
Jayce is 6'2, but these fics make it seem as if he's 6'7 as a means to get him towering over Viktor for that size difference tag. He's big, but come on.
> Jayce got ugly last night. Viktor also got ugly
Jayce started it, Viktor ended it. Don't drink in the lab, homie.
> And I completely took it out on you
Indeed you did. You're not a happy drunk, are you?
> I took a very reasonable concern of yours - about being respected - and I belittled it.
You should have hired me as your editor. I'd need a fuckton of red Sharpies for the amount of shit I'm finding.
> Oh. Umm I'm sorry
Stop with the uh umm uhhh uhhhh it makes you sound like a knuckledragger. Are you a human? Act like it.
> Viktor got the distinct impression that if he tried talking, he would cry
Whatever the fuck for? Jayce was the one who got drunk and said that shit, not him. HE was the one who was jealous. Why does Viktor have to do all the emotional labour for him?
> I think it's good to talk about things. I want to remember. I want to learn
Learn not to drink around sharp objects, you mutt.
> But apologies were hard; they were also an admission of being wrong. Being right about most things was all he really had
You admitted you were wrong about Jayce right in the beginning. Jesus, these characters are absolutely neurotic and I hate them.
> It starts to pour rain because it's incredibly warm out - in February
Jeez, take me there. I'm buried in two feet of snow.
> Not sickening at all, nope.
I hate this 'quirky and relatable' type of writing. You are not on TikTok. Shut up.
> Dude, I've seen worse. Besides, I got my free samples.
Wanna know why he has cake on his pants? The reasons will shock you:
> he gets so overwhelmed that he forgets how to act human
I'll say. Viktor has a panic attack in a cake shop because he cannot differentiate the flavours and knocks the display case over. He's that much of an absolute fuck-up and social pariah he does shit even most autists dread to do in real life. This is meant to be funny and relatable, but honestly sounds like a skit out of American Pie. It's someone who literally cannot function in society that they freak out over cake tasting for a wedding that doesn't even need to have a venue. You can have a private ceremony, you know.
Wedding venues are a pain in the ASS to book; any wedding planner can and will tell you this. You sometimes need to plan a year in advanced. If you don't want a fancy cake, bake one yourself, or consider recipes you know you'll like. Wedding cakes are expensive as hell; one has to wonder why a so-called socialist is so anal on something as 'traditional' and 'Western' as a wedding. Rules for thee but not for me.
> He walks up to Viktor. Opens his mouth, closes it.
Is he Billy Bass, now? Is he gonna sing me a tune?
> I was horrible at the bakery. I'm so sorry.
If you can't handle yourself in public, and smashed a display case you won't be paying for, because you're a good socialist, then stay home. Bake the cake yourself.
> Dram
*Drama. Get a fucking beta.
> His butterfly project with Jinx has hit a safety snag
Because the concept itself is not 'safe'. She created butterfly drones that can shut down weapons - though how they manage to shut down gas powered weapons is not said or explained (I don't even think Beth knows how guns work AT ALL) - that was going to be bought by Mel's company for weaponization purposes. No shit it's going to hit a snag!
> Their new battery design is failing its tests because they haven't been able to properly design the cathode
Skill issue. Literal skill issue. These are supposed to be geniuses and yet they can't seem to use the Internet when it exists in this world. They just got their patent for said battery back - and now they don't know how their own fucking technology works. The actual worldbuilding for this universe is God awful and God forbid you are a sperg like me who likes additional details. It all comes apart once you actually pay attention.
> The vet bill made him want to set the clinic ablaze
Look at that, the socialist wants to destroy shit because his pet ate some copper wiring. Get a better job; and why don't you have pet insurance, buddy? Too bourgeoise? Why didn't you take it to the animal hospital on campus?
> The colour schemes and the cakes and the venue seem ridiculous
So? You don't need to have a venue at all. Marry in a court and have a private party. You're having a panic attack because the fucking cakes taste the same. Calm the fuck down.
> He's still found things to be upset about
Me too. I did have a chuckle at Jayce 'nearly dying' after falling off the roof - IIRC, it's barely two stories, and my man tried to fix it without a watcher on the ladder. Skill issue.
> We need to get our roof fixed
Don't do it in bad weather, and have a spotter by the ladder. How big is your goddamn roof, anyways?
> Larry, his therapist
Of course we have basic bitch soyboy LARRY being the therapist. Of course Jayce needs therapy - my man stabbed by boy Viktor in the face and faced no consequences. Are we going to get some treatment for the serial narcissist here?
> Which tangentially means he feels the same about Viktor, seeing their work and lives are the same
> Surprisingly, Jayce doesn't seem to want to go to bed with him
Uh oh. Trouble in paradise already? You already fucked twice and proposed marriage. What else is wrong? Is Jayce watching porn?
> The man is entitled to his privacy
If he's being sneaky, chances are he's a cheater. He may still be into that brown sugar.
> Viktor suddenly feels horrible for rejecting this idea of a break
Viktor apologizes a LOT, especially for Jayce's mistakes and attitude. Not only is he the stand-in for the emotional labour, he has to be the support and unconditional love both for a man who sold him out because 'his contract demanded it.'
Why is 'volunteering' capitalized?
> Cozy
Oh God, are we gonna see the Ralphamale in TV?
> The next few days, hell, they might even get as far down as here."
> Surely you know that the northern lights are incredibly hard to predict
While this is true, they CAN be tracked if you are following NOAA or solar activity, which is what Jayce is doing. The Kp index is what measures geomagnetic activity; the author would know had she done her research. Looks like I'm the one doing the heavy lifting for her.
> He gets horribly bored
No way, man. Same!
> It's...well. It's terrible
Nice lampshading.
> They laugh and make snide comments
Funny, that's exactly what I'm doing to you.
> Can we pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeease take a picture?
Can you pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeease shut the fuck up?
> They say things like 'slay' and 'awww'
Fucking hell, we've already got teenage IG models on this trip!
> Viktor met Jayce halfway on the size of the wedding. If it were up to Viktor, he'd have it small enough to be in the backyard and have it there
Imagine that. The socialist sticking to his principles - until his bourgeoise, capitalist boyfriend has a say. Then he gets anxiety attacks over frosting and cake.
> They compromised at 50 guests
Now, had you read the first fic as I did, you'd learn that Jayce wasn't even liked by his fellow faculty members at all. If he's talking about his graduate cohort, it's still weird to invite people you don't actually know outside of a professional setting for an intimate event. Instead, Jayce for some reason loves everybody and wants to invite everybody even though he knows Viktor hates crowd. Some couple!
> But Jayce, Loris is a no-bullshit guy. No incidents like that at the bakery.
Give Viktor some weed and he'll be eating those cakes rather than destroying them. Still, I find it fucking ridiculous that he had a mental breakdown over how the cake tastes. How autistic can you get?
> It makes him start to think of their battery
The same battery you got back miraculously due to a company's collapse, even though you already sold the rights to said battery? You must've had some good lawyers.
> Carbon nanotubes and making changes to the cathode's catalyst layer
Now, you can tell this girl is Googling stuff and picking up terms that sound the most science-y to her. What she doesn't realize is that there is a market for advanced cathodes for said electric vehicles, and one of the issues are the cost and poor power output of these devices. But no...they're aiming to use the same tech and processes as a home microwave, and they're still sucking at it.
> It's not necessarily in his wheelhouse of skills, but he needs to give him something, at least
How about some dick?
> Jayce is so good to him, so expressive
I still don't like this sentence.
> His therapist asked him all sorts of invasive questions, which he did not appreciate, even if it was the point
...That literally the point. You can get your gaslighting, neurotic soon-to-be husband into therapy, but you can't? You should be opposed to it on the basis of Big Pharma, anyways, but noooooooo.
> Focusing a bit too aggressively on a very contrived, very heterosexual love triangle between three equally insufferable characters
The author is trying to be tongue in cheek here, but it comes off as breathlessly arrogant. This is an author who wrote a massively contrived, idiotic as fuck fic where the two mains are neurotic, insufferable characters who broke up because one of them sold out his rights when the other thought he was dying. That entire plot point was dropped and not a single one of those 8k comments pointed that out.
I would not say this is a moment of self-awareness or self-mockery, but one of those, 'See? I can write better stories than those trashy heterosexual pulp books. Aren't I better?' This bitch really needs some humility- and a goddamn mirror.
> A more porous diaphragm could -
Then it's not going to absorb the material. This is your air filtration project, right? Invest more on more nanoparticle output.
> If she doesn't get her priorities straight soon, I'm going to turn this whole thing off
Wish I could say the same. Masochism pushes me forward.
> It is not, in fact, 'just getting good'
Funny, I could say the same about your work, Beth.
> He's sure Jayce will take anything Viktor will give him
Even your dick?
> Better not find out anyway
Shame. I want to see it unfold. See that 'contrived heterosexual romance' fall to pieces.
> It has too many amenities to call a hotel, but it doesn't seem luxurious enough to call it a resort
It has private cabins, private whirlpools and springs, and a mountain view. It's a fucking resort.
> Who is he to take a break when he could be using his time to better lives?
He objectively hasn't improved anyone's lives. I don't know what patents he has developed, what inventions he has invented, which people he has helped. By their own admission, their scrubbers won't be out for years (despite said tech already existing; it's the electrical components and power output and catalyst layers that can be improved), etc. All he's done is teach. WHAT, exactly, has he done?
> A cozy living area with a fireplace and a slightly too large sectional sofa, and a little deck out back with a hot tub
Yeah that's a resort, buddy. That ain't no hotel.
> He can tell Jayce has the mind to explore, but Viktor is sore and tired
I thought he got PTSD from the snow? Now he wants to go exploring? Make it make sense.
>Jayce's touch can feel so consuming; electrifying yet soothing at the same time
> Jayce sits at the edge of the bed, and runs a hand through his hair
> How did they not bring pencils? They must have hundreds
This guy is allergic to pens because what? It's an American thing? You can get a fancy ink pen from France like ye olde days or get an inkwell. Motherfucker doesn't even have a MECHANICAL pencil, what a rube!
> Thinks, and thinks, and thinks, and -
Me too, man, me too.
> Viktor supposes the woman felt like she had quite the handsome knight in shining armor. He tries not to let that settle strangely in him
A random woman exists and you're already acting petty because she dared ask for help. Who the fuck are you?
> Comforting. Warm.
Stuff. Thangs.
> Hydrogels themselves
I pointed this out in the prior fic, but Beth here has no idea how hydrogels work. They are mostly used in biomedical engineering and environmental engineering, not as batteries. She is confusing the tech for her static scrubbers for a replacement for the combustion engine.
> But this is what they do
And apparently you can't tell the difference between said combustion engine and what a hydrogel is because it's the wrong application. You're fusing two different technologies together! Not to mention, these batteries were supposed to operate on bacteria before it was retconned to algae, two separate kingdoms!
> What we do can't be all we are, or we'll go insane
You already drove your would-be husband insane by having him have a mental breakdown over a goddamn cake. Maybe it's time to take a look in the mirror.
> But if Viktor isn't devoting every second to it, he feels like a waste
What were you doing for most of your life in the previous fic? Sitting around and bitching and moaning about a guy who sold you out and ruined your life. This man literally did NOTHING and still thinks he's helping people. He couldn't even fight the cops, FFS.
> Dotted with so many stars they seem to take up more of the room than the empty space; faded stars and bright ones (still reads weird because it feels like an incomplete sentence)
> He never understood how the night sky makes people feel small
OK, this is a retcon of what the author wrote in her prior fic. Viktor always wanted to see the night sky and worked tirelessly to invent tech that would clean Zaun's air so he could see it. There was an entire plot point about how Jayce hoped to clean said air with him so he could 'see his soulmate in the moon'. Funny how I can remember all that, and the author, who created it, doesn't.
>a silky soft
Either it's 'silky soft' or 'a silky smoothness'. Pick one.
> The heat and gentle pressure
...? OK? This seems incomplete?
> Opinions on the papers of their peers into conversations about death and legacy
You're not going to lecture about medical costs and how you bitched at Mel for daring to pay for the experimental medicine that saved your life and allowed you to exist thus far? Strange, that.
> Like I'll never do a 'net good'
He didn't. He sold out Viktor's side of the patent because 'it was in his contract' to do so, and Viktor rightfully hated him for it. Instead of a proper confrontation, Jayce never actually addresses his privileges or the consequences of his actions; Viktor did and does all the emotional labour and was expected to forgive him by Jayce's family and peers. It's pretty twisted when you look at it critically.
> They only get out of the tub hours later, near two in the morning
> Jayce is the first to wake, but he's right in front of Viktor, asleep on his side
> Viktor stares, studies the strong curves of his face
> Like looking at the Milky Way from his little spot on Earth
Too bad an asteroid can't be hurled your way to cure your neuroticism.
> Viktor tries to catalog this sight like he would a breakthrough; stores it and preserves it.
> He looks almost gold where the sunlight hits it, messy and misshapen
Jayce's hair is nearly black, so that light must be strong as hell to make it go gold.
> He is a scholar, he has written thousands and thousands of words on subjects most people couldn't even begin to understand
Despite that, you haven't improved anyone's lives with your genius. Not a single one.
> How much research he had to do
Nice lampshading.
> The very idea makes his heart rate pick up. Husband, Husband. Not yet
Eight months, and hopefully you won't knock over the cake this time.
> Oh um, he just gushed about you the whole time
And Viktor automatically hated your guts because his man dared help a dirty woman.
> He's. Been. Working
Uh oh, drama alert! The man telling him not to work has been working, the hypocrite!
> Viktor doesn't know if he should be enraged or feel terrible for the man
That's the entire struggle session in the first fic. And it should always be the first point. That is a necessary reaction.
> Freshly showered with a towel around his waist, hair still dripping. Some water he didn't catch drips down his chest, that lovely soft stomach and to -
In the previous fic, all Jayce had to do was give Viktor doe eyes to get him to do whatever he wanted and drop any and all grudges. In this one, it's him showing off his body. How shallow do you have to be just to be swayed by a good looking body and a dick?
> smirk gone
Uh oh, someone didn't capitalize, here.
> You...Jayce Talis...have been working
Ellipses really do some heavy lifting here.
> He crumbles a bit, in a way Viktor really didn't expect; a way that chips away at his anger piece by piece
> I just...I couldn't help myself. I couldn't do it.
> Not at this, not when he understands his stress so intimately
So why is the man who gets PTSD over snow, going to a snowed-in resort, with a guy who gets PTSD over wedding cakes?
> Jayce nods fervently, almost comically
> His voice cracks, his eyes shining
> The nape of his neck, his lower back
And here we start with the spicy stuff.
> Viktor tries to catalog all he can see with more light: all those moles and divots and scars.
