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- Sep 9, 2021
The fifth chapter of Mind over Malady has been published. Lots of emotional whiplash in this one, as well as a reference to dubcon because alpha males cannot control themselves, go figure.
I have noticed a huge obsession with scent in this fic, and it is a staple of ABO fics in general. Their moods release different scents, and they can be sour, sweet, any flavour of gasoline or alcohol, and blood oranges. This takes place after Viktor took that horse cock up his omegan vagina, and throws a temper tantrum because his 'dear alpha' is not in the same bed as him.
This has as much venom as when JanetGirl's fic had Jayce crowd Viktor in the kitchen when he dared grab some food. You'd think he could smell that alpha scent because of how strong it is. He 'longs for his touch' and sulks, while acting snippy and bitching in the next minute. Your blood sugar too low, friend?
> Watches him with a possessive kind of fondness
Yes, this fic is going to take a dark turn. Because we need that 'freak4freak'.
> I'm not
Fuck off. I really, really hate it when Viktor acts like a moody teenage girl. Your big dicked alpha went to go make food. Calm your ass down. I'd feel pampered if my man did that for me.
> The honesty surprises him even though it doesn't
Contradiction. It shouldn't be a surprise at all because he already confessed in the prior chapter.
> You smell...happy, content, it's doing funny things to my insincts
Oh, really? Are you going to stay a happy puppy or revert right back to being a human shitbull when things get nasty? Turns out, it's the latter.
> Progress waits for no one, Jayce
He says that, and then has to take an entire week off because of his 'heat', aka ovulation, because if he's near an alpha he's just going to go, 'alpha alpha breed me' and waste his time fucking.
> I wasn't exactly gentle with you last night
No shit. He just shoved that Coke can cock in there and made his stomach look like Play-Doh with that belly bulge. The casual utterance of 'he survived' and that he would be bedridden without that venom should be way more concerning: those horse-sized penises are not economical, and can actually kill people.
> He doesn't question it
> He suspects Jayce likes that thought a little more than he lets on
So he DOES question it.
> It will make a fine addition to his nest
You mean your stinky-ass bedroom?
> Burrows himself in his nest
You are a human, not a fucking sun spider.
> Which for a healthy omega, would be seven days
Wanna bet the plot twist here is that he gets pregnant at the end?
> It's a blessing since he's never had to rely on suppressants to quell his cycle - a luxury most omegas couldn't afford
Ah, glad we're back to addressing the social problems again. I almost forgot about that because of how many times our little omega here got stuffed like a turkey. He still has to wear a collar to mark himself as someone else's property, remember.
> He's sure his pheromones are potent enough at this point where someone standing in close proximity could discern he'll reach the height of it soon
Not even humans do this. And if Jayce can smell such potent pheromones, how come you couldn't smell his through the walls?
> He can see the alpha deflate
He deflates because he's not the one who's going to be knotting our dear omega, who painted himself as a stalwart 'feminist' of sorts until he utters this line:
> since every fibre of his being yearns to be fucked, knotted, and pupped
So much for 'not needing no alpha'. Once that dick comes out, you're ready for the beef injection and semen spray.
> Slick gathers between his legs
> His thighs are already slick and trembling, the scent of him cloyingly sweet
Redundant. And what would this 'cloyingly sweet' scent be?
> His body is calling out for Jayce and no one else, and it's agony to be alone in it
It's Just Biology, yeah?
> Allieve
Do you mean, 'alleviate'?
> The omega can't figure out the sudden change in behavior
Oh, so HIS moodiness freaks you out, but yours is perfectly explainable? Hmm. In any case, you're supposed to be a smart man. It's easy to put two and two together: he's jealous that he never got to knot you - which I am sure will be remedied in the final chapter - so much so it's coming out in his sweat, and you're out here wondering what YOU did wrong?
Looks like someone needs to read, 'Why Does He Do That?'
> His inner omega whines in his head
Oh, shut the fuck up with this 'my inner omega' shit. I've heard enough of that from EL James.
> Immediately started scenting him
> Too scent-drunk to care
Wow, these people really are skunks, except their spray glands are in their necks and not their anus (although if you're MGCraig, it's up there, too)
> He doesn't know what holds him back, whether it's insecurity or some irrational fear
You two already fucked. There's no point holding this conversation as this line has already been crossed. You just don't want to be pumped and dumped with a litter full of 'pups' you'll be forced to care for alone.
> To feel like a human again rather than a slave to instinct
Oh tat is fucking RICH, because just a few paragraphs later, Viktor is being threatened because Jayce thinks he cheated and rather than see it as a red flag, his 'biological instincts' to be knotted and bred kick in and all he wants is to get fucked. I despise these characters.
> He has an alpha, ready to and willing to do whatever he needs, and he's doing nothing about it
It's fine, because Jayce breaks into his home and demands who fucked Viktor like a normal person.
> He only hopes it will not end too badly
Talk about sentences that age poorly.
She writes his shirt hanging off his shoulder twice, even though it's six fucking sentences apart. Oh but we all remember what an omega smells like in heat, don't we?
That's right: Jayce storms in there like a true penis nigger, demanding to know who Viktor is fucking because his heat ended too early, threatening him and making Viktor feel both terrified and aroused, because of course he fucking is. All this because Viktor never told him that, due to his illness, his heats are normally shorter. This could have been avoided.
> From what, Viktor doesn't know
HE JUST FUCKING TOLD YOU, YOU RETARD
> He's angry because he thinks he's been getting fucked by another alpha
You just answered your own question.
> Jayce is looking like he wants to chain him up and never let him go, and it makes his heart race
Oh, so he does get sexually aroused at being treated like a human slave. I wonder if he likes cattle whips.
> Viktor knows it's the wrong thing to say
He does it anyways because it just gets him aroused and he knows Jayce will hate fuck him into the bed. I called it.
> His scent pours over him like a crashing tide, angry and raw and overwhelming
So it's like the equivalent to human bear mace. Who needs cops when you can just angrily spray people with pheromones?
> It is my business when it's my collar around your throat
He is still not your fucking property. He willingly wore that because you, a proper 'Nice Guy' didn't want him to get raped by other alphas. Now here you are throwing a mantrum because you THINK someone else took your boytoy with no proof.
> Arousal sparking deep in his belly despite the warning signals his brain is firing
This kind of attitude leads to women getting murdered. Yeah, the threat is there, but you're turned on so who cares?
> The threat - because it IS a threat, not a promise - should alarm him, terrify him. It does not
You were terrified just a few minutes ago, but now since you're wet and want pups it's not that bad. I love how his character is just reduced to being a human slave who's chained not just to instinct but to be pregnant as well.
> A little unhinged at the edges
A 'little'? This man was very close to raping you, all because he thought you were with someone else.
