Chris Chan Documentary.

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I thought this was overall very well done. A lot of points I might have mentioned have been raised by others, save for the fact that Chris wasn't pretending to shoot Adam Stackhouse with an Airsoft gun; I can't decide if this is better or worse, but he was actually "shooting" him with an old-style Megatron Transformers toy.

I don't think it's a minor point that you have a lot of capitalization and spelling errors in text and especially title cards, particularly in the first quarter or so of the runtime. It's absolutely unfair, but it's a fact of life -- when people see an uncapitalized name or a spelling goof, they will automatically think less of the entire product, despite the quality of the movie itself. (Same thing with resumes. However good the qualifications listed, typos and related goofs will get the thing shitcanned.) I admit I didn't put in the effort of taking notes, but if you really want, PM me the text of the titles/cards/whatever text you yourself added, and I can show you where you need to make the corrections. I think there may be some in the credits, too. I didn't watch because frankly, I thought using "Still Alive" was a massive cliche. (You could make a case that Chris's hubris has led to his own downfall, sort of the way GLaDOS's does hers, but in the film as it exists right now, you haven't actually drawn that parallel.)

In the Surfshack Tito saga, you left out any mention of the girl we call "The Wallflower," which is for the best -- both to keep your runtime down, and because she requested everything about her real name or pen name be removed from the CWCki, being an extremely private person who doesn't want to be associated with Chris. However, you left in part of a video where Chris says her real name (something like "You have no right to take NAME from me this way"). If there's a way you can cut that, that would be even better, and it's confusing to viewers who don't know who the hell she is (as she wants it).

Like others, I thought that you should either use the special ed teacher more, or cut him entirely. I lean toward the first, but it's your movie.

That said, good job on actually finishing a project that has been merely notional in people's heads for ages. I think setting it aside for a while and then taking a good, hard look at the whole thing, while taking some of the helpful critiques in this thread on board, would be a good idea, but my boyfriend, who isn't interested enough in Chris to read this shit himself (everything he knows about him is filtered through me for the most part), ended up laughing. So you accomplished that too!
 
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I thought this was overall very well done. A lot of points I might have mentioned have been raised by others, save for the fact that Chris wasn't pretending to shoot Adam Stackhouse with an Airsoft gun; I can't decide if this is better or worse, but he was actually "shooting" him with an old-style Megatron Transformers toy.

I don't think it's a minor point that you have a lot of capitalization and spelling errors in text and especially title cards, particularly in the first quarter or so of the runtime. It's absolutely unfair, but it's a fact of life -- when people see an uncapitalized name or a spelling goof, they will automatically think less of the entire product, despite the quality of the movie itself. (Same thing with resumes. However good the qualifications listed, typos and related goofs will get the thing shitcanned.) I admit I didn't put in the effort of taking notes, but if you really want, PM me the text of the titles/cards/whatever text you yourself added, and I can show you where you need to make the corrections. I think there may be some in the credits, too. I didn't watch because frankly, I thought using "Still Alive" was a massive cliche. (You could make a case that Chris's hubris has led to his own downfall, sort of the way GLaDOS's does hers, but in the film as it exists right now, you haven't actually drawn that parallel.)

In the Surfshack Tito saga, you left out any mention of the girl we call "The Wallflower," which is for the best -- both to keep your runtime down, and because she requested everything about her real name or pen name be removed from the CWCki, being an extremely private person who doesn't want to be associated with Chris. However, you left in part of a video where Chris says her real name (something like "You have no right to take NAME from me this way"). If there's a way you can cut that, that would be even better, and it's confusing to viewers who don't know who the hell she is (as she wants it).

Like others, I thought that you should either use the special ed teacher more, or cut him entirely. I lean toward the first, but it's your movie.

That said, good job on actually finishing a project that has been merely notional in people's heads for ages. I think setting it aside for a while and then taking a good, hard look at the whole thing, while taking some of the helpful critiques in this thread on board, would be a good idea, but my boyfriend, who isn't interested enough in Chris to read this shit himself (everything he knows about him is filtered through me for the most part), ended up laughing. So you accomplished that too!
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I think the mega tron pistol should still be an air soft gun because it is more easy to understand. I mean the pistol is a relic but that is more of a deep and dirty christorian thing in my mind atleast not the main focus. But other than that everything I agree with.

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He'd probably have to attend an anti-Gay rally to see Liquid. :(
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Fly to colorado, waddle down to liquid with my cheeto stained fingers heavy breathing holding up a shitty microphone, scream at him incoherent words "HOWD YFEELCHRIS CHANMOVIE"......."WEL???". I think liquid would use his chun li moves right then and there and karate chop me in 30 places.
 
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Contragulations. Aside from a few typos this documentary looked really professional and informative. Your tone is really good and never I have been annoyed by your narration. I've read a few pages of the thread while I was still lurking and I think any type of constructive criticism has already been made. Thus I will simply say that I will be more than happy to rewatch the documentary once you made the modifications you were talking about when it comes to aesthetics and facts.

I would also rejoice at a director's cut... you know... something 2 hours long... but that's just me. I like to get drunk on my couch, smoking Cohibas and watching documentaries on YouTube...
 
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I liked it. I forgive you the typos and slight factual errors since you're a young 'un. I couldn't have done anything that professional when I was in high school.

I think the only thing that bothered me slightly was how underused the special ed teacher was. I was expecting some really insightful commentary about the support available to sped kids and what happens when they don't get it, with some parallels drawn to Chris. Instead all he really ended up saying was "autistic people want to be happy too" which was a trite and pointless interlude.

Still all the same at no point did it feel like it was dragging and I think most of your narration of the actual sagas was bang-on-the-money. You've got some serious cajones to actually show Chris to a teacher, so kudos.
 
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I put this on last night at 3am intending to fall asleep with it in the background, but I couldn't stop watching. You did a great job on this!! I do think a few things ran a little longer than they needed to (like playing the entire video of the medallion being destroyed), and I would have liked to have seen more insight on how his parents (particularly Barb) have some responsibility in enabling his behavior (really would have loved to have seen a snippet of "THAT IS MY HOUSE" with Bob)...but all in all, this was thorough and amazingly well done. It didn't feel like something done by a high school student at all, but rather a rough draft for something greater :)
 
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Let me be a crazy Roger Ebert with English-issues here and say - i liked it overall, thing's been said here about improvements i totally agree with, something i missed was some more emphasis on the "cultural" impact on the Internet he'd made (Meme's and all those funny YT-Vids that's been made in the hundreds, if not thousands)

I know you mentiond the trolls and the Spazkid vids but i felt somewhat left out on his (im)popularity.
 
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I like Super Size Ego.

Also, first post in the board.
 
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O.K, sorry I have been kind of not here that much but you know I am in school so allot of iffy dates for free time projects. But I just finished the filming of the teachers reaction, going to try and get it done edited and uploaded by late tonight and if not then the next day. Thank you everyone for your patience.
 
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