DeviantArt Horrors

[Cable 7]

Spoiler: Shrek was an okay movie.

 

[Bungleboy]

http://keytee-chan.deviantart.com/art/Blossom-meets-Domesticana-388365958

What the fuck is this gay shit

 

[Lucky Wildcard]

My first post talked about how some weirdo was nagging me to draw Blue from Blue's clues in a diaper. Here's some of the drawings...

Spoiler

 

[Observatory]

My first post talked about how some weirdo was nagging me to draw Blue from Blue's clues in a diaper. Here's some of the drawings...

Spoiler

Well shit.
Why the fuck are the first and last also sexual. Why scat and nipples. Why. Fuck.

 

[Eatme]

My first post talked about how some weirdo was nagging me to draw Blue from Blue's clues in a diaper. Here's some of the drawings...

Spoiler

I hope you didn't drew any of the pictures....
If you did, i really really hope that he paid you well.
It's in general sad when someone gets talked into drawing something messed up like that

 

[Jumpin Jenkins]

My first post talked about how some weirdo was nagging me to draw Blue from Blue's clues in a diaper. Here's some of the drawings...

Spoiler

Pfft, I didn't need sleep anyways.

 

[Johnny Bravo]

My first post talked about how some weirdo was nagging me to draw Blue from Blue's clues in a diaper. Here's some of the drawings...

Spoiler

Oh good, more images to haunt my nightmares.

 

[Jumpin Jenkins]

Well friends, it's time for another in-depth review of Deviant-Art shit.

Spoiler: 2Spooky Creepypasta Special

Let's start by shitting on creepypastas in general. The whole point of a creepypasta is obvious: To be creepy or scary, this is something that none of these OCs not one I have ever seen have managed to do. No Jeff the killer isn't scary, neither is Slenderman (Though very well done) Jeff the Killer is just badly written literacy gorn, which got lucky with all the Sasuke fangirls on deviantArt who thinks that brooding dark and psychopathic is totally hawt.
Ben Drowned is also a case of very well done video editing, but they took it off the deep end with the whole cult thing.
Squidward Suicide has it's own special award for birthing hundreds of "lost episodes" with HYPER REALISTIC BLEEDING EYES. Because how the fuck do eyes even become hyper realistic?
Current creepypastas are nothing more than gorn in the written format. They watched "The Thing" or "The Exorcist" and, wanting to copy it, made "Tokyo Gore Police"(Funny as hell movie check it out) Whilst I still love a good horror story, I can't read half of the shit these people put out what they call Scary! Finding a good story now is close to impossible, you just have to get lucky.
And as I mentioned I'm a huge horror nut, I have more horror movies than I know what to fucking do with. So this still hits me right in the special pace, somewhere near the signed copy of The Evil Dead, and the bottle of habanero sauce.
But enough bullshit, let's get to the reviews.

Here we have Delia Cannibal What can I say about the design? Well let's run the checklist for creepypasta characters:

1. Underage
2. Ruined clothes
3. Constant bleeding
4. Missing eye
5. RED EYEEEEES
6. Kitchen knife

Yep, this is a crappypasta character right here. If she has time to keep her hair perfectly emo, she has time to go to Hot Topic and pick up a new pair of fucking pants. Secondly, why are her molars exposed? I understand rotted flesh and zombie stuff, but wouldn't they be the last to go, the sides of the lips would be first.
Anything else to say? Fuck, I don't know, it's your typical edgy teenager character but with more blood and guts.

