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Decided to write this today. I swear I do my best to constrain to one page, but I don't mind two pages. If it were three I would recontextualize the whole thing to make it more concise. I also did my best to describe the location geographically, but I've attached a photo of the WIP location as I still need to finalize a structure and finish details. I just hope I gave an apt description, and if I didn't then here's an image.
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Aha, what the heck. May I share my manuscript here?

I like writing historical fiction. I started off at ~14 writing fanfiction and forum roleplaying, which I credit with helping me to become a better writer. In college I would help editing my friend's screenplays. After graduation I was part of his writer's room until I left the city. Sometimes I contributed storyboard work to my friend's production company (he does music videos).

When I was... gosh, I was 24? when I came up with the concept for my first novel. The basic idea was "man on trial for witchcraft because of a forbidden romantic relationship." The setting predates the Salem Witch Trials by a few years, although witchcraft has already been denounced in Enlightenment-era Europe.

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When the town meeting house was gutted by fire one winter night, all knew it must be Gabriel Bishop who was to blame, for no one else bore a grudge against religion and order as the Quaker apothecary did. His motive was all too clear: Gabriel must have sold his soul to the devil and burned the meeting house so that Fanny, the governor's slave could be spirited away in the pandemonium. Governor John Winthrop has employed the famed big-game hunter Hardship Cole searches for any evidence of Fanny's whereabouts, with suspicion that Asenath Black, Gabriel's teacher and a gadfly to Winthrop's sense of order, may have been involved. The only one left standing on Gabriel's side is Silas Winthrop, John's only living son; and standing against Gabriel is Winthrop's youngest daughter, Sarah, whom Gabriel was intended to have married. To her, the fond memories of Gabriel from their childhood are as bitter tidings from afar.

Now, the trial is about to begin, and Thomas Braithwaite, clerk of court, has been called up to help adjudicate these matters. But the madness in Ipswich is far from over, and Thomas will soon find himself in for much more than he bargained for. Can he find the truth before it will consume him?

The Sorcerer of Ipswich is a complete novel at 98,200 words (approx. 300 pages)
By Margaret Pless, all copyright retained. ORIGINAL NOVEL DO NOT STEAL

Anyway, have at it, I hope you enjoy it. And if you have feedback, plz, share it.
 

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Hey, I'm looking for someone who would want to go in 50/50 with me on a comic book. I'm in the middle of production of my first one right now, so it's already completely written and scripted out, but I think it could be really fun to work with a writer on the next one. It sure as hell would save a lot of time. I have a few worlds that are a bit fleshed out and a lot of work done on characters and story for my next series. You could expand on what's there, or we could go the other direction and just do a book based on your ideas and worlds.

Current plans are to self publish- but I'm seeing Dark Horse books that are lower in terms of quality than my own art. I can draw better than that Saga comic, and it's doing numbers (relatively) and seems to be carried by story. If we make something cool why not try to get a big publisher involved or maybe kickstart it?
DM me if you're interested, I'm hoping for someone who's fairly decent at writing (aka better than myself) frankly.
 
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Decided to write this today. I swear I do my best to constrain to one page, but I don't mind two pages. If it were three I would recontextualize the whole thing to make it more concise. I also did my best to describe the location geographically, but I've attached a photo of the WIP location as I still need to finalize a structure and finish details. I just hope I gave an apt description, and if I didn't then here's an image.
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I really liked reading this. It's like a tabletop lore manual. The best bit was when you explained the reason for the ice-spears in the moat of Perdition, linking it to the spirits of the tribe who had been displaced from the mesa.
I would enjoy confronting the Frost Warden as a boss in a level devoted to Perdition.
You paint a vivid picture while being very frugal with word count, props props.
 
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Blurb;

In a forest of ancient secrets and lurking horrors, a man on a quest for a mythical locket discovers that he's just a pawn in a grander, more malevolent scheme, where the real treasure is the journey itself.

Genre: Horror
Style: Atmospheric
Themes: Quest, Mystery, Transformation
This is technically good. Everything makes sense. The verbiage is good. The problem is that it doesn't have your voice. This comes off as being Lovecraft-esque. And that's fine but you have to think about the reader and what they're into. What is unique about this that will make the reader jump out and latch onto it because it's something different? Imagine you're meeting someone for the first time and they just speak in esoteric hoity toity kind of verbiage the entire time... You want to strangle them. That's kind of what this is.

Again, this is anything but bad. But the problem is that there's no original voice or ideas. If done as just a writing exercise then ignore my criticism.

I'd just like to add that finding your voice takes time. It took me almost 15 years.
 
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I really liked reading this. It's like a tabletop lore manual.
Thank you. That is exactly my goal. I want to have short and digestible lore snippets for my players when I get around to running my GURPS game. I don't want to overwhelm my friends with an onslaught of words or fill with uninteresting information so that is why I've chosen to constrain myself for my writings. This excludes my summary/synopsis and some short story I wrote that I need to revise which ended up being 30 pages. I've also caught errors on my reread of this one today and corrected them.
 
