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A tumbler furfag decided to self-immolate on the fires of autism. As usual in these threads a couple others are trying to join him.
Edit:I'm just here for the shitstorm
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Allen John Jones III / Coolbreeze88 / Ambition1394 / XBLspartanx170 / Webmaster16 / NoName360 / Axis - A Modern Gallelio: Alt-Right, Black Cock Enthusiast, PK A-Log, TGWTG Fanboy, Bath Salts User
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Edit:I'm just here for the shitstorm
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Egotistical little jackass furry attempted to make us rally against PK, and then made himself into a lolcow.
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@BlueBlob have you interacted with Cool breeze before?
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Eh, his heart seems to be in the right place. We've been here so long that we've forgotten that most normies would find Mr. 88's comments on autism objectionable.
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Let it go already.
EDIT: Has CB88 come back since his disappearance yesterday or was it just a flashbang of stupidity?
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Not really. Just seen him around.
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Are you fearing that, perhaps, this guy is giving you TRUE and HONEST autists a bad name if he's wrongly confused for one of your people?
The reason for that seems to be that noone else would be willing to say, let alone quote, such nonsense.
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Around where? He just joined here yesterday.
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A+ thread, would watch OP halal self again
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I'd li667
6sz SD ea 6 fsRega Hellside Detour Chapter 1: The Theif
So this is CB88's fursona story. First off, what a title! A truly great title invites the reader to ask questions. What or who is Rega? Where is Hellside and why are we taking a detour through it? Searching for "rega" turned up a company called Rega Research Ltd but somehow I don't think this story is about them.
Here we go, the first couple sentences of our story. This is where most writers will take the time to peak our interest, introduce a character, or establish setting. CB88, genius that he is, does at least two.
What masterful characterization. CB88 lets us know right away that Rega's optimism and confidence are unwarranted, a clear hint of challenges ahead for our oblivious hero.
Okay, I can't be sarcastic anymore. What the hell am I reading?
You can't just drop a new concept like "Seekers" on top of the reader without establishing something about them. Are the Seekers our villains? Why is "Seekers" capitalized but Rega's name is not? What is "a path much less traveled"? Are we talking about a metaphorical path or the literal path Rega is walking down? Who are "they" and are they different from Seekers? I'm so baffled.
Lumbering - moving in a slow, heavy, awkward way.
I've also just noticed that CB88 has a bad habit of switching from past to present tense. This is an amateur mistake. So is neglecting proper capitalization and using "their" instead of "there" but I hope you'll forgive me for omitting the obvious.
By the way, so far each quote has represented a new paragraph. Most of CB88's "paragraphs" are only a sentence long. Using single sentence paragraphs may be a stylistic choice but not this early and never this often.
What kind of business route travels over a mountain? And what is a "selective on behemoth automotive hauling machine"? If CB88 is trying to say that Raga is hiking through an abandoned logging camp then he should have just, well, said that.
Or use his smart phone's GPS for that matter.
CB88 thinks he's the Kurt Vonnegut of furry literature.
Again, why capitalize the names of places but not the start of your sentences? I'm starting to miss Chris Chan's writing.
I'm loving these place names, too: West Jew Pass, Jew York, and the Town of Ridgeland. Way to create a theme.
Confirmation that Rega is a pedo?
A genius plan to hike to an abandoned mill on a mountain in the middle of the woods and call a cab. I can't see what could possibly go wrong.
Access to a pocket dimension is an awesome super power, but Raga wastes it by storing stuff he could fit in a backpack without any trouble.
This paragraph comes out of nowhere to let us know that Rega has the tendency to fly into homicidal rages. It also implies that he set a building on fire because he couldn't handle an eating contest. I'm starting to see why he hates background checks.
A lot of amateur writers do this thing where they withhold innocuous information in the first chapter in a sad attempt to stimulate the reader's curiosity, such as a character's name or appearance. In actuality the first chapter is where the author should be revealing the most information so that we the audience have a baseline to understand the world of the story, the characters inside it, and what is at stake. Refusing to tell us anything about Rega's profession isn't building suspense, it's just annoying.
WHAT THE FUCK IS A ROCK CANDY.
