Two Gorillion Dollars
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Is this prose as painful on the eyes as I think it is?
It's pretty badly written ("amidst the chaos of an ancient curse?") but it's also poorly conceived. This is an awful, generic pitch that sounds like a million different YA stories. It tells me nothing about the world, Emerence's place in it, or the plot of the story and the choices Emerence will make throughout it -- what's her journey, what are the stakes? That's the key part of a a pitch like that. Your ancient curse and resurrected gods don't mean anything if you don't hook me on Em's journey immediately, Kayla! Why Em have to fight to find "her place in the world" (nice generic term) and why is that important to her?
"When Hughie's girlfriend is vaporized in broad daylight by an uncaring superhero, he is approached by the mysterious Butcher who offers him revenge on the one responsible. But as the true extent of Butcher's murderous goals become clear, Hughie must choose between his desire for vengeance and his desire to remain human."
Honestly, the love story with a statue sounds like the most interesting part of her novel, yet that summary doesn't focus on it at all. I've read a lot of novels dealing with ancient curses and dark powers rising again. I don't think I've read any dealing with a statue waifu.
That publisher seems like a pretty shady outfit, though. And it looks like they've deleted both their Twitter account and website. That's why you go through agents instead of throwing your stories at whatever little website claims to be a publishing company and offers to sign you based on your sample chapters. Agents are bullshit but they have a vested interest in actually getting you signed by someone reputable.
I'm also so sick of quirky about the author bios.