Fanfiction Horrors

[Chandelier]

There's some mighty fine tongue action in this one. It's also formatted in a way that there are double spaces between each line, so there will be more screenshots. The author wanted to be more scientifically accurate with her work.

Spoiler: Tongue twister

So much for not capitalizing your sentences.

> Appeal to his humanity
...Nigga you straight up killed him. You're lucky you've got that trans pussy power to save you.
> His face split and wolf-like
Nah, Arcane Herald Viktor looks like a squid/lobster tail. There's nothing wolf-like about it.

> The moment Viktor had uttered his name, Jayce was lost
The voice is just that sexy, eh? (To be fair, it IS Harry Lloyd.)
> Tilting his head up to make eye contact
While I can give a pass to this, considering Nu Viktor is over 7 feet tall, this only highlights the height difference between them. How short is pooner Jayce?
> Gods damn his voice, it was awakening some primal part of Jayce
Amazing how that pride gets broken immediately once a man (?) with a hot voice starts speaking.

I can think of something else that's growing. Also reminds me of the meme where people make characters' pupils comically huge.

"What better way to appeal to his humanity than by fucking him?" Well damn, who lifted this plot from the Hub?

> Something desperate and high
High enough to break that T voice, I hope.

> His cunt gushed, his whole body turned on and tuned in
> He could fucking come from this alone
Aren't you already doing that?
> His thighs clenched together
There's no point, plus you were already doing that.
> Jayce was about two seconds from coming in his pants
You were already doing that x3

Viktor having an obscenely long tongue in that form doesn't surprise me; it's rather creative. It's not as bad (yet) as that bladder fic I read earlier.


> He was so close to coming
Again?
> His cunt was throbbing almost painfully with how badly he needed to cum
How many times are you on that precipice? This is like the fifth time it's been written.

> Quivering, slippery hole
Which one?
> Grinding the heel of his hand into his cock
The author wants to be scientifically accurate, so it should be said that the clit and the penis are homologous organs. They have similar embryonic origins, but they are not the same.

> His cock zipping in overstimulation
Your roid clit is doing WHAT now?
> If he had to guess he would say it was 11-12 inches long
Oh, so like Monster can Jayce up there, but thicker than a soda bottle. A real record breaker!

Man, Viktor's heel of his hand is doing a lot of work - it hasn't moved or done anything once!


Ahhh it's never complete without the Tarzan pubes. So thick that it acts like a carpet for that 'little cock'.

> his heart filling with a happy feeling
Ah, you gotta love the good ole feminine romance - big dick and a lotta love. You can fuck the 'man' right out of them with the right dick.

Viktor would still have greater grip strength than pooner Jayce, thin or not. And if he ever bulked, he'd still be stronger than Jayce, even while Jayce is on T. Male strength is more than just testosterone, after all.

Ah yes, that aching cock...that is barely the size of his thumb nail. And then you have Viktor's monster cock by comparison and it's a skit out of Scary Movie.

> Viktoooor
Who invited Blitzcrank? Shield his eyes!

> He pushed his cock up against Jayce's own
Lass, if you want to be 'scientifically accurate'...this ain't it.
> Jayce felt the tip of Viktor's cock kiss his cervix
There is cervix stimulation in this, and it does appear that the author is at least attempting to make it appear realistic vs busting into it like Mike Tyson. But we'll see how it goes. I will say though, this is nowhere near as ridiculous as mango loco.

Well, at least he isn't 'bullying his bladder' like the last one. Also, count how many times 'moan' is used.

> He started fucking the absolute daylights out of him
> Pussy being shoved full of monstrous cock repeatedly without a break
Something something 'bad erotica' something something.
> He wanted to feel Viktor so deep that there was no room left inside him for anything besides his cock
So you want to become a human cookie (more like COCKy) tray. OK.

Yes, we are going to get some uterine fucking here. But at least Viktor tries to be nice this time!
> What, do you want me to breed you then?
Yes, fuck the 'man' right out of him and RETVRN him to his roots.

> I need your come in my womb, I want you so deep I'll be able to feel you for weeks, I want to keep your come so deep inside me there's no chance it can leak out
What's that about a breeding fetish?

Well, at least Viktor actually cares. Other times, the dick owner just plows full blast into the cervix, which sounds absolutely painful. This time around, there's some stimulation involved.

If the dialogue wasn't so cheesy, this would actually be a really nice tongue scene. Might as well play into the concept, right?

> Squelching, wet noises
It seems that's the only noise it produces. That's the second or third time I've read that.

> shame mingled sharply with pleasure
You're getting tongue fucked by a 7 foot tall robot. What is there to be ashamed about?
> His voice would surely be permanently damaged from overuse
Well, at least you can reach a true male timbre instead of the classic Kermit the Frog pitch.


Add some coins to the tip jar for all the times you find 'pleasure', as well as 'squelching'.


Least Viktor cares about boundaries. Normally it's all balls-to-the-wall action, no room for breaks, so at least this is somewhat believable.


> Your desire to be held down and fucked
Isn't that the desire of all of these FTMs? Monsterfucking aside, they all have a craving for big dicks and being 'bred'. *pulls out Freud*

> Zaps of pleasure straight through his cock
What cock?
> He needed Viktor to fuck him through the floor and breed his pussy
Pooners and a breeding fetish, name a better duo.

> Began fucking him like an animal
Well, he was a gentleman at first.
> it was so much and not enough
Ah, this cliché, eh?
> His cock was being shoved into the ground every thrust
You'll be fine. It's not that big enough to be damaged anyways.

I'm glad he 'silent screams' twice because that does sound painful - though it is backed up by Viktor massaging it and working it open. Still raises your eyebrows.

Pleasure is used 18 times here, and as for the breeding thing, yeah, it gets repetitive after a while. We get it: you want to be bred like a spring doe. Try losing weight and you just might!

Well he took all that time to get you cushioned up, so yeah, I'd say he enjoys it. I will say that the banter is kinda funny, all things considering. There's a little self-awareness here.

Looks like someone passed out during this part of the editing process. I get you want to get the horny out as fast as possible, but come on. Put a little effort in.

I do have to laugh at the Hexcore being a closet TERF. It knows exactly what sex Jayce is, and knows he has the parts for breeding to begin with. You can never escape nature, not even in your smut fantasies.


This just makes me think he's a human washing machine, and now he's on the 'heavy duty' load. Literally.

If that ending threw you off - yeah, it did for me, too. It just has so little relation to the beginning - which was already weak to begin with - and now we're here. The sex dialogue was goofy and cheesy, the tongue action was the saving grace, and overall, it seems like a self-aware crack fic that doesn't take itself too seriously. Not the worst I've seen, but definitely not the greatest. Just goofy.

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This one was written by a tradfujo. Surely she sticks to the name, right? This was done in honour of Hardy Lloyd's comments - the best Hardy boy. Archive here.

Spoiler

Great introduction with that broken sentence structure. We get right into the smut, with penetration in every orifice, and Viktor somehow having human nipples and female breasts despite not having a human body anymore.
> Jayce had never known Viktor had a pussy. Until now
How convenient.

> You've ruined me
"It's your fault I fucked up and killed these people! Now shut up and let me shove my dirty dick down your mouth!"

> They have no right to touch you. You're mine
> I haven't been yours in months
Gotta love how Jayce acts like a BPD maniac, going from one mood to another, from homicidal to semi-lovable back to homicidal again. And look at that, we have the typical 'his hands were so large and Viktor is uwu so smol' thing. It's getting predictable and annoying.
> Jayce got up to his small breasts
I wonder why and how he got them. You mean to tell me he never wore a bonder and got the tit chop, or he just kept them this entire time. Viktor's only human flesh is his face; everything else is metal.

> The whole thing fit perfectly into his mouth
Yeah, a-cups will do that.
> Fuck me. Fuck me until I cannot walk
And there's no foreplay, no sex talk - just all raw, no rubber.
> Gonna eat this sweet pussy
Very gay. Very homosexual.
> You little slut, I bet your followers had a grand old time trimming this
Well they were taking the landscaping jobs back from the Mexicans, so...

> His hole to his little clit
What hole are we talking about here? The 'pretty pussy' that's all drenched, or his asshole?
> Lapped at him like a starving man
Ah, this cliché. It seems these people can't get some new metaphors.
> Musk of Jayce making his eyes sting
He's not joking. He's deepthroating a dick that has not been washed in six months. That shit has to smell so fucking bad. We're talking spoiled cheese smegma. This man stinks to high heaven and he's shoving that Hispanic Hog down that throat. You better use some Irish Spring before trying that on me, ese.

> Sucked his balls like a dog, sniffing him in
Yeah, get that smell of rotting flesh into you. All that pus and infection, hell yeah. It's the best cologne. And don't you mean 'lick like a dog'?

Also: note that despite all the attempts to call Viktor a male, Jayce calls his own asshole 'she'. Misgendering your poop chute, go fucking figure. Then he kisses Viktor with the tongue he stuck into said asshole, which has other men's semen in it, and that's all good. Wash your mouth and ass before doing that.
> Practically sucked in like a vacuum
Can it suck the dirt off Jayce? Apparently it can.

Ah yes, nothing better than making your characters look retarded.
> Slipping of tongues and spit
And one of those has been up a used asshole.

> It felt so good, almost too good
> The only person who could make him feel this good
BPD men really can use their dick to get what they want, eh?
> With each thrust came a small bump pressing the skin up
I can't even bother with the belly bulge, because that sex dialogue is something else.
> Never had a cock this big, have you?
Is it 10 inches or the legendary 12 inches?
> Fuck me Jayce. Breed me. I need you now and always.
> Gonna fuck you full with my babies. We can start a family, right here
Funny how transmen insist they are men and they go full RETVRN when it comes to hot men with a big cock. They stop being True and Honest Men and go right back to flower printed dresses and flower crowns and knitting and raising kids and washing dishes and...that all sounds so very stereotypical, doesn't it? Very female-brained.

> His cock was tingling
Which one?
> It amounted to a load that even impressed Jayce
But can he give Jayce a shower with it?
> Can feel it already. I'm going to carry your babies
FTM in the streets, tradwife in the sheets.
> But he was determined to impregnate Viktor one way or another
Does he even produce eggs? Apparently so, as all his female reproductive parts are intact. Very gay sex.

Imagine that. You go through all this fucking trouble to make Viktor a man, and then resort to calling him 'mama' at the end. Pure poetry.

