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Bone apple tea for this one.
I was going to say: where the fuck are his welding goggles? This is basic welding safety! Next you'll tell me he wasn't wearing a proper apron or clothing, too.
> Do you think I'm stupid
Not at the moment, but the more I read, the more I am inclined to believe that.
> A deep, undiscovered well of patience
I thought you were just praying to Janna for patience, and wanted to use your passive-aggressive attitude to turn him off?
> Briefly, homicide
Right off the bat we're leaning right into the BPD pooner bit: even a man asking a question spurs the pooner into passive-aggressive snark and dreams of homicide. He is welcome to try - and then watch the bones in his hands break as he can't form a single punch.
Viktor also complaining that Piltover has too many politics is amusing, considering Zaun also has its own flavour of politics a la the Chembarons. The two cities really are the same in that regard.
Also, LMAO at Viktor touching a holt soldering iron without checking, visually, to see if it was still smoking. We almost had a Darwin award. One point added for the 'do you think I'm stupid' line.
> Improbable occurrence
Didn't you say you have an army of interns that can watch your experiments? Not all of them are going to jump for drinks and some of them are just too young and inexperienced to be thrown around at an expensive gala. Luckily, Jayce calls this bluff and we enter our drama arc.
Jayce is always compared to a dog, either subtly or openly, and it's become a cliché at this point. I'm also raising my eyebrows at Viktor already assuming that Jayce is unkind or has 'unfair aspersions over Jayce's character' like Jayce is a rapist or something. Why would you say something like that to someone who's literally done nothing to you?
> Violence-inducing sort of sway
First off, Viktor isn't this moody. Second, you know this is a certifiably insane pooner writing this because they are moody all to hell and they are unpredictable; a BPD nightmare. Why is Viktor jumping to violence he is utterly incapable of enacting over a simple question?
> It makes him want to smash things
I'd understand the rage if it was just about Piltovan prejudice, but this isn't the case. He's taking it out on Jayce because he can, and because he's an easy target because he knows Jayce won't do anything. I would understand Viktor's anger here IF it didn't come across as a moody temper tantrum from a tiny pooner with an inferiority complex.
> It's not that Viktor hates the waste of his time
> Later writes a sentence later he does indeed hate the waste of his time
Pick one.
> Viktor hates it in the way he hates little else
You've made it pretty clear you hate Jayce, especially with all that passive-aggressive bullshit and wanting to be violent towards him. Oh, totally tongue-in-cheek of course!
> Jayce realizes what the issue Viktor has with him attending galas
> Later writes he has no idea why Viktor would avoid attending galas
PICK ONE
> Helpless fondness and faint despair
Get that? All it takes is puppy-dog eyes and Viktor who wants to smash shit and kill people is totally fine. All that's left is a good dicking and he'll be formally converted.
> Nothing is as infuriating as the way he can feel the chilly chips of ice in his chest melt at the force of Jayce's joy
Ah, so all it takes to melt that iceberg in your heart is to smile and get that pussy wet. At least you won't be punching walls anymore.
Fucking Christ, this Viktor is sneering, dreaming about murder, being passive-aggressive and being an all-around unpleasant person. Who the fuck body-swapped Viktor for this piece of shit? He's not this moody and would be far more sarcastic about his objections. He's more sassy than passive-aggressive - and he definitely doesn't dream about punching walls. What a way to out your pet pooner like this.
What? You mean to tell me that T didn't grant you male strength to lift a box? Guess that puts you on the same level as transwomen who can't open pickle jars anymore!
This is the third fic I've read where Viktor has basically had a strapless shirt/dress that is supposed to make him look ethereal and regal. All it does is just out his female body. How many men wear shirts that expose their backs, even at expensive galas? Maybe Lil Nas X but that man sucks dick for free. Who are you dressing FOR by dressing like that? Wouldn't you want to make your form seem LESS female and more male, when such a cut would only emphasize the female form?
> Nips him at the waist, creating the illusion of pleasant, aesthetic lines
What it's also going to do is, again, highlight your FEMALE body because male and female waists are different. There's a reason why most pooners wear shapeless clothing and plaid - to warp depth perception and make it hard to differentiate the male and female form. Wearing clothing that does just that would just out you. Viktor wouldn't look like a man, he'd resemble a teenage boy in that fit.