> It seems that all the alpha really wants is to have him. Not just parts or pieces, all of him
'Seems'? No, it's clear that he is an obsessed little fuck and this wasn't for show. But oh no, keep ignoring this red flags, that's how you get a spot in the ground.
> Not like a typical male of my designation
Males don't have vaginas. Thanks for playing. Why didn't you tell him this before?
> Achingly fond even now
YOU WERE JUST THREATENED BY HIM, AND NOW YOU FORGIVE HIM?! No, he does not have 'every right to be angry' - HE was the one being irrational and HE is the one who needs to feel guilty. I don't want to hear this shit about how he 'totally wouldn't do this or that and how him being obsessive is 'perfectly natural' and an extension of love. If he still has a 'lingering sense of unease', YOU HAVE A PROBLEM. But oh no, that dick is just far too good. You want to feel wanted and screw your instincts for self-preservation.
> Pleas
She means, 'pleads'.
> Sensation of being desired
What's that smell like, I wonder?
> He's been denied the alpha's touch for too long and now he wants
Fuck right off. Hope your boyfriend gets munched by pit bulls, and that they got for that alpha penis first.
> Puts his instincts at ease
So all you need are some dirty clothes on the bed and you can forget that you were just threatened. How quaint.
> I'll fuck you so full it'll leave you bed bound for days, you'll be unable to move without feeling me all over
So glad we're considerate of his disability, now.
> The invasive nature of being reliant on another
AKA, 'I am a feminist until a well-hung man arrives in my life, then I feel powerful and want to have his kids.'
> His scent betrays him, sweet like spun sugar
So that's what fear and arousal smells like.
> He probably smells as if he's ready to be fucked full of pups
How predictable. You're proud and independent, but instinct always wins out in the end.
> Unbothered by the way Viktor is gushing messily down his fingers
Wet as a waterslide, eh?
> It nearly makes his eyes cross
Again with the retard look.
> How sweet you smelled
Like spun sugar, right?
> Replaced by the heated, thick girth of his cock
Here we go with Round 2 of our Hispanic Hog, Fire Hydrant Edition.
> Barely able to handle the intrusion no matter how many times he's been fucked by now
Once. He's only been fucked once - his other heats he's spent completely alone.
> Making a home in his body like that's where he belongs
You already wrote that last chapter with the 'carved in the shape of him' cliché.
> Gripping onto his hips as though he could fuse them together at the spine
I love how the author forgot that he's disabled and that him gripping his right hip would hurt. He's not even high on that 'alpha venom' so he would absolutely be in pain.
> Hard enough to slam the headboard of the bed against the wall with each thrust
And that's what people came here for. They can ignore the domestic violence so long as THIS is the reward.
> Nnngh -fuck
Go home, Joe.
> The feeling of being stuffed full
Ah, this again.
> Burying himself deep enough to nudge against his cervix
Oh? I thought he was bigger the previous chapter. That belly bugle made it seem as if he was 'in his guts', so to speak.
> Fuck you so full that it knocks you up? Is that what you want, a baby?
Yeah. He said as much a few paragraphs ago.
> The thought of falling pregnant, as unlikely as that possibility is
Yeah he's getting pregnant. That will be the final chapter: him discovering that he is, indeed, carrying 'pups.'
> Viktor imagined what it would be like to trap him with a child
No way. First we had Jayce acting like a domestic abuser, now Viktor wants to baby trap him so he can get all the benefits and shame him with the social expectation of being a good father. Deadbeat dads aren't addressed in ABO; I wonder what happens if an alpha is outed as one. Do they just abandon their brood and make another one, or...?
> Demanding he get bred and well
I don't know why this makes him wet when that's his major fantasy and has been since the start of this chapter.
> He'd be more than a mother than a mother by the week's end, he'd be his wife
This really does confirm that omegas are stand-ins for women, for authors who hate female characters. It is more acceptable for a man to be 'bitched and bred' than a woman to get pregnant. Feminization AND misogyny? You don't say.
> Viktor no longer knows what he's begging for
You do, though? You want kids and a ring and a nice wedding? You just said so?
> Pleasure as he squeezes tightly around Jayce's cock, milking him greedily, demanding a knot
Reading this, you would forget that Jayce ever threatened him or made him property.
> Not when slick gushes over his thighs
I am curious as to how much 'slick' omegas produce. Can it be quantified? Can it fill a beer can, or jug? Can it fill a bathtub? Inquiring minds wish to know.
> It's fucking obscene, the amount, thick and hot and endless, and Viktor swears he can feel it filling him full
Redundant. Looks like we're going with the tried and true 'hentai semen' rule, where bellies literally inflate due to how much semen is produced. They truly are a different breed of human.
> I thought I hurt you
You were going to when you barged into his apartment.
> Relieved that he did not do any lasting damage
> Bruised cervix
Yeah, that's an ER visit, right there.
> I want to do it right
He said that in Chapter 2 when he presented him with the collar. He's concerned about courting NOW, after the shit he pulled? Boy is lucky he's not getting gelded.
Awwww how sweet. Look at all this love and sappy affection - it really makes you forget this guy was ready to maul and take Viktor against his will because he didn't know his heats were so short due to his health. Viktor never bothered to explain it to him, and Jayce never asked - he just took advantage of his crippled malewife 'just cause'.
Like I said, I am calling it that the final chapter has the pregnancy revelation and the flowers and big pseudo-wedding - anything to make Viktor NOT look useless in this. You would never know he was a scientist unless he said it. He doesn't do anything but lie down and get fucked. It's also something how domestic violence plots can just be brushed under the rug because of ABO - it ain't men being violent, it's Just Biology! Know your place and breed those pups, bigot.
Fujofrankenstein has published a double chapter update for her fic as well. I'll be covering one now, and the other later. To no one's surprise, she was inspired by the troon Ethel Cain. 'Potpourri of raging teenage hormones' is a real line. Lots of 'IT IS MA'AM' pooner edition, deadnaming, and yelling at women not to misgender a poor, disabled trans teen.
> He's so beautiful it hurts to look at him
This is really giving 'The Most Beautiful Boy In the World' vibes, completely with pederasty. The obsession with youth and virginity really hammers it home.
> Mel and I used to let the little ones sleep with us
Imagine what's going to happen when she finds out her ex is fucking a white teenager. Grown black women truly are the enemy of Jayviks.
> He's half-hard in his boxers already
> The musk of it makes him nearly growl, a raging potpourri of raging teenage hormones
I told you this was a real line. He's getting horny over a teenage girl who probably smells like a dumpster fire with all that T.
> God, maybe he really is a pedophile
You said it, not me. You're busting a nut over a teenage girl's sweat.
> He hates himself so much it makes his stomach hurt
Better solve that problem, then.