BTW, Harry Lloyd made a cheeky comment on them 'living in a cabin in the woods with four adopted children,' implying that they are male. It defeats the purpose if one of you has female reproductive organs and calls yourself 'mama', doesn't it? Tradfujo indeed. Who knew they all loved childbearing so much?

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Has the fanfic scene gone full-on degenerate, then? Shipping really causes brainrot, it seems like. I do know fanfic writers have gotten an immense sense of entitlement in the last few years.

Always has been. As for the entitlement, you can blame social media for that. Back in the 2010s there was some degree of competency expected among fanfic writers, and the early days of AO3 had higher quality fics. AO3 was legendary from 2014-2018, during the peak Marvel era. There are still better quality fics there, but I have noticed a drop in effort, such as authors refusing to do research, or not even knowing the lore of the fandom they write for. The concrit scene is dead over there; you might as well be rude. They're gonna act entitled, throw it back in their face.

I'll ask a friend later but he got screeched at for telling people to just have fun and don't take fanfiction so seriously. He showed me a few screenshots and the things they've said to justify their hobby were nothing short of insane, like saying writing fanfiction was rebellious.

The bit about 'women and queer people reclaiming their sexuality' is ironic, as I've posted the stats on who writes fanfiction: it's overwhelmingly a white woman's world, regardless of how they identify (even the 'enbies' are still white), and they 'reclaim their sexuality' not through female characters but male ones, because they do not feel sexualized or objectified through male characters.

Fanfiction is not 'rebellion', because it's not your IP, and I don't see these people clamour to destroy that kind of property right because that means their own work is fair game. You are not going to topple governments with your gay male porn that focuses on MALE sexuality and MALE characters and everything male - while it is all written by women. It's a self-defeating joke, and it doesn't help that these same women rah-rah about social mores and rebelling against right wing cultural mores when they are the group that hates any skin tone darker than a Cuban. When I say 'no niggers in slash', I mean it. There is a great irony in how a field dominated by women refuses to center female characters because, by their own admission, they are boring, and not as 'whole or complete' as male characters. Dudes rock.

Your friend should have snapped back with the demographics of AO3, and why women and queers, despite being such a stepped on minority, keep prioritizing male and pale characters. For people who cry about white supremacy...they sure do love that white cock.

Was this the fanfiction subreddit by any chance? They are known to act like that.

 

[Paper Machete]

Lmao ficcers are so insane, imagine writing anything at length about how you're rah rah fighting the power by writing bad smut.

 

[Whore of Babylon 69]

Your friend should have snapped back with the demographics of AO3, and why women and queers, despite being such a stepped on minority, keep prioritizing male and pale characters. For people who cry about white supremacy...they sure do love that white cock.

Was this the fanfiction subreddit by any chance? They are known to act like that.

He definitely should have, but he bailed out of the fanfiction scene years ago after dealing with retarded elitists like that person, and he was only doing it for fun so he didn't pay attention to the demographic numbers.

And yeah it was. He's definitely not going back there ever again after that altercation.

 

[Chandelier]

He definitely should have, but he bailed out of the fanfiction scene years ago after dealing with retarded elitists like that person, and he was only doing it for fun so he didn't pay attention to the demographic numbers.

And yeah it was. He's definitely not going back there ever again after that altercation.

I joined that subreddit years ago - like five years or more - and it was already filled with genderspecials who threw temper tantrums. I've posted this one a few times, but it's always a classic:


These people are the same ones writing fics like the ones I post here, talking about how they'll drop their panties and slobber over well-hung men and demand to be bred. Basically, they talk a big game about how special and queer they are, but once Chad Thundercock comes around, that genderspecial shit will get fucked right out of them. This was posted back in 2020 or so, during lockdowns, so things haven't improved since then. They've gotten louder, wilder, and more entitled.

Do not bother to be nice to these people. Especially when they admit shit like this:

 

[Whore of Babylon 69]

I joined that subreddit years ago - like five years or more - and it was already filled with genderspecials who threw temper tantrums. I've posted this one a few times, but it's always a classic:
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These people are the same ones writing fics like the ones I post here, talking about how they'll drop their panties and slobber over well-hung men and demand to be bred. Basically, they talk a big game about how special and queer they are, but once Chad Thundercock comes around, that genderspecial shit will get fucked right out of them. This was posted back in 2020 or so, during lockdowns, so things haven't improved since then. They've gotten louder, wilder, and more entitled.

Do not bother to be nice to these people. Especially when they admit shit like this:
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That last one is so bizarre to me, because in theory there's all sorts of smut for every taste under the sun, so this person wouldn't need to worry about anything they've said here.

 

[Petrusha the White]

People complain about the commercialization of fandom, which is irritating (constant ebegging/commission advertising + IP owners actually pandering to fandom memes and ships), but very very harmless compared to the policitization of fandom. I can tolerate constant commission pricesheet posting. I do not like people thinking that their fanfiction is "revolutionary" because it "represents underrepresented minorities" or whatever. I do not read fanfiction because it's written by women and queers! I read it because I want to see my favorite characters smooch! It's not that deep

 

[Palmfish]

AO3 lets you upload stories that aren't based on a single property or a crossover, right? Who's gatekeeping "original fiction"?

I don't know if this is of any input weight, but ao3 writers typically lean towards whatever will get them the most kudos/hits/whatever, which is why people who write "original fiction" of their OCs and whatnot typically end up a-logging at their audience when the people who come to read fandom smut end up seeing the person's original work instead and rightfully skipping over it.

 

[Big Miss Steak]

I read most of Manacled, THE Harry Potter Dramoine fic. I heard it was getting the trad publishing treatment so I was curious. I have a lot of thoughts about it that I will need to digest.

 

[Dafuqisdis?]

Do not bother to be nice to these people. Especially when they admit shit like this:
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Feels like the last line is literally an applause line. Turns out I'm not reading this shit because I'm mentally ill, it's because I'm trans(mentally ill). Please clap!

 

[Chandelier]

This was a gift fic, so be sure to give it some loving. The author also made sure to moderate comments, just to prune things a bit.

Spoiler

I'm not sure if this author is ESL or edited this at 3 AM, but I have noticed a lot of authors late-posting without re-reading their work. 'If I was you' sounds like something a Southerner would say.

Who knew pheromones could be vivid? Next we'll have all the colours like on those Korean colour drapes. Are you a Spring warm or a Summer cool? Weak scent or strong scent? Blue or yellow toned? ABO sure has everything!

You would think Zaunite omegas would be somewhat protected as those toxic gases would prevent them from scenting each other or would affect their biology, but no. Turns out, this just makes them sitting ducks for alphas, who wait around every corner ready to rape them. Weird how ABO really is a rape culture to the bone, but no one criticizes it because it's Deconstructing Gender.

> The crippled, omega Zaunite - three biggest misfortunes marked at his birth
You forgot trans, as that would be the forth, and for some reason in the ABO universe, you can change from female-to-male but you can never be an omega that wants to become an alpha. That's Just Biology and you can't change that.
> Shorting at the letters
Is Jayce cosplaying Rufus the bull?
> Piece of man
Piece of meat, more like.

> Jayce was acting like those big jerk alphas they used to joke about
You mean a jock stand-in? The wrong kind of alpha male who doesn't sell pamphlets?
> Instead of explaining himself or apologizing, he just sighed and rubbed his hands all over his face
Oh, so what normal men do.
> Being the big fan and observer of behaviour patterns he was
Right, that's why you're antagonizing the alpha so you can get a hard fuck.
> Being in the scientific field - alpha dominated area
Swap 'alpha' with 'male dominated' and you get that Deconstructing Gender bit. Omegas are always stand-ins for women for women who don't actually want to address said issues in their fic. They'll just skirt around the issue and say it has Always Been This Way and That's Just Biology. Omegas sure do need their Valerie Solanas.

> Can you stop being so sensitive?
> Specially at how the adjective 'sensitive' was attributed to omegas like some kind of disease
See what I mean? ABO is a nice way to talk about and glorify misogyny without touching on women once. Alphas don't need to be sensitive or caring or protective; they have to be literal rape beasts where suppressors have to be invented so omegas won't be raped during their ruts. I call them human shitbulls a lot, and damn is it accurate.
> Smoky pine, strong and so thick he could almost see it leaving Jayce's neck
Well damn, he IS a living Yankee Candle!
> Jayce was a big alpha, after all. Years of evolution had taught him, like any omega, that he should walk away from this increasingly unprofessional situation
Funny how evolution comes into play here. Biological essentialism is bad, but omegas need to be nice to alphas and do whatever they want or else they get their shit rocked. Are there any domestic violence laws against alphas? I've never actually seen that addressed in these fics.
> He swears he never sought out unpredictable or Piltover alphas for the past twenty-six years of his life, yet there was just something about Jayce Talis
Hold on, were you pursuing alphas AS A CHILD?! Don't fucking tell me this shit goes to children, too! What was he doing pursuing alphas before puberty?

> Thoughtfully scented blanket
That has plumes of pine wafting out of it, just like you're in the Rocky Mountains.
> Or maybe he was concentrating on not punching his lab partner in the face
So are there domestic violence laws protecting omegas or can alphas just do whatever they want? Punching your uwu smol trans omega in the face doesn't sound like good optics.
> He tried to cough out the hormones trying to crawl into his lungs
So the pheromones act like fungal spores. Nice. Hopefully he doesn't turn into a Clicker.

> Your hormones are trying really hard to molest me
'Molest' is both wildly appropriate and wildly inappropriate, because why are you antagonizing someone who is trying to molest you? And do these hormones make everyone moody, because their personalities change on a whim.
> Trying to ignore the smell of an omega he didn't have balls to court
It's fine, his balls will be slapping that ass real soon.

> Barking and growling his alpha does
Does he need a muzzle? I'm getting the muzzle.
> How he was traumatized about the fact that his own body could deceive him and make him make out with a pretty omega at a bar just because of one single mole
I'm surprised your 'alpha instincts' didn't take over and you didn't rape him in the bathroom. It's Just Biology.
> If his competition had fallen
No niggers in my ABO

*His cane

Jayce asks how Viktor knows about him and Mel, forgetting that Viktor is pretty perceptive. Omegas like gossip too.

> Being an omega doesn't make me stupid
I am curious to see what the Bell Curve is for alphas and omegas. If science is an 'alpha dominated field', what are omega dominated ones? Prostitution? Sewing? Fashion?
> Turning back to Viktor
*Turning his back to Viktor

> Now he was fucking mad
Why? Because Jayce won't fuck him, that's why.
> You can't just be this impulsive and risk all our work
A shame that he didn't have his state mandated sex slave - er, comfort omega, to help him through his ruts.
> Viktor's small wrist
He has a normal male wrist, but since he's a pooner I reckon it really is that fucking small.