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And yes, flash fiction is a favorite of mine:


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The parasite, I name it that because it’s the only thing that allows me to separate myself in good company from my thoughts and my actions, it glows with Might is Right allegory. Beneath a crystal chandelier is Jeffrey Epstein receiving a ‘My First Eugenicist kit’ for an early Hanukah.
 
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This... this is good. I thought this was some doctors confession posted online since people overshare everything but realized that its fiction. Nonetheless its believable enough to be a body horror, psychological thriller. Some doctors are caring, others do it for the money, a small portion are seriously fucked up. The converting and perfume part is too much & breaks the story for me but the rest is convincing.
 
The converting and perfume part is too much & breaks the story for me but the rest is convincing.
I read up how women like to put whatever is around inside an over-large bra just to fill it out and see what they look like. I think I was operating off a similar mind set: just anything around that can be used to fill the void (emotionally and physically) for the pursuit of vanity.
 
I picked back up writing a few snippets on and off last week.

This one’s from the 9th:

The sound of your voice, it resonates my heart, it makes me float, your tongue, sweet tongue, uttering meaningless words that sound so lovely, lovely as your pure heart, a true angel’s voice, being in your arms are warm, comfortable as a familiar bossa I’ve heard so long ago, why must you be so cruel to me, to deny my touch, to deny my proclamations of “I love you”, to be stiff as I kiss, your soft frame turns to stone, oh please, my love, let us dance one last time, the kids are gone, the table is set, let us enjoy each other before you retreat into yourself again.
 
Just going to put down some words as an experiment, see how it goes.

Rotten. That was how he felt. He'd tossed away his life before. Not literally. Still in university. No girlfriend. No real desire. No friends, not anymore. Just a wanderer in the dark mist. Might bump into something for a moment. But he was keen sighted in the dark. He knew the bumps, the obstacles. Wasn't a matter of choice. Eyes wander to the gentle murmur of the sea. The cool sand squishes against toes, feels as cold as he does. Full moon glitters against the cresting waves, smashing down as quicksilver. Retreat as quickly as a rumor. He wished he'd smoked. Maybe the harsh smoke would numb him. Maybe he'd cough. He stood for a long minute, his thoughts out to sea, to the blinking red buoy a mile away. Thoughts as choppy as the waters skipped across his mind. Maybe he could go somewhere. Fly far away. But too much luggage. Couldn't resolve it like that. He'd tried that once, wrecked him. Left him tired of life. Sapped his joy. Toes clawed into the damp, cool sand. Mind sank into the dark, cold sea. He'd sleep on it. Let his thoughts rest for another night. Leave the thinking for tomorrow. His mind carried numbly, his feet plodded along the cool sand. Through the cool, dark mist.
 
I had some leftover voice AI credits so here's an audio version. Personally, the only edit I would make is that there's a close, unaesthetic repetition of the word "smoke" in there that I didn't like.


 
Plastic Make it Possible

I stand at a curb while the sky has an exquisite post-apocalyptic look with orange and gold light interspersed with the dispersal of night. A loud crying steals my attention away momentarily, my weather app finally loaded. There is a family in sudden mourning and my black box finally found a signal. There is an air of poverty about this family gathered at the hospital across the street. Soon there is a gathering of more people, sullen looks, friends and extended family members would be my guess. My passivity is interrupted by the scene their making, I check my email even though I didn’t get a notification and walked back inside to my job. What could I say to them? What could I even offer but meek sympathy? You carry on with your day. You ignore. You suppress. You hate.

That was yesterday.

How could I help them then? How could I help anyone? But it all changed.

It just happened one morning. I woke up and the plastics around me could bend to my will. I noticed it when I went to eat some cereal but was annoyed when I discovered the milk had gone bad and cursed the milk jug. The instant I tossed the container aside, muttering a disappointed “Fuck” under my breath, the container spectacularly exploded. I wondered if I was chosen by ecclesiastical or perhaps supernatural beings and this was a test of faith? Maybe I simply evolved? I quickly put to rest that I had some undiagnosed form of schizophrenia by calmly emptying the plastic bowl of cereal and contorting it with my mind then recording it and playing it back. Bending and twisting it were remarkably easy but getting an exact shape took more concentration. I had to think about the Venus de Milo and hold on this mental image for minutes, focusing on every detail and imagining parts that I didn’t know such as the feet in order for the bowl to take that shape. All I have to do is think about it and it will happen.

I quit my job and set about how to exploit this ability.

I’m going to fix this world.

I’m going to rebuild and help the impoverished masses.

Upon demonstrating this ability to the masses I will be praised as their savior.

The outside had become terribly humid over the course of several hours. The sidewalks in the heart of Los Angeles have become ever more congested. Bums on the corner beg for money or food with a few singing out of tune. Around me I see the young and old in their pristine outfits clutching their equally pristine electronics. There are several people in a group with one holding a selfie-stick recording their activities where they are as loud and as boisterous as possible. It looks like an impromptu gathering of the rich & powerful. I see the octogenarian scream into their phone at some poor unfortunate who cannot scream back. I see laughing and amusement from the college kids in the overpriced restaurant being served margarita towers. All around me I see the same kind of people on repeat. All of these fake people.