> There was a reason why he jumped to 'wait a minute this isn't my bedroom'
> Viktor would be blind not to recognize how handsome Jayce was
Ah...there's that pussy talking. All that passive-aggressiveness gets thrown right out the window once your man comes strutting out in a fit that highlights his muscles.
> He fears a bit for his safety when that finally comes to pass
Why? Afraid that big Muscly Man with a Meaty Man Meat is going to bend you over and fuck the living daylights out of you? Because it sure sounds like it.
> Drools profusely when he falls asleep after pulling an all-nighter in the lab
This is an incomplete sentence; something else was meant to be added to end that thought process.
> It's unbearably intimate, and sends a shiver down Viktor's spine
Ahhhh here we go...we're entering the smut territory, lads.
Jayce isn't that ignorant to know people aren't going to look down on Viktor because he's a Zaunite. Viktor pretty much tells him of this dynamic the first night they met. Having him act blind, of course, just adds to the drama.
> He stands, tall and at attention
All 5'2 of it
> Weak imitation of the man Jayce calls his partner
You don't say.
> Swallowed by his adoring public
Don't you mean 'swallowed by THE adoring public'? Sounds weird otherwise.
> Somewhere along the line, Viktor had forgotten what the rest of Piltover was like
There is no way he'd ever forget. He knows his roots and it was a core part of his identity, in Arcane and in his original lore. There's no fucking way he's going to pretend Pilties aren't what they are. He's remarkably intelligent and though he isn't very social, he knows what social cues are. He knows the drama and the people. He knows the tea. Reducing his intelligence like this is par the course for these authors; it makes him look weak and dependable, perfect for the smut.
> Faintly floral
> Sweet, sickly and floral
Pick one. And I did, in fact, like that paragraph for its imagery, btw.
> Jayce looks down at their joined thighs, questioning
Ah, we're finally getting to the good stuff.
> He dislikes, profusely the image
Yeah, I can't imagine why you having total disdain over other women, you being one yourself. You're 'Not Like the Other Girls', you're a Real Man, a Man's Man, and the thought of one dancing with 'your man' leaves you so bitter and enraged you could punch a wall - or have a drunk mental breakdown. Or, better yet, you can drunkenly touch your would-be love on the thigh when it's clearly awkward and unwanted!
Don't worry, though, it all gets consensual in the end.
> Archaic sort of instinct, the one that calls for claiming and keeping
What's that? The pooner reverts to BIOLOGIAL, ARCHAIC INSTINCTS once that pussy starts getting revved up? You don't fucking say.
> To ask would be to court a concrete answer
> He doesn't know what he might do if Jayce were to give him an answer he doesn't want to hear
Well he's clearly receptive to sex. If you can get through that, you can tell him how you really feel. You're drunk anyways; just blame it on that.
> Sticky wetness gathering in his curls and hole
Ah, never is a pooner fic complete without Rapunzel pubes.
> Thuming experimentally at Viktor's cock
> Sensitive, swollen nub
Pick one. Either it's a nub or it's a 1-2 inch roid clit. I think I know which one is less humiliating to use.
> Viktor's hole
> Viktor's folds, circling once, then twice around Viktor's entrace
You mean you touched the vulva, and then went lower to the vagina. And why didn't you just use 'entrance' before?
> Jayce's finger is too dry, no lube, Viktor didn't produce enough
Did he not produce enough to wet his underwear? Did you not just write that it was collecting around Viktor's pubes and entrance? He's clearly producing enough. When did he go dry all of a sudden?
> The burn, greater and harder and then some, pain over pleasure
Ah, this cliché. But it shouldn't be happening if you already wet your underwear with your arousal. It should well be enough for everything to go smoothly.
> He wants Jayce's cock
He wants that meaty man Hispanic Hog. Oink.
> Viktor's dick, swollen and neglected
It wouldn't be neglected if it was a real one. HEYO
> Thick outline of Jayce's cock, chubbed up and fighting to stand at attention
Ah, didn't know his cock was trying out for Full Metal Jacket.
> Jayce's dick is even bigger than expected
Of course. It wouldn't be any other way.