> Only big difference being that his hand enveloped half of Viktor's jaw and neck
He really does have DK mode hands, doesn't he? Viktor's so smol and Jayce's hand so big he could probably dribble him like a basketball.
> Viktor can't remember a time where he felt so fucking wet and horny looking at such a dump alpha
He's doing the classic 'if I bait him enough he'll fuck me hard enough and we'll make up' tactic. So much for worrying about getting punched in the face - that fist is going up your vagina instead.

> More shocked by the information than by the fact he was almost attacked by his partner - the blame being clearly partly his
It's either clearly or partly. Second, weren't you just getting all wet because Jayce was hot and bothered? You can't walk that back now.
> He could have snapped it like a twig
That dick of his is going to do the job instead.

> Like the culprit was anyone other than his own conscience and degenerate desires
It's Just Biology, Bro!
> Distressed scent, sour, as if it made the omega obligated to cry with him
When alphas or omegas get upset, their scents turn sour. What does sour pine smell like? We know what sour milk smells like. God, it must smell terrible if their scents change as quickly as their moods.
> Ain't no way
Damn, we really are talkin' like we in the hood.

> What even Talis felt the need to apologize for?
This isn't English.
> Snapping at an omega who was purposely pushing his buttons?
Even so, Viktor did have a moment where he thought he was going to be choked or punched - and of course it gets brushed off as 'it's just his biology, he can't help himself'.

> Why did you came here?
He already told you. Jayce came there because he knew Viktor would show up. As it turns out, it was because he couldn't get enough of Viktor's scent.

Which we already know. Along with likely being an ESL speaker, the author forgot what she wrote just a few paragraphs ago.

> I can even pretend I'm in your nest sometimes, and that just fucks with me.
Does Viktor even nest? I don't recall him ever doing that when he wears a scent blocking collar all the time.
> Drinking some desperate doses of air
Nice alliteration, but why would you 'drink' air, when you're gasping it in?

> The alpha's hormones are making him dizzy
Since they have the same qualities as chlorine gas, I don't blame him. Forget scent blockers - wear respirators!
> How ungodly he would be behaving if he got a free trial of the real thing
I wasn't aware omegas provided free trials. Are his 30 days up already?
> What on earth would he be doing once he got to gulp down all the omega's scent for himself
Well he'll be gulping down that 'cunt juice' among other things - and feeding him that alpha cock.

> Hands squeezing Viktor's ridiculously small waist
This again? How many times do I need to read this?

> Sweet milk all over
Can't imagine what that smells like once it sours
> He licked from the boy's shoulder to his jaw as one swift motion
Damn, he really does have a dog's tongue, doesn't he?
> Jayce as hard as he could with his rather thick cock marking his pants
Is it going to be 'too big' to fuck with as it is in Mo Meat Mo Problems, or is it just above average? Guess we'll find out.

> This facade of behaved alpha could be thrown out the window
And out comes the beast that knows only fucking ad breeding.
> Not when he was smelling, feeling how bad his omega wanted him
Wasn't he afraid that Jayce was going to punch him earlier? Funny how fast that changed because his pussy got wet.

> all the man did was growl at the possibility of his omega wanting to get away from him
That's not a warning sign. Not at all.
> And Viktor would try to process what he said for a few seconds if he didn't get another bite
The classic 'my red flags were being raised but he had a big dick so it's no big deal' trope
> The Jayce who was only thinking with what was between his legs
Oh, so a regular man. It's Just Biology Bro.
> Making the poor boy choke on his own moan
Oh he's gonna choke, alright - and have the trans man fucked right out of him.
> His hand was touching over his womb
Uh, what? Inside or outside?

> Jayce's finger would go up to every hill of skin
He's got 'hills of skin' down there? Did he lose a bunch of weight?
>Another finger already circling his hole
If you can use 'squirting and vaginal ejaculation' you can use vagina. It's not a demonic word to use.
> Viktor's voice sounded tearful, just as small as he was trying to make himself look when hiding under the alpha's body
Gotta lean into that uwo smol trans boi thing, eh?

> Curious like he didn't know Jayce would be bigger than he would ever get
Spoiler: he's 12 inches, same size as the one from the Monster can series, and probably 3-4 inches thick. These women really do have a size fetish.
> Fuzzy mountain of venus
You mean Mound of Venus? Glad that it's not the Tarzan pubes, though!
> Cock fat and so big all Viktor could think of was if it would even fit inside of him
It will, and we're not including the knot yet. That'll be the real stretcher.
> Jayce had to fit, there was not a possible scenario where Viktor would walk out of this lab without feeling this alpha deep in his insides
And they say women don't care about size. I bet he'll be 'tasting him in his throat'.

> Tip rubbing against his omega's hole
Once again: if you can use the vaginal sex tag, you can use vagina. I know it doesn't trigger you as much as you say it does.
> This thing is not going smoothly inside, and it is not a compliment
Of course an alpha doesn't like his dick getting insulted. That's part of his pride! It's Just Biology to shove a big dick in a tight pussy, you know!

Oh nice, he got 6 inches in in one push. Now we have the rest and the knot. Don't worry, he'll cram it in there.

> he would end up acting like an insane mutt
1. He is. 2. Hilarious these people don't get the double meaning of that title, especially considering that Jayce is mixed race.
> He almost popped a knot because a naked, all red Viktor with half a cock impaling him was really a sign to see
It's later written he nearly KILLS Viktor doing this. Please do some more foreplay next time.
> He made it his personal mission to fuck all his length inside the boy
He keeps calling Viktor a 'boy', despite him being a pooner, and there was absolutely no foreplay. I'd believe this if he was 'wet as a waterslide', but here, Jayce just crams the damn thing inside. Even the fic where Viktor fucks Jayce with his tongue had more tact to it.
> The rest being hugged and fucked into Jayce like a flashlight
She means fleshlight, and yes, this is how the smut goes. Jayce fucks Viktor like a brute, and there's no time to even digest any of it.

> That made him cum again in less than five minutes
And? Women can do that. It's men who have longer refractory periods, though in some of these fics Jayce doesn't seem to have any. He's truly superhuman.
> Lips against his ear growling like a possessive idiot
You got that right.
> Viktor just gasped as he felt the knot bulge his stomach
> Being fucked by Jayce was a near death situation
I'll say. And this is hot HOW? At least make that pussy GLEAM.

> He could have won and lost the omega of his life in less than one hour
> I was acting like a dick
And you nearly killed him with your dick. Pottery.

> Wet and with cum dripping oh so slowly from him
What, we didn't even get a scene of Jayce filling him up like a water balloon? No bullying his bladder? No making his belly squish? No stretching his vagina so much the skin goes taut? For shame.

Viktor sure does giggle a lot for someone who nearly died on that dick. And the smut wasn't even that good aside from the 'big dick in small pussy' lure. The least you can do is make sure everything is as 'wet as a waterslide' and 'suck that clit like a straw'. If this was a fic gifted to me I would've trashed it straight up. Ain't no way you're selling me the man meat without the foreplay first.

---

While English is not this author's first language, one must wonder how a uterus magically appeared in that male body.

Spoiler

You already wrote that the existence of the cabin goes against the 'lifeless landscape' twice.
> A man with pale white skin
What happened to his Hexcore body? He's supposed to be purple.
> He places a hand on his large and rounded belly
And now the Arcane gave him a fully functioning uterus and eggs. Nice.


> Life in the mountains is simple
You just had a paragraph describing how it's dangerous.


Jayce decided he wanted to beat 'Getting Over It' and reach the final level: 'Getting Over It with Viktor'.

> However, to Viktor's helplessness, Jayce's answer is much simpler than he would like it to be

Jayce is getting angry at Viktor choosing to leave him behind, not knowing the circumstances or why Viktor might want to hide away, especially if he still had his Arcane Herald body. Jayce decides to go balls to the wall ALLCAPS, MOTHERFUCKER instead.

> WE WERE TOGETHER, OUR SOULS MERGED, YOU KNOW HOW I FEEL
Does he? He felt pretty good up on that mountain without you.
> YOU LEFT ME ALONE AND NOW YOU PRETEND YOU DON'T KNOW MY FEELINGS
He pretends he doesn't know Viktor is pregnant - something the author makes sure to note.

> You should be the hero who defeats the villain
Aye, and you should be punished for all those cosmic genocides. Do we have a TVA to hand down a Nuremberg trial?
> Because Viktor was already dead when Jayce, in a reckless and desperate impulse, used the Hexcore to save his life
He was actually still alive. You can see his face contort in pain.

"I can't live in a world without you" sounds less romantic and more clingy in this context, and reduces their entire character arcs to one relying on the other like they are symbiotic parasites. But people eat it up.

> Do you have any idea of what I wanted to do not to have to endure living in a world without you? I will always need you
Again, very parasitic. I don't see this as romantic.
> My life is worth nothing without you with me
And the world is safer when you are both dead - that is a fact.

She describes Jayce kissing Viktor twice, and of course his 'traitorous body gives in'. Did you expect it to act like anything else?

Yeah, he notices it now - twice in fact - when that should have been obvious from the get-go. Viktor wasn't even wearing anything to hide it, ffs.

How does he know the sex of the fetus? And how very TERFy, suggesting a man and a woman have to copulate to create new life. It's magic this time around, bigot. A man CAN give birth and you gotta deal with it!

Yeah, I'd be panicking at an Immaculate Conception, too. Where'd that sperm come from? Did he jizz on a whim in the astral plane and it landed in a magical uterus somewhere?

Technically he does, because he went through this in multiple timelines. Jayce is a natural gaslighter, it seems.

No, he isn't right. Viktor didn't want him to suffer the consequences of his actions, so Viktor let him go. It's a noble thing to do. But Jayce comes up there and screams at him that he was wrong and pulls the puppy dog look and all is well. I miss the times when adults actually acted like adults.

Technically he does. Viktor spent most of his life alone. He had himself (and his parents, if you want to count that) to aid him. Mage Viktor should be the one blamed for this, not him.

What happened to the screaming match, the 'YOU LEFT ME ALONE I CAN'T LIVE WITHOUT YOU RAAAAAAH' speech? He just now forgives him because he knows he's preggers and he can't afford a miscarriage so late?

This fic was supposed to have a graphic birth scene. Either that will be in the second chapter (if there is one) or the author was lying. For once, I'll go with both options. The girl was so desperate to post she didn't even include the scene where Viktor fulfills his female duties of pregnancy and breastfeeding, despite this actually not being a trans fic.

