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This author, taking a note out of MGCraig, has decided to make a bitching fic - with adults for once. She is otherwise known as a shotacon and hangs around VeeforVindicta and can be seen in PBM's fics, as well. 'The intake of cum is one of the cornerstones of bitching' is a real line. Also features sex-changing cum toothpaste - no, I'm not joking.
I'll add to this post later, but get a load (literally) of this wild shit.
> Urging two alphas to get along is like pulling teeth
So how does society function, then? It's a wonder anything is peaceful if all it takes is two alphas to start fighting each other like they're pitbulls.
> There is something soothing about Viktor's scent. More often than not, he is completely doused in the other alpha's pheromones
So he's a walking pepper spray can, gotcha.
> It's very much the opposite
I am reminded of geckos and how two males will tear each other up if they so much as invade each other's space. Glad this society is only a cut above base human instincts. It's a miracle it's lasted this long.
> All he knows is that his ruts have never been as calm as they have been
> It must be because they are pack
*They are a pack. A pack is more than two people. Besides, this entire dynamic is based on the misunderstanding of wolf pack dynamics. Thanks, Supernatural.
> Alpha and alpha relations are frowned upon
Oh, right: because the 'natural' relations are between alpha and omega. We don't tolerate pseudo-homosexuality here; someone HAS to have a vagina in order for it to be true sex. MGCraig made the same argument in hers: two openly gay men couldn't be together as alpha males, one has to be bitched and act as the woman in order for it to be accepted. If it sounds like a roundabout way of espousing conservatism, you are correct.
> Incredibly easy on the eyes
Ever notice Omegaverse never features ugly people? Something to think about.
> Whispers of the danger of an alpha's possessiveness
So they act like rabid dogs when they don't get what they want. AKA they just act like unhinged men.
> Remembers hearing people talk about bitching down in the fissures
What this means is that if you manage to 'bitch' another alpha, you can end up turning them into a situational hermaphrodite, with a magic pussy developing overnight. How is this done? Dubious amounts of cum, as the author wrote. She is not exaggerating.
> Letting intake dubious amounts of cum
This isn't English.
Yes, his idea of making Jayce into an omega is to engage in rape by deception by literally sticking his semen everywhere: in his cream, in his lotions, in his cologne, in his shower gels and shampoos and conditioners, even his toothpaste. If that didn't make you go, 'what the absolute fuck' you are in for a treat.
No shit. Cologne isn't just water. Your semen is going to make it glob. The toothpaste shit is vile, though. I'm surprised she didn't rub it into his toilet paper for an added bonus.
> Happily dousing himself in alpha cum and not batting an eye
Guess that heady alpha pheromone means nothing to Old Spice.
> His instincts are becoming more and more omegaesque
What does this mean? Well, they become dumb breeding cows who drool and hunger for cock. No intelligence is to be found among them, and the only words they'll ever say is, 'Alpha breed me'. We're taking down gender dynamics, yo.
> Being cursed with a designation other than beta
So being an omega is a curse and is almost as bad as living as a woman under the Taliban. I don't see why he'd be happy to lose his alpha status since they get everything they want and then some.
> The only thing in class they taught him was how his ruts work
Oh, so there is no comprehensive sex-ed in Omegaverse. They just do basic, heterosexual sex lessons and abstinence. For a world meant to critique gender, it sure has the gender dynamics and faith of the Bible Belt.
> Feels safe whenever his partner is around
> The feeling of safety
Redundant.
> It won't take much for his bowels to explode, leave a bloody mess all over his couch
First we've got semen toothpaste, now we've got exploding assholes. What's next, pedophilia? Oh, wait.
> It would be too omegaesque for an alpha
So they aren't allowed to break ordained gender roles because of biology. Sounds very biological essentialist.
> The strange need to be bred
> His omegan instincts begging to be bred, to be knotted
You already wrote that. You also wrote 'he only cares about that' multiple times already.
> Seems to have completely missed all the signs
Haha, get it? He's hot but he's also a retard!
> Being too obvious
She means 'oblivious'. Missing a few letters, there.
> Leaving nothing but the need to be bred, to be knotted behind
You already wrote that twice. This is the third time.
> Not wanting to cross the line of taking from an unconscious body
Buddy you PUT CUM IN HIS TOOTHPASTE AND SOAP. The line you draw is at fucking a corpse?!
