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Well you're the one who knows all the shit we need for the article regardless.
Fair enough. Just tell me what you need at a given juncture.
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Well you're the one who knows all the shit we need for the article regardless.
The introduction has been rewritten and so has the "Early years" area.
https://lolcow.wiki/wiki/Brianna_Wu#Early_years
I've tagged some things with {[cite}} but there's more that needs to be cited IMO.
What's sad is that this is a really interesting article when you condense it. She's a complete and total failure.
Don't do it all at once. Just take one section and refurbish it. Or, look at how the excellent Adolf Hitler WP article is organized and just organize information.
The biggest issue is the snark factor. You never want to impose your opinions on the reader in a wiki article. I've noticed you tend to write a sentence like this:
"Despite X, Brianna Wu never did Y."
There's not really any reason to say someone didn't do something when you're being objective. "Hitler never considered how terrible Operation Barbarossa could end for his war effort" is not a pertinent piece of information and is a baseless conjecture. Compare that to these more neutral statements that are given context to make a negative claim.
"Despite objections by his war cabinet, Hitler showed no concern that Operation Barbarossa could fail."
"Although Wu has repeatedly claim to be a journalist and an engineer,<reference> there is no evidence of her ever having graduated."
@Jaimas can you help me {{cite}} her RNC work and her parent's RNC work?
Inc.com said:At Ole Miss, Wu studied journalism and wrote for The Daily Mississippian, but she never graduated. She left school the first time to start her own video animation company, came back, and dropped out for good in 2001 after getting swept up in the excitement surrounding George W. Bush's election as president. Her parents were big donors, and they got her a ticket to an inaugural ball. That led to a stint working in Washington--long enough to become disillusioned with Republican politics as well as dangerously dependent on Ambien, a sleep aid. Her parents, in a final act of support, brought her home to Hattiesburg and paid for a bed at Pine Grove, where Tiger Woods would later be treated for sex addiction.
“The first time I met him, I was the opinion editor at The DM [EDITOR’S NOTE: The Daily Mississippian], and I turned to see this creepy fuck standing behind me. I shook his hand, and he pulled it away, saying “oowwww.” He then explained that he’d broken his wrist in a bicycle accident that had almost killed him and had given him amnesia. He explained that he wanted to be a columnist and that he had previously worked for George W. Bush in the white house but that he had since realized how retarded and evil all conservatives were. About this time my phone started ringing, and I politely ignored it while I talked to this guy. Then it rang again, and again until I answered. It was the managing editor, who had ducked behind the front desk and was whispering, “stay calm, and don’t react to this, but this guy isn’t supposed to be here. He has a restraining order. Get rid of him.” By this point, I was concerned the guy might knife me at any moment; so I told him to write me three columns and that I’d evaluate them and get back to him on whether he could write for me. (I’m still proud of my ability to remain poised and convincingly pretend that the dm had any fucking standards.)
Turns out, a year prior, he’d come in wanting the dm to run a comic strip that he was doing. When he was told they weren’t interested, he flipped out. He called one of the workers a fat dyke, and when Dr. Husni came to her defense, he called him a “raghead” and a “sand nigger.” They got a restraining order to keep him away from Farley, but when they moved to Bishop, it no longer applied, and he was actually able to weasel back in to working for the SMC.”
At the age of 23, she decided to move to DC and work in politics for the Republican party — despite having no job leads. She threw everything she owned in her car and kept applying until she found work doing constituent services and fundraising. Wu has frequently spoken about this time period leading to a strong shift in her political views. Seeing the way the Republican party operated was in stark contrast to the ideals of the Republican party she saw stated on Fox News. By 26, she left DC disgusted — and decided to finish her undergraduate degree at the University of Mississippi.
By 2004, Wu was extremely frustrated with the Bush administration, and started reading books by prominent liberals reevaluating her beliefs. She spent 2004 campaigning heavily for John Kerry. In 2005, she was disowned by her parents over differences over the election and GLBT rights. Wu has stated she was homeless during this period.
It's getting there but you're still getting caught in old pitfalls. Words like "likewise", "indeed", "outright" are still there. It's really just not necessary.Added more citations. Gradually working on things.
Half of this sentence is personal language and the use of emphasis here is inappropriate.
Despite this, Brianna Wu has repeatedly declared that she has, indeed, graduated.
Actually Jaimas, as a starting point, do me a favor. Like I said with the Frank article, please double-check if there's any information in the main Frank article, then merge that info in from the Brianna article. Once that's done, remove the entire thing and write a very, very short "Family" paragraph at the very bottom above references a la https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Adolf_Hitler#Family
I need you to do this because I don't know anything about Frank or the Flynts.