Talisa_Kite
kiwifarms.net
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- Aug 2, 2021
I'm a bit late on OP feedback, sorry. @Whistlin' Crustacean I couldn't reply directly to your post - maybe your post is too long?The "star cycle" idea is good. However, it's merely one idea. To create a great story, there must be many good ideas. Story arcs, as it were. For example. How did Nick go from kicking people off the show for saying the dreaded f-slur to "I call people faggots on the Internet, that's what I do"? How did he go from "chad dad" to "I wish my parents told me how they fucked"? How did we get from "incel is a left-wing insult" to "KF is a bunch of incel faggots"? And not just "here's point A, and here's point B 20 paragraphs down apropos of nothing." Weave a thread. Establish patterns. Employ call-backs to points previously made. A gradual decline. A regression in standards and morals. Were the signs there? What did people gloss over back then? With hindsight, what can we observe?
Finally, "hypocrisy." That word is never used in your draft.
I'm a newbie to the thread who didn't really know about Rackets before the bottle incident, I've been following since then but didn't really look into his history. I have to agree that as a person new to the content, the OP doesn't really pull things together for me cohesively. I get the gist of why everyone thinks his behaviour is hypocritical because I've been following the last 100-150 pages of this thread, so I was really looking forward to an OP that went into more detail on it but I can't really say it helped me understand his background more.
For example, a lot of people emphasised that he's always held himself as having a sort of 'trad' background and family, but there isn't any example, quotes, or archives of him saying this. I've also read a lot of posters contrasting this starkly with the behaviour of his friend Drex, who he frequently has on the show, but no mention of that either. There's also been the evidence of him basically being a trust fund baby type, leading to the speculation he's now rebelling against his parents or his wife's family. (Didn't he say something about being unhappy or pretending to be something he's not for the last twenty years or so?) I think that's relevant as he may have been carrying on the trad persona to avoid getting cut off monetarily and is splitting off now that he's (in his own view) achieved his independent financial stability through streaming.
I think narratively the focus on making these 'arcs' meant that the timeline of events isn't really cohesive and I don't really see the linear 'descent' from traditional, wholesome and respectable lawyer to nude-posting hedonistic degeneracy. (As an aside, I don't watch the cartoon show (Futurama?) that you're referencing so I don't get that reference either.) I understand that his drinking has always been prevalent on the show but it only comes up towards the end of the OP. As does his family. And considering that most of the content now comes from Locals, there's barely any mention of it or how its contributing to his current state.
For example, a lot of people emphasised that he's always held himself as having a sort of 'trad' background and family, but there isn't any example, quotes, or archives of him saying this. I've also read a lot of posters contrasting this starkly with the behaviour of his friend Drex, who he frequently has on the show, but no mention of that either. There's also been the evidence of him basically being a trust fund baby type, leading to the speculation he's now rebelling against his parents or his wife's family. (Didn't he say something about being unhappy or pretending to be something he's not for the last twenty years or so?) I think that's relevant as he may have been carrying on the trad persona to avoid getting cut off monetarily and is splitting off now that he's (in his own view) achieved his independent financial stability through streaming.
I think narratively the focus on making these 'arcs' meant that the timeline of events isn't really cohesive and I don't really see the linear 'descent' from traditional, wholesome and respectable lawyer to nude-posting hedonistic degeneracy. (As an aside, I don't watch the cartoon show (Futurama?) that you're referencing so I don't get that reference either.) I understand that his drinking has always been prevalent on the show but it only comes up towards the end of the OP. As does his family. And considering that most of the content now comes from Locals, there's barely any mention of it or how its contributing to his current state.
TLDR; the draft OP kind of feels like a sort of in-joke thing where people who have been long time (now former) fans of Rekieta and followed the whole weeb wars saga 'get it', but its a bit confusing to a newbie. New OP has put in a lot of effort though and its clear other people enjoy the summary, so kudos for that.