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The article didn't say which site, but if it were Ao3, wouldn't the story tags do the work for them? Not the "I wrote this instead of sleeping" tags, but noncon is one of the big 4 Archive Warnings in the waffle on the left.
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Good point. Maybe it was another site after all, or maybe they don't know about the archive tags or don't trust them.
Point is it's pretty obvious that OpenAI made a deliberate effort starting years ago to scrape fanfiction and train their model to rewrite it in a way that doesn't break their guidelines (and those guidelines seem to no longer exclude erotica the way they used to, just violence or rape). Apparently "putting a fic into ChatGPT and asking it to continue it for you" is already a thing (and is probably happening a lot with people who don't admit to it):
Like, these women complaining about AO3 scraping now aren't just shutting the barn door after the horse has bolted, they're trying to shut the door after the horse has bolted, been recaptured by another owner, died of old age, and has been processed into glue.
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Body issues, anxiety attacks, and self projection - AKA why fanfic shouldn't be an author's journal entry.
Right off the bat, the self-hatred is off the charts. While the tags do include internalized ableism, this author cranked it up to 11, making it so that is so full of self-pity you start to resent the character rather than empathize with them. I am not surprised at all that the only thing he feels pride in is getting those zippertit scars. He hates his body and its mere existence, but the act of being 'seen as a man' overrides that. You clearly did not hate your body enough to try to change it into something it isn't.
> Betraying him first in function and then in aesthetics
I assume the 'aesthetics' would be him being born female? Because those moles aren't ugly. They're cute. He is objectively handsome.
> He does care, does secretly enjoy the attention
Pooner seeks the love and attention from an actual man, news at 11.
> Come too close and face his wrath, lest you find the rot festering underneath
So would I see the rot first, or the wrath?
> Look at everything that is wrong with me
Crippled or not, you are a smart man. Or you were. I find myself not resonating with this character and resenting him because of that wallowing self-pity.
You'll be seeing that a lot. Can't erase those female emotions, eh?
You hate your body so much and hate how it's betraying you, but are adamant in being seen as a man. T shots and zippertit scars are beautiful to you, but nothing else is. Make it make sense.
> How he wants him, in any way, shape or form
Of course the actual male is going to be the heroic saviour, because this really is a case of 'woman has no self-confidence, man gives it back to her' type of romance story, but with the trans tag attached.
> There is no point seeking something that can never be yours
You already wrote that. And it's later disproven as Viktor kisses Jayce.
This bitch even took away Viktor's excitement and joy of discovery. Yes, he doesn't like galas or social gatherings because he's more addicted to his work. No, he would not throw away the chance to talk about it - hell, his original League self used to gloat about it. Who is this pussy bitch?
> But the painful reminders he receives, like here in this gala, where he is made to feel humiliated and ostracized, leave him feeling small and undeserving
You had a whole diatribe on how you don't care about these people and care more about your own, but now you suddenly care because uhhhh emotions? Being left out? Boo hoo you.
Yes, he has anxiety attacks at the drop of a hat. I wonder if the testosterone affecting his mood has anything to do with that. In the business we call this 'woobification', as Viktor is just so helpless he cannot do anything. It just makes him pathetic to read; I would honestly not shed a tear if he fell down the stairs.
You got that right. You hate your body and have a Woe Is Me attitude about it, until it comes to you injecting your T shots and going beyond the pale to 'appear' as a man. Then it's brave and you're proud and you're selfish.
Leave Keanu Reeves out of this, bitch.
This comes right from an IG comic I posted in the SJW art thread, the one where Viktor only has four fingers. It is meant to stoke up drama with petty mean girl talk, because Viktor is just that pathetic of a person to think he's that fucking ugly. Also, calling a deathly ill man a 'twink' is rather insensitive.
I also can't help but notice it's only pooners who think like this. If this was a transwoman, they'd be confronting the students and would immediately start throwing punches. Pooners just run away and cry. Funny how it always ends up like that.
All of the scars are hideous except the zippertit ones. Those are a source of pride and a sign of manhood, dood.
If these occurrences are normal, how come Viktor doesn't know what they are already? He's lived with them his whole life, yeah?
> You are dating a broken man, Jayce
Let me tell you that my 'Shut the fuck up' was genuine here. I honestly cannot stand Viktor here and would honestly cheer if he decided to take the Kurt Cobain method.
> I want to take care of you
> I want you to be taken care of
Oh, just like a fragile doll that needs to be kept in a glass case, eh? He's such an uwu smol thing. He just can't handle life. He's so lucky he has such a caring man to be his malewife!
> How small he is in the face of Jayce's overwhelming heart
If I read 'his hands met in the middle' during the smut I will throw my laptop out the window.
Domesticity, feeling safe, having a man cook for you...reads almost like your basic bitch Booktok book, doesn't it? It surely is something when FTMs are the ones with the body image issues when the MTFs would be out at the club bragging about bagging DL husbands. Woe is Me for the Pooner, I'd Fuck Me for the troon.
> I love how small you are
And how small is he? 5'0?
> It's so easy to hold you like this
It's like he's a doll!
> Your surgery scars are beautiful
No, they aren't.
> Viktor feels caged by yet is also drawn towards
Oh, is our little flower in the attic yearning for freedom? Sorry, you get panic attacks if a breeze so much as blows on you.
> A starving man to a feast
Cliché. I better not read this during the smut.
> It is a lesson, but of what, Viktor does not understand
> A potential truth
So he knows what it is if he knows it's truthful.
> Here is that lesson in words
This is a contradictory sentence and the author was too dumb to catch it. If you don't know what the lesson is, but know it's truthful, then you knew what the lesson was, and if the lesson is described in the next fucking sentence the prior one is fucking redundant. Christ, was this beta read? Shame on them if it was.
Aww our pooner is breaking through their barriers and is showing our male wife their 'beautiful' body.
> That you will see me in all my hideousness
Your personality makes me hate you more than your body. I honestly want to introduce your teeth to a brick, that's how much I hate you.
> He finds it hard to believe, but perhaps he will, one day
All thanks to his loyal malewife.
BTW, his 'you're beautiful' speech at the end? He keeps fucking saying it as if he's a broken NPC. It gets annoying real fucking quick.
> Something inside of him is unfurling, something he doesn't understand
This is again contradicted just a few sentences later.
> He feels small, not unlike a child
You sure do act like one
> Here is a lesson in love
So that 'something' has a name, and he understands it.
All this from bumping into someone OUTSIDE? Boy sounds like he'd get PTSD if he were harassed by seagulls.
Yes, Viktor regresses to the mentality of a child, if you didn't need to hate this any more than you should've already. Nothing like making the transman so pathetic they resume the fetal position any chance they get and bitch and moan and cry about how terrible their life is. I don't think a fic has made me this MATI since Janetgirl's UWU Alpha fic.
Milk, cookies, and his favourite book. You want some flavoured crayons with your blankie too, you weak fuck?
...he needs help microwaving food. Microwaving. Food. How fucking pathetic can you make a character?
> Not unlike a child
He sure has a child's IQ if he doesn't know what a collage is.
All about safety and love with these sappy pieces of shit. Funny how Jayce is the one who is actually going through character development while Viktor is the mentally stunted one. Guess the author projecting a little TOO hard.
> There is so much life in here, he says, helpless
Imagine being such a pathetic cuck that you physically drain the life out of any room you are in, and the muscly himbo has to overcompensate for you.
> Creates a narrative that challenges everything his checklist stands for, for which Viktor has no rebuttal
I fucking hate this character and his existence. Congrats, author. You have made me hate a bunch of words and pixels so much my blood pressure goes up whenever he comes on screen. You're a more hated character than Griffith from Berserk.
Again with the infantilization. This is getting pathetic. Am I supposed to feel pity for you going back to your roots? 'Pride and determination'? Where the fuck has that been?
> He is seen, and he is acknowledged
I want to see less of this pathetic fuck, thank you.
> Sobs quietly
From the bottom of my heart: STFU.
> Jayce bundles him in his arms, shushes him and pulls him onto his lap
Does he need a bib and a nappie, too?
> Viktor trusts Jayce. Jayce says that he is beautiful, that he loves Viktor
Thanks, I got that already.
Not this fucking line. It's fucking everywhere like the goddamn plague. Oh, should I inform you that this was beta read by THREE authors and not one of them noted how overused this goddamn line is. I spit on its presence.
Waaaaaaah waaaaaah muh safety muh safe words my gender euphoria. Fuck off.
Oh here we go with the 'delicate and pale' description of Viktor, while Jayce is the big dicked Greek statue who is every woman's wet dream. The big, muscular, bronzed himbo who just loves art and microwaves meals like a malewife? What a hottie. A romance for the ages.
> 90 degree angle
That's, uh, an interesting position to hold.
> Has Viktor's cock grinding against Jayce's belly
Sorry, no Hispanic Hog or belly bulge here - though that would have been a saving grace from the utter bullshit I just read.
> His cock twiches with excitement
His, or Viktor's? That is what happens when you call a roid clit a cock.
> He feels full. Jayce's cock large and stretching him to the brim
This pathetic creature couldn't microwave his food or look after himself, but he can lie down and get fucked. Guess the author really did capture the true trans man experience.
> Stretching and plunging into him
You already wrote that he was getting stretched.
> It makes him feel soft, and shy and seen, and
Oh, shut the fuck up. All this shit about feeling soft and getting validated and whatnot lost its appeal within the first few sentences. I cannot and will not sympathize with a character so deballed and so emasculated that not even a male identity could save his ass. Who is this absolute baby?
> Stretching him to his limits
You wrote this three times already.
> Oh, I'm crying
I am crying to put your head inside of a microwave.
And that's the smut. You got a few thrusts and more emphasis on how big Jayce's hands were than actual spice. It wasn't even enough to make the mental torture worth it.
> I feel full
You already said that.
> I love you Jayce
I sure as hell don't.
> A waist for Jayce to eagerly wrap his arms around, softened with warm food
I am to believe Viktor cannot act like an adult and has mentally regressed to a baby, so he has to have a grown-ass man play airplane with him just to eat. He lives in a literal playroom with coloring books and crayons and his entire life, if it is not a mentally ill nightmare, has to be a daycare. Everyone has to watch themselves around him because he quite literally is an energy vampire and sucks the life out of a room. I've never read such a terrible interpretation of Viktor and I suffered through queercatfan's shit. It's just bad.
That's right: the tiny pooner who is not a source of joy or inspiration - and I am told that being trans is a source for both - has to have the himbo malewife prop him up like he's a toddler because this grown ass creature cannot act like an adult. Normally, I post nightmares like that underage deer rape fic or piss fics or what have you, but this one was a nightmare of a different sort: you're reading a living diary entry of the author, who had THREE PEOPLE read her work and tell her to cut that shit out, and thinks it's a beautiful tale of acceptance and love when it inspires resentment and hatred in people you do not want to inspire said feelings from. I don't care if characters are disabled. I care about their personality and will. This author sucked the absolute life out of this one and made him so hated a plastic straw serves more purpose than he does. Clichés and bodice rippers aside, this is one of the worst cases if infantilization I've ever read, and I've skewered shotacon fics. This is not something you want to brag about. People really need to find more critical beta readers.
Since we're on the underage nightmare streak, here is another one from fujofrankenstein, friend of CordeliaCordate. Take a guess how young these folx are when they start getting into the nasty.
What a nice start. Surely it can't be THAT bad, can it?
Yeah, it's bad. They're actual blood brothers in this, and immediately start getting down and dirty Alabama style.
> Viktor is fourteen, and he knows things, okay?
Old enough to know what sex is AND that you're trans? Funny, thing, that. It's almost as if trans people are natural born groomers.
> Eleven-year-old innocence
What is the common first age for viewing pornography? If you guessed 11, congrats! You'd be correct.
> He might just die if he doesn't kiss his little brother right now
Maybe it would be better if you did. While there is no penetration, that is more than 'playing doctor'. They are no doubt replicating what they see in porn.
> Kisses him back like he's starving for it
Cliché.
> It's so fun and makes him so turned on
> Wants to have sex with him so bad
Really not dodging the allegations that trans people really are sex pests, eh? All I have to do is post this fic as a receipt.
> Rut against each other like animals
don't worry, Jayce doesn't do the deed until he is a whopping 15 years old.
> His little brother is still so young, so innocent
And how does he know what sex is, huh? Someone must've shown him.
> Wrapping his mouth around Jayce's soft cock
Yes, nothing like molestation coming from a pooner. Who needs a pedophilic uncle when you got the T-roid Tickler right here?
> Now practically towering over Viktor, and he feels like he's going to fucking die
All over a height difference? Damn, you really must be that Ellen Page height.
> His friends all started having sex a summer or two ago, and they tease him for being a virgin
They're going to be disgusted once they find out you're fucking your brother, and that you're trans, to boot. Hope there will be lots of tea on Twitter and Tiktok from those kids.
> Fairly lights
No fucking way. The pooner is using FAIRY LIGHTS? And ROSE PETALS? Why not add a bottle of wine while you're at it?
> Binder on or off?
You can have underage siblings fuck, but don't you dare be transphobic.
> Laps at his clit like a puppy with a bowl of water
What is it with these people and their dog allegories? They're everywhere. We need to find out why these white women are obsessed with dogs.
> Damp curls covering Viktor's mound
Can't forget the Tarzan pubes for this forbidden love.
> His wet hole
You're never going to guess what Jayce is going to do with it.
> We'll make it fit
There's more emphasis on the fisting - and yes, there is a fisting scene here. The one pump chump dump is not going to be the focal point; the author really wants to push the limits of her dead dove.
> Milking him of his cum
Apparently he was that good our boy didn't even get a thrust in. How's that for a first time tale?
> Something warm and safe
Despite all the tags and how fucked up this is, we still need our safe space. We need to be warm and loved.
> Something primal and animal is unleashed within Jayce
In which he takes 'Hot for sister' and bumps up that inbreeding rate among Hispanics.
> Fucked him over his desk while he tried in vain to read his textbooks
Did he last longer than a minute?
> As if Viktor isn't winging this himself
I assume that Viktor is getting this from porn, because incestuous siblings don't just decide to fist each other out of the blue. Someone got that idea somewhere, and someone was looking at hardcore fetish porn.
> Just how young Jayce is
He's around 15 in this. She's taking the 'rampaging teenage hormones' thing a little too seriously.
> Think you're ready for more
> Wanna take more
Redundant. Now, read on how Viktor gets hollowed out like a chicken.
> Viktor is so tight it's fucking insane
When I tell you that, in the next scene, he literally punches his vagina like a hole puncher, I'm not exaggerating.
> Is unable to deny him anything when he gets like this, all sweet and demure and submissive
Funny how it's always the trans man who's given those traits.
> He is not actually certain that it is okay, but he wants this so fucking bad
You wrote that he was 'winging it', and if he wasn't aware of the risks, why do it?
> He doesn't fucking care if he bleeds or not
You should if you get a vaginal prolapse. Good luck explaining that to your gyno: 'Oh yeah, my brother fisted me up to the wrist for the first time, do you have a problem with that?'
> The pleasure-pain making him see stars
You'll see this at least two more times.
> You like that, my little whore?
And this three times.
> Wanna feel that pretty mouth on my dick
You already got that treatment when you were 11.
> Fuck you until you're nice and sore
You'll be seeing this a lot, too.
> He fucks into him hard and fast
This, too.
> His abused cunt sore
> Abused hole
Redundant. This is also written at least three times.
> Gonna get you pregnant
Nice. Can't wait to see those retard genes.
Ten years eh? So now they are grown adults and are in their The Coffin of Andy and Leyley arc, right down to the codependency. Now, for added spice: voyeurism in front of their lab assistants, that they apparently have a lot of, and who also know they're related AND fucking, but said rumours haven't ruined their reputation yet. I wonder what the rich Pilties think of that.
> Growing wet and hard
Hard with what? Did he start taking T during the ten year gap?
> Afraid to look up to see if anyone has noticed
Spoiler: they noticed, and they're also watching. Some of them even enjoy it.
> Especially when they've got such an audience
Just how many assistants are there? They only ever worked together; Sky was their sole assistant. Who are their randos?
> Then he's shoving two fingers into Viktor's wet cunt, and Viktor howls at the intrusion
If no one heard you yet, they're hearing you now.
> Such a good little slut
Weird talk for someone who was a virgin when he one pump chumped his older brother.
> He feels like he's floating
You already wrote that.
> The pleasure-pain of Jayce's thick fingers stretching him open
This, too.
> Viktor bites down
Not with teeth, apparently, because I don't see no blood.
> You greedy little whore
> You good whore
So he's called Viktor his whore three times - scratch that, make that four. Four times and two uses of slut for our incestuous pooner here.
> Burying himself to the hilt
Cliché.
> The tip of his dick pressing against Viktor's cervix
Huh, wasn't aware we were dealing with the Hispanic Hog. No belly bulge this time around. You'll have to do with cunt punching - and yes, that's a real statement.
> He's unaware that a few are still watching
Pretty sure all of them are watching, homie.
> They'd assumed for years, of course - no one could ignore the rumours
And yet they never suffered any social consequences for that because...? What would Jayce's mother think? Their aunts and uncles, because they have them now? I'm sure Hextech will sell well once people learn it was invented by incestuous degenerates - especially if one is a crippled pooner.
> My good little toy. All mine to fuck and use however I please
He's droolin' like a squeaky.
BTW, 'pleasure' is used 11 times in this fic.
> There's not a soul in this building who doesn't know what they're doing right now
I mean they're all there watching you. It's not like they disappeared in a poof of smoke.
> Viktor still can't believe how good Jayce is at eating pussy
Hopefully he doesn't 'lick it like a puppy licking at its bowl' now.
> Puffy little cock
Lmao. Against that big cunt puncher? I don't think si.
> His abused cunt
Make that the third time this has been used.
> Obscene squelching
I forgot, this line is overused a lot, too, along with 'his hands met in the middle'. They really do seem to copy each other.
> He's practically punching him in the cunt with how hard he's fingering him
I told you I wasn't exaggerating. The shit these people write.
> He's finger fucking him relentlessly
We know, you just wrote him 'punching him in the cunt'. You don't need to do it twice.
> Publicly fucked and used
I thought Jayce got possessive over people looking at Viktor the wrong way? Guess he's really marking his territory now.
> Used hole
Make that fourth time.
They died in the Arcane, got resurrected as actual blood brothers, fucked as early as 11 years old (for Jayce), stayed in an incestuous relationship for ten years, and then the pooner gets punched in the cunt during an intense round of finger fucking in front of a captive audience. I might need time to process this one.
Right off the bat, the self-hatred is off the charts. While the tags do include internalized ableism, this author cranked it up to 11, making it so that is so full of self-pity you start to resent the character rather than empathize with them. I am not surprised at all that the only thing he feels pride in is getting those zippertit scars. He hates his body and its mere existence, but the act of being 'seen as a man' overrides that. You clearly did not hate your body enough to try to change it into something it isn't.
> Betraying him first in function and then in aesthetics
I assume the 'aesthetics' would be him being born female? Because those moles aren't ugly. They're cute. He is objectively handsome.
> He does care, does secretly enjoy the attention
Pooner seeks the love and attention from an actual man, news at 11.
> Come too close and face his wrath, lest you find the rot festering underneath
So would I see the rot first, or the wrath?
> Look at everything that is wrong with me
Crippled or not, you are a smart man. Or you were. I find myself not resonating with this character and resenting him because of that wallowing self-pity.
You'll be seeing that a lot. Can't erase those female emotions, eh?
You hate your body so much and hate how it's betraying you, but are adamant in being seen as a man. T shots and zippertit scars are beautiful to you, but nothing else is. Make it make sense.
> How he wants him, in any way, shape or form
Of course the actual male is going to be the heroic saviour, because this really is a case of 'woman has no self-confidence, man gives it back to her' type of romance story, but with the trans tag attached.
> There is no point seeking something that can never be yours
You already wrote that. And it's later disproven as Viktor kisses Jayce.
This bitch even took away Viktor's excitement and joy of discovery. Yes, he doesn't like galas or social gatherings because he's more addicted to his work. No, he would not throw away the chance to talk about it - hell, his original League self used to gloat about it. Who is this pussy bitch?
> But the painful reminders he receives, like here in this gala, where he is made to feel humiliated and ostracized, leave him feeling small and undeserving
You had a whole diatribe on how you don't care about these people and care more about your own, but now you suddenly care because uhhhh emotions? Being left out? Boo hoo you.
Yes, he has anxiety attacks at the drop of a hat. I wonder if the testosterone affecting his mood has anything to do with that. In the business we call this 'woobification', as Viktor is just so helpless he cannot do anything. It just makes him pathetic to read; I would honestly not shed a tear if he fell down the stairs.
You got that right. You hate your body and have a Woe Is Me attitude about it, until it comes to you injecting your T shots and going beyond the pale to 'appear' as a man. Then it's brave and you're proud and you're selfish.
Leave Keanu Reeves out of this, bitch.
This comes right from an IG comic I posted in the SJW art thread, the one where Viktor only has four fingers. It is meant to stoke up drama with petty mean girl talk, because Viktor is just that pathetic of a person to think he's that fucking ugly. Also, calling a deathly ill man a 'twink' is rather insensitive.
I also can't help but notice it's only pooners who think like this. If this was a transwoman, they'd be confronting the students and would immediately start throwing punches. Pooners just run away and cry. Funny how it always ends up like that.
All of the scars are hideous except the zippertit ones. Those are a source of pride and a sign of manhood, dood.
If these occurrences are normal, how come Viktor doesn't know what they are already? He's lived with them his whole life, yeah?
> You are dating a broken man, Jayce
Let me tell you that my 'Shut the fuck up' was genuine here. I honestly cannot stand Viktor here and would honestly cheer if he decided to take the Kurt Cobain method.
> I want to take care of you
> I want you to be taken care of
Oh, just like a fragile doll that needs to be kept in a glass case, eh? He's such an uwu smol thing. He just can't handle life. He's so lucky he has such a caring man to be his malewife!
> How small he is in the face of Jayce's overwhelming heart
If I read 'his hands met in the middle' during the smut I will throw my laptop out the window.
Domesticity, feeling safe, having a man cook for you...reads almost like your basic bitch Booktok book, doesn't it? It surely is something when FTMs are the ones with the body image issues when the MTFs would be out at the club bragging about bagging DL husbands. Woe is Me for the Pooner, I'd Fuck Me for the troon.
> I love how small you are
And how small is he? 5'0?
> It's so easy to hold you like this
It's like he's a doll!
> Your surgery scars are beautiful
No, they aren't.
> Viktor feels caged by yet is also drawn towards
Oh, is our little flower in the attic yearning for freedom? Sorry, you get panic attacks if a breeze so much as blows on you.
> A starving man to a feast
Cliché. I better not read this during the smut.
> It is a lesson, but of what, Viktor does not understand
> A potential truth
So he knows what it is if he knows it's truthful.
> Here is that lesson in words
This is a contradictory sentence and the author was too dumb to catch it. If you don't know what the lesson is, but know it's truthful, then you knew what the lesson was, and if the lesson is described in the next fucking sentence the prior one is fucking redundant. Christ, was this beta read? Shame on them if it was.
Aww our pooner is breaking through their barriers and is showing our male wife their 'beautiful' body.
> That you will see me in all my hideousness
Your personality makes me hate you more than your body. I honestly want to introduce your teeth to a brick, that's how much I hate you.
> He finds it hard to believe, but perhaps he will, one day
All thanks to his loyal malewife.
BTW, his 'you're beautiful' speech at the end? He keeps fucking saying it as if he's a broken NPC. It gets annoying real fucking quick.
> Something inside of him is unfurling, something he doesn't understand
This is again contradicted just a few sentences later.
> He feels small, not unlike a child
You sure do act like one
> Here is a lesson in love
So that 'something' has a name, and he understands it.
All this from bumping into someone OUTSIDE? Boy sounds like he'd get PTSD if he were harassed by seagulls.
Yes, Viktor regresses to the mentality of a child, if you didn't need to hate this any more than you should've already. Nothing like making the transman so pathetic they resume the fetal position any chance they get and bitch and moan and cry about how terrible their life is. I don't think a fic has made me this MATI since Janetgirl's UWU Alpha fic.
Milk, cookies, and his favourite book. You want some flavoured crayons with your blankie too, you weak fuck?
...he needs help microwaving food. Microwaving. Food. How fucking pathetic can you make a character?
> Not unlike a child
He sure has a child's IQ if he doesn't know what a collage is.
All about safety and love with these sappy pieces of shit. Funny how Jayce is the one who is actually going through character development while Viktor is the mentally stunted one. Guess the author projecting a little TOO hard.
> There is so much life in here, he says, helpless
Imagine being such a pathetic cuck that you physically drain the life out of any room you are in, and the muscly himbo has to overcompensate for you.
> Creates a narrative that challenges everything his checklist stands for, for which Viktor has no rebuttal
I fucking hate this character and his existence. Congrats, author. You have made me hate a bunch of words and pixels so much my blood pressure goes up whenever he comes on screen. You're a more hated character than Griffith from Berserk.
Again with the infantilization. This is getting pathetic. Am I supposed to feel pity for you going back to your roots? 'Pride and determination'? Where the fuck has that been?
> He is seen, and he is acknowledged
I want to see less of this pathetic fuck, thank you.
> Sobs quietly
From the bottom of my heart: STFU.
> Jayce bundles him in his arms, shushes him and pulls him onto his lap
Does he need a bib and a nappie, too?
> Viktor trusts Jayce. Jayce says that he is beautiful, that he loves Viktor
Thanks, I got that already.
Not this fucking line. It's fucking everywhere like the goddamn plague. Oh, should I inform you that this was beta read by THREE authors and not one of them noted how overused this goddamn line is. I spit on its presence.
Waaaaaaah waaaaaah muh safety muh safe words my gender euphoria. Fuck off.
Oh here we go with the 'delicate and pale' description of Viktor, while Jayce is the big dicked Greek statue who is every woman's wet dream. The big, muscular, bronzed himbo who just loves art and microwaves meals like a malewife? What a hottie. A romance for the ages.
> 90 degree angle
That's, uh, an interesting position to hold.
> Has Viktor's cock grinding against Jayce's belly
Sorry, no Hispanic Hog or belly bulge here - though that would have been a saving grace from the utter bullshit I just read.
> His cock twiches with excitement
His, or Viktor's? That is what happens when you call a roid clit a cock.
> He feels full. Jayce's cock large and stretching him to the brim
This pathetic creature couldn't microwave his food or look after himself, but he can lie down and get fucked. Guess the author really did capture the true trans man experience.
> Stretching and plunging into him
You already wrote that he was getting stretched.
> It makes him feel soft, and shy and seen, and
Oh, shut the fuck up. All this shit about feeling soft and getting validated and whatnot lost its appeal within the first few sentences. I cannot and will not sympathize with a character so deballed and so emasculated that not even a male identity could save his ass. Who is this absolute baby?
> Stretching him to his limits
You wrote this three times already.
> Oh, I'm crying
I am crying to put your head inside of a microwave.
And that's the smut. You got a few thrusts and more emphasis on how big Jayce's hands were than actual spice. It wasn't even enough to make the mental torture worth it.
> I feel full
You already said that.
> I love you Jayce
I sure as hell don't.
> A waist for Jayce to eagerly wrap his arms around, softened with warm food
I am to believe Viktor cannot act like an adult and has mentally regressed to a baby, so he has to have a grown-ass man play airplane with him just to eat. He lives in a literal playroom with coloring books and crayons and his entire life, if it is not a mentally ill nightmare, has to be a daycare. Everyone has to watch themselves around him because he quite literally is an energy vampire and sucks the life out of a room. I've never read such a terrible interpretation of Viktor and I suffered through queercatfan's shit. It's just bad.
That's right: the tiny pooner who is not a source of joy or inspiration - and I am told that being trans is a source for both - has to have the himbo malewife prop him up like he's a toddler because this grown ass creature cannot act like an adult. Normally, I post nightmares like that underage deer rape fic or piss fics or what have you, but this one was a nightmare of a different sort: you're reading a living diary entry of the author, who had THREE PEOPLE read her work and tell her to cut that shit out, and thinks it's a beautiful tale of acceptance and love when it inspires resentment and hatred in people you do not want to inspire said feelings from. I don't care if characters are disabled. I care about their personality and will. This author sucked the absolute life out of this one and made him so hated a plastic straw serves more purpose than he does. Clichés and bodice rippers aside, this is one of the worst cases if infantilization I've ever read, and I've skewered shotacon fics. This is not something you want to brag about. People really need to find more critical beta readers.
Since we're on the underage nightmare streak, here is another one from fujofrankenstein, friend of CordeliaCordate. Take a guess how young these folx are when they start getting into the nasty.
What a nice start. Surely it can't be THAT bad, can it?
Yeah, it's bad. They're actual blood brothers in this, and immediately start getting down and dirty Alabama style.
> Viktor is fourteen, and he knows things, okay?
Old enough to know what sex is AND that you're trans? Funny, thing, that. It's almost as if trans people are natural born groomers.
> Eleven-year-old innocence
What is the common first age for viewing pornography? If you guessed 11, congrats! You'd be correct.
> He might just die if he doesn't kiss his little brother right now
Maybe it would be better if you did. While there is no penetration, that is more than 'playing doctor'. They are no doubt replicating what they see in porn.
> Kisses him back like he's starving for it
Cliché.
> It's so fun and makes him so turned on
> Wants to have sex with him so bad
Really not dodging the allegations that trans people really are sex pests, eh? All I have to do is post this fic as a receipt.
> Rut against each other like animals
don't worry, Jayce doesn't do the deed until he is a whopping 15 years old.
> His little brother is still so young, so innocent
And how does he know what sex is, huh? Someone must've shown him.
> Wrapping his mouth around Jayce's soft cock
Yes, nothing like molestation coming from a pooner. Who needs a pedophilic uncle when you got the T-roid Tickler right here?
> Now practically towering over Viktor, and he feels like he's going to fucking die
All over a height difference? Damn, you really must be that Ellen Page height.
> His friends all started having sex a summer or two ago, and they tease him for being a virgin
They're going to be disgusted once they find out you're fucking your brother, and that you're trans, to boot. Hope there will be lots of tea on Twitter and Tiktok from those kids.
> Fairly lights
No fucking way. The pooner is using FAIRY LIGHTS? And ROSE PETALS? Why not add a bottle of wine while you're at it?