There are sudden screams from several women in the group hosting a livestream. They continue shrieking and clutch at their breasts and asses. The screams rise in pitch as more around me convulse in horror & panic. A Tesla careens onto the curb and slamming into a homeless encampment before the battery explodes bursting with fire. The ladies around me scream and scream and scream until I notice that their plastic breast and ass implants have gone rogue. The implants tear themselves away from their hosts in a gory display. One woman, the one who held the selfie-stick, clutches her face when the silicone tears away from her lips revealing the raw meat underneath the sun bleached skin. The implants form together into a massive puddle. The screaming octogenarian man clutches at his crotch as his penis implant becomes sentient; he gestures as though he wants to hold it in place and refuses to let it go. The signage above the college kids gives way and crushes the lot. They pull out their phones to make a call but the plastic casing and gorilla glass melts away scalding the hands and soon creates a point that impales their brains as a man’s pacemaker ruptures and he dies like a cartoon character zapped by electricity.

A homeless man approaches me, just as the pile of silicone forms a statue in my image; he recognizes this significance and bows before me praying for his safety.

Here I am, a mutant who perpetuates brutal and terrible things being loved by a stranger. It feels like mistaken identity. Like I attended a funeral and everyone there thinks I'm the deceased who miraculously is not dead.
 
Another one I think is just too "triggering" and I was hoping to get this out there in an anthology but people want to play games or suddenly have zero time at all when you show them something that could be read in about 5 minutes. I say just self-publish your shit. Fuck people who want to play games or publish just their friends books so they can live up the dream of being a publisher. The whole market is fucked because of nepotism and assholes.

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Forgiveness

Can you forgive losing the irreplaceable? Could you say “thank you” to the murderers of your child?

A college student is dragged out of their vehicle by an irate mob. Tortured. Murdered. Three men held responsible. The parents argued in their favor, citing racial tensions, strife, that theirs was a sacred sacrifice for a cause -more like a rung in a ladder. The killers walked. The parents advocated for their release. A charity was created in the name of the fallen. The parents and murderers became friends.

What’s interesting to me are the political parties and spokesman for the parents had talked to Hollywood people in order to get a film made based on the case. Lo and behold more merchandise and the lie of unity for all. Could anyone believe the tale without embellishment? If they approve it then could it be considered a sign of their naiveté or a weakness in character? I am appalled by such actions and, in a massive sign out of a game show spelling out the word, there is a long and distorted gibberish word written by lightning that once deciphered could spell either Pacifist or Fascist. There is an image in my mind of a mongoloid weeping when they found out Stalin died because they were taught how every life is precious. One should celebrate the death of monsters.

I had made up my mind and will assume the pain of the fallen. I don’t care if I am caught and hanged. I am that child’s discarded vengeance. Hate is good. Hate is logical. To deny logic and impulse is to hate what is natural. And to hate human nature is to stab into the Earth and hope that it bleeds wherein such logic is the nonsense of madmen.

The men live very publicly, a news article seemingly congratulates them and has a photo of the smiling mother of the victim with their arms around them like a family or posing for the photos of a cuckold porn. I wonder if, in an ancient time and culture, if the punishment for murder would entail that the murderer would be adopted by the family of the victim as an abused servant? I will research this later.

It was an easy travel. Even easier to locate the men and ever easier to smuggle in my weaponry. The men live in a robust commune. A conflicting environment at once celebrating lavish expenditure and socialist equality -share the wealth so everyone may be poor. In the foyer of the building is a rainbow painting featuring all the races holding hands against a rising sun. Such a stereotypical image, just like a beautiful landscape watercolor hung in a morgue.

Elaborate torture fantasies played out before me -forgetting their implausibility- such as a Roman coliseum where one killer would be tied to a spinning wheel, a raucous crowd screams for blood, and off comes a limb -further games would be whether or not to administer morphine or leeches for their pain.

It surprised me how available they were, a simple question to a staffer and I knew exactly the room they all slept in. Why they slept in the same room I could only hypothesize to be the result of economics but I wonder if their collective murder of the child was a bonding experience for them?

I head to the bathroom and assemble my .45 Glock made mostly of 3D printed parts. I hold two extra clips of hollow point rounds just in case. I march my way to their room and await a calm in the air. I pull a nearby fire alarm and wait for them to leave their room while attaching a small Mag Light silencer. People calmly walk away, the hall is empty, one of them opens the door and I hesitate for a moment to make sure I have the correct target. I fire into their chest twice in rapid succession then proceed to the door and keep it open, firing wildly into the other two men as they scream. Another goes down and one sits there helplessly in his ever-draining fluids pleading to me, I insert the 2nd clip and calmly speak to them “This is pain.” And put three bullets into their skull ala the Mozambique drill before vacating.

In walking away in assured victory I mull over the possibilities of being caught; I would happily give an interview explaining how I am just and will be celebrated over a triumph of naïve liberalism. Perhaps inspiring a domino effect where men are no longer afraid to be men and destroyers of the family are not spared.

If I die than I assume the same martyrdom of the slain child. But I do not assume that shame and humiliation fostered by a corrupted ideology. I am the breaker of the fraudulent cycle of love and peace. There is man. There is love. There is hate. And there is pain that I take upon me and use it to create for the better.
 
