- Joined
- Oct 29, 2020
The last chapter ending with the police coming in would've been perfect to leave it at, since obviously the torture and trauma porn is what Emma's in it for, but of course she has to drag it out longer.
It's been a while since I've read the other 7 chapters, but if memory serves, their speech had significantly devolved but otherwise still "normal" - and now they suddenly have New Yorker accents? (I'm assuming it rubbed off on them from Boog, but I have no fucking clue what he sounds like because I never wasted time on this shit show until this shitshow) It makes the dialogue such a goddamn slog to read through. One of the first things you learn about writing dialogue is not to write out accents because it's confusing and obnoxious to read through. I guess dear Emma was too eager to pump out the latest installment of Fanboy And Yo Get Traumatized Together to research some actual writing tips.
It's been a while since I've read the other 7 chapters, but if memory serves, their speech had significantly devolved but otherwise still "normal" - and now they suddenly have New Yorker accents? (I'm assuming it rubbed off on them from Boog, but I have no fucking clue what he sounds like because I never wasted time on this shit show until this shitshow) It makes the dialogue such a goddamn slog to read through. One of the first things you learn about writing dialogue is not to write out accents because it's confusing and obnoxious to read through. I guess dear Emma was too eager to pump out the latest installment of Fanboy And Yo Get Traumatized Together to research some actual writing tips.