> Binder on or off?
You can have underage siblings fuck, but don't you dare be transphobic.
> Laps at his clit like a puppy with a bowl of water
What is it with these people and their dog allegories? They're everywhere. We need to find out why these white women are obsessed with dogs.
> Damp curls covering Viktor's mound
Can't forget the Tarzan pubes for this forbidden love.
> His wet hole
You're never going to guess what Jayce is going to do with it.
> We'll make it fit
There's more emphasis on the fisting - and yes, there is a fisting scene here. The one pump chump dump is not going to be the focal point; the author really wants to push the limits of her dead dove.
> Milking him of his cum
Apparently he was that good our boy didn't even get a thrust in. How's that for a first time tale?
> Something warm and safe
Despite all the tags and how fucked up this is, we still need our safe space. We need to be warm and loved.
> Something primal and animal is unleashed within Jayce
In which he takes 'Hot for sister' and bumps up that inbreeding rate among Hispanics.
> Fucked him over his desk while he tried in vain to read his textbooks
Did he last longer than a minute?
> As if Viktor isn't winging this himself
I assume that Viktor is getting this from porn, because incestuous siblings don't just decide to fist each other out of the blue. Someone got that idea somewhere, and someone was looking at hardcore fetish porn.
> Just how young Jayce is
He's around 15 in this. She's taking the 'rampaging teenage hormones' thing a little too seriously.
> Think you're ready for more
> Wanna take more
Redundant. Now, read on how Viktor gets hollowed out like a chicken.
> Viktor is so tight it's fucking insane
When I tell you that, in the next scene, he literally punches his vagina like a hole puncher, I'm not exaggerating.
> Is unable to deny him anything when he gets like this, all sweet and demure and submissive
Funny how it's always the trans man who's given those traits.
> He is not actually certain that it is okay, but he wants this so fucking bad
You wrote that he was 'winging it', and if he wasn't aware of the risks, why do it?
> He doesn't fucking care if he bleeds or not
You should if you get a vaginal prolapse. Good luck explaining that to your gyno: 'Oh yeah, my brother fisted me up to the wrist for the first time, do you have a problem with that?'
> The pleasure-pain making him see stars
You'll see this at least two more times.
> You like that, my little whore?
And this three times.
> Wanna feel that pretty mouth on my dick
You already got that treatment when you were 11.
> Fuck you until you're nice and sore
You'll be seeing this a lot, too.
> He fucks into him hard and fast
This, too.
> His abused cunt sore
> Abused hole
Redundant. This is also written at least three times.
> Gonna get you pregnant
Nice. Can't wait to see those retard genes.
Ten years eh? So now they are grown adults and are in their The Coffin of Andy and Leyley arc, right down to the codependency. Now, for added spice: voyeurism in front of their lab assistants, that they apparently have a lot of, and who also know they're related AND fucking, but said rumours haven't ruined their reputation yet. I wonder what the rich Pilties think of that.
> Growing wet and hard
Hard with what? Did he start taking T during the ten year gap?
> Afraid to look up to see if anyone has noticed
Spoiler: they noticed, and they're also watching. Some of them even enjoy it.
> Especially when they've got such an audience
Just how many assistants are there? They only ever worked together; Sky was their sole assistant. Who are their randos?
> Then he's shoving two fingers into Viktor's wet cunt, and Viktor howls at the intrusion
If no one heard you yet, they're hearing you now.
> Such a good little slut
Weird talk for someone who was a virgin when he one pump chumped his older brother.
> He feels like he's floating
You already wrote that.
> The pleasure-pain of Jayce's thick fingers stretching him open
This, too.
> Viktor bites down
Not with teeth, apparently, because I don't see no blood.
> You greedy little whore
> You good whore
So he's called Viktor his whore three times - scratch that, make that four. Four times and two uses of slut for our incestuous pooner here.
> Burying himself to the hilt
Cliché.
> The tip of his dick pressing against Viktor's cervix
Huh, wasn't aware we were dealing with the Hispanic Hog. No belly bulge this time around. You'll have to do with cunt punching - and yes, that's a real statement.
> He's unaware that a few are still watching
Pretty sure all of them are watching, homie.
> They'd assumed for years, of course - no one could ignore the rumours
And yet they never suffered any social consequences for that because...? What would Jayce's mother think? Their aunts and uncles, because they have them now? I'm sure Hextech will sell well once people learn it was invented by incestuous degenerates - especially if one is a crippled pooner.
> My good little toy. All mine to fuck and use however I please
He's droolin' like a squeaky.
BTW, 'pleasure' is used 11 times in this fic.
> There's not a soul in this building who doesn't know what they're doing right now
I mean they're all there watching you. It's not like they disappeared in a poof of smoke.
> Viktor still can't believe how good Jayce is at eating pussy
Hopefully he doesn't 'lick it like a puppy licking at its bowl' now.
> Puffy little cock
Lmao. Against that big cunt puncher? I don't think si.
> His abused cunt
Make that the third time this has been used.
> Obscene squelching
I forgot, this line is overused a lot, too, along with 'his hands met in the middle'. They really do seem to copy each other.
> He's practically punching him in the cunt with how hard he's fingering him
I told you I wasn't exaggerating. The shit these people write.
> He's finger fucking him relentlessly
We know, you just wrote him 'punching him in the cunt'. You don't need to do it twice.
> Publicly fucked and used
I thought Jayce got possessive over people looking at Viktor the wrong way? Guess he's really marking his territory now.
> Used hole
Make that fourth time.
They died in the Arcane, got resurrected as actual blood brothers, fucked as early as 11 years old (for Jayce), stayed in an incestuous relationship for ten years, and then the pooner gets punched in the cunt during an intense round of finger fucking in front of a captive audience. I might need time to process this one.
Here's the thing: most fanfic authors are a little 'high on their supply' to put it lightly. They love reminding people that this is a labour of love and how it's done for free...and then when this issue is brought up, suddenly it's their intellectual property right and how their rights are being violated. Well, hun, hate to burst your bubble, but as it's transformative fiction you don't really own that IP, just your ideas. AI scraping it was a predictable outcome - and it isn't as if the human touch is any different.
Like I said, they're more upset that their property rights are being violated - the only property rights they care about - and are upset that their work is being scraped for free. See, theirs is different; their work is art, they're changing the world with it, and goddammit that underage rape fic is a metaphor for SOMETHING in society!
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Ok, I asked ChatGPT 4o what fanfiction archives it had been trained on, and it answered that OpenAI hadn't disclosed that ("OpenAI says my training included a mix of licensed data, publicly available data, and data for which they had permissions, and tries to exclude sites that explicitly prohibit scraping, like AO3"). But then it added a follow-up question like it always does these days, and asked "Want me to show you the difference in style if i wrote a paragraph “like” an AO3 fic vs a Wattpad fic?" I said yes.
So, it 1) wrote me an AO3-style paragraph right after it claimed they had tried to exclude the site, and 2) immediately offered me a paragraph of what looks an awful lot like a romantic fic about the brothers from Supernatural. Sam Altman built me a lying incest robot.
AO3-style paragraph (more polished, emotional, tagged-with-17-feelings-you-didn’t-know-you-had):
Wattpad-style paragraph (faster, more casual, heavy internal monologue, younger voice):
The AO3 one leans cinematic, aching, careful.
The Wattpad one leans voicey, chaotic, hormonal.
Dean’s hands trembled as he reached for the mug, coffee sloshing over the rim. Sam watched from the doorway, saying nothing, because what could he say? The silence stretched taut between them, heavy with a hundred things they’d never learned to speak aloud. Outside, the rain blurred the world into watercolor grey. Inside, Dean swallowed hard and said, voice hoarse, “Stay.” And Sam—Sam stayed.
Wattpad-style paragraph (faster, more casual, heavy internal monologue, younger voice):
I legit couldn’t breathe when I saw him standing there, like full-on heart attack levels of not breathing. He had that stupid smirk on his face, the one that made me want to punch him and kiss him at the same time. (Mostly punch. Definitely punch.) I crossed my arms and tried to act cool but let’s be real, I probably looked like a drowned rat. Perfect. Just perfect.
The AO3 one leans cinematic, aching, careful.
The Wattpad one leans voicey, chaotic, hormonal.
So, it 1) wrote me an AO3-style paragraph right after it claimed they had tried to exclude the site, and 2) immediately offered me a paragraph of what looks an awful lot like a romantic fic about the brothers from Supernatural. Sam Altman built me a lying incest robot.
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Hideoustasha, who wrote that long winded pregnancy drama, has published its fourth chapter. Encounter more Hispanic mama dramas and a uterus owner who doesn't even factor into the picture despite the fic being centered around them.
In the previous chapter, Jayce was reconnecting with his mother and they had a long chat at his father's gravestone. She met Viktor, noted his pregnancy, worried about him, and did not put two and two together that her son is the father.
> The baby would take what it needed from Viktor's body, or so Jayce had gathered from his reading
You should have known this when the pregnancy was 12 weeks along, vs 31 weeks. For a smart man, he sure is retarded in how his sperm knocked up his trans partner. Oh no, penis in vagina sex led to pregnancy...who knew?
As for Viktor, he was offered the choice of termination, yet did not take it. Now he has to deal with the health consequences for the sake of ~drama~.
> Two weeks of leave
That isn't enough for childcare. None of them have discussed it, either. In the previous chapter, Viktor discussed leaving Jayce in his will and allocating his resources and any accumulated wealth to him. They fought, and Jayce still wonders how he's going to be a single dad to a kid he helped create.
Despite this talk, Ximena doesn't seem to conclude that Jayce is the father. All the signs and clues are there, yet she willingly chooses to stay in the dark. You would think she would have grasped it in the prior chapter, but no.
This entire fic is a waste of time. The person who should be front-and-center in this fic isn't there, and it's all about the man and HIS feelings and HIS problems.
> Telling her would change things
Change what? That Viktor is actually a woman? That her son knocked up a pooner? Do tell.
No shit. Any woman could have told you that - your own mother could have. He sure is doing a lot of reading so late into a pregnancy that he didn't care about until recently. BTW, she has a 'trigger warning' for childbirth because centering a fic on pregnancy is A-OK, but giving birth is dysphoric.
You would think Viktor would care more about his health rather than take the suicide option, but no. He wants to leave a legacy behind and admitted this in Chapter 3, and that's why he was so adamant on keeping the child. He has a physical tie to Jayce and something to remember him by - when, in not so nice terms, this is a glorified form of baby trapping.
Now we're introducing Cait, who is far more analytical than Ximena, and she begins asking some uncomfortable questions. This leads to Jayce admitting that he knocked Viktor up, and the consequences thereafter.
This is one of the few times Viktor is discussed or included in any conversation. For people who want to elevate a disabled man or want trans men to be seen as men, they sure are erased from their own stories.
I can't imagine what that water bill must be.
Here we go: the Maury Povich confrontation.
> To say it out loud felt like it cost him something
It didn't cost you anything. You just ejaculated into a vagina and bam, pregnancy.
> I thought you were supposed to be a genius. I thought you had more sense
Wow, a character calling out Jayce for his shit? That's a first.
> He'd come to understand that Viktor wanted a child, badly - but he had not particularly wanted one with Jayce
Is that so? Because from the first chapter, Viktor is rather cagey on whether he wants a kid or not. This was sprung on him and he later admits the child will be his legacy and last living embodiment of him. Did he want a kid? No, because he was never asked.
I agree. Jayce decided a quick fuck without protection was the better option - and Viktor thought testosterone was birth control. Both of them are at fault here.
> He was far enough along by then that he couldn't
Incorrect. He was 12 weeks or so when they found out he was pregnant. That is more than enough time for termination. Either the author forgot what she wrote, or this is from Jayce's perspective and he can't remember what was said. I'm going with the former.
> He'd been hands-off for so long that it must seem odd for him to step in now
So much for all that 'reading'. Yes, he stepped away to let Viktor do what he wanted, but now he just sounds callous as fuck. Almost a deadbeat daddy.
> made their baby seem more real to him
...it wasn't before?
> Jayce hadn't spent much time wondering whether the baby was a boy or a girl
Isn't it funny how the people who say sex isn't binary seem to resort back to binary sex when it comes to their Playing Dollhouse stories? They know what sex is with their magical dream fetuses, but not for grown humans.
>David
A Hebrew name? Really?
Now we have Viktor spewing up blood and bits of tissue and that isn't cause for alarm at all. They just ignore it and move on - and these two even have a spicy moment despite our boy here spitting up his own lungs.
Yes, Jayce, you fucking know. There is no point in lying about it either because mama dearest doesn't buy it, either.
Imagine that: this fic is about a trans pregnancy and how a trans man is only good for giving birth, and the main concern is that the man didn't get pussy for a few weeks. How very revealing.
> His clit was a hard knot
Can you smash glass with it?
> The neat, glistening slit, framed by damp, dark hair, opening for him like the petals of a damp flower
I do not get the obsession with comparing the vagina with flowers, but it needs to stop - along with the Rapunzel pubes.
> Brought into being with their intimacy
Yes, you had heterosexual sex and this was the result. You did the thing that brought all of humanity into being, well done.
> He found himself strangely affected by the idea that the baby woke and slept in cycles
At that stage, pretty sure they have REM sleep. He should also know this because he was reading up on everything regarding pregnancy, remember?
The bit about resentment and how the fetus was a 'thing' and a 'tumor' sucking the life out of Viktor lost its power in the first chapter. You had the option to terminate and the pooner said no, and despite the pooner being the main character in this, it's all about the man and what he feels. The FTM getting replaced by the actual man, go figure.
Did you not just express surprise that they had sleep cycles? Someone has got a selective memory here.
Pretty sure they know by now - or at least Ximena does. They've been keeping this on the down-low for months, and they're only getting away with it because Viktor is a recluse.
> Do you imagine your peers will congratulate you?
Over what? A wealthy man having a kid? Rich folks have bastards all the time. It's no big deal. He's not from a higher class house, anyways.
> You have not even told your mother
I would assume she knows, but for the sake of drama she does not. You would think maternal instinct and the fact her son talks about nothing but this pooner would be a major clue.
He's scared of popping out a bastard child, while no one seems to be bothered by 'pregnant men'. He's worried she will get upset that her grandchild is half Zaunite vs being a half-retarded one because 'momma dearest' was taking testosterone during the pregnancy. Forget the kid being Zaunite - it's going to be functionally mute with a soft head or an abnormally large one at that rate.
> Others in her social circle would see the baby's existence as a scandal
Again, they're more offended over the class issue than the fact it came from a pooner, because the only sin they take seriously is bigotry.
> He'd gotten a bastard child on a trencher
They were sleeping together for three years and never once concluded or imagined that pregnancy could happen. Just because you identify as a man, doesn't erase your female biology.
It really is something how passive Viktor is in this. But don't worry, there is a happy ending - Viktor is going to get augmented lungs. Will he implant them himself? Nope! That's Jayce doing. He's just along for the ride.
Odd reading Mel in such a positive light when the author hates her ass.
Yeah, we can't be wondering how a man got pregnant. We need to focus more on the fact that it's a Zaunite bastard.
The one time we bring up augmentation and it's Jayce doing it for Viktor v Viktor doing it for himself. This man doesn't have a lick of agency; he just exists to be pregnant and that's it.
> A heart's simple
No it isn't, especially not in mammals. You have to replicate the four chambers, muscles, the blood vessels and electrical pathways. It's a muscular, electrical blood pump to be specific.
> Jayce had no background in medical science
Neither does the author, otherwise she wouldn't be saying 'hearts are simple'. If they were, they'd be using pig hearts with augmentations, as their hearts are very similar to ours.
She knows because she saw him at the gala. Not hard to deduce that he is pregnant and ill - hell, how come no one else was talking about that tumble he had at that party? You're worried about being found out and yet that happened? Talk about a major plot hole.
> I rather think that was your decision
Everything has been Jayce's decision. I've yet to see one actually made by Viktor.
Ironic that Viktor is saying that when he consented to this pregnancy, to the sex that led to said pregnancy, and to its continuation. He doesn't want to be an experiment while walking around as an experiment. This is the same author who got mad when someone brought up Viktor was poisoning his fetus with the testosterone shots.
> With
*Worth
> A body with no integrity, no dignity at all
This entire fic is about how a disabled trans man's worth is getting pregnant and giving birth. To quote Hexhomos, 'giving birth is the only thing his broken body can do'.
> There was less of him
And it's supposedly an 'uncomplicated pregnancy', uh huh. Despite all the health issues of the 'gestational carrier'.
> The thin scars on either side of his chest
And he can't breastfeed, either. He has to use formulate.
> I've never trusted my body to do anything
> I could never rely on it
You had no problem getting 'gender affirming surgery' to make you appear more male. You took testosterone no problem. No I'm to believe that you found your purpose with pregnancy? Miss me with that bullshit.
Jayce has been doing 'so much reading' and yet he keeps getting taken by the wayside, like fetuses in that stage of pregnancy having sleep cycles or thinking the heart is 'simple'. My boy is being awfully confident on a body he knows nothing about.
> At least conceptually
For fuck's sake, are we STILL doing this? This little dance of whether or not he feels the child is a person and not a thing? Did you not discuss it thousands of words ago?
> A vaginal birth
Imagine that, the proper use of 'vagina'. She still needs a trigger warning for fucking pregnancy, though.
> He'd spent long hours reading about childbirth and the many ways it could go horribly wrong
But nothing on a fetus exposed to testosterone, I see.
Get ready for a long ass birthing scene that Margaret Atwood can't even compare to.
Viktor is skeptical of a lot of things, yet is overridden by Jayce every single time. I truly wonder why that is.
> Childbirth was a natural process
Yes, for WOMEN. FEMALES. All this talk about how transmen are men and yet we always go right back to pregnancy.
> This was Viktor, not some case study in a textbook
The fuck you mean, bitch? He IS a case study - he's a deathly ill trans man that became pregnant because of heterosexual sex, exposed his fetus to testosterone and whatever else he's taking, and is literally fucking dying. 'Uncomplicated pregnancy' my ass when he's under 100 pounds and is having a high-risk pregnancy.
Yes, 14k or so words were wasted just for this titular moment. It could have been sped up to spare us a bore, but no. We have to draw it out because we need that ~drama~ and for maximum pissing and shitting and crying from the audience.
> I read a paper about it
And he doesn't seem aware that a woman's hormones go haywire during childbirth thanks to oxytocin being released.
> the book had suggested imagery like a flower blooming
Know what else was blooming like a flower? Viktor's vagina. How fitting.
> As his cunt bloomed around the top of the baby's head
I don't know why this rubs me the wrong way, but using 'cunt' to describe childbirth oddly sexualizes it. You could have used 'vagina' - just as you did with 'vaginal birth' - and it would have been fine.
> A girl
Oh look, we assigned sex at birth and we believe that their theybie is a girl - until the kindergarten teacher says otherwise.
Too bad the child cannot breastfeed. That is what happens when you decide to yeet the teets to pretend to be something you are not - only to embrace your biology for the sake of reproduction anyways.
> His hand was big enough
Oh? It's not big enough to span the entirety of Viktor's back? That's a first. You sure it isn't as big as the baby itself?
Turns out, Viktor is going through post-partum depression, and the author has a trigger warning for that too just as she does for the casual use of scientific terms for female reproductive organs. You'd think they would have spoken more about this and the pitfalls of pregnancy, but no.
Of course they decided on his last name. Everything goes to the male, as is typical. Jayce gets to walk away with this, while Viktor's only purpose was to give birth with his broken body.
Lochia. The word you are looking for is lochia. And that can last for weeks. Should've caught that in your readings.
> He was restless, distracted, prone to tears that he couldn't explain
That's PPD for you. Amazing how so much of this fic is centered around a woman's issue and a woman's illness and the character isn't even that important besides that fact
> I don't know what's wrong with me
After all those months of reading, and Viktor moping around doing absolutely nothing (to be fair, he is dying), how come Jayce doesn't know about post-partum depression? This is a major thing to skip over.
> I wanted her so badly. I dreamed about her
Imagine that: the FTM goes out of her way to take T shot and pretend to be a man, and yet she's drawn by her biology in the end. She dreams of childbirth and being a mother, just as Nature intended. Now, did you really need all these words to describe that wish?
> Dad
You mean uterus owner? Gestational carrier? Vagina haver? Oh, those terms are just for us, eh? You get to keep the male terms for yourselves because their identity isn't the one in question.
Here comes the final twist of this long-ass chapter: Ximena discovers that she is an abuela.
She still doesn't get it, does she? Must be that 85 IQ.
You would think she could have deduced it in the prior chapter, but no, we had to draw this out because we need this to be as dramatic as possible. In case you got lost in this behemoth of a chapter, here's the TL;DR:
- Jayce and Viktor talk some more about this pregnancy. Jayce does a 'lot of reading', forgets a bunch of shit, talks to Mel about investors and Cait finds out first that the kid is his.
- Jayce finds out that he can make augmented hearts and lungs for Viktor, Viktor initially refuses but relents. Author thinks hearts are 'easy'.
- Viktor goes through contractions and eventually gives birth to a baby girl. Admits he dreamed about having a child despite wanting to be seen as a man the prior chapters. Has post-partum depression and cannot handle the child screaming for more than five minutes.
- Jayce's mother finds out she's a grandmother. Calls her son selfish.
- The comments are filled with people crying and pissing themselves over such dramatic twists, not realizing that the only reason Viktor exists is to just give birth and how he ceases to be a person aside from the fact. No, really: he really has done nothing else but be a literal incubator in a so-called 'uncomplicated pregnancy' that is clearly complicated. No discussions of how he feels or nothing, aside from him wanting the kid to get his money. All we find out is that he returned to his biological, womanly roots for reproduction for his destined child.
The last chapter, I assume, will be just as long and bloated, but people love this sappy shit. I found it an absolute bore, and it is something to note how the sole purpose of a trans man is just to give birth. Whatever could these progressive authors mean by that?
In the previous chapter, Jayce was reconnecting with his mother and they had a long chat at his father's gravestone. She met Viktor, noted his pregnancy, worried about him, and did not put two and two together that her son is the father.
> The baby would take what it needed from Viktor's body, or so Jayce had gathered from his reading
You should have known this when the pregnancy was 12 weeks along, vs 31 weeks. For a smart man, he sure is retarded in how his sperm knocked up his trans partner. Oh no, penis in vagina sex led to pregnancy...who knew?
As for Viktor, he was offered the choice of termination, yet did not take it. Now he has to deal with the health consequences for the sake of ~drama~.
> Two weeks of leave
That isn't enough for childcare. None of them have discussed it, either. In the previous chapter, Viktor discussed leaving Jayce in his will and allocating his resources and any accumulated wealth to him. They fought, and Jayce still wonders how he's going to be a single dad to a kid he helped create.
Despite this talk, Ximena doesn't seem to conclude that Jayce is the father. All the signs and clues are there, yet she willingly chooses to stay in the dark. You would think she would have grasped it in the prior chapter, but no.
This entire fic is a waste of time. The person who should be front-and-center in this fic isn't there, and it's all about the man and HIS feelings and HIS problems.
> Telling her would change things
Change what? That Viktor is actually a woman? That her son knocked up a pooner? Do tell.
No shit. Any woman could have told you that - your own mother could have. He sure is doing a lot of reading so late into a pregnancy that he didn't care about until recently. BTW, she has a 'trigger warning' for childbirth because centering a fic on pregnancy is A-OK, but giving birth is dysphoric.
You would think Viktor would care more about his health rather than take the suicide option, but no. He wants to leave a legacy behind and admitted this in Chapter 3, and that's why he was so adamant on keeping the child. He has a physical tie to Jayce and something to remember him by - when, in not so nice terms, this is a glorified form of baby trapping.
Now we're introducing Cait, who is far more analytical than Ximena, and she begins asking some uncomfortable questions. This leads to Jayce admitting that he knocked Viktor up, and the consequences thereafter.
This is one of the few times Viktor is discussed or included in any conversation. For people who want to elevate a disabled man or want trans men to be seen as men, they sure are erased from their own stories.
I can't imagine what that water bill must be.
Here we go: the Maury Povich confrontation.
> To say it out loud felt like it cost him something
It didn't cost you anything. You just ejaculated into a vagina and bam, pregnancy.
> I thought you were supposed to be a genius. I thought you had more sense
Wow, a character calling out Jayce for his shit? That's a first.
> He'd come to understand that Viktor wanted a child, badly - but he had not particularly wanted one with Jayce
Is that so? Because from the first chapter, Viktor is rather cagey on whether he wants a kid or not. This was sprung on him and he later admits the child will be his legacy and last living embodiment of him. Did he want a kid? No, because he was never asked.
I agree. Jayce decided a quick fuck without protection was the better option - and Viktor thought testosterone was birth control. Both of them are at fault here.
> He was far enough along by then that he couldn't
Incorrect. He was 12 weeks or so when they found out he was pregnant. That is more than enough time for termination. Either the author forgot what she wrote, or this is from Jayce's perspective and he can't remember what was said. I'm going with the former.
> He'd been hands-off for so long that it must seem odd for him to step in now
So much for all that 'reading'. Yes, he stepped away to let Viktor do what he wanted, but now he just sounds callous as fuck. Almost a deadbeat daddy.
> made their baby seem more real to him
...it wasn't before?
> Jayce hadn't spent much time wondering whether the baby was a boy or a girl
Isn't it funny how the people who say sex isn't binary seem to resort back to binary sex when it comes to their Playing Dollhouse stories? They know what sex is with their magical dream fetuses, but not for grown humans.
>David
A Hebrew name? Really?
Now we have Viktor spewing up blood and bits of tissue and that isn't cause for alarm at all. They just ignore it and move on - and these two even have a spicy moment despite our boy here spitting up his own lungs.
Yes, Jayce, you fucking know. There is no point in lying about it either because mama dearest doesn't buy it, either.
Imagine that: this fic is about a trans pregnancy and how a trans man is only good for giving birth, and the main concern is that the man didn't get pussy for a few weeks. How very revealing.
> His clit was a hard knot
Can you smash glass with it?
> The neat, glistening slit, framed by damp, dark hair, opening for him like the petals of a damp flower
I do not get the obsession with comparing the vagina with flowers, but it needs to stop - along with the Rapunzel pubes.
> Brought into being with their intimacy
Yes, you had heterosexual sex and this was the result. You did the thing that brought all of humanity into being, well done.
> He found himself strangely affected by the idea that the baby woke and slept in cycles
At that stage, pretty sure they have REM sleep. He should also know this because he was reading up on everything regarding pregnancy, remember?
The bit about resentment and how the fetus was a 'thing' and a 'tumor' sucking the life out of Viktor lost its power in the first chapter. You had the option to terminate and the pooner said no, and despite the pooner being the main character in this, it's all about the man and what he feels. The FTM getting replaced by the actual man, go figure.
Did you not just express surprise that they had sleep cycles? Someone has got a selective memory here.
Pretty sure they know by now - or at least Ximena does. They've been keeping this on the down-low for months, and they're only getting away with it because Viktor is a recluse.
> Do you imagine your peers will congratulate you?
Over what? A wealthy man having a kid? Rich folks have bastards all the time. It's no big deal. He's not from a higher class house, anyways.
> You have not even told your mother
I would assume she knows, but for the sake of drama she does not. You would think maternal instinct and the fact her son talks about nothing but this pooner would be a major clue.
He's scared of popping out a bastard child, while no one seems to be bothered by 'pregnant men'. He's worried she will get upset that her grandchild is half Zaunite vs being a half-retarded one because 'momma dearest' was taking testosterone during the pregnancy. Forget the kid being Zaunite - it's going to be functionally mute with a soft head or an abnormally large one at that rate.
> Others in her social circle would see the baby's existence as a scandal
Again, they're more offended over the class issue than the fact it came from a pooner, because the only sin they take seriously is bigotry.
> He'd gotten a bastard child on a trencher
They were sleeping together for three years and never once concluded or imagined that pregnancy could happen. Just because you identify as a man, doesn't erase your female biology.
It really is something how passive Viktor is in this. But don't worry, there is a happy ending - Viktor is going to get augmented lungs. Will he implant them himself? Nope! That's Jayce doing. He's just along for the ride.
Odd reading Mel in such a positive light when the author hates her ass.
Yeah, we can't be wondering how a man got pregnant. We need to focus more on the fact that it's a Zaunite bastard.
The one time we bring up augmentation and it's Jayce doing it for Viktor v Viktor doing it for himself. This man doesn't have a lick of agency; he just exists to be pregnant and that's it.
> A heart's simple
No it isn't, especially not in mammals. You have to replicate the four chambers, muscles, the blood vessels and electrical pathways. It's a muscular, electrical blood pump to be specific.
> Jayce had no background in medical science
Neither does the author, otherwise she wouldn't be saying 'hearts are simple'. If they were, they'd be using pig hearts with augmentations, as their hearts are very similar to ours.
She knows because she saw him at the gala. Not hard to deduce that he is pregnant and ill - hell, how come no one else was talking about that tumble he had at that party? You're worried about being found out and yet that happened? Talk about a major plot hole.
> I rather think that was your decision
Everything has been Jayce's decision. I've yet to see one actually made by Viktor.
Ironic that Viktor is saying that when he consented to this pregnancy, to the sex that led to said pregnancy, and to its continuation. He doesn't want to be an experiment while walking around as an experiment. This is the same author who got mad when someone brought up Viktor was poisoning his fetus with the testosterone shots.
> With
*Worth
> A body with no integrity, no dignity at all
This entire fic is about how a disabled trans man's worth is getting pregnant and giving birth. To quote Hexhomos, 'giving birth is the only thing his broken body can do'.
> There was less of him
And it's supposedly an 'uncomplicated pregnancy', uh huh. Despite all the health issues of the 'gestational carrier'.
> The thin scars on either side of his chest
And he can't breastfeed, either. He has to use formulate.
> I've never trusted my body to do anything
> I could never rely on it
You had no problem getting 'gender affirming surgery' to make you appear more male. You took testosterone no problem. No I'm to believe that you found your purpose with pregnancy? Miss me with that bullshit.
Jayce has been doing 'so much reading' and yet he keeps getting taken by the wayside, like fetuses in that stage of pregnancy having sleep cycles or thinking the heart is 'simple'. My boy is being awfully confident on a body he knows nothing about.
> At least conceptually
For fuck's sake, are we STILL doing this? This little dance of whether or not he feels the child is a person and not a thing? Did you not discuss it thousands of words ago?