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I have no talent for writing or story telling but at times I will vomit out a handful of short fables just for fun.
Anton is a good man who always believes in all the right things.
Being a good man requires that Anton must always choose to vote for the Good Party when the time comes for him to perform his civic duty.

The good people of Anton's district came together and once again elected the Good Party's representative, it was a good and joyous day. Anton is a good man and he too cast his ballot appropriately.

To celebrate his election, the representative of the Good Party invited himself into Anton's home that night and during that night's revelries found time to piss on Anton's carpet and shoot Anton's dog in the head.

The following morning, as Anton mopped up the blood and urine, he remarked to his good friends: "I certainly am grateful that we elected the representative of the Good Party, the Bad Party's representative would certainly have shit on my bed and shot my wife"
The great bane of Gerta's life had forever been Shame. Always she had been limited and controlled by Shame and her fear of it. After many years of being at its mercy, she finally contrived to track down and kill her enemy and so she did this very thing. Shame was left a bloodied corpse at her feet and Gerta rejoiced at her newfound freedom.

Sadly for Gerta, her joy was to be short lived, for Shame had also been the great limiter of her ambitious neighbor. It was Shame that had a prevented Gerta's neighbor from overpowering Gerta and seizing her meagre home but the neighbor rejoiced when he felt the threat of Shame removed from his shoulders. Gerta's end was just as swift and brutal as Shame's was.

Many years later, after the weak had been conquered or killed, leaving only the strong; Gerta's neighbor thought back on the violence and injustice he had done and concluded: "there is nothing to be ashamed of"
Solomon was struck in the face by a man in a yellow hat for no reason other than that the man in the yellow hat had felt the desire to do so. With great animation, Solomon made a personal declaration that he would never again be the victim of a man in a yellow hat.

Solomon gathered his friends, he gathered his family, he gathered whoever was sympathetic to him and finally he went out to the poor and gathered them with promises of loot to be taken from all those who wear yellow hats; including the man who had orginally struck Solomon now that he renounced his yellow hat. All men who happened to be wearing yellow hats that day were killed and their property was seized by Solomon and those he had gathered.

Solomon looked upon the carnage he had wrought and declared: "No man shall ever be struck in the face again, now that there is not a man left in a yellow hat"
Simon the ironmonger was very displeased with the quality of horseshoes in his village, their shape was all wrong and they could not properly fit any foot which Simon had ever seen.

Using his own foot as a model, Simon crafted iron footwear of the greatest perfection, none who saw Simon's shoes could impune the quality of their craftsmanship and materials. Soon enough every villager with a horse had purchased shoes enough for their entire herd, for Simon's ironmongery was without peer.

When the purchasers of Simon's perfectly crafted shoes came back to Simon's shop, outraged that the shoes had grievously harmed every horse to which they were fitted, Simon said: "It is not my problem that your faulty horses did not fit my perfect shoes"
The great king ruled a great swathe of the world but was always uneasy with how much of it remained outside of his grasp. Through war and persuasion the great king pursued total conquest and soon owned all that lay upon the ground.

But his mind soon turned to the waters and the skies, the great king declared them to also be his (for who would argue?) but knew in his heart that he could never truly master all that occurred within them. The seasons and life mostly played out the same as they always had. Even the inner thoughts and feelings of his subjects lay beyond the power of the great king. He became morose, for true dominion would always be beyond him.

At the lowest depth of the great king's despondence, the devil came to call upon the king at his court and offered him a magical cage.

"Nothing" explained the devil, "will exist outside of this cage for you should you enter it willingly"

Before the devil could even finish explaining his terms or the workings of the cage, the great king had already leapt inside, shouting: "At last I am the king of all!"
Cobbler was a merchant who always knew where his money was, not a single piece of currency was unaccounted for in his perfectly managed vaults and ledgers. Cobbler's obsession had made him the wealthiest man under heaven.

One night, as Cobbler wandered through his sprawling gilded mansion, it so happened that he tripped on his most valuable silken rug and fell. Fortunately he landed upon a very well padded and very expensive divan, unfortunately he also dropped the copper coin he had been playing with at the time. A single coin unaccounted for was too dreadful a possibility for Cobbler to consider. His panic mounted as he searched in the darkness for his missing coin.

Frustration led Cobbler to conceive a desperate plan, he knocked over an oil lamp and escaped from his now burning mansion. Later the following day he sifted through the ashes of his former home until he discovered his copper coin and proudly declared: "At last, I have recovered what is mine!"
The East country and the West country were not speaking. Their disputes were frequent but short and never overly violent.

Over many years a pattern had formed, the East or West country would become incensed with some perceived or real unfairness from their neighbor and all lines of communication would be severed. After a variable but predictable period of chilly silence, usually one or two months, business would resume as normal once either the West or East country would need something from their neighbor.

The South country was troubled by their neighbors' frequent chilliness, for they had always maintained friendly relations with both East and West countries. It was decided that this time the pattern would end. Through the South, communication would never be closed between East and West again.