> Under lubricated and stretching him
Again, you just write he was wet enough to change his 'white underwear to gray'. So there's enough there for adequate lubrication; you would have had more if Jayce decided to play with that roid clit some more.
> Small base need for violence
Against whom? The only thing you'll break is your own bones trying to punch someone.
> Equated violence to love and love to possession
> Be a pooner
> You get taken advantage of by actual men
> You think their violence against you is love
> Your one true love can't even get you wet enough for his properly male dick
> You dream about his cock literally leaving a phantom hole in you so that you can always remember the good dicking you got
> Revolve your life over getting good dick
Just Pooner Things.
> White and watery
...The fuck is his diet if his cum is watery?
> Dips a dainty finger
Ah yes, the engineer who probably has burned and calloused fingertips has 'dainty fingers'. Just True and Honest Man Things.
Verdict: not overtly terrible, there were some descriptions I liked, but the sex is of course par the course and generally forgettable. Viktor does not carry the fic this time because he's too busy being a passive-aggressive moody pooner. Also, why is Jayce's cum watery? Question for the ages.
This one has Jayce escaping a sex cult. Has a villain who unironically talks like Joe Biden.
You didn't need to have those in two separate sentences, but hey, going off the queercatfan formula I see.
> His reason was a petty one: he did not like to think about Jayce and his relationship to one Councilor in particular
Might as well come right out and call her a filthy nigger. Of course she's the villain in this because she's the one who invites Jayce to the sex cult. Gotta make the black woman look bad.
> He also felt stupid for not knowing what caused his consternation
..You just told him?
> notorious for its degenerate acts
Huh, sounds like Heimerdinger should have confronted Jayce about this directly. He doesn't, btw; he just sends Viktor in his place so he can be the sacrificial lamb.
> Once Viktor had felt mildly annoyed at the disturbance caused by Jayce's absence and the person who had orchestrated it
Never fail, pooners. We know you hate blacks as much as the most virulent white supremacists. Difference is, you're too cowardly to ever admit it openly.
Yes, send the trans man to a sex cult. Surely they're not going to take advantage of that. It honestly reads like one of those 'spirit cooking' parties Lady Gaga was known to frequent.
> Ms. Young doesn't have the knack for this type of mechanics
Damn, even Sky, too? All the token blacks get shit on here. Not like it's a trend, or anything!
> He hated doctors. He hated the way that Piltover physicians treated him
But he uses them when he wants his T shots and other procedures. That's OK, though.
> He hated the secrets they knew about his body
AKA they know he's actually female and he hates that.
> Under strict conditions, whether or not these were explicitly stated
It wouldn't be explicitly stated if it were strict.
> Viktor could not actually recall if he'd ever seen a naked woman
...he is one. You mean to tell me he honestly thinks his body isn't female? Your memory should be fresh since you see it every damn day. Hoo boy.
> A song was one that a wandering spirit might compose
Don't you mean 'THE song'?
> Those things appeared largely to be sex
So we get the impression that Viktor is sex averse and doesn't know what sex is, hence his confusion and disgust. That's OK, though, because he later kisses Jayce like a pro.
> He was a hypocrite
I'll say. He's shy around sex all of a sudden? Guess it's OK to write him as sex-averse when The Right Person does it.
> I prefer my whores a little better-bred
You mean sex slaves with better makeup.
> Viktor would find a way to improve the lives of everyone who suffered for this sort of function
But not abolish prostitution or end sex trafficking, which would hurt these people in their pockets.
Remember what I said about this villain sounding like Joe Biden? Well imagine him wearing a Squid Game outfit. This is that scenario.
Is there a reason he's talking like that, or is it meant to drum up the tension? Again, I can't take it seriously if it sounds like a Joe Biden speech.
> They were not the best and brightest in Piltover, merely the wealthiest
And yet, they've had this sex cult for how many years? And it kept going on and clearly was powerful enough no one did anything to stop it? The author is trying to drum up an Epstein case but it ends up sounding more ridiculous than it is.
> It made the plan they concocted full of holes
Ironic.
> It should have been ridiculous, it should have been bizarre
It is on both counts. You're welcome.
> Why was he kissing him?
You gotta stay in-character somehow.
