Okay,
@Jaimas has spent innumerable hours working on the BWu article, which has paid off. The Lolcow Wiki article is just shy of being as long as Wikipedia's main article on Adolf Hitler, and it's the
FOURTH most prominent neutral google result for her name, above fucking
brietbart and just below her own personal website. That to me is absolutely staggering.
But I think Jaimas needs some help, especially with 1) structure, 2) reduction of fluff, 3) neutrality of tone. I'll give you an example. I've cleaned up the very first paragraph of the article as an example.
Old:
New:
I did the following.
1. Tried to hit as many points as possible to give people an understanding of who this person is without fine tooth combing it. To me, the most significant element is not that Brianna Wu tweets a lot, it's that she involves herself in drama. The best example of that IMO is how she wrangled a cripple into the national spotlight to accuse him for being some sort of cyber terrorist. That's pretty fucking amazing.
2. Reduced fluff. Every word serves a purpose. There's a lot of purely editorial issues, probably because Jaimas writes so much information that he doesn't really have time to properly spruce up text. The best example of this in what I've given is the "by-all-accounts". Not only does that phrase mean literally nothing from an objective standpoint, it appears twice in consecutive sentences (which is poor writing), and it's also inconsistent. The first instance is hyphenated, the second is not.
3. I tried to remove bias as much as possible. Lolcow Wiki should be fairly neutral. Sarcasm quotes, direct insults, etc all betray the trust of the reader. No one doing a casual google search for Brianna Wu who finds this article is going to read past the first paragraph or even skim through the rest of the article because they're going to assume it's written by someone with a grudge. If you really want to harm someone with a LCW article, you do it by being honest, straightforward, and sincere. It's an encyclopedia of failures, not ED.
But furthermore the rest of the summary area is preposterously gargantuan.
Adolf Hitler:
http://i.imgur.com/Ql6fcvi.png
Brianna Wu:
http://i.imgur.com/mqlSGVp.png
Literally, the introductory area for Adolf Hitler is smaller than Wu's. I know for a fucking fact that Wu is not as accomplished as Mein Furhrer and I find this insulting. A summary should be just that: a summary. "Wu did this, and this, and this." It should be 3, 4 paragraphs tops for someone like Brianna Wu.
And finally, please, turn all the [[pipelining|sentences which are entirely contained within pipelines to citations]]. When your comment is a link to something else on the wiki, that isn't a link. A link is saying [[Adolf Hitler|Chancellor of Germany during World War II]] -- you're linking to something. When you are citing an entire stated fact, you want to use proper references.
I mean honestly, there's tons of interest in this thread right now and in BWu right now because of the game. There's a ton of information in that article but that's the problem. It reads like a brick and Jaimas really enjoys garnish and superfluous in writing -- which works great for a forum post or short story, not so much for an encyclopedia.