On to the bio.
"Pain, so much pain.. Over years and years.
I was diffrent then the other Teenagers...Just like everybody else."
Attention all goth kids, or "different" kids: You are not, you just are not different. You think you are a unique snowflake, well so do the rest of the unique snowflakes. And in the end you all hit the ground and clump together to become slush.
"they didn't accept me, they bullied and ignores me all the time. Pain, so much Pain...
It embarrasses me to say I used to type...like this... Every other word...had this...drawn out speech...but... I had no idea...that it was not what I thought it was...
I always had depressions, They could help me...but they didn't they still ignored and hated me.
Another tip for the kids feeling left out: Pull your finger out your arse and go talk to somebody, chances are they won't think you are such and antisocial cunt, if you are not an antisocial cunt.
I always suppressed my hate and my wrath. Bit this was a mistake..a big mistake...
lonely...so...lonely...
Boring, so boring...
"Hey you stupid Emo Bitch!", they said. Every and every day... and much worser things.
Just like high school. Wait, are you saying everyone does that in high school or are you just being an over-dramatic cunt? Well shit! I guess being bullied in high school doesn't make you an interesting character. So people can stop using it now. Please.
I felt worser every day. I started to cutting me and had suicide thoughts and then... murderous thoughts...
I wantet to see...Blood...THEIR BLOOD! I lought i lought so diseased.
I have no idea what "I lought" means. What even.
Next day I dook a knife in my Schoolbag. "they will die, they will all die!",I laught. Something inside me broke...my Psyche. All I wanted, was to kill.
I thougt the whole way to the Busstop about my revenge.
Because nothing says murder like waiting for the bus!
I crossed the street and didn't realized anything. Suddenly, a car crashed into me.
Blood was all over the street.
No seriously, I actually laughed at this part. It may make me a bastard, but imagine a little angry emo kid running across the road with a knife. "Yaaaa--" *BOOM* Hit by a bus! That shit's hilarious.
Feel...my Pain...
No. I don't want to.
Name: Delia Cannibal
Age: 15
Species: Undead.
Friends:
NOPE! NOT DOING THIS FRIENDS/ENEMIES SHIT! It's always fucking Slenderman and Jeff the Killer. Fuck that.
Well, it can't be that ba-
Friends: Jeff the Killer, Eyeless Jack, BEN DROWNED, Smile.Dog, Mr. Widemouth, Slenderman, Trenderman, Splendorman,Offenderman,the SeedEater
I knew it. I fucking knew it.
Needs to inhale daily chemical Gas to avoid decay.
You mean embalming fluid right? And you don't inhale that stuff.
Well what can I say about this?
It's a typical example of how bad this shit can get. I mean, what the fuck does this have to do with creepypastas? I have no idea. This should just be a OC or something along those lines. If you don't have a story, you are not a creepypasta. And this? This is just shit. It's not the least bit creepy, it's not scary-looking, and hell, even the fact she's a zombie doesn't mean shit when she acts and moves like a human. No reason why she became a zombie, no reason why she didn't try to do anything about her cuntiness. Just your typical "I'm a misunderstood teenager" bullshit you hear from kids all the fucking time.
I guess I should give some more constructive criticism on this. Learn how rot works, if she has decayed enough to lose her cheeks, other parts would have rotted off too. And Google embalming fluid. It's not a gas.
And finally, learn to write without putting "..." between every other word.

Expect more Creepypasta OC reviews.

 

[Lucky Wildcard]

I hope you didn't drew any of the pictures....
If you did, i really really hope that he paid you well.
It's in general sad when someone gets talked into drawing something messed up like that

I didn't. I almost did (Out of reluctance, mind you), but I searched his profile and found out he asked multiple people for this, which is where I snapped at him and blocked him. None of those were commissions, they were all requests. Even if I did, I would've deleted it anyway, so he was wasting my time regardless of whatever happened. My real mistake was not blocking him the first time he asked me for it. Actually, my real mistake was taking requests to begin with.

BTW, he never favorited the work people drew for him. When he finally did, some people who did draw for him (And I mean some) deleted their pictures they drew for him.

 

[wheat pasta]

God dammit, Blue's Clues was my favorite show as a kid.
Fuck.

 

[Eatme]

I didn't. I almost did (Out of reluctance, mind you), but I searched his profile and found out he asked multiple people for this, which is where I snapped at him and blocked him. None of those were commissions, they were all requests. Even if I did, I would've deleted it anyway, so he was wasting my time regardless of whatever happened. My real mistake was not blocking him the first time he asked me for it. Actually, my real mistake was taking requests to begin with.

BTW, he never favorited the work people drew for him. When he finally did, some people who did draw for him (And I mean some) deleted their pictures they drew for him.

Creating very specific messed up wankfodder for someone with wierd fetishes for free, risking any reputation the artist may had, doesn't even get the artist a little "thank you" or something.
Only a picture of Blue with soiled daipers, or worse, on their Gallery.

Good to hear that you turned down his request.

 

[Lucky Wildcard]

God dammit, Blue's Clues was my favorite show as a kid.
Fuck.

Someone said that his childhood died when he looked at his gallery. Said person was a diaper lover. I'm not making this up.