When the next seasonal dispute arose between East and West the South country dispatched their diplomat with instructions to ensure that communication would continue between them. First the diplomat went to the East, he listened to their side of the conflict before going West. The diplomat shared the East's point of view with the West, which made them very angry for they found the East's account to be very one-sided.

The West wrote a furious reply and instructed the diplomat to take their message East. When the Southern diplomat did as instructed, the people of the East became even more upset with the West, for the message from the West completely dismissed their concerns and lay blame solely upon the East country.

Many more times over many a year, the Southern diplomat went East then West, following his instructions to ensure that East and West remained in communication. Both countries were made poor and soon concluded that coexistence was no longer an option. Their armies met on the field of battle and war began, though communication remained open as both East and West relied on the Southern diplomat to exchange insults and recriminations.

After a long period of bloody war, when the South country's army finally marched into the East and West countries to re-establish peace and order by incorporating them in to the South, they were barely opposed by the starving and desperate survivors of both countries. The Southern diplomat was then recalled and given the highest of honors for his role in enlarging the realm. To this day the Southern diplomat is honored as a great conquerer, the inscription on his mausoleum reads: "a war of words becomes a war of swords once words enough are traded"
 
This is one of the "good" things from the past 6-8 months I think. I wrote a lot of shit and most of them are unfinished or bad but this I guess is okay. Sorry for the formatting
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A post apocalyptic future with an air of destruction and fumes of decay with equal parts beauty and disgust. As the Nuclear desert, relatively unaffected by the ravages of Modernity, there rides a figure in the distance. A figure in complete Black, Brimed Fedora goggles and all, covered in a coat composed of shadow rode on a trusty steed which might have been the ride of death, accompanying his master through the apocalypse. But this stranger was no master nor monster, he was just a man lost in a desolate world. As he wandered the land in search of a purpose, there he saw in the distance a couple of figures. In such a desolate land, the presence of humanity was a rare occurrence, but on closer examination the figures may have been human to varying degrees despite showing a significant lack of humanity. As the figure rode closer to the figures on the distance, they seemed to be mutated husks shuffling along dragging a perceivably normal woman who seemed to be battered by the elements but relatively unharmed. He followed the figures to a gathered crowd contained in the ruined relics of the past, a restless group of mutated husks indistinguishable into neither man or woman. They gathered around, agitated, as the woman was dragged through the crowd and hoisted on a piece of debris. The crowd started making noises with faint senses of lingering humanity with the voices themselves resembling words, two words to be exact, “female” and “flesh”. The woman seemed to squirm in the same position, slowly undoing the restraints holding her but not fast enough to make escape a viably possibility. Suddenly a whistle came out of nowhere, closer to an animal call than a casual sound, which seemed toalert the shambling corpses to their state. A collective turn around ensued with an almost melancholic visage breaking through the animalistic façade as the alerted pack started smoking out the source of the sound. Then came a single shot tearing away a part of flesh and skull off one of them, startling the rest as they backed away in fear. Then came another tearing apart the jaws of another causing the fear to escalate into hysteria as the goals were tossed away. The women started working through her restraints faster but had a feeling of safety grow slowly on the inside. Suddenly there stood the rider in Black, a phantom perched on a beast, holding a smoking gun in a gloved hand. The mutant humanoids stepped back a bit in fear and gave him a path towards the woman. They trembled in fear and stepped away in waves as he walked through them, the gunsmoke scaring them away. He approached the woman, holstered the gun, undid the rest of her restraints and carried her back to the horse. As he helped her climb aboard the horse, he saw little humanoids being held back by the old ones, them too trembling in fear. There was a moment of empathy for these creatures and the little humanity they managed to retain. But it was only for a moment, these creatures were too far gone and their embrace of bestiality, with or without will, was enough to separate them from humankind. One of them lost control, started growling and roaring at the Stranger. The Stranger took a shot and he missed, for he spared the creature out of pity with the sound and smoke serving as a warning. The both of them rode out in to the distance, the woman being quite exhausted from the whole ordeal.

The Stranger: Where are ye from?

Woman: Huh?

The Stranger: Where are ye from? The place.

Woman: Sorry, I couldn’t hear right the first time. I’m from Zone B.

The Stranger: Zone B? Anything more specific?

Woman: I don’t know, it was a village called Hampton I think. I was brought up calling the place Zone B.

The Stranger: Hampton, yeah I know the place. That’s a long ways away. You need some rest, theres another village nearby.

Woman: Thank you, for your actions.

The Stranger gestures a slight nod as the both of them ride the wasteland for a couple of hours till they reach the village. Once there at eve, the Stranger guides the woman to a local motel. Even at eve the Strangers dark figure attracted the gaze of everyone, striking a mixture of fear and comfort into the beholders. He packed his dark steed by the motel and went into the establishment. The motel counter held a young boy of 13. He was busy reading the local newspaper, quite amused at the cartoons as he turned his eyes towards the stranger and the woman behind him. The Stranger’s visage and huge stature was enough to put a little fright into him.

Boy: Just a minute Sir, let me call my pa. He runs this fine establishment and I’m sure he could help you. Make yourselves comfortable in the meantime.