> Trussed up and humiliated by a sex cult
This doesn't need to be a separate sentence, and yes, he doesn't need to be part of a sex cult. The plot is really that dumb.
> I didn't want to sleep with a stranger tonight
How sweet that we have faithful and virginal Jayce.
> On the verge of crying or laughing, perhaps ready to do both
See what a comma can do? It's beautiful.
> Attempted to shut out his own feelings
They're fucking in the same building where the cult is, btw. They're all doing it where they can still get caught. Logic.
> Incredible how a modest gesture was moving, especially after everything Viktor had been through
Such as? Jayce was the one who was going to be gang-raped, not him.
> Tongues jostled for supremacy
I thought we retired this cliché. It's clearly not OK when Booktok uses it.
So, Jayce discovers that Viktor is actually a woman, not a man, and he's perfectly OK with it as if he didn't fall in love with someone he thought was a man. It's fine because it means less prep and he doesn't have to out himself as gay if he fucks man-pussy because it really doesn't count. But hey, at least he gets fingered during one of the most harrowing moments of their lives.
Now, we have Viktor wondering if Jayce would've been transphobic and pushed him away all because he discovered that Viktor has a vagina, and not a penis. Luckily for him, Jayce takes it in stride and still sees him as a 'real man' and 'appreciates' the fact that Viktor has a cunt. I wonder why that is.
> He felt the large and distinct intrusion
> Nothing in the world was bigger than the prick about to go inside him
Huh, I thought he was already working the roid clit? Did you not get wet enough?
> A young man, any young man, really
You're not a man at all, so...
> Engineered by the bigger man
We always gotta know who the real male is by how big they are in comparison to the pooner. Pottery.
> Dripped sweat on him, inhaled and moaned endearments in his hair
See what a comma can do?
You waited until MORNING to sneak out? That's great: you just put yourself at risk for hours on end, but it's OK because you were fucking and blending in! No one is ever going to notice that Jayce is still there and easy pickings! But don't worry, bub, the plot twist is coming.
> English
They speak English to us, but their language is not actually English.
> He wondered if their partnership was ruined
You had to infiltrate an Epstein-style sex party, saved your friend and let him finger fuck you. You tell me if it's going to be normal.
Gotta take your rage out on the black woman. Can't trust a nigga to do shit round here.
Interesting how the plot twist was that everyone, including Jayce, was actually involved and Viktor was never informed, meaning he was actually the bait and could have been assaulted and no one would have cared because he was a Zaunite. Brutal indeed. And she waited this long to act on it even though they've been ruling for centuries. I'm sure they can be replaced that quickly.
Why. Are you. Talking. Like this. Are we having a dementia episode?
> The idea of using people like this was foreign to him
...No it isn't? Zaun does this all the time. Does he not know that some Chem-barons engaged in child labour and human trafficking? Really, nigga?
Of course. We can't have the black woman have feelings. That bitch needs to know her place.
> He was tired of the world and everyone in it
I think I'm more tired of you, fam.
> If he weren't a fool
Hey, who is the one who said that he 'never saw a naked woman before' when he actually IS a woman? 'Fool' doesn't even BEGIN to describe you.
> Whatever he had gone through, he felt Jayce had suffered worse
I mean he DID volunteer to recreate a P.Diddy party so...you tell me.
> It was his fault somehow
I mean, you did fuck in the same mansion you were supposed to escape, so it is partially your fault.
Imagine if he WAS told. Would it have made a difference? No.
> I don't want you to see me as being that pathetic
Too late, you didn't even want to tell Jayce that you were trans, and it all had to do with you being rejected as female. You are absolutely pathetic.
> I don't know who I am, I don't understand what's been done to me
You almost had the Justin Bieber treatment, friendo. You're lucky the baby oil wasn't used. Least you got to fuck a pooner, right?
Have some fat Jayce to lighten up the mood.
And here's one of him fucking a corpse.
I was going to say: where the fuck are his welding goggles? This is basic welding safety! Next you'll tell me he wasn't wearing a proper apron or clothing, too.
> Do you think I'm stupid
Not at the moment, but the more I read, the more I am inclined to believe that.