> His freshly omegan instincts telling him what to do
Let me guess. To be bred.
The cramps you read earlier was his genitalia changing because of the cum soap. I'm not joking, that's a real thing.
> Scent spiking even further, spices filling the air
Maybe instead of plundering the world for spices, the British Empire could've just grabbed a bunch of alphas. Would've saved 'em a lot of trouble!
> Felt like sinking into a hot bath
More like a hot bath with a pepper spray bath bomb that overflowers.
> Little bundle of nerves
Yes, the G-spot is no longer in his ass. Fascinating biology if I do say so myself.
> Open him up on it and mold his cunt to the shape of his dick
Ah, this line. Not as common as 'his thumbs met in the middle' but it's the third most popular.
> The thought of fucking him reminds the alpha that Jayce wasn't on birth control
Because it wasn't needed. He had a cock until your cum toothpaste changed his entire sex.
> Tightening and squirting slick when he comes
I just think of a spooked octopus or wet sponge.
> Stuffed full with a knot to milk
Are you a cow, now? Never mind, don't answer that.
> Can't breed you if you simply cockwarm me
You can if you ejaculate. This also means the bitching caused him to produce eggs. If this is true, then there really is no need for a sexually dimorphic species.
> Basically virginally again
Again? You mean he had this vagina before? And it just changed back like he's a slug?
> Completely ignoring that the heat would have made it impossible
You already wrote that. We get it, he's a dumb bitch when horny.
> The cunt that solely exists because Viktor made it so.
You already wrote that.
> Squelshing
Nice.
> Begging for entrance. Forcing the omega open more and more
He's already iside.
> Ill-equipped for a child at this point
Well, can Jayce menstruate now? Can he produce eggs? Those are the big questions.
> Knot almost too big to leave
That's a first. Usually he has a pencil dick. Gotta take the wins when you can.
> I made you, you're mine
You said that already.
> Needing to claim him inside out, need to make sure nobody else would take what is his
You already wrote that.
Does this mean that in every universe you change his sex with magic cum toothpaste? Because that is a wild fucking premise if I've ever read one. Omegaverse really can enter WTF territory real quick. It may also help to learn that a German is writing this, so this comes naturally to them. A German enby who writes about sex-changing cum while also being a shotacon? Man, the Marshall Plan wasn't enough.
Do you remember the myths surrounding the laws of Prima Noctis? Where a Lord could rape another man's wife if he so chooses, as that is his lordly wife? Well, throw aside accuracy for a moment and have another turgid tale of a battle-hardened man with PTSD that cucks another white man to rail his white (wo)man. The man getting cucked didn't even appear in the show, but in a journal as a doodle.
So, a few things: Piltover has no standing army, not even mercenaries. It's a city of technology and science, and was founded to escape mages. Noxus is the one that is an imperialist power. Where, exactly, Piltover would invade when all its wealth comes from trade routes is not said. If it wants resources, Zaun is there. Going to war when your city was founded to escape war is certainly a choice.
> Meeting a quota of reaped souls of the opposition
Redundant. 'Meeting a quota of reaped souls' works just as well. The author has a habit of creating these haiku-like sentences that will start grinding your gears.
> His deepest regret
And it's our dear white pooner forced into marriage! Why? Because despite going to war with a foreign power, they still oppress Zaun, and Zaunites have to either assimilate or be kicked out. Remind you of any recent conflicts going on right now?
The Council would be the ones voting to go to war. Why Mel would vote to allow it is never said, but it's safe to assume the author just made her a villain by proxy.
Which foreign nation? The closest one is Noxus and you are NOT invading them. They are a trading partner of Piltover. Ixtal is a jungle nation where there are a bunch of mages with fucked up magic; Shurima is a desert, Targon is a no-ho as the gods hang out there, Noxus would send you packing. Who the fuck are you going to war WITH?
> It was affection that held them together
I nearly died from this cheese.
> Better man
Too bad you aren't one. Maybe you getting on your knees and begging would have been better than you crying and laying around waiting to be saved.
I highly doubt that Mel would pull her investment. She was the one who spearheaded the whole thing, and if she can convince them to keep the other Councilors' investments, she can do it here. Last I checked, they also never shared their patents so there would be no competitors for the Hexgates unless someone stole it.
> Death was a natural outcome in war
No fucking shit. This is treated as a deep philosophical question when it's the most basic statement ever. So proud of you figuring that out, author!