> I didn't know his age then
You knew he was young, and took advantage of it because you 'wanted to feel young again'.
> Slick gushing out of his hole
Not this again.
> He's a terrible foster father. He should call Caitlyn immediately, confess everything to her
You'll end up on a sex offender registry faster than you can say, 'I didn't know he was 16'. It sure is deserved.
> Jayce has heard the horror stories. He knows how terrible foster fathers can be
While he admits he's a pedo and that his foster kid is 'too beautiful to resist', and that he NEEDS to keep him or else he'll 'lose his virtue'. The only reason this isn't giving people The Ick is because Jayce is hot.
> You're a good man
> He admits he's a pedo in his mind
Uh huh.
This screenshot is short because the author embedded the most female-coded playlist you can imagine. Making playlists/song list/burning CDs is something teenage girls do. You can't escape the female socialization even if you tried.
And it only works because he's hot. Weird how female sexuality works. If Jayce looked like Ricky Berwick this would be a horror show.
> This is literally a romance novel
How many romance novels have men with beer guts scoring teenage girls? Next to none - I again stress this only works because the man is hot. If he wasn't, Jinx would be going 'EWWWWW THAT'S GROSS STOP THAT'.
> Only Jinx would be sorry that the middle-aged an he has a crush on promised not to touch him
See point above.
> Vander knows how he and Jayce met
And Vander won't be caving in Jayce's skull because he let minors in his establishment. It's a 'your word against mine' scenario.
> He wouldn't want me telling anyone that he lets minors into his bar knowingly
And he would be fined for that. Fucking said minor leads you on a sex offender registry. Guess which one is worse.
> Would it be okay if we tried the co-sleeping thing?
Oh, here we go. This is where things are going to get spicy.
I figured there would be a discussion on gender dysphoria and here it is: he doesn't have large breasts - presumably he has A-cups - and took pride in it but now doesn't because he is gaining weight. Silco might have been a drug dealer but he was a gender affirming meth dealer and that's okay. Admits his ribs are warped because of binding but it's all part of 'being a teenage boy'...while using feminine wiles to seduce a grown man. Ho hum.
> Is the mental discomfort worth it?
You sure don't suffer discomfort when a man uses your vagina. You're fine getting the woman fucked back into you with that.
> The man is wearing a pair of denim shorts far too skimpy for a man in his 40s
> He's possibly the hairiest man Viktor has ever seen
This author is leaning towards the bara element, with the Dream Daddy aesthetic, but it doesn't work. It just makes him looks like a washed up Randy Quaid - or just Randy Quaid.
I am also not surprised that the pooner who suffers immense dysphoria around her breasts is suddenly fine when a handsome man shows up and fondles her. Suddenly you want to be a woman again and to 'get fucked like one'.
That is a weird amount of focus on a teenage girl's breasts. One might almost say it's predatory, but it's OK because he's hot. He can lust over those lugs and how the girl's breasts pop through a seatbelt and wishes he can get his mouth on them to suck them but he is not a child sex offender, okay? He's just a good dad, a great foster dad, and he's hot in a pair of short-shorts.
That's fucking weird, bro. He's not a child. Turns out, he had this mental breakdown because he was suffering chest dysphoria. He certainly wasn't feeling it when he was flaunting them in front of Jayce and smirking at him.
Why am I not surprised that this plot line has to include the trials and tribulations of a pooner fucking up her ribs because she hates her breasts? Guess we have to add that on top of the 'Fuck Me, Daddy' trope.
I feel bad for Natalia here. She cannot serve a minor in an adult-only sex store, trans or not, because she'll lose her job, but gets guilt-tripped by a man into doing it. Being seen as a transphobe is far worse than serving a minor.
>Sometimes the right thing isn't in the handbook
Says the pedo. She legally cannot serve minors, you fuck. You know he wouldn't do this to a fellow man.
Your 'son' told you he suffers from chest dysphoria and is hyperventilating because of it, and all you are focused on is seeing a 15 year old in lingerie. What a sick fuck.
> What do you think I am, a weirdo?
Yes, actually. You're a pedophile. Why is Viktor getting dysphoria over his breasts, but didn't get any when he was using his vagina for penetration?
> I don't want you to see me like this
So why did you approach him in a bar for sex with a fake ID?
Your breasts give you dysphoria, but not your vagina?
> I can't breathe!
Calm down, George Floyd, the $20 is real this time!
> He knows the image of Viktor's soft breasts will be branded into his retinas until the day he dies
Your 'teenage son' hates 'his' breasts, but that's OK because you love them and the dysphoria will be cured by some talk no jutsu.
> He's a dirty old man and she knows exactly what he was thinking
Indeed he is. She should report him to the cops.
> Eyes prick with childish emotion
You had a mental breakdown because your breasts were peeking out, despite not having it when 'taunting' Jayce with them. Ho hum.
Oh, here we go. First we had the sex shop, now we have bank tellers getting yelled at for transphobia. Wait until it comes time to get his passport and his sex will have to be legally female thanks to God Emperor Trump
> Don't you want to do some good today?
Here we go again with the guilt-tripping of women to accept troon shit. I assume that manager wanted to diffuse the situation rather than get punched in the face by an angry Mexican Randy Quaid. Name changes on bank cards varies by state; you'd think Jayce would have researched this - and Viktor as well - to AVOID such a thing from happening. But oh no, we needed the drama because trans people just suffer so much
That sure is a 180. You had a breakdown over your breasts, and now you suddenly feel proud of them because a 'devastatingly handsome man' hairier than Bigfoot is ogling and fondling them. Even during a so-called terrible moment, where you Can't Breathe and are crying and shit, you felt more sexual arousal at a man you find attractive touching you than the 'debilitating' dysphoria that sends you into a depression. Guess the cure for dysphoria wasn't therapy, but a sexy man pounding the woman back in with every thrust. Who knew?
Edit: Here is the fourth chapter of Fujofrankenstein's work that I did not get around to posting earlier.
> Jayce can't breathe
Wow, everyone is getting the George Floyd treatment here, eh?
> He's a teenage boy, of course he's jacking off
He doesn't have the parts to 'jack off' and he just came off of a mental breakdown over being deadnamed. But you do you.
> He is a dirty old man, and he is going straight to hell
Thank you for the self awareness. A shame he won't suffer any consequences for his actions and gets away with it solely because he is attractive. If these men were ugly and weird, these fics would not get written.
> Voice going so high it nearly ends in a squeak
Does he get dysphoria from that, or is it only from his breasts?
> How the boy would look under a cascade of water
He sure is getting a lot of images of this teenager being naked, wearing lingerie, running around with his breasts out, you name it. It's almost as if he's attracted to the 'barely legal' element and the fact that it's new territory that he can claim.