Yeah, it's that weird.

---

From the same author who gave us the Tattoo Shop AU, comes a tale of discovery, deadnaming, and tomboy genocide.

She said it, not me. And Marcus Skeen is the guy who wrote and performed a JayVik EP that was promptly overshadowed by bbno$'s cosplay. My man went from writing the 'JayVik anthem' to becoming sloppy seconds, lmao.

Spoiler: bind me by my binder

Juuuuuust in case you needed to know who the actual male was. They're teenagers in this, so when it comes down to the 'gender affirmation' shit, it gets sinister.

> As captivated as a little boy can be by a little girl
*cue Avril Lavigne*
> In a tacky cocktail dress and sneakers
Why are you wearing that at school? Forget foster care and 'transcending gender' for a moment...cocktail dresses are designed for fully grown, adult women. Why is a middle schooler wearing one?
> The weird tomboy with the cane was cooler than anyone gave her credit for
And she decides to troon out, because I fucking bet you - as this is the author's self insert - that Viktor was sexually abused in foster care, and that's why the poonout happened. The tomboy all of a sudden decides that being a girl is wrong and being a boy is better, and manages to snag hormones from somewhere. Tomboy genocide is real.

> Viktor started talking about being a boy
Oh I do wonder how THAT started out.
> Jayce did his best with the pronoun change, but it took him a month to get good at it
He's a kid. He's struggling to understand why this former tomboy declared herself a 'boy' and why she gets offended at being misgendered. But you can't ask why or else you're a dirty transphobe.
> His hair cut short and wardrobe exchanged for something more masculine
It really is about gender stereotypes with these people. Short hair and pants don't make you a boy, they make you a girl with short hair and pants. This is all from the people who claim people are always 'shoved into two boxes.'
> It as absolutely Viktor that made him realize he was into guys too
Cute, but he isn't a man. You're straight as an arrow, son.

> It isn't until after that Viktor remembers he can get pregnant, and that sends the two down a worry spiral
No shit. Testosterone is not birth control and we find out later that the 'no hormones are given to minors' crowd had a minor on them since she was 16. Thanks for admitting the obvious, you groomer bitch.
> They made Jayce call Viktor by his old name
What transphobes! I bet they voted the wrong way, too. I bet they're all Christian maniacs who can't support a True and Honest trans boi.
> It felt wrong
That does, but a tomboy 'becoming' a man by butchering her body is perfectly fine. These people are maniacs.

> It felt like he got caught cheating
Yeah, that Central European racism coming right through. He knows when you've been fucking niggers, Jayce.

> Balked at the term boyfriends
Why? I thought you were a boy? A real gay man? You mean to tell me you don't like the term because it gives you The Ick?

It figures that the trans man wants to save money to get top surgery first, vs doing anything to make him walk better. Priorities. Destroy your flesh and make your nipples look like NY pepperonis vs actively fixing your health.

Yeah, and imagine what would happen if Viktor got sent to a male prison. You want to be men so badly until it comes time to playing with Big Bubba and the boys.

> Small as they are, he's only a man
And what is a man, by chance? A penis owner? An ejaculator? Do tell. Funny how we know what they are when it comes to emulating one.
> Viktor gave him permission to 'enjoy them while they last'
And then he can touch nasty dog-ear scars from the zippertit procedure, and touch fried nerve endings and wonder what the fuck happened to Viktor's areolas.

Jayce drops his hand to rub at Viktor's 'cock' twice, says quiet twice, and makes a mention that Viktor has been on T for 'a few months'. That bottom growth will never reach the size of a man's penis, but they always insist that it's equivalent to one. Either way, I suppose one thing we can be grateful for is that Viktor waited until 18 to get the T shots - despite them throwing tantrums over laws seeking to end minors getting them. In any case, yes, testosterone does make you more horny - and it also rots your vagina. But you've heard that from me hundreds of times already.

Also, how were they not caught earlier? They have cell phones and text messages, yet the cameras inside department stores suddenly disappeared.

Cute. Now how do you plan to pay for top surgery while owning a shitty Honda? GoFundMe? Onlyfans? Bitching about transphobia under the username, bruhthats_gay (that's her actual handle) despite not being a gay man?

Thank you, dear author, for making this your little journal. You were tossed around in the foster care system, killed the tomboy inside, and now think you are a gay man - and turn what is perceived as a gay man because he is sensitive into a full blown pooner. How pathetic.

Well, it has been done. Trans Viktor has now reached 2000 fics, and is near the number Jayce/Viktor was before S2 came out (296. From 400 to 2000, that's five times the original number.

I read most of Manacled, THE Harry Potter Dramoine fic. I heard it was getting the trad publishing treatment so I was curious. I have a lot of thoughts about it that I will need to digest.

I read about that. She's planning on deleting it because many of her original work's plot was based on that; I mean, 'The Love Hypothesis' is basically a Reylo fic. What'd you think of it?

 

[Troon Whisperer]

Your friend should have snapped back with the demographics of AO3, and why women and queers, despite being such a stepped on minority, keep prioritizing male and pale characters. For people who cry about white supremacy...they sure do love that white cock.

It will forever be one of the funniest things that they count anything involving Hermione as "POC" because that evil Terf Queen said she could be black because they are that fucking desperate for POC representation in their shipping stat lists that isn't Asian.

 

[Tri-Tachyon'sClown]

*snip*

This post hurts me.
>Describes fanfiction from hell
>Screenshots it
>Copies the text and posts part of it in a spoiler
>Links it
>Archives it
>Makes a PDF of it
This is probably what you're supposed to do on this thread since I was just linked here but dear lord.

 

[Big Miss Steak]

This post hurts me.
>Describes fanfiction from hell
>Screenshots it
>Copies the text and posts part of it in a spoiler
>Links it
>Archives it
>Makes a PDF of it
This is probably what you're supposed to do on this thread since I was just linked here but dear lord.

Everything must be preserved so that we can continue to laugh even if the author edits the work or dirty deletes

I read about that. She's planning on deleting it because many of her original work's plot was based on that; I mean, 'The Love Hypothesis' is basically a Reylo fic. What'd you think of it?

While it's undoubtedly a cut above a lot of the other fanfic slop, it's still not a very well-written story and there are aspects of Manacled that are deeply disturbing. It's already been deleted from AO3 and anywhere else the author published it, but it's very easy to find a pdf/epub of the fic by keyword searching the Dramoine subreddit. I have absolutely no clue what this thing will look like once traditionally published because the Harry Potter and Handmaid's Tale elements are so integral to the story, and because the story arc is so icky. I will make a post about it sometime in the next couple days. I still have the epub file and I'll see if I can attach it to that post. Theoretically there shouldn't be any issues as it's smaller than many videos people embed or attach to their posts.

 

[Lizard Machine Bugs]

I feel like there's been too much Arcane-tism in this thread lately, not that it isn't autistic or the fics shown don't fit the thread criteria. I just think we need some new matieral.
In that vain, here's something from /JP/ I've been keeping my eye on for a while.

Spoiler

Introducing the Hakurei Shrine Experience, also known as the HSE. A one million plus word long Touhou fanfiction about Yukari kidnapping and raping Anon(a viewer self insert), then forming a rape-dungeon-brothel around him and then Yukari forces his and Reimu’s daughter to rape him as well.
Originally starting as a round robin community fanfiction thing from 4chan, thread here and the fic on Ao3 here.
Also all of the youkai that rape the main character cosplay as Reimu, I think, and the tags, are all that needs to be said on the subject about it.

 

[Chandelier]

That knight AU I posted earlier was deleted, but has since been re-written and reuploaded. The first chapter is mostly the same, but with an additional 2k words. So, let's see what has changed and what hasn't.

Spoiler: Chapter 1 - once upon my ridin' knight

So, there are some changes made here: instead of a violin, the author used the more period correct lute, and instead of a princess, Seraphine is a 'noblewoman' - before it goes back to her being a princess. As to why they are allowing a trans man, and not an actual man, to wed a princess is still not explained. That is the biggest plot hole and I doubt the author will address that just as she refused to do it the first time.

This time around, Jayce is part of a company of knights, vs being alone, and Viktor has a proper transport. This eventually makes their separation and isolation more believable, as the bandit attack still happens. Viktor tells himself that he is totally gay, being more attracted to hot, muscular men than women - when it's just spicy straightness with a different label.

Yep, this time he has carriages; before, it was just him and Jayce. There was no way that Jayce, a knight, would be solely tasked with delivering a valuable prince of Piltover to Zaun (Viktor is made a Prince of Piltover; before, he was a random prince to a random kingdom, so the geography is now more suited to that city/country than to a proper medieval AU). This is more believable.

> It was the voice of a queen, a mother
So is Viktor expected to be a sea horse dad, or is everyone OK with that? How are going to continue a legacy with another woman? I still bet it's going to be Jayce who does that, as he took Viktor's virginity in the original, and likely will do it in this rework, too.

This was used in the old fic, and while it does make more sense in the rewrite, if it's a Medieval AU they should at least be happy their prince isn't dead from plague. I just wonder if the peasants know that their 'prince' is actually a princess.

> He hadn't been allowed to attend courtly lessons alongside his peers
Does he even have any? I get the impression Viktor was raised in total isolation. What peers could he possibly have at all?

> The heavily armored escort was not just a precaution, it was a necessity
Paying attention to a major criticism, good job. Now, about Viktor's transness...

> His mind had always dwelled more on men
Because you're straight. I wonder how and why Viktor decided he was trans when his mother and other peers would have treated him as female. Did something change during puberty, or...?
> He wondered if he had the same effect on Knight Talis
Spoiler: he does, and either they fuck in this chapter or they will bang in the next one.

Viktor is supposed to be a smart, yet perceptive, man, even if he did grow up alone. If he was reading erotica books, he should know what Jayce meant there. It was a sexually subtle comment, and Viktor sure knows what it means because it made him a little horny.
> Wed their princess
Ah, so she's a princess again. Again, I have to wonder what the politics are like to even wed a transman to a woman. Viktor can't impregnate her or do any 'princely duties', so what's the point?

So why did Viktor ask? Drama and context, that's why.

The horse riding scene is the same, as is the eventual bandit fight - except they attack the company, too. Writing that a 'king wasn't expected to ride' when that was a sport expected of most princes is...well. I get he's crippled but even the author wrote he rode the 'tame, older beasts' vs the spirited ones. So he does know how to ride, she just forgot what she wrote.
> Before he was married off to a woman he barely knew
Newsflash, you're a woman too.

Always about safety with pooners.