So why didn't you propose then, even as a security measure? Oh yeah, he was too autistic to tell. He had to suffer PTSD to realize the truth.
I still don't know who the fuck you chose to fight a war with.
> Dmitri had been the optimal choice
Of course the doodle is the 'optimal choice' because he was a rival and we need people based on doodles to become rivals.
So he can get lawyers for marriage but he can't get any to defend his citizenship? You know he can just return to Zaun, right?
Viktor has family now? Since when? He's never mentioned them at all.
Ah, the classic tale of the man returning from war only to find his love betrothed to another man. Cue a bunch of dialogue about how Viktor 'didn't choose this' and had to marry in order to keep his rights to Hextech because fuck Mel apparently.
He bites down a sob here, and yet in the next scene, he isn't upset at all when Jayce drags him out of the party. Instead, he's deathly afraid, because if a caveman had murder in his eyes and dragged me out of anywhere, I'd be scared, too.
Note how Viktor is once again feminized, because trans men and People of Gender can't decide whether they want to be treated as men or not.
> What is the meaning of this?
You know full well what this is. He doesn't take it well, naturally.
You were fighting a war that existed for no reason, that was started for no reason, in the author's way of commenting on what I assume is the Israel-Iran conflict, and now has a man blaming another for 'choosing wrong' even when he had no fucking clue what was going on back home.
> Slim wrist
If there's a 'his hands were so big his thumbs met in the middle' I'll declare war on this bitch.
> He never really had a choice to begin with
Very fitting for a pooner. You identify as a man to get more rights, but find out that society still treats you like a woman, so you're back at square one.
> Humiliatingly dragged from the festivities without another word
What a gentleman. And yes, he 'almost rapes' Viktor later, but it's OK because it turns fully consensual.
> Making Viktor feel small in his presence
I bet you he's barely over 5'4.
> Jayce never considered the consequences
You think a man written like a savage has thoughts of consequences? I bet you he can't answer the breakfast question.
> Was nothing but greedy when it came to Viktor
So why didn't he propose marriage in the first place? This would have spared us the trouble.
> Years ago, I would have thought it a dream come true
This is the trope of a bride confessing to her true love that she wants him and wishes she could marry him but can't. Add on some shitty world building and a caveman and you've got this.
You could have just returned to Zaun and continued your work there. You could have smuggled the blueprints out, but noooooo, you wanted to be a victim and have the actual man come and sweep you off your feet. Pathetic.
> Be a trans man
> Your only worth to society is to pop out children
> It keeps happening within this community
Just Pooner Things.
> Prototypes laid in vaults built within the lab
> The careful way Viktor concealed and kept his projects from immediate view
You already wrote that. That said, why didn't he just take the blueprints and run to Zaun? He didn't have to stay in Piltover at all.
> Regarded Viktor with the respect he deserved for his brilliance
And that respect involves using an archaic law to 'claim' him for his own, a law that explicitly is reserved for women. Lmao.
> He was given a large estate
So this basically functions like 19th century Russian society: he gets a house and a medal for all his work in a war we still don't know who was waged against.
> The Council had voted against it each and every time
But they can vote for a foreign war. Logic.
I'm still not getting over how this author looked at that law and went, 'oh wow, that's so perfect for me!' while not realizing it was meant for claiming WOMEN. Nice way to clock your pooner, bitch.
So, let me get this straight: prima noctis here can apply to 'gay' marriage for the purpose of securing an heir, but doesn't happen to actual males because...? I guess we're just left to assume that's the case because the author didn't expect people to think this hard about it.
> Ravenous, voracious desperation
Funny how those terms all apply towards the brown man, while the white one is innocent and pure.
> To stake the claim that should have been apparent to all
You could have done that before you left, you know.
> In the eyes of the Courts, Jayce had full privilege and jurisdiction
And of course the vagina owner can't say no, because they don't have rights.
Yes, we're getting a full-blown bodice ripper scene! Fun!
> Trembling and looking so small
He's just uwu so smol compared to our beastly Latino.
> A wickedness igniting in his veins at the way Viktor's eyes darkened
Don't worry, it's fully consensual, swear. Our little pooner is in good hands.
> Perhaps Viktor expected cruelty; perhaps Viktor expected thoughtless greed and heartless lust
So he assumed his 'lover' was going to be a brute. They are never escaping the racist allegations.
