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Well, you can't spell ELLIPSES without ELLIS!Nothing punches up dialog like...ellipses...everywhere...you can...squeeze them in.
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Well, you can't spell ELLIPSES without ELLIS!Nothing punches up dialog like...ellipses...everywhere...you can...squeeze them in.
Maybe the Boston Brands of this world can help here, but the phrasing "she came upon a realization" seems so awkward. 'Upon' is too formal for this usage, and I don't think 'to' can be substituted for 'upon', anyway; a realization is a sudden thing.
I see no reason she couldn't say: "She realized," except for the fact that exact phrase appears only a few sentences before.Maybe the Boston Brands of this world can help here, but the phrasing "she came upon a realization" seems so awkward. 'Upon' is too formal for this usage, and I don't think 'to' can be substituted for 'upon', anyway; a realization is a sudden thing.
And her naming a character, 'Ampersand', is fucking embarrassing: doubly so if it connotes some kind of ironic character trait that they need/want/desire companionship like their namesake.
So... very... drunk.Nothing punches up dialog like...ellipses...everywhere...you can...squeeze them in.
I agree. It's something an 11th grader would find clever dropping in his literature class's short story assignment.And her naming a character, 'Ampersand', is fucking embarrassing: doubly so if it connotes some kind of ironic character trait that they need/want/desire companionship like their namesake.
As they say... The Review Must Go On"At least I'm doing better than Channel Awesome."
Lets check in on them... oh dear.
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Looks like someone has another reason to drink.
It reads like someone trying to replicate dialog between humans and other civilizations in an episode of Star Trek. Like if someone from Starfleet was talking to a Ferengi or something, but it doesn't come off right, Im not sure how to explain it.
Channel Awesome lives rent free in her head."At least I'm doing better than Channel Awesome."
Lets check in on them... oh dear.
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Looks like someone has another reason to drink.
And in the heads of a few people at least.Channel Awesome lives rent free in her head.
The human side of the dialogue reads as more unnatural, stilted and awkward than the alien. It seems like Lindsay doesn't actually relate much to Cora as a protagonist but more to Ampersand and Kaveh. A lonely chicken alien and a world-weary but observant cynical optimist are more accessible to her mindset than a 20 something idpol label collector with trauma issues. Weird word choices all around.It reads like someone trying to replicate dialog between humans and other civilizations in an episode of Star Trek. Like if someone from Starfleet was talking to a Ferengi or something, but it doesn't come off right, Im not sure how to explain it.
I love this, its like the most hackneyed Star Trek premise possible. 'You humans eat animal flesh? How incomprehensible, and barbaric'.
I love this, its like the most hackneyed Star Trek premise possible. 'You humans eat animal flesh? How incomprehensible, and barbaric'.
I always find this an annoying cliche anyway since an intelligent creature will probably have come from an evolutionary pathway with at least some predatory behaviour (hunting tends to correlate with higher intelligence compared to more passive ways of finding nutrition, and meat can be a very valuable quick infusion of calories for a creature with a energetically demanding brain), the concept of eating meat shouldn't be that foreign to them.
Considering Ellis seems to be indulging her fetish for bug-horse aliens that snag mates with a questionable approach to consent she might as well have just went all in and found the most depraved and horrendous mating strategies in nature and attached them to the aliens."More refined" aliens are utopian trash fantasies anyway. Give me an advanced culture based on the mating habits of anglerfish. "You mean you human males don't nibble on a vastly larger female until her acidic flesh dissolves your lips so that you fuse to her body, at which point you slowly shrivel away to naught but a pair of gonads jutting from her grotesque corpus? How revolting!"
It's not something new. Since Blip didn't have visible views, people assumed TGWTG contributors were more popular than they really were. When they moved to YT, the truth came out.Oh man, someone really needs to burst their bubble that Lindsay is making "millions" on any of her books.
One week on a bestseller list doesn't mean jack shit when the book's in clearance bins at wholesalers within half a year.
Yeah pretty much. The only way we knew what views they had was if they told us themselves like Linkara and Mike Michaud talking about viewership of NC.It's not something new. Since Blip didn't have visible views, people assumed TGWTG contributors were more popular than they really were. When they moved to YT, the truth came out.
I love this, its like the most hackneyed Star Trek premise possible. 'You humans eat animal flesh? How incomprehensible, and barbaric'.
That Aaron Lewis song is pretty shit but it was low hanging fruit. Whining about the statues in the music video was a better choice than other directions he could have gone, like sperging about Rittenhouse. The video felt rushed and minimal effort IMO, I think I kind of laughed once? maybe? but I wasn't familiar with a lot of the songs. The nice thing with sponsorship is he isn't splitting the lists into two videos for more money. Makes me a bit sad though, because I recently rewatched his OHW on Coven's One Tin Soldier and damned if it wasn't funny and informative in a way he hasn't been in a while. Todd, Lindsay, etc really did ruin their humor with politics; there's little funny about a sanctimonious wokescold pontificating about pop culture. It's a shame really.I wouldn't bother handing out half a guess on which song is number one on the list.
I wouldn't bother handing out half a guess on which song is number one on the list.
Won't debate if Todd deserves a thread or not because it seems OHW and TW are good enough that he's spared that fate (for now), but I WILL say that we know the avenue that could lead to him having one now.That Aaron Lewis song is pretty shit but it was low hanging fruit. Whining about the statues in the music video was a better choice than other directions he could have gone, like sperging about Rittenhouse. The video felt rushed and minimal effort IMO, I think I kind of laughed once? maybe? but I wasn't familiar with a lot of the songs. The nice thing with sponsorship is he isn't splitting the lists into two videos for more money. Makes me a bit sad though, because I recently rewatched his OHW on Coven's One Tin Soldier and damned if it wasn't funny and informative in a way he hasn't been in a while. Todd, Lindsay, etc really did ruin their humor with politics; there's little funny about a sanctimonious wokescold pontificating about pop culture. It's a shame really.