And the bandit scene is next.

> A falcon's cry
No way that isn't an Assassin's Creed reference.
> Why did this kind of disrespectful treatment make his mind spiral toward thoughts so indecent?
Don't worry, you'll be walking around in the shape of his cock, soon. You'll be told you can take those 12 inches of knightly man meat, and you will, because a woman ain't going to give you the dicking of your life.

> The sun hung low
> Midday sun
One suggests evening, the other is at its highest point in the sky. Big difference.

Now, the bandits here are more like a ragtag group of mercenaries, properly armed and ballsy enough to take on knights. Better than just the dagger wielders of the original.

I wasn't away John Dark Souls was in this!

This line was unfortunately kept, and it makes it sound like a bad Witcher sidequest. All we're missing is a fat guy with drums going COME ON, ENGERLUND! SCORE SOME FUKKIN GAWLS!

Guess he must've gotten that from Darius.

Yep, we have the attempted sexual assault scene...but it comes off more like a proper hostage situation. The original was way more cliched. Jayce actually gets a chance to show off how brutal he is.

Annnnnd this line was kept, too. It was shitty then, it's still shit now.

That's twice a different bandit has snarled. There are other noises humans make, you know.

You might as well commit to the bit, you know. No point in begging.

This was in the original as well - Jayce was a member of the Two-Faced Snake, a mercenary band, and is still recognized and feared by commoners. That likely explains why no one wants to fuck with him.

And for a Medieval AU, they didn't use 'okay'. That's a short form of 'all correct', and didn't appear until the 1880s.

Well, at least it's believable this time around. The first time they were ambushed solo; this time their company was slaughtered. This gives them a reason to be alone - and sexy times are afoot.

> He had a fiancee waiting, there was no time for distractions
That's just your innate female biology talking. You see a hot man, you get the need to breed with him. Nature is one helluva bitch.

So he didn't bother to stuff the wound with those healing herbs like he did in the original, and now you're going to have a big, nasty, infected scab. He's going to get a fever real soon.

> You must be a sight to behold
Uhhh you're looking at him? Weird thing to saw when you know what he looks like.

So much for that 'low point' sun. Glad we're back to afternoon shenanigans.

This more or less stays the same; in the next chapter they ride around until they find the clearing, Jayce finds the hare, Sky is introduced and whitewashed, and they fuck. I wonder if the smut will be any better or if it will be just as bad as it was the first time.

Fingers crossed we won't see 'walk around in the shape of his dick'. The cabin sex scene is what I'm really watching out for - especially that deepthroat scene. The twist will also be the same - but that will be brand new. The new chapter will be reviewed here once it's posted.

---

This pretty much writes itself. As it is not available to non AO3 users, it will be screenshotted here.

If it reads like a fuckton of projection...it is.

Spoiler

I don't recall Jayce having asthma. This is definitely something the author projected onto him.
> The drugs he took at a party three years ago fried his brain and he hasn't noticed since now
Interesting. What kind?

> The least stagnant water he knows of
> it's pretty stagnant
Same difference.
> Crazy scurvy
You get that from Vitamin C deficiency.
> Trenchest foot ever
That's from damp socks and boots that aren't dried out.
> How do people make soap? Lye. He definitely doesn't have lye
Not sure if these are the 'alters' talking, but you also need fat as well as lye. And guess who has the most fat here...

Can't tell if serious or tongue-in-cheek. Who's going to start a coup, and with who or what?

> His mage isn't Viktor
This would be one case where the alternative would be preferred and Ryze would be the mage.
> She, that's so...why does he feel
Yes, there is a 'bigender' tag for Viktor here, because he's also a woman for some reason. I also am not sure if Viktor is the woman the whole time, or if Jayce is referring to himself as female.

The funny thing is, when you put all those 'like' sentences in a gender guesser, it comes out with a female verdict.


Is it Ramon or Raul who's talking? Are they all Mexican, too?

> When we have sex usually I'm a girl
Talk about fucking weird. There is a feminization tag, but this sounds more like sissification, being that a man wants to be 'fucked like a girl/woman' because they think that's what being a woman is. The irony that Viktor, a woman pretending to be a man, is saying this is not lost on me.

If this was just about DID and explorations of it, I wouldn't have minded it. The moment the gender shit got brought up I lost all interest. Viktor, a woman, calls himself 'sapphic' when in a relationship with a woman (because he would be a lesbian) but he's a man with Jayce, so it's a different kind of gay, and 'presents masculine' every other time, so he doesn't 'fuck like a woman' anymore.
> Jayce isn't a girl, he's never felt like one - okay, he definitely has felt like one
Which means what?

> Annoyed at being told to advocate for himself
Viktor isn't even being an asshole here. He's being rather understanding. But I have to ask: who is higher on the oppression pole: Jayce, the half-Mexican who feels like a woman, or Viktor, the white transman?

Who's the man? Who's the woman? We're all bigender here, baby.

Right. I'll just let the author's note speak for itself:

---

This fic I reviewed earlier that was a let down in the red wings department had a second chapter, and fulfilled their smutty promise. Oh anon, how you deliver!

Spoiler

Guess you gotta show you got your red wings somehow, eh? For context: this is the second chapter where Viktor has sex with Jayce, who is on his period. They never got to the down and dirty proper - this is where they actually do it.

> Smut novel love interest
Aha, get it? Totally mocking those silly bodice ripper novels...while reading like a bodice ripper. You aren't breaking the fourth wall, you're breaking the believability. Just stick to the bad porn and roll with it.
> Moves Viktor's own body like he weighs almost nothing
T does a lot, but all I can think of is a slightly more muscular Jammidodger. Viktor is lucky he's so thin; otherwise that girl is getting her back broke.

> His briefs feel warm and slimy, cum sinking into the fabric and over the trail of hair going up his crotch
Ew. Hopefully you DO wash that.
> Jayce is a large man
Maybe horizontally. Trans men can bulk up, but they are never as large as normal men.

> Smattering of chest hair
He has more on his belly; that is, if the author remembers how much body hair he actually has. I am also surprised he has sensation near his nipples. Usually they get fried once the zippertit surgery gets done.

Glad we forgot to capitalize our new sentences.

Viktor out here with the hard carry as always. Even if the fic is bad, he's there to save the day.

> Jayce's hands are large enough to nearly encompass his waist
This again? This is pretty much said so many times it might as well become a new Commandment. But this time around, Jayce is the FTM, not Viktor, and Viktor's waist is lean - it's not that small. Jayce's hands would not be able to do that because his hands would be smaller due to him being female. I swear this line gets copied again and again because of a bad analysis on twitter or somewhere.


> Layer of dark hair on his belly
So he has a thicker patch of hair there, but a thinner patch on his chest, like he's a burnt pancake. OK.
> Sculpt of his tights
She means 'shape of his thighs'.


> Make cunt clench
*Made his cunt clench
> The outside of his hole

> Viktor's cock is pretty average girth, he'd wager, but he knows he's long
The one time he's an actual man and he's still nerfed compared to the Hispanic Hog. Sad!

> Red-tinged slick dribbling out onto the sheets
In case you forgot, this was a period sex fic. But I am glad that our True and Honest Man is on birth control!
> His cunt
> His hole
Pick one.
> Sliding their cocks together
Riiiight.

> You feel like you were made for him
I mean, this is straight sex with a different label, so it IS technically true.

> Against Jayce's dick, sliding it against his cock
Sliding what against whose cock now?

> the clean out
*The clean one out

Oh, really? The Hispanic Hog can get hard within seconds of ejaculation. You, poor white man, have to wait a few hours. Skill issue. 12 inch Jayce would be down to fuck as soon as he took a breath.

I wasn't aware Nikocado Avocado made an appearance here.

While it's undoubtedly a cut above a lot of the other fanfic slop, it's still not a very well-written story and there are aspects of Manacled that are deeply disturbing.

I'll have to give it a read sometime. Dramoine isn't as popular as Drarry but I did read an article on how the author was going to delete it as she was basing her original novel off of it, and it would count as monetization. That leaves 'All the Young Dudes' as the crown of that fandom.

It is something when you read super popular fics and they don't pan out as you hope, eh? That's how I was with 'Coming Home'. Wildly popular, yet terribly written.

I feel like there's been too much Arcane-tism in this thread lately, not that it isn't autistic or the fics shown don't fit the thread criteria. I just think we need some new matieral.
In that vain, here's something from /JP/ I've been keeping my eye on for a while.

Any material will work here! Arcane is just my fixation at the moment. I used to do CoD fics and was even looking at HOTD fics.

Stories that are more than one million words are something else. The fandom that has the most of them are Marvel and, you guessed it, Harry Potter.

 

[Thiletonomics]

This post hurts me.
>Describes fanfiction from hell
>Screenshots it
>Copies the text and posts part of it in a spoiler
>Links it
>Archives it
>Makes a PDF of it
This is probably what you're supposed to do on this thread since I was just linked here but dear lord.

Well I do try to do my best to make sure that other people can later experience the said written horrors.

On another note, is it male writers, or female ones, that write foot fetish and/or scent fetish stories? Here's one example, a FE3H one that also has Futas:



Link / Archive

(The total amount of text would exceed the 64k character limit)

The fic also pictures of footjobs (obvious NSFW), for some reason. Does adding pictures to fanfics, since AO3 allows that, do anything except to add more fetish fuel to blatant fetish fics like this one?

 

[Tri-Tachyon'sClown]

 

[Chandelier]

It's OK to be confused for this one. First world problems, you know. This is written by a 20 year old they/them Aussie with the most feminine strawpage I've ever seen.

Spoiler

That's quite the tongue twister. Who has the bigger cock? Answer: whoever has the bigger strap-on.

> Jayce is a damn pro at eating pussy
As all gay men are, I've heard.
> He looks like he's about to fucking burst
Did he eat the wrong candy at the Willy Wonka tour?

So this is S2 Jayce, who also wears a brace...but lives his life completely normally to the point you forget he even has it. As this is a modern AU, his broken tibia can absolutely be fixed with surgery and physiotherapy. I honestly had no idea the author was using this version of Jayce until she clarified that brace was his.
> into the curls on his mound
Never a fic without the Tarzan pubes - well except that mango loco fic where Jayce goes, 'Get pregnant, get pregnant, get pregnant!' He was smooth there.
> Jayce nuzzled into his bush and inhaled
Does it smell like a Yankee candle? Can you find an ABO scent in there?

> Not too distracting
You're a pro if you can get oral and still do work. Most people lose their shit.