> Broad shoulders
It's always the big, handsome, muscular men doing this and never some skinny methhead fuck, because that isn't sexy and doesn't make these Genderspecials want to flick the bean.
> Has he had his way with you
Because we all know white men can't fuck, but white pussy is worth it.
> Romance crested by depravity and gluttony
This really is a bodice-ripper smut, lmao.
> All of his partner laid out like a feast in front of him
Cliché.
> Drinking from the sweetest nectar that has ever touched his tongue
Way to drum up that ham. And then we get:
> Spreading his flushed, pink pussy open
Because that's what this is all based on: access to pussy. If he was an actual man marrying another man, would this law still apply? I don't think so.
> Made Lord Talis' bedwarmer, cockwarmer
I LOVE how this is always what FTMs are reduced to: holes to fuck at the discretion of hot men. It's so fucking predictable it's comedy now.
> The size difference was obscene, Jayce dwarfed his smaller, slender frame in almost every proportion
I am under the belief that these retards honestly think that Jayce is nearly 7 feet tall and Viktor is under 5 feet tall. The size difference is just ludicrous at this point. Yes, showcase which one is the mal and which one is the female, again.
> How deep would his cock reach inside him
Yes, we are going with the monster cock Jayce, because why not?
> It won't fit
I really need to post those comments I found on YouTube where the women were mocking lines like these. Your footlong cock is just going to drive me into a casket, not the bed.
> The blood on his cock shouldn't stir feelings of lust and triumph as it did
You cannot convince me this is not a racial fetish fic. The brown man takes the white (wo)man's virginity, is so brutal with his thrusts that he gets blood on his dick, and constantly refers to the white FTM as 'delicate'. These women have a bizarre fascination with making a Latino a sexual brute, which either means they sincerely believe that, or wish it was true and that it would happen to them.
> He could mourn the lost time, the years he could have spent breeding Viktor like this
So...why didn't you just do it? This could have all been avoided had he just knocked Viktor up.
> Making him cum, squirt until his restless mind was subdued with pleasure
I wonder how he can even feel pleasure if that police baton is 'nuzzled pleadingly' against his cervix when it's clear Jayce is being so rough he's drawing blood.
> Seeing his fingers meet in the middle
ENOUGH WITH THIS GODDAMN LINE. Forget Iran, I'm going to hammer this bitch's house with bricks. I am so utterly sick of this fucking line and how they make Viktor so fucking tiny. I'm bigger than him at this point!
> Saccharine sadism contrasted cruelly with his darling declaration
If he's sadistic, he can't make any 'darling declarations' because it isn't coming from a place of love. Sadistic and cruel are also redundant as they mean the same thing. This bitch really thought she was achieving something with this.
> Slipping into that primal state where nothing matter but getting his cunt brutalized by that thick, throbbing cock
I wonder how many of these authors are virgins, or if they have had sex, do it with extra large toys. This is ridiculous. He's fucking him so hard there is BLOOD. That isn't pleasure, that pooner would be screaming in pain.
> Vicious, violent thrusts
> Pistoning his hips in equal punishment and reward for every twitch and tightening of his walls against his cock
> One final, merciless thrust of his cock right against his womb
So we have a caveman with a 12'' prick fucking a pooner so hard there's blood, and you want to tell me he was 'nuzzling' against that cervix a while ago. Miss me with that shit.
'I'm ruined'? No bitch, you need a HOSPITAL.
> Be a pooner
> You're a natural slut for a bigger man with a bigger dick
> You end up carrying his child because in the end you're just a tradwife
Yeah, that fits.
You know this could have been avoided had he just stole the blueprints and hid in Zaun. But no, we had to have a random war, a PTSD caveman rape his white pooner pet, and knock him up and claim him as his proper bedslave. Nice Khal Drogo cosplay, man.
Jayviks had ableism until it comes time for them to use terms like 'cripple'. Then it's freeing and them 'reclaiming the term'. I wonder how that cripple's body can even sustain a pregnancy.
I had to stop here. I could not take any more of this fucking fic. It literally made me pull my hair out for how fucking drawn out it was, and for how all that drama Viktor STILL ends up being a pregnant tradwife. These people stress over and over again that they're men and deserve to be treated like men, and yet drop their panties and get out the sundress when a man with a big dick comes around. It's so goddamn-female brained it's offensive. Only a turbo virgin or a fat bitch whose only exposure to sex is violent pornography could write this.