> A deep, undiscovered well of patience
I thought you were just praying to Janna for patience, and wanted to use your passive-aggressive attitude to turn him off?
> Briefly, homicide
Right off the bat we're leaning right into the BPD pooner bit: even a man asking a question spurs the pooner into passive-aggressive snark and dreams of homicide. He is welcome to try - and then watch the bones in his hands break as he can't form a single punch.
Viktor also complaining that Piltover has too many politics is amusing, considering Zaun also has its own flavour of politics a la the Chembarons. The two cities really are the same in that regard.
Also, LMAO at Viktor touching a holt soldering iron without checking, visually, to see if it was still smoking. We almost had a Darwin award. One point added for the 'do you think I'm stupid' line.
> Improbable occurrence
Didn't you say you have an army of interns that can watch your experiments? Not all of them are going to jump for drinks and some of them are just too young and inexperienced to be thrown around at an expensive gala. Luckily, Jayce calls this bluff and we enter our drama arc.
Jayce is always compared to a dog, either subtly or openly, and it's become a cliché at this point. I'm also raising my eyebrows at Viktor already assuming that Jayce is unkind or has 'unfair aspersions over Jayce's character' like Jayce is a rapist or something. Why would you say something like that to someone who's literally done nothing to you?
> Violence-inducing sort of sway
First off, Viktor isn't this moody. Second, you know this is a certifiably insane pooner writing this because they are moody all to hell and they are unpredictable; a BPD nightmare. Why is Viktor jumping to violence he is utterly incapable of enacting over a simple question?
> It makes him want to smash things
I'd understand the rage if it was just about Piltovan prejudice, but this isn't the case. He's taking it out on Jayce because he can, and because he's an easy target because he knows Jayce won't do anything. I would understand Viktor's anger here IF it didn't come across as a moody temper tantrum from a tiny pooner with an inferiority complex.
> It's not that Viktor hates the waste of his time
> Later writes a sentence later he does indeed hate the waste of his time
Pick one.
> Viktor hates it in the way he hates little else
You've made it pretty clear you hate Jayce, especially with all that passive-aggressive bullshit and wanting to be violent towards him. Oh, totally tongue-in-cheek of course!
> Jayce realizes what the issue Viktor has with him attending galas
> Later writes he has no idea why Viktor would avoid attending galas
PICK ONE
> Helpless fondness and faint despair
Get that? All it takes is puppy-dog eyes and Viktor who wants to smash shit and kill people is totally fine. All that's left is a good dicking and he'll be formally converted.
> Nothing is as infuriating as the way he can feel the chilly chips of ice in his chest melt at the force of Jayce's joy
Ah, so all it takes to melt that iceberg in your heart is to smile and get that pussy wet. At least you won't be punching walls anymore.
Fucking Christ, this Viktor is sneering, dreaming about murder, being passive-aggressive and being an all-around unpleasant person. Who the fuck body-swapped Viktor for this piece of shit? He's not this moody and would be far more sarcastic about his objections. He's more sassy than passive-aggressive - and he definitely doesn't dream about punching walls. What a way to out your pet pooner like this.
What? You mean to tell me that T didn't grant you male strength to lift a box? Guess that puts you on the same level as transwomen who can't open pickle jars anymore!
This is the third fic I've read where Viktor has basically had a strapless shirt/dress that is supposed to make him look ethereal and regal. All it does is just out his female body. How many men wear shirts that expose their backs, even at expensive galas? Maybe Lil Nas X but that man sucks dick for free. Who are you dressing FOR by dressing like that? Wouldn't you want to make your form seem LESS female and more male, when such a cut would only emphasize the female form?
> Nips him at the waist, creating the illusion of pleasant, aesthetic lines
What it's also going to do is, again, highlight your FEMALE body because male and female waists are different. There's a reason why most pooners wear shapeless clothing and plaid - to warp depth perception and make it hard to differentiate the male and female form. Wearing clothing that does just that would just out you. Viktor wouldn't look like a man, he'd resemble a teenage boy in that fit.
> There was a reason why he jumped to 'wait a minute this isn't my bedroom'
> Viktor would be blind not to recognize how handsome Jayce was
Ah...there's that pussy talking. All that passive-aggressiveness gets thrown right out the window once your man comes strutting out in a fit that highlights his muscles.