> A vaginal birth
Imagine that, the proper use of 'vagina'. She still needs a trigger warning for fucking pregnancy, though.
> He'd spent long hours reading about childbirth and the many ways it could go horribly wrong
But nothing on a fetus exposed to testosterone, I see.
Get ready for a long ass birthing scene that Margaret Atwood can't even compare to.
Viktor is skeptical of a lot of things, yet is overridden by Jayce every single time. I truly wonder why that is.
> Childbirth was a natural process
Yes, for WOMEN. FEMALES. All this talk about how transmen are men and yet we always go right back to pregnancy.
> This was Viktor, not some case study in a textbook
The fuck you mean, bitch? He IS a case study - he's a deathly ill trans man that became pregnant because of heterosexual sex, exposed his fetus to testosterone and whatever else he's taking, and is literally fucking dying. 'Uncomplicated pregnancy' my ass when he's under 100 pounds and is having a high-risk pregnancy.
Yes, 14k or so words were wasted just for this titular moment. It could have been sped up to spare us a bore, but no. We have to draw it out because we need that ~drama~ and for maximum pissing and shitting and crying from the audience.
> I read a paper about it
And he doesn't seem aware that a woman's hormones go haywire during childbirth thanks to oxytocin being released.
> the book had suggested imagery like a flower blooming
Know what else was blooming like a flower? Viktor's vagina. How fitting.
> As his cunt bloomed around the top of the baby's head
I don't know why this rubs me the wrong way, but using 'cunt' to describe childbirth oddly sexualizes it. You could have used 'vagina' - just as you did with 'vaginal birth' - and it would have been fine.
> A girl
Oh look, we assigned sex at birth and we believe that their theybie is a girl - until the kindergarten teacher says otherwise.
Too bad the child cannot breastfeed. That is what happens when you decide to yeet the teets to pretend to be something you are not - only to embrace your biology for the sake of reproduction anyways.
> His hand was big enough
Oh? It's not big enough to span the entirety of Viktor's back? That's a first. You sure it isn't as big as the baby itself?
Turns out, Viktor is going through post-partum depression, and the author has a trigger warning for that too just as she does for the casual use of scientific terms for female reproductive organs. You'd think they would have spoken more about this and the pitfalls of pregnancy, but no.
Of course they decided on his last name. Everything goes to the male, as is typical. Jayce gets to walk away with this, while Viktor's only purpose was to give birth with his broken body.
Lochia. The word you are looking for is lochia. And that can last for weeks. Should've caught that in your readings.
> He was restless, distracted, prone to tears that he couldn't explain
That's PPD for you. Amazing how so much of this fic is centered around a woman's issue and a woman's illness and the character isn't even that important besides that fact
> I don't know what's wrong with me
After all those months of reading, and Viktor moping around doing absolutely nothing (to be fair, he is dying), how come Jayce doesn't know about post-partum depression? This is a major thing to skip over.
> I wanted her so badly. I dreamed about her
Imagine that: the FTM goes out of her way to take T shot and pretend to be a man, and yet she's drawn by her biology in the end. She dreams of childbirth and being a mother, just as Nature intended. Now, did you really need all these words to describe that wish?
> Dad
You mean uterus owner? Gestational carrier? Vagina haver? Oh, those terms are just for us, eh? You get to keep the male terms for yourselves because their identity isn't the one in question.
Here comes the final twist of this long-ass chapter: Ximena discovers that she is an abuela.
She still doesn't get it, does she? Must be that 85 IQ.
You would think she could have deduced it in the prior chapter, but no, we had to draw this out because we need this to be as dramatic as possible. In case you got lost in this behemoth of a chapter, here's the TL;DR:
- Jayce and Viktor talk some more about this pregnancy. Jayce does a 'lot of reading', forgets a bunch of shit, talks to Mel about investors and Cait finds out first that the kid is his.
- Jayce finds out that he can make augmented hearts and lungs for Viktor, Viktor initially refuses but relents. Author thinks hearts are 'easy'.
- Viktor goes through contractions and eventually gives birth to a baby girl. Admits he dreamed about having a child despite wanting to be seen as a man the prior chapters. Has post-partum depression and cannot handle the child screaming for more than five minutes.
- Jayce's mother finds out she's a grandmother. Calls her son selfish.
- The comments are filled with people crying and pissing themselves over such dramatic twists, not realizing that the only reason Viktor exists is to just give birth and how he ceases to be a person aside from the fact. No, really: he really has done nothing else but be a literal incubator in a so-called 'uncomplicated pregnancy' that is clearly complicated. No discussions of how he feels or nothing, aside from him wanting the kid to get his money. All we find out is that he returned to his biological, womanly roots for reproduction for his destined child.
The last chapter, I assume, will be just as long and bloated, but people love this sappy shit. I found it an absolute bore, and it is something to note how the sole purpose of a trans man is just to give birth. Whatever could these progressive authors mean by that?
Incredible how it captured the tone of Dean/Sam shippers word for word. They can complain all they like, but read enough of these fics and they really do start blending together. They should be angrier that they all copy one another than AI copying them.
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We've got another stalker fic on our hands - but don't worry, they match each other's freak real good. It is the classic, 'It's not abusive because he's hot' fic, where men can commit the most heinous actions and if they have a great smile, panties will get dropped. It is the definition of female fantasy and this author seems utterly blind to it. Written by a Cluster B.
Recall that one pooner stalker fic I posted where Viktor managed to dox Jayce just from his apron, and compare it to this: Viktor can't seem to gather any details about the stalker who has stalked him for seven years (yes, it's been that long) aside from the first initial of his name and the mental image he conjures of said man.
This should also be compared to the fics where Viktor is the stalker; in those, Viktor used emotional manipulation to get close to his victim, pretending to be their friend, and then yanking the carpet out from under them. Jayce just sends him gifts, breathes heavily into the phone, and is generally aggressive. Later, he even cuts up cows to mail their hearts to them.
Now, you may be wondering: who is the cop handling this case? Why, it's none other than Caitlyn, and she just brushes it all off despite the guy sending his victim live cow hearts in the mail. This man is replicating S7VEN and you're going to sleep on that? Really?
> Big enough to wrap around Viktor's waist maybe
This fucking line. These bitches whine about AI when they really should be worrying about sound so basic AI can copy their shit word for word.
> J is the most careful person he knows
Everyone has a slip up, even the hot Hispanic Jeffrey Dahmers.
So he picked a niche subject and despite his field of expertise, he doesn't seem to want to play cat-and-mouse with his stalker. He just rolls with it because it's hot and he doesn't feel so lonely, okay?
> Gross misuse of laboratory chemicals for personal uses
> Viktor stole a fucktonne of drugs and locked himself in his apartment for a week
Chemicals, or substances? I don't think of a pharmacy that he looted - I think of him huffing toxic gas to get high. Pooners and drug addictions, name a better duo.
> He this time tries to mould into something useful
This sentence does not make sense. "...The dread and self-hatred that he tries to mould into something useful THIS TIME' would work.
> Viktor hates cops
Ahh there's that ACAB attitude.
We find out that Jayce's Dahmer/Meiwes/Armie Hammer arc involves him writing detailed letters, fulfilling male-typical stalker notions of kidnapping, rape and cannibalism, while poooner Viktor wants a $40k ring and a fancy wedding. They are just not comparable, right down to the syntax.
> He's aware it's a demented way to feel about such an ordeal
It only works because he's hot.
> He's also sure that J is in all likelihood probably hideous
'In all likelihood' and 'probably' are redundant, they mean the same thing. If Jayce really was balding with missing teeth, this wouldn't be a smut fic, it'd be a remake of The Hills Have Eyes.
> He's disappointed to discover it was a cow
> Rants about ethical consumption of meat
Yeah, that's your typical female shitlib right there. You want your sexy stalker to send you a real human heart, now?
> Then there's the part of him that fantasizes they're pictures of something else
You already discussed this: you wish they were real human body parts because it would mean the obsession is all about you and how you are important. That was firmly established just a few sentences ago.
> hands pinned beneath his own thighs
Very feminine
> Look, I don't think you have anything to worry about
Cait is terribly OOC here. This man is getting live cow hearts in the male and actual people are showing up missing. She has a file on Viktor and would absolutely be worried for him. She would NOT take this lightly. But we have to dumb her down because our sexy stalker fic needs to pan out so we can see our freaks go at it.
It is a dismissal, but it's a dismissal for stupid reasons. She would never actually do that and would probably put it high on her list of priorities. That shit usually warrants the attention of the FBI.
> Gossiping about coworkers or men
Just like real ladies do, teehee!
> Daydreaming about his stalker
Again, this whole thing only works because Jayce is hot. If he wasn't, this would be a horror fic. Women love sexy serial killers.
> Unless the submission along with his size paint him an easy target for violence
He's just an uwu trans boi, give him a break, yeah?
> The man, holy shit, look at him
Absolutely feminine brained. He matches Viktor's internal construct of his stalker, and instead of thinking that's weird, his panties get wet and he's ready to be bred. Really fitting the stereotype of 'women become dumb when they want to get fucked'.
> Until approximately now, he would have asserted to be the type of person who would never feel tempted to choose a man over a friend
I am calling it now: something will happen to Sky. Pooner authors hate her too and this is one way to get away with torturing black female characters would being called a racist. Ditching your best friend for a hot guy you just met? How petty.
> Still one syllable
> It's the same letter as your stalker
> He fits the mental image of your stalker
> Do not assume any ill will or malcontent because he turns you on
Just pooner things. You would also think his stalker not responding when he was talking to Jayce would have been something to note. This man is in forensic sciences, so where are his deductive capabilities?
> Shameful fantasy of them or two men like them fighting over him
Literal cliched female fantasy right there. Holy fuck, these authors just don't get it. Trans men are men, yet make them have female fantasy so blatant and in-your-face to the point most women would raise their eyebrows at it. They're not even trying to behave like men.
> Descriptions of sex acts that would make a lesser man blush
Thank God he isn't bald and doesn't look like Alex Jones, then.
> Desiring their souls to fuse, wanting to be so close to Viktor that their bodies could not be separated through time, space, universes
Haha, it's just like what happened in the ending, get it?
> He uses more emojis than Viktor's stalker ever does
Doesn't matter. You should note from their syntax whether they are similar or not. People have been doxed and identified over less.
> It's horribly appealing, actually, and more than a little cute
Insert *it's just because he's hot* line for the umpteenth time.
Here we go. Viktor begins to realize Jayce is saying things that only his stalker knows, even when he was getting clues before then, such as the stalker not talking whenever Jayce was talking to him and how certain details overlap. Glad his Liam Neeson skills only come to fruition when it's too late.
> Gender neutral bathroom
Yeah, that fits.
Too bad you can't run with that bum leg. You can hobble, though.
> Warm enough he feels ridiculous for thinking of texting Sky for rescue earlier
This is one of those 'you should have listened to your gut' warnings that he clearly disregarded. I also think he spiked his wine.
There it is. The ultimate revelation. Viktor realizes just then that Jayce is his stalker, and Jayce, despite also being drunk, offers to drive him home...yeah, he spiked his drink.
> Is worried to death that Jayce really is his stalker
> Gets turned on by his muscles anyways
Fucking hell. You really are asking for it at this point.
> Uppers and caffeine
What, was he on cocaine and meth? Never thought I'd read a meth-addicted pooner who also drank Monster like it was going out of style. His heart and liver must be made of a completely different material.
> Muster up the full meat of his horror
Very fitting for a quasi cannibal fic.
> You have to know it's important to me that you want it
Oh, how nice. He's making sure his victim is consenting. This fic doesn't hit the horror notes as it did for that one fic where Viktor attempted suicide and was locked up by Jayce; rather, it's almost tongue-in-cheek funny. You have an immigrant Hispanic kidnapping a pooner who huffs chemical fumes to get high, and who keeps polaroid photos because his stalker was hot. He took the 'I'll fuck you better than anyone ever has' seriously - and Jayce already said that in the beginning, btw.
> You have to let yourself want it
He eventually will. Those muscles and long eyelashes sealed the deal.
He doesn't actually have that many friends; Sky is his only consistent friend. She would know something is wrong.
> It's just disappointing to watch you fight this when you're so smart in quite literally every other regard
For once, I agree. He's supposed to be a forensic scientist and yet walked right into this and is Hot for Stalker.
> You haven't menstruated in years
Oh well, glad our Hispanic psychopath didn't forget the T shots! He may be a cannibal but he isn't a transphobe!
> Viktor has no idea how such a twisted mind can be such an accomplished scientist at the same time
Boy really has no idea who the fuck Jeffrey Epstein was hanging up. Hell, an accomplished scientist was outed as a zoosadist and rapist. You're a forensic scientist - you should have a clue.
BTW, PB&J sandwiches are just going to spike his insulin levels. They are not a proper meal.
> No point in trying to run away
Not like you can, anyways.
> You're a psychopath by now
Wait until you find out why Viktor was kicked off the board.
> I already know how you feel
That's really not surprising. Viktor really did walk into this one.
> Because he's an immigrant himself
Making the brown-skinned immigrant the murderous psychopath who eats people is definitely a choice. Hope he's got his papers or ICE is gonna come knocking.
> Openly gay and transgender
Oh, fuck off with this shit. No, pooners, you are not gay if you are attracted to men. A penis going into a vagina is NOT gay sex. You have to be MALE attracted to OTHER MALES to be gay. Chances are, it wasn't you being a 'gay trans man' that got you kicked off, it was something else.
> I spent seven years waiting for you to make a move
He didn't know who you were? You were an anonymous stalker?
> Why would I have waited seven years if this was the case?
Good question.
> You're wasting both of our time and prolonging your suffering for no reason
Nice lampshading.
> When did you first start worrying about being a sociopath?
And there we have it: the FTM is also a psycho. I love the accurate stereotyping here.
LMAO OF COURSE THE POONER FAILED THE PSYCH EVAL, WOO BOY
If the drugs didn't do it that sure did
I don't think I've read a Stockholm Syndrome fic where the victim was lusting so openly after their stalker, but eh, I'm always surprised.
> If the relationship had gotten that serious
If the Kweens found out that Mel was getting butchered like a cow this bitch would have gotten roasted.
> I never hurt any animal
You sent him a cow heart and extremely gory pictures of it. What is he supposed to think?
> I know you know the difference between animals and people
Psychopaths and murderers do start torturing animals first, because they know they're easy prey and cannot fight back. Race bent Jeffrey Dahmer only gets a pass because...wait for it...he's hot.
> First one was a slaughterhouse worker
> I wanted to do something small, something to feel close to your morals
> Just a few whose lifestyles I disagreed with. I'm not a monster
Preaching to the choir there. You killed a man doing his job because he dared date your sociopathic pooner? That's a helluva change from butchering live cows just to sympathize with a vegetarian!
> I don't act on every urge I have to hurt the people who get to look at you. There'd be no one left if I did
That's not very encouraging.
> You want it. Why won't you let yourself?
And here comes the smut.
> One big hand to his stomach
Let me guess. It encompasses it entirely.
> Inner thighs slick, his cock red and throbbing
If your roid clit is that red, you have a problem. I want to see how big Jayce is before I start laughing at the absurd comparison.
> Breathe directly over his hole
You're not supposed to blow air up the vagina.
> Viktor's ready to ask for it. He's probably even ready to beg
And all it took was 17 days? Huh, if murder is what turned Viktor on, how come he didn't kill the board members who didn't like their 'out and loud' gay pooner? Or was that too obvious?
> He's a little annoyed and hurt that they failed
Is this Stockholm Syndrome, or are you just a brat because you didn't get fucked right away?
> Do you want me to force you, Viktor? Is that it?
Because rape would only be a natural touch up from the murder and cannibalism.
> I'll know if you really mean it
He sounds like a broken record at this point. Shut up, Ramirez!
> You don't really think you could fight me
Objectively he couldn't. He is a pooner who barely weighs 100 lbs. He'd lose against a highschool textbook.
> You can brush your teeth
Just how long was he going with a stanky mouth?
> Follows him from room to room
It's not like he's going to run away, you know.
> You can't be so certain I won't hurt you or run away
Bud, again, you are barely 100 lbs. You are a disabled pooner who needs their daily dose of testosterone or else that gender dysphoria will send you into a depressive spiral. You would lose against a dinner plate. He is right to not take your threats seriously.
Weed? Really? All that shit and it's WEED you're drugging him with? I legitimately thought it was going to be rohypnol. The guy huffs chemical gases because he's an addict; how the fuck would you think an EDIBLE would be enough to knock him out? How did the drugs in the wine glasses knock him out when he gets high off of ammonia and uppers FOR FUN?
> I'd know when you really meant it
Stop repeating yourself, Ramirez.
> Kisses him in a way that forces him to open up for it
He was already opened up for it; you took him by surprise.
> Violent contrast of pain and pleasure
Cliché.
> Their size difference laughable, his fingers big enough to reach nearly all the way around at Viktor's knee
Guess those yeti hands change size on a whim. We have to make him tiny because how else would that big ole dick fit in such a nice, tight vagina?
> Oversensitive cock
Now I really want to know how big Jayce is.
> I'll know if you really mean it
Shut up, already. Jesus.
> Need you to feel it, the way I'm gonna split you open
Yes, he has a 'monstrous cock'. As is usual with fics like these.
> Positioning him like a doll. It takes Viktor this long to realize he really intends to fuck him
Indeed.
> I'll know when you mean it
FUCKING HELL IS YOUR PROGRAMMING MALFUNCTIONING?
> Too big, too much
> Jayce feels unbelievably large. Monstrous
Where would we be without our Hispanic Hog splitting our wee pooner in half? These women are size queens, through and through.
> He shudders and clings to the bed and lets him fuck a new permanent shape into Viktor's body
This again? It sure is becoming more common since that Knight AU.
> Jayce fucks like he's trying to take him apart
Just like a cow heart, eh? He's just going back to his roots.
> A hot rush of slick down his thighs like he's pissed himself
The comments went crazy at this line, but squirting is so common in these fics it doesn't surprise me. He did say he would fuck him better than anyone else, and what better way to do it than on a dick the size of a police baton?
> He feels like he's never going to exist outside the context of pleasure this intense ever again
Once you go Ramirez, you never look in the rear mirror.
> Jayce has permanently disfigured him
Didn't think you could break the pooner any harder than before, yet here we are. Break those hips with that dick, son.
> Wet pleasure and blinding sensation and a hole to fuck
Interesting how pooners always write themselves as 'holes to fuck'. There surely couldn't be a trend there.
Lmao, the chemical huffing pooner had no friends that were worried about him because they didn't even notice he was gone
Man, if that isn't pathetic I don't know what is.
> Viktor is wanted, known, seen
And all it took was a massive cock, a hot guy, and every female fantasy fulfilled because who the fuck cares if you get stalked and kidnapped when the guy doing it is sexy as hell? It's literally the plot of 365 Days, but with a trans man.
I also just discovered that this author not only wrote another fic where Jayce has a monster cock and fucks Viktor with it, she also has Cluster B disorders. I plan on doing that other fic in the future, just to see if it's as bad as this one.
The majority of the comments for this fic are just female gooners jacking it, confirming that stalking and kidnapping really are hot if the dude is hot.
So predictable.
Recall that one pooner stalker fic I posted where Viktor managed to dox Jayce just from his apron, and compare it to this: Viktor can't seem to gather any details about the stalker who has stalked him for seven years (yes, it's been that long) aside from the first initial of his name and the mental image he conjures of said man.
This should also be compared to the fics where Viktor is the stalker; in those, Viktor used emotional manipulation to get close to his victim, pretending to be their friend, and then yanking the carpet out from under them. Jayce just sends him gifts, breathes heavily into the phone, and is generally aggressive. Later, he even cuts up cows to mail their hearts to them.
Now, you may be wondering: who is the cop handling this case? Why, it's none other than Caitlyn, and she just brushes it all off despite the guy sending his victim live cow hearts in the mail. This man is replicating S7VEN and you're going to sleep on that? Really?
> Big enough to wrap around Viktor's waist maybe
This fucking line. These bitches whine about AI when they really should be worrying about sound so basic AI can copy their shit word for word.
> J is the most careful person he knows
Everyone has a slip up, even the hot Hispanic Jeffrey Dahmers.
So he picked a niche subject and despite his field of expertise, he doesn't seem to want to play cat-and-mouse with his stalker. He just rolls with it because it's hot and he doesn't feel so lonely, okay?
> Gross misuse of laboratory chemicals for personal uses
> Viktor stole a fucktonne of drugs and locked himself in his apartment for a week
Chemicals, or substances? I don't think of a pharmacy that he looted - I think of him huffing toxic gas to get high. Pooners and drug addictions, name a better duo.
> He this time tries to mould into something useful
This sentence does not make sense. "...The dread and self-hatred that he tries to mould into something useful THIS TIME' would work.
> Viktor hates cops
Ahh there's that ACAB attitude.
We find out that Jayce's Dahmer/Meiwes/Armie Hammer arc involves him writing detailed letters, fulfilling male-typical stalker notions of kidnapping, rape and cannibalism, while poooner Viktor wants a $40k ring and a fancy wedding. They are just not comparable, right down to the syntax.
> He's aware it's a demented way to feel about such an ordeal
It only works because he's hot.
> He's also sure that J is in all likelihood probably hideous
'In all likelihood' and 'probably' are redundant, they mean the same thing. If Jayce really was balding with missing teeth, this wouldn't be a smut fic, it'd be a remake of The Hills Have Eyes.
> He's disappointed to discover it was a cow
> Rants about ethical consumption of meat
Yeah, that's your typical female shitlib right there. You want your sexy stalker to send you a real human heart, now?
> Then there's the part of him that fantasizes they're pictures of something else
You already discussed this: you wish they were real human body parts because it would mean the obsession is all about you and how you are important. That was firmly established just a few sentences ago.
> hands pinned beneath his own thighs
Very feminine
> Look, I don't think you have anything to worry about
Cait is terribly OOC here. This man is getting live cow hearts in the male and actual people are showing up missing. She has a file on Viktor and would absolutely be worried for him. She would NOT take this lightly. But we have to dumb her down because our sexy stalker fic needs to pan out so we can see our freaks go at it.
It is a dismissal, but it's a dismissal for stupid reasons. She would never actually do that and would probably put it high on her list of priorities. That shit usually warrants the attention of the FBI.
> Gossiping about coworkers or men
Just like real ladies do, teehee!
> Daydreaming about his stalker
Again, this whole thing only works because Jayce is hot. If he wasn't, this would be a horror fic. Women love sexy serial killers.
> Unless the submission along with his size paint him an easy target for violence
He's just an uwu trans boi, give him a break, yeah?
> The man, holy shit, look at him
Absolutely feminine brained. He matches Viktor's internal construct of his stalker, and instead of thinking that's weird, his panties get wet and he's ready to be bred. Really fitting the stereotype of 'women become dumb when they want to get fucked'.
> Until approximately now, he would have asserted to be the type of person who would never feel tempted to choose a man over a friend
I am calling it now: something will happen to Sky. Pooner authors hate her too and this is one way to get away with torturing black female characters would being called a racist. Ditching your best friend for a hot guy you just met? How petty.
> Still one syllable
> It's the same letter as your stalker
> He fits the mental image of your stalker
> Do not assume any ill will or malcontent because he turns you on
Just pooner things. You would also think his stalker not responding when he was talking to Jayce would have been something to note. This man is in forensic sciences, so where are his deductive capabilities?
> Shameful fantasy of them or two men like them fighting over him
Literal cliched female fantasy right there. Holy fuck, these authors just don't get it. Trans men are men, yet make them have female fantasy so blatant and in-your-face to the point most women would raise their eyebrows at it. They're not even trying to behave like men.
> Descriptions of sex acts that would make a lesser man blush
Thank God he isn't bald and doesn't look like Alex Jones, then.
> Desiring their souls to fuse, wanting to be so close to Viktor that their bodies could not be separated through time, space, universes
Haha, it's just like what happened in the ending, get it?
> He uses more emojis than Viktor's stalker ever does
Doesn't matter. You should note from their syntax whether they are similar or not. People have been doxed and identified over less.
> It's horribly appealing, actually, and more than a little cute
Insert *it's just because he's hot* line for the umpteenth time.
Here we go. Viktor begins to realize Jayce is saying things that only his stalker knows, even when he was getting clues before then, such as the stalker not talking whenever Jayce was talking to him and how certain details overlap. Glad his Liam Neeson skills only come to fruition when it's too late.
> Gender neutral bathroom
Yeah, that fits.
Too bad you can't run with that bum leg. You can hobble, though.
> Warm enough he feels ridiculous for thinking of texting Sky for rescue earlier
This is one of those 'you should have listened to your gut' warnings that he clearly disregarded. I also think he spiked his wine.
There it is. The ultimate revelation. Viktor realizes just then that Jayce is his stalker, and Jayce, despite also being drunk, offers to drive him home...yeah, he spiked his drink.
> Is worried to death that Jayce really is his stalker
> Gets turned on by his muscles anyways
Fucking hell. You really are asking for it at this point.
> Uppers and caffeine
What, was he on cocaine and meth? Never thought I'd read a meth-addicted pooner who also drank Monster like it was going out of style. His heart and liver must be made of a completely different material.
> Muster up the full meat of his horror
Very fitting for a quasi cannibal fic.
> You have to know it's important to me that you want it
Oh, how nice. He's making sure his victim is consenting. This fic doesn't hit the horror notes as it did for that one fic where Viktor attempted suicide and was locked up by Jayce; rather, it's almost tongue-in-cheek funny. You have an immigrant Hispanic kidnapping a pooner who huffs chemical fumes to get high, and who keeps polaroid photos because his stalker was hot. He took the 'I'll fuck you better than anyone ever has' seriously - and Jayce already said that in the beginning, btw.
> You have to let yourself want it
He eventually will. Those muscles and long eyelashes sealed the deal.
He doesn't actually have that many friends; Sky is his only consistent friend. She would know something is wrong.
> It's just disappointing to watch you fight this when you're so smart in quite literally every other regard
For once, I agree. He's supposed to be a forensic scientist and yet walked right into this and is Hot for Stalker.
> You haven't menstruated in years
Oh well, glad our Hispanic psychopath didn't forget the T shots! He may be a cannibal but he isn't a transphobe!
> Viktor has no idea how such a twisted mind can be such an accomplished scientist at the same time
Boy really has no idea who the fuck Jeffrey Epstein was hanging up. Hell, an accomplished scientist was outed as a zoosadist and rapist. You're a forensic scientist - you should have a clue.
BTW, PB&J sandwiches are just going to spike his insulin levels. They are not a proper meal.
> No point in trying to run away
Not like you can, anyways.
> You're a psychopath by now
Wait until you find out why Viktor was kicked off the board.
> I already know how you feel
That's really not surprising. Viktor really did walk into this one.
> Because he's an immigrant himself
Making the brown-skinned immigrant the murderous psychopath who eats people is definitely a choice. Hope he's got his papers or ICE is gonna come knocking.
> Openly gay and transgender
Oh, fuck off with this shit. No, pooners, you are not gay if you are attracted to men. A penis going into a vagina is NOT gay sex. You have to be MALE attracted to OTHER MALES to be gay. Chances are, it wasn't you being a 'gay trans man' that got you kicked off, it was something else.
> I spent seven years waiting for you to make a move
He didn't know who you were? You were an anonymous stalker?
> Why would I have waited seven years if this was the case?
Good question.
> You're wasting both of our time and prolonging your suffering for no reason
Nice lampshading.
> When did you first start worrying about being a sociopath?
And there we have it: the FTM is also a psycho. I love the accurate stereotyping here.
LMAO OF COURSE THE POONER FAILED THE PSYCH EVAL, WOO BOY
If the drugs didn't do it that sure did
I don't think I've read a Stockholm Syndrome fic where the victim was lusting so openly after their stalker, but eh, I'm always surprised.
> If the relationship had gotten that serious
If the Kweens found out that Mel was getting butchered like a cow this bitch would have gotten roasted.
> I never hurt any animal
You sent him a cow heart and extremely gory pictures of it. What is he supposed to think?
> I know you know the difference between animals and people
Psychopaths and murderers do start torturing animals first, because they know they're easy prey and cannot fight back. Race bent Jeffrey Dahmer only gets a pass because...wait for it...he's hot.
> First one was a slaughterhouse worker
> I wanted to do something small, something to feel close to your morals
> Just a few whose lifestyles I disagreed with. I'm not a monster
Preaching to the choir there. You killed a man doing his job because he dared date your sociopathic pooner? That's a helluva change from butchering live cows just to sympathize with a vegetarian!
> I don't act on every urge I have to hurt the people who get to look at you. There'd be no one left if I did
That's not very encouraging.
> You want it. Why won't you let yourself?
And here comes the smut.
> One big hand to his stomach
Let me guess. It encompasses it entirely.
> Inner thighs slick, his cock red and throbbing
If your roid clit is that red, you have a problem. I want to see how big Jayce is before I start laughing at the absurd comparison.
> Breathe directly over his hole
You're not supposed to blow air up the vagina.
> Viktor's ready to ask for it. He's probably even ready to beg
And all it took was 17 days? Huh, if murder is what turned Viktor on, how come he didn't kill the board members who didn't like their 'out and loud' gay pooner? Or was that too obvious?
> He's a little annoyed and hurt that they failed
Is this Stockholm Syndrome, or are you just a brat because you didn't get fucked right away?
> Do you want me to force you, Viktor? Is that it?
Because rape would only be a natural touch up from the murder and cannibalism.
> I'll know if you really mean it
He sounds like a broken record at this point. Shut up, Ramirez!
> You don't really think you could fight me
Objectively he couldn't. He is a pooner who barely weighs 100 lbs. He'd lose against a highschool textbook.
> You can brush your teeth
Just how long was he going with a stanky mouth?
> Follows him from room to room
It's not like he's going to run away, you know.
> You can't be so certain I won't hurt you or run away
Bud, again, you are barely 100 lbs. You are a disabled pooner who needs their daily dose of testosterone or else that gender dysphoria will send you into a depressive spiral. You would lose against a dinner plate. He is right to not take your threats seriously.
Weed? Really? All that shit and it's WEED you're drugging him with? I legitimately thought it was going to be rohypnol. The guy huffs chemical gases because he's an addict; how the fuck would you think an EDIBLE would be enough to knock him out? How did the drugs in the wine glasses knock him out when he gets high off of ammonia and uppers FOR FUN?