Yes, I am MATI. I cannot take this any longer. I am ready to eat a goddamn brick.
I'll add to this post later, but get a load (literally) of this wild shit.
> Urging two alphas to get along is like pulling teeth
So how does society function, then? It's a wonder anything is peaceful if all it takes is two alphas to start fighting each other like they're pitbulls.
> There is something soothing about Viktor's scent. More often than not, he is completely doused in the other alpha's pheromones
So he's a walking pepper spray can, gotcha.
> It's very much the opposite
I am reminded of geckos and how two males will tear each other up if they so much as invade each other's space. Glad this society is only a cut above base human instincts. It's a miracle it's lasted this long.
> All he knows is that his ruts have never been as calm as they have been
> It must be because they are pack
*They are a pack. A pack is more than two people. Besides, this entire dynamic is based on the misunderstanding of wolf pack dynamics. Thanks, Supernatural.
> Alpha and alpha relations are frowned upon
Oh, right: because the 'natural' relations are between alpha and omega. We don't tolerate pseudo-homosexuality here; someone HAS to have a vagina in order for it to be true sex. MGCraig made the same argument in hers: two openly gay men couldn't be together as alpha males, one has to be bitched and act as the woman in order for it to be accepted. If it sounds like a roundabout way of espousing conservatism, you are correct.
> Incredibly easy on the eyes
Ever notice Omegaverse never features ugly people? Something to think about.
> Whispers of the danger of an alpha's possessiveness
So they act like rabid dogs when they don't get what they want. AKA they just act like unhinged men.
> Remembers hearing people talk about bitching down in the fissures
What this means is that if you manage to 'bitch' another alpha, you can end up turning them into a situational hermaphrodite, with a magic pussy developing overnight. How is this done? Dubious amounts of cum, as the author wrote. She is not exaggerating.
> Letting intake dubious amounts of cum
This isn't English.
Yes, his idea of making Jayce into an omega is to engage in rape by deception by literally sticking his semen everywhere: in his cream, in his lotions, in his cologne, in his shower gels and shampoos and conditioners, even his toothpaste. If that didn't make you go, 'what the absolute fuck' you are in for a treat.
No shit. Cologne isn't just water. Your semen is going to make it glob. The toothpaste shit is vile, though. I'm surprised she didn't rub it into his toilet paper for an added bonus.
> Happily dousing himself in alpha cum and not batting an eye
Guess that heady alpha pheromone means nothing to Old Spice.
> His instincts are becoming more and more omegaesque
What does this mean? Well, they become dumb breeding cows who drool and hunger for cock. No intelligence is to be found among them, and the only words they'll ever say is, 'Alpha breed me'. We're taking down gender dynamics, yo.
> Being cursed with a designation other than beta
So being an omega is a curse and is almost as bad as living as a woman under the Taliban. I don't see why he'd be happy to lose his alpha status since they get everything they want and then some.
> The only thing in class they taught him was how his ruts work
Oh, so there is no comprehensive sex-ed in Omegaverse. They just do basic, heterosexual sex lessons and abstinence. For a world meant to critique gender, it sure has the gender dynamics and faith of the Bible Belt.
> Feels safe whenever his partner is around
> The feeling of safety
Redundant.
> It won't take much for his bowels to explode, leave a bloody mess all over his couch
First we've got semen toothpaste, now we've got exploding assholes. What's next, pedophilia? Oh, wait.
> It would be too omegaesque for an alpha
So they aren't allowed to break ordained gender roles because of biology. Sounds very biological essentialist.
> The strange need to be bred
> His omegan instincts begging to be bred, to be knotted
You already wrote that. You also wrote 'he only cares about that' multiple times already.
> Seems to have completely missed all the signs
Haha, get it? He's hot but he's also a retard!
> Being too obvious
She means 'oblivious'. Missing a few letters, there.
> Leaving nothing but the need to be bred, to be knotted behind
You already wrote that twice. This is the third time.
> Not wanting to cross the line of taking from an unconscious body
Buddy you PUT CUM IN HIS TOOTHPASTE AND SOAP. The line you draw is at fucking a corpse?!
> His freshly omegan instincts telling him what to do
Let me guess. To be bred.
The cramps you read earlier was his genitalia changing because of the cum soap. I'm not joking, that's a real thing.