> Perhaps he's just being mean, but the way Jayce immediately tries to go pliant and breathes
> He takes his time, he takes a lot of time. Half sadistic, half-caring; every time Jayce tries to get more friction, Viktor steadies him
I will give the author this, out of all the shit that tanks her work and skills, she doesn't use the typical 'bottom Viktor' and 'top Jayce' thing, but makes them switches. Too often Viktor is the stereotypical moody bottom who 'needs' Jayce to fuck him to keep him happy. Here, they both top and bottom, which does introduce a little bit of equality. The writing is still shit, but I can give credit where credit is due.
> Accepting the time he's taking, accepting what he's given
> He could do this to Jayce forever; unravel him, unwrap him, tease him, and give him more and more and more.
> I've been ready for like...15 minutes?
> Stay nice and still. He enters him slowly, the heat intoxicating. The sheer pleasure of it rolls through him like a wave. They have nowhere to be, nothing to concern themselves with.
> The oil from the massage gets all over Viktor's chest and stomach, messy and slick
Why does that remind me of crab meat for some reason?
> Completely safe
You know a woman wrote this when:
> There you go...close your eyes. Just focus on my voice.
> Viktor lets that hit him, let himself feel the weight of it
Too bad it doesn't hit the rational part of your brain. You're marrying a neurotic.
> He craves Jayce's pleasure so much that it's both feeding his own want and more important than it
This doesn't make sense at all. :He craves his pleasure so much' works fine on its own.
> Viktor gets an idea, a diabolical one
> Always, always...that's why I'm making you my husband
> Then he plops back down onto the mattress as if completely boneless
He was already laying on his back.
> Jayce looks like a wreck, panting like he just ran a marathon. His eyes are bloodshot, hair a mess.
> He almost feels in a trance with it, watching as his cheeks move under Viktor's touch. His eyelashes flutter, and he runs his fingers through Jayce's hair, trying to smooth it.
> All of this - you, here, the whole trip
> He pulls Jayce closer, because he made it difficult. He almost refused to go. He never would have done this for himself
You still found it within yourself to forgive a neurotic, so...anything is possible, I guess.
Viktor hating saunas when hot tubs involve the same concept is not lost on me. Why does he hate saunas? Is it because he has to wear a towel, or sit on a painful wooden bench? Just write that!
> The water feels incredible - warm and welcoming.
> How on earth did Talis rope you into it?
Gaslighting. Lots and lots of it. And a very nosey, needy Hispanic mother. And a lesbian half-Asian half-sister.
> No the fuck you didn't
Love how the author is trying to make me hate Grindr Greg here when I actually kinda like him. He's saying all the shit Viktor needs to hear; he's literally me but a rich gay man.
> Yes, actually...a tiger is what you're looking for
Both of them have stripes, you asswipe. Tasmanian tigers had them, too.
> I'm just saying, it's a surprise! I thought for sure you'd marry your career, but congrats Viktor
I'm surprised he doesn't bring up what happened between Jayce and Viktor for them to split in the first place. Spoiler: he never does.
> What has happened to this man? He seems...empty
You talking about your former fucktoy or yourself, buddy?
> Do I know you?
Yes, he met him at the restaurant when Viktor was using Greg as a tool to make Jayce jealous.
> It's all ridiculous behaviour. Jayce is a renowned inventor. He's in his mid-30s
If these people actually acted like rational, decent men we wouldn't be there. They are just bitchy gay men diving headlong into the Wall without realizing it.
> Why would you be so childish about a man who I used to sleep with in grad school?
I seem to recall you weaponizing this man in that restaurant as a means to make Jayce jealous after his mama's attempts to get you two together didn't work just yet. It is 100% childish indeed, and I don't think the author knows how men work in general. These people are just stereotypical gay drama queens.
> Jayce has nothing to be jealous of
Clearly he is, because he's afraid of Grindr Greg and his plans to steal his cake-destroying hubby-to-be away. Funny how they focus more on this than the actual crimes Jayce committed against Viktor. Yes, selling away someone's patent against their knowledge can land you in court.
> I gave you the idea to see someone that night, which was the opposite of what I wanted to happen.
> I'm fairly deep in the bottle, and Sky comes in looking for you...Remember, I was young, drunk, and very upset. And I told her, 'Sky, he's gay. He doesn't like you that way. Give it a rest'.
This poor girl. It doesn't have to be JUST Mel, who was the biggest Black Bitch in the previous fic. Sky has to be humiliated because that white dick only gets turned on by fellow dicks. Good on her for talking back to him, though.
> Stoooooop
Stop fucking talking like you're on TikTok. You're in your mid-30s. You aren't a 'cool kid' anymore.
> Jayce and Sky always seemed a bit at odds in a way he couldn't place until they randomly became friendly
Just a sprinkle of that race war, eh? All that for white cock. Damn, that really does make the world go round, eh?
> They go on a scenic drive, where Jayce takes pictures of everything.
> There's a moose outside
Moose don't traverse high altitudes. If you're that high up where you can see the Northern Lights, you would likely see elk or caribou.
> Viktor talks about green hydrogen
Funny how this is the one tech that actually makes sense, vs using hydrogels for the wrong purpose and using outdated static scrubber tech where the weaknesses and limitations of said tech is where they can base their patent on. Someone must've given Beth a tip.
> It's a beautiful day despite the cold, one of the best he's ever had.
> Viktor laughs until his sides hurt, laughs until Jayce silences him with little pleading kisses.
> It's one of the first times he's felt joy without fear; joy without lingering suspicions of its futility.
You should still be suspicious, because this is the guy who ruined your life by stealing a patent while you were ill. I will never stop bringing that up because the author forgot that was a major plot point and the main foil for their relationship. It was the cause for their 'divorce' in the first place.
> He knows it'll return again like Mars is in orbit
Mars isn't in Earth's orbit.
> He knows they'll tend to each other in the meantime; that his bed will never be cold.
>He feared Jayce would get upset; beg him to change his mind
A lot of this universe is based on Viktor not wanting to upset Jayce when Jayce is the fuckup.
Funny how that works.> A little sad but still genuine
Why is he sad? It's the Current Year. People don't need to take on patronymic lineages. Spanish people use both the names of their mother AND father, you uncultured swine.
> Viktor doesn't need to be a Talis
Note the use of the word NEED vs 'want'. Viktor NEEDS to take that last name because otherwise he will never be part of that family or lineage; him refusing it would be him sticking to his roots and Jayce does not like that. His name carries weight and Viktor's doesn't - just look at how the publishing world treats the two of them. IF Viktor even publishes, that is.
> The ridiculous cartoon cats
I thought they were loaves of bread and the caption was, 'You are all I knead'?
> Yes, though I quite enjoyed last year.
> Jayce was a nervous wreck, and it made Viktor feel oddly cared for.
Can you not take care of yourself, or do you need to base your entire life around a neurotic piece of shit? It's definitely the latter.
> Viktor wonders why sometimes you have to do less of what you love in order to keep loving it, but he understands a bit more now.
Well you are a workaholic; why would you ever take a break? The few times you take breaks you smash cake displays, so it might be better if you stick to your job.
> He remembers the characters were in an office, and they were not happy about it.
Was it 'The Office'? How the turns have tabled.
> He hates social media. He's never on it, but it appears Jayce wants to show him off regardless.
That sounds like something that was never properly communicated to your partner. Besides, even if you DO hate social media, he is an inventor and professor so he has to have a LinkedIn. Everyone has an Internet footprint, even (and especially!) hypocritical leftists.
> The other photos make him tighten all over each time.
> Jayce had a panic attack and almost fell into the fountain in the hotel lobby
These people have panic attacks so much I wonder if the author is even capable of writing normal, stable people. 'Cringe' is the nicest word I'd use for them; 'fucking pathetic' is what I'd use on a normal day. They're just a thinly veiled excuse for the author to project her mental illnesses on, and it shows.
> Looks like he's on stimulants (more than what's prescribed)
So he's a hopeless depressive fuck who only gets interesting when you give him the good shit like ketamine and meth - and the former can actually be used to treat the worst forms of depression. Jayce himself does appear to be a guy who'd take it, so go for it. (But the author won't, because hard drugs are a big no-no; we're good girls here.)
> This was one of the best days of his life, right before everything changed.
That was also the day Vi couldn't stop mocking Viktor for being a sap, and the day when Ximena basically egged him to forgive Jayce. Viktor never forgave Jayce on his own; he was forced to do it by other people. That's what makes this so shallow.
> He remembers waking up on Jayce's shoulder, feeling for a moment like it was completely normal before remembering their circumstance.
"We're supposed to be enemies but we're wearing ugly sweaters? OMG Besties!!!"
> Like something had shifted; like he was done hiding, or maybe he just couldn't anymore.
Done hiding not from his crimes against Viktor, but because he 'saw his soulmate in the moon' (this was real, btw) and went full puppy-dog eyes on him.
> Pulled in by something bigger than themselves
Well asteroids are chunks of rock thrown out of orbit to hit other planets; perhaps it's fitting that your destructive tendencies lend to your comparison to one.
> It's packed with couples; loud, dimly lit.
> Small lights hang around the windows, and there are roses on every table. There's candlelight and soothing piano.
I thought this was a hotel and not a resort, but they have entire towns with restaurants like this? Lmao.
> Staring at him like he put the earth into orbit himself
So he's blinding like the sun?
> Yes, yes! Oh my God, Viktor. Senselessly.
I hate how these people talk. They don't even sound like men, but YAAAAAAAAS KWEEEEEN audience members on Dress to Impress.
> He tells Viktor of his mother's various ex-boyfriends with a hint of disdain
Eh? A Catholic woman taking random men home without marrying them? Blasphemy.
> Desert
She still confuses 'dessert' with 'desert'.
> Not a complete truth. Really, he just wanted to see Jayce squirm
OK, that's a lie. That woman openly called you Jayce's husband because she assumed you were, and that was because Jayce couldn't stop talking about Viktor. Not only did the author forget what she wrote earlier, she's saying it's a lie when it clearly was not. He definitely was not squirming when that random woman called him Jayce's husband, btw.
> A little flustered but mostly content, his shoulders relaxed and his smile easy.
> He...he doesn't get it. He doesn't get why this is so bad.
First it was the mental breakdown over the wedding cakes, and now it's a mental breakdown over a Valentine's Day card. He is freaking out more over that than he did Jayce stabbing him in the back and selling out his half of the patent while he was ill and under duress. Priorities.
> I couldn't sense how much you needed a break. I wasn't in tune with it at all
Uh, you could tell he was stressed? You were stressed? He nearly died (your words, not mine) after falling off the roof trying to fix a leak? You didn't want a break because you felt like you could be servicing (lol) others with your time and effort? You weren't 'in tune' because you were a workaholic, not because you were ignorant.
> With the wife
Ah, there's that comparison of the token heterosexual dream and the true and honest gay love. They still end up with the house and the white picket fence. How socialist.
> No, listen. You didn't know I needed a break this badly
Remember how he was being sketchy with the laptop? Jayce was the one who planned this entire trip and tricked Viktor into going. Why is he making it seem as if it's Viktor's fault?
> You say it to me every time you kiss me...or when you hold me in bed, or when you make me my favourite soup with just the right amount of spice.
> Viktor would have found it deeply condescending not two years ago
It's still condescending, mostly because the author is trying to convince the audience that their breakup wasn't as serious as it actually was. Hell, not even Beth herself remembers.
> And - look at me
> It's amazing how much weight someone can carry without realizing it
As I've said before, note how it's Viktor, not Jayce, who has to do all the emotional labour around here. He feels pressured to take Jayce's name and Jayce's lineage without keeping his own, which really begs the question of whether the author remembers Viktor's socialist bent and why he even believes in this ancient cultural practice anyways. Why should he feel pressured, when JAYCE was the one who wanted him back?
> Hey - for real!
> Viktor's come to realize over the past year that he can't make everything about what he does and does not deserve
Funny, the moment you stopped prioritizing that is when you lost your agency and became a literal cocksucker for this man. Incredible how this man became a wet towel as soon as Jayce fluttered his eyelashes. If Viktor was a woman, everyone would be calling this out for how toxic it is.
> You're treating it like you're going to get a grade, or some sort of fucked up peer review
> He won't be judged
This entire fic is about you being judged, homie. You can write whatever you like, but you can't SAY whatever you like.
> He's clearly excited about the gifts - he has his on the coffee table.
> I am sorry I cannot show more enthusiasm for color schemes and cakes
Reminder that Jayce is the one who wanted a big party and a big guest list; Viktor did not. Viktor wanted a private ceremony and Jayce overruled his wishes. Funny how that doesn't get brought up as a character flaw but as a 'quirky' thing that Jayce is so good on.
> I am aware that the gravitational pull of a black hole is relatively small
...black holes THEMSELVES are small - their gravitational pull is not. They are among the densest things in the universe; they are so dense light itself cannot escape. This girl could not even Google basic facts about space, ffs.
And there's that bit about the multiverse and the 'you and I meet in every timeline' bullshit. Canonically this isn't true - they do not meet in the timeline where Vi dies and Overton confirms this - and even in this one it is better if they didn't meet at all. Jayce, again, was the one who ruined Viktor's life and he never faced consequences for it. Instead, he emotionally manipulates his way out of it, which you will see below.
> He's afraid to give it to him, but at least it's done - at least he has something.
> It's five pages long
Jesus Christ.
Now, Jayce here says he doesn't like to think of the years Viktor was away and said nothing because he didn't want to upset him, but then goes right into a tangent into how it upset him and ruined his life. Me, me, me. He never once considered how Viktor would feel about having his own patent stolen from him as a co-inventor and being fucked over while he was ill - he just goes ' Whoops, sorry about that, have you thought about how I was so sad and cried about your absence?' It's the most selfish thing I've ever read, and people in the comments were crying and shitting themselves over this. It's incredibly manipulative.
> It gave me the thought to invent scrubby
That tech already existed - you just stole it and made a shittier copy.
> It gave me time to understand why you had to go
No, it didn't. You never addressed that. Viktor doesn't bring it up, either; in the main fic, he blames Mel instead for daring to pay for his medical treatment. She gets all the heat while Jayce, who stole his invention, gets loved in return. The gall of this author.
> I smelled your hair when you walked past me
That's weird, bro. You betray him and THAT is the first thing you think of?
> I know you and I don't see eye to eye on multiverses, but I feel I'm with you in every universe
Oh, fuck you. Maybe Vi should have died in this one after all to spare us this Godawful sappy writing.
> They said the same thing in their cards, the exact same concept
OMG THEY WERE SOULMATES ALL ALONG!
>You are my sun, moon, and stars
I need Khal Drogo to come in here with some boiling gold stat, so Jayce can get a golden crown for that cringe.