> He'd have to be blind not to notice the way the boy's eyes go wide as he takes in the sight of his bare, hairy chest
I would, too. I'd be wondering how the fuck a man could get so hairy.
> Jayce wonders if his fingers still smell like his cunt
I should never have to read this sentence, let alone see it written, yet here we are.
> Jayce would be lying if he said he didn't want to tease Viktor a little bit
If you were a hundred pounds fatter, the teenage pooner would get The Ick and you wouldn't be able to do anything. Pedos tend to be the ugly sort and they live out vicariously through fantasy. They have go young because their victims don't know any better and cannot reject them.
> He wonders if Viktor knows he reeks of sex, the scent of his wet cunt hot and pungent
Another sentence I did not need to read.
I'd rather he just start college. Play with the 'hot for teacher' trope all you like, then: at least they are consenting adults.
The kid's allegedly a genius and yet cannot wash his face. That's how you get acne and clogged pores. Never sleep with your makeup on!
> The delicious friction of being known completely
You're a teenager. Stop acting as if you're a prima donna.
> Viktor hates her
Of course he does. She's a young adult female, red-haired to boot, and he decides she's public enemy number one. He probably hates how she's comfortable in her body and he has mental breakdowns because he does not like to be reminded that he is female.
> She doesn't have a chance in hell
Mostly because she's a grown woman, and if she found out her professor was a nonce, she'd be making all those TikToks and spreading the tea. THAT would be a twist I'd live for.
> Viktor imagines a world in which he were older, where he meets Jayce under different circumstances
The author could have done just that, and would earn no complaint from me. I have read age gap fics in a multitude of fandoms - GOT has a lot - but even GOT fans know said age gaps are wrong. This is set in the modern world, and you have a 44 year old man lusting after a teen. That is a problem, for obvious reasons.
> Has Viktor pushed too many buttons, crossed too many lines?
Yeah. It started when you used a fake ID to sneak into a 'gay' bar and picked up a 44 year old man. I don't like to victim blame but this was intentional.
> Thinks about Jayce being his dad for real, and a thrill goes straight to his cunt
The daddy fetish was real. He was abused by his real dad, now he needs another father figure to exorcise those sins and to 'reclaim that trauma'. The obsession of being owned and being 'his son' really hammers home that this is a teenager desperate for love and affection and is seeking it in the wrong places.
That's one of the lamest pick up lines I've ever heard. What the fuck.
> He presses his face into the wet fabric
> He licks the wet spot Viktor left
Why am I not surprised at this. Next he's going to start moving on to huffing underwear and licking toilets.
I am also not shocked that our wee pooner is a vegan. The Auschwitz look on top of the T injections is a helluva way to sell this pairing.
> It's like a date
Christ, someone needs to spike this man's milkshake with paint thinner.
> Liberal arts majors
Haha, get it? She's poking fun at those dumbasses who chose an easy major! Unlike our enlightened pooner here who is a math genius and isn't in university already and gets panic attacks every time she looks at her chest!
The authors writing this dynamic have a problem with 'puriteens' telling them writing this shit is wrong, yet then argue that they can totally consent and understand sex dynamics like this. They need to pick a struggle.
> I can't breathe!
Damn, how many times do they need to invoke the George Floyd defense?
Then, we have our classic 'I was raped' story, where Viktor confesses everything to Jayce - and where he uses it to get closer to him and show him that 'not all men are like that' while still acting like a predatory nonce. Once again, the difference here is that he is hot, while the original rapist was not.
Look at that, the biggest issue wasn't the rape - it was being misgendered during the rape. You just can't be reminded that you are female, eh?
> Thank you for telling me
> You asked for this
Two sentences once should dread hearing.
Oh, btw, this gun cleaning scene? It has an NSFW version. Yes, it's as vile as it sounds.
> I'd rather you teach me a different kind of stripping lesson
That's going to be hard when he has enough hair to give every kid at St. Jude's a wig.
> Viktor is consumed with thoughts of putting his mouth on the cold steel
...You want to deepthroat a gun, now?
> The slide cracks your teeth
Why are you sticking the gun so close to your face? I assume he is disassembling a Glock, which is considered easy for beginners. There's no mention of a hammer, and no reference to recoil at all.
> Unless you want it to hurt when it slides home
Haha get it? It's a sex joke. He's gonna dump that magazine soon enough, fill him with a LOAD of bullets.
Imagine fondling your 'son' in a shooting range - that has cameras. Fastest way to out yourself.
Yes, and that only excites Mexican Randy Quaid here more. He keeps SAYING he regrets it, that he wishes it never happened, when it's clear it sexually excites him. He loves it. He wants to 'eat this boy for breakfast, lunch and dinner' and we're supposed to see it as normal. I can see why this author decided to moderate comments on her work.
Lol. Lightweight. It's not just him being underage or female, but because he's got no fat on him. Veganism does that. Champagne doesn't even have that high of an alcohol content, and teens in Europe drink wine and beer at a low alcohol volume and don't get blasted. Maybe try eating some meat there, dood.
> Before I do something stupid
You already ARE doing something stupid.
> Just above the swell of his ass
What ass? He's a vegan, all that fat and muscle is going to be digested. There are fucking chimpanzees with more ass than this boy, and that's saying something.
> Jayce is the adult, should act like the adult
And he's acting like the men who admit they would fuck teens if there were no laws preventing them from doing so. I guess, in a way, you can argue this is 'normal male sexuality'. It's a real blackpill to swallow.
> You're not crazy
Yes he is. He's getting erections over the thought of you being so young. It's the 'fruit of youth' he loves and wants to plunder. That excites a fuckton of men - concerningly so.
> I'm the crazy one
In a way, yeah. You went into that bar with a fake ID and picked up a 44 year old. You went back to his truck knowing how young you were, got penetrated digitally, and then fell in love. I don't like blaming teens for this, but Christ this author is really making Viktor a Jezebel here. It's Lolita with Bhad Bhabie in there.
> You're fifteen. I'm supposed to protect you
You lick his cum off the chairs he sits in and masturbates when he moans. This is 100% a toxic relationship.
Wait until you read that NSFW gun piece. You'll wish you'd have Budd Dwyer's courage.
I have noticed a huge obsession with scent in this fic, and it is a staple of ABO fics in general. Their moods release different scents, and they can be sour, sweet, any flavour of gasoline or alcohol, and blood oranges. This takes place after Viktor took that horse cock up his omegan vagina, and throws a temper tantrum because his 'dear alpha' is not in the same bed as him.
This has as much venom as when JanetGirl's fic had Jayce crowd Viktor in the kitchen when he dared grab some food. You'd think he could smell that alpha scent because of how strong it is. He 'longs for his touch' and sulks, while acting snippy and bitching in the next minute. Your blood sugar too low, friend?