> Scent spiking even further, spices filling the air
Maybe instead of plundering the world for spices, the British Empire could've just grabbed a bunch of alphas. Would've saved 'em a lot of trouble!
> Felt like sinking into a hot bath
More like a hot bath with a pepper spray bath bomb that overflowers.
> Little bundle of nerves
Yes, the G-spot is no longer in his ass. Fascinating biology if I do say so myself.
> Open him up on it and mold his cunt to the shape of his dick
Ah, this line. Not as common as 'his thumbs met in the middle' but it's the third most popular.
> The thought of fucking him reminds the alpha that Jayce wasn't on birth control
Because it wasn't needed. He had a cock until your cum toothpaste changed his entire sex.
> Tightening and squirting slick when he comes
I just think of a spooked octopus or wet sponge.
> Stuffed full with a knot to milk
Are you a cow, now? Never mind, don't answer that.
> Can't breed you if you simply cockwarm me
You can if you ejaculate. This also means the bitching caused him to produce eggs. If this is true, then there really is no need for a sexually dimorphic species.
> Basically virginally again
Again? You mean he had this vagina before? And it just changed back like he's a slug?
> Completely ignoring that the heat would have made it impossible
You already wrote that. We get it, he's a dumb bitch when horny.
> The cunt that solely exists because Viktor made it so.
You already wrote that.
> Squelshing
Nice.
> Begging for entrance. Forcing the omega open more and more
He's already iside.
> Ill-equipped for a child at this point
Well, can Jayce menstruate now? Can he produce eggs? Those are the big questions.
> Knot almost too big to leave
That's a first. Usually he has a pencil dick. Gotta take the wins when you can.
> I made you, you're mine
You said that already.
> Needing to claim him inside out, need to make sure nobody else would take what is his
You already wrote that.
Does this mean that in every universe you change his sex with magic cum toothpaste? Because that is a wild fucking premise if I've ever read one. Omegaverse really can enter WTF territory real quick. It may also help to learn that a German is writing this, so this comes naturally to them. A German enby who writes about sex-changing cum while also being a shotacon? Man, the Marshall Plan wasn't enough.
Do you remember the myths surrounding the laws of Prima Noctis? Where a Lord could rape another man's wife if he so chooses, as that is his lordly wife? Well, throw aside accuracy for a moment and have another turgid tale of a battle-hardened man with PTSD that cucks another white man to rail his white (wo)man. The man getting cucked didn't even appear in the show, but in a journal as a doodle.
So, a few things: Piltover has no standing army, not even mercenaries. It's a city of technology and science, and was founded to escape mages. Noxus is the one that is an imperialist power. Where, exactly, Piltover would invade when all its wealth comes from trade routes is not said. If it wants resources, Zaun is there. Going to war when your city was founded to escape war is certainly a choice.
> Meeting a quota of reaped souls of the opposition
Redundant. 'Meeting a quota of reaped souls' works just as well. The author has a habit of creating these haiku-like sentences that will start grinding your gears.
> His deepest regret
And it's our dear white pooner forced into marriage! Why? Because despite going to war with a foreign power, they still oppress Zaun, and Zaunites have to either assimilate or be kicked out. Remind you of any recent conflicts going on right now?
The Council would be the ones voting to go to war. Why Mel would vote to allow it is never said, but it's safe to assume the author just made her a villain by proxy.
Which foreign nation? The closest one is Noxus and you are NOT invading them. They are a trading partner of Piltover. Ixtal is a jungle nation where there are a bunch of mages with fucked up magic; Shurima is a desert, Targon is a no-ho as the gods hang out there, Noxus would send you packing. Who the fuck are you going to war WITH?
> It was affection that held them together
I nearly died from this cheese.
> Better man
Too bad you aren't one. Maybe you getting on your knees and begging would have been better than you crying and laying around waiting to be saved.
I highly doubt that Mel would pull her investment. She was the one who spearheaded the whole thing, and if she can convince them to keep the other Councilors' investments, she can do it here. Last I checked, they also never shared their patents so there would be no competitors for the Hexgates unless someone stole it.
> Death was a natural outcome in war
No fucking shit. This is treated as a deep philosophical question when it's the most basic statement ever. So proud of you figuring that out, author!
So why didn't you propose then, even as a security measure? Oh yeah, he was too autistic to tell. He had to suffer PTSD to realize the truth.
I still don't know who the fuck you chose to fight a war with.