> To have my inventions change lives
They don't; in fact, their batteries in their cars are causing accidents that have killed up to four people. So no, you've actually TAKEN lives rather than improved them.
> His hands are shaking. He needs him right now, so badly.
> He laughs. It sounds wet, like he's on the verge of tears
When are they not?
> He pointedly looks at his hands, notices a frayed edge of one of his fingernails. He tries to stop his heart from racing.
> It feels like minutes pass, but he's sure it's less than.
> I uhh - I promise I didn't read yours
Didn't he already read his card? He made a whole show of it.
> Before Viktor knows what's happening, they're colliding
They do this twice, btw.
> He's insatiable, he's all over him
> Of course, it's okay - it's Jayce.
> Jayce is the one who taught him how to forgive
This is what pisses me off - that 'taught him' part. Viktor had no reason to forgive Jayce and Jayce did not EARN his forgiveness; Viktor was the one who had to go through the trials and tribulations of accepting a man who fucked him over and objectively ruined his life. HE had to do the emotional labour and HE was the one who had to be convinced by others because Jayce felt bad and probably would have killed himself. It was never about centering Viktor's emotions, but Jayce's.
> ...too ill to breathe without help, who know rests his head on Viktor's chest before they fall asleep just to remind himself he's alive
Maybe it would have been better if he was dead, after all.
> Jayce has never been openly ravenous - not rough, but not soft.
> Jayce groans and stands back to take off his pants, giving Viktor time to do the same
I swear, this bitch's allergy to commas is going to kill me.
> Wanna be - wanna be close
God, I hate this dialogue so much.
> Viktor nods; same with him. (Why is this repeated?)
> ...pulling him closer, feeling the heat of Jayce's breath on his cheek
> So sweet, always so, so sweet
> Jayce knows, ruthlessly now, the exact spots he needs to reach to give him the most pleasure
> Jayce looks at him, nodding frantically
> The position is so deep, so intimate. He gasps the stretch
I suppose one consolation is that the smut isn't that graphic. Imagine if it really was a balls-to-the-wall fucking with that dialogue.
> Viktor's never felt more alive, more human, more stripped of pretense and laid bare
You had your entire character stripped for a good dicking. How about them apples?
> Viktor puts his thumb on Jayce's lower lip and dips it into Jayce's mouth, just to see how eagerly Jayce welcomes it
I swear, this woman needs an editor. I am metaphorically running out of red Sharpies for this.
> Viktor moves with him, taking his thumb out of Jayce's mouth and wraps an arm around the back of his neck
> He rolls his hips until he finds the perfect angle, until Jayce is brushing up against that spot inside him
> He kisses away the salt, but Jayce doesn't mind. Not one bit.
> Viktor feels the heat of their mingling breaths between them, of their bodies
> He's in a stellar collision, fusing and melting - before slowly coming down.
This is the third use of 'collision' I've read.
> He wants Jayce to take him still, wants Jayce to use him. Jayce kisses him, rocks into him. It's so, so much. But it's him - and it's always so much.
She should have hired me as her beta. I would have fixed this.
> They've never felt anything quite like that, quite as open or unguarded. It's as if something's been unlocked, opened up for them
Would it be the cake shop they ruined?
For the love of God, merge your sentences together. I am at the end of my rope.
> Afraid of underwhelm, ashamed how much something so childish could mean to him
> It's not the brilliant vibrancy one might experience at higher latitudes
THE NORTHERN LIGHTS ARE EASIER TO SEE AT HIGHER LATITUDES, YOU DUMB FUCK
> When Viktor was a boy, he dreamed of an open sky, of fresh air, of living in a world he could help shape for the better
This was established in the prior fic, and was buttressed between Jayce's speech on how he could find his soulmate in the moon and Viktor was his soulmate and how cleaner air in Zaun would make it easier to always find his soulmate. As for Viktor actually improving the lives of others...that remains to be proven. He's objectively never saved or improved anyone's lives, aside from fucking random gay men and being gaslit into accepting the man who destroyed his dreams.
> The kind of sight one might remember on their deathbed, multiple dreams in one view
I am not getting over Beth here not knowing that the Northern Lights are more visible at higher latitudes. Really, nigga?
> Partly because he's cold, but mostly because it's him
> Saying it doesn't feel hard
So it was hard the other times you said it? Did you feel guilt tripped into saying it? Do you not actually love this man, as it was based on deception and gaslighting from a pushy Hispanic mama and a nosey Hapa half-sister? That would actually make for some interesting drama, but no. We get an 18k word fic on Valentine's Day cards, a resort that isn't a resort, panic attacks in cake shops, and a socialist who got bullied into having a big wedding against his will. Very, very bourgeoise. And very cringe, thank you author!
> He doesn't feel fixed. Perhaps he never needed to be
You're alive because of Mel, you dumb fuck. Maybe it would have spared everyone here if you took your socialist leanings to heart and just died. Your fellow Czechs would be pleased that you were gone. And I don't think anyone here appreciates the 'you're beautiful because of your cancer'
theme you still chose to keep from the show. Give it a rest already.Beth, AKA queercatfan, still writes in her Strangulation Sentence style, and reminds me of this kid:
It's fascinating reading fics that are clearly written by men vs those written by pooners: the pooners still focus on feelings, emotions and drama even when there's obscene amounts of vaginal ejaculate, while the MTFs focus on diapers and human shit. You can even FEEL the sexual fetish differently.
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You know, I hate the idea that we need some level of actual suffering/deprivation in our lives to be capable of being able to have a rational worldview, but I have a hard time of seeing people with these sort of beliefs/mindsets as have any actual adversity in thier lives. This is not something a serious person thinks up. This is not #livegoals. This is not something to aspire to. I've known methed out alcoholics with more realistic thought patterns than this.
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This ABO fic is as wild as it reads, featuring men barreling through walls, BREED ME declarations, Discussion of Gender Roles, and alpha pheromones strong enough to act as bear mace. This is the first chapter in a three-chapter fic.
> Of alpha and ash and smoke and fire and shortbread
OK, so an alpha smells like the aftermath of a kitchen fire. Good to know! A long-held question has finally been answered.
> He's got his pheromones on full, heady blast
So he's a human air conditioner?
> I appear to be..in estrus
You can't, because estrus is for female mammals. But since this is an ABO, Viktor has a magical anal estrus that allows him to gestate young in a pocket dimension uterus. That's really the only easy way I can describe this nightmare of a universe.
> BREED ME
OK, OK! I'll go call Tony to make a sign!
> Head still hanging out the window
Where'd the window came from? Isn't Viktor in the lab? Is Jayce hanging on the ledge outside like he's Spiderman? I demand answers!
> A gush of slick trickles out of Viktor on impact, wetting his underpants
All this from a tackle? How much slick does an omega produce? Can it be measured?
> You're going to get mauled if you try and walk home alone
In the ABO universe, alphas are barely disguised, low IQ retard rapists who cannot control themselves around an omega once they 'present', and excuse it using the 'It's Just Biology, Bro!' argument. Omegas are basically their fucktoys during this period, and have absolutely no rights or public presence unless it is to birth 'pups'. If they sound like breeding dogs, you would be correct. The only difference is self-awareness.
> Just because I am going into heat does not mean I am infirm
You were just told that if you went outside like that you'd be gang-raped. Yeah, you're pretty infirm at this point.
> I'm a staunch omegist
That's right: the author wanted to talk about Gender Roles, so she has introduced this universe's equivalent to a feminist: an omegist! An omegist believes in equality and human rights; of COURSE an omega has the right to choose their reproductive future! But once that heat starts, suddenly it's Just Biology and we all go right back to our primal roots. What an absolutely perceptive and telling piece of advice.
> Jayce fills the hallway, fills his head
Did he fill it entirely? Like did he go from human size to King Boo size? Is he THE hallway?
> He wants to suck Jayce's tongue
Like a dog or a straw?
> Blonde, tall, strong, with big hands. He was dumb, unfortunately.
Really leaning into the dumb blonde argument, eh?
> Viktor is smart enough to balance out his feeble intellect, their pups would be big and smart and -
That's not how heredity works, and that is ESPECIALLY not how the bell curve works. You fucking a retard would give rise to mediocre kids, as most things tend to centre towards the mean. Your kids would likely be of middling strength as well. Viktor is clearly not smart enough to read Murray and Hernnstein - and neither is the author.
> The lift is flooded with intense alpha pheromones
At this point I am just going to imagine the pheromones as akin to bear spray: thick and orange and stings like hell if you run into it. Maybe they can use it for riot control, IDK
> he's wetter than he's been in a long time
I am under the impression these people are Neanderthals in disguise and they are figuring out language for the first time. It's literally, "Alpha male provide strong scene. Me omega want fuck. Me omega want breed. Me omega want pups for alpha." Was an asteroid not enough?
> Jayce smells pleased now, dominant and sated
Does it still smell like a kitchen fire or like shortbread?
> It slides with the heavy sway of Viktor's gait in maddening circles
Look at that, Viktor is doing the 'fuck me walk' despite being crippled. Being an omega sure does grant you inhuman properties, eh?
> I had an alpha partner once, when I was nineteen, and they-they injured me
Of course we need a rape mention. Omegas are truly miserable creatures.
> Slick sliding down his inner thighs
OK I am really curious as to how much slick omegas can produce. Can you fill an inflatable bed with it?
> We're syncing
This doesn't even happen to human women, you fuck. They should really manufacture chemical castration drugs for alphas - but that would be interrupting their natural cycles and we can't have that.
> Landing hard on his knees
Aren't you disabled?
> He's very strong and smart, much smarter than Sloan, smarter than Viktor sometimes even
I have to wonder how a retard like Sloan even became an Academy member - oh right, because he's an alpha. Very poignant social commentary there.
> His pups would be far superior to Sloan's
Maybe, if we're sticking to Mendelian genetics.
That's a lot of licking. I'm sure you would carry them carefully in that magical anal uterus of yours.
> Big hands on his hips
Always with the yaoi hands. Hand so big you could slap down concrete with them.
> Additional overwhelming flood of alpha pheromones is more than Viktor can take
Get a gas mask, and become your own Psycho Mantis.
> I really would give you good pups. Strong and smart
Again, that's not always a guarantee. You could have higher than average kids with middle physiques, which is usually the case. Geniuses are and will remain rare. They are literally lightning in a bottle.
> It's simple. Jayce, his big, smart Jayce, just needs to fill him with alpha come and breed him. "Put your young in me."
Write that down as another example of 'shit fanficcers say' for the wildest shit.
> My mom's underwear
WHAT THE FUCK, WHY DO YOU KNOW WHAT UNDERWEAR YOUR MOTHER WEARS?!
> Away from the tidal wave of alpha pheromones
OK, are we in a Taco Bell restroom or what? This shit smells rancid if you ask me.
> His empty hole is throbbing
...which one does he have?
> Having to wrestle him into the bedroom to get free, how humiliating
> He sees a nine-pound hammer
I legitimately believed Viktor was going to fuck himself with that hammer. Imagine my surprise when he uses it to smash a hole in the wall instead.
> Tears out the animal-hair-insulation
Well, least it isn't asbestos!
> Then Jayce's fist breaks through the sheet wall on the other side
That's right, Jayce bursts through a fucking wall like the Kool-Aid man. Fucking wild.
> His golden eye peers through the hole, wide and incised, and the scent of an alpha in rut floods through
"Heeeeeeeeeeeeeeere's Jayce-y!"
> Jayce sets to tearing his way through the wall
Ain't no OH YEAHS here, just a lot of OH FUCK NO
> His slick leaks down his inner thighs in rivulets
Well, least you have a portable fire extinguisher if you need one.
> Then tears away every stitch of clothes from his body
Damn. Talk about a bodice ripper. My man is a portable shredder!
> Gonna knot you, V. Gonna stuff you full. I got you
He's either talking about sex or stuffing a pastry. It sounds a lot better when talking about the latter.
> He pushes two generous, big fingers into where Viktor is wet and waiting
Now I REALLY gotta know which hole it is. Is it a magical lubricating anus, or a magical pocket vagina? ABO isn't consistent on this so you never know what you're gonna get.
> Jayce gallops into it
Like a horse?
> Fucks him through the mattress
Like THROUGH IT? Literally through the floor? Wow
> He knots him in minutes
Faster than a microwave takes to heat a pizza pocket.
> One hand over where his cockhead is pressing against Viktor's belly
Alphas in this universe usually have monstrous dicks and there usually is a belly bulge of sorts; as to how big, exactly, Jayce is, we can assume 10-12 inches. He's the Hispanic Hog with the DK hands. Such is 'alpha biology'.
> Must you pant in my face like a hound
What the - YOU ACT LIKE DOGS, WHAT ARE YOU TALKING ABOUT
> My big strong alpha. Thank you for fucking my stupid little omega brains back into my head
Now, let's try this in the Traditional Gender Roles way: 'My big strong man. Thank you for fucking my stupid little woman brains back into my head!' It reads like a man wrote it and would be featuring on R/MenwritingWomen. It's fine here because it's ABO and you won't see anyone criticize this on Reddit.
> I am an omegist. I just also have a lot of phero-chemicals coursing through my body right now
"I'm a feminist, but it's my job to fuck the shit out of you. It's just my biology."
> No, I mean...I have a lady of the night
Interesting how the only time women are actually featured in this universe is that they are 'comfort women' for the alphas and male omegas. Gender Role critique indeed.
> He falters. He's pretty sure he's blushing
Sounds like you need to be shoved into a freezer.
> Arching his back like a cat
I thought he had screws in his back? Guess Omegan biology grants you the anatomy of a cat.
> Starts fucking him like he's got a steam engine between his legs
OK, add this to the 'shit fanficcers say' list.
> Jayce feels so good in him, so big and heavy
How big? Can he get stuck in a Pringles can?
> Right. Jayce liked that omega talk earlier
"Now, while I may support and love omega's rights, I still think it's your duty to be fucked and have my pups. It's Just My Alpha Biology, bro."
> Fill me with pups, alpha. Breed me
Add this to the list.
> Jayce barks
Literally, or figuratively? I am tempted to believe the former because they really are dogs at this point.
> Eyes crossing
Did he lose a chromosome with that steam-engine fucking?
> Particularly adventurous pairing on the kitchen table
Please don't tell me you did it over the dishwasher. That ain't water you're cleaning the dishes with!
> You don't like
Like what?
> Are you...making fun of me?
I sure am.
> But needs must
Needs must what?
> Wowee, thanks
Retire this Millennial talk shit immediately before I use Ximena's flipflops as a weapon.
> You are very sweet. Hell, you have a way about you...and I don't really want kids.
That's why you fucked your omega through the mattress. Because it was for fun and not because your alpha biology demanded that you breed. And Viktor was asking for it anyways so...see this excuse get dropped in the next chapters. We all know he's not serious with that.