> Watches him with a possessive kind of fondness
Yes, this fic is going to take a dark turn. Because we need that 'freak4freak'.
> I'm not
Fuck off. I really, really hate it when Viktor acts like a moody teenage girl. Your big dicked alpha went to go make food. Calm your ass down. I'd feel pampered if my man did that for me.
> The honesty surprises him even though it doesn't
Contradiction. It shouldn't be a surprise at all because he already confessed in the prior chapter.
> You smell...happy, content, it's doing funny things to my insincts
Oh, really? Are you going to stay a happy puppy or revert right back to being a human shitbull when things get nasty? Turns out, it's the latter.
> Progress waits for no one, Jayce
He says that, and then has to take an entire week off because of his 'heat', aka ovulation, because if he's near an alpha he's just going to go, 'alpha alpha breed me' and waste his time fucking.
> I wasn't exactly gentle with you last night
No shit. He just shoved that Coke can cock in there and made his stomach look like Play-Doh with that belly bulge. The casual utterance of 'he survived' and that he would be bedridden without that venom should be way more concerning: those horse-sized penises are not economical, and can actually kill people.
> He doesn't question it
> He suspects Jayce likes that thought a little more than he lets on
So he DOES question it.
> It will make a fine addition to his nest
You mean your stinky-ass bedroom?
> Burrows himself in his nest
You are a human, not a fucking sun spider.
> Which for a healthy omega, would be seven days
Wanna bet the plot twist here is that he gets pregnant at the end?
> It's a blessing since he's never had to rely on suppressants to quell his cycle - a luxury most omegas couldn't afford
Ah, glad we're back to addressing the social problems again. I almost forgot about that because of how many times our little omega here got stuffed like a turkey. He still has to wear a collar to mark himself as someone else's property, remember.
> He's sure his pheromones are potent enough at this point where someone standing in close proximity could discern he'll reach the height of it soon
Not even humans do this. And if Jayce can smell such potent pheromones, how come you couldn't smell his through the walls?
> He can see the alpha deflate
He deflates because he's not the one who's going to be knotting our dear omega, who painted himself as a stalwart 'feminist' of sorts until he utters this line:
> since every fibre of his being yearns to be fucked, knotted, and pupped
So much for 'not needing no alpha'. Once that dick comes out, you're ready for the beef injection and semen spray.
> Slick gathers between his legs
> His thighs are already slick and trembling, the scent of him cloyingly sweet
Redundant. And what would this 'cloyingly sweet' scent be?
> His body is calling out for Jayce and no one else, and it's agony to be alone in it
It's Just Biology, yeah?
> Allieve
Do you mean, 'alleviate'?
> The omega can't figure out the sudden change in behavior
Oh, so HIS moodiness freaks you out, but yours is perfectly explainable? Hmm. In any case, you're supposed to be a smart man. It's easy to put two and two together: he's jealous that he never got to knot you - which I am sure will be remedied in the final chapter - so much so it's coming out in his sweat, and you're out here wondering what YOU did wrong?
Looks like someone needs to read, 'Why Does He Do That?'
> His inner omega whines in his head
Oh, shut the fuck up with this 'my inner omega' shit. I've heard enough of that from EL James.
> Immediately started scenting him
> Too scent-drunk to care
Wow, these people really are skunks, except their spray glands are in their necks and not their anus (although if you're MGCraig, it's up there, too)
> He doesn't know what holds him back, whether it's insecurity or some irrational fear
You two already fucked. There's no point holding this conversation as this line has already been crossed. You just don't want to be pumped and dumped with a litter full of 'pups' you'll be forced to care for alone.
> To feel like a human again rather than a slave to instinct
Oh tat is fucking RICH, because just a few paragraphs later, Viktor is being threatened because Jayce thinks he cheated and rather than see it as a red flag, his 'biological instincts' to be knotted and bred kick in and all he wants is to get fucked. I despise these characters.
> He has an alpha, ready to and willing to do whatever he needs, and he's doing nothing about it
It's fine, because Jayce breaks into his home and demands who fucked Viktor like a normal person.
> He only hopes it will not end too badly
Talk about sentences that age poorly.
She writes his shirt hanging off his shoulder twice, even though it's six fucking sentences apart. Oh but we all remember what an omega smells like in heat, don't we?
That's right: Jayce storms in there like a true penis nigger, demanding to know who Viktor is fucking because his heat ended too early, threatening him and making Viktor feel both terrified and aroused, because of course he fucking is. All this because Viktor never told him that, due to his illness, his heats are normally shorter. This could have been avoided.
> From what, Viktor doesn't know
HE JUST FUCKING TOLD YOU, YOU RETARD
> He's angry because he thinks he's been getting fucked by another alpha
You just answered your own question.
> Jayce is looking like he wants to chain him up and never let him go, and it makes his heart race
Oh, so he does get sexually aroused at being treated like a human slave. I wonder if he likes cattle whips.
> Viktor knows it's the wrong thing to say
He does it anyways because it just gets him aroused and he knows Jayce will hate fuck him into the bed. I called it.
> His scent pours over him like a crashing tide, angry and raw and overwhelming
So it's like the equivalent to human bear mace. Who needs cops when you can just angrily spray people with pheromones?
> It is my business when it's my collar around your throat
He is still not your fucking property. He willingly wore that because you, a proper 'Nice Guy' didn't want him to get raped by other alphas. Now here you are throwing a mantrum because you THINK someone else took your boytoy with no proof.
> Arousal sparking deep in his belly despite the warning signals his brain is firing
This kind of attitude leads to women getting murdered. Yeah, the threat is there, but you're turned on so who cares?
> The threat - because it IS a threat, not a promise - should alarm him, terrify him. It does not
You were terrified just a few minutes ago, but now since you're wet and want pups it's not that bad. I love how his character is just reduced to being a human slave who's chained not just to instinct but to be pregnant as well.
> A little unhinged at the edges
A 'little'? This man was very close to raping you, all because he thought you were with someone else.
> It seems that all the alpha really wants is to have him. Not just parts or pieces, all of him
'Seems'? No, it's clear that he is an obsessed little fuck and this wasn't for show. But oh no, keep ignoring this red flags, that's how you get a spot in the ground.
> Not like a typical male of my designation
Males don't have vaginas. Thanks for playing. Why didn't you tell him this before?
> Achingly fond even now
YOU WERE JUST THREATENED BY HIM, AND NOW YOU FORGIVE HIM?! No, he does not have 'every right to be angry' - HE was the one being irrational and HE is the one who needs to feel guilty. I don't want to hear this shit about how he 'totally wouldn't do this or that and how him being obsessive is 'perfectly natural' and an extension of love. If he still has a 'lingering sense of unease', YOU HAVE A PROBLEM. But oh no, that dick is just far too good. You want to feel wanted and screw your instincts for self-preservation.