> I'd know when you really meant it
Stop repeating yourself, Ramirez.
> Kisses him in a way that forces him to open up for it
He was already opened up for it; you took him by surprise.
> Violent contrast of pain and pleasure
Cliché.
> Their size difference laughable, his fingers big enough to reach nearly all the way around at Viktor's knee
Guess those yeti hands change size on a whim. We have to make him tiny because how else would that big ole dick fit in such a nice, tight vagina?
> Oversensitive cock
Now I really want to know how big Jayce is.
> I'll know if you really mean it
Shut up, already. Jesus.
> Need you to feel it, the way I'm gonna split you open
Yes, he has a 'monstrous cock'. As is usual with fics like these.
> Positioning him like a doll. It takes Viktor this long to realize he really intends to fuck him
Indeed.
> I'll know when you mean it
FUCKING HELL IS YOUR PROGRAMMING MALFUNCTIONING?
> Too big, too much
> Jayce feels unbelievably large. Monstrous
Where would we be without our Hispanic Hog splitting our wee pooner in half? These women are size queens, through and through.
> He shudders and clings to the bed and lets him fuck a new permanent shape into Viktor's body
This again? It sure is becoming more common since that Knight AU.
> Jayce fucks like he's trying to take him apart
Just like a cow heart, eh? He's just going back to his roots.
> A hot rush of slick down his thighs like he's pissed himself
The comments went crazy at this line, but squirting is so common in these fics it doesn't surprise me. He did say he would fuck him better than anyone else, and what better way to do it than on a dick the size of a police baton?
> He feels like he's never going to exist outside the context of pleasure this intense ever again
Once you go Ramirez, you never look in the rear mirror.
> Jayce has permanently disfigured him
Didn't think you could break the pooner any harder than before, yet here we are. Break those hips with that dick, son.
> Wet pleasure and blinding sensation and a hole to fuck
Interesting how pooners always write themselves as 'holes to fuck'. There surely couldn't be a trend there.
Lmao, the chemical huffing pooner had no friends that were worried about him because they didn't even notice he was gone
Man, if that isn't pathetic I don't know what is.> Viktor is wanted, known, seen
And all it took was a massive cock, a hot guy, and every female fantasy fulfilled because who the fuck cares if you get stalked and kidnapped when the guy doing it is sexy as hell? It's literally the plot of 365 Days, but with a trans man.
I also just discovered that this author not only wrote another fic where Jayce has a monster cock and fucks Viktor with it, she also has Cluster B disorders. I plan on doing that other fic in the future, just to see if it's as bad as this one.
The majority of the comments for this fic are just female gooners jacking it, confirming that stalking and kidnapping really are hot if the dude is hot.
So predictable.
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Periods suck. Don't you wish your boyfriend had a blood kink to make you feel better? This author's got you covered.
I was gonna say: he fucked you so hard with his dick that you felt it in your stomach, but as it turns out, it was just chili sauce. Our wee pooner can't handle brown boy spice
Oh, and PINK compression socks? I thought you were a Man's Man, dood!
What a lazy fucker. I bet he has bed bugs.
> Has been on testosterone for years
> All the thick hair you've gotten has been for your legs and pubes only
Lol. Lmao
> Slurping
Oh, we're doing the Chinese noodle chug, eh?
Normally testosterone does delay or halt one's periods, but I assume there was a lapse in the medication that he conveniently got a heavy one. There are always convenient excuses for fics like these.
Oh, Jayce likes getting pegged, eh? Well at least he's an equal opportunity bottom. Too often Viktor is the sole bottom.
> That meant he was harbouring something really dangerous
Well if you want to enter 'what the fuck status', you can have him cook leftover endometrium tissue like that one woman who cooked it like bacon. I doubt he'll go that far.
> A knot that Viktor has only half-untangled from years of repression
Repression from what? Who are the homophobes and/or transphobes in this?
> Is his boyfriend a repressed sadist
He'd be a lot crueler if he was. He'd be cutting you for blood rather than patiently wait for you to bleed.
Imagine if he had an 'accident' and nicked an artery. What kind of boner would Jayce get from that?
> Even if his own fingers aren't nearly thick enough
Just your regular uwu trans boi fingers. So tiny and doll-like.
> A sticky red strand form between his knuckles
The T must really be fucking things up if it's looking like that.
> A small dark clot
Watch Jayce gobble that up like it's a dumpling. Calling it now.
Me too. But like I said, we need plot conveniences otherwise Jayce is never gonna get his red wings.
I can tell that Jayce is one of those men who really expects a woman - or whoever is coded as one - to do all the cleaning up after him. Throwing your dirty-ass shoes under the table where you eat? Really, nigga?
> Playstation
They don't use PCs?
> Roommates to boyfriends
How many boyfriends get their periods?
Damn, talk about a portable Niagara Falls. This lil dood is spraying liquids everywhere here. Hope somebody brought a mop.
We find out that Jayce's blood kink also includes huffing and tasting old blood underwear. So long as he doesn't start wearing it, I think we're good - for now.
> His body begs to be touched, to be filled
Depends. Will we be getting the Hispanic Hog?
Free bleeding? Oh hell no. You just said it was a 'massacre' down there, so no amount of white underwear or pants is going to survive that. You are going to make one hell of a mess. And for what? Your boyfriend to huff it like gasoline?
The guy was deepthroating your underwear. Methinks he wants it to stain.
While I do appreciate that Viktor is not the typical 'woe is me' pooner, and takes a more active role, I really want to know which part of Jayce was 'repressed' here. Is it just the blood kink, or something else?
> It's a fucking massacre
Oh, he's got a pint dumped down there, eh?
> Into the patch of wet, curly hair beneath his navel
I'm surprised he CAN freebleed with that Persian carpet he calls his pubic hair. That shit is so thick it could carry a gallon of it without dripping.
You already had the visual of him licking up your blood after that nosebleed, remember?
> I liked them clean
> There was so much blood
We know. Also, the author really isn't exaggerating about there being so much blood. You'll see in a bit.
> Obscene squelch
Add this to the list of 'overused lines'. It's almost as bad as 'his fingers met in the middle'.
> Smell the tang of his fluids from Viktor's cunt on his fingers
I've heard it tastes like battery acid. Wonder if it's the same here.
> His partner moans aloud, eyes noticeably crossing as they roll back
Oh, so he went retard mode. Never go full cross-eyed mode.
> The sensation is so overwhelming that there's a fear creeping up that he'll start doing something embarrassing if he's not getting fucked soon
Pooners and their insatiable love for huge cock, name a better duo.
Well, you wouldn't have to worry about lube if you've got the Fall of Manila happening between your legs.
> His partner's cock is covered in it
The author is legit not kidding about that. Later on, there's so much blood it's like someone stuck a pig.
> Holding him in place with effortless strength
Of course. He's barely 100 lbs and is a wee pooner.
> Every wet slap of their skin meeting only reminds them both of the reason Viktor's cunt takes the intrusion so readily
So Hispanic Hog or belly bulge this time around. Just a fuckton of blood. What's the term that can be used here? 'Wet as a waterslide'?
> Like I'm fucking a wound
Hey, now. Don't say that to a trans person. A proper description would be, 'like I'm watching a cartel video.'
If you're wondering how many times 'pleasure' was used in this, it was 10 times.
> His hands, his hips, his cock, all red and caked with blood
Going back to his Aztec roots, I see. Now, women only produce around a tablespoon of blood during their period. If Viktor is producing so much he's making Jayce look like a Sicario, it's time to visit a doctor. I'm shocked he doesn't faint from blood loss.
> Encourage the parts of sex that are sometimes scary but ultimately deeply validating
Problem with that is that the escalation never stops. Jayce has a blood kink for menstrual blood NOW, later he will develop a kink for live blood. True to form, Viktor introduces him to knife play later - how validating.
There you go: the moment of escalation. After that, it'll be autoerotic asphyxiation and Viktor will come home to Jayce going out the way David Carradine did because he wanted to pop an easy boner and tied the belt around his neck too tight. This was beta read by three authors; while not as cringeworthy as the other stuff I've read, the amount of blood from Viktor's vag is formidable to the point of absurdity. He better not be out on the ocean chumming sharks with that.
There's been an increase of fics where older men are fucking teenagers, and it seems to come from a clique of white women who want to be as offensive as possible. This one wants to make into a multi-chapter fic. The teenager is 16 years old in this one, while the grown ass man is 44.
If the underage Dream Daddy fantasy wasn't enough, add in the race cuckoldry. Mel is the wife and mother of his children, and he's running after underage white teenagers in bars. Imagine the scandal for her.
> How could they understand what Jayce is going through? When they have never felt the warm touch of a woman?
How many of them lust after 16 year old girls with daddy issues who think they're men?
> The writing is horrid
You got that right.
> A nice birthday gift for his 44th
Yep, the age gap is that big. We're not in Game of Thrones or the Middle Ages. Even Leonardo DiCaprio waits until they're 19.
> Lost fawn asking for a hunter's attention
Ah, there're those allegories for innocence. I wonder if this author read that deer rape fic.
> The man, hopefully
Not a man, and not an adult.
> Kissable lips parted around a tiny gasp
The author can't even write his lips (or nose) right. They're all plump and red when they're narrow and pale (to be fair, his bottom lip is larger). All to make him look far younger than he really is.
> Shooting touch for a body-shaking coughing fit
Is this English? I don't even know what this bitch wrote.
> And I wouldn't really count bending over and showing underage holes as buying more so an, eh, exchange of interests
I don't know what the fuck this was, but 'underage holes'? Really, nigga?
> Appealed
*Appalled
> About an underage boy, in front of said underage boy
What is funny is that Jayce clocked him as 'getting wet' within minutes of meeting him. Guess it was that pussy smell that tipped him off.
> Then what was this virginal boy's reason for walking up to a greying old man?
I'd ask why he's in that bar in the first place. If he was 18 then you can play with the Dream Daddy trope all you want.
> Aren't you rude, assuming me to be the scum of the earth
You ARE the scum of the earth. He later admits to poking holes in condoms so he can get Mel pregnant without her knowing.
> Pure heart trampled by prejudice
It should be MORE prejudiced.
> 16 years old
> Almost 30 years
> A whole lifetime between them
What's that about being prejudiced?
> So little he fits into Jayce's side like he always belonged there
Yeah, we need the uwu smol trans boi because we need that size difference contrasted to max level.
> There are laws and there are customs and there is reputation - none decided by his dick
And your dick doesn't care about a single one of those, just about cunny and getting itself wet.
> He should've gone through with his suicide attempts
Indeed. I'll offer him some extra rope.
> Hurt, a teenage hysteria incoming
Funny how 'teenage hysteria' only ever applies to the female ones.
> It's scary, sometimes, how genetics work
Don't talk about genetics on a fic about a 44-year-old man with spoiled sperm trying to jump inside of a 16-year-old white girl's pants.
> Each vowel formed to be dug into a half-formed frontal lobe
If you had a half-formed frontal lobe you wouldn't be able to form language to begin with. This is an attempt to sound smart while also appearing extremely retarded.
> Who's to say you won't run, teary-eyed and and still cum-filled, to report the city's respected professor for raping an underage boy?
This is a Dead Dove, so it doesn't shock me to see Jayce use emotional manipulation here. Note how it's always about HIS reputation, HIS feelings and HIS body, not Viktor's. Him being a teenager doesn't matter to him. He wants that virginal 'boy', abandon his wife and kids, and live in a cottage so he can slam that white pussy.
Of course the pooner would be an easy victim. They all have daddy issues.
> You promise to keep your mouth shut
> It feels nice, to be listened to
Ah, using the trans man for your emotional labour. They're always the 'holes' and the therapists, while the transwoman brag about getting fucked in their ass. Huge world of difference.
> Viktor can't run away
Physically he can't. He can't do anything, really.
> He is still physically strong. Way stronger than Viktor, at the least.
Naturally. Viktor is barely 5'0 and 100 lbs. Jayce is male, and has done physical labour. You're comparing a bull to a reed here.
> Palms spread on a little waist, thumbs touching
OH NOT THIS FUCKING LINE
> His scent -day of sweat, sweet skin, no perfume, only Viktor
But it is like omega perfume? I heard that shit smells like oranges.
> Preying on old men
> You're so enticing, I'm not at fault for a single moment of weakness
Blaming the woman for your lack of self control, a tale as old as time. Men really will do anything for pussy, especially white pussy.
> Point-clear focus on the single thing that interests him, so childlike
This doesn't make a single like of sense.
So he's been closeted about wanting teens for 16 years? Damn, son. Why did you even marry a woman, if not to use her as a beard?
> I've been wet ever since you called me son, Jayce
It is something how the author is trying to write Viktor as being into this when it's clear he's being manipulated. I'll leave you to ponder the aspect of a man manipulating a trans man and how easy it is - and how common it is.
> There are so many weird men out there, preying on young girls
Meanwhile she was looking at one herself, but Jayce has always had a penchant for white meat. He probably felt chained down after fucking a nigger for years.
> The sounds beat every over-the-top opera performance Jayce has ever been to
I bet it's a nasty vocal fry, too.
> Making his cock drool
Great. First it was 'his pussy drooled like a dog', now this.
> Ass and pussy holes presented for the taking
Fantastic writing.
> Finish his hungry little cunt off
With that big ole dick.
> His hymen still intact
This author does not know how hymens work despite being female. They aren't like a lid you pop off and they are not proof of virginity. They can be broken easily and some women don't even have them. It's a virginity fetish, and I'm not surprised an author who just wrote the straightest fic to ever exist used that trope.
> Having his cervix pounded until he pisses himself
He's not just going to be pissing himself. He's going to be bleeding and he's going to the hospital. These women have such monster dick obsessions they fail to realize that even normal men can bump into the cervix and it will HURT. Can it be stimulated? Absolutely! But you need CARE. You can't just slam into it and expect it to bounce back.
Now, the author promises 'freaky sex' for Chapter 2. Expect a whole ton of bullshit and a 12'' dick going into a 'tiny hole'. You know what to expect by now.
Here is our wee pooner's AN, featuring a 'fun fact':
Trans men cannot ejaculate the way natal men do. The fluid that is produced are the remnants of whatever is created by the clitoris, which is buried at the base of the phallus. It's not semen by any stretch of the imagination.
Glad we started with the dog allegories again. These people drool like they're St. Bernard's.
> Bottom teeth grazing sensitive skin and thicker hair
There's a lot of ass eating in this, and since Jayce has a full on Frankendong, that means he has no more vaginal tissue. All the 'hole' talk in this is directly referring to his asshole. For once, Viktor is a transwoman, not a transman, and it's one of the only times, ironically, that he keeps his penis. Not surprised there's an ass bush here, too.
> Coaxing a bead of precum to spill from Jayce's tip
Press X to doubt.
> Sharpens her tongue
With what? A pencil sharpener? This makes me think he got Marilyn Manson's tongue.
> The desire in her spit is almost tangible
Lmao, what?
> Strings of wet bead from his cock
That wouldn't be happening. Their Frankendongs can't even piss properly. What makes you think they're producing oodles and noodles of cum?
> Drawing sensitive swollen skin into her mouth
Thank God Jayce doesn't have hemorrhoids.
> Pillowed flesh easily
Damn, that ass must really be divine.
> Hooking her feet over his thighs, pinning him spread eagle
Quite a pose for a disabled man. You'll note Viktor's leg doesn't bother him once in this fic.
> A failed attempt to keep herself from humping the air
Just girl things, tee hee.
> Settling perched on her heels, still hooked over Jayce's thighs
I still do not get this position. Is he squatting over Jayce, or what?
> Her cock is slick
Along with the magic semen the Frankendong is producing, Viktor the troon has his cock working above and beyond normal, producing bucket loads of semen with a low refractory period. This despite taking estrogen, which eventually fries a man's sex drive and shrinks his penis.
> Jayce knows, factually, that he overpowers Viktor easily
Lmao. Transwomen usually grow a full foot taller than transmen. They can knock them out with a single push. Who is this woman fooling?
> She fits against him like a puzzle piece falling into place
It's almost like they're straight with extra steps...except one has a Frankendong.
> he can feel the precum squirting from her cock
I am glad that trans cocks take on the properties of fire extinguishers, guzzling out so much white stuff that everything gets coated in a 20 mile radius.
> She'll squirt her drool into him
From which opening?
> To be the tool for her relief
They never can escape that female socialization, can they? They only exist to serve the male and be a living hole for them. So much for crushing gender stereotypes.
> press into his g-spot
These shitheads don't know how women's bodies work. Our g-spot isn't in our ass.
> He's filled with strong pulses
Pulses of what? Electricity? Semen? Electric semen?
> You put a lot in me
Indeed. I didn't think a troon could produce that much from all those years of E.
> He's so full, of her, of her essence
Redundant.
Oh, he got the bolt-ons too, eh? What size?
> He's not sure which part of him she's referring to
Me too, lad. Me too.
> Weeping head of his cock
Stop that. We know it's not actually weeping. You aren't producing enough ejaculate for it to do that.
I cannot take this deepthroating scene seriously because Frankendongs are notorious for having no feeling or nerve endings, and actually get cold in some places because of the poor blood flow. They are limp pieces of flesh stapled to the wrong area of the abdomen, and most pooners state they don't even KNOW whether they are penetrating their partners or not due to the lack of nerves in it. It'd be like him deepthroating a salami.
> Face pressed into his bush
Ass bush or regular bush?
> It's so erotic, the slide and pulse of her throat like velvet
Not really, especially if the Frankendong owner can't really feel it.
> Liquid steel floods through Jayce's body
Lmao, you cannot ejaculate like males can, so you might as well stop there.
Guess his leg was cured when he decided to get the bolt-ons.
> Her own cum, tainted with her fluids and her spit
Yes, there is felching in this. He's getting mouthfuls of ass hair, too.
What's with all this drooling? Not to mention hawking up that spoiled cum makes me think of the consistency of machine oil. Gross. Hope that ass was cleaned out.
> A small amount of precum squirts from his cock
Define 'small amount'.
> Encouraged by the impossibly erotic sound of his cock sliding in and out of Viktor's throat
He'd have a better time doing that with a German sausage. The author keeps saying it's erotic, but it really isn't. It just seems so utterly lifeless when there's a Frankendong involved.
> Audibly gags, quiet, and gargled
These are all contradictory terms.
> It floods through him like a dam breaking
And all he produced was a few dollops of ejaculate, lmao.
> Presses his release valve
Yes, that's the thing that makes the Frankendong flaccid - it's located in the ballsack created by the leftover labia. They press it repeatedly to inflate and deflate their little toy. Hot. Erotic. I bet you touched yourself there, too.
> Pushing more of her cum into her mouth
Fascinating how he can produce so much despite all those years of estrogen. F1NN5STER would like to know your location
> Like soil and scented oils, like sugar
I don't want to think of soil and scented oils together. Makes me think of pig shit for some reason.
Bored yet? I got you covered with this next one.
Trans men cannot ejaculate the way natal men do. The fluid that is produced are the remnants of whatever is created by the clitoris, which is buried at the base of the phallus. It's not semen by any stretch of the imagination.
Glad we started with the dog allegories again. These people drool like they're St. Bernard's.
> Bottom teeth grazing sensitive skin and thicker hair
There's a lot of ass eating in this, and since Jayce has a full on Frankendong, that means he has no more vaginal tissue. All the 'hole' talk in this is directly referring to his asshole. For once, Viktor is a transwoman, not a transman, and it's one of the only times, ironically, that he keeps his penis. Not surprised there's an ass bush here, too.
> Coaxing a bead of precum to spill from Jayce's tip
Press X to doubt.
> Sharpens her tongue
With what? A pencil sharpener? This makes me think he got Marilyn Manson's tongue.
> The desire in her spit is almost tangible
Lmao, what?
> Strings of wet bead from his cock
That wouldn't be happening. Their Frankendongs can't even piss properly. What makes you think they're producing oodles and noodles of cum?
> Drawing sensitive swollen skin into her mouth
Thank God Jayce doesn't have hemorrhoids.
> Pillowed flesh easily
Damn, that ass must really be divine.
> Hooking her feet over his thighs, pinning him spread eagle
Quite a pose for a disabled man. You'll note Viktor's leg doesn't bother him once in this fic.
> A failed attempt to keep herself from humping the air
Just girl things, tee hee.
> Settling perched on her heels, still hooked over Jayce's thighs
I still do not get this position. Is he squatting over Jayce, or what?
> Her cock is slick
Along with the magic semen the Frankendong is producing, Viktor the troon has his cock working above and beyond normal, producing bucket loads of semen with a low refractory period. This despite taking estrogen, which eventually fries a man's sex drive and shrinks his penis.
> Jayce knows, factually, that he overpowers Viktor easily
Lmao. Transwomen usually grow a full foot taller than transmen. They can knock them out with a single push. Who is this woman fooling?
> She fits against him like a puzzle piece falling into place
It's almost like they're straight with extra steps...except one has a Frankendong.
> he can feel the precum squirting from her cock
I am glad that trans cocks take on the properties of fire extinguishers, guzzling out so much white stuff that everything gets coated in a 20 mile radius.
> She'll squirt her drool into him
From which opening?
> To be the tool for her relief
They never can escape that female socialization, can they? They only exist to serve the male and be a living hole for them. So much for crushing gender stereotypes.
> press into his g-spot
These shitheads don't know how women's bodies work. Our g-spot isn't in our ass.
> He's filled with strong pulses
Pulses of what? Electricity? Semen? Electric semen?
> You put a lot in me
Indeed. I didn't think a troon could produce that much from all those years of E.
> He's so full, of her, of her essence
Redundant.
Oh, he got the bolt-ons too, eh? What size?
> He's not sure which part of him she's referring to
Me too, lad. Me too.
> Weeping head of his cock
Stop that. We know it's not actually weeping. You aren't producing enough ejaculate for it to do that.
I cannot take this deepthroating scene seriously because Frankendongs are notorious for having no feeling or nerve endings, and actually get cold in some places because of the poor blood flow. They are limp pieces of flesh stapled to the wrong area of the abdomen, and most pooners state they don't even KNOW whether they are penetrating their partners or not due to the lack of nerves in it. It'd be like him deepthroating a salami.
> Face pressed into his bush
Ass bush or regular bush?
> It's so erotic, the slide and pulse of her throat like velvet
Not really, especially if the Frankendong owner can't really feel it.
> Liquid steel floods through Jayce's body
Lmao, you cannot ejaculate like males can, so you might as well stop there.
Guess his leg was cured when he decided to get the bolt-ons.
> Her own cum, tainted with her fluids and her spit
Yes, there is felching in this. He's getting mouthfuls of ass hair, too.
What's with all this drooling? Not to mention hawking up that spoiled cum makes me think of the consistency of machine oil. Gross. Hope that ass was cleaned out.
> A small amount of precum squirts from his cock
Define 'small amount'.
> Encouraged by the impossibly erotic sound of his cock sliding in and out of Viktor's throat
He'd have a better time doing that with a German sausage. The author keeps saying it's erotic, but it really isn't. It just seems so utterly lifeless when there's a Frankendong involved.
> Audibly gags, quiet, and gargled
These are all contradictory terms.
> It floods through him like a dam breaking
And all he produced was a few dollops of ejaculate, lmao.
> Presses his release valve
Yes, that's the thing that makes the Frankendong flaccid - it's located in the ballsack created by the leftover labia. They press it repeatedly to inflate and deflate their little toy. Hot. Erotic. I bet you touched yourself there, too.
> Pushing more of her cum into her mouth
Fascinating how he can produce so much despite all those years of estrogen. F1NN5STER would like to know your location
> Like soil and scented oils, like sugar
I don't want to think of soil and scented oils together. Makes me think of pig shit for some reason.
Bored yet? I got you covered with this next one.
Periods suck. Don't you wish your boyfriend had a blood kink to make you feel better? This author's got you covered.
I was gonna say: he fucked you so hard with his dick that you felt it in your stomach, but as it turns out, it was just chili sauce. Our wee pooner can't handle brown boy spice
Oh, and PINK compression socks? I thought you were a Man's Man, dood!
What a lazy fucker. I bet he has bed bugs.
> Has been on testosterone for years
> All the thick hair you've gotten has been for your legs and pubes only
Lol. Lmao
> Slurping
Oh, we're doing the Chinese noodle chug, eh?
Normally testosterone does delay or halt one's periods, but I assume there was a lapse in the medication that he conveniently got a heavy one. There are always convenient excuses for fics like these.
Oh, Jayce likes getting pegged, eh? Well at least he's an equal opportunity bottom. Too often Viktor is the sole bottom.
> That meant he was harbouring something really dangerous
Well if you want to enter 'what the fuck status', you can have him cook leftover endometrium tissue like that one woman who cooked it like bacon. I doubt he'll go that far.
> A knot that Viktor has only half-untangled from years of repression
Repression from what? Who are the homophobes and/or transphobes in this?
> Is his boyfriend a repressed sadist
He'd be a lot crueler if he was. He'd be cutting you for blood rather than patiently wait for you to bleed.
Imagine if he had an 'accident' and nicked an artery. What kind of boner would Jayce get from that?
> Even if his own fingers aren't nearly thick enough
Just your regular uwu trans boi fingers. So tiny and doll-like.
> A sticky red strand form between his knuckles
The T must really be fucking things up if it's looking like that.
> A small dark clot
Watch Jayce gobble that up like it's a dumpling. Calling it now.
Me too. But like I said, we need plot conveniences otherwise Jayce is never gonna get his red wings.
I can tell that Jayce is one of those men who really expects a woman - or whoever is coded as one - to do all the cleaning up after him. Throwing your dirty-ass shoes under the table where you eat? Really, nigga?
> Playstation
They don't use PCs?
> Roommates to boyfriends
How many boyfriends get their periods?
Damn, talk about a portable Niagara Falls. This lil dood is spraying liquids everywhere here. Hope somebody brought a mop.
We find out that Jayce's blood kink also includes huffing and tasting old blood underwear. So long as he doesn't start wearing it, I think we're good - for now.
> His body begs to be touched, to be filled
Depends. Will we be getting the Hispanic Hog?
Free bleeding? Oh hell no. You just said it was a 'massacre' down there, so no amount of white underwear or pants is going to survive that. You are going to make one hell of a mess. And for what? Your boyfriend to huff it like gasoline?
The guy was deepthroating your underwear. Methinks he wants it to stain.
While I do appreciate that Viktor is not the typical 'woe is me' pooner, and takes a more active role, I really want to know which part of Jayce was 'repressed' here. Is it just the blood kink, or something else?
> It's a fucking massacre
Oh, he's got a pint dumped down there, eh?
> Into the patch of wet, curly hair beneath his navel
I'm surprised he CAN freebleed with that Persian carpet he calls his pubic hair. That shit is so thick it could carry a gallon of it without dripping.
You already had the visual of him licking up your blood after that nosebleed, remember?
> I liked them clean
> There was so much blood
We know. Also, the author really isn't exaggerating about there being so much blood. You'll see in a bit.
> Obscene squelch
Add this to the list of 'overused lines'. It's almost as bad as 'his fingers met in the middle'.
> Smell the tang of his fluids from Viktor's cunt on his fingers
I've heard it tastes like battery acid. Wonder if it's the same here.
> His partner moans aloud, eyes noticeably crossing as they roll back
Oh, so he went retard mode. Never go full cross-eyed mode.
> The sensation is so overwhelming that there's a fear creeping up that he'll start doing something embarrassing if he's not getting fucked soon
Pooners and their insatiable love for huge cock, name a better duo.
Well, you wouldn't have to worry about lube if you've got the Fall of Manila happening between your legs.
> His partner's cock is covered in it
The author is legit not kidding about that. Later on, there's so much blood it's like someone stuck a pig.
> Holding him in place with effortless strength
Of course. He's barely 100 lbs and is a wee pooner.
> Every wet slap of their skin meeting only reminds them both of the reason Viktor's cunt takes the intrusion so readily
So Hispanic Hog or belly bulge this time around. Just a fuckton of blood. What's the term that can be used here? 'Wet as a waterslide'?
> Like I'm fucking a wound
Hey, now. Don't say that to a trans person. A proper description would be, 'like I'm watching a cartel video.'
If you're wondering how many times 'pleasure' was used in this, it was 10 times.
> His hands, his hips, his cock, all red and caked with blood
Going back to his Aztec roots, I see. Now, women only produce around a tablespoon of blood during their period. If Viktor is producing so much he's making Jayce look like a Sicario, it's time to visit a doctor. I'm shocked he doesn't faint from blood loss.
> Encourage the parts of sex that are sometimes scary but ultimately deeply validating
Problem with that is that the escalation never stops. Jayce has a blood kink for menstrual blood NOW, later he will develop a kink for live blood. True to form, Viktor introduces him to knife play later - how validating.
There you go: the moment of escalation. After that, it'll be autoerotic asphyxiation and Viktor will come home to Jayce going out the way David Carradine did because he wanted to pop an easy boner and tied the belt around his neck too tight. This was beta read by three authors; while not as cringeworthy as the other stuff I've read, the amount of blood from Viktor's vag is formidable to the point of absurdity. He better not be out on the ocean chumming sharks with that.
There's been an increase of fics where older men are fucking teenagers, and it seems to come from a clique of white women who want to be as offensive as possible. This one wants to make into a multi-chapter fic. The teenager is 16 years old in this one, while the grown ass man is 44.
If the underage Dream Daddy fantasy wasn't enough, add in the race cuckoldry. Mel is the wife and mother of his children, and he's running after underage white teenagers in bars. Imagine the scandal for her.
> How could they understand what Jayce is going through? When they have never felt the warm touch of a woman?
How many of them lust after 16 year old girls with daddy issues who think they're men?
> The writing is horrid
You got that right.
> A nice birthday gift for his 44th
Yep, the age gap is that big. We're not in Game of Thrones or the Middle Ages. Even Leonardo DiCaprio waits until they're 19.
> Lost fawn asking for a hunter's attention
Ah, there're those allegories for innocence. I wonder if this author read that deer rape fic.
> The man, hopefully
Not a man, and not an adult.
> Kissable lips parted around a tiny gasp
The author can't even write his lips (or nose) right. They're all plump and red when they're narrow and pale (to be fair, his bottom lip is larger). All to make him look far younger than he really is.
> Shooting touch for a body-shaking coughing fit
Is this English? I don't even know what this bitch wrote.