The Stranger and the woman took seats nearby. There was visible exhaustion from the woman as she slouched forward covered in dust and grime. The Stranger, on the other hand was almost robotic and inhuman as his head bent slightly forward in mechanical fashion. The goggles felt empty with an emptier stare inside if there was one, with a completely blank visage. But one could say there was a sense of unease, something waiting ahead in time. It was not perceptible but certainly present. Something did not feel right. But before brainpower could be dedicated to the thought of that, the boy came back with his burly father, a figure of late 40s stout yet thin from possible starvation. He looks at the two with a cautious optimism and a solemn smile which almost passed as authentic.

Owner: Hello, can I get you anything? We have a fine selection of rooms starting from 10 old dollars. We have a bar and a kitchen, meals are served from …

The Stranger gets up before the owner could finish. A bunch of dust and sand fell off him as his towering figure blackened the room. The owner’s voice reduced until he ultimately stopped talking.

The Stranger: I’ll give you 15. Give this woman a room, a bathtub, some clothes and privacy. That should be enough, for now.

Owner: Okay Sir, thank you for your contribution to this humble establishment. (Startled and gulped)

The woman looks down sheepishly. Her eyes start twitching suspiciously as she squeezes out a thank you to the Stranger. The Stranger goes outside the establishment and stood against his steed as the sun set. He let out a cold breath through his mask as he pondered on the events of the day. Suddenly, as night fell, there were unearthly sounds heard. As the darkness grew, the sounds grew louder, devolving from scuttling into screeching. The Stranger now perturbed by the thought of dangerous events, rushed into the establishment. Before him was a very frightened owner and his son beside him as the building slowly creaked and crumbled around them. The Stranger ran up the stairs into the hallway with the residential rooms. As he made his way into the hallway, the place started violently shaking as each door rattled against its hinges, some more than others. But there was one which was darker than the others, closer to ash black than wooden brown, being barely held by its hinges against violent forces. The Stranger ran towards it just as it finally came off its hinges to reveal a dusty void of a room, pitch black in contrast to the dingy lit hallway. As he stepped into the room, he could feel an otherworldly being inside, completely obscured by darkness. The Stranger fired off a shot to illuminate the room. Through the muzzle flash he could get a glimpse of the inhuman figure nearby, just a glimpse. A half devoured corpse of a woman was stuck on the wall over a destroyed bedframe with meaty tendrils outstretched into the walls, rooted into them on either side of the corpse. The corpses chest was violently pulsating with liveness as fleshy outgrowth was spreading around the body and spewing organic refuse all around. The Stranger’s shot had startled the creature and it swiped its tendrils at him. But the Stranger was able to move around before the tendril caught him. As the ground started slowly parting beneath his foot and the room becoming less visible from dust and sand, the Stranger found himself running out of options. He took a quick decision and fired two shots in quick succession. In his mind he had a rough idea of where the heart of the scourge was. With one shot he confirmed the location of the beating heart while incapacitating a tendril out of luck and with the second shot he destroyed the heart as it explode in a burst of organic refuse. The rumbling of the walls and floor stopped as the creature started disintegrating and the dust started dissipating. There was still questionable structural integrity but this house will stand, for now. The Stranger went down the stairs towards the counter where the owner and his son were still pretty frozen with shock. He kept 3 10 ancient dollar bills on the counter.

The Stranger: Sorry for the trouble, twas my fault. I hope this helps.

For one who resembled an apocalypse rider, those were steely words. The Stranger left the establishment, climbed upon his blissfully peaceful steed and rode into the night, pondering the events of the day and the disastrous consequences.
Im reading a lot and I want to start writing something serialized like Manga so Im convinced that I can do better.
 
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Hello, two of my friends and I at American Taliban wrote a book.

It is about how we all remember the same 5 days differently, and thus it is each of our account of those five days.

Before we started this project we agreed it should never be sold as a precondition to its creation.

Therefore as there is no profit in hiding it, here is the book. Certain names, dates, ages, years and other details have been changed.

This website seems resilient so I think it might find a long, if obscure, home here. Even if nobody reads it, it has already served its purpose.
 

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So I wrote some shit, I want to know if theyre good enough to continue
This is my version of a Batman story where he fights communists
BATMAN ENEMY OF THE STATE

Open in on Gotham, an unknown day in 1987, real stormy night without rain. There is no batsign, no lights as we close in on a deadend alley with a bunch of dumpsters. A young kid runs along the alleyway with a broken radio. The kid settles beside a dumpster holding the radio as he tries to find the correct channel. Static spewed into the kids face which prompts him to hit it twice with his hands and hit it twice on the ground. Suddenly the static starts receding as there is a faint tuning sound and the kid takes the chance to find the correct channel. There is a faint talking sound which starts to emanate and the sound is increased using the volume dial. “We have gathered here today to put an end to tyranny. The oppressed have lived in silent suffering for too long…”

Cut to a television screen showing a tall thin man with a thick mustache in a business suit. He looks vaguely Slavic and well fed. He is surrounded by militia members wearing military uniforms with a prevalent symbol, very analogous looking to the hammer and sickle. Their masks and blank stares indicate a cold yet sinister demeanor while the thick mustache man looks a lot more agitated with an air of smug superiority. He continues to talk

Mustache Man: The time has come to take back control from the fascists who wish to control us and the parasites who live off us. We will succeed in our efforts, we will destroy the darkness in our pursuit of the light. No more will the sick, the poor, the hurt and everyone else have to face their problems alone. Anyone who stands in our way will get annihilated starting today with this brave soul”

Camera pans to reveal a battered and bruised Batman sitting on a chair with his hands tied by fiber wire, bleeding through the side of his mouth and wire cutting into his wrists.