> I drooled on your face
Damn, they ARE dogs.
> Say say any more sexy omega stuff
'Breed me' is 'sexy omega stuff'? Just sounds like an instruction manual for a farming simulator.
No shit. Thanks for the dialogue, though; it's imminently quotable. And I still want to know if they banged next to the dishwasher.
The other chapters will be reviewed as soon as they are posted.
This Billy Idol reference doesn't even bother hiding what it is:
>It's immoral
Plenty of royals have used prostitutes throughout history; in fact, some are even GIFTED to them if they are of higher standing. Who knew these people were Puritans?
> If either of their families knew Jayce is sneaking outside of Piltover to find a brother to hide in, he would certainly get an earful
I'd be more worried about what kind of STDs you're picking up.
> Even though he's seeing a man, he hopes it's all the same
Yeah, I don't think someone with a 'gushy pussy' is a man, just saying.
> He considers turning right back around and running back to Piltover
You already wrote that.
> The steel of their swords
What, no guns? Not even crossbows?
> He doesn't look particularly thrilled to be there
I do wonder why. Trans men are either prostitutes, sluts, or cock sluts in these fics - there is no in-between.
> His lingerie dress
You can have fancy lingerie dresses but not guns? OK.
> From his milky, skinny calves and fragile ankles
This makes me think he's a satyr. Rather fitting given the context.
> "I've had sex, but not with a man"
Luckily for you, Viktor isn't a man, so he isn't really gay. It's just 'man pussy' he's fucking, which is totally different! The feel is different, it gushes more, it does everything a woman's vagina doesn't! It's better because it's a man's vagina, and men are better. Got it?
Does your duty including giving your wife an STD?
> Palming at his impressively large cock
Ah, Hispanic Hog Jayce is at it again.
> If she's turned on enough
For a moment, I thought the author slipped and called Viktor a she, but she was referring to Jayce's would-be wife. Leave it to a 'man' to show Jayce how to work around a vagina.
> His dainty fingers
Yep, I could clock you from 20 yards away.
> Spreading apart Viktor's pussy lips
You mean labia? 'Pussy lips' makes me think a man wrote it.
> His cunt seems to suck in his fingers
Is it a wild Pac-man?
> Lapping at his hole like a dog
He laps at a lot of things like a dog. All he's missing is 'marking his territory' by pissing on a fire hydrant.
> Suckle on his clit desperately
You can use this but not 'vagina', except for the tags. Hell, these people can't even use 'vaginectomy' so what does that tell you?
> Blowing hot air onto Viktor's shivering genitals
1. You're not supposed to do that and 2. His genitalia should already be hot. Why is it cold like the inside of a hot pocket?
> I wanted to sleep with someone real, feel something, instead of having sex for the sake of heirs
Ironic he's saying this; he's sleeping with a woman pretending to be a man, and is convincing himself it's gay sex. You are still having straight sex, buddy.
> His big hands resting on Viktor's slim waist
Slim waist, dainty hands, tiny body...yeah, I can't tell who the woman is.
> Observing how deep he's about to fit
I wager he's around 10-12 inches. A classic hog.
> Wraps a dainty hand
Again with this description.
> Jayce panting heavily like a dog
That's the second time he's done that.
> Then down to the flat tits at his chest
But that's a man, yo, it ain't straight sex.
> Petting through Jayce's hair like he's a pup
More dog language. Guess I really need to get the dog shed out.
> At the feel of Viktor sucking him in
In which Viktor's vagina acts like a Dyson vacuum.
> You are clean, and you cannot impregnate me
Did he get a hysterectomy, or is he on some form of birth control? Maybe it's the latter. Prostitutes can't afford to have kids.
> There's a squelch as Viktor drips slick down Jayce's balls
Why was I reminded of bacon grease?
> You're so wet, I haven't..fucked like this before
Haven't had sex with a vagina, or fucked a trans man?
> Where Jayce can just feel the outline of his cock below Viktor's belly button
For a belly bulge, she can't even keep the size of Jayce's penis consistent. It goes from being hard enough to feel through his stomach, to a 'barely there bulge'. Observe.
> Ragdoll him off his cock
Because he's so uwu dainty and smol and is nothing compared to the big Hispanic man.
> Like nothing I've had before
You said that, already.
> Jayce reaches down to rub his clit
What, no 'cock' this time?
> He squirts warm liquid over Jayce's hand and soaking him
Not enough to wet the bed, it seems.
> Breaking the skin and streaking red down his spine
Damn, did he turn into Wolverine?
> He jackhammers into him
Finally, I was getting bored!
> Fucking his cum in o his womb deep
Because True and Honest Men have wombs, you know.
> He watches as his cum messily squirts from his pussy
Sperm is thicker than vaginal ejaculate; it should be sliding out with the consistency of glue.
'Practice', uh huh. It's gay but it's not gay because it happens to be the exact same anatomy of your would-be wife. Hopefully you don't get syphilis.
Nice. Treating your wife as a toy because you dream about fucking the trans man more. How very feminist.
This one features period sex, from an author who bled for two months. Maybe it's time to visit a doctor, eh?
> A dull, blunt sort of discomfort that Viktor has known intimately, but not in a long while
So he hasn't taken his T shots in a few days - as well as not showering - and his periods are inconsistent enough he doesn't know if he gets them anymore. Then when he does, it's a shock.
> Small but ever-noticeable in the horror it brings with it
Let me guess: it's a reminder that you are female and you cannot bear to be reminded that you are not the sex you say you are.
> Let alone medicated himself
Three days without showering, eating, or taking those T shots, and BAM! Aunt Flo comes on like she's a plague of Egypt. Fitting.
> Then down on the unconscious clenching of his cunt around nothing
Guess that pain can be fixed with a good ole fucking from the Hispanic Hog, eh?
> He hadn't wanted to tell Jayce about his predicament in any capacity
Forget that; does he even KNOW you're female?
> For one, because it had always been a source of insecurity for him, a reminder that his body wasn't quite what he wanted it to be
Ah, so I was right. You hate it because it reminds you that you are female.
> The slickness between his legs is driving him half mad
Luckily Jayce is there to be your human tampon.
> Which is topical
You mean 'typical'?
> Let's just go back to work
He says this around three times
> He is menstruating
> I am on my period
Yes, you've already told Jayce that. And he still wants to get his Red Wings.
> He's on the verge of tears from the sheer frustration of not enough
Well someone is on their time on the month, get it?
> Get the more
Get the what?
> Viktor's back arches violently
I'm glad a man with a back brace can bend better than a contortionist at a circus. Trans privilege really is something!
> How sublime Jayce's warm, wet tough is against his aching cunt
> He wonders if Jayce can taste the blood, how much if it he's ingesting
2-3 tablespoons, if we're being accurate - but with how much blood he's actually producing, one would think he's in a Cartel gore video.
> The idea that Jayce is consuming his blood
You already wrote this.
> People have sex on their periods all the time
Which people?
> His blood, absorbed by Jayce
He is a tax free tampon. Nice!
> His sensitive cock
That clit is nothing compare to that massive dick you're going to get fucked by, so don't bother.
> His tongue rapidly oscillating between stroking his cock and breaching his hole
Fuck off. This entire fic is based on Viktor experiencing a female issue and you can't even be bothered to use the proper term for where it comes out of.
> Truly, the lower half of his face is covered, and now, a good part of his forearm is, too
Jeez, he really does moonlight as a Sinaloa hitman, doesn't he?
> Still has a layer of blood coating half of his face
Just how much fucking blood are you bleeding, man? Did someone butcher a pig up there?
> In the soil of Viktor's cunt
I've never, ever heard anyone referred to a vagina as 'the soil'. This is new. Unless the author means it literally because he hasn't showered in three days.
> Is met with the sight of a bloodstain on the head of the bulge
Are we taking a page out of Superbad here?
> Finally, Jayce's cock is out, and Viktor has no choice but to tear his eyelids open and force his gaze down, and his mouth waters
Of course. He's a hog. 10-12 inches of pure (okay, half, it's that white daddy DNA) Mexican Man Meat. And he's going to put it to good use.
> Just because they're doing this doesn't mean that their relationship will fundamentally change
Yeah it will, and you just admitted that you are going to be affected by it more. That wouldn't have anything to do with your sex, would it?
> Only the head is in him, and yet he feels so full
Pringle Can Jayce is on the job.
> Adjusting to the frankly massive intrusion into Viktor's body
10-12 inches long, 3 inches wide, my man can feed an entire Italian family with that.
> To be well and truly fucked by this man means everything to him
Makes me wonder how he would react if Jayce was average sized. Something tells me that innate female desire to be dicked down by a big one would not be pleased.
> With every press of Jayce's cockhead against Viktor's cervix
Ouch. Careful there.
> Jayce is borderline cruel with the way he fucks Viktor
I'm surprised he doesn't break something. He's fucking him against the wall and Viktor's spine is amazingly intact.
> Almost struggling even now to take all of him inside
Guess you're not wet enough, then.
> The trousers around his hips stained completely around his groin and down his thighs
Damn, this IS from Superbad! Superbad with some Freddy Kreuger in there.
> Driving his cock deeper into Viktor despite already being all the way inside him
I thought he wasn't all the way inside him because Viktor was struggling to take him?
> Cringes at the feeling of blood and come dripping out of him
I'd cringe too if I knew I was becoming a human strawberry shortcake.
> Now that Jayce knows the taste of his blood
Menstrual blood is different from regular blood; it actually contains LOWER iron content and he'd be eating a lot more endometrium tissue, lmao.
> Viktor knows in this moment that they will be okay
This wouldn't be an issue between two men. It's always the woman who has to carry on the emotional labour and it still sticks even if they are a trans man. You cannot escape your biological fate.
> His boxers have some blood on them
My man really DID come from a slaughterhouse, eh?
> Viktor will dream of the sex
Of course. Hispanic Hog Jayce is second to none.
> Yet he struggles to believe
...he just told you he felt the same way? You're not going to take him at face value, even when Jayce is a fundamentally honest person?
> Willing Jayce to accept it in all of its gore
His buddies are making gore videos as we speak; it's in his blood.
> They need to go home, and shower
They don't, because they need to stew in that bloody mess for a few more days. There should not be so much menstrual blood as to make pools unless your own uterus was ripped out of your body - and based on how fast Jayce was going, I'd believe it.
> None of it is pressing
>Things that aren't pressing now
You said that twice. This was also beta read. Someone has not told her that Superbad already had this plot and made it way funnier. This just raised by eyebrows and activated my OCD. I need a mop and some Pine-Sol, stat.
> Of alpha and ash and smoke and fire and shortbread
OK, so an alpha smells like the aftermath of a kitchen fire. Good to know! A long-held question has finally been answered.
> He's got his pheromones on full, heady blast
So he's a human air conditioner?
> I appear to be..in estrus
You can't, because estrus is for female mammals. But since this is an ABO, Viktor has a magical anal estrus that allows him to gestate young in a pocket dimension uterus. That's really the only easy way I can describe this nightmare of a universe.
> BREED ME
OK, OK! I'll go call Tony to make a sign!
> Head still hanging out the window
Where'd the window came from? Isn't Viktor in the lab? Is Jayce hanging on the ledge outside like he's Spiderman? I demand answers!
> A gush of slick trickles out of Viktor on impact, wetting his underpants
All this from a tackle? How much slick does an omega produce? Can it be measured?
> You're going to get mauled if you try and walk home alone
In the ABO universe, alphas are barely disguised, low IQ retard rapists who cannot control themselves around an omega once they 'present', and excuse it using the 'It's Just Biology, Bro!' argument. Omegas are basically their fucktoys during this period, and have absolutely no rights or public presence unless it is to birth 'pups'. If they sound like breeding dogs, you would be correct. The only difference is self-awareness.
> Just because I am going into heat does not mean I am infirm
You were just told that if you went outside like that you'd be gang-raped. Yeah, you're pretty infirm at this point.
> I'm a staunch omegist
That's right: the author wanted to talk about Gender Roles, so she has introduced this universe's equivalent to a feminist: an omegist! An omegist believes in equality and human rights; of COURSE an omega has the right to choose their reproductive future! But once that heat starts, suddenly it's Just Biology and we all go right back to our primal roots. What an absolutely perceptive and telling piece of advice.
> Jayce fills the hallway, fills his head
Did he fill it entirely? Like did he go from human size to King Boo size? Is he THE hallway?
> He wants to suck Jayce's tongue
Like a dog or a straw?
> Blonde, tall, strong, with big hands. He was dumb, unfortunately.
Really leaning into the dumb blonde argument, eh?
> Viktor is smart enough to balance out his feeble intellect, their pups would be big and smart and -
That's not how heredity works, and that is ESPECIALLY not how the bell curve works. You fucking a retard would give rise to mediocre kids, as most things tend to centre towards the mean. Your kids would likely be of middling strength as well. Viktor is clearly not smart enough to read Murray and Hernnstein - and neither is the author.
> The lift is flooded with intense alpha pheromones
At this point I am just going to imagine the pheromones as akin to bear spray: thick and orange and stings like hell if you run into it. Maybe they can use it for riot control, IDK
> he's wetter than he's been in a long time
I am under the impression these people are Neanderthals in disguise and they are figuring out language for the first time. It's literally, "Alpha male provide strong scene. Me omega want fuck. Me omega want breed. Me omega want pups for alpha." Was an asteroid not enough?
> Jayce smells pleased now, dominant and sated
Does it still smell like a kitchen fire or like shortbread?
> It slides with the heavy sway of Viktor's gait in maddening circles
Look at that, Viktor is doing the 'fuck me walk' despite being crippled. Being an omega sure does grant you inhuman properties, eh?
> I had an alpha partner once, when I was nineteen, and they-they injured me
Of course we need a rape mention. Omegas are truly miserable creatures.
> Slick sliding down his inner thighs
OK I am really curious as to how much slick omegas can produce. Can you fill an inflatable bed with it?
> We're syncing
This doesn't even happen to human women, you fuck. They should really manufacture chemical castration drugs for alphas - but that would be interrupting their natural cycles and we can't have that.
> Landing hard on his knees
Aren't you disabled?
> He's very strong and smart, much smarter than Sloan, smarter than Viktor sometimes even
I have to wonder how a retard like Sloan even became an Academy member - oh right, because he's an alpha. Very poignant social commentary there.
> His pups would be far superior to Sloan's
Maybe, if we're sticking to Mendelian genetics.
That's a lot of licking. I'm sure you would carry them carefully in that magical anal uterus of yours.
> Big hands on his hips
Always with the yaoi hands. Hand so big you could slap down concrete with them.
> Additional overwhelming flood of alpha pheromones is more than Viktor can take
Get a gas mask, and become your own Psycho Mantis.