> And I wouldn't really count bending over and showing underage holes as buying more so an, eh, exchange of interests
I don't know what the fuck this was, but 'underage holes'? Really, nigga?
> Appealed
*Appalled
> About an underage boy, in front of said underage boy
What is funny is that Jayce clocked him as 'getting wet' within minutes of meeting him. Guess it was that pussy smell that tipped him off.
> Then what was this virginal boy's reason for walking up to a greying old man?
I'd ask why he's in that bar in the first place. If he was 18 then you can play with the Dream Daddy trope all you want.
> Aren't you rude, assuming me to be the scum of the earth
You ARE the scum of the earth. He later admits to poking holes in condoms so he can get Mel pregnant without her knowing.
> Pure heart trampled by prejudice
It should be MORE prejudiced.
> 16 years old
> Almost 30 years
> A whole lifetime between them
What's that about being prejudiced?
> So little he fits into Jayce's side like he always belonged there
Yeah, we need the uwu smol trans boi because we need that size difference contrasted to max level.
> There are laws and there are customs and there is reputation - none decided by his dick
And your dick doesn't care about a single one of those, just about cunny and getting itself wet.
> He should've gone through with his suicide attempts
Indeed. I'll offer him some extra rope.
> Hurt, a teenage hysteria incoming
Funny how 'teenage hysteria' only ever applies to the female ones.
> It's scary, sometimes, how genetics work
Don't talk about genetics on a fic about a 44-year-old man with spoiled sperm trying to jump inside of a 16-year-old white girl's pants.
> Each vowel formed to be dug into a half-formed frontal lobe
If you had a half-formed frontal lobe you wouldn't be able to form language to begin with. This is an attempt to sound smart while also appearing extremely retarded.
> Who's to say you won't run, teary-eyed and and still cum-filled, to report the city's respected professor for raping an underage boy?
This is a Dead Dove, so it doesn't shock me to see Jayce use emotional manipulation here. Note how it's always about HIS reputation, HIS feelings and HIS body, not Viktor's. Him being a teenager doesn't matter to him. He wants that virginal 'boy', abandon his wife and kids, and live in a cottage so he can slam that white pussy.
Of course the pooner would be an easy victim. They all have daddy issues.
> You promise to keep your mouth shut
> It feels nice, to be listened to
Ah, using the trans man for your emotional labour. They're always the 'holes' and the therapists, while the transwoman brag about getting fucked in their ass. Huge world of difference.
> Viktor can't run away
Physically he can't. He can't do anything, really.
> He is still physically strong. Way stronger than Viktor, at the least.
Naturally. Viktor is barely 5'0 and 100 lbs. Jayce is male, and has done physical labour. You're comparing a bull to a reed here.
> Palms spread on a little waist, thumbs touching
OH NOT THIS FUCKING LINE
> His scent -day of sweat, sweet skin, no perfume, only Viktor
But it is like omega perfume? I heard that shit smells like oranges.
> Preying on old men
> You're so enticing, I'm not at fault for a single moment of weakness
Blaming the woman for your lack of self control, a tale as old as time. Men really will do anything for pussy, especially white pussy.
> Point-clear focus on the single thing that interests him, so childlike
This doesn't make a single like of sense.
So he's been closeted about wanting teens for 16 years? Damn, son. Why did you even marry a woman, if not to use her as a beard?
> I've been wet ever since you called me son, Jayce
It is something how the author is trying to write Viktor as being into this when it's clear he's being manipulated. I'll leave you to ponder the aspect of a man manipulating a trans man and how easy it is - and how common it is.
> There are so many weird men out there, preying on young girls
Meanwhile she was looking at one herself, but Jayce has always had a penchant for white meat. He probably felt chained down after fucking a nigger for years.
> The sounds beat every over-the-top opera performance Jayce has ever been to
I bet it's a nasty vocal fry, too.
> Making his cock drool
Great. First it was 'his pussy drooled like a dog', now this.
> Ass and pussy holes presented for the taking
Fantastic writing.
> Finish his hungry little cunt off
With that big ole dick.
> His hymen still intact
This author does not know how hymens work despite being female. They aren't like a lid you pop off and they are not proof of virginity. They can be broken easily and some women don't even have them. It's a virginity fetish, and I'm not surprised an author who just wrote the straightest fic to ever exist used that trope.
> Having his cervix pounded until he pisses himself
He's not just going to be pissing himself. He's going to be bleeding and he's going to the hospital. These women have such monster dick obsessions they fail to realize that even normal men can bump into the cervix and it will HURT. Can it be stimulated? Absolutely! But you need CARE. You can't just slam into it and expect it to bounce back.
Now, the author promises 'freaky sex' for Chapter 2. Expect a whole ton of bullshit and a 12'' dick going into a 'tiny hole'. You know what to expect by now.
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Anyone who knows the limitations of AI and of the general average quality of what is posted on Ao3 should not worry. The worst that can happen is endless word counts of sparse, elementary level prose giving play by plays of cartoon characters giving each other logistically impossible sex.
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Still slogging through Secrets and Masks. It's much more dull than Manacled.
I'd bet my next paycheck it was a fic about Joker torturing Jason Todd. I've never had the courage to look, but I've always imagined that a lot of people were fetishizing this plotline, especially after it was popularized by the Arkham videogames.
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Hey, it captured the AO3 tone nearly perfectly. It probably scanned the most popular fics and just summarized their tone and syntax and that's what it came up with. Similar to how artists complain that AI 'has no soul' and 'can't draw hands', they should look in the mirror and see if their art has soul and whether they can draw hands properly (spoiler: they usually can't).
I started reading Marcus Skeen's stuff, and haven't gotten back to it because it's boring as hell. Those fics are the absolute worst. I'll be eager to hear your thoughts on that one, too.
Maybe one day I'll take a crack at All The Young Dudes even though Harry Potter is not my fandom. It's such a massive work and inspired its own fandoms that it's like a golden goose you have to catch.
Fujofrankenstein, who is an orbiter and friend of CordeliaCordate, posted a new fic inspired by that monstrosity where Jayce lusts after a 15-year-old while being married with children. That author, problematicism, just posted a fic where Jayce lusts after a baby. Let's take a peek at her self-indulgent excitement.
No race cuckoldry this time around - but you will get a police raid on a meth dealer - yes, that actually happens.
> A boy who looks far too young to be in a place like this, doe-eyed and cherubic with you
I've noticed a lot of 'deer language' with these fics. It's too common to be a coincidence.
> A beautiful twink has brought down many a great man
Boy, you are not Hadrian and he is not your Roman towel boy. You are in the 21st century. Go find a mature twink. Plenty would love to have you.
> He just looks young
> Pretty little thing
> The boy is so, so beautiful
> This boy is the moon and stars
He sounds like a cross between a Catholic priest and Steven Tyler, who smuggled a 16-year-old across state lines to marry her. I would call him a pederast, but Viktor is female, so...
> Throws the boy over his shoulder
I bet he's barely 80 lbs soaking wet.
> Whore. Slut. Little fuck toy.
Be sure to include 'your pussy drools like a dog' in your sex talk, too.
> Slick pours out of his hole
I wonder what that smells like. Oranges, or cinnamon?
> God, you really are a whore
He's saying this to a 15-year-old, btw. And yes, the author does try to play the 'I swear I didn't know she was 15' card.
> I'm old enough to be this kid's father
Spoiler: he becomes his foster father and ends up fulfilling his wish.
> The sweetest words Jayce has ever heard in his 44 years on earth
Ring any bells? The last fic I read had the exact same age. I wonder if they're all plagiarizing each other; they do hang out in the same Discord servers.
> Jayce feels like a wild animal
Almost like a rabid dog or bear, eh?
> Like a horny teenager
Uh huh. He just can't help himself.
> They frot against each other like wild animals
To frot, you need to have two dicks. One of these is just a normal clitoris.
> V is whimpering and moaning like a kitten
Kittens don't moan. Unless they're dying, that is.
Of course. You want to guess how old he is? 15.
> She's a bomb in the shape of a girl
Thank God she's white, else it'd be racially insensitive.
Yes, we have a dramatic twist that involves Silco getting cornered by giant goons who want a cut of his money. Did it come out of nowhere? Absolutely. Is it needed for the plot? Absolutely. Is it retarded? Absolutely.
Yeah, getting hit by a guy that big is going to lead to missing teeth. I've seen pooners so much as get pushed and they end up knocking themselves out. You can identify as a man all you like - but it won't give you a male skull.
> You're under arrest for the manufacturing and distribution of methamphetamine
Cute. If he's a big time drug dealer, even under the radar, he can't be a foster parent. This would also mean the cops would have a warrant for an arrest, and that it would probably mean SWAT if he's a big time guy. All this focus on underage pussy and she can't even get the justice system right
> Nobody deserves incarceration
Says the people who think 'bigots' should be ostracized and 'Nazis' should be thrown in jail. Your foster dad sold METH; how many families and people has that destroyed? You'd think he'd be selling fent or tranquilizer as those are the 'in' drugs.
And there we have it: Jayce is a foster parent, who has 'seen some shit' and finger banged a 15-year-old he didn't know was 15. That excuse would have flown had he deeply regretted it and told the kid no, because sometimes that DOES happen. Here, he just goes with it because he 'can't resist'. It's hard to take his 'I'm a predator, I'm unsafe to be around' if he keeps doing it.
> He hates himself
I would, too. Commit seppuku.
> Jayce is not a pedophile
Are you sure about that? You say here and now you 'never would have slept with him' but it's clear that you would. No point in trying to convince the audience otherwise when the woman you dedicated this to has Jayce lusting after his newborn fucking baby. There's twisted and there is fucking THAT.
> Fucking him with plausible deniability is one thing, but flirting with him, knowing full well he's fifteen?
Sounds pretty bad when it puts you on the same level as R. Kelly and Elvis Presley, huh? Presley got away with it because he was hot at the time. In the same vein, Jayce only gets away with it because people find him sexy.
Say what you want about Jordan Peterson, he got one thing right: female pornography follows certain trends, and it is ALL centered around whether the guy is hot. If this guy looked like Cyraxx or Destiny or even NICK REKEITA this bitch would be running for the hills. When it looks like a Hispanic Dolph Lundgren, ohhhh boy. Start dropping those panties, ladies.
I'm amazed foster care works this quickly. It usually takes weeks or months for a transfer. This guy was on insta-call. So, no only do we have someone who doesn't understand how cops and drug busts work - even Rekeita needed a warrant, and his kids had cocaine in their hair - we have someone who thinks foster care is a quick and easy system. Very convenient for a fic based on a 15-year-old living out their fantasy of fucking their father figure. Hey, an alliteration!
The author promises that this will be a very self-indulgent work. Just like the one I reviewed earlier, I expect it to nose dive very quickly and to see all the usual clichés. True to form, guess who showed up in the comments?
Maybe the Kweens were onto something - white women and queers have something wrong with them.
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That's Korean, although I can't tell if this is an English writer than auto-translates the fics into Korean, or it is an actual Korean writer, given the writer's bio:
Thread tax, in the form of another Kill la Kill fanfic with soiled diapers:
Satsuki blinked. She sat in the classroom and looked at the teacher. Was that...her mother? It couldn't be.
Ragyo, sat in front of the classroom, typing notes on her laptop. Somehow she had returned. She wasn't sure how. She knew one thing and that was that she wanted to get revenge on her daughter. Ruling the world was not a priority. So she decided to disguise herself as a teacher. With a few connections she passed a bland online two week substitute teacher training course, bribed some people and, created a character.
She was Professor Kinryuu Rakugo-ko. Yes it was cheesy. Yes it some how worked.
She sat there dressed in a button down blouse, her hair tied into a bun, a skirt and glasses.
Satsuki blinked again. Sure. Ok.
A few seats behind her sat Ryuko, Mako and Nonnon sat jabbering on about some TV show. A few seats over sat Omiko, who perused through a book. The class was only about half full which made sense as it was a elective.
Omiko had actually been bribed immediately. Ragyo had offered the young woman a substantial amount of money from a offshore account that she would get, rain or shine. Omiko was not stupid but satisfied with Ragyo promising and showing she had no resources to take over the world.
So everyday without fail so far for about a month, Omiko would have a special bento set for lunch and always give one to Satsuki. The secret ingredient were various chemical mixtures Ragyo provided her.
Today's lesson was on diapers and hygienics, as was the current study unit on such things like childcare. Ragyo, or Rakugo-ko Sensei, stood at the front of the class marking on the chalkboard as she read from the textbook.
"Therefore" She said, "It is vitally important that one makes sure to clean the subject, be it child or adult very carefully to avoid rashes."
Satsuki could hear Ryuko snoring.
"In some cases" Rakugo-Ko Sensei continued. Satsuki looked at her. Her hair bun was so elegant and she wore such clean crisp clothes, and had a curvy figure not unlike her mother.
"One must triple or double diaper the subject to make sure that in the event one cannot change right away no mess will be made."
Satsuki looked at the clock. Forty minutes until lunch. The lecture seemed to drone on.
"Alright class," Rakugo-ko Sensei turned around her glasses sparkling. "Who would like to tell me why it is important to be thorough, firm but gentle during changing of a subject?"
Omiko's hand lifted.
"Hakodate-san?"
"It's important so not only does the subject stay healthy but so they are reassured of their safety in a vulnerable spot."
"Very good!"
Lunch at last.
"Satsuki-Sama!"
Satsuki who was walking to one of the outside eating areas looked to see Omiko walking towards her.
"Good afternoon Omiko."
"Ready for Lunch?"
"Certainly. Your food is always delicious." Satsuki let out a small smile. Omiko simply blushed.
"Well, today I figured I'd try something special!" Omiko grinned.
"Oh?"
As they sat down, they opened the lunch boxes.
Satsuki's eyes sparkled as the tantalizing smell hit her. It was a five set box today. Two larger portions, one of a Pork Yakitori, another of a Shio Ramen. The medium portion was white rice and the smaller two contained takuanzuke pickles and a seaweed salad.
"Oh?" Satsuki asked. "Aren't these..."
"Yes!" Omiko smiled. "Local specialities from where my family comes from, Hakodate in Hokkaido."
"People in Hokkaido seem to have really good food." Satsuki said picking up one of the yakitori skewers.
"Itadakimasu!"
The next day in class was fine. Rakugo-ko Sensei was sitting upfront talking about the various ways mothers could induce lactation, as well as sanitation in regards to breastfeeding.
Speaking of, Satsuki snuck a glance at Omiko. Was it her or had Omikos breasts grown? Her usually modest breasts seemed to be bigger. Much bigger. They were at least DD cups at this point.
Her stomach twisted suddenly as she felt cramps. She politely excused herself as she left the classroom. Satsuki whimpered, her knees shaking as she tried to get to the bathroom without shitting herself. Pigeon toe step by step she finally made it to the bathroom.
She felt more out of breath than usual, she finally made it into the bathroom and looked at herself in the mirror. She had gained a bit of a belly. She gently poked her belly in awe. It wasn't just her belly but her thighs, hips, butt, her whole body. She had to admit she did look cute but she didn't want it to last. She waddled over to the stall, and tried to open it. She peeked under. No one. They were all locked.
"Are you kidding me?" She mumbled, as she fidgeted with the doors. She was going to shit her panties at this rate. No dice.
She ran out into the hallway, belly jiggling until she ran into someone and fell down.
"Satsuki-Sama?! Are you ok?!" Omiko who had been at the other end of the hall ran over to her friend.
"Oh Goodness! Kiryuuin-san are you ok?" Rakugo-ko Sensei, stood over her, looking frazzled, having ran in to her. Omiko finally made it over. Ragyo looked down and internally smiled as Satsuki had shit herself.
Satsuki tried to nod but couldnt she bit her lower lip as she sat in the mess of her own doing.
Ragyo had been able to afford a decent if not plush house in the nearby neighborhood in Honnoji. It was not as luxurious as the Kiryuuin estate, but she would get ahold of it soon enough.
It was here that she brought both Omiko and Satsuki. The two women found themselves in a large playroom of sorts, looking like a nursery almost.
Satsuki whimpered as Omiko gently rubbed her belly. Satsuki hadn't been allowed a change or cleaning so she lay on what could be called an oversized and over glorified changing table.
"Satsuki-Sama is such...a chubby baby...a big girl...." Omiko whispered and cooed. Satsuki knew something was happening but she didn't fight it. Between just feeling shame, and enjoying the belly rubs she let herself lay there.
She whimpered as Rakugo-ko walked in. She paused, as the white haired woman started fondling her messy panties.
"Kiryuuin-san is such a naughty, filthy girl." She breathed with a husky rich voice, as with a single momement ripped Satsuki's panties off and threw them in the bin. The young woman said nothing, as the cool air touched her nether regions.
"Hakodate-San?"
"Yes Sensei?"
"Please show me how to clean her as demonstrated in class."
"W-Wait." Before Satsuki could object the blonde was vigorously wiping her down with the wet wipes. As much as she disliked it, she felt relief, surprised how thorough Omiko was being. She powdered, applied cream, shaved Satsuki's neatly trimmed public hair and reapplied powder, cream. Satsuki was actually impressed. "W-wait." Satsuki stuttered as she watched the woman pull out a huge pack of oversized adult diapers. Satsuki badly wanted to squirm away, to escape. She was even more amazed when she then put three full large diapers on her.
Satsuki felt like she was on a cloud, and her legs were spread.
Suddenly she found Rakugo-ko Sensei lifting her and setting her on the ground befote walking out.
Satsuki gasped as Omiko raised her skirt to reveal several diapers too. Omiko blushed. Her tongue drooled.
"T They feel so good." She rubbed herself, moaning, openly masturbating in her diapers. Satsuki was too horny and too appalled to look away.
Omiko crawled over, and positioned herself on the other woman, and let her tongue slither into Satsuki's mouth. Their lips met. Satsuki's eyes widened as she tried to push the woman off but to no avail. It was the messiest sloppiest kiss she had ever had and Omiko was rubbing Satsuki's diaper.
Satsuki whimpered, given the situation, she was glad she was just pear shaped and chubby, not so large she couldn't move.
It didn't help when Rakugo-ko sensei walked in holding Satsuki's new uniform. She had no power to resist as she was dressed and Omiko certainly wasn't going to help.
When she was finished, Rakugo-ko turned the chubby Satsuki to the mirror who looked on.
Satsuki had a bright pink diaper cover on her, which aside from her big butt and three layers of diapers was huge, and made it difficult to walk. A pink sailor dress that hugged all of her curves, that barely went down over her belly and certainly revealed her diaper, cream stockings that went all the way up her legs, frilly pink booties, a small pink bonnet and mittens.
She looked like a fat overgrown toddler. Or a grown woman cosplaying as one. The way her chubby belly peaked out and her classic trademark hime cut was not helping disprove very at all the later thought, thought Satsuki
Satsuki couldn't help but whimper, as Omiko groped her again.
"I bet baby is hungry!" the blonde chirped, as she took Satsuki's hand and pulled her to the high chair at the side of the room.
Satsuki's mind swirled as she tried to process the kiss the dress the diapers. She tugged trying to get away but to no avail.
She was locked into the high chair, and had a bib tied around her. Rakugo-ko Sensei plopped a few bowls of red gray mush in front of her.
Satsuki frowned and having enough.
"I am not eating that! Let me go this instant both of you."
Rakugo-ko didn't both responding as she grabbed Satsuki's face and shoved a pipe in it, which lead up to a funnel above the high chair. As Omiko secured Satsuki's hands, Rakugo-ko Sensei dumped the three bowls of mush into the funnel and left the room.
"If you finish your num nums I'll give you some ramen!" Omiko said. Satsuki froze. Freedom....or delicious food hmm?
With what dignity she had left she suddenly started swallowing the gulpy mush that slid into her throat, thick, sticky, sweet, spicy and bland. She let out a moan, as it kept coming and coming.
After about 15 minutes she finished it. She gasped for breath as Omiko pulled the tube out, and undid the restraints before putting a big bowl of ramen on the table, the same as what Omike had made before. She shoveled it into Satsuki's mouth savoring the flavor.
In her haze she wanted to get out, but the food was so good. As Omike unlocked her from the tray and led her over to the side of the room with the window overlooking Honnoji and Tokyo, Satsuki blushed realizing anyone could see her. It didn't help that Omiko popped her tits out and shoved a nipple into Satsuki's mouth.
Milk filled her mouth as she suckled and it kept coming. She moaned, too full to move as the cool liquid contrasted from the kiss earlier, as Omike rubbed her diaper. She was so close, so close to cumming but she couldn't. It was evideny after a few minutes Omiko was getting frustrated, so she stopped rubbing Satsuki's diaper and started rubbing her own. Satsuki frowned but said nothing, too busy guzzling down her classmates milk to say anything.
Minutes passed and Omiko looked even more frustrated and before she knew it Satsuki found herself on the floor again this time with Omiko standing up and sitting over her before leaning down and giving her a sloppy kiss and rubbing her diapers together.
Satsuki couldn't refuse or move, her mind was hazy and filled as her stomach groaned against the weight, and she couldnt move her body im response.
Especially not as tired as she was, especially not with the girls saliva slithering down her throat.
She wasn't sure if she wanted more or less. Weakly she lifted her arms and managed to pull Hakodate into her, chest on chest, against her, which only made Hakodate go even crazier. The womans togue danced as Satsuki demanded more.
She moaned, she moaned loudly as they kissed, as Satsuki's deepest kiss was given to her while she was wearing diapers and dressed as an overgrown toddler beginning pretending to be a school girl.
The two made out with squishing and crinkling, the medicinal spiked food taking effect on Satsuki as without warning as she felt herself begin to soil her diapers. Unlike with the panties, the current load of shit began with no where to go but around. Satsuki's special places, crotch, ass, cracks she didn't know she had all filled with hot steaming shit. Log after log pushed it's way out. It mushed around. Satsuki moaned loudly. She couldn't deny what her body was doing and reveled in it.
Minutes passed until Satsuki stopped shitting herselr. By now her diaper had buldged and evn under the diaper cover, the brown was visible. Omiko moaned herself as she broke away from her kiss before renewing it with more vigor. She couldnt help herself. The smell of Satsuki herself, the smell of her diaper it was also good and Hakodate wanted more.
The door swung in as Rakugo-ko Sensei walked in and looked down at the two. With a terrible smirk she took her glasses off and let her hair down, the rainbow colors shining through.
Satsuki's eyes widened as she moaned.
It was her mother now.
It was tricked.
Satsuki swore under her breath.
"Well darling." Ragyo laughed, "you've gotten yourself in to quite a special situation". She bent down, her hand cupping and grabbing Satsuki's cheeks, not allowing the slobbering Hakodate to distract her.
"Don't worry though." She let go of her face. "I have no dreadful plans. no, if you realize I've got you in as you are now, there is no need for domination. Just Satsuki's Humiliation." Satsuki's blood shivered as she heard those words, watching as she unbuttoned her blouse allowing her double plus sized watermelon sized breasts to come out.
She grabbed both of the women picking them up, shoving Hakodate onto one breast and Satsuki on the other. The blonde squeaked as Satsuki moaned, the thick milky tea like liquid pouring into their mouths as she sat down, putting both women on her knees. Ragyo let out a boisterous deep laugh. Satsuki blushed. She was fattened, tricked and diapered like a naughty brat on her mothers knee.
She moaned as Ragyo took great pleasure in groping her messy diaper allowing the mess to shift around.
The milk too was addictiven she found herself sucking instinctively like a horse needing water. Omiko was no better off, guzzling it down greedily.
"Oh my," Ragyo smiled, "It look like mommy is going soon to have a second fat baby on her hands."
Omiko moaned in response.
Ragyo let out another deep hearty boisterous laugh.
"I have you Satsuki, your life is mine now, and I will make sure that never you will forget the humiliation you inflicted on me."
She groped her diaper more and brought her knees together, forcing the two women to be right up each other. Their breasts pressed into each other and Satsuki became accutely aware Omiko as she began groping her and Satsuki groped back. The two women broke from Ragyo's fat tits as began making out. Satsuki's hands left Omiko's body as they raised up to her side and started shaking as the woman's longue tongue slid down her throat.
Ragyo let out another deep hearty boisterous laugh.
"Say it with me girls. I'm a fat perverted adult who loves being a baby! I belong to and am the property of Kiyuurin Ragyo!"
Omiko broke away from Satsuki with saliva who whined.
"I'm Hakodate Omiko! I'm a fat perverted adult who loves being a baby! I belong to and am the property of Kiyuurin Ragyo!"
This time Ragyo laughed boisterously and cackled she looked at Satsuki expectantly.
Satsuki froze, on one hand knowing this was a terrible idea, on the other the way Ragyo kept pervertedly rubbing her diaper made her need to cum. The way her messy diaper rubbed up against her and the way she was dressed, not to mention just being horny really weighed on her. Did she really want to throw away her reputation for this? What would Ryuko think? What would Mako think? What would the four kings think? Would she Ragyo try to hurt others if she said no?
Her thoughts were distracted as Hakodate began groping her again, both the diaper and her breasts.
Satsuki moaned as she looked down at her self, and her fat cute belly. Her thighs, and arms. He gently groped her own belly. Is this really what I want? She thought. She smelled herself. Perverted. Filthy.
Ragyo waited and smiled at Satsuki, she wasn't going to be going soon. Satsuki took a deep breath. It was now or never.
"I Kyuurin Satsuki, I'm a fat perverted adult who loves being a baby! I belong to and am the property of Kiyuurin Ragyo!"
With that Ragyo cackled like never before.
Satsuki reveling in humiliation and pushing her diaper in the right area, came. Her orgasm made her shake, bucking her hips in her diaper like the nasty pervert she was. She was mommys baby, Ragyos sweet baby.
Honnoji had been saved once again from an unspecified disaster, as Satsuki groped herself and made out with Hakodate, Ragyo cackled and clapped her hands.
Hakodate had gotten what she wanted, money, power, probably the ability to be the most skilled and
prestigious student at Honnoji, now outshining Satsuki, especially she had gotten Satsuki. Her new perverted playmate who she could hump and kiss and be a big sister too.
She had Mommy Ragyo who was unstoppable.
Ragyo was pleased, she had gotten her revenge, delicious.
May she could do her other daughter yet, or at least convince the Manshoku woman to let her. She cackled again.
For now, she would stay with her fat, perverted adult baby Satsuki.
Ragyo, sat in front of the classroom, typing notes on her laptop. Somehow she had returned. She wasn't sure how. She knew one thing and that was that she wanted to get revenge on her daughter. Ruling the world was not a priority. So she decided to disguise herself as a teacher. With a few connections she passed a bland online two week substitute teacher training course, bribed some people and, created a character.
She was Professor Kinryuu Rakugo-ko. Yes it was cheesy. Yes it some how worked.
She sat there dressed in a button down blouse, her hair tied into a bun, a skirt and glasses.
Satsuki blinked again. Sure. Ok.
A few seats behind her sat Ryuko, Mako and Nonnon sat jabbering on about some TV show. A few seats over sat Omiko, who perused through a book. The class was only about half full which made sense as it was a elective.
Omiko had actually been bribed immediately. Ragyo had offered the young woman a substantial amount of money from a offshore account that she would get, rain or shine. Omiko was not stupid but satisfied with Ragyo promising and showing she had no resources to take over the world.
So everyday without fail so far for about a month, Omiko would have a special bento set for lunch and always give one to Satsuki. The secret ingredient were various chemical mixtures Ragyo provided her.
Today's lesson was on diapers and hygienics, as was the current study unit on such things like childcare. Ragyo, or Rakugo-ko Sensei, stood at the front of the class marking on the chalkboard as she read from the textbook.
"Therefore" She said, "It is vitally important that one makes sure to clean the subject, be it child or adult very carefully to avoid rashes."
Satsuki could hear Ryuko snoring.
"In some cases" Rakugo-Ko Sensei continued. Satsuki looked at her. Her hair bun was so elegant and she wore such clean crisp clothes, and had a curvy figure not unlike her mother.
"One must triple or double diaper the subject to make sure that in the event one cannot change right away no mess will be made."
Satsuki looked at the clock. Forty minutes until lunch. The lecture seemed to drone on.
"Alright class," Rakugo-ko Sensei turned around her glasses sparkling. "Who would like to tell me why it is important to be thorough, firm but gentle during changing of a subject?"
Omiko's hand lifted.
"Hakodate-san?"
"It's important so not only does the subject stay healthy but so they are reassured of their safety in a vulnerable spot."
"Very good!"
Lunch at last.
"Satsuki-Sama!"
Satsuki who was walking to one of the outside eating areas looked to see Omiko walking towards her.
"Good afternoon Omiko."
"Ready for Lunch?"
"Certainly. Your food is always delicious." Satsuki let out a small smile. Omiko simply blushed.
"Well, today I figured I'd try something special!" Omiko grinned.
"Oh?"
As they sat down, they opened the lunch boxes.
Satsuki's eyes sparkled as the tantalizing smell hit her. It was a five set box today. Two larger portions, one of a Pork Yakitori, another of a Shio Ramen. The medium portion was white rice and the smaller two contained takuanzuke pickles and a seaweed salad.
"Oh?" Satsuki asked. "Aren't these..."
"Yes!" Omiko smiled. "Local specialities from where my family comes from, Hakodate in Hokkaido."
"People in Hokkaido seem to have really good food." Satsuki said picking up one of the yakitori skewers.
"Itadakimasu!"
The next day in class was fine. Rakugo-ko Sensei was sitting upfront talking about the various ways mothers could induce lactation, as well as sanitation in regards to breastfeeding.
Speaking of, Satsuki snuck a glance at Omiko. Was it her or had Omikos breasts grown? Her usually modest breasts seemed to be bigger. Much bigger. They were at least DD cups at this point.
Her stomach twisted suddenly as she felt cramps. She politely excused herself as she left the classroom. Satsuki whimpered, her knees shaking as she tried to get to the bathroom without shitting herself. Pigeon toe step by step she finally made it to the bathroom.
She felt more out of breath than usual, she finally made it into the bathroom and looked at herself in the mirror. She had gained a bit of a belly. She gently poked her belly in awe. It wasn't just her belly but her thighs, hips, butt, her whole body. She had to admit she did look cute but she didn't want it to last. She waddled over to the stall, and tried to open it. She peeked under. No one. They were all locked.
"Are you kidding me?" She mumbled, as she fidgeted with the doors. She was going to shit her panties at this rate. No dice.