Mustache Man: The Saviors of the city, the caped crusader, the Dark Knight. This fascist and his cabal of extraordinary terrorist scum who you might know as the Justice League have used their undeserved power to persecute and control the general populace. What is Justice to these profiteers, these superiors, these “heroes”? Where are they when the poor starve, the sick suffer and the weak die? What does their work speak for them other than the destruction of capital, the villainization of the mentally ill and the war against the marginalized. This is not a war on crime, this is a hunt for sport. We will not tolerate this, the road to utopia is paved with the death of such individuals and we wil work towards a utopia, a better tomorrow for all and the liberation of oppressed worldwide. That path begins here, with the defacing and the defiling of the great Batman.

He calls upon three of his guards in a vague Slavic tongue. The gestures costumes and expressions involved invokes images of dictatorial regimes conducting capital punishment. Two guards grab Batman as he starts shaking in his chair to no avail, prompting said guards to take their rifles and sock him in the jaw and the back of the neck with their rifle stocks. They put their rifles back on their shoulders and hold his arms tight as another guard approces the chair from behind. Mustache man continues talking

Mustache Man: Let us see who the famous crusader really is, the one who can have endless opportunities and resources to wage a one man war.

They guard at the back tries to remove Batmans mask as he violently tries to shuffly either side. As the mask comes off, there is a man in his late 40s, teeth clenched, bleeding and exhausted with white streaks and a recognizable face. As he opens his eyes, light flashes into his face as he stares directly into the screen with dilated pupils and the stare of a caged animal. This is the face of Bruce Wayne.

Two Years earlier

Shot of Gotham during the day, focusing on the Wayne Industries office twoer as the skyrail whizzes by. Bruce was in a board meeting with Lucius Fox and couple others on the stakeholding and board of directors side. This wasn’t an average meeting, Bruce was an adult man and hit pretty hard by the wisdom coming with age. He was very attentive making some astute observations with sufficient back and forth.

Kriegstein: Mr Wayne Division C for processing industrial resources needs some extra funding and possible developments in tech

Fox: Sure Mr Kriegstein I can look into the developments part, can get you some reports by the end of the week if not by the next couple of days.

Kriegstein: Mr Wayne?

Bruce: Sure I can take up the investments. Lets settle with the primary investments for now and take a look at the results.

Kriegstein: I would give the suggestion of going all in, it’s a pretty competent division who have given very good results in the past.

Bruce: Cant do Mr Kriegstein. I might have a good feeling about this and you have one too Im sure but I would rather take a complete look at the results before going further. I hope you understand.

Kriegstein: Respectable decision. I look forward to seeing the research and processing in action. Thank you gentlemen, thatll be all.

Kriegstein walks out of the room with a bunch of his documents as Bruce and Lucius Fox lead him out. Once he leaves they come back to the table and put on a slightly secretive demeanor while organizing documents.

Bruce: So what developments do you have for me Lucius?

Lucius: Well we have a new coffee maker for breaktimes.

Bruce: No, the other developments. Those developments.

Lucius: Ah, we have some new Kevlar, stab resistant, made from a new compound micropolymer. Its stitched in layers so you can be assured it works against anything thrown at you, unless youre gonna be hacked by a chainsaw. Pretty good if you ask me for whatever you might go against.

Bruce: Excellent. What else?

Lucius: Theres a targeting system still in beta stages, seems good so far. You got your usual thermal and you got some extras on top of that, sweet extras. The most important of them being a vital systems monitor. This could get a guys pulse and the like even if the guys gonna scramble other systems, mainly thermal. I could get you a sample if you wanted.

Bruce: Useful but it can wait, Id like to keep my senses useful for as long as possible.

Lucius: Fair. You got some vehicular modifications, a new propulsion system which operates on carbon neutral fuel sources, mostly mineral ones and has a 25% increase over your previous speed limit. You got a new camouflage system, color sensitive plating, might give you an edge in environmental advantages, slightly vulnerable to high intensity lights as reflectivity is around 10 to 15% but I don’t think that’s going to be a problem for you.

Bruce: Very good, I see you’ve upped your game.

Lucius: Anything for the best, the brightest and the richest in all the land.

Bruce: Haha true. You got anything else, possibly?

Lucius: Some other stuff, it can wait. Anything else, Mr Wayne?

Bruce: Thatll be all Mr Fox. Thank you for your time.

Bruce shakes Fox’s hand and both of them leave the room with Fox leading the way. Bruce takes his leave to go back home when hes greeted by a lanky fellow in a business suit in the hallway, the dictatorial man from the television broadcast. He didn’t look particularly business like nor aggressive but his scrawny figure and solemn demeanor indicated something sinister. He shook Bruce’s hand as an agitated receptionist came running towards him.

