Opening paragraphs are okay at best, Rey excitedly exploring aliana's ship even if it's inaccurate to the actual lore of the Fury class intercepter (I don't remember who of you guys shit on the depiction first, but whatever) it's described as so heavily modded that it almost feels trivial to point it out.
I don't know if it speaks to my inexperience with Star Wars Fanfiction, the quality of the sequel Trilogy's writing or what, but reys's characterization when not obsessed about aliana almost feels decent.
lot of back and forth dialogue between Rey and Aliana, mostly talking about backstory stuff detailing how Aliana has bartered to getting her ship how it is, and why she doesn't go to any of the core systems, and in a hilarious narrative move that can only be described as "lily" esplains the answer as because she dresses like a jedi and has a lightsaber on her waist.
I'm not joking. It's hilarious because swap out the word lightsaber with "Youtube channel" and suddenly it's literally just lily.
When asked "So why don't you just not take the lightsaber with you" the answer is 'because it keeps trouble away more than it causes trouble" which I guess works.
This chapter is mostly just back and forth dialogue with Rey and Aliana. a lot of this stuff was stuff with Finn in episode 7 so it feels kinda dumb
There's a paragraph where Aliana debates breaking the hard news to Rey that her parents are gone.
Finally something that's interesting. Aliana discloses her tragic backstory where her mom gets murdered, detailing an unprovoked attack by jedi and the jedi's padawan and killed her mother in two on one battle before trying to kill her. Details she managed to get into the fury and just ran. scene ends in them doing an emotional comforting hand touch.
So somewhere it was either deliberately left out of the first chapters or I missed it, but apparently Aliana just had Poe in a coma in the ships medbay and just decided taking him to a Resistance safehouse was a smart move. So either I'm stupid or lily deliberately withheld information in her writing. They pass Poe over to Senator in charge of the Safe house and then leave. I'm going to give credit where it's due and say that at the very least this is better than Poe just showing up at the end of episode 7 with no explanation
We transition to a scene from the perspective of Hux. Lily's hateboner for Kylo Ren is blindingly bright through the sheer level of disdain Hux has for Kylo Ren, making it sound like the first order would actually be better off with out a force user in their ranks.
Exchange between Hux and Kylo, breaks down into immediate violent manchild breakdown. I'll be honest with you, it's kind of amazing how with the one emotional outbreak from episode 7, the amount of people immediately jumping on this idea that Kylo can bearly hold in any emotion kind of gives the idea that no one really fucking gets it.
The more I read Lily's portrayal of Kylo Ren the more I get the vibe she's aiming for "Darth Helmet cosplayer, but trying to ignore the fact Spaceballs was a comedy, and somehow that makes it more funny"
The scene ends with this.
I sure hope lily has plans to make an actual antagonist for the rewrite because otherwise it's gonna be really, really boring with how little she cares about Kylo Ren, who is the primary antagonist. Also, it speaks to how little lily gives a shit about the fact that it was implied that, if not vader, than
someone was talking to Ren through the helmet
We immediately swap back to Aliana and Rey
Rey has given Aliana a nickname with the justification of them being friends. Aliana blushes because gay.
a moment of near self awareness happens where Aliana subconciously makes items around her float in the air with her force powers because being near Rey makes her passion flare up, and because- Well I'm just gonna screen shot the dumb thing.
it feels self-aware, but I can't even be sure because this is Lily Orchard we're talking about.
Rey has no idea what soup is.
Rey also doesn't know what "Gay" is. Aliana just came out to Rey.
Apparently Rey didn't even know it was an option. I know Rey spent her whole ass life on Jakku, but I didn't think she was sheltered.
Theres an short narrative bit about how lgbt people are oppressed across the hutt ran parts of the galaxy, the republic, and the first order. It feels as natural as it sounds.
Also rey inadvertently flirts with Aliana, realises it's the third time she's done it, and has no idea why she is doing it.
also there's a throw away line about kids not being named Anakin anymore in the aftermath of the empire falling and...How widely known was the name Anakin and the association to the empire?
The chapter ends
It's divergent, but cotton candy like in how insubstantial the whole thing is.
eh, whatever/10
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