Creating very specific messed up wankfodder for someone with wierd fetishes for free, risking any reputation the artist may had, doesn't even get the artist a little "thank you" or something.
Only a picture of Blue with soiled daipers, or worse, on their Gallery.

Good to hear that you turned down his request.

I never wanted to draw it in the first place. He should never have stalked me for it. He did apologize later on for giving me a hard time, and later requests weren't diaper related, but by then people were getting onto him hounding everyone so he deactivated.

 

[grilledcheesesandwich]

Spoiler: Just your average Deviantart user

 

[Jumpin Jenkins]

Part 2 of the Spooky Creepypasta Special.

Spoiler: 420spookit

And here we have Cavity by corgi-moon-pies. I like the design again on this one, it looks like it would make a funny candy store owner, or something fun and happy. But it's a horror character. So long, potential!
There is nothing about this that says horror. At all. I'm sure the candy would taste nice, but the green pus kind of makes me think she has past her expiration date.
Since we don't want this to long I will be cutting out some crap for the rest of this.
Name: Sweet Tooth (aka "The Cavity") most people just call her Sweety [her real name is Yvette]
I knew a guy in jail called "The cavity" But for an ENTIRELY different reason.
Age: 15
National Origin: German
Birthday: May 5th 1996
I don't think people should put the year of a characters birth, unless their story is set in a specific time period. Day and month is fine, putting years gives you problems with the passage of time.
Methods of Killing: Her claws can retract and extend to a certain amount of feet,
How uncomfortable.
her saliva is unbearably sweet and on contact instantly starts to decay and rot, her teeth can also inject her saliva like a spider injecting venom into their victim
So acid spit. I understand rotting away teeth and bones, but I don't know many sweets which rot away skin, unless you count Krokodil as a sweet.
Likes: Sweet things, candy, things that give people a sense of thrill (like murder),
Most people don't count murder as thrills, buuuut it's an "edgy" OC, so pointless murder and atrocities against humanity are pretty much like saying hello is in most other universes.
being in a good mood and not having anything bad happen during the day, things decaying and rotting, oh and did i mention candy? She likes that a lot.
Maybe she should like her rot, not just any rot. Have you smelled rotten meat? I mean, the maggots crawling out are pretty cool, but the smell is nasty.
Dislikes: Anything sour tasting, cleanliness (anything, she'll mess it up because she's urged to), she dislikes very little
Great lesson to teach kids, "don't shower, and a magical candy monster will come, made completely out of sweets, with candy cane spikes and gumdrop nipples." ...



I dare you, dear Kiwi's, to call a loved one "Gumdrop Nipples" as a pet name.
Story: Ever since she was a little child, Yvette loved visiting her grandfather who was an inventor of candy in all shapes and sizes (think of Willy Wonka And The Chocolate Factory, that kind of candy creator).
Funny you should mention this, because I think this character would be much better as a Willy Wonka fancharacter. The candy monster!
Whenever she came over her grandpa always warned her never to eat too much of his candy, or she might just turn into some; little did she know he was being serious rather than a cute joke everyone made when a child ate too much of something.
Don't eat too much broccoli or you will turn into one!
But one day her teeth she craving something sweet like a person going through withdraw from drugs and decided to get a few handfuls of delicious creations;
That really needs punctuation. I mean, I get what she is saying, but at first glance it's like you had a stroke at the keyboard.
some fizzed against her tongue, and even changed the color of her teeth!She should really brush more. Except, in the reference her teeth are normal-coloured.
You know, I think it's the non-candy parts that make the character look pathetic. Replace the teeth with candy corn, or shards of rock candy. Change the eyes to gumdrops, or something on the same level. Make her hair strawberry laces, or candyfloss. Go all-out.
More and more Yvette consumed, stopping for short breaks to take a breather; she drops the handful of goodies as she clutches her gut, she screams in pain. Everything before her eyes begins to change and distort itself,
I hope it was rat poison.
her body begins to slowly mutate, her nails into fiendish claws, as gum covers and welds to her arms, horns burst from underneath her skull, "w-what was this?" She thought as her pupils formed x's that crossed her vision into how you say, heat sensors.
Psh! Your pupils do not suddenly become heat sensors if they become crossed. And what the fuck do heat sensors have to do with candy? Wouldn't it make more sense for her eyes to see everything in "Gummyvision?"
Odd enough pieces of literal candy broke through her shoulder blade as her blood changed from a crimson to a green, it smelled sweet as if apple flavored gummy bears were being melted with a torch. Falling to her knees, taking a good look at what she was becoming her at the girl's very eyes the flesh tone of her skin faded to a dull purple, her canines pulled and over grew, she had become a monster. Her grandfather runs onto the scene as his own grand daughter is writhing in pain, but something's different, this isn't his own family anymore. Yvette looses all control of the poison she ingested
What poison? Has her father been poisoning her all these years? Does his shitty candy have some sort of additive that he was developing to avoid the radars, and to keep the kids coming back to taste his lollipop? I guess we will never know.
as her claws dig deep into her grandpa's throat as all life drains from his body, throwing his corpse to the side she begins to drool, but it's so sweet and saturated as soon as the liquid hits his skin, it deteriorates and rots down to the bone,
Didn't she throw him to the side? If you were going to eat him why throw away the body?
with no one to intervene the factory was hers for the taking, a new place to live with all the candy she desired. And free to attack the living and causing one nasty cavity.
Until the power bill came up, or the gas/electricity/rent/health inspectors, or workers/family/anything came along. Or until she realised one person can't run an entire fucking factory.
i hope you all like her design and story; I was thinking about it for a bit
Well you didn't think enough.

