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That settles it. At this point Labelle is just phoning it in.
Sophie Labelle Verville / Guillaume Labelle / Serious Trans Vibes Comics / Assigned Male / Candycore Comics / Pastel Sexy Times / WafflesArt - Obnoxious webcomics and horrific porn by a crazy fat pedo troon
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Billy's been phoning it in for a while. I think he's been forced to pick up his $3,000 stylus because his tours and books aren't drawing the numbers like they used to.
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Stephie clearly broke her arm jerking herself off.
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Now I am no JK Rowling best seller myself, but this page is shoddily written and hard to follow. In fact, why does he begins this story with Ciel's recollection of what he did, it's the same pattern with the comics, the characters do everything interesting offscreen. This is the very first page, and you have ONE sentence that is making the story go forward (moving forward as from point A to point B to C, etc...), and it's just describing the teacher's action. The rest is just a flashback that contributes nothing, since none of the other characters will be made aware of all that information. Billy's wasting his readers time, as usual. At the very least, if it was a setup for something interesting.
Billy could have had the story begin the previous night, with Ciel making the decision to go to the hairdresser. Then, you would have the dialogue with the hairdresser, where the information above about Ciel's change in haircut would be provided during the actual interaction and action between the hairdresser and Ciel. He could have described the various stages of the hair-change process and Ciel's impressions of say, getting his scalp scratched and enjoying it a little too much because he's a creep, etc...
And what is this sentence: "Too sensible for my liking". How is a haircut too sensible? Does Sophie means "sensitive"? That doesn't even make any more sense. Probably had no money for a professional translator.
Taking the first page from Harry Potter, Rowling characterizes and sets up very important characters, and then at the end, she teases the reader that they have a secret, to make them want to keep reading. The description is brief - 4 sentences and the whole family is characterized.
Labelle cannot even setup Ciel's appearance description in 6!
Billy could have had the story begin the previous night, with Ciel making the decision to go to the hairdresser. Then, you would have the dialogue with the hairdresser, where the information above about Ciel's change in haircut would be provided during the actual interaction and action between the hairdresser and Ciel. He could have described the various stages of the hair-change process and Ciel's impressions of say, getting his scalp scratched and enjoying it a little too much because he's a creep, etc...
And what is this sentence: "Too sensible for my liking". How is a haircut too sensible? Does Sophie means "sensitive"? That doesn't even make any more sense. Probably had no money for a professional translator.
Taking the first page from Harry Potter, Rowling characterizes and sets up very important characters, and then at the end, she teases the reader that they have a secret, to make them want to keep reading. The description is brief - 4 sentences and the whole family is characterized.
Labelle cannot even setup Ciel's appearance description in 6!
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The first few paragraphs of a book are the most important. The opening is what usually sticks with readers the longest and an author has only those few sentences to drop you into a world and provide a hook.
Rowling clearly cared about her reader and her story.
Labelle? Obnoxious first person narration, way too much useless exposition and absolutely not a hint of narrative or world building.
The book is going to be like this the whole way through, isn't it? Ciel narrating his way through a mundane life. It reads like a first draft, like notes on a novel. A real story would start somewhere like the night before when Ciel had left the hairdresser. You could actually show the self doubt or whatever, with a build of tension when they got to school.
But nah, gib me troonbux for my art please
Rowling clearly cared about her reader and her story.
Labelle? Obnoxious first person narration, way too much useless exposition and absolutely not a hint of narrative or world building.
The book is going to be like this the whole way through, isn't it? Ciel narrating his way through a mundane life. It reads like a first draft, like notes on a novel. A real story would start somewhere like the night before when Ciel had left the hairdresser. You could actually show the self doubt or whatever, with a build of tension when they got to school.
But nah, gib me troonbux for my art please
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This is the far-left equivalent of books for Christian little girls who always say their prayers and do the right thing.
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I don’t think it’s necessarily bad to open with the haircut exchange, if it’s important. Say, Ciel’s seeking Frank’s approval or he’s worried about his appearance. If it’s part of the wider character theme. But I’d stop at “I’m flattered he noticed” and come back to the details later.
I also find the sentence “Nathaniel Brazeau, our science and technology teacher, takes his place in front of us with a pile of documents,” very clunky. Say “M. Brazeau takes his place at the front of the class,” and that tells us he’s the teacher. The science and technology aspect will come up naturally during the scene (presumably) and you can introduce the documents later. Nobody’s going to scream “plot hole” if the teacher hands out documents that weren’t mentioned earlier, he’s a teacher. If the documents are important, I’d say something like, “We eye the documents in his hand with suspicion.”
Generally, shorter, punchier sentences are needed at this point. You can write a great novel with longer sentences at the beginning, but nobody picked up Moby Dick because it’s a thrill-a-minute page-turner.
I also find the sentence “Nathaniel Brazeau, our science and technology teacher, takes his place in front of us with a pile of documents,” very clunky. Say “M. Brazeau takes his place at the front of the class,” and that tells us he’s the teacher. The science and technology aspect will come up naturally during the scene (presumably) and you can introduce the documents later. Nobody’s going to scream “plot hole” if the teacher hands out documents that weren’t mentioned earlier, he’s a teacher. If the documents are important, I’d say something like, “We eye the documents in his hand with suspicion.”
Generally, shorter, punchier sentences are needed at this point. You can write a great novel with longer sentences at the beginning, but nobody picked up Moby Dick because it’s a thrill-a-minute page-turner.
