Seeing as the hot goss right now is about the Jeff fanfic, I have to say, it's actually not half badly written... In the sense that at least the majority of it reads smoothly when read aloud and there's no major spelling mistakes. The grammar is acceptable and she can even use a thesaurus to look up big words.
For those who may see her fanfic as god awful and unreadable, I challenge you to attempt to read aloud parts of notoriously terrible fanfics, such as Sonic Highschool or Jeff the Killer (yes that one, not our boy Dahmer), and notice how you stumble over the awful sentence structure.
A key part of writing is to write coherently, and to give the reader the grace to follow along without pausing awkwardly after each closing dialogue. And I am not arguing that her work is not in fact awful. But at least it's written clearly.
So in a way, Steph *can* write... The content of what she's written might be absolutely dumb, but she has the basic intelligence to put together coherent paragraphs and to even use some basic descriptive language.
So really it's a shame her effort is going into something as wasteful as this.
I don't see a reason why she couldn't dedicate time to learn how to write better, maybe work on a series of short stories or focus inward on more apropriate fanfics. With time and effort she may even get a small following of fans for her writing.
What I am saying is, Steph could even make it a hobby. She's creative enough, or at least willing to try. Her patch art is perhaps not as talented as she may think it is (it's shit). But she has the balls or rather the lack of self awareness to try to sell them.
Writing may very well be something that she could put her ample free time into that would be at least semi productive. But perhaps that's me being criminally optimistic.
With that said, - and I'm going to sound like I'm reviewing a fucking novel here - Her fanfic has some issues... Hot take I know!
With this fanfic, there's no plot to speak of. Needless to say the entire premise is bizarre.
It would have been entirely wasteful to write at all if it didn't give us the amusement of reading some funny serial killer sex scenes.
I'm sure she's only writing it just for herself but just wants the attention of people reading it and giving her praise. More darkly I propose that she is writing this fanfic just to get off, as is common for many shitty fanfic writers.
But all the same, she posted it willingly for everyone to see; critique, or just laugh at it, as they wish.
Thus far, no setting has really been described outside of a brief nondescript in each scene, and scenes and settings jump brashly from place to place with little logic, sometimes in the same paragraph.
No continuity or timeline can be made of the story, because there's no plot. Apart from sudden lapses of years I know nothing of the characters or where they are in life. But at least Steph makes a small effort in describing what 'he', the character has gotten up to during these cuts (and yes it is clearly a self insert, let's not pretend otherwise).
Important events happen 'off screen' and isn't described in any way, if it is, it's vaguely touched on in a sense that the fanfic expects you to know a full history of Jeffrey Dahmer (or look him up on Wikipedia as is the extent of the author's research).
One moment Jeff is a shy weirdo who likes trans boys, the next he's notorious in 'Gay District' for roofying drinks and being a kid diddler. The way that particular bit is written is so casually put in, and the main character is resorting to coping and essentially justifying defending an insane rapist just because 'he' likes being fucked by him. It's a terrible moral for a character and can no way be respected or be given empathy by the reader, unless the reader is the author, in this case why bother to write at all? What's the point? No effort has been done on the main character because the main character is the author and the author has written it entirely for themselves.
The dialogue is not at all accurate for the setting or the time, not even going to go into detail here, it speaks for itself. Dialogue is awkward and stiff, as though all of the characters have severe autism. But hey, write what you know! I think it's safe to say that she's not writing this to try to improve her skills anyway.
At least the action (read; sex) scenes in the first two chapters are funny. But there's no way it can be spun to be emotional or make any reader side with the characters. It's written in a really creepy way as if the main character (Steph) is 100% on board with Jeff's behaviour and twisted psychology. Speaking of this, the entire portion where the main character is trying to psychoanalyze Jeff, and explains that their entire character motive is to go to school to be a shrink so that they can defend Jeff in court, reads as though Steph just looked up a few self diagnose "Am I schizophrenic/BPD/autistic/a retard?" quizzes online and now sees herself as a professional doctor/lawyer. It's hilarious!
I understand the irony of seeming to expect a semi serious fanfic from the likes of the main topic of this thread. And nothing from the fanfic shows the authority to be taken seriously. But I know Steph reads this thread. Consider it some constructive criticism from a concerned citizen.
And just so! I enjoyed laughing at this fanfic and I suppose I'm looking forward to seeing more! So in a way, I'm a fan!
TL;DR. Enough teasing with shitty, no impact emotional 'intrigue' in your fanfic. Let's see some more hot steamy serial killer tranny sex. He's a legend in his own lifetime in being a caring and dominant lover!
Or if Steph won't do this because evil Farmers are laughing at her lack of game, cut to the court case scenes already, I want to see some shit so great that even Ace Attorney writers would bow their heads in defeat!