She ran out into the hallway, belly jiggling until she ran into someone and fell down.
"Satsuki-Sama?! Are you ok?!" Omiko who had been at the other end of the hall ran over to her friend.
"Oh Goodness! Kiryuuin-san are you ok?" Rakugo-ko Sensei, stood over her, looking frazzled, having ran in to her. Omiko finally made it over. Ragyo looked down and internally smiled as Satsuki had shit herself.
Satsuki tried to nod but couldnt she bit her lower lip as she sat in the mess of her own doing.
Ragyo had been able to afford a decent if not plush house in the nearby neighborhood in Honnoji. It was not as luxurious as the Kiryuuin estate, but she would get ahold of it soon enough.
It was here that she brought both Omiko and Satsuki. The two women found themselves in a large playroom of sorts, looking like a nursery almost.
Satsuki whimpered as Omiko gently rubbed her belly. Satsuki hadn't been allowed a change or cleaning so she lay on what could be called an oversized and over glorified changing table.
"Satsuki-Sama is such...a chubby baby...a big girl...." Omiko whispered and cooed. Satsuki knew something was happening but she didn't fight it. Between just feeling shame, and enjoying the belly rubs she let herself lay there.
She whimpered as Rakugo-ko walked in. She paused, as the white haired woman started fondling her messy panties.
"Kiryuuin-san is such a naughty, filthy girl." She breathed with a husky rich voice, as with a single momement ripped Satsuki's panties off and threw them in the bin. The young woman said nothing, as the cool air touched her nether regions.
"Hakodate-San?"
"Yes Sensei?"
"Please show me how to clean her as demonstrated in class."
"W-Wait." Before Satsuki could object the blonde was vigorously wiping her down with the wet wipes. As much as she disliked it, she felt relief, surprised how thorough Omiko was being. She powdered, applied cream, shaved Satsuki's neatly trimmed public hair and reapplied powder, cream. Satsuki was actually impressed. "W-wait." Satsuki stuttered as she watched the woman pull out a huge pack of oversized adult diapers. Satsuki badly wanted to squirm away, to escape. She was even more amazed when she then put three full large diapers on her.
Satsuki felt like she was on a cloud, and her legs were spread.
Suddenly she found Rakugo-ko Sensei lifting her and setting her on the ground befote walking out.
Satsuki gasped as Omiko raised her skirt to reveal several diapers too. Omiko blushed. Her tongue drooled.
"T They feel so good." She rubbed herself, moaning, openly masturbating in her diapers. Satsuki was too horny and too appalled to look away.
Omiko crawled over, and positioned herself on the other woman, and let her tongue slither into Satsuki's mouth. Their lips met. Satsuki's eyes widened as she tried to push the woman off but to no avail. It was the messiest sloppiest kiss she had ever had and Omiko was rubbing Satsuki's diaper.
Satsuki whimpered, given the situation, she was glad she was just pear shaped and chubby, not so large she couldn't move.
It didn't help when Rakugo-ko sensei walked in holding Satsuki's new uniform. She had no power to resist as she was dressed and Omiko certainly wasn't going to help.
When she was finished, Rakugo-ko turned the chubby Satsuki to the mirror who looked on.
Satsuki had a bright pink diaper cover on her, which aside from her big butt and three layers of diapers was huge, and made it difficult to walk. A pink sailor dress that hugged all of her curves, that barely went down over her belly and certainly revealed her diaper, cream stockings that went all the way up her legs, frilly pink booties, a small pink bonnet and mittens.
She looked like a fat overgrown toddler. Or a grown woman cosplaying as one. The way her chubby belly peaked out and her classic trademark hime cut was not helping disprove very at all the later thought, thought Satsuki
Satsuki couldn't help but whimper, as Omiko groped her again.
"I bet baby is hungry!" the blonde chirped, as she took Satsuki's hand and pulled her to the high chair at the side of the room.
Satsuki's mind swirled as she tried to process the kiss the dress the diapers. She tugged trying to get away but to no avail.
She was locked into the high chair, and had a bib tied around her. Rakugo-ko Sensei plopped a few bowls of red gray mush in front of her.
Satsuki frowned and having enough.
"I am not eating that! Let me go this instant both of you."
Rakugo-ko didn't both responding as she grabbed Satsuki's face and shoved a pipe in it, which lead up to a funnel above the high chair. As Omiko secured Satsuki's hands, Rakugo-ko Sensei dumped the three bowls of mush into the funnel and left the room.
"If you finish your num nums I'll give you some ramen!" Omiko said. Satsuki froze. Freedom....or delicious food hmm?
With what dignity she had left she suddenly started swallowing the gulpy mush that slid into her throat, thick, sticky, sweet, spicy and bland. She let out a moan, as it kept coming and coming.
After about 15 minutes she finished it. She gasped for breath as Omiko pulled the tube out, and undid the restraints before putting a big bowl of ramen on the table, the same as what Omike had made before. She shoveled it into Satsuki's mouth savoring the flavor.
In her haze she wanted to get out, but the food was so good. As Omike unlocked her from the tray and led her over to the side of the room with the window overlooking Honnoji and Tokyo, Satsuki blushed realizing anyone could see her. It didn't help that Omiko popped her tits out and shoved a nipple into Satsuki's mouth.
Milk filled her mouth as she suckled and it kept coming. She moaned, too full to move as the cool liquid contrasted from the kiss earlier, as Omike rubbed her diaper. She was so close, so close to cumming but she couldn't. It was evideny after a few minutes Omiko was getting frustrated, so she stopped rubbing Satsuki's diaper and started rubbing her own. Satsuki frowned but said nothing, too busy guzzling down her classmates milk to say anything.
Minutes passed and Omiko looked even more frustrated and before she knew it Satsuki found herself on the floor again this time with Omiko standing up and sitting over her before leaning down and giving her a sloppy kiss and rubbing her diapers together.
Satsuki couldn't refuse or move, her mind was hazy and filled as her stomach groaned against the weight, and she couldnt move her body im response.
Especially not as tired as she was, especially not with the girls saliva slithering down her throat.
She wasn't sure if she wanted more or less. Weakly she lifted her arms and managed to pull Hakodate into her, chest on chest, against her, which only made Hakodate go even crazier. The womans togue danced as Satsuki demanded more.
She moaned, she moaned loudly as they kissed, as Satsuki's deepest kiss was given to her while she was wearing diapers and dressed as an overgrown toddler beginning pretending to be a school girl.
The two made out with squishing and crinkling, the medicinal spiked food taking effect on Satsuki as without warning as she felt herself begin to soil her diapers. Unlike with the panties, the current load of shit began with no where to go but around. Satsuki's special places, crotch, ass, cracks she didn't know she had all filled with hot steaming shit. Log after log pushed it's way out. It mushed around. Satsuki moaned loudly. She couldn't deny what her body was doing and reveled in it.
Minutes passed until Satsuki stopped shitting herselr. By now her diaper had buldged and evn under the diaper cover, the brown was visible. Omiko moaned herself as she broke away from her kiss before renewing it with more vigor. She couldnt help herself. The smell of Satsuki herself, the smell of her diaper it was also good and Hakodate wanted more.
The door swung in as Rakugo-ko Sensei walked in and looked down at the two. With a terrible smirk she took her glasses off and let her hair down, the rainbow colors shining through.
Satsuki's eyes widened as she moaned.
It was her mother now.
It was tricked.
Satsuki swore under her breath.
"Well darling." Ragyo laughed, "you've gotten yourself in to quite a special situation". She bent down, her hand cupping and grabbing Satsuki's cheeks, not allowing the slobbering Hakodate to distract her.
"Don't worry though." She let go of her face. "I have no dreadful plans. no, if you realize I've got you in as you are now, there is no need for domination. Just Satsuki's Humiliation." Satsuki's blood shivered as she heard those words, watching as she unbuttoned her blouse allowing her double plus sized watermelon sized breasts to come out.
She grabbed both of the women picking them up, shoving Hakodate onto one breast and Satsuki on the other. The blonde squeaked as Satsuki moaned, the thick milky tea like liquid pouring into their mouths as she sat down, putting both women on her knees. Ragyo let out a boisterous deep laugh. Satsuki blushed. She was fattened, tricked and diapered like a naughty brat on her mothers knee.
She moaned as Ragyo took great pleasure in groping her messy diaper allowing the mess to shift around.
The milk too was addictiven she found herself sucking instinctively like a horse needing water. Omiko was no better off, guzzling it down greedily.
"Oh my," Ragyo smiled, "It look like mommy is going soon to have a second fat baby on her hands."
Omiko moaned in response.
Ragyo let out another deep hearty boisterous laugh.
"I have you Satsuki, your life is mine now, and I will make sure that never you will forget the humiliation you inflicted on me."
She groped her diaper more and brought her knees together, forcing the two women to be right up each other. Their breasts pressed into each other and Satsuki became accutely aware Omiko as she began groping her and Satsuki groped back. The two women broke from Ragyo's fat tits as began making out. Satsuki's hands left Omiko's body as they raised up to her side and started shaking as the woman's longue tongue slid down her throat.
Ragyo let out another deep hearty boisterous laugh.
"Say it with me girls. I'm a fat perverted adult who loves being a baby! I belong to and am the property of Kiyuurin Ragyo!"
Omiko broke away from Satsuki with saliva who whined.
"I'm Hakodate Omiko! I'm a fat perverted adult who loves being a baby! I belong to and am the property of Kiyuurin Ragyo!"
This time Ragyo laughed boisterously and cackled she looked at Satsuki expectantly.
Satsuki froze, on one hand knowing this was a terrible idea, on the other the way Ragyo kept pervertedly rubbing her diaper made her need to cum. The way her messy diaper rubbed up against her and the way she was dressed, not to mention just being horny really weighed on her. Did she really want to throw away her reputation for this? What would Ryuko think? What would Mako think? What would the four kings think? Would she Ragyo try to hurt others if she said no?
Her thoughts were distracted as Hakodate began groping her again, both the diaper and her breasts.
Satsuki moaned as she looked down at her self, and her fat cute belly. Her thighs, and arms. He gently groped her own belly. Is this really what I want? She thought. She smelled herself. Perverted. Filthy.
Ragyo waited and smiled at Satsuki, she wasn't going to be going soon. Satsuki took a deep breath. It was now or never.
"I Kyuurin Satsuki, I'm a fat perverted adult who loves being a baby! I belong to and am the property of Kiyuurin Ragyo!"
With that Ragyo cackled like never before.
Satsuki reveling in humiliation and pushing her diaper in the right area, came. Her orgasm made her shake, bucking her hips in her diaper like the nasty pervert she was. She was mommys baby, Ragyos sweet baby.
Honnoji had been saved once again from an unspecified disaster, as Satsuki groped herself and made out with Hakodate, Ragyo cackled and clapped her hands.
Hakodate had gotten what she wanted, money, power, probably the ability to be the most skilled and
prestigious student at Honnoji, now outshining Satsuki, especially she had gotten Satsuki. Her new perverted playmate who she could hump and kiss and be a big sister too.
She had Mommy Ragyo who was unstoppable.
Ragyo was pleased, she had gotten her revenge, delicious.
May she could do her other daughter yet, or at least convince the Manshoku woman to let her. She cackled again.
For now, she would stay with her fat, perverted adult baby Satsuki.
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Fujos really have a fetish with seeing brown men locked up, so get a taste of this one where he's taking to a breeding facility. Yes, you read that right: it's an ABO fic, and they milk alphas like cows for sperm. Author does not seem to catch the optics of sending a brown man to prison to get 'milked' by a white one. 'He blames his beautiful penis' is a real line. An archive of the work is here.
In this universe, 'unruly' alphas, rapist alphas, the ones who cannot be managed in society, get sent to fancy prisons where they are milked for their sperm so sex-crazed omegas can pop out 'pups'. Basically, the prison industrial complex meets the fertility market, with the best, most attractive and aggressive alphas ejaculating into tubes or stand-mandated sex slaves to ensure the survival of the race. Rather creative spin on it, I must say.
> Snarling against his muzzle
They really do take the dog thing seriously. Brown men in muzzles don't paint the image these fujos want people to paint.
> A girthy erection
Of course. Alpha males in this wield giant horse cocks. It's BBC but with a different race.
> Mad on the streets, lost in rut with no omega to knot and breed
And in order to avoid raping an innocent omega, Jayce gets sent to Sperm CECOT here so he can 'blow off some steam' and get Viktor the omega to blow him.
The optics of having the token brown man be an uncontrollable rapist is also an interesting choice.
> Viktor's cunt is an alpha whisperer, able to bend even the most aggressive alphas to his will
These fics produce some WILD quotes, and this is just one of them. I'll be referencing this in the future.
> All without the need for his exemplary pussy
White omega pussy is the best. You can conquer worlds with it.
> Outside in the world, it's a curse
Well, at least there is SOME self awareness here.
> If he doesn't have viable sperm, or decent genetics, there's no point in keeping him
If this sounds like eugenics, you'd be correct - it IS. They are taking the most desirable alphas and 'filtering' their sperm to get the best 'pups' like it's a dog breeding show. It's weird but also funny because the author has no fucking idea what she just wrote.
> Walks right into a burning oven, sense swarmed by the alpha's potent pheromones
Since these people are walking Scentsys, any guesses on what he smells like? The bear spray decided to head into the 'make shit smell good' department.
> Cunt slickening up, and he's never been so thoroughly unsettled by his own body, sweating and shifting where he stands
And all it took was a hot brown man in a muzzle. White women love big brown guys locked up.
> Appraising his much larger frame and strong physique as would a breeding attendant
So. A show horse. Alphas are literally show horses.
> His large hands are marred with knicks and burns
Let me guess. They can wrap around his waist because Viktor is just that small.
> He is large, a fact that amplifies the empty ache his cunt is trying to remedy by squeezing around nothing
Of course. Dick sizes are never normal in ABO. The bigger, the better. Fire extinguisher cocks are not uncommon.
> Burning bright enough to be mistaken for two miniature suns on the verge of collapse
They'd be red, then.
> He's panting harshly behind his muzzle
This author really wants to paint him like an animal, eh?
> He wants Viktor to submit to him, is likely used to omegas folding under the dominating intoxication of his pheromones
Or he just rapes them, because he was about to do that before he was arrested. This author basically wrote him as your typical low IQ Hispanic rapist and her bitch ass has no clue.
> Any other omega would have presented their sopping wet cunt to him
Because that's all they're good for.
> Alphas in rut respond better to a subservient omega(...) he is with his full authority to use sex as a form of dominance
Shocker, he does just that - before he starts salivating over that massive cock, that is.
> Fingers large enough to completely envelop his slim bony wrist. He could very well hold Viktor's entire waist, or maybe his thigh, with one hand
Yes, it's THIS fucking line. It also suggests that his hands are so fucking huge he can physically hold his entire waist with ONE hand, making his hands larger than the average human hand on the planet. AKA he is literally a fucking gorilla trying to breed the 'human' and 'dainty' omega and holy fuck have I not seen a more racist depiction. I usually don't like using that term, but goddamn.
> Demented bitch, knot-slut, evil sperm scientist
"Evil sperm scientist" has a nice ring to it.
> He needs to be satisfied or else his body will take it as a rejection
AKA he needs to cum or his primal instincts will render him inhuman for all time. Only after cumming in an omega pussy can be become human again.
> I can smell your slick. Is this when I knot you?
Unless there's a change in attitude, having Jayce talk like an animal is, again, really fucking racist. Imagine hearing this come from a progshit rather than someone like Nick Fuentes.
> A non-threatening word to turn into a cuntstruck knothead
Oh I'm using that for penis niggers in the future. What a line.
> His subject is all fired up now that he's got the idea in his head that Viktor will be carrying his pups
'ABO is a deconstruction of gender. We really like exploring things outside of the box.'
> His hand could be a pillow and the alpha would fuck it in a rut
...so your basic unrestrained male.
> The alpha is a hot, throbbing, veiny mess in his hands
Of course. It's not like it would ever be average.
> Revealing the bulbous cockhead flushed so red it's soon to be purple, looking like it was made to be sucked on
Do show how he's going to deepthroat something the size of his forearm. These women have an obsession with horse cocks on darker men. I do think they take their Bad Dragon dildos to heart.
> He can hardly wrap his fingers around the base
Guess his hands are that small.
> Some omegas develop growth during puberty. While Viktor is within the group that did, he never bothered with a pump given how pointless it would be
I assume this is a nod to 'intersex omegas', which isn't how it works, anyways.
> Want to see you holding my pups
Literal subhuman IQ. And it's a progshit writing it.
> They want to cover his beautiful skin in cum
Wonder if it has anti-aging properties.
> Pressing into his uncircumcised tip
Why am I not surprised that circumcision isn't a thing in ABO? We can have brown men being treated as literal animals, but no Jews.
> Who wants to bust his knot in Viktor
Spoiler: they do have an intense fuck session, but no knot is popped. Viktor does get kidnapped at the end, though.
> He wants to drink it all, lick the cup clean, be filled in every hole until he drips like the empty pump he eyes enviously
What does alpha semen taste like? Does it have an array of flavours like their scents or is it just your basic 'salt and sweat' taste?
> Let me go and I'll fuck you like you've never been fucked before
He's not lying about that.
> He really is gorgeous
> A hunter, a predator
White progressive women really have a thing for writing brown men like beasts. There truly can't be something to be gleaned from that, not at all.
> What a little whore
He won't be saying that for long.
> You are safe here
Uh huh. His first instinct is to jump the first omega he sees because he likes them. He was literally sent so Jayce wouldn't rape somebody else.
Oh, thank God he's clean, then! We can't have alpha males carrying any STDs!
> They've seen him spread on an alpha's cock before
Oh, he's about to be tamed real quick.
> Let the alpha do as he pleases with him, ruin him, mold him back together again
> Only moan and beg until he's worked over the alpha's stupid fat cock
A stand-in for a female character losing it over a big dick? You don't say.
> Be grateful when his womb is kissed with life
Don't ever let these people tell you they want to be childfree. They have a breeding kink - they just want it with the 6'0 Chad despite saying otherwise. Always pay attention to what they like.
> Jayce makes him want to be a good omega
Read: housewife.
> He wants the alpha to take his control away as if he never had it in the first place, turn him into a drooling mess who only knows the shape of his alpha's knot
Reducing him to a sex toy that has no thought but to jump on that police baton? You don't say. I think 'wet blanket' is a very apt description.
How much do alphas get paid to breed 'pups'? Is a dollar for each one, or...?
> He reprimands himself for his wanton fantasies. The subject is not in his right mind
Nah, he is. He's just a penis nigger. The author just doesn't think it's racist, lmao.
> No longer a man but a growling and snarling feral beast
See point above. She does this A LOT. The animal allegories and descriptions DO NOT help her case.
> These meat brained alphas, too, believe he must have a holy grail between his legs
You wrote that he was an 'alpha tamer'. What else could you possibly mean with that?
> Slammed with his scent, clenching and dripping around nothing as he takes a wobbling step into the room
Does it still smell like a forge or does it smell like oranges?
> Why does he care that this alpha sounds so ruined by his absence?
Because you want that dick, that's why.
> Spicy wisps of his pheromones
Does it smell like chili? Or a barbecue with that 'smoky aroma'?
> You're so sexy like that...wanna fuck you in it. Just tear a hole and slide my cock into you
Yes, this is how Jayce sounds. He talks like a 1980s porn star who just discovered English for the first time.
> Knowing he's going to fuck this stupid alpha anyway
Bud, you walked right into this. Don't roll your eyes.
> His cunt on full display under the bush of dark hair
Of course there's Rapunzel pubes. Never complete without it. I also think Jayce is Bigfoot here based on how big he's written; these authors always write him as being this hairy, untamed beast and I cannot unsee it.
> Viktor does not trust the alpha to not force himself in with one push, and he's not in the mood to be torn
The fact this is a thing really proves alphas have penises that simply would not work in their species. These penile sizes would work for Dark Souls, because the humanoids are over 8-9 feet tall. Not for normal humans!
> I want to make you feel so good, please, omega, fuck
Oh, he does. He starts spewing pure cringe when the smut starts going.
> Naval
Bitch can't differentiate between 'navel' and 'naval'. One involves submarines, the other involves getting a submarine shoved up his vagoo. Big difference.
> The instinct is natural, a yearning call from within
AKA 'my maternal instincts are calling because there's a big, beautiful cock in front of me'. No, really, that's actually said.
> Jayce is just that big
Just go with the 12'' measurement, as the bigger the better is the norm for ABO.
> Let me fuck you for real
He's not joking about that.
> Nodding like a dumb slut
And neither is he. Funny how that's all omegas get reduced to: a hentai stereotype where they stick their tongue out and drool. This is almost on the level of 'mango loco's level of absurdity, but not quite.
> He's layered in muscle, though unlike the marbled, sculpted depictions of gods
So...your basic bitch description in paperback smut novels. Don't ever let these People of Gender tell you there is no 'peak masculine form' or that masculinity isn't real. They know what it is - and they fucking LOVE IT.
> Kissing Viktor's womb with the bulbous head
I'm just thinking of a giant egg squash here.
> The hands Viktor accurately deduced could fit entirely around his thighs
It wasn't just that - she wrote that he could fit A SINGLE HAND around his waist. Meaning his hands are larger than a normal human hands. We are literally dealing with Bigfoot here.
> He's right where he needs to be, being so pliant to show how good he can be
How fitting that our dainty omega is about to get railed by a 'ferocious beast' that will give him the best dicking of a lifetime. How predictable.
> Fucked stupid and whimpering
Indeed. Amazing how intelligence can be thrown right out the window with a massive cock.
> It's a nice fantasy when he's brainless
Nice lampshading. Also fits the author's commentators, too.
> He could make the alpha promise to take care of him
Your pussy may be good, but it isn't THAT good, trust me.
> You want me to break you?
He's not joking about that.
> I need you, please, make me full, ahhh
And that's all it takes to reduce these people to sub IQ animals.
> Over his womb, where he swears the alpha is trying to fuck his way into
Naturally, there is a belly bulge, because why wouldn't there be if you have a 12'' penis?
> Speared in place and it feels so fucking good
Like a stuffed pig, eh? All you're missing is the apple.
> Gonna put my pups right here
And I'm sending them off to the puppy mill.
> Heavy balls smacking his ass
For some reason, I imagined them to be purple, too, like his eggplant of a penis. Heavy like iron, probably swings about when he moves, too. A bull's testicles. He should be put out to pasture.
> Jayce drills into him
Like a New York sidewalk.
> He blames his beautiful penis for that
Yes, this is a real line. Putting that one in my 'shit fujos say'.
> Moaning, mewling, whimpering
The bit about masculinity actually made me MATI. You are going to make a SOCIAL STATEMENT on gender roles when you do this shit? When you have the brown man as an animalistic penis nigger and the omega as a pure white 'breeder'? Really, nigga?
Literal animals, slaves to their instincts and sex. A terrible reality.
Here comes the good shit.
> All you want is to be fucked on big cock and you know it, huh?
Talk about lampshading. That pretty much sums up this universe.
> He's not in there at all, mouth wide and accepting while Jayce spits in it
Yes, he's literally 'fucked stupid'. That dick is just that big and so good.
> You're adorable, you take my cock so well, baby, you were made for it
That white omega pussy sure does hit different in prison, huh? *hits blunt*
> Leaving him with the reminder of the alpha who turned him into a slut
Weren't you already a slut? Or are you made one because he's the baddest, most unruly one?
> The very one Jayce wants to fill with his cute pups
He really is a shit bull, isn't he? He can't function like a human - he's only there to fuck and kill. Should've been put down a long time ago.
> He'd agree to anything to never have this end
12'' cock sure hits differently, literally and figuratively.
> He's nothing, just this pretty thing that will squirt and do as he's told
So. An octopus. He's like an octopus.
> Slick gushing out of him like a malfunctioning fountain
We had 'wet as a water slide' and 'drooling like a dog', now we have this. These authors keep delivering bangers.
> His stomach bulging obscenely
I bet. When you stuff a fire extinguisher up there, you're already past the breaking point. Might as well move on to volleyballs like the Goatse man tried to do.
> Nudging away at his pussy, the base fattening up to his squelching cunt
I just think of a wet sponge, honestly.
> He didn't claim him. He's relieved, of course he is
He literally got fucked to unconsciousness and how he has a purring shitbull for a human on top of him. Christ, these people really ARE worse than furries. This man took a fire hydrant up his snatch and now has gallons of cum flowing out of him. No hentai can match this.
> Both alpha guards stare at his gaping hole, his fucked-red pussy
Anybody think of a strawberry glazed donut here?
> Viktor is reminded of the flawed system, his requests for beta guards that have been denied time and time again
It clearly isn't that flawed if rapist alphas are being sent to sperm banks/prisons. Normally they're allowed free rein to do whatever they want, like rape 12-year-old omegas.
> If he were a breeder, he could be in bed with Jayce for days
Weren't you already going mad for that cock just a few paragraphs ago? Just because you aren't a 'breeder' doesn't mean you're immune to your biology. You're a literal sex puppet and you admit it.
> He'll imagine it's Jayce when he fucks himself with a lifeless toy a few days from now
Hey, another based take: silicone toys are nothing compared to the real thing.
> The trails of milky white leaking out of him eventually slow
Makes me think of petroleum. Same consistency, same amount. Literal barrels of cum.
> The pill he takes every morning would not have allowed his body to foster a safe environment for a fetus
Oh no not the baby fever! Our little omega just hopped on a fire hydrant from our little brown animal and he's already wanting a baby? Let's just get you on Maury already!
> Missing Jayce and his big warm hands and gorgeous cock
It really boils down to lusting after a Bigfoot sized man, doesn't it? Beautiful, large cocks move the world. These women really do have basic tastes. Mr. Hands has nothing on this.
> The hard-working but humbled omega who just had their first difficult case
Penis niggers with 12'' penises sure are a handful, eh? Luckily that omegan vagina comes in clutch; otherwise you'd end up in the ER. If Alphas have penises like horses, omegas have vaginas like vacuums: tight and neverending. Like a pocket dimension is hiding up there.
> Viktor assumes he threatened a lawsuit
Oh I want to see how that holds up in court: would-be alpha rapist gets sent to a rehabilitation facility and complains about the 'sub par' treatment despite everything going to plan. My man really is aiming for the nigger lotto.
> Would willingly throw himself to the wolves for another chance to see him again
Big dicks bring all the hos to the yard.
> Idyllic cottage
Ah, the classic '4 kids and a cottage' reference. Haven't been seeing a lot of those lately, but that might change.
> His heels lift from the ground
Oh no, not our 5'1 omega being lifted up by our ravenous, ferocious brown beast!
Shocker that the alpha who was a public menace was let go and immediately goes and kidnaps his favourite omega. Who could have seen that coming after everything that transpired?
In all seriousness, I do not think I've seen a smut fic, let alone an ABO, be so blatant with its racism. I do not like to use that term lightly. But holy fuck did this author really take it and run with it: making the brown man almost nigger-tier, so aggressive he has to have a muzzle and be tranquilized like a rabid dog (and is described as such) just to behave in a clinical setting. In public his 'ruts' lead him to attack any omega he finds like he's engaging in the knock out game. He's a would-be rapist with a fire hydrant for a penis, and ends up kidnapping our 'female coded' white character for him to become an 'atticwife' - and yes, the author does plan for a sequel. Imagine writing such a long-ass fic with a brown man being sent to a breeding facility because he's too violent. We really, really need to find out what's going on with white women!
The author's response to someone calling out said racism was this:
You know she was mad.
Wanted to post this before I go into Chapter 4 of 'Mind Over Malady'. This is a medical gaslighting fic, and the author posted the usual 'don't like, don't read'. I, of course, had to read it.
I noticed 'medical gaslighting' isn't on there, and it's a major theme of this fic.
Oof. You're lucky he didn't die from aspirating that vomit. That shit is no joke.
So he's a bit of a druggie, even though he says he isn't. He is an opioid addict because he cannot get treatment for his pain, and just so happens to drink hard liquor while doing it. I'm sure the author is aware that female livers is going to absorb more of that alcohol per volume, and be hit harder with higher blood alcohol content. Identifying as a man is not going to change that. He also runs the risk of NAFLD due to all that testosterone use.
Poor Sky. Even when you're not treated like shit, you are still The Mammy.
> You're not dying of liver failure
Not yet. He will eventually.
Drinking mimosas when you take opioids for a living is not a good idea; one would say that's a poor life choice. Making the pooner a druggie is predictable, and quite a choice. I don't think these authors have a lot of self-awareness.
> Name, age, height, weight
I noticed 'sex' isn't mentioned. But go ahead, treat him like a male and watch what happens.
> Tall, dark and handsome medical professional
You could not get any more female-brained or cliched if you tried.
> He wasn't used to having to piss in a cup
The other hospital must've been shit, then. Piss tests are common for drug tests.
I did have a laugh at Viktor gawking at the pregnancy test. Usually, such things are given to females only; the fact that Jayce offered it at all means he knows Viktor isn't a man. They don't have the same kind of hesitancy for men, just women. Getting clocked in under five minutes is a new record.
> The sound made his hair stand on end
He's getting red flags but ignoring them because the doctor is hot. How many times has that happened?
> Considering how his musculature was practically bulging out of his uniform
> Had he hot almost OD'd, he wouldn't have been sitting with some fabulous eye candy
> Who said romance was dead
Very female-brained: you get a sign that a guy is no good, are more distracted with the fact he's hot, and ignore all instincts to chase after dick. Some women really are that shallow and pooners are not immune from that. In fact, they are the worst of all female stereotypes as they abide by the most extreme ones. You just MET said hot doctor. Why you thirsting over him already?
You don't say. Viktor later only remembers him because he was fat, lmao.
> Queer chosen family was like that
Getting horny over a hot doctor who immediately offered you a pregnancy test because he knew you were female isn't 'queer', it's straight with gender sparkles. You really sold that when Viktor was getting hot and bothered as soon as he saw Jayce.
Indeed it is. However, because Viktor is just a shallow pooner, and because they are 100% True and Honest Men, he finds himself talked into it because he magically has no confidence and he wants to be a people pleaser. While a man would debate, disagree, ask why it was important - and male druggies are infamously resistant to treatment - the pooner just shrugs her shoulders and goes with it. A smile makes her bowl over. How predictable.