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He means "too conventional", not speshuel enough. Indeed the whole paragraph reads like My Immortal without the over-the-top fun.
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I can't believe I'm saying this, but the opening paragraph would be more suitable if Stephie was the main character. Trying to appear female is a big part of her character, so having someone comment on her hair could display her worries about passing. As it is, it makes Ciel look conceited, unless personal appearance/fitting in is a big part of the book.
What is the plot of the novel, anyway? The blurb doesn't give us much to go on: It doesn't tell us of an antagonist or really much a problem that Ciel has to face. It just tells us they're busy with the LGBT club, Youtube and a science project. Yeah, they're busy, but why should we care?
What is the plot of the novel, anyway? The blurb doesn't give us much to go on: It doesn't tell us of an antagonist or really much a problem that Ciel has to face. It just tells us they're busy with the LGBT club, Youtube and a science project. Yeah, they're busy, but why should we care?
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The entire push for troon rights can be summed up with this sentence. Go ahead, chop your dick off and wear a dress, but don't turn it into a political statement. It shouldn't be surprising that a troon novel is entirely self centered navel gazing.
The documents line just reads wrong too. Are we to believe this is a child's inner monologue?
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Come to think of it, how old are Stephie and Ciel? I remember the former was 11 when the comic started. I THINK they might be 13/14 by now?
The vast majority of you are not French native speaker, but there is something that bothered me the first time I read "Assignée Garçon". This expression is simply incorrect.
The verb "assigner" comes from Latin "assignare", and then gave "to assign" in English. Those verbs, in all three languages, are used with a direct object and an indirect object (accusative and dative for the Latin one).
The French sentence "On a assigné 'garçon' à ce bébé" translates into "Someone assigned this baby 'male'". In passive form, we have, respectively, "'Garçon' a été assigné à ce bébé" and "This baby was assigned 'male'".
A bad translation of the English passive form would be "Ce bébé a été assigné 'garçon'" (only the direct object can become the subject of the French passive form). That is the form used in the title "Assignée Garçon".
I don't know for Québec, but in France we learn the passive form at 12 years old (second year of middle school).
The verb "assigner" comes from Latin "assignare", and then gave "to assign" in English. Those verbs, in all three languages, are used with a direct object and an indirect object (accusative and dative for the Latin one).
The French sentence "On a assigné 'garçon' à ce bébé" translates into "Someone assigned this baby 'male'". In passive form, we have, respectively, "'Garçon' a été assigné à ce bébé" and "This baby was assigned 'male'".
A bad translation of the English passive form would be "Ce bébé a été assigné 'garçon'" (only the direct object can become the subject of the French passive form). That is the form used in the title "Assignée Garçon".
I don't know for Québec, but in France we learn the passive form at 12 years old (second year of middle school).
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English version 4 days latter
https://assignedmale.tumblr.com/post/666122481529241600 (Archive)
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https://www.facebook.com/assigneegarcon/photos/a.1441344799487909/3067218006900572
T-shirt design from https://www.facebook.com/sorsdemesbobettes/
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https://www.lesoleil.com/actualite/...es-dangereux-e3fcefd27a873c60032f3035a12ab2fe (Archive)
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https://assigneegarcon.tumblr.com/post/666122461475192832 (Archive)
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T-shirt design from https://www.facebook.com/sorsdemesbobettes/
https://www.facebook.com/sorsdemesbobettes/posts/110942041373440
https://www.facebook.com/sorsdemesbobettes/posts/112773477856963
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I attempted to recreate this pose at my desk and I have to say my shoulder hurts like hell now. So either Stephie has some hypermobility OR ( the real reason) LaBelle cannot into anatomy. Like all he had to do was turn the torso a little bit and the lean in would be believable. Like this is basic shit and LaBelle can't even do that right.
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There’s something just so offputting and retarded about that tiger drawing and I can’t exactly put my finger on it, but I fucking hate it. It just... looks faggy.
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Doesnt Labelle want to be an officially recognized class given special protections based on publicly stated identity? You can't do that without being outed in this case so...
...am I missing something here?
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The fuck is Billy worried about being outed for anyways? He no longer lives in Canada and won't ever shut up about how trans he is. Not to mention troons get special treatment in Canada anyways. ADDITIONALLY these fucktards wanted more checkboxes on forms, documents, and whatnot, than "male" and "female" so they're literally getting what they've been asking for and are now getting their manties in a bunch over it. You're literally getting what you asked for and are now mad about it because it will remove all this "oppression" you keep beating people over the head with for ez pitybux.
What I don't understand is how this will lead to "forced sterilization". Like binch you and the rest of the genderspecials already did that by going whole hog on HRT. You've already fucked up your own gender markers and body chemistry with Chinese horse piss pills.
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It looks like a chubby cartoon child. Short limbs, fat body, very large eyes, ridiculously colorful clothes. It's basically a toddler. Which makes this version, with the underwear logo on the T-shirt, incredibly paedophilic. And we know his background. We know this interpretation is not reading too much into it.
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For me, I think it’s the fact that Labelle doesn’t seem to know whether he’s going for a realistic tiger or a cartoony one, so none of the features really mesh together. Like, it has fairly realistic eyes, but the mouth is just a hole. It has tiger paws on the end of human arms that make it look like it’s wearing mittens (how did it put the rollerblades on?).
While I don’t think tracing is a good idea, it’s very clear that trying anything more ambitious is beyond the limits of Billy’s ability.