> Pleas
She means, 'pleads'.
> Sensation of being desired
What's that smell like, I wonder?
> He's been denied the alpha's touch for too long and now he wants
Fuck right off. Hope your boyfriend gets munched by pit bulls, and that they got for that alpha penis first.
> Puts his instincts at ease
So all you need are some dirty clothes on the bed and you can forget that you were just threatened. How quaint.
> I'll fuck you so full it'll leave you bed bound for days, you'll be unable to move without feeling me all over
So glad we're considerate of his disability, now.
> The invasive nature of being reliant on another
AKA, 'I am a feminist until a well-hung man arrives in my life, then I feel powerful and want to have his kids.'
> His scent betrays him, sweet like spun sugar
So that's what fear and arousal smells like.
> He probably smells as if he's ready to be fucked full of pups
How predictable. You're proud and independent, but instinct always wins out in the end.
> Unbothered by the way Viktor is gushing messily down his fingers
Wet as a waterslide, eh?
> It nearly makes his eyes cross
Again with the retard look.
> How sweet you smelled
Like spun sugar, right?
> Replaced by the heated, thick girth of his cock
Here we go with Round 2 of our Hispanic Hog, Fire Hydrant Edition.
> Barely able to handle the intrusion no matter how many times he's been fucked by now
Once. He's only been fucked once - his other heats he's spent completely alone.
> Making a home in his body like that's where he belongs
You already wrote that last chapter with the 'carved in the shape of him' cliché.
> Gripping onto his hips as though he could fuse them together at the spine
I love how the author forgot that he's disabled and that him gripping his right hip would hurt. He's not even high on that 'alpha venom' so he would absolutely be in pain.
> Hard enough to slam the headboard of the bed against the wall with each thrust
And that's what people came here for. They can ignore the domestic violence so long as THIS is the reward.
> Nnngh -fuck
Go home, Joe.
> The feeling of being stuffed full
Ah, this again.
> Burying himself deep enough to nudge against his cervix
Oh? I thought he was bigger the previous chapter. That belly bugle made it seem as if he was 'in his guts', so to speak.
> Fuck you so full that it knocks you up? Is that what you want, a baby?
Yeah. He said as much a few paragraphs ago.
> The thought of falling pregnant, as unlikely as that possibility is
Yeah he's getting pregnant. That will be the final chapter: him discovering that he is, indeed, carrying 'pups.'
> Viktor imagined what it would be like to trap him with a child
No way. First we had Jayce acting like a domestic abuser, now Viktor wants to baby trap him so he can get all the benefits and shame him with the social expectation of being a good father. Deadbeat dads aren't addressed in ABO; I wonder what happens if an alpha is outed as one. Do they just abandon their brood and make another one, or...?
> Demanding he get bred and well
I don't know why this makes him wet when that's his major fantasy and has been since the start of this chapter.
> He'd be more than a mother than a mother by the week's end, he'd be his wife
This really does confirm that omegas are stand-ins for women, for authors who hate female characters. It is more acceptable for a man to be 'bitched and bred' than a woman to get pregnant. Feminization AND misogyny? You don't say.
> Viktor no longer knows what he's begging for
You do, though? You want kids and a ring and a nice wedding? You just said so?
> Pleasure as he squeezes tightly around Jayce's cock, milking him greedily, demanding a knot
Reading this, you would forget that Jayce ever threatened him or made him property.
> Not when slick gushes over his thighs
I am curious as to how much 'slick' omegas produce. Can it be quantified? Can it fill a beer can, or jug? Can it fill a bathtub? Inquiring minds wish to know.
> It's fucking obscene, the amount, thick and hot and endless, and Viktor swears he can feel it filling him full
Redundant. Looks like we're going with the tried and true 'hentai semen' rule, where bellies literally inflate due to how much semen is produced. They truly are a different breed of human.
> I thought I hurt you
You were going to when you barged into his apartment.
> Relieved that he did not do any lasting damage
> Bruised cervix
Yeah, that's an ER visit, right there.
> I want to do it right
He said that in Chapter 2 when he presented him with the collar. He's concerned about courting NOW, after the shit he pulled? Boy is lucky he's not getting gelded.
Awwww how sweet. Look at all this love and sappy affection - it really makes you forget this guy was ready to maul and take Viktor against his will because he didn't know his heats were so short due to his health. Viktor never bothered to explain it to him, and Jayce never asked - he just took advantage of his crippled malewife 'just cause'.
Like I said, I am calling it that the final chapter has the pregnancy revelation and the flowers and big pseudo-wedding - anything to make Viktor NOT look useless in this. You would never know he was a scientist unless he said it. He doesn't do anything but lie down and get fucked. It's also something how domestic violence plots can just be brushed under the rug because of ABO - it ain't men being violent, it's Just Biology! Know your place and breed those pups, bigot.
Fujofrankenstein has published a double chapter update for her fic as well. I'll be covering one now, and the other later. To no one's surprise, she was inspired by the troon Ethel Cain. 'Potpourri of raging teenage hormones' is a real line. Lots of 'IT IS MA'AM' pooner edition, deadnaming, and yelling at women not to misgender a poor, disabled trans teen.
> He's so beautiful it hurts to look at him
This is really giving 'The Most Beautiful Boy In the World' vibes, completely with pederasty. The obsession with youth and virginity really hammers it home.
> Mel and I used to let the little ones sleep with us
Imagine what's going to happen when she finds out her ex is fucking a white teenager. Grown black women truly are the enemy of Jayviks.
> He's half-hard in his boxers already
> The musk of it makes him nearly growl, a raging potpourri of raging teenage hormones
I told you this was a real line. He's getting horny over a teenage girl who probably smells like a dumpster fire with all that T.
> God, maybe he really is a pedophile
You said it, not me. You're busting a nut over a teenage girl's sweat.
> He hates himself so much it makes his stomach hurt
Better solve that problem, then.
> I didn't know his age then
You knew he was young, and took advantage of it because you 'wanted to feel young again'.
> Slick gushing out of his hole
Not this again.
> He's a terrible foster father. He should call Caitlyn immediately, confess everything to her
You'll end up on a sex offender registry faster than you can say, 'I didn't know he was 16'. It sure is deserved.
> Jayce has heard the horror stories. He knows how terrible foster fathers can be
While he admits he's a pedo and that his foster kid is 'too beautiful to resist', and that he NEEDS to keep him or else he'll 'lose his virtue'. The only reason this isn't giving people The Ick is because Jayce is hot.
> You're a good man
> He admits he's a pedo in his mind
Uh huh.