> Clearly he was not being heard
You think it's because you are trans, or a woman? I don't see any 'transphobia' tags even when this would be a perfect setting for it. Jayce knows he can't get away with this shit with a man. He's doing it with a woman pretending to be one because he knows her weakness. The self-doubt and the self-hatred will lead to all the nasty shit that will later pan out - and necrophilia happens to be more common among males than females. I really don't know what kind of corpses he's going to be fucking.
> He was heftier then
LMAO are you saying he was fat back then? A lil chubby puppy who had too many enchiladas? Was he eating corpses back then, too? I swear, if this author has MEL being the corpse he's eating the Kweens are going to jump her ass, and for good reason. Jayviks have a major problem with that shit.
Now we begin the atticwife arc. I bet there will 10k chapters on corpse fucking, eating, and using Viktor as a human toilet. Girl wasn't kidding about this being a snuff fic.
Since she's been showing up a lot here, problematicism is looking to be a cow of mine. The obsession she has with writing underage shit warrants further criticism, and she's been responsible for the current trend of horrorfics as seen by veeforvindicta, tojipiss, and fujofrankenstein. Here is another installment of her series, where she keeps showing her high school fixation. Predictably, she has a Spotify playlist that features a lot of tracks from the Lolita film, her main inspiration. Her name is 'Lux' or Luxie.
> It would be a good thing to do. The right thing, and he could learn to even forgive himself for the one-time mistake
Uh huh. Such a mistake that you keep fucking doing it. You don't feel regret over it - you only feel regret if you get caught.
> Mapping the curves and dips and sensitive spots of his body
The author wants to make this some kind of pederast fic, but true to form, it still ends up reading like Lolita with a female victim: a teenage girl so beautiful men cannot help themselves around her. Who cares if she's 15? No one cares if she's at a club for adults, drinking and cavorting with them. She's got daddy issues, and needs a proper 'daddy' to take care of her.
> Someone might try to take advantage of you
Pot calling the fucking kettle black.
> I think that man who was trying to talk to you drugged your drinks
BTW, that random man was his dad, Singed. He drugged him with rohypnol for...God knows why. To fuck him himself? Might as well pile on the incest, why not.
> That'd just get all of us in trouble
Note that that's the biggest thing he's worried about.
> Almost childish in the action
He IS a child.
> Unlike his usual doll-like behavior
Funny how the trans man is always the 'doll', pliant and perfect for the grown ass male. There's a blatant trend here.
> Sometimes you act like you're my boyfriend
Well you're not old enough to be his sugar baby. The author has the nerve to call this a 'gay club AU'. You need to be male for one, and two, no one should be focusing this much on teenagers fucking.
> Kayce wonders if he kissed him now, would he feel any effects of the drugs himself?
Unless you're sucking his blood, no. Pretty sure that's rohypnol. If you were drugged, you wouldn't be able to drive.
> He could be the boy's father. He has committed a litany of crimes to have his hands on him
Yeah, he's not guilty over it. He loves it because it's 'unconquered territory' and to fulfill the unfortunately common male fantasy of fucking teens.
> He lets Jayce manhandle him around
As if you were ever strong enough to do otherwise - even sober.
> He fucks into him, the slick sound of it. Viktor's nose scrunches a bit, (at the) lack of preparation, but Jayce knows he can handle it
If he's that wet, why is there a problem? Or is Jayce just that brutal?
> Th idea of anyone else trying to carve their way into Viktor lights a fury inside him
Oh, we can't have our little Lolita date someone their own age, eh? You have to be the one to conquer that untouched flesh, and remind him of the classic 'ain't no one gonna fuck you better than me' mantra.
> The slight whine of pain from the boy only spurs him on further, grinding into him as deep as he can get
If he's on GHB as I think he is, he's not going to be conscious. He's going to be knocked the fuck out - especially with that small body. Singed doesn't make mistakes.
> I should have fucking killed the guy, really
> That was my dad, actually
What a twist! Now, did Singed do it out of paternal protection or did he do it to shag up his own daughter? Get a taste of that cherry lip gloss himself? Who the fuck knows. Lux here needs her hard drive checked.
In this universe, 'unruly' alphas, rapist alphas, the ones who cannot be managed in society, get sent to fancy prisons where they are milked for their sperm so sex-crazed omegas can pop out 'pups'. Basically, the prison industrial complex meets the fertility market, with the best, most attractive and aggressive alphas ejaculating into tubes or stand-mandated sex slaves to ensure the survival of the race. Rather creative spin on it, I must say.
> Snarling against his muzzle
They really do take the dog thing seriously. Brown men in muzzles don't paint the image these fujos want people to paint.
> A girthy erection
Of course. Alpha males in this wield giant horse cocks. It's BBC but with a different race.
> Mad on the streets, lost in rut with no omega to knot and breed
And in order to avoid raping an innocent omega, Jayce gets sent to Sperm CECOT here so he can 'blow off some steam' and get Viktor the omega to blow him.
The optics of having the token brown man be an uncontrollable rapist is also an interesting choice.
> Viktor's cunt is an alpha whisperer, able to bend even the most aggressive alphas to his will
These fics produce some WILD quotes, and this is just one of them. I'll be referencing this in the future.
> All without the need for his exemplary pussy
White omega pussy is the best. You can conquer worlds with it.
> Outside in the world, it's a curse
Well, at least there is SOME self awareness here.
> If he doesn't have viable sperm, or decent genetics, there's no point in keeping him
If this sounds like eugenics, you'd be correct - it IS. They are taking the most desirable alphas and 'filtering' their sperm to get the best 'pups' like it's a dog breeding show. It's weird but also funny because the author has no fucking idea what she just wrote.
> Walks right into a burning oven, sense swarmed by the alpha's potent pheromones
Since these people are walking Scentsys, any guesses on what he smells like? The bear spray decided to head into the 'make shit smell good' department.
> Cunt slickening up, and he's never been so thoroughly unsettled by his own body, sweating and shifting where he stands
And all it took was a hot brown man in a muzzle. White women love big brown guys locked up.
> Appraising his much larger frame and strong physique as would a breeding attendant
So. A show horse. Alphas are literally show horses.
> His large hands are marred with knicks and burns
Let me guess. They can wrap around his waist because Viktor is just that small.
> He is large, a fact that amplifies the empty ache his cunt is trying to remedy by squeezing around nothing
Of course. Dick sizes are never normal in ABO. The bigger, the better. Fire extinguisher cocks are not uncommon.
> Burning bright enough to be mistaken for two miniature suns on the verge of collapse
They'd be red, then.
> He's panting harshly behind his muzzle
This author really wants to paint him like an animal, eh?
> He wants Viktor to submit to him, is likely used to omegas folding under the dominating intoxication of his pheromones
Or he just rapes them, because he was about to do that before he was arrested. This author basically wrote him as your typical low IQ Hispanic rapist and her bitch ass has no clue.
> Any other omega would have presented their sopping wet cunt to him
Because that's all they're good for.
> Alphas in rut respond better to a subservient omega(...) he is with his full authority to use sex as a form of dominance
Shocker, he does just that - before he starts salivating over that massive cock, that is.
> Fingers large enough to completely envelop his slim bony wrist. He could very well hold Viktor's entire waist, or maybe his thigh, with one hand
Yes, it's THIS fucking line. It also suggests that his hands are so fucking huge he can physically hold his entire waist with ONE hand, making his hands larger than the average human hand on the planet. AKA he is literally a fucking gorilla trying to breed the 'human' and 'dainty' omega and holy fuck have I not seen a more racist depiction. I usually don't like using that term, but goddamn.
> Demented bitch, knot-slut, evil sperm scientist
"Evil sperm scientist" has a nice ring to it.
> He needs to be satisfied or else his body will take it as a rejection
AKA he needs to cum or his primal instincts will render him inhuman for all time. Only after cumming in an omega pussy can be become human again.
> I can smell your slick. Is this when I knot you?
Unless there's a change in attitude, having Jayce talk like an animal is, again, really fucking racist. Imagine hearing this come from a progshit rather than someone like Nick Fuentes.
> A non-threatening word to turn into a cuntstruck knothead
Oh I'm using that for penis niggers in the future. What a line.
> His subject is all fired up now that he's got the idea in his head that Viktor will be carrying his pups
'ABO is a deconstruction of gender. We really like exploring things outside of the box.'
> His hand could be a pillow and the alpha would fuck it in a rut
...so your basic unrestrained male.
> The alpha is a hot, throbbing, veiny mess in his hands
Of course. It's not like it would ever be average.
> Revealing the bulbous cockhead flushed so red it's soon to be purple, looking like it was made to be sucked on
Do show how he's going to deepthroat something the size of his forearm. These women have an obsession with horse cocks on darker men. I do think they take their Bad Dragon dildos to heart.
> He can hardly wrap his fingers around the base
Guess his hands are that small.
> Some omegas develop growth during puberty. While Viktor is within the group that did, he never bothered with a pump given how pointless it would be
I assume this is a nod to 'intersex omegas', which isn't how it works, anyways.
> Want to see you holding my pups
Literal subhuman IQ. And it's a progshit writing it.
> They want to cover his beautiful skin in cum
Wonder if it has anti-aging properties.
> Pressing into his uncircumcised tip
Why am I not surprised that circumcision isn't a thing in ABO? We can have brown men being treated as literal animals, but no Jews.
> Who wants to bust his knot in Viktor
Spoiler: they do have an intense fuck session, but no knot is popped. Viktor does get kidnapped at the end, though.
> He wants to drink it all, lick the cup clean, be filled in every hole until he drips like the empty pump he eyes enviously
What does alpha semen taste like? Does it have an array of flavours like their scents or is it just your basic 'salt and sweat' taste?
> Let me go and I'll fuck you like you've never been fucked before
He's not lying about that.
> He really is gorgeous
> A hunter, a predator
White progressive women really have a thing for writing brown men like beasts. There truly can't be something to be gleaned from that, not at all.
> What a little whore
He won't be saying that for long.
> You are safe here
Uh huh. His first instinct is to jump the first omega he sees because he likes them. He was literally sent so Jayce wouldn't rape somebody else.
Oh, thank God he's clean, then! We can't have alpha males carrying any STDs!
> They've seen him spread on an alpha's cock before
Oh, he's about to be tamed real quick.
> Let the alpha do as he pleases with him, ruin him, mold him back together again
> Only moan and beg until he's worked over the alpha's stupid fat cock
A stand-in for a female character losing it over a big dick? You don't say.
> Be grateful when his womb is kissed with life
Don't ever let these people tell you they want to be childfree. They have a breeding kink - they just want it with the 6'0 Chad despite saying otherwise. Always pay attention to what they like.
> Jayce makes him want to be a good omega
Read: housewife.
> He wants the alpha to take his control away as if he never had it in the first place, turn him into a drooling mess who only knows the shape of his alpha's knot
Reducing him to a sex toy that has no thought but to jump on that police baton? You don't say. I think 'wet blanket' is a very apt description.
How much do alphas get paid to breed 'pups'? Is a dollar for each one, or...?
> He reprimands himself for his wanton fantasies. The subject is not in his right mind
Nah, he is. He's just a penis nigger. The author just doesn't think it's racist, lmao.
> No longer a man but a growling and snarling feral beast
See point above. She does this A LOT. The animal allegories and descriptions DO NOT help her case.
> These meat brained alphas, too, believe he must have a holy grail between his legs
You wrote that he was an 'alpha tamer'. What else could you possibly mean with that?
> Slammed with his scent, clenching and dripping around nothing as he takes a wobbling step into the room
Does it still smell like a forge or does it smell like oranges?
> Why does he care that this alpha sounds so ruined by his absence?
Because you want that dick, that's why.
> Spicy wisps of his pheromones
Does it smell like chili? Or a barbecue with that 'smoky aroma'?
> You're so sexy like that...wanna fuck you in it. Just tear a hole and slide my cock into you
Yes, this is how Jayce sounds. He talks like a 1980s porn star who just discovered English for the first time.
> Knowing he's going to fuck this stupid alpha anyway
Bud, you walked right into this. Don't roll your eyes.
> His cunt on full display under the bush of dark hair
Of course there's Rapunzel pubes. Never complete without it. I also think Jayce is Bigfoot here based on how big he's written; these authors always write him as being this hairy, untamed beast and I cannot unsee it.
> Viktor does not trust the alpha to not force himself in with one push, and he's not in the mood to be torn
The fact this is a thing really proves alphas have penises that simply would not work in their species. These penile sizes would work for Dark Souls, because the humanoids are over 8-9 feet tall. Not for normal humans!
> I want to make you feel so good, please, omega, fuck
Oh, he does. He starts spewing pure cringe when the smut starts going.
> Naval
Bitch can't differentiate between 'navel' and 'naval'. One involves submarines, the other involves getting a submarine shoved up his vagoo. Big difference.
> The instinct is natural, a yearning call from within
AKA 'my maternal instincts are calling because there's a big, beautiful cock in front of me'. No, really, that's actually said.
> Jayce is just that big
Just go with the 12'' measurement, as the bigger the better is the norm for ABO.
> Let me fuck you for real
He's not joking about that.
> Nodding like a dumb slut
And neither is he. Funny how that's all omegas get reduced to: a hentai stereotype where they stick their tongue out and drool. This is almost on the level of 'mango loco's level of absurdity, but not quite.
> He's layered in muscle, though unlike the marbled, sculpted depictions of gods
So...your basic bitch description in paperback smut novels. Don't ever let these People of Gender tell you there is no 'peak masculine form' or that masculinity isn't real. They know what it is - and they fucking LOVE IT.
> Kissing Viktor's womb with the bulbous head
I'm just thinking of a giant egg squash here.
> The hands Viktor accurately deduced could fit entirely around his thighs
It wasn't just that - she wrote that he could fit A SINGLE HAND around his waist. Meaning his hands are larger than a normal human hands. We are literally dealing with Bigfoot here.
> He's right where he needs to be, being so pliant to show how good he can be
How fitting that our dainty omega is about to get railed by a 'ferocious beast' that will give him the best dicking of a lifetime. How predictable.
> Fucked stupid and whimpering
Indeed. Amazing how intelligence can be thrown right out the window with a massive cock.
> It's a nice fantasy when he's brainless
Nice lampshading. Also fits the author's commentators, too.
> He could make the alpha promise to take care of him
Your pussy may be good, but it isn't THAT good, trust me.
> You want me to break you?
He's not joking about that.
> I need you, please, make me full, ahhh
And that's all it takes to reduce these people to sub IQ animals.
> Over his womb, where he swears the alpha is trying to fuck his way into
Naturally, there is a belly bulge, because why wouldn't there be if you have a 12'' penis?
> Speared in place and it feels so fucking good
Like a stuffed pig, eh? All you're missing is the apple.
> Gonna put my pups right here
And I'm sending them off to the puppy mill.
> Heavy balls smacking his ass
For some reason, I imagined them to be purple, too, like his eggplant of a penis. Heavy like iron, probably swings about when he moves, too. A bull's testicles. He should be put out to pasture.
> Jayce drills into him
Like a New York sidewalk.
> He blames his beautiful penis for that
Yes, this is a real line. Putting that one in my 'shit fujos say'.
> Moaning, mewling, whimpering
The bit about masculinity actually made me MATI. You are going to make a SOCIAL STATEMENT on gender roles when you do this shit? When you have the brown man as an animalistic penis nigger and the omega as a pure white 'breeder'? Really, nigga?
Literal animals, slaves to their instincts and sex. A terrible reality.
Here comes the good shit.
> All you want is to be fucked on big cock and you know it, huh?
Talk about lampshading. That pretty much sums up this universe.
> He's not in there at all, mouth wide and accepting while Jayce spits in it
Yes, he's literally 'fucked stupid'. That dick is just that big and so good.
> You're adorable, you take my cock so well, baby, you were made for it
That white omega pussy sure does hit different in prison, huh? *hits blunt*
> Leaving him with the reminder of the alpha who turned him into a slut
Weren't you already a slut? Or are you made one because he's the baddest, most unruly one?
> The very one Jayce wants to fill with his cute pups
He really is a shit bull, isn't he? He can't function like a human - he's only there to fuck and kill. Should've been put down a long time ago.
> He'd agree to anything to never have this end
12'' cock sure hits differently, literally and figuratively.
> He's nothing, just this pretty thing that will squirt and do as he's told
So. An octopus. He's like an octopus.
> Slick gushing out of him like a malfunctioning fountain
We had 'wet as a water slide' and 'drooling like a dog', now we have this. These authors keep delivering bangers.
> His stomach bulging obscenely
I bet. When you stuff a fire extinguisher up there, you're already past the breaking point. Might as well move on to volleyballs like the Goatse man tried to do.
> Nudging away at his pussy, the base fattening up to his squelching cunt
I just think of a wet sponge, honestly.
> He didn't claim him. He's relieved, of course he is
He literally got fucked to unconsciousness and how he has a purring shitbull for a human on top of him. Christ, these people really ARE worse than furries. This man took a fire hydrant up his snatch and now has gallons of cum flowing out of him. No hentai can match this.
> Both alpha guards stare at his gaping hole, his fucked-red pussy
Anybody think of a strawberry glazed donut here?
> Viktor is reminded of the flawed system, his requests for beta guards that have been denied time and time again
It clearly isn't that flawed if rapist alphas are being sent to sperm banks/prisons. Normally they're allowed free rein to do whatever they want, like rape 12-year-old omegas.
> If he were a breeder, he could be in bed with Jayce for days
Weren't you already going mad for that cock just a few paragraphs ago? Just because you aren't a 'breeder' doesn't mean you're immune to your biology. You're a literal sex puppet and you admit it.
> He'll imagine it's Jayce when he fucks himself with a lifeless toy a few days from now
Hey, another based take: silicone toys are nothing compared to the real thing.
> The trails of milky white leaking out of him eventually slow
Makes me think of petroleum. Same consistency, same amount. Literal barrels of cum.
> The pill he takes every morning would not have allowed his body to foster a safe environment for a fetus
Oh no not the baby fever! Our little omega just hopped on a fire hydrant from our little brown animal and he's already wanting a baby? Let's just get you on Maury already!
> Missing Jayce and his big warm hands and gorgeous cock
It really boils down to lusting after a Bigfoot sized man, doesn't it? Beautiful, large cocks move the world. These women really do have basic tastes. Mr. Hands has nothing on this.
> The hard-working but humbled omega who just had their first difficult case
Penis niggers with 12'' penises sure are a handful, eh? Luckily that omegan vagina comes in clutch; otherwise you'd end up in the ER. If Alphas have penises like horses, omegas have vaginas like vacuums: tight and neverending. Like a pocket dimension is hiding up there.
> Viktor assumes he threatened a lawsuit
Oh I want to see how that holds up in court: would-be alpha rapist gets sent to a rehabilitation facility and complains about the 'sub par' treatment despite everything going to plan. My man really is aiming for the nigger lotto.
> Would willingly throw himself to the wolves for another chance to see him again
Big dicks bring all the hos to the yard.
> Idyllic cottage
Ah, the classic '4 kids and a cottage' reference. Haven't been seeing a lot of those lately, but that might change.
> His heels lift from the ground
Oh no, not our 5'1 omega being lifted up by our ravenous, ferocious brown beast!
Shocker that the alpha who was a public menace was let go and immediately goes and kidnaps his favourite omega. Who could have seen that coming after everything that transpired?
In all seriousness, I do not think I've seen a smut fic, let alone an ABO, be so blatant with its racism. I do not like to use that term lightly. But holy fuck did this author really take it and run with it: making the brown man almost nigger-tier, so aggressive he has to have a muzzle and be tranquilized like a rabid dog (and is described as such) just to behave in a clinical setting. In public his 'ruts' lead him to attack any omega he finds like he's engaging in the knock out game. He's a would-be rapist with a fire hydrant for a penis, and ends up kidnapping our 'female coded' white character for him to become an 'atticwife' - and yes, the author does plan for a sequel. Imagine writing such a long-ass fic with a brown man being sent to a breeding facility because he's too violent. We really, really need to find out what's going on with white women!
You know she was mad.
You got that right. I've read a few via Google translate back when I was in the Assassin's Creed fandom where characters like Arno Dorian would get guns shoved up his ass. Another had him getting an enema until it 'blew him up like he was pregnant' and he was told to let it shoot out of his anus or lick it up off the floor.
A musician who made an entire EP for Arcane, centered on the Jayvik pairing. I found him first through his work, so he's a bit of a jack-of-all-trades.
China has the largest percentage of Internet users in the world. While AO3 is blocked by its Great Firewall, China does not forbid VPNs, so they access it through a private VPN. LOFTER is a Chinese-language fanfic site and they usually export their stuff from there to AO3. Chinese users are big in fandoms such as 'The Untamed' and 'Scum Villain Society', or any Chinese BL manhua that is popular over there. But one thing you WILL notice is that there are next to no Indian language fic. Not even progshits on AO3 cannot stand Indians. There are no prominent Indian pairings to be found on the site at all. They get it worse than niggers.
Wanted to post this before I go into Chapter 4 of 'Mind Over Malady'. This is a medical gaslighting fic, and the author posted the usual 'don't like, don't read'. I, of course, had to read it.
I noticed 'medical gaslighting' isn't on there, and it's a major theme of this fic.
Oof. You're lucky he didn't die from aspirating that vomit. That shit is no joke.
So he's a bit of a druggie, even though he says he isn't. He is an opioid addict because he cannot get treatment for his pain, and just so happens to drink hard liquor while doing it. I'm sure the author is aware that female livers is going to absorb more of that alcohol per volume, and be hit harder with higher blood alcohol content. Identifying as a man is not going to change that. He also runs the risk of NAFLD due to all that testosterone use.
Poor Sky. Even when you're not treated like shit, you are still The Mammy.
> You're not dying of liver failure
Not yet. He will eventually.
Drinking mimosas when you take opioids for a living is not a good idea; one would say that's a poor life choice. Making the pooner a druggie is predictable, and quite a choice. I don't think these authors have a lot of self-awareness.
> Name, age, height, weight
I noticed 'sex' isn't mentioned. But go ahead, treat him like a male and watch what happens.
> Tall, dark and handsome medical professional
You could not get any more female-brained or cliched if you tried.
> He wasn't used to having to piss in a cup
The other hospital must've been shit, then. Piss tests are common for drug tests.
I did have a laugh at Viktor gawking at the pregnancy test. Usually, such things are given to females only; the fact that Jayce offered it at all means he knows Viktor isn't a man. They don't have the same kind of hesitancy for men, just women. Getting clocked in under five minutes is a new record.
> The sound made his hair stand on end
He's getting red flags but ignoring them because the doctor is hot. How many times has that happened?
> Considering how his musculature was practically bulging out of his uniform
> Had he hot almost OD'd, he wouldn't have been sitting with some fabulous eye candy
> Who said romance was dead
Very female-brained: you get a sign that a guy is no good, are more distracted with the fact he's hot, and ignore all instincts to chase after dick. Some women really are that shallow and pooners are not immune from that. In fact, they are the worst of all female stereotypes as they abide by the most extreme ones. You just MET said hot doctor. Why you thirsting over him already?
You don't say. Viktor later only remembers him because he was fat, lmao.
> Queer chosen family was like that
Getting horny over a hot doctor who immediately offered you a pregnancy test because he knew you were female isn't 'queer', it's straight with gender sparkles. You really sold that when Viktor was getting hot and bothered as soon as he saw Jayce.
Indeed it is. However, because Viktor is just a shallow pooner, and because they are 100% True and Honest Men, he finds himself talked into it because he magically has no confidence and he wants to be a people pleaser. While a man would debate, disagree, ask why it was important - and male druggies are infamously resistant to treatment - the pooner just shrugs her shoulders and goes with it. A smile makes her bowl over. How predictable.
> Clearly he was not being heard
You think it's because you are trans, or a woman? I don't see any 'transphobia' tags even when this would be a perfect setting for it. Jayce knows he can't get away with this shit with a man. He's doing it with a woman pretending to be one because he knows her weakness. The self-doubt and the self-hatred will lead to all the nasty shit that will later pan out - and necrophilia happens to be more common among males than females. I really don't know what kind of corpses he's going to be fucking.
> He was heftier then
LMAO are you saying he was fat back then? A lil chubby puppy who had too many enchiladas? Was he eating corpses back then, too? I swear, if this author has MEL being the corpse he's eating the Kweens are going to jump her ass, and for good reason. Jayviks have a major problem with that shit.
Now we begin the atticwife arc. I bet there will 10k chapters on corpse fucking, eating, and using Viktor as a human toilet. Girl wasn't kidding about this being a snuff fic.
Since she's been showing up a lot here, problematicism is looking to be a cow of mine. The obsession she has with writing underage shit warrants further criticism, and she's been responsible for the current trend of horrorfics as seen by veeforvindicta, tojipiss, and fujofrankenstein. Here is another installment of her series, where she keeps showing her high school fixation. Predictably, she has a Spotify playlist that features a lot of tracks from the Lolita film, her main inspiration. Her name is 'Lux' or Luxie.
> It would be a good thing to do. The right thing, and he could learn to even forgive himself for the one-time mistake
Uh huh. Such a mistake that you keep fucking doing it. You don't feel regret over it - you only feel regret if you get caught.
> Mapping the curves and dips and sensitive spots of his body
The author wants to make this some kind of pederast fic, but true to form, it still ends up reading like Lolita with a female victim: a teenage girl so beautiful men cannot help themselves around her. Who cares if she's 15? No one cares if she's at a club for adults, drinking and cavorting with them. She's got daddy issues, and needs a proper 'daddy' to take care of her.
> Someone might try to take advantage of you
Pot calling the fucking kettle black.
> I think that man who was trying to talk to you drugged your drinks
BTW, that random man was his dad, Singed. He drugged him with rohypnol for...God knows why. To fuck him himself? Might as well pile on the incest, why not.
> That'd just get all of us in trouble
Note that that's the biggest thing he's worried about.
> Almost childish in the action
He IS a child.
> Unlike his usual doll-like behavior
Funny how the trans man is always the 'doll', pliant and perfect for the grown ass male. There's a blatant trend here.
> Sometimes you act like you're my boyfriend
Well you're not old enough to be his sugar baby. The author has the nerve to call this a 'gay club AU'. You need to be male for one, and two, no one should be focusing this much on teenagers fucking.
> Kayce wonders if he kissed him now, would he feel any effects of the drugs himself?
Unless you're sucking his blood, no. Pretty sure that's rohypnol. If you were drugged, you wouldn't be able to drive.
> He could be the boy's father. He has committed a litany of crimes to have his hands on him
Yeah, he's not guilty over it. He loves it because it's 'unconquered territory' and to fulfill the unfortunately common male fantasy of fucking teens.
> He lets Jayce manhandle him around
As if you were ever strong enough to do otherwise - even sober.
> He fucks into him, the slick sound of it. Viktor's nose scrunches a bit, (at the) lack of preparation, but Jayce knows he can handle it
If he's that wet, why is there a problem? Or is Jayce just that brutal?
> Th idea of anyone else trying to carve their way into Viktor lights a fury inside him
Oh, we can't have our little Lolita date someone their own age, eh? You have to be the one to conquer that untouched flesh, and remind him of the classic 'ain't no one gonna fuck you better than me' mantra.
> The slight whine of pain from the boy only spurs him on further, grinding into him as deep as he can get
If he's on GHB as I think he is, he's not going to be conscious. He's going to be knocked the fuck out - especially with that small body. Singed doesn't make mistakes.
> I should have fucking killed the guy, really
> That was my dad, actually
What a twist! Now, did Singed do it out of paternal protection or did he do it to shag up his own daughter? Get a taste of that cherry lip gloss himself? Who the fuck knows. Lux here needs her hard drive checked.
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My gut tells me it's the former, based on this line:
I'm not good enough at Korean to translate this by myself, so I used some machine translation tools:
If the writer is a native Korean, why would they bother to explain a yaoi meme to presumably an audience of Korean yaoi enthusiasts? This might seem crazy, but it seems like this person was writing either in English or at best basic Korean, sending it off to a translator for editing, and then blindly copy pasting what was sent back with translator's notes and all.
Thread tax: I looked at the bookmarks of the only person to bookmark this Korean work, Lightmeup2010 (A), and oh my goodness:
Bonus Putin fic: I saw this Chinese fic in the bookmarks as well:
Clicking the highlighted Chinese tag led me to "Bottom Vladimir Putin"!
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Here is the fourth chapter of Mind over Malady. It's a long one, so bring a drink.
This is after their dramatic cunnilingus session. They haven't actually fucked properly yet; the author promises that will be for the gala section, which is in this chapter. So we'll see what happens.
> As though every part of him is known and wanted
Imagine that: the omega who is a second-class citizen and has to wear collars so as not to be claimed (read: raped) by another alpha is happy HIS alpha is 'not like other alphas'. He's what you would call a 'male feminist'.
> At least not an alpha
Viktor prided himself on not needing them and being fine by himself, until of course his hunk offered him some pain relief and now we're in a FWB situation where they're catching feelings.
> Like this, with your scent all over me and body next to mine
I forgot how often this author repeats herself. We already know Jayce is wrapped up in him; she just wrote him as a 'possessive vine'. The only credit I can give her is that he does act like a human vs a caveman like that prison fic I reviewed yesterday.
> The admission takes him by surprise even though it really shouldn't
Did you just not just admit that fact to yourself a few sentences ago? Viktor admits he was surprised that Jayce stayed at all, so why wouldn't be conclude that Jayce just likes to stay after all?
> It's never been this intimate, with him being held and their bodies so thoroughly entwined
The man just ate you out. I'd call that pretty intimate.
> It's impossible to tell where one begins and the other ends
They're like binary stars, uwu.
> Tries not to let his eyes wander over the broad expanse of his back
Oh I can't wait for all the 'large hand' descriptions and how big his dick is. That's going to be fine. I wonder if his hand will be so big he can hold Viktor's waist with just one of them.
> Stubborn alpha
Viktor is going to say this a lot, so get ready.
> It's domestic in a way that unsettles him
Can't wait for the four kids and a cottage arc.
> The alpha side of him undoubtedly taking pride in the brunet's approval
Lmao, even the author uses the gender-specific terms for 'brunet' and 'brunette'. Interesting how alphas are always expected to express pride and dominance, while the omegas have to be demure and domestic. Deconstructing gender, indeed.
> Jayce is going to be the death of him one day
He already presented you with a collar and you're 'biological instincts' are screaming for him to breed you. That fate was already sealed when he presented you with that slave collar - er, 'special property' collar.