> He fears a bit for his safety when that finally comes to pass
Why? Afraid that big Muscly Man with a Meaty Man Meat is going to bend you over and fuck the living daylights out of you? Because it sure sounds like it.
> Drools profusely when he falls asleep after pulling an all-nighter in the lab
This is an incomplete sentence; something else was meant to be added to end that thought process.
> It's unbearably intimate, and sends a shiver down Viktor's spine
Ahhhh here we go...we're entering the smut territory, lads.
Jayce isn't that ignorant to know people aren't going to look down on Viktor because he's a Zaunite. Viktor pretty much tells him of this dynamic the first night they met. Having him act blind, of course, just adds to the drama.
> He stands, tall and at attention
All 5'2 of it
> Weak imitation of the man Jayce calls his partner
You don't say.
> Swallowed by his adoring public
Don't you mean 'swallowed by THE adoring public'? Sounds weird otherwise.
> Somewhere along the line, Viktor had forgotten what the rest of Piltover was like
There is no way he'd ever forget. He knows his roots and it was a core part of his identity, in Arcane and in his original lore. There's no fucking way he's going to pretend Pilties aren't what they are. He's remarkably intelligent and though he isn't very social, he knows what social cues are. He knows the drama and the people. He knows the tea. Reducing his intelligence like this is par the course for these authors; it makes him look weak and dependable, perfect for the smut.
> Faintly floral
> Sweet, sickly and floral
Pick one. And I did, in fact, like that paragraph for its imagery, btw.
> Jayce looks down at their joined thighs, questioning
Ah, we're finally getting to the good stuff.
> He dislikes, profusely the image
Yeah, I can't imagine why you having total disdain over other women, you being one yourself. You're 'Not Like the Other Girls', you're a Real Man, a Man's Man, and the thought of one dancing with 'your man' leaves you so bitter and enraged you could punch a wall - or have a drunk mental breakdown. Or, better yet, you can drunkenly touch your would-be love on the thigh when it's clearly awkward and unwanted!
Don't worry, though, it all gets consensual in the end.
> Archaic sort of instinct, the one that calls for claiming and keeping
What's that? The pooner reverts to BIOLOGIAL, ARCHAIC INSTINCTS once that pussy starts getting revved up? You don't fucking say.
> To ask would be to court a concrete answer
> He doesn't know what he might do if Jayce were to give him an answer he doesn't want to hear
Well he's clearly receptive to sex. If you can get through that, you can tell him how you really feel. You're drunk anyways; just blame it on that.
> Sticky wetness gathering in his curls and hole
Ah, never is a pooner fic complete without Rapunzel pubes.
> Thuming experimentally at Viktor's cock
> Sensitive, swollen nub
Pick one. Either it's a nub or it's a 1-2 inch roid clit. I think I know which one is less humiliating to use.
> Viktor's hole
> Viktor's folds, circling once, then twice around Viktor's entrace
You mean you touched the vulva, and then went lower to the vagina. And why didn't you just use 'entrance' before?
> Jayce's finger is too dry, no lube, Viktor didn't produce enough
Did he not produce enough to wet his underwear? Did you not just write that it was collecting around Viktor's pubes and entrance? He's clearly producing enough. When did he go dry all of a sudden?
> The burn, greater and harder and then some, pain over pleasure
Ah, this cliché. But it shouldn't be happening if you already wet your underwear with your arousal. It should well be enough for everything to go smoothly.
> He wants Jayce's cock
He wants that meaty man Hispanic Hog. Oink.
> Viktor's dick, swollen and neglected
It wouldn't be neglected if it was a real one. HEYO
> Thick outline of Jayce's cock, chubbed up and fighting to stand at attention
Ah, didn't know his cock was trying out for Full Metal Jacket.
> Jayce's dick is even bigger than expected
Of course. It wouldn't be any other way.
> Under lubricated and stretching him
Again, you just write he was wet enough to change his 'white underwear to gray'. So there's enough there for adequate lubrication; you would have had more if Jayce decided to play with that roid clit some more.
> Small base need for violence
Against whom? The only thing you'll break is your own bones trying to punch someone.