Well what can I say about this?
Shit, once again there is no "creepy" to it, just pointless murder. If you want to do a creepypasta with this, have it a monster that lives in a candy factory, and have the main story around bad things that happen to kids. How candy has hidden ingredients. She could be a seller of toxic candies to kids.
But all in all, it seems like it would do better as a Willy Wonka fanfiction. Not something creepy or scary. Lose the crappy mutation stuff and murder. Replace it will you winning a golden ticket and eating all the experimental candy, turning you into this. Hell you could even go as far as lurking around the chocolate factory eating Oompa Loompas. I think that would actually be pretty cool. The Loompacabra.
Wasted Potential out of ten.

 

[Firesharpie]

and to keep the kids coming back to taste his lollipop?

I'm calling the police.

 

[Jumpin Jenkins]

Alright, I found another one and I just had to.

Spoiler: Spooks? No.

name- Sharpjaw
That really should be a "Legend" name, like Bigfoot. I doubt his real name is Bigfoot, it's probably Gary, but everyone calls him Bigfoot.
age- 20
Credit for a decent age.
height- 5'7"
purpose- not known
That's great, leaves the character open for stuff. Shame I'm still going to shit all over it.
scars- the slit on his neck and his missing eye is from a wound when he was just a child; shark attack (ironic yeah?)
I was going to put a gif of a shark attack victim here, but that would be in poor taste. Instead have this.