> He's grown dependent, and yet the thought (just noticed she used 'the' twice) does not unsettle him as it normally would
You wanna know why? Because It's Just Biology speaking. He's obeying his biological imperative to breed, to know his place, and he's settling in because that is the way he was made.
> Permession
Oh, someone didn't have a beta, eh?
> He has never considered himself to be a creature of want, at least not in the primal sense
The 'I never wanted anyone until I wanted you' cliché.
> Wishing the alpha wasn't so stubborn
Make that the second time this was used.
> Not with the steadily increasing amount of blankets and pillows
When I say that people in this universe act like birds, I mean it. They steal pillows and blankets for their 'mates' like they're sticks or car keys, and true to form, Viktor is 'nesting' like he's about to lay a clutch of eggs. These 'people' cannot even act like normal humans.
> Viktor would normally have some choice words to say about clinging to the man's arm like an accessory
Says the man who wears a collar made by him to designate him as his property. No fucking self-awareness.
> The alpha has every intention of showing him off as his partner
What's that about being an accessory? You ARE being treated as one, because by doing that, he's showing that you're off limits. He is the alpha and he has made his claim. You? You're just a domestic bitch ready to have some pups. No more, no less.
> Which he knows Jayce's ideals are more progressive
> His disposition on Zaun is still far from favourable
So he isn't that progressive, especially since he made Viktor wear that collar. Custom made or not, that means you are property of an alpha, who are the 'top dogs' in society. This also means Jayce sees Viktor as 'one of the good ones', while still viewing his people as animals. That's something the author clearly overlooks.
> He can't help but feel a strange furl of exhilaration
The man just admitted he's still racist towards your people but hey, he makes YOU feel giddy and that's okay, boo.
> I'm not bringing you as a political statement
He is, in fact, bringing him as a political statement. You wouldn't ask if he could wear his colours if this was not a political statement.
> A dark green undershirt clings to (his) figure, the fabric soft and breathable beneath a deep red waistcoat
Dark green and burgundy go, but when I think 'deep red', I think either wine-red or scarlet. They are complementary colours, but I just think of the Christmas shits.
> It doesn't matter how often Viktor has seen him this way, it still captures his attention each time, lingering on the broad width of his shoulders and the sharpness of his jawline
AKA he is distracted and in love with the Chad physique.
> Along with the collar that Jayce had crafted for him
What's that about not being seen as a political statement and an accessory? That collar ITSELF is both.
> Lifting him by the waist like he weighs nothing - which he supposes to someone like Jayce, he doesn't
You're just a smol uwu omega, barely 100 lbs soaking wet. You tiny lil thing, you.
> They look like mates
Which was the intent. So much for it not being a political statement.
> For all of his charisma and ambition, Jayce has always been by the desire to please
*Lived by the desire to please
> When Jayce subtly - and not so subtly - begins to show him off
You were already showing him off with that colour and his Zaunite colours. Everyone noticed as soon as you entered the room.
> There'd be nothing but pride on his face
> A gleam of pride
You'll be seeing this a lot.
> An alpha-like arrogance that is exaggerating just as much as it is strangely attractive
Why is it attractive? Because it's mate-guarding. It's the feeling women get when their man protects them from other would-be mates trying to gain access to their reproductive capabilities. Just in case you never had enough clues that omegas were not stand-ins for women.
> As if shielding him from the scrutiny of other guests. The omega appreciates it more than he'd like to admit
See point above. His 'alpha male' is protecting him and showing him his worth. All he's missing is the elaborate dance - which he later does.
> Slipping into the role he'd been groomed for
'Groomed for'? I was told alphas were always born to lead, because That's Just Biology. What's this about taking on social roles that are already biologically ordained?
> The inclusion makes him feel warm
Of course. Omegas are second-class citizens; being treated like a human being must feel nice.
> He allows himself to rest his head on Jayce's shoulder as the man speaks
'He did not want to be seen as a political statement' my ass.
> Some of the other omegas in attendance wear similar expressions, envious at how he's the one who holds the alpha's aattentions
Do they not see the collar? The author also wrote that omegas wear collars if they're 'claimed', and fancy ones if they're Piltovan. So where are theirs?
> He's downright furious with the alphas who display open respect towards him
He's not mad at the biology and how society is built around that respect, he's only mad that it's not shown in this setting. If he truly cared, he'd be lobbying for omegan right. He doesn't. He knows what their place is as well as his. He's only mad because it's HIS mate that's being threatened, not because he gives a damn about them being seen as people.
> Some of the alphas look at him with thinly veiled contempt
What's that about not making a political statement?
> Seeing them treat you like that, like you're nothing
Hey, it's Just Biology. You were born into that social code; why would you ever want to change it? You can transition from a woman to a man with your 'primary gender', but you cannot identify as an alpha. That's scandalous.
> You and I both know it doesn't matter. Their opinions are insignificant
> Their approval means very little
1. Redundant. 2. Yes it does, you need their money 3. You obviously do care because they are rich alphas parading around their omegas and here you are, a Zaunite, being paraded around with a higher class man who still admits to hating your people. Very consistent storytelling.
> This is absurd, ridiculous, downright humiliating
That is, but wearing a collar isn't? Ho hum.
> The comforting scent of fire and leather and the subtle undertone of cinnamon
Ah, so that's what alphas smell like. They really do smell like a Febreeze collection. Which one of them smells like fresh spring linens?
> Devouring him like a man starved
Cliché. Here comes the spice.
> A thought that doesn't alarm him as much as it should
That happens a lot. And why should it alarm you when that's what you want? It's a contradictory statement.
> It's humiliating, almost, his responsiveness - still he's soaked through, aching to be pleasured, to be filled
It's Just Biology, and you are just fulfilling your role. Why would it be humiliating?
> I ca smell how slick you are
Does it smell like oranges or tuna salad?
> Makes him seem more beast than man
Funny. Make the brown man the beast and the alpha male, based on outdated wolf pack dynamics, to dominate the smaller, paler white man with a vagina.
> Rubbing his face in his neck like a cat marking its territory
They're just leaving their scent when they do that. Animals piss on things to mark their territory. This fic does not have a piss kink tag, thankfully.
> Arousal unfurling like the petals of a flower
Provided it's not Viktor's vulva doing this, we're good.
> If you can take four, I'll fuck you
What a gentleman, preparing his omega like that.
> Your whole fist, if need be
I did NOT expect this line, holy shit.
> Nearly scent-drunk on the alpha's pheromones
I bet it smells like Starbucks and a taco truck.
> His tongue is devastating, hot, thorough, and ravenous
> Mouthing at his cunt like he means to drink him down
> The alpha's tongue slick and relentless, fucking into him skillfully
Redundant.
> Every obscene slurp
I keep telling you, I think of Chinese noodles when they write it like this.
> Then four, slow and steady and mercilessly thick
Oh yeah, I forgot that the author wrote his fingers as huge. Yeti punchers, indeed.
> Stretched impossibly wide
But can you take a volleyball up there?
> Be a good boy while I get my cock in you?
More like horse cock.
> Like his brain has been completely disconnected and all that's left is his instincts
You were already acting like that before the sex scene.
> A wrecked sob
He's going to get a lot, get ready.
> He just wants more. Needs it. Needs his alpha
He NEEDS to be bred he NEEDS those puppies he NEEDS that 12'' police baton. He needs to be stuffed like a carnival falafel!
> Gonna fuck you so deep you feel it for days
He's not kidding about that.
> Thinks better of it when he remembers just how big Jayce is, his fingers just barely connecting around the sheer fucking girth of him
Oh yeah, I forgot about that. Either Viktor's hands are just that small, or Jayce really is walking around with a horse cock. These ABO authors really have a fetish with giving him genitalia a farm handler would be proud of. He's basically the girth of a Boss Hog sex toy.
> Slicked and flushed and far too big
Like taking a baby the opposite way.
> As if he's not currently in the process of splitting him in half
Like a rotisserie chicken.
> Scruffs him
Yes, he picks him up from the back of his neck like he's a kitten, and since these people behave like animals, he calms down real quick. Doesn't stop him from sobbing, though.
> Stuffed full
Like a stuffed pig.
> Too empty-headed and cock-drunk
Literally.
> He carves out a space inside of him that no one else can ever hope to fill
Cliché.
> He nudges right up against his cervix
Pretty sure he wasn't just 'nudging' up against it - he was pounding against it.
> His groan is so feral
Almost like he's an animal, eh?
> Nngh fuck
You're gonna need more NNGG and HNNNG if you want that ambulance to come by.
> From the hollow of his chest to the burning spot where Jayce's cock is buried so deep inside of him that he can almost sense it in his throat
Cliché. If he's in the hollow of his chest, he really is packing a fire extinguisher - he's more than 12'', and thick as a Yankee candle. These women are utterly OBSESSED with giving him an animal-like penis.
> His cock unintentionally kisses his cervix on every thrust
I thought he could feel it in the 'hollow of his chest'? And what happened to 'nudging' against his cervix?
> It's said with nothing but pride
Yeah, making your partner sob and cry because it hurts so much with that horse cock of yours (God, I'm starting to sound like Vaush here) is something to be proud of. You just can't empathize because alphas can't be penetrated. That's an affront to biology.
> You'll tear
He's already tearing. He was being 'split in half' remember?
> Slick gushes out of him in aborted pulses
Because that dick is acting like a plug, right?
> His womb is empty. How is he supposed to be satisfied with that?
Ah, glad we're going back to the 'fairer sex' being angry that Mr. Hands here didn't impregnate him. That's for next chapter, I presume. He'll finally take that knot and they'll have four kids and a cottage, reproductive functions completed.
> Too sweet for someone who had just fucked him into the mattress
More emphasis was placed on Jayce's size than the actual sex.
> Viktor, you're purring
Going back to our animal roots, I see.
> Express his happiness in the most omegan way he's able
So, omegans purr like cats, alphas growl like dogs, and both revert back to animal instincts when it comes time for breeding. The knotting scene is going to be wild.
Guess all it took to get rid of your pride and independence was a good dicking, eh? Tale as old as time.
This fic is not as badly written as other ABOs, and just as outwardly aggressively racist like that one prison one. I do like their dynamics, but the social dynamics and Viktor being the 'frail, dainty sex' was not lost on me. He is a stand-in for a woman, simple as. Jayce has the typical 'alpha cock' that is inhumanly large that miraculously does not cause blood loss and does not cause any vaginal prolapses. Their anatomy truly is fascinating. I'm curious to see how this one ends.
Do you get upset when your boytoy doesn't respond after a few weeks? Dragonbagel's got you covered.
Well that's quite a turnaround from the previous fic, eh? We go from alpha males with equine genitalia to strap-ons. What a world.
> Sex was something he'd come to associate with Viktor
Oh? Why? You also cannot say that you associate intimacy with him and then say you don't expect it of him - one negates the other. This is also contradicted when he later complains he doesn't get any for weeks on end.
> Since that night Jayce had shown up at Viktor's door on the brink of a nervous breakdown
If they don't make him an animal, they make him a BPD or socially anxious mess. He's neither, but they do love projecting onto him.
Name one thing that doesn't drive you crazy, boy.
What's that about not expecting intimacy? You're out here demanding it after treating your pet pooner after a dinner date. He's such a nice guy he reverts to his innate programming when he doesn't get what he wants.
> He didn't dislike her company, he simply preferred Viktor's
She's still catching strays even when she isn't even the love interest. She just exists and these people get mad as fuck.
What's that? A reporter for a fake news magazine is trying to find out if our Golden Boy is banging a Zaunite? Hmm, what's the bigger scandal? Him fucking that, or him fucking a trans person?
> He knew that Viktor must have been scared
Right, so why didn't you assume that that is the reason why he's been avoiding you? Are you that tone deaf and socially unaware that you don't think there will be consequences to that?
Not only was our dear Helena a tabloid journo-scum - she's a gossip magazine journo-scum. Meaning she can ask invasive questions and get away with people because people are hungry for details. She wants to know if Viktor is good at it because how could he possibly keep such an Adonis by his side?
> People have been saying I slept my way here since I became the Dean's assistant
That shouldn't be old news to Viktor. He should be well aware of it, in fact. Now, we have to find out whether he is Slut Viktor or Chaste Viktor.
> The things they would say about you if this became public
Such as? Give me some examples. You want to be offensive? Ask if white pussy is better than black pussy, for starters.
> Not because he thought Viktor incapable, but because he cared
I see this a lot. While it's touching, it gets repetitive after a while.
He finds those things patronizing or pitying, but not gossip mags that are asking him if he's good at blowjobs. Consistency.
> He kissed Viktor's top surgery scars, then his nipples
I'm surprised he still has nerves there.
You know the drill: all the uses of 'cock' here refer to a roid clit 2 inches long. I won't be pressing on that further.
> While he wouldn't go so far as to call it good
Wait a minute. Is Jayce here saying that Viktor's pussy tastes bad? That is a fucking first. Imagine writing a tender love story (which is rare in this genre) and you have the male love interest saying that your pussy stinks. Fucking hell
Why is he confused? Haven't they had sex like this before, or have they really not been 'intimate' in the case of lovemaking?
> He knew they were both clean, he was aware that Viktor didn't take birth control because it interacted weirdly with his hormones
She means testosterone. There is hormonal-free birth control, as well as IUDs. They're concerned about STDs but not pregnancy. Strange.
How touching that we get a love-making fic when they usually involve piss fetishes and getting so high they think they're fucking fairies. Definitely takes me for a loop.
> He had called them cringey
They are. Sappy, too.
> Sex with Viktor was always good, but this...this was special
Why wasn't it special the other times? It was never made clear that you were FWBs.
> Jayce had always thought of fucking and lovemaking to be synonymous
1. He would never actually think that and 2. They are not. He clearly prefers Viktor's company, so why DOESN'T he view this as important?
> You make me feel so loved
Ugh, get me a tissue, I'm going to be sick (really).
So much for being judged by society. Guess we're throwing that out the window for an expensive wedding. Fuck the rules, I have money!
And that's it. Definitely unique in that it's more in the tender-and-sappy department. Otherwise totally forgettable, unlike the Jayce before who speaks like a caveman or has an equine dick. Sometimes you gotta take the tiny wins when you can, and appreciate the light stuff before the heavy shit hits you again.
This is after their dramatic cunnilingus session. They haven't actually fucked properly yet; the author promises that will be for the gala section, which is in this chapter. So we'll see what happens.
> As though every part of him is known and wanted
Imagine that: the omega who is a second-class citizen and has to wear collars so as not to be claimed (read: raped) by another alpha is happy HIS alpha is 'not like other alphas'. He's what you would call a 'male feminist'.
> At least not an alpha
Viktor prided himself on not needing them and being fine by himself, until of course his hunk offered him some pain relief and now we're in a FWB situation where they're catching feelings.
> Like this, with your scent all over me and body next to mine
I forgot how often this author repeats herself. We already know Jayce is wrapped up in him; she just wrote him as a 'possessive vine'. The only credit I can give her is that he does act like a human vs a caveman like that prison fic I reviewed yesterday.
> The admission takes him by surprise even though it really shouldn't
Did you just not just admit that fact to yourself a few sentences ago? Viktor admits he was surprised that Jayce stayed at all, so why wouldn't be conclude that Jayce just likes to stay after all?
> It's never been this intimate, with him being held and their bodies so thoroughly entwined
The man just ate you out. I'd call that pretty intimate.
> It's impossible to tell where one begins and the other ends
They're like binary stars, uwu.
> Tries not to let his eyes wander over the broad expanse of his back
Oh I can't wait for all the 'large hand' descriptions and how big his dick is. That's going to be fine. I wonder if his hand will be so big he can hold Viktor's waist with just one of them.
> Stubborn alpha
Viktor is going to say this a lot, so get ready.
> It's domestic in a way that unsettles him
Can't wait for the four kids and a cottage arc.
> The alpha side of him undoubtedly taking pride in the brunet's approval
Lmao, even the author uses the gender-specific terms for 'brunet' and 'brunette'. Interesting how alphas are always expected to express pride and dominance, while the omegas have to be demure and domestic. Deconstructing gender, indeed.
> Jayce is going to be the death of him one day
He already presented you with a collar and you're 'biological instincts' are screaming for him to breed you. That fate was already sealed when he presented you with that slave collar - er, 'special property' collar.
> He's grown dependent, and yet the thought (just noticed she used 'the' twice) does not unsettle him as it normally would
You wanna know why? Because It's Just Biology speaking. He's obeying his biological imperative to breed, to know his place, and he's settling in because that is the way he was made.
> Permession
Oh, someone didn't have a beta, eh?
> He has never considered himself to be a creature of want, at least not in the primal sense
The 'I never wanted anyone until I wanted you' cliché.
> Wishing the alpha wasn't so stubborn
Make that the second time this was used.
> Not with the steadily increasing amount of blankets and pillows
When I say that people in this universe act like birds, I mean it. They steal pillows and blankets for their 'mates' like they're sticks or car keys, and true to form, Viktor is 'nesting' like he's about to lay a clutch of eggs. These 'people' cannot even act like normal humans.
> Viktor would normally have some choice words to say about clinging to the man's arm like an accessory
Says the man who wears a collar made by him to designate him as his property. No fucking self-awareness.
> The alpha has every intention of showing him off as his partner
What's that about being an accessory? You ARE being treated as one, because by doing that, he's showing that you're off limits. He is the alpha and he has made his claim. You? You're just a domestic bitch ready to have some pups. No more, no less.
> Which he knows Jayce's ideals are more progressive
> His disposition on Zaun is still far from favourable
So he isn't that progressive, especially since he made Viktor wear that collar. Custom made or not, that means you are property of an alpha, who are the 'top dogs' in society. This also means Jayce sees Viktor as 'one of the good ones', while still viewing his people as animals. That's something the author clearly overlooks.
> He can't help but feel a strange furl of exhilaration
The man just admitted he's still racist towards your people but hey, he makes YOU feel giddy and that's okay, boo.
> I'm not bringing you as a political statement
He is, in fact, bringing him as a political statement. You wouldn't ask if he could wear his colours if this was not a political statement.
> A dark green undershirt clings to (his) figure, the fabric soft and breathable beneath a deep red waistcoat
Dark green and burgundy go, but when I think 'deep red', I think either wine-red or scarlet. They are complementary colours, but I just think of the Christmas shits.
> It doesn't matter how often Viktor has seen him this way, it still captures his attention each time, lingering on the broad width of his shoulders and the sharpness of his jawline
AKA he is distracted and in love with the Chad physique.
> Along with the collar that Jayce had crafted for him
What's that about not being seen as a political statement and an accessory? That collar ITSELF is both.
> Lifting him by the waist like he weighs nothing - which he supposes to someone like Jayce, he doesn't
You're just a smol uwu omega, barely 100 lbs soaking wet. You tiny lil thing, you.
> They look like mates
Which was the intent. So much for it not being a political statement.
> For all of his charisma and ambition, Jayce has always been by the desire to please
*Lived by the desire to please
> When Jayce subtly - and not so subtly - begins to show him off
You were already showing him off with that colour and his Zaunite colours. Everyone noticed as soon as you entered the room.
> There'd be nothing but pride on his face
> A gleam of pride
You'll be seeing this a lot.
> An alpha-like arrogance that is exaggerating just as much as it is strangely attractive
Why is it attractive? Because it's mate-guarding. It's the feeling women get when their man protects them from other would-be mates trying to gain access to their reproductive capabilities. Just in case you never had enough clues that omegas were not stand-ins for women.
> As if shielding him from the scrutiny of other guests. The omega appreciates it more than he'd like to admit
See point above. His 'alpha male' is protecting him and showing him his worth. All he's missing is the elaborate dance - which he later does.
> Slipping into the role he'd been groomed for
'Groomed for'? I was told alphas were always born to lead, because That's Just Biology. What's this about taking on social roles that are already biologically ordained?
> The inclusion makes him feel warm
Of course. Omegas are second-class citizens; being treated like a human being must feel nice.
> He allows himself to rest his head on Jayce's shoulder as the man speaks
'He did not want to be seen as a political statement' my ass.
> Some of the other omegas in attendance wear similar expressions, envious at how he's the one who holds the alpha's aattentions
Do they not see the collar? The author also wrote that omegas wear collars if they're 'claimed', and fancy ones if they're Piltovan. So where are theirs?
> He's downright furious with the alphas who display open respect towards him
He's not mad at the biology and how society is built around that respect, he's only mad that it's not shown in this setting. If he truly cared, he'd be lobbying for omegan right. He doesn't. He knows what their place is as well as his. He's only mad because it's HIS mate that's being threatened, not because he gives a damn about them being seen as people.
> Some of the alphas look at him with thinly veiled contempt
What's that about not making a political statement?
> Seeing them treat you like that, like you're nothing
Hey, it's Just Biology. You were born into that social code; why would you ever want to change it? You can transition from a woman to a man with your 'primary gender', but you cannot identify as an alpha. That's scandalous.
> You and I both know it doesn't matter. Their opinions are insignificant
> Their approval means very little
1. Redundant. 2. Yes it does, you need their money 3. You obviously do care because they are rich alphas parading around their omegas and here you are, a Zaunite, being paraded around with a higher class man who still admits to hating your people. Very consistent storytelling.
> This is absurd, ridiculous, downright humiliating
That is, but wearing a collar isn't? Ho hum.
> The comforting scent of fire and leather and the subtle undertone of cinnamon
Ah, so that's what alphas smell like. They really do smell like a Febreeze collection. Which one of them smells like fresh spring linens?
> Devouring him like a man starved
Cliché. Here comes the spice.
> A thought that doesn't alarm him as much as it should
That happens a lot. And why should it alarm you when that's what you want? It's a contradictory statement.
> It's humiliating, almost, his responsiveness - still he's soaked through, aching to be pleasured, to be filled
It's Just Biology, and you are just fulfilling your role. Why would it be humiliating?
> I ca smell how slick you are
Does it smell like oranges or tuna salad?
> Makes him seem more beast than man
Funny. Make the brown man the beast and the alpha male, based on outdated wolf pack dynamics, to dominate the smaller, paler white man with a vagina.
> Rubbing his face in his neck like a cat marking its territory
They're just leaving their scent when they do that. Animals piss on things to mark their territory. This fic does not have a piss kink tag, thankfully.
> Arousal unfurling like the petals of a flower
Provided it's not Viktor's vulva doing this, we're good.
> If you can take four, I'll fuck you
What a gentleman, preparing his omega like that.
> Your whole fist, if need be
I did NOT expect this line, holy shit.
> Nearly scent-drunk on the alpha's pheromones
I bet it smells like Starbucks and a taco truck.
> His tongue is devastating, hot, thorough, and ravenous
> Mouthing at his cunt like he means to drink him down
> The alpha's tongue slick and relentless, fucking into him skillfully
Redundant.
> Every obscene slurp
I keep telling you, I think of Chinese noodles when they write it like this.
> Then four, slow and steady and mercilessly thick
Oh yeah, I forgot that the author wrote his fingers as huge. Yeti punchers, indeed.
> Stretched impossibly wide
But can you take a volleyball up there?
> Be a good boy while I get my cock in you?
More like horse cock.
> Like his brain has been completely disconnected and all that's left is his instincts
You were already acting like that before the sex scene.
> A wrecked sob
He's going to get a lot, get ready.
> He just wants more. Needs it. Needs his alpha
He NEEDS to be bred he NEEDS those puppies he NEEDS that 12'' police baton. He needs to be stuffed like a carnival falafel!
> Gonna fuck you so deep you feel it for days
He's not kidding about that.
> Thinks better of it when he remembers just how big Jayce is, his fingers just barely connecting around the sheer fucking girth of him
Oh yeah, I forgot about that. Either Viktor's hands are just that small, or Jayce really is walking around with a horse cock. These ABO authors really have a fetish with giving him genitalia a farm handler would be proud of. He's basically the girth of a Boss Hog sex toy.
> Slicked and flushed and far too big
Like taking a baby the opposite way.
> As if he's not currently in the process of splitting him in half
Like a rotisserie chicken.
> Scruffs him
Yes, he picks him up from the back of his neck like he's a kitten, and since these people behave like animals, he calms down real quick. Doesn't stop him from sobbing, though.
> Stuffed full
Like a stuffed pig.
> Too empty-headed and cock-drunk
Literally.
> He carves out a space inside of him that no one else can ever hope to fill
Cliché.
> He nudges right up against his cervix
Pretty sure he wasn't just 'nudging' up against it - he was pounding against it.
> His groan is so feral
Almost like he's an animal, eh?
> Nngh fuck
You're gonna need more NNGG and HNNNG if you want that ambulance to come by.
> From the hollow of his chest to the burning spot where Jayce's cock is buried so deep inside of him that he can almost sense it in his throat
Cliché. If he's in the hollow of his chest, he really is packing a fire extinguisher - he's more than 12'', and thick as a Yankee candle. These women are utterly OBSESSED with giving him an animal-like penis.
> His cock unintentionally kisses his cervix on every thrust
I thought he could feel it in the 'hollow of his chest'? And what happened to 'nudging' against his cervix?
> It's said with nothing but pride
Yeah, making your partner sob and cry because it hurts so much with that horse cock of yours (God, I'm starting to sound like Vaush here) is something to be proud of. You just can't empathize because alphas can't be penetrated. That's an affront to biology.
> You'll tear
He's already tearing. He was being 'split in half' remember?
> Slick gushes out of him in aborted pulses
Because that dick is acting like a plug, right?
> His womb is empty. How is he supposed to be satisfied with that?
Ah, glad we're going back to the 'fairer sex' being angry that Mr. Hands here didn't impregnate him. That's for next chapter, I presume. He'll finally take that knot and they'll have four kids and a cottage, reproductive functions completed.
> Too sweet for someone who had just fucked him into the mattress
More emphasis was placed on Jayce's size than the actual sex.
> Viktor, you're purring
Going back to our animal roots, I see.
> Express his happiness in the most omegan way he's able
So, omegans purr like cats, alphas growl like dogs, and both revert back to animal instincts when it comes time for breeding. The knotting scene is going to be wild.
Guess all it took to get rid of your pride and independence was a good dicking, eh? Tale as old as time.
This fic is not as badly written as other ABOs, and just as outwardly aggressively racist like that one prison one. I do like their dynamics, but the social dynamics and Viktor being the 'frail, dainty sex' was not lost on me. He is a stand-in for a woman, simple as. Jayce has the typical 'alpha cock' that is inhumanly large that miraculously does not cause blood loss and does not cause any vaginal prolapses. Their anatomy truly is fascinating. I'm curious to see how this one ends.
Do you get upset when your boytoy doesn't respond after a few weeks? Dragonbagel's got you covered.
Well that's quite a turnaround from the previous fic, eh? We go from alpha males with equine genitalia to strap-ons. What a world.
> Sex was something he'd come to associate with Viktor
Oh? Why? You also cannot say that you associate intimacy with him and then say you don't expect it of him - one negates the other. This is also contradicted when he later complains he doesn't get any for weeks on end.
> Since that night Jayce had shown up at Viktor's door on the brink of a nervous breakdown
If they don't make him an animal, they make him a BPD or socially anxious mess. He's neither, but they do love projecting onto him.
Name one thing that doesn't drive you crazy, boy.
What's that about not expecting intimacy? You're out here demanding it after treating your pet pooner after a dinner date. He's such a nice guy he reverts to his innate programming when he doesn't get what he wants.
> He didn't dislike her company, he simply preferred Viktor's
She's still catching strays even when she isn't even the love interest. She just exists and these people get mad as fuck.
What's that? A reporter for a fake news magazine is trying to find out if our Golden Boy is banging a Zaunite? Hmm, what's the bigger scandal? Him fucking that, or him fucking a trans person?
> He knew that Viktor must have been scared
Right, so why didn't you assume that that is the reason why he's been avoiding you? Are you that tone deaf and socially unaware that you don't think there will be consequences to that?
Not only was our dear Helena a tabloid journo-scum - she's a gossip magazine journo-scum. Meaning she can ask invasive questions and get away with people because people are hungry for details. She wants to know if Viktor is good at it because how could he possibly keep such an Adonis by his side?
> People have been saying I slept my way here since I became the Dean's assistant
That shouldn't be old news to Viktor. He should be well aware of it, in fact. Now, we have to find out whether he is Slut Viktor or Chaste Viktor.
> The things they would say about you if this became public
Such as? Give me some examples. You want to be offensive? Ask if white pussy is better than black pussy, for starters.
> Not because he thought Viktor incapable, but because he cared
I see this a lot. While it's touching, it gets repetitive after a while.
He finds those things patronizing or pitying, but not gossip mags that are asking him if he's good at blowjobs. Consistency.
> He kissed Viktor's top surgery scars, then his nipples
I'm surprised he still has nerves there.
You know the drill: all the uses of 'cock' here refer to a roid clit 2 inches long. I won't be pressing on that further.
> While he wouldn't go so far as to call it good
Wait a minute. Is Jayce here saying that Viktor's pussy tastes bad? That is a fucking first. Imagine writing a tender love story (which is rare in this genre) and you have the male love interest saying that your pussy stinks. Fucking hell
Why is he confused? Haven't they had sex like this before, or have they really not been 'intimate' in the case of lovemaking?
> He knew they were both clean, he was aware that Viktor didn't take birth control because it interacted weirdly with his hormones
She means testosterone. There is hormonal-free birth control, as well as IUDs. They're concerned about STDs but not pregnancy. Strange.
How touching that we get a love-making fic when they usually involve piss fetishes and getting so high they think they're fucking fairies. Definitely takes me for a loop.
> He had called them cringey
They are. Sappy, too.
> Sex with Viktor was always good, but this...this was special
Why wasn't it special the other times? It was never made clear that you were FWBs.
> Jayce had always thought of fucking and lovemaking to be synonymous
1. He would never actually think that and 2. They are not. He clearly prefers Viktor's company, so why DOESN'T he view this as important?
> You make me feel so loved
Ugh, get me a tissue, I'm going to be sick (really).
So much for being judged by society. Guess we're throwing that out the window for an expensive wedding. Fuck the rules, I have money!
And that's it. Definitely unique in that it's more in the tender-and-sappy department. Otherwise totally forgettable, unlike the Jayce before who speaks like a caveman or has an equine dick. Sometimes you gotta take the tiny wins when you can, and appreciate the light stuff before the heavy shit hits you again.
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