> Past his hole a little
Entrance is just fine, thanks. Especially if you ever use 'vaginal fingering' tags.

> Spitting onto his pussy
He was already wet. You didn't need to do that.
> Jayce was literally jerking him off
Eh, not really. But at least I saw 'clitoral hood' used.
> Let me suck your cock
This is where the mindfuck begins.

> His overstimulated cock
Uh, which one?
> Someone who had just spent the better part of an hour eating pussy
As real gay men are wont to do. Kudos to him though for going where no man has gone before - without complaining, that is.

> What the hell, how could his heart stand this man?
IDK, that massive dick might have something to do with it. Always the proud trans man until that thing gets whipped out.
> You like calling my clit...a cock. You said you wanted to suck my cock
In which the trans author brings up a conundrum: Jayce, a man, calls a clit a cock, and Viktor, the transman, who wants to see their clit as a cock, notes the difference (which is a first). What a riddle.

> A more tangible cock in your mouth
Hey, wait a minute! If the clit is a cock, why does size matter? I am told they're exactly the same and a source of pride...why are we admitting that this really IS all about size?

> He was supposed to just walk around his workplace and fight off a raging boner for eight hours
If you're hard for eight hours, you're going to need to go to the ER.
> The break room bathroom hated to see Jayce come in
Not as much as the person with IBS. Though it's a close second.

> He hadn't been with a man in even longer. And even though Viktor was lacking the anatomy of the average man
Yes, because he's a woman. Female. You fucking him makes you straight, not gay.
> he had the confidence of ten
Just don't compare dick sizes and you're good.

> Jayce wasn't so close-minded that he thought being dominant meant being the one with the equipment
Wew! I was under the impression that was exactly the case, if the other works I posted here are anything to go by. So glad Jayce is progressive and sheds those damnable 'toxic masculinity' traits and shows he's willing to get pegged by a transman. We support equality, here.

> Am I not my own man, capable of my actions
No.
> Jayce wanted them in his mouth
The buttons or his fingers?

> Peeled off his shirt and tossed it aside
> When the shirt came off
The shirt is already off.
> I like it to look as natural as possible
Oh? I was under the impression that the clitoris was a cock (x2). What's this TERFery I'm reading?
> Going to feel like it's really yours
Turns out...it is! It's modeled after Jayce's shape and size.

> I put that in you?
He has the anatomy that can stretch to take it. How come you can't tell that it's the same size and shape as yours, Jayce? Do you not measure your own dick? Lemme guess. It's the legendary 12 inches, complete with a belly bulge.
> To warm up to it. To start bobbing his head
This can be one sentence.

> There was no feeling of flesh, no burn of hot blood on his tongue, but it felt incredible all the same
Sounds rather depressing in context. You're comparing a pale lump of silicone to the real thing, and despite insisting it is equivalent to the real thing...you can't stop comparing it to the real thing.
> To feel the control over Jayce he was never born with. It may be a substitute, but it was a damn good one
See point above. Also, why would he not have control? That has nothing to do with his sex, does it?
> Feeling the slight outlines of veins
Which aren't real.

> Viktor, who has always hated being treated as though he were made of glass
Funny how even the T never managed to fix that.

> Jayce grabbed Viktor's waist and wrapped his hands around it, fingertips meeting in the middle
Oh, it's THIS line again. The line I keep seeing over and over again, like these people cannot conceive of anything else. Now I am really tempted to go back and see just how big Jayce's hands are against Viktor's back and see if this is true.
> There were no nerve endings in the dildo...it was disconnected from his body, but there was a phantom feeling he got watching Jayce grip a mould a flesh coloured so similarly to his own
Again, sounds depressing as fuck. You don't have an actual penis, so you use a substitute, and can't stop comparing yourself to the substitute, despite insisting you're a real man. If anything, the dildo really is an allegory for trans identity: you can make it look like the real thing, but it will never compare, even in the pseudo dick-owner's words.
> He like liked marking
Someone get their beta.
> He could fit his entire cock in Jayce's mouth with one thrust
And how big is this dildo? 10 inches? 12? Because that's impressive if he can do that without choking.

> Didn't think I'd like bottoming? You're more progressive than that
You're taking a dildo up the ass from a woman pretending to be a man. You cannot get any more progressive than that.
> Such an eager little slut. Just the idea of my cock got you so pathetically asking to be fucked
Hey, he's a progressive! Talk dirtier. Anything goes.

> I thought a filthy slut like you would have a more expansive collection
Then why ask about bottoming if you knew he had said collection? I'll take back what I said about Jayce being straight; he's clearly bisexual. If he likes shoving stuff up his ass, that boy wants to experiment. He's not 100% a top.

> Viktor was used to the size of his partner by now, but even he needed to be loosened up a little
You have the anatomy that is built for that, that is the difference. You shouldn't need to spit on it either, if you're sufficiently wet.

> It flew towards Viktor, almost hitting him in the face
Reminds me of the scene from Trailer Park Boys when Ricky throws the pillow at Julian.
> You're so fucking big
He's fucking you with a replica of your cock, dumbass.
> He had never been spoken of as if he was necessary, as if he was wanted this way
> He had always been conditioned to feel as if he were meek, small and especially during sex, the one who had to be obedient, submissive
Hm...I wonder why he's being treated that way. Is it because of his sex? Sounds rather...outdated especially coming from a 20-year-old zoomer who wants to smash gender roles and talks about how wonderful being trans is. Why, then, do I keep coming across confessions such as these, where they admit that they're expected to be obedient and submissive because they are the 'feminine' ones?
> There was always a side of Viktor that felt inferior
Sounds like projection to me. It is something to see this in FTM fics, and never MTF fics. There's always a degree of shame and not wanting to be seen as the stereotypical bottom...while writing non traditional masculine characters as bottoms.

> He did want Viktor to fuck him, he did want Viktor to hold the reins of his body and steer it in his own way, he did want Viktor
Are you not in a relationship? When did this get so introspective?
> If he did have a cock, he would have spilled into Jayce at the sight alone
Thanks for admitting your roid clits aren't cocks. Takes a lot, but I'm proud of you.

He calls Jayce a dirty whore and demands he ejaculate on his sheets, and then later gets mad when Jayce ejaculates on his sheets...okay.

Uh, you told him to do it. You called him a dirty slut and everything.

For an 8k word fic, this sure did fly by fast. Didn't have much substance despite all those tags insisting it was doing to be a banger (literally and figuratively). All I got instead was a pep talk on how it's unfair that Viktor is expected to act submissive and meek. Whose fault is that, again? Wouldn't be the zoomer who doesn't want those gender boxes but abides by them anyways, right?

Oh, nice. Talk no jutsu worked here, too.

I included that author's note just to let you know that this is a 20 year old woman who has grown up on TikTok and Twitter and cannot draw her own OCs to save her life. Her writing is better than said art, but not by much. It's simply unimpressive, and almost reads like a personal journal sometimes. This is in fact the second part; I'll have to read the first part sometime, and take us right to the beginning.

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This is a multi-chapter fic, and is set in the 1990s-2018. If you think it's going to be about nightclubs, Beanie Babies and cool music, you'd be dead wrong. Get ready for a lecture.

Spoiler: Chapter 1 - Ain't no Nirvana

Oh, good. We're going to have a talk about internalized homophobia, but discussions about transphobia is off-limits. I would love to know what kind of homophobia we're dealing with here, especially as the character in question is actually a woman. Class consciousness from someone who probably gets their politics from Twitter is going to be a hoot, so let's crack open this bitch.

> No real concept of wealth or class
Yet he knows his mother has to work two jobs to keep them afloat, and kids can pick up on that pretty quick.

The Gameboy came out in 1989, and if is the 90s he's growing up in, by the time he's 10-11 the Playstation would have come out. There are mentions of Pokemon, but none for the Nintendo 64 or Goldeneye, some of the most popular platforms and games of that era.

> He doesn't feel right changing something so fundamental about himself
Foreshadowing. This will come into play much later into the story.
> He's used the sound of traffic
*He's used TO the sound of traffic

> At first Jayce thought it was a boy, but now he thinks maybe it's not
Uh oh, better get your genders in order, boyo.
> The haircut is ambiguous, not long enough to be long hair but not short hair
This is an era of the heroin chic, and where girls tended to go all out in grunge. Short hair was common, as was girls skateboarding and playing in the mud. If you want to play at gender roles, at least get the 90s look right.

> Are you a boy or a girl?
Excuse me, that's literally genocide to a trans person.
> I'm a girl, duh!
This isn't the case for long.
> If maybe that's the style goal here
What? Took me a few minutes to parse what she just wrote.

*Tobias

All of those proper nouns should be capitalized. Ivy League, Christmas, etc. Basic stuff. And of course our boy Jayce here has to be a shitlib. He'll work on projects in Brazil vs impoverished counties in America. Insert stonetoss socialist meme here.

> Time slippery wobble somewhere deep in him
...what?

Glad he has come to terms with his bisexuality. I assume the 'internalized homophobia' bit will come from his youth, and whether him having sex with a transman makes him gay or not.


*Silver hair
Strange how Heimerdinger got a different name. His first name is Cecil.

Ah, the man of the hour...and already he's a sanctimonious prick. I can already tell what his politics are.

Oh my. What happened to cause their divorce? Internalized homophobia or a splash of transphobia? That bleeding heart has gotta bleed for something.

Spoiler: Chapter 2 - Not them bones

That's how it works with historical societies. Someone should've given him the memo - and this boy lives in DC; he KNOWS how permits work. This was never going to a single season one-and-done thing.

I'll admit, I never thought there would be a YOU NEED TO LEAVE style argument, but here we are. Jayce is right to bring up the ADA and how there should be accommodations made for disabled people, yet Viktor, the disabled trans man, shoots it down because it would 'ruin the building' even though most older buildings do have those accommodations.

And why is he so nasty, you ask? That's something for ten years ago, explained in flashbacks.

That stubble just makes him look like Asmongold. Thanks for killing the mood.

Ah, we finally have a PlayStation and N64 reference! Though by this time, the PS2 would have been released and it would have had way more titles.
> Girls just aren't as strong as boys
I get what the author is going for: a gender critique on how Viktor, a girl at this time, feels pressured due to her sex and the limitations imposed upon her. Her solution, though, is to just have Viktor say she's a man vs accepting herself as a GNC woman. And yes, boys are stronger than girls, even at that age - puberty only widens the gap.

So here is where Viktor starts having mental breakdowns over her sex, and this is where the gender dysphoria plot comes in. There was no social media, so Viktor would not have had Reddit or Twitter for encouragement, but there's no doubt in my mind the author is going to pull all the usual stops as to why Viktor is 'actually' a boy. Guaranteed it's all going to be based on stereotypes.