This screenshot is short because the author embedded the most female-coded playlist you can imagine. Making playlists/song list/burning CDs is something teenage girls do. You can't escape the female socialization even if you tried.
And it only works because he's hot. Weird how female sexuality works. If Jayce looked like Ricky Berwick this would be a horror show.
> This is literally a romance novel
How many romance novels have men with beer guts scoring teenage girls? Next to none - I again stress this only works because the man is hot. If he wasn't, Jinx would be going 'EWWWWW THAT'S GROSS STOP THAT'.
> Only Jinx would be sorry that the middle-aged an he has a crush on promised not to touch him
See point above.
> Vander knows how he and Jayce met
And Vander won't be caving in Jayce's skull because he let minors in his establishment. It's a 'your word against mine' scenario.
> He wouldn't want me telling anyone that he lets minors into his bar knowingly
And he would be fined for that. Fucking said minor leads you on a sex offender registry. Guess which one is worse.
> Would it be okay if we tried the co-sleeping thing?
Oh, here we go. This is where things are going to get spicy.
I figured there would be a discussion on gender dysphoria and here it is: he doesn't have large breasts - presumably he has A-cups - and took pride in it but now doesn't because he is gaining weight. Silco might have been a drug dealer but he was a gender affirming meth dealer and that's okay. Admits his ribs are warped because of binding but it's all part of 'being a teenage boy'...while using feminine wiles to seduce a grown man. Ho hum.
> Is the mental discomfort worth it?
You sure don't suffer discomfort when a man uses your vagina. You're fine getting the woman fucked back into you with that.
> The man is wearing a pair of denim shorts far too skimpy for a man in his 40s
> He's possibly the hairiest man Viktor has ever seen
This author is leaning towards the bara element, with the Dream Daddy aesthetic, but it doesn't work. It just makes him looks like a washed up Randy Quaid - or just Randy Quaid.
I am also not surprised that the pooner who suffers immense dysphoria around her breasts is suddenly fine when a handsome man shows up and fondles her. Suddenly you want to be a woman again and to 'get fucked like one'.
That is a weird amount of focus on a teenage girl's breasts. One might almost say it's predatory, but it's OK because he's hot. He can lust over those lugs and how the girl's breasts pop through a seatbelt and wishes he can get his mouth on them to suck them but he is not a child sex offender, okay? He's just a good dad, a great foster dad, and he's hot in a pair of short-shorts.
That's fucking weird, bro. He's not a child. Turns out, he had this mental breakdown because he was suffering chest dysphoria. He certainly wasn't feeling it when he was flaunting them in front of Jayce and smirking at him.
Why am I not surprised that this plot line has to include the trials and tribulations of a pooner fucking up her ribs because she hates her breasts? Guess we have to add that on top of the 'Fuck Me, Daddy' trope.
I feel bad for Natalia here. She cannot serve a minor in an adult-only sex store, trans or not, because she'll lose her job, but gets guilt-tripped by a man into doing it. Being seen as a transphobe is far worse than serving a minor.
>Sometimes the right thing isn't in the handbook
Says the pedo. She legally cannot serve minors, you fuck. You know he wouldn't do this to a fellow man.
Your 'son' told you he suffers from chest dysphoria and is hyperventilating because of it, and all you are focused on is seeing a 15 year old in lingerie. What a sick fuck.
> What do you think I am, a weirdo?
Yes, actually. You're a pedophile. Why is Viktor getting dysphoria over his breasts, but didn't get any when he was using his vagina for penetration?
> I don't want you to see me like this
So why did you approach him in a bar for sex with a fake ID?
Your breasts give you dysphoria, but not your vagina?
> I can't breathe!
Calm down, George Floyd, the $20 is real this time!
> He knows the image of Viktor's soft breasts will be branded into his retinas until the day he dies
Your 'teenage son' hates 'his' breasts, but that's OK because you love them and the dysphoria will be cured by some talk no jutsu.
> He's a dirty old man and she knows exactly what he was thinking
Indeed he is. She should report him to the cops.
> Eyes prick with childish emotion
You had a mental breakdown because your breasts were peeking out, despite not having it when 'taunting' Jayce with them. Ho hum.
Oh, here we go. First we had the sex shop, now we have bank tellers getting yelled at for transphobia. Wait until it comes time to get his passport and his sex will have to be legally female thanks to God Emperor Trump
> Don't you want to do some good today?
Here we go again with the guilt-tripping of women to accept troon shit. I assume that manager wanted to diffuse the situation rather than get punched in the face by an angry Mexican Randy Quaid. Name changes on bank cards varies by state; you'd think Jayce would have researched this - and Viktor as well - to AVOID such a thing from happening. But oh no, we needed the drama because trans people just suffer so much
That sure is a 180. You had a breakdown over your breasts, and now you suddenly feel proud of them because a 'devastatingly handsome man' hairier than Bigfoot is ogling and fondling them. Even during a so-called terrible moment, where you Can't Breathe and are crying and shit, you felt more sexual arousal at a man you find attractive touching you than the 'debilitating' dysphoria that sends you into a depression. Guess the cure for dysphoria wasn't therapy, but a sexy man pounding the woman back in with every thrust. Who knew?
This might seem a little cheesy, but I met two friends on FFnet. One introduced me to fanfic overall, and another we bonded over discussing bad fics. I am no longer friends with them (one unfriended me after finding out I was a TERF, the other just stopped talking) but still have fond memories of those days. This was before AO3 took over and changed the culture forever.
I remember one for Gravity Falls where one of the twins ate Taco Bell and spends the fic shitting in the toilet, or something like that. Adding onto the 'so wild it's funny' fic trend, ages ago there was an Assassin's Creed fic where they were in high school, and Connor Kenway had to stop a high school bomber/ school shooter. This was on AO3, so it was more 'serious', but who the fuck thought that was a good idea to write down?Excuse you, plebian - how DARE you mock the man behind the legendary cult classic, "Waluigi's Taco Stand".
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I thought this thing ended years ago, but no, it was updated fucking yesterday.
Edit: Here is the fourth chapter of Fujofrankenstein's work that I did not get around to posting earlier.
> Jayce can't breathe
Wow, everyone is getting the George Floyd treatment here, eh?
> He's a teenage boy, of course he's jacking off
He doesn't have the parts to 'jack off' and he just came off of a mental breakdown over being deadnamed. But you do you.
> He is a dirty old man, and he is going straight to hell
Thank you for the self awareness. A shame he won't suffer any consequences for his actions and gets away with it solely because he is attractive. If these men were ugly and weird, these fics would not get written.
> Voice going so high it nearly ends in a squeak
Does he get dysphoria from that, or is it only from his breasts?
> How the boy would look under a cascade of water
He sure is getting a lot of images of this teenager being naked, wearing lingerie, running around with his breasts out, you name it. It's almost as if he's attracted to the 'barely legal' element and the fact that it's new territory that he can claim.