> Dmitri had been the optimal choice
Of course the doodle is the 'optimal choice' because he was a rival and we need people based on doodles to become rivals.
So he can get lawyers for marriage but he can't get any to defend his citizenship? You know he can just return to Zaun, right?
Viktor has family now? Since when? He's never mentioned them at all.
Ah, the classic tale of the man returning from war only to find his love betrothed to another man. Cue a bunch of dialogue about how Viktor 'didn't choose this' and had to marry in order to keep his rights to Hextech because fuck Mel apparently.
He bites down a sob here, and yet in the next scene, he isn't upset at all when Jayce drags him out of the party. Instead, he's deathly afraid, because if a caveman had murder in his eyes and dragged me out of anywhere, I'd be scared, too.
Note how Viktor is once again feminized, because trans men and People of Gender can't decide whether they want to be treated as men or not.
> What is the meaning of this?
You know full well what this is. He doesn't take it well, naturally.
You were fighting a war that existed for no reason, that was started for no reason, in the author's way of commenting on what I assume is the Israel-Iran conflict, and now has a man blaming another for 'choosing wrong' even when he had no fucking clue what was going on back home.
> Slim wrist
If there's a 'his hands were so big his thumbs met in the middle' I'll declare war on this bitch.
> He never really had a choice to begin with
Very fitting for a pooner. You identify as a man to get more rights, but find out that society still treats you like a woman, so you're back at square one.
> Humiliatingly dragged from the festivities without another word
What a gentleman. And yes, he 'almost rapes' Viktor later, but it's OK because it turns fully consensual.
> Making Viktor feel small in his presence
I bet you he's barely over 5'4.
> Jayce never considered the consequences
You think a man written like a savage has thoughts of consequences? I bet you he can't answer the breakfast question.
> Was nothing but greedy when it came to Viktor
So why didn't he propose marriage in the first place? This would have spared us the trouble.
> Years ago, I would have thought it a dream come true
This is the trope of a bride confessing to her true love that she wants him and wishes she could marry him but can't. Add on some shitty world building and a caveman and you've got this.
You could have just returned to Zaun and continued your work there. You could have smuggled the blueprints out, but noooooo, you wanted to be a victim and have the actual man come and sweep you off your feet. Pathetic.
> Be a trans man
> Your only worth to society is to pop out children
> It keeps happening within this community
Just Pooner Things.
> Prototypes laid in vaults built within the lab
> The careful way Viktor concealed and kept his projects from immediate view
You already wrote that. That said, why didn't he just take the blueprints and run to Zaun? He didn't have to stay in Piltover at all.
> Regarded Viktor with the respect he deserved for his brilliance
And that respect involves using an archaic law to 'claim' him for his own, a law that explicitly is reserved for women. Lmao.
> He was given a large estate
So this basically functions like 19th century Russian society: he gets a house and a medal for all his work in a war we still don't know who was waged against.
> The Council had voted against it each and every time
But they can vote for a foreign war. Logic.
I'm still not getting over how this author looked at that law and went, 'oh wow, that's so perfect for me!' while not realizing it was meant for claiming WOMEN. Nice way to clock your pooner, bitch.
So, let me get this straight: prima noctis here can apply to 'gay' marriage for the purpose of securing an heir, but doesn't happen to actual males because...? I guess we're just left to assume that's the case because the author didn't expect people to think this hard about it.
> Ravenous, voracious desperation
Funny how those terms all apply towards the brown man, while the white one is innocent and pure.
> To stake the claim that should have been apparent to all
You could have done that before you left, you know.
> In the eyes of the Courts, Jayce had full privilege and jurisdiction
And of course the vagina owner can't say no, because they don't have rights.
Yes, we're getting a full-blown bodice ripper scene! Fun!
> Trembling and looking so small
He's just uwu so smol compared to our beastly Latino.
> A wickedness igniting in his veins at the way Viktor's eyes darkened
Don't worry, it's fully consensual, swear. Our little pooner is in good hands.
> Perhaps Viktor expected cruelty; perhaps Viktor expected thoughtless greed and heartless lust
So he assumed his 'lover' was going to be a brute. They are never escaping the racist allegations.
> Broad shoulders
It's always the big, handsome, muscular men doing this and never some skinny methhead fuck, because that isn't sexy and doesn't make these Genderspecials want to flick the bean.