> I really would give you good pups. Strong and smart
Again, that's not always a guarantee. You could have higher than average kids with middle physiques, which is usually the case. Geniuses are and will remain rare. They are literally lightning in a bottle.
> It's simple. Jayce, his big, smart Jayce, just needs to fill him with alpha come and breed him. "Put your young in me."
Write that down as another example of 'shit fanficcers say' for the wildest shit.
> My mom's underwear
WHAT THE FUCK, WHY DO YOU KNOW WHAT UNDERWEAR YOUR MOTHER WEARS?!
> Away from the tidal wave of alpha pheromones
OK, are we in a Taco Bell restroom or what? This shit smells rancid if you ask me.
> His empty hole is throbbing
...which one does he have?
> Having to wrestle him into the bedroom to get free, how humiliating
> He sees a nine-pound hammer
I legitimately believed Viktor was going to fuck himself with that hammer. Imagine my surprise when he uses it to smash a hole in the wall instead.
> Tears out the animal-hair-insulation
Well, least it isn't asbestos!
> Then Jayce's fist breaks through the sheet wall on the other side
That's right, Jayce bursts through a fucking wall like the Kool-Aid man. Fucking wild.
> His golden eye peers through the hole, wide and incised, and the scent of an alpha in rut floods through
"Heeeeeeeeeeeeeeere's Jayce-y!"
> Jayce sets to tearing his way through the wall
Ain't no OH YEAHS here, just a lot of OH FUCK NO
> His slick leaks down his inner thighs in rivulets
Well, least you have a portable fire extinguisher if you need one.
> Then tears away every stitch of clothes from his body
Damn. Talk about a bodice ripper. My man is a portable shredder!
> Gonna knot you, V. Gonna stuff you full. I got you
He's either talking about sex or stuffing a pastry. It sounds a lot better when talking about the latter.
> He pushes two generous, big fingers into where Viktor is wet and waiting
Now I REALLY gotta know which hole it is. Is it a magical lubricating anus, or a magical pocket vagina? ABO isn't consistent on this so you never know what you're gonna get.
> Jayce gallops into it
Like a horse?
> Fucks him through the mattress
Like THROUGH IT? Literally through the floor? Wow
> He knots him in minutes
Faster than a microwave takes to heat a pizza pocket.
> One hand over where his cockhead is pressing against Viktor's belly
Alphas in this universe usually have monstrous dicks and there usually is a belly bulge of sorts; as to how big, exactly, Jayce is, we can assume 10-12 inches. He's the Hispanic Hog with the DK hands. Such is 'alpha biology'.
> Must you pant in my face like a hound
What the - YOU ACT LIKE DOGS, WHAT ARE YOU TALKING ABOUT
> My big strong alpha. Thank you for fucking my stupid little omega brains back into my head
Now, let's try this in the Traditional Gender Roles way: 'My big strong man. Thank you for fucking my stupid little woman brains back into my head!' It reads like a man wrote it and would be featuring on R/MenwritingWomen. It's fine here because it's ABO and you won't see anyone criticize this on Reddit.
> I am an omegist. I just also have a lot of phero-chemicals coursing through my body right now
"I'm a feminist, but it's my job to fuck the shit out of you. It's just my biology."
> No, I mean...I have a lady of the night
Interesting how the only time women are actually featured in this universe is that they are 'comfort women' for the alphas and male omegas. Gender Role critique indeed.
> He falters. He's pretty sure he's blushing
Sounds like you need to be shoved into a freezer.
> Arching his back like a cat
I thought he had screws in his back? Guess Omegan biology grants you the anatomy of a cat.
> Starts fucking him like he's got a steam engine between his legs
OK, add this to the 'shit fanficcers say' list.
> Jayce feels so good in him, so big and heavy
How big? Can he get stuck in a Pringles can?
> Right. Jayce liked that omega talk earlier
"Now, while I may support and love omega's rights, I still think it's your duty to be fucked and have my pups. It's Just My Alpha Biology, bro."
> Fill me with pups, alpha. Breed me
Add this to the list.
> Jayce barks
Literally, or figuratively? I am tempted to believe the former because they really are dogs at this point.
> Eyes crossing
Did he lose a chromosome with that steam-engine fucking?
> Particularly adventurous pairing on the kitchen table
Please don't tell me you did it over the dishwasher. That ain't water you're cleaning the dishes with!
> You don't like
Like what?
> Are you...making fun of me?
I sure am.
> But needs must
Needs must what?
> Wowee, thanks
Retire this Millennial talk shit immediately before I use Ximena's flipflops as a weapon.
> You are very sweet. Hell, you have a way about you...and I don't really want kids.
That's why you fucked your omega through the mattress. Because it was for fun and not because your alpha biology demanded that you breed. And Viktor was asking for it anyways so...see this excuse get dropped in the next chapters. We all know he's not serious with that.
> I drooled on your face
Damn, they ARE dogs.
> Say say any more sexy omega stuff
'Breed me' is 'sexy omega stuff'? Just sounds like an instruction manual for a farming simulator.
No shit. Thanks for the dialogue, though; it's imminently quotable. And I still want to know if they banged next to the dishwasher.
This Billy Idol reference doesn't even bother hiding what it is:
>It's immoral
Plenty of royals have used prostitutes throughout history; in fact, some are even GIFTED to them if they are of higher standing. Who knew these people were Puritans?
> If either of their families knew Jayce is sneaking outside of Piltover to find a brother to hide in, he would certainly get an earful
I'd be more worried about what kind of STDs you're picking up.
> Even though he's seeing a man, he hopes it's all the same
Yeah, I don't think someone with a 'gushy pussy' is a man, just saying.
> He considers turning right back around and running back to Piltover
You already wrote that.
> The steel of their swords
What, no guns? Not even crossbows?
> He doesn't look particularly thrilled to be there
I do wonder why. Trans men are either prostitutes, sluts, or cock sluts in these fics - there is no in-between.
> His lingerie dress
You can have fancy lingerie dresses but not guns? OK.
> From his milky, skinny calves and fragile ankles
This makes me think he's a satyr. Rather fitting given the context.
> "I've had sex, but not with a man"
Luckily for you, Viktor isn't a man, so he isn't really gay. It's just 'man pussy' he's fucking, which is totally different! The feel is different, it gushes more, it does everything a woman's vagina doesn't! It's better because it's a man's vagina, and men are better. Got it?
Does your duty including giving your wife an STD?
> Palming at his impressively large cock
Ah, Hispanic Hog Jayce is at it again.
> If she's turned on enough
For a moment, I thought the author slipped and called Viktor a she, but she was referring to Jayce's would-be wife. Leave it to a 'man' to show Jayce how to work around a vagina.
> His dainty fingers
Yep, I could clock you from 20 yards away.
> Spreading apart Viktor's pussy lips
You mean labia? 'Pussy lips' makes me think a man wrote it.
> His cunt seems to suck in his fingers
Is it a wild Pac-man?
> Lapping at his hole like a dog
He laps at a lot of things like a dog. All he's missing is 'marking his territory' by pissing on a fire hydrant.
> Suckle on his clit desperately
You can use this but not 'vagina', except for the tags. Hell, these people can't even use 'vaginectomy' so what does that tell you?
> Blowing hot air onto Viktor's shivering genitals
1. You're not supposed to do that and 2. His genitalia should already be hot. Why is it cold like the inside of a hot pocket?
> I wanted to sleep with someone real, feel something, instead of having sex for the sake of heirs
Ironic he's saying this; he's sleeping with a woman pretending to be a man, and is convincing himself it's gay sex. You are still having straight sex, buddy.
> His big hands resting on Viktor's slim waist
Slim waist, dainty hands, tiny body...yeah, I can't tell who the woman is.
> Observing how deep he's about to fit
I wager he's around 10-12 inches. A classic hog.
> Wraps a dainty hand
Again with this description.
> Jayce panting heavily like a dog
That's the second time he's done that.
> Then down to the flat tits at his chest
But that's a man, yo, it ain't straight sex.
> Petting through Jayce's hair like he's a pup
More dog language. Guess I really need to get the dog shed out.
> At the feel of Viktor sucking him in
In which Viktor's vagina acts like a Dyson vacuum.
> You are clean, and you cannot impregnate me
Did he get a hysterectomy, or is he on some form of birth control? Maybe it's the latter. Prostitutes can't afford to have kids.
> There's a squelch as Viktor drips slick down Jayce's balls
Why was I reminded of bacon grease?
> You're so wet, I haven't..fucked like this before
Haven't had sex with a vagina, or fucked a trans man?
> Where Jayce can just feel the outline of his cock below Viktor's belly button
For a belly bulge, she can't even keep the size of Jayce's penis consistent. It goes from being hard enough to feel through his stomach, to a 'barely there bulge'. Observe.
> Ragdoll him off his cock
Because he's so uwu dainty and smol and is nothing compared to the big Hispanic man.
> Like nothing I've had before
You said that, already.
> Jayce reaches down to rub his clit
What, no 'cock' this time?
> He squirts warm liquid over Jayce's hand and soaking him
Not enough to wet the bed, it seems.
> Breaking the skin and streaking red down his spine
Damn, did he turn into Wolverine?
> He jackhammers into him
Finally, I was getting bored!
> Fucking his cum in o his womb deep
Because True and Honest Men have wombs, you know.
> He watches as his cum messily squirts from his pussy
Sperm is thicker than vaginal ejaculate; it should be sliding out with the consistency of glue.
'Practice', uh huh. It's gay but it's not gay because it happens to be the exact same anatomy of your would-be wife. Hopefully you don't get syphilis.
Nice. Treating your wife as a toy because you dream about fucking the trans man more. How very feminist.
This one features period sex, from an author who bled for two months. Maybe it's time to visit a doctor, eh?
> A dull, blunt sort of discomfort that Viktor has known intimately, but not in a long while
So he hasn't taken his T shots in a few days - as well as not showering - and his periods are inconsistent enough he doesn't know if he gets them anymore. Then when he does, it's a shock.
> Small but ever-noticeable in the horror it brings with it
Let me guess: it's a reminder that you are female and you cannot bear to be reminded that you are not the sex you say you are.
> Let alone medicated himself
Three days without showering, eating, or taking those T shots, and BAM! Aunt Flo comes on like she's a plague of Egypt. Fitting.
> Then down on the unconscious clenching of his cunt around nothing
Guess that pain can be fixed with a good ole fucking from the Hispanic Hog, eh?
> He hadn't wanted to tell Jayce about his predicament in any capacity
Forget that; does he even KNOW you're female?
> For one, because it had always been a source of insecurity for him, a reminder that his body wasn't quite what he wanted it to be
Ah, so I was right. You hate it because it reminds you that you are female.
> The slickness between his legs is driving him half mad
Luckily Jayce is there to be your human tampon.
> Which is topical
You mean 'typical'?
> Let's just go back to work
He says this around three times
> He is menstruating
> I am on my period
Yes, you've already told Jayce that. And he still wants to get his Red Wings.
> He's on the verge of tears from the sheer frustration of not enough
Well someone is on their time on the month, get it?
> Get the more
Get the what?
> Viktor's back arches violently
I'm glad a man with a back brace can bend better than a contortionist at a circus. Trans privilege really is something!
> How sublime Jayce's warm, wet tough is against his aching cunt
> He wonders if Jayce can taste the blood, how much if it he's ingesting
2-3 tablespoons, if we're being accurate - but with how much blood he's actually producing, one would think he's in a Cartel gore video.
> The idea that Jayce is consuming his blood
You already wrote this.
> People have sex on their periods all the time
Which people?
> His blood, absorbed by Jayce
He is a tax free tampon. Nice!
> His sensitive cock
That clit is nothing compare to that massive dick you're going to get fucked by, so don't bother.
> His tongue rapidly oscillating between stroking his cock and breaching his hole
Fuck off. This entire fic is based on Viktor experiencing a female issue and you can't even be bothered to use the proper term for where it comes out of.
> Truly, the lower half of his face is covered, and now, a good part of his forearm is, too
Jeez, he really does moonlight as a Sinaloa hitman, doesn't he?
> Still has a layer of blood coating half of his face
Just how much fucking blood are you bleeding, man? Did someone butcher a pig up there?
> In the soil of Viktor's cunt
I've never, ever heard anyone referred to a vagina as 'the soil'. This is new. Unless the author means it literally because he hasn't showered in three days.
> Is met with the sight of a bloodstain on the head of the bulge
Are we taking a page out of Superbad here?
> Finally, Jayce's cock is out, and Viktor has no choice but to tear his eyelids open and force his gaze down, and his mouth waters
Of course. He's a hog. 10-12 inches of pure (okay, half, it's that white daddy DNA) Mexican Man Meat. And he's going to put it to good use.
> Just because they're doing this doesn't mean that their relationship will fundamentally change
Yeah it will, and you just admitted that you are going to be affected by it more. That wouldn't have anything to do with your sex, would it?
> Only the head is in him, and yet he feels so full
Pringle Can Jayce is on the job.
> Adjusting to the frankly massive intrusion into Viktor's body
10-12 inches long, 3 inches wide, my man can feed an entire Italian family with that.
> To be well and truly fucked by this man means everything to him
Makes me wonder how he would react if Jayce was average sized. Something tells me that innate female desire to be dicked down by a big one would not be pleased.
> With every press of Jayce's cockhead against Viktor's cervix
Ouch. Careful there.
> Jayce is borderline cruel with the way he fucks Viktor
I'm surprised he doesn't break something. He's fucking him against the wall and Viktor's spine is amazingly intact.
> Almost struggling even now to take all of him inside
Guess you're not wet enough, then.
> The trousers around his hips stained completely around his groin and down his thighs
Damn, this IS from Superbad! Superbad with some Freddy Kreuger in there.
> Driving his cock deeper into Viktor despite already being all the way inside him
I thought he wasn't all the way inside him because Viktor was struggling to take him?
> Cringes at the feeling of blood and come dripping out of him
I'd cringe too if I knew I was becoming a human strawberry shortcake.
> Now that Jayce knows the taste of his blood
Menstrual blood is different from regular blood; it actually contains LOWER iron content and he'd be eating a lot more endometrium tissue, lmao.
> Viktor knows in this moment that they will be okay
This wouldn't be an issue between two men. It's always the woman who has to carry on the emotional labour and it still sticks even if they are a trans man. You cannot escape your biological fate.
> His boxers have some blood on them
My man really DID come from a slaughterhouse, eh?
> Viktor will dream of the sex
Of course. Hispanic Hog Jayce is second to none.
> Yet he struggles to believe
...he just told you he felt the same way? You're not going to take him at face value, even when Jayce is a fundamentally honest person?
> Willing Jayce to accept it in all of its gore
His buddies are making gore videos as we speak; it's in his blood.