> Equated violence to love and love to possession
> Be a pooner
> You get taken advantage of by actual men
> You think their violence against you is love
> Your one true love can't even get you wet enough for his properly male dick
> You dream about his cock literally leaving a phantom hole in you so that you can always remember the good dicking you got
> Revolve your life over getting good dick
Just Pooner Things.
> White and watery
...The fuck is his diet if his cum is watery?
> Dips a dainty finger
Ah yes, the engineer who probably has burned and calloused fingertips has 'dainty fingers'. Just True and Honest Man Things.
Verdict: not overtly terrible, there were some descriptions I liked, but the sex is of course par the course and generally forgettable. Viktor does not carry the fic this time because he's too busy being a passive-aggressive moody pooner. Also, why is Jayce's cum watery? Question for the ages.
This one has Jayce escaping a sex cult. Has a villain who unironically talks like Joe Biden.
You didn't need to have those in two separate sentences, but hey, going off the queercatfan formula I see.
> His reason was a petty one: he did not like to think about Jayce and his relationship to one Councilor in particular
Might as well come right out and call her a filthy nigger. Of course she's the villain in this because she's the one who invites Jayce to the sex cult. Gotta make the black woman look bad.
> He also felt stupid for not knowing what caused his consternation
..You just told him?
> notorious for its degenerate acts
Huh, sounds like Heimerdinger should have confronted Jayce about this directly. He doesn't, btw; he just sends Viktor in his place so he can be the sacrificial lamb.
> Once Viktor had felt mildly annoyed at the disturbance caused by Jayce's absence and the person who had orchestrated it
Never fail, pooners. We know you hate blacks as much as the most virulent white supremacists. Difference is, you're too cowardly to ever admit it openly.
Yes, send the trans man to a sex cult. Surely they're not going to take advantage of that. It honestly reads like one of those 'spirit cooking' parties Lady Gaga was known to frequent.
> Ms. Young doesn't have the knack for this type of mechanics
Damn, even Sky, too? All the token blacks get shit on here. Not like it's a trend, or anything!
> He hated doctors. He hated the way that Piltover physicians treated him
But he uses them when he wants his T shots and other procedures. That's OK, though.
> He hated the secrets they knew about his body
AKA they know he's actually female and he hates that.
> Under strict conditions, whether or not these were explicitly stated
It wouldn't be explicitly stated if it were strict.
> Viktor could not actually recall if he'd ever seen a naked woman
...he is one. You mean to tell me he honestly thinks his body isn't female? Your memory should be fresh since you see it every damn day. Hoo boy.
> A song was one that a wandering spirit might compose
Don't you mean 'THE song'?
> Those things appeared largely to be sex
So we get the impression that Viktor is sex averse and doesn't know what sex is, hence his confusion and disgust. That's OK, though, because he later kisses Jayce like a pro.
> He was a hypocrite
I'll say. He's shy around sex all of a sudden? Guess it's OK to write him as sex-averse when The Right Person does it.
> I prefer my whores a little better-bred
You mean sex slaves with better makeup.
> Viktor would find a way to improve the lives of everyone who suffered for this sort of function
But not abolish prostitution or end sex trafficking, which would hurt these people in their pockets.
Remember what I said about this villain sounding like Joe Biden? Well imagine him wearing a Squid Game outfit. This is that scenario.
Is there a reason he's talking like that, or is it meant to drum up the tension? Again, I can't take it seriously if it sounds like a Joe Biden speech.
> They were not the best and brightest in Piltover, merely the wealthiest
And yet, they've had this sex cult for how many years? And it kept going on and clearly was powerful enough no one did anything to stop it? The author is trying to drum up an Epstein case but it ends up sounding more ridiculous than it is.
> It made the plan they concocted full of holes
Ironic.
> It should have been ridiculous, it should have been bizarre
It is on both counts. You're welcome.
> Why was he kissing him?
You gotta stay in-character somehow.
> Trussed up and humiliated by a sex cult
This doesn't need to be a separate sentence, and yes, he doesn't need to be part of a sex cult. The plot is really that dumb.
> I didn't want to sleep with a stranger tonight
How sweet that we have faithful and virginal Jayce.
> On the verge of crying or laughing, perhaps ready to do both
See what a comma can do? It's beautiful.