She needed a trigger warning for 'parental abuse', even when it's obvious that Viktor's mother is a druggie and an alcoholic. No point in treating this with kid gloves.


If you want to be 'seen as a boy', you better stop using 'like' so much. If I put this dialogue into a gender guesser, the AI is going to correctly clock it as feminine.

> It's not like she's ever been a girl to him
Just because she is gender nonconforming, does not make her a boy. It's fascinating to see progshits slap on those dastardly labels they say don't exist out of one side of their mouth.

But yeah, having Viktor go to a boy's gym class would be brutal. You can pretend that sex doesn't exist or doesn't matter until that volleyball gets spiked at 70 mph towards your head.
> This means they could never get married
Ah, so THIS is where the internalized homophobia is for. Why is he thinking about marriage when he doesn't have romantic feelings yet?
> We'll be bros
Hell yeah, dood. Screw those NLOGs, we'll be the bestest bros, bro.

This is 2004; most of the forums on trans shit is going to be adult-oriented. I don't want to think of the implications of that. Trans issues were still mostly a minor thing; it wasn't until tumblr and 2014-2015 when this became mainstream.
> The copious amounts of red tape
This is your field of expertise. You should know that this was always going to be the issue - and you likely pushed for said regulations anyways, so suck it.
> Some petty bullshit
Oh, now I want the tea. What happened?

Jesus should be capitalized.
> Jayce witnessed Viktor's transition firsthand, but he only got to see him bloom into a young guy, a youthful teen. He's never seen him as a man
Because he isn't one. You just saw a teenage girl, who hated her body, go through puberty - and who now hates your guts for some undisclosed reason.

"Sorry people, I couldn't complete the project."
"Why?"
"An angry tranny I pissed off in my youth is still mad at me, and I can't do anything because that might be transphobic. AITA?"

> Insists that Viktor is a true and honest man
> Can't stop thinking about his 'delicate hands'
Wew lad, I can't wait for that tea.

Spoiler: Chapter 3 - After five years on the east coast, it was time to go home

I'm having a hard time figuring out who the teenage girl is supposed to be. Is it Viktor, or Jayce?

> Or if he has to reach to sound like a girl
He already 'sounds like a girl' because he is one. You start losing that 'teenage boy' voice once puberty starts.
> Oh my God that is so weird. You sound just like a girl
Funny, so do you, Jayce. A 2000s era boy would say, 'That's so weird, dude. You sound like a chick!"
> Shots
What shots? Vaccines or T shots? Because I don't think PP was handing them out on a whim back then.

> Sees teenage girls
> Thinks they are being transphobic
> First instinct is to fight them and 'teach them a lesson'
I'm sure a pair of Irish sunglasses and an assault charge would be a nice way to peak them.

It is common for girls uncomfortable with their body to wear baggy clothes so they won't be sexualized, but here Viktor does it because he also has medical conditions that did not prompt anyone to call CPS on his mother. Also, note how his 'voice breaks' when he gets upset - they usually lose control and forget all those voice training lessons once that happens.

Cerebral Palsy is a common trait authors give to him, but they forget that most cases of cerebral palsy have below average IQs - hovering near the retardation level. They no doubt saw the muscular dystrophy aspect of it and went with that, and not the profound intellectual challenges that has.
> It made sense when Vik was still a girl
He still IS one, and will always be one. He's also binding his chest when he has a warped spine, which is only going to make things worse. But as trans people insist, the euphoria is worth it, even when your bones break. It always comes first to fixing issues that have drastic impacts on one's QOL.
> It's a boyish figure nonetheless
> Points out the ways it isn't
He can stay thin and narrow, but again, puberty is going to fix that. He already has the hips, now things like the placement of his knees and elbows will give him away if you know where to look.

> He's beautiful like a boy
There's something really sinister to this, and it's saying that this person cannot be beautiful as a GNC girl, but they are pretty as a 'twink' until puberty and ageing hits and they end up looking 45 at 27. It's almost a juvenile 'girls are icky and boys are prettier' comment.

> Be realistic
Homie if that was the case, you'd accept yourself as a GNC girl. Binding your breasts won't make that scoliosis better.

Cool! Now, what's the tea between them? So far, Viktor's only 'big' personality is that he's a cunt. He's lucky the cerebral palsy didn't hit him in the IQ department.

This is the second time this has been said, so I must ask: what petty bullshit? What pissed off the transman? He's not drop kicking fridges like a hon so you better start explaining.


So this is where the plot comes in: the town has been hit with the economic issues of 2008 and onwards (note the author can't even say 'homeless people', she says 'unhoused', which is libshit speak), and despite seeing the data, the NGO sent him to restore a single building when it could have offered a bigger, grander project. At the same time, housing and stuff like that is probably a federal thing, and he'd need to bitch to get those permits, etc etc. Viktor doesn't want the place gentrified, and wants the working class brought back - but then that would involve bringing in more rich people to zone it, and rebuild said factories that may or may not raise property value...you get the gist of it. Happened to the steel mills in parts of Philly (or any town you can name). Something tells me he wouldn't like an Amazon or Walmart placed there - and I thought factories were major sources of pollution? Gah, it's always hard to tell with this people. But at least we know why Viktor hates Jayce. He's an NGO cocksucker, and he can't even Mage Piltover Great Again. You poor sucka.

On another note, is it male writers, or female ones, that write foot fetish and/or scent fetish stories? Here's one example, a FE3H one that also has Futas:

Futas are overwhelmingly written by males. I have seen some foot fetishes written by women, but it's less about the fetish than about sucking toes, for example. There are some scent fetish ones, but they usually involve unshaved armpits. The more noxious the scent fetish, the more likely it's written by a man. When men write fetish fic they are usually straightforward with it and there are no embellishments. When women write weird shit, it looks like this:

Pedophilia, but make it ~pretty~ Meanwhile men will just write fucking dolls in shit, no bows or glitter attached.

 

[Petrusha the White]

ime, foot fetish is usually written by men, scent fetish is more written by women if it's not specifically disgusting scents (e.g. farts) and/or the scents in question are highly romanticized (e.g. rank stale mansweat being described as "the concentrated aroma of [favorite male character]" or some shit).

Pedophilia, but make it ~pretty~ Meanwhile men will just write fucking dolls in shit, no bows or glitter attached.

This is basically how it works. Women will put a lot of effort into the aesthetic choices of their writing - sure, it might not always turn out very poetic, or even coherent, but they do make aesthetic choices. Men just wanna get off. Nice prose is secondary if it's even thought about at all.
Generally speaking, though, outside of rape kink and related fetishes (especially milder ones like bondage/other bdsm-adjacent stuff) it's usually men who have/express fetishes. Especially extreme ones like that Toy Story fic lol.
Women are super overrepresented in writing rapefics, but that's also why so many of them have batshit storylines and highly questionable romances attached. Most female authors don't want to to just drop the rape scene and go, they want to contextualize it in some weird weird attempt at being DEEP and POETIC.

Obviously these are general statements and there are exceptions for everything but as a rule of thumb, yeah, if you make assumptions of a fanfic author's sex based on the fetishes in the fic and how they're presented, you're gonna be right like 95% of the time.

 

[Chandelier]

Wanted to continue that 90s fic. It's set at 10 chapters and 6/10 are posted, so I decided to cover the other three.

Spoiler: Chapter 4 - Grove Street. Home.

> If he had the foresight to know he would be involved in this project
Fun fact: he did! He petitioned for it as soon as it came up! And Jayce, being the social media man that he is, never bothered to do research on the town he once called home. You'd think the 2008 financial crisis and ensuing crashes would have woken him up, but no. He works for an NGO and only takes on cosmetic bourgeois projects. Funny.
> He grieved him everywhere and in everything, the whole world felt devoid of color and brilliance
There's a habit of writing these two as so co-dependent they're almost parasitic, and it fits this one perfectly. Jayce is so dependent on Viktor he has no thoughts and feelings of his own, and admits that he never has them without Viktor. If Jayce was a woman, this would be a Colleen Hoover novel. Since he's a man, it's OK, but it still feels over-the-top clingy.

> I don't know how to use these resources in any other way
He says this three times in the course of this chapter, and he is right in a way. The grant was for historic restoration, not for low income housing. That's a state thing. He works for an NGO and can't seem to get in touch with other departments for said funding, so he really is sitting on his ass for this one. He really did not know what happened to his small town so he leapt at window dressing first chance he saw it. How shallow.


> He doesn't need him to protect him
It's a man protecting his woman, what's the big deal? Transmen are perfectly able to take care of themselves, so let them fight their own battles. That's how being a man works.

Leave it to the token blonde to be an insensitive prick, even when he's just being a teenage boy. Of course the trans boy doesn't interpret this as 'masculine' behaviour even when it is. Rough and tumble play stays throughout adulthood, albeit there are beer bottles involved once you hit a certain age.

Haha, dumb blondes, get it?

> He's always wearing boxers, big enough on him to be swim trunks
Just wait until the plaid shirts come in.
> At the altar of teenage boyhood
This just in, ladies: if you eat Cheetos and drink Gatorade, you're actually a teenage boy. Guess I'm a honorary dood because I happened to have and like both.

> Cologne or deodorant, he isn't sure
Are you saying this boy smells?

> He probably should have toured around a little more, it feels like an oversight now
Correct, he should have. He also should have read up on what happened to his old town. That way, if he did, he could have lobbied his NGO buddies for additional projects that would have led to more funding.

For a minute, I thought Viktor had brought a cardboard box as a bed. Imagine my pleasant surprise when it was food.

Also note the subtle ACAB messaging here: cops don't like homeless people and move them out, even when there isn't a police station in the area. Where are they going to put said homeless people? In the next county? It'd be more trouble than what it's worth - see San Francisco.

He works with an NGO, not the government proper. If he did, he would have lobbied for other programs to be put in this area. He's working with a gentrification project and is now getting a proper beatdown (verbally, of course) on how ignorant he is. He keeps saying he 'has no power' to do this, even though he does - he lives in DC, he has connections. Where are the other NGOs stepping in to help?


Insulin is an arm and a leg down there, so I can appreciate what Viktor is doing here.

> It does seem trivial and useless in the wake of real struggle, and he hates that
Well, you are working with NGOs that claim, on one hand, to help people and yet refuse to step in when it comes to working class issues in bumfuck nowhere. That does indeed happen all the time, especially in the South, and most of these libshits stick their noses up at these people. I can see what the author is aiming for, but you'd think Jayce would have SOME awareness, especially as his mother lives there. Property values would plummet and Tobias would absolutely take notice of it.
> I haven't been able to get state funding
Because you haven't lobbied for it. You are figuring out your old town's issues TODAY.