> They need to go home, and shower
They don't, because they need to stew in that bloody mess for a few more days. There should not be so much menstrual blood as to make pools unless your own uterus was ripped out of your body - and based on how fast Jayce was going, I'd believe it.
> None of it is pressing
>Things that aren't pressing now
You said that twice. This was also beta read. Someone has not told her that Superbad already had this plot and made it way funnier. This just raised by eyebrows and activated my OCD. I need a mop and some Pine-Sol, stat.
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I think a two-month period is not particularly unusual if you're a woman taking testosterone.
Unfortunately I know this because I know some women IRL who take testosterone, and they often complain about their trainwreck symptoms. One woman on T described a long period (not just spotting, full-on bleeding for weeks and weeks) that honestly made me worried she was going to bleed to death. I think she was taking testosterone and hormonal birth control, and her uterus probably just gave the fuck up and tried to end itself. Who the fuck even knows?
I (and others) did gently press her to go to the doctor, but usually these people just go back to their "gender affirming" doctors, and of course they are never going to tell them to stop anything.
I (and others) did gently press her to go to the doctor, but usually these people just go back to their "gender affirming" doctors, and of course they are never going to tell them to stop anything.
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I know this isn't the thread to go into detail about how much of a malpractice-ridden clusterfuck this entire practice is, but christ, these people need to be in jail.
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Men in the past may have not wanted to marry for a variety of reasons, but they had more freedom in their personal lives than a wife ever would and kings and princes have always gotten their extra marital affairs hand waived and treated as just a thing. It's funny a lot of fics like this treat it as some dramatic thing (the way it would be for a female character). Even same sex attracted men in the past would've just shrugged at getting married since as a noble on up it was simply required and more a political thing than anything else. You go through the ceremonies and then go back to whatever it was you did before. The places and times that put great emphasis on the sanctity of marriage often don't have arranged marriages.
Part of why it's so frustrating coming across pooners writing stuff about this is they constantly take what are female experiences and write about their male characters appropriating it for the purpose of it being "gay". There is a special sort of insult to that.
Part of why it's so frustrating coming across pooners writing stuff about this is they constantly take what are female experiences and write about their male characters appropriating it for the purpose of it being "gay". There is a special sort of insult to that.
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I found this one and decided to give it a whirl, and it was surprisingly not that bad. I'll consider it a buffer compared to the worse things I've posted here. It is a trans Viktor fic, as most of the things I've posted here are, but it surprisingly hasn't shoved it in your face yet. This might be one where I will R&R once it's done.
> Cool, humid breeze
Well, humid breezes aren't cool, they're humid.
> If only the wind would bother to reach so far
How is there a breeze, then?
> Zaun hadn't been his home for a long time now
He still considers it his home, as everything he does in Piltover is for the benefit of his people below.
> Piltover had been kind to him in the end
No it hadn't. He still wanted to assimilate everyone and he still faced prejudice. The author later retcons this tidbit.
> Wave in the breeze that cools Viktor's lungs
You just wrote he's so high up the wind doesn't reach him, which A) would be the opposite and B) I thought it was just a breeze?
> Jayce clutching his shoulders in his strong arms
You'll see a lot of that; while it is a simple description, it's something I notice a lot in female-written stories where the focus is all on the hot guy. It's a minor thing but you'll start noticing it more and more.
> Piltover was a hellscape of perpetual judgement and stagnation
1. It is called the City of Progress for a reason and 2. you just wrote that Piltover 'had been kind to him in the end'.
> Big, warm hands to catch him
You'll be seeing 'big, warm hands' a lot. Trust me.
> Until the horizon is swallowed by the darkening storm
That high up, the horizon should BE the clouds, and you should see the full extent of that storm. He's on top of the Hexgates which has to be as tall, if not taller, than the World Trade Center.
> Stretches out over the shoulder of the kneeling figure in silent greeting
This makes me think his arm perpetually stretches out like he's Stretch Armstrong.
> Was this inevitable?
No, not really. All Jayce had to do was talk to you. It just so happens to be inevitable due to the plot.
> I don't think it's healthy for either of us to take on such guilt
...you wiped out entire universes all because you could NOT give a kid a rune. You just could NOT let that kid die in the snow. You absolutely SHOULD take on such guilt because all of this is absolutely your fault. Miss me with that BS.
> Strange, faded tattoos
That he doesn't have. IIRC, he has lines on his fingers, but the original mage was coated with them. That's in the main show, so the fault doesn't lie entirely on the author.
> That he shouldn't have been so reckless, so careless, so idealistic
Nothing wrong with being an idealistic. Hell, we don't even know where the Anomaly even came from, who made it, or if Mage Viktor was the original one who made it. It's a paradox and of course it falls on the pooner to take on the brunt of the guilt.
> That it doesn't matter if he feels guilt or remorse - what's done is done
"Yeah I killed billions of people across multiple timelines...but so what? It's over, bro. Get over it."
> Is who he would have been if he had done the same
You DID do the same. Who are you fooling?
> The strange birds sing alien songs
I thought there were no birds up there?
> Believe it or not, this is a rarity
What happened to, 'in all timelines, in all possibilities, only you could show me this?' We retconning that now?
> It is far from a rarity for him to sacrifice himself for you
I will say this, though: this is far better written than even Queercatfan's shit, because at least it manages to be pretty with the literary language. The Time Machine reference is also a nice touch, and is one of my favourite parts.
> But what if none of it matters
Spoilers: it doesn't, because that is the nature of the multiverse. There is no butterfly effect here, homie.
> A living thing blanketed against the cold
If it's humid up there, it should be 'blanketed against the humidity'.
I do like these flashbacks, though. Very well-written.
> Does this version of Viktor roll up on Jayce's toes to kiss him
Viktor is only six inches shorter than Jayce; he doesn't need to stretch that far. This just outs him as the short pooner.
> With a big hand across the small of his back
Remember what I said? Yeah. Keep a tally, now.
> Why show me this if it still ends up the same?
It doesn't, though. You either end up dead or apart - almost as if the universe wants to spare itself from your existence.
> Even though it hurts, I enjoy reliving them with him, too
He says this while Jayce is a living statue, btw. Utter torture.
> Viktor, the Viktor of this timeline, is nowhere to be seen
And Jayce is now part of the concrete, meaning the world is saved.
> Viktor can't breathe through the realization that at any point Jayce could have been stolen from him in so many ways
You didn't, though? He had no way of knowing. He saved Jayce from suicide and Viktor was the light of his life; he gave him a reason to live. How could he have known about things that likely never would have happened?
These were some of my favourite parts; I do like the worldbuilding in this.
> He speeds up time to spring
Which makes you wonder why he didn't do that in the first place. Man, this Viktor is a sadist.
> So many mistakes, so many points in time they lost each other
Almost as if the universe is better off with the two of you dead, or something.
> At the end of the one timeline that started it all
Which one? Mage Viktor's timeline? He was the one who started the paradox.
> Eigengrau
I haven't seen many authors use this term, but it is effective, for once. No thesaurus sucking.
> Why is it, apart, his entire world shatters, and together they meet the same fate?
Because Fate understands that you need to be wiped out to end the paradox and save the multiverse, simple as.
> Before the loop
That you caused, btw.
> Other timelines. Sometimes, it worked. He won. We both did
And yet, you still died.
> I tried to manipulate one relationship into something new...but never could initiate on our own. It ended all the same
So despite him trying to tweak the timeline, Fate turns against him and spews his meddling right back in his face. It's almost as if the world would be better if said relationship was left alone, eh?
> But failed so many times on the way
This is despite your meddling. You aren't just a sadist, you're a shitty mage. Ryze would never.
> He'd been a fool. A bull-headed, careless fool
Well at least you didn't manipulate entire timelines in order to fix your own relationship and have it backfire on you worse than what's happening to Blake Lively. Talk about cosmic karma.
> Tortured with the burden of knowing the true end of all things
That you cause, and continue to cause
> Of the failure Viktor had already inflicted upon the world
Skill isuse.
> Tide pool teeming with tiny, unique creatures
> Little creatures swirling in a pool
You didn't need to write this twice.
> Broad, treasured shoulders
Perfect for you to be thrown over them, eh?
> His big hands
OK, this is around the fourth time that's been written.
> Viktor had taken for granted the love language he had been too tired and unfocused to recognize
Eh? I thought it was established he WAS aware of it, he just didn't act on it because he didn't want to ruin their friendship? Something ain't right.
> I'm simply glad you realize it now
This is the only time he gets to realize it? This is the first time he's ever met his alternate self?
> Be kind to yourself, and to him. Live your lives
All he's missing is a 'Live, Laugh, Love' poster.
> But a man all the same
Lol. Lmao. All those universes and he's biologically female in every single one.
> Enough has been done there to warrant some rest from them both
You don't get to vacation from mass genocide, sorry. Jumping into a timeline where it never happened isn't character development; it's cowardice. An absolution of guilt that you should not shed.
> For the justice they will never face, for the ruin of the world to eventually sow sees of growth and progress
Because magitech is bad and natural mages are the only ones who should wield it - despite a mage being solely responsible for every crime and decision they've ever made. Logic.
> How idiotic Viktor had been in his chase for immortality when the answer to all his problems had been right under his nose all along
Love wasn't going to cure cancer, sorry bud. You wanting to get dicked down was never going to cure a terminal illness. Blaming a disabled person for wanting to cure themselves, nice going progshits.
> Given a second chance through sheer willpower alone
But it wasn't your decision; it was Mage Viktor's. He was the one who sent you here. His idea of 'breaking the loop' was sending you to a pocket dimension where everything is fine because the alternate versions of you never met...lol
> Like he's finally being seen and heard and listened to
Now, remind me, which sex has the problem with this, again? You mean to tell me that Viktor, a woman pretending to be a man, STILL wasn't listened to or believed? Huh.
> all of Viktor is, was, and will be had always depended on his sound of mind at the expense of his diminishing body
You just wrote he was a fool for trying to fix said diminishing body. You mean to tell me he was 'always meant' to suffer from cancer? Very enlightening from a 'trans and disabled author' if you are one.
> Big, warm hands scooping underneath Viktor's shoulders
How many times does this need to be written?
> A loop that is now broken, thanks to your strength and power of will
It still exists, they're just in a dimension where their alternate selves are either possessed or dead. Viktor never has to suffer the consequences because 'let bygones be bygones' has worked in history, right?
> And attractive, mouth-watering body
The pooner yearns for the big dicked male to dick her down, now and forever.
> All this wasted energy and headspace devoted to pretending they didn't care this much about each other
Wasn't it written earlier that Viktor simply did not KNOW Jayce was into him? That he was ignorant? Now they know, they just didn't do it because of work demands? K, then.
> A fantasy come true from so many lonely nights spent in his cramped apartment
And it only took a few cosmic genocides to get there.
> Tawny brown
He's more of an olive-tone.
> The stolen glances, the so many hugs and gentle touches, the things the both of them ignored for the sake of progress
Again, this retcons what the author wrote earlier on Viktor not even knowing that Jayce felt that way about him. If you're going to write about pining - keep it consistent! I swear I have a better memory than these authors do, and they wrote the damn thing!
> With a growl Viktor finds incredibly attractive
Pooners: progshits in the streets, tradwife in the sheets
> Nothing in any dimension, any timeline, seems impossible now that every barrier has been removed between them
Well you died in the others, because the universe hated you so much, lmao. The multiverse is a TERF.
> His grip around Jayce is not so encompassing as even one of Jayce's hands around himself
Just in case you needed to know who the woman was. And yes, there's a lot of fucking crying during the smut.
> Finds the scars underneath his pectorals with a sense of duty of needing to kiss along the length of them
Surprised he still has sensation in his nipples. Most zippertit procedures involving frying the nips; hell, they even LOOK mangled. This may be fantasy, but why the fuck would you seek a zippertit job over something that could save your life? You chose to lop them off because you hated being female, but didn't want to live? Priorities.
> Broad enough to pin Viktor down with one hand
Of course. It's a pooner's dream to be fucked by a big, well-hung man. Law of averages don't apply here.
> Hungry tongue swiping from twitching hole to the hard peak of Viktor's cock
And there goes my praise for this fic. I had a feeling that the smut was going to go right back to the typical pooner tropes where they can't use 'vagina' in their fic, but have no problem with the 'penis in vagina sex' tag.
> Lips sealing over Viktor's cock to suck and play with the pebbled head
Then it isn't a cock. And wait until you find out how big Jayce is by comparison.
> Jayce drinks from him like he won't find another meal for days after
This cliché again?
> Parting of his mouth from Viktor's cock and cunt
Once again, we are comparing something as small as a school eraser to a Pringles can. Jayce is fucking massive.
> His palm pressing up against his cock
See point above.
> How does Jayce have such incredible reach inside him
Because he has, as you've written many, many times, big hands?
> Pawing at his thick cock
And thick it is.
> Suddenly aware that he's been crying this entire time
Because nothing says, "women can't take accountability" like a trans man crying because he doesn't have to face any consequences for his misdeeds because all he needs is a big cock to 'set him straight'. Who knew?
> Has desired him and devoted so many lonely hours wondering if the two of them could ever be
That's a far cry from the 'I wasn't even aware of his feelings for me' when he was talking to his alternate self. Now he's always loved him and knew right from the beginning they were meant to be together.
> What all those past versions of Viktor would give to experience just a fraction of the love Jayce pins him with in this moment
Except...one version did, the one where they got married and were dancing. Remember that? Clearly not.
> His hands, so wide and calloused with years of forgework
> His middle fingers meeting at Viktor's center to pull apart his wet, soaking core
Now, it's common for authors to write Jayce's hands as so big, and Viktor so uwu smol, that Jayce's hands are big enough to encompass his middle. It's done to highlight the size difference, but it only outs Viktor as the female he is. Male Viktor is not that small; he's just thin from being ill. He has a wider trunk than that.
> The thick spear of Jayce's cock, pushing so far inside Viktor he can taste him in the back of his throat
So thick and long it was used to defeat the Persians in 300.
> Jayce is large, bigger than any other person or toy he has taken
10-12 inches, probably more than 3 inches wide. Every pooner's wet dream. They LOVE big dicks.
> Jayce stretches him so deep and wide Viktor can do nothing except cling to him while he rides him
You are riding the Hispanic Hog, so you need to be ready to take on a fire hydrant, lad.
> Viktor blinks around the tears from both how hungry he is for Jayce's cock and for the orgasm that is quickly building
And yet he sheds no tears for the people he assimilated. Trans men really can't take accountability, can they? Give them a massive cock and they'll be bred just right.
And comparing Viktor's 'cock' with that massive dong is just pure comedy to me. They're so unaware of the juxtaposition.
> Lets Viktor grind his cock down over his stomach
It's barely larger than his belly button. You've got something you 'can taste at the back of his throat' to a mini cupcake.