> Has he had his way with you
Because we all know white men can't fuck, but white pussy is worth it.
> Romance crested by depravity and gluttony
This really is a bodice-ripper smut, lmao.
> All of his partner laid out like a feast in front of him
Cliché.
> Drinking from the sweetest nectar that has ever touched his tongue
Way to drum up that ham. And then we get:
> Spreading his flushed, pink pussy open
Because that's what this is all based on: access to pussy. If he was an actual man marrying another man, would this law still apply? I don't think so.
> Made Lord Talis' bedwarmer, cockwarmer
I LOVE how this is always what FTMs are reduced to: holes to fuck at the discretion of hot men. It's so fucking predictable it's comedy now.
> The size difference was obscene, Jayce dwarfed his smaller, slender frame in almost every proportion
I am under the belief that these retards honestly think that Jayce is nearly 7 feet tall and Viktor is under 5 feet tall. The size difference is just ludicrous at this point. Yes, showcase which one is the mal and which one is the female, again.
> How deep would his cock reach inside him
Yes, we are going with the monster cock Jayce, because why not?
> It won't fit
I really need to post those comments I found on YouTube where the women were mocking lines like these. Your footlong cock is just going to drive me into a casket, not the bed.
> The blood on his cock shouldn't stir feelings of lust and triumph as it did
You cannot convince me this is not a racial fetish fic. The brown man takes the white (wo)man's virginity, is so brutal with his thrusts that he gets blood on his dick, and constantly refers to the white FTM as 'delicate'. These women have a bizarre fascination with making a Latino a sexual brute, which either means they sincerely believe that, or wish it was true and that it would happen to them.
> He could mourn the lost time, the years he could have spent breeding Viktor like this
So...why didn't you just do it? This could have all been avoided had he just knocked Viktor up.
> Making him cum, squirt until his restless mind was subdued with pleasure
I wonder how he can even feel pleasure if that police baton is 'nuzzled pleadingly' against his cervix when it's clear Jayce is being so rough he's drawing blood.
> Seeing his fingers meet in the middle
ENOUGH WITH THIS GODDAMN LINE. Forget Iran, I'm going to hammer this bitch's house with bricks. I am so utterly sick of this fucking line and how they make Viktor so fucking tiny. I'm bigger than him at this point!
> Saccharine sadism contrasted cruelly with his darling declaration
If he's sadistic, he can't make any 'darling declarations' because it isn't coming from a place of love. Sadistic and cruel are also redundant as they mean the same thing. This bitch really thought she was achieving something with this.
> Slipping into that primal state where nothing matter but getting his cunt brutalized by that thick, throbbing cock
I wonder how many of these authors are virgins, or if they have had sex, do it with extra large toys. This is ridiculous. He's fucking him so hard there is BLOOD. That isn't pleasure, that pooner would be screaming in pain.
> Vicious, violent thrusts
> Pistoning his hips in equal punishment and reward for every twitch and tightening of his walls against his cock
> One final, merciless thrust of his cock right against his womb
So we have a caveman with a 12'' prick fucking a pooner so hard there's blood, and you want to tell me he was 'nuzzling' against that cervix a while ago. Miss me with that shit.
'I'm ruined'? No bitch, you need a HOSPITAL.
> Be a pooner
> You're a natural slut for a bigger man with a bigger dick
> You end up carrying his child because in the end you're just a tradwife
Yeah, that fits.
You know this could have been avoided had he just stole the blueprints and hid in Zaun. But no, we had to have a random war, a PTSD caveman rape his white pooner pet, and knock him up and claim him as his proper bedslave. Nice Khal Drogo cosplay, man.
Jayviks had ableism until it comes time for them to use terms like 'cripple'. Then it's freeing and them 'reclaiming the term'. I wonder how that cripple's body can even sustain a pregnancy.
I had to stop here. I could not take any more of this fucking fic. It literally made me pull my hair out for how fucking drawn out it was, and for how all that drama Viktor STILL ends up being a pregnant tradwife. These people stress over and over again that they're men and deserve to be treated like men, and yet drop their panties and get out the sundress when a man with a big dick comes around. It's so goddamn-female brained it's offensive. Only a turbo virgin or a fat bitch whose only exposure to sex is violent pornography could write this.
Yes, I am MATI. I cannot take this any longer. I am ready to eat a goddamn brick.
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I can already tell this will be a disaster.