> He'd have to be blind not to notice the way the boy's eyes go wide as he takes in the sight of his bare, hairy chest
I would, too. I'd be wondering how the fuck a man could get so hairy.
> Jayce wonders if his fingers still smell like his cunt
I should never have to read this sentence, let alone see it written, yet here we are.
> Jayce would be lying if he said he didn't want to tease Viktor a little bit
If you were a hundred pounds fatter, the teenage pooner would get The Ick and you wouldn't be able to do anything. Pedos tend to be the ugly sort and they live out vicariously through fantasy. They have go young because their victims don't know any better and cannot reject them.
> He wonders if Viktor knows he reeks of sex, the scent of his wet cunt hot and pungent
Another sentence I did not need to read.
I'd rather he just start college. Play with the 'hot for teacher' trope all you like, then: at least they are consenting adults.
The kid's allegedly a genius and yet cannot wash his face. That's how you get acne and clogged pores. Never sleep with your makeup on!
> The delicious friction of being known completely
You're a teenager. Stop acting as if you're a prima donna.
> Viktor hates her
Of course he does. She's a young adult female, red-haired to boot, and he decides she's public enemy number one. He probably hates how she's comfortable in her body and he has mental breakdowns because he does not like to be reminded that he is female.
> She doesn't have a chance in hell
Mostly because she's a grown woman, and if she found out her professor was a nonce, she'd be making all those TikToks and spreading the tea. THAT would be a twist I'd live for.
> Viktor imagines a world in which he were older, where he meets Jayce under different circumstances
The author could have done just that, and would earn no complaint from me. I have read age gap fics in a multitude of fandoms - GOT has a lot - but even GOT fans know said age gaps are wrong. This is set in the modern world, and you have a 44 year old man lusting after a teen. That is a problem, for obvious reasons.
> Has Viktor pushed too many buttons, crossed too many lines?
Yeah. It started when you used a fake ID to sneak into a 'gay' bar and picked up a 44 year old man. I don't like to victim blame but this was intentional.
> Thinks about Jayce being his dad for real, and a thrill goes straight to his cunt
The daddy fetish was real. He was abused by his real dad, now he needs another father figure to exorcise those sins and to 'reclaim that trauma'. The obsession of being owned and being 'his son' really hammers home that this is a teenager desperate for love and affection and is seeking it in the wrong places.
That's one of the lamest pick up lines I've ever heard. What the fuck.
> He presses his face into the wet fabric
> He licks the wet spot Viktor left
Why am I not surprised at this. Next he's going to start moving on to huffing underwear and licking toilets.
I am also not shocked that our wee pooner is a vegan. The Auschwitz look on top of the T injections is a helluva way to sell this pairing.
> It's like a date
Christ, someone needs to spike this man's milkshake with paint thinner.
> Liberal arts majors
Haha, get it? She's poking fun at those dumbasses who chose an easy major! Unlike our enlightened pooner here who is a math genius and isn't in university already and gets panic attacks every time she looks at her chest!
The authors writing this dynamic have a problem with 'puriteens' telling them writing this shit is wrong, yet then argue that they can totally consent and understand sex dynamics like this. They need to pick a struggle.
> I can't breathe!
Damn, how many times do they need to invoke the George Floyd defense?
Then, we have our classic 'I was raped' story, where Viktor confesses everything to Jayce - and where he uses it to get closer to him and show him that 'not all men are like that' while still acting like a predatory nonce. Once again, the difference here is that he is hot, while the original rapist was not.
Look at that, the biggest issue wasn't the rape - it was being misgendered during the rape. You just can't be reminded that you are female, eh?
> Thank you for telling me
> You asked for this
Two sentences once should dread hearing.
Oh, btw, this gun cleaning scene? It has an NSFW version. Yes, it's as vile as it sounds.
> I'd rather you teach me a different kind of stripping lesson
That's going to be hard when he has enough hair to give every kid at St. Jude's a wig.
> Viktor is consumed with thoughts of putting his mouth on the cold steel
...You want to deepthroat a gun, now?
> The slide cracks your teeth
Why are you sticking the gun so close to your face? I assume he is disassembling a Glock, which is considered easy for beginners. There's no mention of a hammer, and no reference to recoil at all.
> Unless you want it to hurt when it slides home
Haha get it? It's a sex joke. He's gonna dump that magazine soon enough, fill him with a LOAD of bullets.
Imagine fondling your 'son' in a shooting range - that has cameras. Fastest way to out yourself.
Yes, and that only excites Mexican Randy Quaid here more. He keeps SAYING he regrets it, that he wishes it never happened, when it's clear it sexually excites him. He loves it. He wants to 'eat this boy for breakfast, lunch and dinner' and we're supposed to see it as normal. I can see why this author decided to moderate comments on her work.
Lol. Lightweight. It's not just him being underage or female, but because he's got no fat on him. Veganism does that. Champagne doesn't even have that high of an alcohol content, and teens in Europe drink wine and beer at a low alcohol volume and don't get blasted. Maybe try eating some meat there, dood.
> Before I do something stupid
You already ARE doing something stupid.
> Just above the swell of his ass
What ass? He's a vegan, all that fat and muscle is going to be digested. There are fucking chimpanzees with more ass than this boy, and that's saying something.
> Jayce is the adult, should act like the adult
And he's acting like the men who admit they would fuck teens if there were no laws preventing them from doing so. I guess, in a way, you can argue this is 'normal male sexuality'. It's a real blackpill to swallow.
> You're not crazy
Yes he is. He's getting erections over the thought of you being so young. It's the 'fruit of youth' he loves and wants to plunder. That excites a fuckton of men - concerningly so.
> I'm the crazy one
In a way, yeah. You went into that bar with a fake ID and picked up a 44 year old. You went back to his truck knowing how young you were, got penetrated digitally, and then fell in love. I don't like blaming teens for this, but Christ this author is really making Viktor a Jezebel here. It's Lolita with Bhad Bhabie in there.
> You're fifteen. I'm supposed to protect you
You lick his cum off the chairs he sits in and masturbates when he moans. This is 100% a toxic relationship.
Wait until you read that NSFW gun piece. You'll wish you'd have Budd Dwyer's courage.
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On the house and all.
' after writing nasty pedophilia makes me want to go, 'No, you should have hit the X button on your life instead.' These people act as if they are entitled to endless praise when they are not; praise is earned. They think they earn it just by breathing. They talk a lot about 'fandom etiquette' when it is just a cover for 'do whatever you want all the time.' Even if they are not trannies, they are spiritually trannies. Anyone who tells me to 'don't like don't read' is just going to make me curious and I will read it out of spite.