> His doctors told him of the loss of her fertility so long ago
Cool. Guess those T shots paid off, eh? Just without the sandpaper vagina.
> That has Viktor blinking away emotions he can't readily name
Notice 'regret' isn't one of them. You don't have to answer for genocide when you've got a foot of man meat inside you.
> Viktor can never forgive himself for breaking such a precious man
Your alternate self refused to help him, created that anomaly in the first place, and he shot you in the chest when he could have pleaded for parley. That's on him. Such a convenient forgiveness.
> Mistakes are mistakes, things he can never fix, but this, at least, is a start
"I don't have to answer for a genocide that extended over the multiverse, because mistakes are mistakes. Let bygones be bygones, I can be dicked down now!" If this was a 'cis female' thinking this she'd be raked over the coals. Of course it's only forgivable if it's a man or a trans person.
> Without feeling like a piece of meat cooking in an oven
Interesting choice of words there.
> Threatens such a delicate peace Viktor has carved for them both
Mage Viktor was the one who sent you there, not yourself. He is the one solely responsible for this.
> Viktor knows this is the arcane taking pity on them both
It isn't? It's physically incapable of doing that? You caused a cosmic genocide and it decided 10 inches of dick was the cure? OK, dumbass.
He's kissing the statue of Jayce he made, after he ended the world, because Jayce saved his life and couldn't kill him, and he responded by making everyone automatons and then got bored with the result. Then he tells his alternate self to Live, Laugh, Love in another universe where the Arcane 'takes pity on them' so they can fuck each other for the rest of their days.
Jesus. If the rest of the fic is like this, it definitely warrants a hate read.
TL;DR After nearly ending the world and causing cosmic genocides on a scale Thanos or Galactus could not dream of, Mage Viktor sends Viktor to a new world where he Lives, Laughs, Loves on 10 inches of Mexican Man Meat. This will go on for multiple chapters; hopefully they won't be as long as this one.
Two pooners delivered this work, and play 'fast and loose' with the lore like they do that 'gaping hole' that is Viktor's genitalia.
> He was anxious when things got too hot
Tell me something I don't know.
Based on the way this was written, I initially thought that Viktor was being 'adopted' into these houses as a child; thank God, then, that he's a grown adult. Still weird to have him be 'adopted out' when he isn't an escort or an indentured service.
> Because Viktor was stick thin
No shit. This also makes it easier to pass as as a man; once you start gaining weight, those sex differences start becoming clearer.
> To top it all off, Jayce was shirtless, in a pair of ridiculous boxers in pink hearts, a small amount of pudge from his sides peeking out over the edges
So along with cooking bacon shirtless, which is a piss poor idea unless you want to get sparked in the nips from bacon grease, he's a bit of a chubster too. That fat should not be pinchable if he's doing hard labour; that muscle should be absolutely solid. He's a strongman, not a dad bod.
> His belly, Viktor knew, was soft
Looks like we have a barely there fat fetish.
> Viktor wanted Jayce to take him across the breakfast bar right now, holy shit
Really diving right into the trope that pooners want to be fucked 24/7, eh? He later recants this fantasy and gets fucked against a door, because that's somehow better for his back.
> This glorious, strong provider, who managed to carry Viktor up to his apartment when he had slipped on the ice
Wow, what a man! It's not at all giving me vibes of 'I say I am a man but I really want to be taken care of and fucked by one' by the authors! Progshit in the streets, tradwife in the sheets.
> Beside Viktor, who was sitting there wearing Jayce's boxers and Jayce's t-shirt and tucked into his own plate
Is he physically tucked into his own plate? That's a weird position to be in, but uh, plate fucking would be very new!
> For Viktor was now a man provided for
Every pooner's dream.
> Could not remember the last time he had felt unsafe
It is always about safety with these pooners. That's one way you can clock them as female - among other things, but this is the most glaring FEMALE thing imaginable.
> The sharp lines of his hips in contrast to the softness Viktor knew was carried through his midsection
What is this boy eating in between his forge work?
> Ogling admiring
Same difference.
> He might fall prey to the pout that was aleady forming
> Perfect lips, pouting
Which is it?
Spank Bank honestly sounds like a GTA joke. Very close to 'Sperm Bank'. Very on the nose.
> Do you think you can fuck me against the door?
I suppose wood is more comfortable than a marble breakfast bar, but Jesus Christ. That's still going to be bad for your back.
> This would not be particularly comfortable
But the dicking is too good, right?
> Can you just fuck me already?
Straight to the point, I see.
> Viktor was so horny he thought he was going to die and Jayce was laughing
They really did the, 'You're laughing. X is happening and you're laughing' meme.
>His single minded focus on his task
> When he dedicated himself to a task
> Especially when the task
Your task should be limiting the times you use 'task', my dears.
Now, count how many times 'whine' is used here: three times in four paragraphs. Amazing.
> Full staff
You mean 'full mast'?
> He was certain no other dick would make him feel this way; would fill him so well
Also count how many times 'fill him well' is used.
> Jayce had ruined him for all other men
The legacy of the Hispanic Hog strikes again.
> So full of Jayce's wonderful dick that he could barely think
You didn't think about how many times 'filled' would be used.
> Filling Viktor so thoroughly that he thought he was about to start seeing stars
That's three times.
> Pussy stuffed so full of Jayce he thought he must be in heaven
Make that four. Also, are you a turkey? And aren't you already seeing stars? Are you seeing stars in heaven?
> Viktor thought he might just be split like a tree with the force of Jayce, fast and strong forcing his back against the door
Hopefully the door breaks first. What an odd word choice to use.
> He was so full of Jayce
Five.
> He would always be clinging to the man
Very healthy. You're only doing this because he has a big dick and can cook good bacon.
> Viktor was a man starved for most of his life
Cliché.
> He fully planned on gorging himself on Jayce
I'll count this as 'filled', so make it six.
> It felt like too much. It wasn't enough.
Another cliché.
> Before he felt full again
Seven.
>Jayce was so warm
Now count how many times THIS is used. Two times in this screenshot.
> Held his waist between his hands, pointer fingers almost able to touch
Get it? He's an uwu skinny smol trans boi, he's so tiny and cute next to the big dicked, tall and hunky male!
> To feel this warm
Three.
> This safe
Again with the safety. Makes me think OSHA is going to pop up with a violation.
> Stay warm in Jayce's arms
Four.
> By the warm slumber
Five.
> The loss of his warmth
Six.
Two people wrote this and they couldn't count how many times they reused phrases and words. Maybe they were too busy dreaming about getting bent over a breakfast bar to thinking properly?
This one has a sequel in the works, and even has fanart! Hope you love this throwback to GTA Vice City's 'Go West: Call Me', because Jayce looks like an even darker Tommy Vercetti.
If you haven't eaten for a week, that's concerning. You will not consume enough calories for you to keep those muscles and you will start losing weight. Fast.
Oh, fun. A BPD man on medication while drinking is a fun combo. I do not think this author or her beta realize you're not supposed to drink while on anti-psychotic medications. Not eating or sleeping on top of that is going to make the symptoms worse.
> The trash is almost overflowing with paper towels but otherwise, it's clean
So...somewhat clean.
You shouldn't be drinking while on anti-psychotic medications period, you dumbass. That's the fastest way for you to go through an episode and end up on a crime podcast.
Obligatory Ekko reference. I wonder if he knows about the glory hole upstairs?
You called a random number that told you you could get a good time without questions, and the directions led you to a bathroom. What else were you expecting? You'd think a 'gay man' would know exactly what that would mean.
He's heard of glory holes...yet didn't think he was going to go to one. OK, son.
Well then, Viktor doesn't have a gag reflex, as this is Slut Viktor and he can do anything.
> As if the other man were collecting data of Jayce's reactions and storing it away for later
Hehe...like a SPERM BANK, get it?
Looks like Viktor doesn't have the Rapunzel pubes this time, but Jayce does. Please trim that shit; I'm not looking to find a roach infestation in there.
Well then! Looking forward to the sequel? This author plans to post one from Viktor's POV. I'm sure we'll get all the measurements of Jayce's penis and how it's perfectly 10 inches in length. Fun!
I am still not getting over how the one thing that has remained consistent is that they are progshits in the streets, yet tradwives in the sheets, because all they want is to be dominated by an attractive male.
> Cool, humid breeze
Well, humid breezes aren't cool, they're humid.
> If only the wind would bother to reach so far
How is there a breeze, then?
> Zaun hadn't been his home for a long time now
He still considers it his home, as everything he does in Piltover is for the benefit of his people below.
> Piltover had been kind to him in the end
No it hadn't. He still wanted to assimilate everyone and he still faced prejudice. The author later retcons this tidbit.
> Wave in the breeze that cools Viktor's lungs
You just wrote he's so high up the wind doesn't reach him, which A) would be the opposite and B) I thought it was just a breeze?
> Jayce clutching his shoulders in his strong arms
You'll see a lot of that; while it is a simple description, it's something I notice a lot in female-written stories where the focus is all on the hot guy. It's a minor thing but you'll start noticing it more and more.
> Piltover was a hellscape of perpetual judgement and stagnation
1. It is called the City of Progress for a reason and 2. you just wrote that Piltover 'had been kind to him in the end'.
> Big, warm hands to catch him
You'll be seeing 'big, warm hands' a lot. Trust me.
> Until the horizon is swallowed by the darkening storm
That high up, the horizon should BE the clouds, and you should see the full extent of that storm. He's on top of the Hexgates which has to be as tall, if not taller, than the World Trade Center.
> Stretches out over the shoulder of the kneeling figure in silent greeting
This makes me think his arm perpetually stretches out like he's Stretch Armstrong.
> Was this inevitable?
No, not really. All Jayce had to do was talk to you. It just so happens to be inevitable due to the plot.
> I don't think it's healthy for either of us to take on such guilt
...you wiped out entire universes all because you could NOT give a kid a rune. You just could NOT let that kid die in the snow. You absolutely SHOULD take on such guilt because all of this is absolutely your fault. Miss me with that BS.
> Strange, faded tattoos
That he doesn't have. IIRC, he has lines on his fingers, but the original mage was coated with them. That's in the main show, so the fault doesn't lie entirely on the author.
> That he shouldn't have been so reckless, so careless, so idealistic
Nothing wrong with being an idealistic. Hell, we don't even know where the Anomaly even came from, who made it, or if Mage Viktor was the original one who made it. It's a paradox and of course it falls on the pooner to take on the brunt of the guilt.
> That it doesn't matter if he feels guilt or remorse - what's done is done
"Yeah I killed billions of people across multiple timelines...but so what? It's over, bro. Get over it."
> Is who he would have been if he had done the same
You DID do the same. Who are you fooling?
> The strange birds sing alien songs
I thought there were no birds up there?
> Believe it or not, this is a rarity
What happened to, 'in all timelines, in all possibilities, only you could show me this?' We retconning that now?
> It is far from a rarity for him to sacrifice himself for you
I will say this, though: this is far better written than even Queercatfan's shit, because at least it manages to be pretty with the literary language. The Time Machine reference is also a nice touch, and is one of my favourite parts.
> But what if none of it matters
Spoilers: it doesn't, because that is the nature of the multiverse. There is no butterfly effect here, homie.
> A living thing blanketed against the cold
If it's humid up there, it should be 'blanketed against the humidity'.
I do like these flashbacks, though. Very well-written.
> Does this version of Viktor roll up on Jayce's toes to kiss him
Viktor is only six inches shorter than Jayce; he doesn't need to stretch that far. This just outs him as the short pooner.
> With a big hand across the small of his back
Remember what I said? Yeah. Keep a tally, now.
> Why show me this if it still ends up the same?
It doesn't, though. You either end up dead or apart - almost as if the universe wants to spare itself from your existence.
> Even though it hurts, I enjoy reliving them with him, too
He says this while Jayce is a living statue, btw. Utter torture.
> Viktor, the Viktor of this timeline, is nowhere to be seen
And Jayce is now part of the concrete, meaning the world is saved.
> Viktor can't breathe through the realization that at any point Jayce could have been stolen from him in so many ways
You didn't, though? He had no way of knowing. He saved Jayce from suicide and Viktor was the light of his life; he gave him a reason to live. How could he have known about things that likely never would have happened?
These were some of my favourite parts; I do like the worldbuilding in this.
> He speeds up time to spring
Which makes you wonder why he didn't do that in the first place. Man, this Viktor is a sadist.
> So many mistakes, so many points in time they lost each other
Almost as if the universe is better off with the two of you dead, or something.
> At the end of the one timeline that started it all
Which one? Mage Viktor's timeline? He was the one who started the paradox.
> Eigengrau
I haven't seen many authors use this term, but it is effective, for once. No thesaurus sucking.
> Why is it, apart, his entire world shatters, and together they meet the same fate?
Because Fate understands that you need to be wiped out to end the paradox and save the multiverse, simple as.
> Before the loop
That you caused, btw.
> Other timelines. Sometimes, it worked. He won. We both did
And yet, you still died.
> I tried to manipulate one relationship into something new...but never could initiate on our own. It ended all the same
So despite him trying to tweak the timeline, Fate turns against him and spews his meddling right back in his face. It's almost as if the world would be better if said relationship was left alone, eh?
> But failed so many times on the way
This is despite your meddling. You aren't just a sadist, you're a shitty mage. Ryze would never.
> He'd been a fool. A bull-headed, careless fool
Well at least you didn't manipulate entire timelines in order to fix your own relationship and have it backfire on you worse than what's happening to Blake Lively. Talk about cosmic karma.
> Tortured with the burden of knowing the true end of all things
That you cause, and continue to cause
> Of the failure Viktor had already inflicted upon the world
Skill isuse.
> Tide pool teeming with tiny, unique creatures
> Little creatures swirling in a pool
You didn't need to write this twice.
> Broad, treasured shoulders
Perfect for you to be thrown over them, eh?
> His big hands
OK, this is around the fourth time that's been written.
> Viktor had taken for granted the love language he had been too tired and unfocused to recognize
Eh? I thought it was established he WAS aware of it, he just didn't act on it because he didn't want to ruin their friendship? Something ain't right.
> I'm simply glad you realize it now
This is the only time he gets to realize it? This is the first time he's ever met his alternate self?
> Be kind to yourself, and to him. Live your lives
All he's missing is a 'Live, Laugh, Love' poster.
> But a man all the same
Lol. Lmao. All those universes and he's biologically female in every single one.
> Enough has been done there to warrant some rest from them both
You don't get to vacation from mass genocide, sorry. Jumping into a timeline where it never happened isn't character development; it's cowardice. An absolution of guilt that you should not shed.
> For the justice they will never face, for the ruin of the world to eventually sow sees of growth and progress
Because magitech is bad and natural mages are the only ones who should wield it - despite a mage being solely responsible for every crime and decision they've ever made. Logic.