And I am surprised he wasn't attacked more, seems like he is constantly bleeding. He should get that checked out. And shark attacks would not just take your eye and leave a pretty scar, just sayin'.
friends- N/A
enemies- N/A
GOOD! I LIKE THIS! How creepypasta characters should be, it should not be about the love between you and an androgynous man in a white morphsuit, it should be all about the story. Now give me a damn story!
likes- water, rain, swimming, anything that shines, collecting sea shells, being in high places such as lounging on a tree branch, eating anything salty, toying with people (you could say he's a trickster), and helping out the weak.
Wait what? A creepypasta who likes helping out the weak? I know I just suggested a character that kills abusive parents but still.
dislikes- dry places (like the desert), anything sweet, being misjudged, being close with anyone, talking about his past, anything soft (such as fleece), hot anything (tea, blazing sunlight, humidity), and being dehydrated.
"I don't like things sharks don't like." Lets get to the fucking story.
story- As a young boy, he was born with a weird mutation from his mother's side, when he got older by each year his tailbone would stretch more and more to soon be a tail.
Was it instant? I mean, if it was his birthday and he suddenly sprouted an extra spinal disk I would be concerned about where the fuck it came from.
It was only Sharpjaw and his mother,
He must have a shitty mother for her to call him Sharpjaw.
he never knew his father but got his appearance from his side of the family and his caring personality from his mother's side.
See this is what happens at the end of hentai. The violated asian woman gives birth to this thing.
They lived on the shore, for his love of the ocean and water became apparent as he mutated with his personal admire for the sea;
Sorry, but this is bugging me. Get a proofreader. If you are not sure about your English, always get a proofreader.
one day when he was only 6 a shark came up to the tide and pulled him under, causing the scar on his neck and the missing eye
And he didn't die? Lucky bastard. I mean, you are six years old. You just had your eye and throat torn out by a shark. And somehow not only did he let you go, you made it to shore. And didn't bleed out. At only six years old!
which he replaced with his favorite childhood toy, a telescope for sailors which he has the ability to scope it to the full length and back to its shrunken state with his mind.
I'm sorry, I didn't know being bit in the head by a shark gives you latent psionic powers. And you can't just stick a toy into the wound of a six year old and call it a day. His mother must really suck. Plus, as he aged he would constantly need new one... Why the fuck am I reasoning with this?!
As Sharpjaw got older, his mother became gravely ill and took her under his care everyday until one day; she passed and he was one his own to survive in the world but he was only 13..
He got his face/neck bitten by a shark, has psychic powers, and probably some other hidden shit. He will be fine. Go eat a fish or something.
He buried her body under the sand their house was built upon and lived there by himself; the house slowly wilted away like her body
So eaten by crabs and seagulls. Oh god! I can just picture it. He lays her to rest in the sand, and goes to sleep, two days later she gets washed away and shows up on shore again with seagulls picking at her hahahaha. Something is wrong with me I laughed at that for a good few minutes.
as people feared him, calling him a monster and a freak of nature; this caused him to be furious and began attacking innocents, literally ripping their limbs apart with his teeth (hence the name Sharpjaw).
So he is now murdering people, instead of going on the road as the world-famous Shark-Man. Seriously people, use what ya' gods gave you.
Around the age of 16 he began to call himself a "vigilante," doing so called good crimes but in reality he was causing terror to the human race..
By ripping appart innocents, yep! Those are some good deeds.
A mob of angry people arrived at his home and burned it to the ground, luckily he escaped with his life but had no where to live; Sharpjaw now thrives in the woods of Slendy's territory,
Conveniently, all these serial killers end up in Slendy's woods. Maybe what we don't realise is it's a mental asylum for psychos and monsters, they are just too stupid to notice. Turns out Slenderman is a side effect of the sedatives.
living in the depths of the lake Sadie ran into when she first had the incident where she met the Slenderman and he took her in.
Which is totally relevant how?
He has the ability to breath underwater since his father's genes (not known to him) were part aquatic and has used this talent to suit his needs.
Yes, he totally hunts pond frogs. If you had all these shark powers, why didn't you live in an abandoned ship wreck or something cooler than a pond.
He is a loner and is often hanging around throughout the forest;
The woods which seem to be flooded with other "loners." Seriously, it's like the emo/goth kids who always hang out in packs but insist they are unique and different and alone, just like all the others. Listen, if you want a loner, you live in the woods, or become a wanderer. Not live in a crowded forest's pond.
He is neutral in the party, not evil or friendly; just Sharpjaw forever being assumed as "one of the bad guys.
"You ate innocent people, and hang out in a forest full of serial killers and monsters who are also "totally not the bad guys." Choose your company better.

Well what can I say about this?
There is no real potential for this one. The story has been done a thousand times over and there are so many stupid additions that are just there for flavour.

• Why can he magically control a telescope?
• Why does that even work for an eye?
• How did he survive the shark attack?
• Why did his mother not seek help?
• Why did his mother not tell him his father was a Street Shark?
• Why did he decide to live in a forest, not the ocean, if he's a loner?
• How can he think he is not a bad guy when he butchered people?

The story itself, as I said, has been done to death. "Oh no, a misunderstood monster who slaughtered a bunch of people. He isn't bad, totally guys!" And then he finds "solitude" with other monsters, but is totally a loner.
Constructive criticism: Maybe make him know his father, have them both live on a fishing dock, and have the mother sickly from the start. Maybe they had to steal food from local fishermen, and became a local legend. But then something happens, and his father has to sacrifice himself so he can escape with his mother. They don't know if his father is dead, but he hasn't seen him. Him and his mother now live on a houseboat they stole, she is still ill, but slowly getting better as they sail across the world in search of his father.Of course, this means it would lose the creepypasta aspect...but not like it matters because once again, this shit is about as creepy as a third nipple.