> Attempted to shut out his own feelings
They're fucking in the same building where the cult is, btw. They're all doing it where they can still get caught. Logic.
> Incredible how a modest gesture was moving, especially after everything Viktor had been through
Such as? Jayce was the one who was going to be gang-raped, not him.
> Tongues jostled for supremacy
I thought we retired this cliché. It's clearly not OK when Booktok uses it.
So, Jayce discovers that Viktor is actually a woman, not a man, and he's perfectly OK with it as if he didn't fall in love with someone he thought was a man. It's fine because it means less prep and he doesn't have to out himself as gay if he fucks man-pussy because it really doesn't count. But hey, at least he gets fingered during one of the most harrowing moments of their lives.
Now, we have Viktor wondering if Jayce would've been transphobic and pushed him away all because he discovered that Viktor has a vagina, and not a penis. Luckily for him, Jayce takes it in stride and still sees him as a 'real man' and 'appreciates' the fact that Viktor has a cunt. I wonder why that is.
> He felt the large and distinct intrusion
> Nothing in the world was bigger than the prick about to go inside him
Huh, I thought he was already working the roid clit? Did you not get wet enough?
> A young man, any young man, really
You're not a man at all, so...
> Engineered by the bigger man
We always gotta know who the real male is by how big they are in comparison to the pooner. Pottery.
> Dripped sweat on him, inhaled and moaned endearments in his hair
See what a comma can do?
You waited until MORNING to sneak out? That's great: you just put yourself at risk for hours on end, but it's OK because you were fucking and blending in! No one is ever going to notice that Jayce is still there and easy pickings! But don't worry, bub, the plot twist is coming.
> English
They speak English to us, but their language is not actually English.
> He wondered if their partnership was ruined
You had to infiltrate an Epstein-style sex party, saved your friend and let him finger fuck you. You tell me if it's going to be normal.
Gotta take your rage out on the black woman. Can't trust a nigga to do shit round here.
Interesting how the plot twist was that everyone, including Jayce, was actually involved and Viktor was never informed, meaning he was actually the bait and could have been assaulted and no one would have cared because he was a Zaunite. Brutal indeed. And she waited this long to act on it even though they've been ruling for centuries. I'm sure they can be replaced that quickly.
Why. Are you. Talking. Like this. Are we having a dementia episode?
> The idea of using people like this was foreign to him
...No it isn't? Zaun does this all the time. Does he not know that some Chem-barons engaged in child labour and human trafficking? Really, nigga?
Of course. We can't have the black woman have feelings. That bitch needs to know her place.
> He was tired of the world and everyone in it
I think I'm more tired of you, fam.
> If he weren't a fool
Hey, who is the one who said that he 'never saw a naked woman before' when he actually IS a woman? 'Fool' doesn't even BEGIN to describe you.
> Whatever he had gone through, he felt Jayce had suffered worse
I mean he DID volunteer to recreate a P.Diddy party so...you tell me.
> It was his fault somehow
I mean, you did fuck in the same mansion you were supposed to escape, so it is partially your fault.
Imagine if he WAS told. Would it have made a difference? No.
> I don't want you to see me as being that pathetic
Too late, you didn't even want to tell Jayce that you were trans, and it all had to do with you being rejected as female. You are absolutely pathetic.
> I don't know who I am, I don't understand what's been done to me
You almost had the Justin Bieber treatment, friendo. You're lucky the baby oil wasn't used. Least you got to fuck a pooner, right?
Have some fat Jayce to lighten up the mood.
And here's one of him fucking a corpse.
The few how-to guides I've seen have really tried to make it a deconstruction of gender, and I'm pretty sure I posted one such guide a couple of pages back. They all abide by strict biological norms and what is ironic is that it's coming from the same people who tell you sex and gender aren't the same. A transman is a real man, but an omega can NEVER identify as an alpha, because 'they weren't born one'. Fucking funny how that works.
That's not female brained at all. Were these actual men they'd be gone by the morning and back on Grindr or the other apps for fresh meat. Ain't no time for love declarations there. All this talk about safety, love and 'being treated right'? All female coded. And these people get real fucking pissed if you keep pointing it out.
GAY