> How idiotic Viktor had been in his chase for immortality when the answer to all his problems had been right under his nose all along
Love wasn't going to cure cancer, sorry bud. You wanting to get dicked down was never going to cure a terminal illness. Blaming a disabled person for wanting to cure themselves, nice going progshits.
> Given a second chance through sheer willpower alone
But it wasn't your decision; it was Mage Viktor's. He was the one who sent you here. His idea of 'breaking the loop' was sending you to a pocket dimension where everything is fine because the alternate versions of you never met...lol
> Like he's finally being seen and heard and listened to
Now, remind me, which sex has the problem with this, again? You mean to tell me that Viktor, a woman pretending to be a man, STILL wasn't listened to or believed? Huh.
> all of Viktor is, was, and will be had always depended on his sound of mind at the expense of his diminishing body
You just wrote he was a fool for trying to fix said diminishing body. You mean to tell me he was 'always meant' to suffer from cancer? Very enlightening from a 'trans and disabled author' if you are one.
> Big, warm hands scooping underneath Viktor's shoulders
How many times does this need to be written?
> A loop that is now broken, thanks to your strength and power of will
It still exists, they're just in a dimension where their alternate selves are either possessed or dead. Viktor never has to suffer the consequences because 'let bygones be bygones' has worked in history, right?
> And attractive, mouth-watering body
The pooner yearns for the big dicked male to dick her down, now and forever.
> All this wasted energy and headspace devoted to pretending they didn't care this much about each other
Wasn't it written earlier that Viktor simply did not KNOW Jayce was into him? That he was ignorant? Now they know, they just didn't do it because of work demands? K, then.
> A fantasy come true from so many lonely nights spent in his cramped apartment
And it only took a few cosmic genocides to get there.
> Tawny brown
He's more of an olive-tone.
> The stolen glances, the so many hugs and gentle touches, the things the both of them ignored for the sake of progress
Again, this retcons what the author wrote earlier on Viktor not even knowing that Jayce felt that way about him. If you're going to write about pining - keep it consistent! I swear I have a better memory than these authors do, and they wrote the damn thing!
> With a growl Viktor finds incredibly attractive
Pooners: progshits in the streets, tradwife in the sheets
> Nothing in any dimension, any timeline, seems impossible now that every barrier has been removed between them
Well you died in the others, because the universe hated you so much, lmao. The multiverse is a TERF.
> His grip around Jayce is not so encompassing as even one of Jayce's hands around himself
Just in case you needed to know who the woman was. And yes, there's a lot of fucking crying during the smut.
> Finds the scars underneath his pectorals with a sense of duty of needing to kiss along the length of them
Surprised he still has sensation in his nipples. Most zippertit procedures involving frying the nips; hell, they even LOOK mangled. This may be fantasy, but why the fuck would you seek a zippertit job over something that could save your life? You chose to lop them off because you hated being female, but didn't want to live? Priorities.
> Broad enough to pin Viktor down with one hand
Of course. It's a pooner's dream to be fucked by a big, well-hung man. Law of averages don't apply here.
> Hungry tongue swiping from twitching hole to the hard peak of Viktor's cock
And there goes my praise for this fic. I had a feeling that the smut was going to go right back to the typical pooner tropes where they can't use 'vagina' in their fic, but have no problem with the 'penis in vagina sex' tag.
> Lips sealing over Viktor's cock to suck and play with the pebbled head
Then it isn't a cock. And wait until you find out how big Jayce is by comparison.
> Jayce drinks from him like he won't find another meal for days after
This cliché again?
> Parting of his mouth from Viktor's cock and cunt
Once again, we are comparing something as small as a school eraser to a Pringles can. Jayce is fucking massive.
> His palm pressing up against his cock
See point above.
> How does Jayce have such incredible reach inside him
Because he has, as you've written many, many times, big hands?
> Pawing at his thick cock
And thick it is.
> Suddenly aware that he's been crying this entire time
Because nothing says, "women can't take accountability" like a trans man crying because he doesn't have to face any consequences for his misdeeds because all he needs is a big cock to 'set him straight'. Who knew?
> Has desired him and devoted so many lonely hours wondering if the two of them could ever be
That's a far cry from the 'I wasn't even aware of his feelings for me' when he was talking to his alternate self. Now he's always loved him and knew right from the beginning they were meant to be together.
> What all those past versions of Viktor would give to experience just a fraction of the love Jayce pins him with in this moment
Except...one version did, the one where they got married and were dancing. Remember that? Clearly not.
> His hands, so wide and calloused with years of forgework
> His middle fingers meeting at Viktor's center to pull apart his wet, soaking core
Now, it's common for authors to write Jayce's hands as so big, and Viktor so uwu smol, that Jayce's hands are big enough to encompass his middle. It's done to highlight the size difference, but it only outs Viktor as the female he is. Male Viktor is not that small; he's just thin from being ill. He has a wider trunk than that.
> The thick spear of Jayce's cock, pushing so far inside Viktor he can taste him in the back of his throat
So thick and long it was used to defeat the Persians in 300.
> Jayce is large, bigger than any other person or toy he has taken
10-12 inches, probably more than 3 inches wide. Every pooner's wet dream. They LOVE big dicks.
> Jayce stretches him so deep and wide Viktor can do nothing except cling to him while he rides him
You are riding the Hispanic Hog, so you need to be ready to take on a fire hydrant, lad.
> Viktor blinks around the tears from both how hungry he is for Jayce's cock and for the orgasm that is quickly building
And yet he sheds no tears for the people he assimilated. Trans men really can't take accountability, can they? Give them a massive cock and they'll be bred just right.
And comparing Viktor's 'cock' with that massive dong is just pure comedy to me. They're so unaware of the juxtaposition.
> Lets Viktor grind his cock down over his stomach
It's barely larger than his belly button. You've got something you 'can taste at the back of his throat' to a mini cupcake.
> His doctors told him of the loss of her fertility so long ago
Cool. Guess those T shots paid off, eh? Just without the sandpaper vagina.
> That has Viktor blinking away emotions he can't readily name
Notice 'regret' isn't one of them. You don't have to answer for genocide when you've got a foot of man meat inside you.
> Viktor can never forgive himself for breaking such a precious man
Your alternate self refused to help him, created that anomaly in the first place, and he shot you in the chest when he could have pleaded for parley. That's on him. Such a convenient forgiveness.
> Mistakes are mistakes, things he can never fix, but this, at least, is a start
"I don't have to answer for a genocide that extended over the multiverse, because mistakes are mistakes. Let bygones be bygones, I can be dicked down now!" If this was a 'cis female' thinking this she'd be raked over the coals. Of course it's only forgivable if it's a man or a trans person.
> Without feeling like a piece of meat cooking in an oven
Interesting choice of words there.
> Threatens such a delicate peace Viktor has carved for them both
Mage Viktor was the one who sent you there, not yourself. He is the one solely responsible for this.
> Viktor knows this is the arcane taking pity on them both
It isn't? It's physically incapable of doing that? You caused a cosmic genocide and it decided 10 inches of dick was the cure? OK, dumbass.
He's kissing the statue of Jayce he made, after he ended the world, because Jayce saved his life and couldn't kill him, and he responded by making everyone automatons and then got bored with the result. Then he tells his alternate self to Live, Laugh, Love in another universe where the Arcane 'takes pity on them' so they can fuck each other for the rest of their days.
Jesus. If the rest of the fic is like this, it definitely warrants a hate read.
Two pooners delivered this work, and play 'fast and loose' with the lore like they do that 'gaping hole' that is Viktor's genitalia.
> He was anxious when things got too hot
Tell me something I don't know.
Based on the way this was written, I initially thought that Viktor was being 'adopted' into these houses as a child; thank God, then, that he's a grown adult. Still weird to have him be 'adopted out' when he isn't an escort or an indentured service.
> Because Viktor was stick thin
No shit. This also makes it easier to pass as as a man; once you start gaining weight, those sex differences start becoming clearer.
> To top it all off, Jayce was shirtless, in a pair of ridiculous boxers in pink hearts, a small amount of pudge from his sides peeking out over the edges
So along with cooking bacon shirtless, which is a piss poor idea unless you want to get sparked in the nips from bacon grease, he's a bit of a chubster too. That fat should not be pinchable if he's doing hard labour; that muscle should be absolutely solid. He's a strongman, not a dad bod.
> His belly, Viktor knew, was soft
Looks like we have a barely there fat fetish.
> Viktor wanted Jayce to take him across the breakfast bar right now, holy shit
Really diving right into the trope that pooners want to be fucked 24/7, eh? He later recants this fantasy and gets fucked against a door, because that's somehow better for his back.
> This glorious, strong provider, who managed to carry Viktor up to his apartment when he had slipped on the ice
Wow, what a man! It's not at all giving me vibes of 'I say I am a man but I really want to be taken care of and fucked by one' by the authors! Progshit in the streets, tradwife in the sheets.
> Beside Viktor, who was sitting there wearing Jayce's boxers and Jayce's t-shirt and tucked into his own plate
Is he physically tucked into his own plate? That's a weird position to be in, but uh, plate fucking would be very new!
> For Viktor was now a man provided for
Every pooner's dream.
> Could not remember the last time he had felt unsafe
It is always about safety with these pooners. That's one way you can clock them as female - among other things, but this is the most glaring FEMALE thing imaginable.
> The sharp lines of his hips in contrast to the softness Viktor knew was carried through his midsection
What is this boy eating in between his forge work?
> Ogling admiring
Same difference.
> He might fall prey to the pout that was aleady forming
> Perfect lips, pouting
Which is it?
Spank Bank honestly sounds like a GTA joke. Very close to 'Sperm Bank'. Very on the nose.
> Do you think you can fuck me against the door?
I suppose wood is more comfortable than a marble breakfast bar, but Jesus Christ. That's still going to be bad for your back.
> This would not be particularly comfortable
But the dicking is too good, right?
> Can you just fuck me already?
Straight to the point, I see.
> Viktor was so horny he thought he was going to die and Jayce was laughing
They really did the, 'You're laughing. X is happening and you're laughing' meme.
>His single minded focus on his task
> When he dedicated himself to a task
> Especially when the task
Your task should be limiting the times you use 'task', my dears.
Now, count how many times 'whine' is used here: three times in four paragraphs. Amazing.
> Full staff
You mean 'full mast'?
> He was certain no other dick would make him feel this way; would fill him so well
Also count how many times 'fill him well' is used.
> Jayce had ruined him for all other men
The legacy of the Hispanic Hog strikes again.
> So full of Jayce's wonderful dick that he could barely think
You didn't think about how many times 'filled' would be used.
> Filling Viktor so thoroughly that he thought he was about to start seeing stars
That's three times.
> Pussy stuffed so full of Jayce he thought he must be in heaven
Make that four. Also, are you a turkey? And aren't you already seeing stars? Are you seeing stars in heaven?
> Viktor thought he might just be split like a tree with the force of Jayce, fast and strong forcing his back against the door
Hopefully the door breaks first. What an odd word choice to use.
> He was so full of Jayce
Five.
> He would always be clinging to the man
Very healthy. You're only doing this because he has a big dick and can cook good bacon.
> Viktor was a man starved for most of his life
Cliché.
> He fully planned on gorging himself on Jayce
I'll count this as 'filled', so make it six.
> It felt like too much. It wasn't enough.
Another cliché.
> Before he felt full again
Seven.
>Jayce was so warm
Now count how many times THIS is used. Two times in this screenshot.
> Held his waist between his hands, pointer fingers almost able to touch
Get it? He's an uwu skinny smol trans boi, he's so tiny and cute next to the big dicked, tall and hunky male!
> To feel this warm
Three.
> This safe
Again with the safety. Makes me think OSHA is going to pop up with a violation.
> Stay warm in Jayce's arms
Four.
> By the warm slumber
Five.
> The loss of his warmth
Six.
Two people wrote this and they couldn't count how many times they reused phrases and words. Maybe they were too busy dreaming about getting bent over a breakfast bar to thinking properly?
This one has a sequel in the works, and even has fanart! Hope you love this throwback to GTA Vice City's 'Go West: Call Me', because Jayce looks like an even darker Tommy Vercetti.
If you haven't eaten for a week, that's concerning. You will not consume enough calories for you to keep those muscles and you will start losing weight. Fast.
Oh, fun. A BPD man on medication while drinking is a fun combo. I do not think this author or her beta realize you're not supposed to drink while on anti-psychotic medications. Not eating or sleeping on top of that is going to make the symptoms worse.
> The trash is almost overflowing with paper towels but otherwise, it's clean
So...somewhat clean.
You shouldn't be drinking while on anti-psychotic medications period, you dumbass. That's the fastest way for you to go through an episode and end up on a crime podcast.
Obligatory Ekko reference. I wonder if he knows about the glory hole upstairs?
You called a random number that told you you could get a good time without questions, and the directions led you to a bathroom. What else were you expecting? You'd think a 'gay man' would know exactly what that would mean.
He's heard of glory holes...yet didn't think he was going to go to one. OK, son.
Well then, Viktor doesn't have a gag reflex, as this is Slut Viktor and he can do anything.
> As if the other man were collecting data of Jayce's reactions and storing it away for later
Hehe...like a SPERM BANK, get it?
Looks like Viktor doesn't have the Rapunzel pubes this time, but Jayce does. Please trim that shit; I'm not looking to find a roach infestation in there.
Well then! Looking forward to the sequel? This author plans to post one from Viktor's POV. I'm sure we'll get all the measurements of Jayce's penis and how it's perfectly 10 inches in length. Fun!
It would not surprise me at all if T was the reason why this woman's hormones were all over the place, as T is damaging to the uterus. They will gloss over these issues as that would make them look bad in the eyes of their community. Who cares if your vagina rots and bleeds from testosterone poisoning when you can promote a fantasy that everything will work the same, if not better?
Not to mention men had the option of refusing wives until they found the one they wanted; women normally did not have this choice unless they had a wealthy family member in tune with her wants. That one fic where he's a prince trying to score prostitutes would not raise eyebrows in a royal family as, back in the day, prostitutes (clean ones) were often presented to princes as 'gifts' for them to experience manhood.
It is funny to see the people who despise the institution of marriage...write so vehemently about how it's sacred. Well then how about you get married, boo?
Worse: they take a male character and slap a vagina on them, and then they occupy the 'female role' while keeping a male identity. They are uncomfortable with female bodies, yet don't like the man they desire to be having a dick, so they make them have normal heterosexual sex while saying it's the opposite. It's a way for them to skirt the usual clichés and tropes while using said tropes and being praised.
I am still not getting over how the one thing that has remained consistent is that they are progshits in the streets, yet tradwives in the sheets, because all they want is to be dominated by an attractive male.