 

[c-no]

Alright, I found another one and I just had to.

Spoiler: Spooks? No.

View attachment 36530
name- Sharpjaw
That really should be a "Legend" name, like Bigfoot. I doubt his real name is Bigfoot, it's probably Gary, but everyone calls him Bigfoot.
age- 20
Credit for a decent age.
height- 5'7"
purpose- not known
That's great, leaves the character open for stuff. Shame I'm still going to shit all over it.
scars- the slit on his neck and his missing eye is from a wound when he was just a child; shark attack (ironic yeah?)
I was going to put a gif of a shark attack victim here, but that would be in poor taste. Instead have this.
View attachment 36532
And I am surprised he wasn't attacked more, seems like he is constantly bleeding. He should get that checked out. And shark attacks would not just take your eye and leave a pretty scar, just sayin'.
friends- N/A
enemies- N/A
GOOD! I LIKE THIS! How creepypasta characters should be, it should not be about the love between you and an androgynous man in a white morphsuit, it should be all about the story. Now give me a damn story!
likes- water, rain, swimming, anything that shines, collecting sea shells, being in high places such as lounging on a tree branch, eating anything salty, toying with people (you could say he's a trickster), and helping out the weak.
Wait what? A creepypasta who likes helping out the weak? I know I just suggested a character that kills abusive parents but still.
dislikes- dry places (like the desert), anything sweet, being misjudged, being close with anyone, talking about his past, anything soft (such as fleece), hot anything (tea, blazing sunlight, humidity), and being dehydrated.
"I don't like things sharks don't like." Lets get to the fucking story.
story- As a young boy, he was born with a weird mutation from his mother's side, when he got older by each year his tailbone would stretch more and more to soon be a tail.
Was it instant? I mean, if it was his birthday and he suddenly sprouted an extra spinal disk I would be concerned about where the fuck it came from.
It was only Sharpjaw and his mother,
He must have a shitty mother for her to call him Sharpjaw.
he never knew his father but got his appearance from his side of the family and his caring personality from his mother's side.
See this is what happens at the end of hentai. The violated asian woman gives birth to this thing.
They lived on the shore, for his love of the ocean and water became apparent as he mutated with his personal admire for the sea;
Sorry, but this is bugging me. Get a proofreader. If you are not sure about your English, always get a proofreader.
one day when he was only 6 a shark came up to the tide and pulled him under, causing the scar on his neck and the missing eye
And he didn't die? Lucky bastard. I mean, you are six years old. You just had your eye and throat torn out by a shark. And somehow not only did he let you go, you made it to shore. And didn't bleed out. At only six years old!
which he replaced with his favorite childhood toy, a telescope for sailors which he has the ability to scope it to the full length and back to its shrunken state with his mind.
I'm sorry, I didn't know being bit in the head by a shark gives you latent psionic powers. And you can't just stick a toy into the wound of a six year old and call it a day. His mother must really suck. Plus, as he aged he would constantly need new one... Why the fuck am I reasoning with this?!
As Sharpjaw got older, his mother became gravely ill and took her under his care everyday until one day; she passed and he was one his own to survive in the world but he was only 13..
He got his face/neck bitten by a shark, has psychic powers, and probably some other hidden shit. He will be fine. Go eat a fish or something.
He buried her body under the sand their house was built upon and lived there by himself; the house slowly wilted away like her body
So eaten by crabs and seagulls. Oh god! I can just picture it. He lays her to rest in the sand, and goes to sleep, two days later she gets washed away and shows up on shore again with seagulls picking at her hahahaha. Something is wrong with me I laughed at that for a good few minutes.
as people feared him, calling him a monster and a freak of nature; this caused him to be furious and began attacking innocents, literally ripping their limbs apart with his teeth (hence the name Sharpjaw).
So he is now murdering people, instead of going on the road as the world-famous Shark-Man. Seriously people, use what ya' gods gave you.
Around the age of 16 he began to call himself a "vigilante," doing so called good crimes but in reality he was causing terror to the human race..
By ripping appart innocents, yep! Those are some good deeds.
A mob of angry people arrived at his home and burned it to the ground, luckily he escaped with his life but had no where to live; Sharpjaw now thrives in the woods of Slendy's territory,
Conveniently, all these serial killers end up in Slendy's woods. Maybe what we don't realise is it's a mental asylum for psychos and monsters, they are just too stupid to notice. Turns out Slenderman is a side effect of the sedatives.
living in the depths of the lake Sadie ran into when she first had the incident where she met the Slenderman and he took her in.
Which is totally relevant how?
He has the ability to breath underwater since his father's genes (not known to him) were part aquatic and has used this talent to suit his needs.
Yes, he totally hunts pond frogs. If you had all these shark powers, why didn't you live in an abandoned ship wreck or something cooler than a pond.
He is a loner and is often hanging around throughout the forest;
The woods which seem to be flooded with other "loners." Seriously, it's like the emo/goth kids who always hang out in packs but insist they are unique and different and alone, just like all the others. Listen, if you want a loner, you live in the woods, or become a wanderer. Not live in a crowded forest's pond.
He is neutral in the party, not evil or friendly; just Sharpjaw forever being assumed as "one of the bad guys.
"You ate innocent people, and hang out in a forest full of serial killers and monsters who are also "totally not the bad guys." Choose your company better.