Indeed, sounds very bourgeois doesn't it? Luckily Viktor the trans man has social consciousness and is here to help. Now, all we're missing is the happy ending with the white picket fence.

Spoiler: Chapter 5 - Things have changed around here

And what are they bitching about, you may ask?

That's right! Pregnancy! Viktor's mother Anna misgenders him and Jayce acts all confused because how can he possibly get another boy pregnant and then it clicks that Viktor is actually female all along and that yes, penis in vagina sex can absolutely lead to pregnancy. The boy has a few loose gears here. The author genuinely thinks that if you brainwash someone enough with pronouns and gender ideology they can forget what biological sex is, and while that might work for the time period, it sure as hell doesn't for teenage boys.

Pregnancy would not be 'possible in theory', it is possible. Viktor has female reproductive organs and you cannot self identify out of those.
> He is so used to seeing Vik as he is, as just another teenage boy
Yet this teenage boy never compares what he can do vs what Viktor cannot do, on the level teenage boys are known to do, especially with the differences brought on by puberty. This isn't a matter of being nice, it's a matter of a teenage boy being purposefully neutered because we can't be transphobic.
> Would she think that anyway, even if he wasn't trans?
...yeah? Because Viktor is still female? She would have entirely different thoughts if you were two boys sharing a room together.
> Sex with a boy, sex with a disabled boy, a disabled boy who, definitely, has the equipment that is ready made for sex with another boy
AKA female reproductive organs, because he is female. Therefore he is not a boy. This was before Reddit so the fact this kid is still buying the fucking Kool-Aid is sending me.

I'll say. There's being a himbo and there's being a retard. He is the latter. There is no greater sex difference and noticing said differences than among teenagers. It can be brutal.

> Like it was some sort of betrayal
And what is the reason for this, you wonder? Because Jayce is so 'connected' to Viktor he is physically incapable of doing anything or enjoying things without him, and has to ask his permission to do something. If Viktor was written as a normal woman, this would be creepy as hell.

You sure Jayce isn't the teenage girl here? Because that's how they talk. All he's missing is the Pauly Shore haircut.

You're also wasting people's money. I'm shocked and not shocked that a libshit like Jayce claims to care about the working class and the lower class, while also remaining profoundly ignorant on what the 2008 financial crash did. Just libshit things.

So very similar to what happened in Lahaina with the wildfires. I can believe that. That just makes Jayce look even more sinister in comparison because he took up this NGO project with them knowing the town was bought up by greedy developers. Jayce is out here with all the confidence and ignorance of Gavin Newsom.

Committees, committees. You'd think a guy who spends all his time in one should know how government red tape works. This could have been avoided, or at least expedited, had he done his homework.

You've already said that. And it still comes off as needy.

> If Viktor even likes girls
You mean if he's a lesbian, or if he's a spicy straight which would lead him right to you? Hard to tell with the gender bending.

Oh wow, the blonde jock is the token asshole. Never could've seen that coming. Leave it to the males to fight it out over a woman, despite the trans man being a true and honest man and capable of handling it himself - you know what? Fuck it. Let the jock throw a punch. You want to talk about class issues? Insert a hate crime. You know you want to.

Teenage girls exist and mill around and this boy is absolutely losing his shit because they dare talk to his 'boyfriend'. Of course the goth one is named Maddie; can't imagine why she's so hated.
> He's handsome, maybe not big and tough and sporty like Tommy but he's delicate and elegant and lovely
And you're getting mad that another girl is taking an interest? Women love that shit. Jayce would love to see those women eat their own teeth.

> He isn't sure why, but he knows he is relieved by this information
> What the fuck is wrong with him tonight?
You're being territorial over a 'boy' that you know is a girl yet want to protect as a girl as a man. You are jealous of another teenage girl for 'stealing your man'. And look at that: the blonde jock makes a period joke there, sending Jayce into Full Testiscular Rage Mode, causing a scene and getting them kicked out. Leave it to the teenage girls to be token Mean Girls to boot.

> What the fuck is her problem, Maddie?
She's the Bitch in the Way, and you decided that she needed her shit pushed in.
> Clearly meant to placate
Hmm, I wonder which sex has to do that to calm down males from their pissing competitions.
> He would NEVER do this
Of course not, because he's a NICE GUY and NICE GUYS aren't possessive and don't plan their entire lives over people they think are their soulmates but aren't because they aren't even in a relationship but trust me he's a NICE GUY.

> Viktor deserves better. Jayce would treat him better
Yeah I'm sure he admires the testicular rage display you had that restaurant. Real girls love sweaty jocks fighting it out (and fucking each other).
> Why was he so jealous of Maddie giving Viktor attention?
Because she's a teenage girl, and she exists, and fuck women for stealing my man who is actually a woman. FUCK WOMEN

Ah, so this is where the 'internalized homophobia' comes from. Can't wait to see how he walks himself outta that one.

Spoiler: Chapter 6 - Little devil over there, BIG devil over there

Silco is actually 6 feet tall, so he should be taller than Viktor.
> There is no doubt in Jayce's mind that these men are not brothers
This is poking fun at their 'brotherly bond' that has homoerotic elements in the art book. Gotta have the bear and the twink.
> Jayce feels that immediate endearment that he often gets around other queer people
Funny that he thinks he's 'queer' for liking pussy.
> More akin to the micro apartments you find in big cities
So their solution to the housing crisis is to create bugmen apartments where even tiny trailer homes would suffice. Talk about maximizing profit over people.

> I don't want to waste time on stuff that doesn't need to be done
You ARE wasting time on stuff that doesn't need to be done.
> Viktor looks like he has something else he wants to say, but he doesn't
How about you be a real man and just say it outright?


And there we have it: Jayce's 'gay awakening' and 'internalized homophobia' is for a natal female who dresses and acts like a boy, and he genuinely believes this is same-sex attraction because he has 'never seen Viktor as a girl' and never thinks about doing gay stuff with other men. He would never do 'actual gay shit', and shocker - he wouldn't, because he isn't actually gay. At the very least he bisexual, but fucking someone with a vagina doesn't make you gay. You are straight with a different label. One would say 'straight with different steps.' Homosexuality is about same sex attraction, and Viktor is not the same sex as Jayce, simple as. There are no 'boy parts' of Viktor, because he is female. The only 'boy parts' you have are masculine-style clothing. That's it. Nothing else about him is male, so this cannot be homosexual in nature.

> How much larger he is than the other boy
Yeah, because you're undergoing male puberty and the other isn't. Don't tell me I'm going to see a 'his hands were so large they encircled his waist' thing again.
>the contrast of the colours of their skin, snow and bronze
And men tend to have darker skin than women, even if they are of the same race. Fun! We love our white (wo)men don't we, folks?
> He's finding it harder to sit still these days
Yes, the author is aiming for the ADHD Jayce. Because why not?

> They just wanna see how close they can get to California
Of course. I wouldn't expect this to be set anywhere else.
> Jayce has never heard Viktor talk about finding men attractive
Right, and since we're going with the 'sex is not gender' thing, apparently what you have between your legs doesn't matter, especially if your sexuality is based on what you PERCEIVE to be male, vs an actual male. Viktor is totally gay because he likes men and identifies as one, duh!
> He was also pretty sure he liked girls
No? Maddie was the only interaction he had, and you hated her ass because she laughed at him.

> Why not stay a straight girl?
You ARE a straight girl. Your identity didn't change your sexual orientation.
> But I'm not a girl, and I'm not straight
Right. But you still want that thick Mexican cock.
> It's okay if you're gay, too, obviously. I won't tell anyone.
People are going to be more confused at the girl saying she's a gay man, than the openly gay man. People back then still knew that being gay meant you had same-sex attraction, not same gender attraction.
> I think I've kind of broken brains
You got that right.
> Viktor's gender identity feels like such a given, but homosexuality...he isn't sure how everyone would handle something like that
Well Viktor isn't a man, so people would see it as straight with extra steps.

Want to know where Jayce is getting all his transgender stuff? Livejournal.

Of course he wants top surgery and all the bells and whistles to convince people he is not female. Of course he wants testosterone and all the facial hair and all the proper clothes to be a Man's Man...but he also happens to like his vagina, and likes getting penetrated. You see where the author is going with this, right?

> It doesn't make you any less of a guy
> There is no set of genitals that could define Viktor to him, he sees the man he's become
*slow breath* Genitalia is a primary sex characteristic. You identifying as a man is not going to make your vagina a 'male organ', nor is it going to give you male properties. What Viktor is aiming for to 'become a man' are all arbitrary concepts that can change on a whim, because being a gay man means eating Cheetos, getting top surgery and getting fucked in the vagina. That is not homosexual, far from it. Penis in vagina sex isn't gay, and it is amazing how this needs to be explained t people.
> It isn't the nebulous thought of being so close they're smushed into one shape like a collapsing star
Haha get it, it's a reference to their canonical ending!
> Wishes he felt as okay about being gay as Viktor does
Here's the funny thing...neither of you are gay. If you're into pussy, you are at least a flavour of bi. Just say that and be done with it.

Funny how he always has to turn to the actual man to get things done. What, that glare couldn't do the job yourself?

Yes, this author has an issue spacing out her paragraphs. A fuckton of them are this big.

Nice that such a bankrupt town with a bunch of homeless people can have festivals like that. That would mean a farming community nearby, so why aren't they raising a bitchfit? You don't fuck with farmers.

> It caters to a different demographic though
This guy legit thought a town that was bankrupt with a bunch of homeless people could benefit from having communities centers and programs people cannot afford. Not to mention it would have gentrified the area, something that you know Viktor is opposed to. The entire thing is a mess from the get go.

I'm with Viktor on this one. You just witnessed an aftermath of a raid and you want to take a man out on a date?

> I'm not here because you're here, you know
That's half a truth, half a lie. Jayce has repeatedly said he 'literally can't live or function without him', while Viktor says his life has been better. Jayce says that his life has been less colorful since Viktor has been gone (something he already said in the first chapter). Now the question is: what was said or done to cause such a divorce? You're gonna have to keep on reading; the author loves keeping the audience guessing.

He doesn't understand his own sexuality, either. Don't worry, the author will clear all that up with her author's notes and lectures and trigger warnings...just in case those pesky 'hey, wait a minute' thoughts keep poking through.