Rega's murderous rage returns as he rips a shotgun straight out of his furry asshole.
Thought you had a map, dipshit.
Unfounded - having no foundation or basis in fact.
And then the blue furry fell into Hell and died, the end.
If I do another one of these I'll pick a different story. This was a hard read.
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Godbear bless, this is beautiful. Thank you, @coolbreeze88, for your total lack of self-preservation, you Christmas miracle.
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Oh come now friend. You can tell me. Don't ignore me. It hurts my feelings when I'm ignored.
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Rega Hellside Detour Chapter 1: The Theif
So this is CB88's fursona story. First off, what a title! A truly great title invites the reader to ask questions. What or who is Rega? Where is Hellside and why are we taking a detour through it? Searching for "rega" turned up a company called Rega Research Ltd but somehow I don't think this story is about them.
Here we go, the first couple sentences of our story. This is where most writers will take the time to peak our interest, introduce a character, or establish setting. CB88, genius that he is, does at least two.
What masterful characterization. CB88 lets us know right away that Rega's optimism and confidence are unwarranted, a clear hint of challenges ahead for our oblivious hero.
You can't just drop a new concept like "Seekers" on top of the reader without establishing something about them. Are the Seekers our villains? Why is "Seekers" capitalized but Rega's name is not? What is "a path much less traveled"? Are we talking about a metaphorical path or the literal path Rega is walking down? Who are "they" and are they different from Seekers? I'm so baffled.
Lumbering - moving in a slow, heavy, awkward way.
I've also just noticed that CB88 has a bad habit of switching from past to present tense. This is an amateur mistake. So is neglecting proper capitalization and using "their" instead of "there" but I hope you'll forgive me for omitting the obvious.
By the way, so far each quote has represented a new paragraph. Most of CB88's "paragraphs" are only a sentence long. Using single sentence paragraphs may be a stylistic choice but not this early and never this often.
What kind of business route travels over a mountain? And what is a "selective on behemoth automotive hauling machine"? If CB88 is trying to say that Raga is hiking through an abandoned logging camp then he should have just, well, said that.
Or use his smart phone's GPS for that matter.
CB88 thinks he's the Kurt Vonnegut of furry literature.
Again, why capitalize the names of places but not the start of your sentences? I'm starting to miss Chris Chan's writing.
I'm loving these place names, too: West Jew Pass, Jew York, and the Town of Ridgeland. Way to create a theme.
Confirmation that Rega is a pedo?
A genius plan to hike to an abandoned mill on a mountain in the middle of the woods and call a cab. I can't see what could possibly go wrong.
Access to a pocket dimension is an awesome super power, but Raga wastes it by storing stuff he could fit in a backpack without any trouble.
This paragraph comes out of nowhere to let us know that Rega has the tendency to fly into homicidal rages. It also implies that he set a building on fire because he couldn't handle an eating contest. I'm starting to see why he hates background checks.
A lot of amateur writers do this thing where they withhold innocuous information in the first chapter in a sad attempt to stimulate the reader's curiosity, such as a character's name or appearance. In actuality the first chapter is where the author should be revealing the most information so that we the audience have a baseline to understand the world of the story, the characters inside it, and what is at stake. Refusing to tell us anything about Rega's profession isn't building suspense, it's just annoying.
WHAT THE FUCK IS A ROCK CANDY.
Rega's murderous rage returns as he rips a shotgun straight out of his furry asshole.
Thought you had a map, dipshit.
Unfounded - having no foundation or basis in fact.
And then the blue furry fell into Hell and died, the end.
If I do another one of these I'll pick a different story. This was a hard read.
I cracked up on reading the first sentence. This is "My Immortal"-level of godly.
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Clearly they’re roommates/gay lovers. You know, like SolidMario amd @DarthChaos.
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around the back alley, giving niggers blowjobs
Frozen Fishsticks
kiwifarms.net
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Give him time to get home from school, do his chores and homework, and a 45 minutes cooldown period where his mom restrains him with pillows while he screeches about animated ponies and/or Sonic. Then he get to go on dad's computer before bedtime.
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Oh that many guys sword fighting together....totes not gay