Well what can I say about this?
There is no real potential for this one. The story has been done a thousand times over and there are so many stupid additions that are just there for flavour.

• Why can he magically control a telescope?
• Why does that even work for an eye?
• How did he survive the shark attack?
• Why did his mother not seek help?
• Why did his mother not tell him his father was a Street Shark?
• Why did he decide to live in a forest, not the ocean, if he's a loner?
• How can he think he is not a bad guy when he butchered people?

The story itself, as I said, has been done to death. "Oh no, a misunderstood monster who slaughtered a bunch of people. He isn't bad, totally guys!" And then he finds "solitude" with other monsters, but is totally a loner.
Constructive criticism: Maybe make him know his father, have them both live on a fishing dock, and have the mother sickly from the start. Maybe they had to steal food from local fishermen, and became a local legend. But then something happens, and his father has to sacrifice himself so he can escape with his mother. They don't know if his father is dead, but he hasn't seen him. Him and his mother now live on a houseboat they stole, she is still ill, but slowly getting better as they sail across the world in search of his father.Of course, this means it would lose the creepypasta aspect...but not like it matters because once again, this shit is about as creepy as a third nipple.

If one were to click the link of that original character, it just gives you an error page. Did the author chimp out at any criticism or something?

 

[Pina Colada]

I'm calling the police.

Stuff that, I'm calling CPS and Chris Hansen.

 

[GiantSpiderInvasion]

Here! Have some bestiality!

Spoiler

Artist's comments:
"Candi was in a room of Lions and she decides to tame them her own way. Not only attack a few and scared them to behave herself, but she began to let one of the lions pleasure her without attack her, cause If they did one of there"twigs" would snapped easily from them!

"

And, some pedophilic bestiality!

Spoiler

Artist's comments:
"When It was bed time Britha was looking for Rat PJ Pants/Undies to go to bed so she asked one of them If they had but they said no, and decided why not sleep without them. The Bros soon smirked each other and said they were going to do there ways with her while she's asleep."

And, some plain old butt sex!

Spoiler

Artist's comments:
""4th Of July" may be over, but that didn't stop our married couple to have their "Honey Moon" together at some bridge while Devin gets a "quickie" with his wife's butt poundin' her real good."

And, finally, some rape!

Spoiler

Artist's comments:
"After her big show, a bunch of nasty Pirates decided to take on "Ride" on the (Blonde) Forest Fatty's Butt. One of them toke off her skirt, hold her down, and one of the began to ride her, while she tries to hold off the pain and moaned for pleasure. When they were finished with her (and clean her off) they put back on her skirt and pushed her out of the door, and was a bit dizzy after the "Wild Ride". Since the (Blonde) Forest Fatty may be a bit agile, but lucky for her she didn't feel any pain at all except pleasure."

Fun fact: I reported the first image twice, yet it is still up.

I'm also pretty sure this guys is in his early 30's. He also used to have a reputation on DA for going around, requesting people draw some obscure cartoon dog girl giving other cartoon girls wedgies. That is, until some people drew troll art for him, and he stopped.

His gallery is here: http://thegr8estone.deviantart.com/gallery/ for more poorly drawn, butt fetishy goodness.

 

[Jumpin Jenkins]

If one were to click the link of that original character, it just gives you an error page. Did the author chimp out at any criticism or something?

Pretty much.