Man: Hello Mr Wayne, Im Alex Dunwich, you can call me Alex.

Receptionist: I tried to allot him an appointment Mr Wayne but he was quite insistent and hurried.

The mans accent was complemented by his demeanor, there was something oddly peculiar about him like a humanoid rat ready to pounce at any moment.

Bruce: Oh its alright, Ill take it from here. You’ve been a doll.

The receptionist blushed and walked away.

Bruce: Now then, nice to meet you Mr Dunwich. What can Wayne Industries help you with today?

Alex: Ive come here as part of an organization which seeks to evaluate some metrics of social and…

Bruce: What organization is this?

Alex: The Strategic Plan for social and welfare services, no acronyms.

Bruce: Pretty good name, could use an acronym as Im assuming it’s a work in progress.

Alex: Yes, it is. Anyways getting back to the issue at hand, we need evaluation of social and welfare statuses of the American populace at large. We wanted your organization to lend its hand in such a philanthropic effort. The process would involve a routine analysis of the functions of your organization, workplace evaluations, anonymous psychometric evaluations of employees and analysis of multiple other metrics.

At that moment, Bruce knew.

Alex: Would you be interested Mr Wayne?

Bruce: Im not currently. This endeavor seems to be suited for an industry and business of a different caliber. My organization does not have a large workforce and not to brag but we are doing our jobs quite well. I will admit that this is a very bold endeavor but I am not interested.

Alex: But we are…

Bruce: As much as I admire your intentions Mr Dunwich, nothing you can say is possibly going to change my mind. I wish you all the best.

Alex’s face becomes a bit more sour but slowly becomes emotionless as he parses the response.

Alex: Thank you for your time, Mr Wayne.

Those last syllables came out more sharp than intended as there was a perceptible anger which was contained behind the façade. Alex exited the room as stern faced Bruce was unwilling to budge at the response which was bordering on negativity, albeit let it slip out with a smile to acknowledge it. At the end of the day, Bruce took his leave after a brief talk with the receptionist. Despite his age, his character remained the same.

Back at Wayne Manor, 8:00PM at the Batcave, Bruce was busy suiting up for a round of night scouting.

Alfred: Arent you a bit old to be doing this Master Bruce? You are reaching 50 after all.

Bruce: Crime doesn’t stop, does it Alfred? It has its ups and downs but it doesn’t stop. Why should I?

Alfred: I worry for you Master Bruce. Ive raised you since you were a little lad and Ive seen you wasting yourself away for the plight of others. An amorphous dream, one which could probably just kill you.

Bruce: Don’t worry Alfred. I wont die just yet, Ive done this for more than 20 years now. You wont be burying me any time soon.

Alfred: If you say so.

Bruce sees Alfred turn solemn faced. He sighs, walks upto him and puts a hand on his shoulder.

Bruce: Take the rest of the night off. Go make yourself something and get some rest. Ill be fine.

Alfred forces a smile, nods and leaves. Bruce goes to the computer and starts tapping away.

MATCH CUT

Batman on top of a building looking away into the blackness of the city streets. The city was pretty bustling at midnight but some neighborhoods were empty, alleys were empty. Batman spreads his wings and glides across the rooftops. He lands on one and picks out his NVG. He surveys some of the alleyways and spots a bunch of masked men, heavy built with assault weapons, waltzing around a pick up truck. There were 4 of them, presumably guarding the truck which on closer examination was open. Batman stealthily navigated the rooftops to find a better vantage point. Since the truck was parked in an alleyway it was easier to find a vantage point. The street lights were below the rooftops and the moonlight didn’t cast a shadow not that it mattered since both Batman and the rogue party worked in the dark. Batman hatched a plan to get access to the truck. But he then saw the masked men alerted to something. They were assuming strategic positions and raising their arms in anticipation. They could be receiving instructions in their earphones but there were no signs of it since they didn’t touch their ears. It could be something inside the truck but Batman couldn’t possibly find out without access to it. He suddenly felt something around him, he turned to see a drone staring right into him. He threw a batrang and missed it as it dodged his attack. He didn’t want to waste his batrangs on this thing and grabbed his retractable stun gun. He had sufficient ammo charges and fired at the drone. It dodged the shot again. Batman hatched a plan on his toes and threw a batrang at it which it dodged but was quick enough to anticipate its dodge and shot it with his stun gun, electrocuting it and bringing it down. By this time he could hear footsteps closeby and was quick enough to slink away

Two of the armed men were on the terrace, guns in hand. One of them signaled the directions to be inspected and both of them proceeded to travel in both directions inspecting the area. The Batman had hid himself on the fire exit stairs just as they entered the terrace. As one of the men approached near, he pulled the man down by his legs in a surprise maneuver. Before he could react he was held by the Batman, in a choke hold, mouth muffled by a gloved hand. The Batman analyzes his gear as his gun fell to the bottom of the alley, making a mild thud sound. After a quick look the Batman breaks his knees with a kick and knocks him out with a punch to the head. The other man had noticed his partners absence by this time and started to look around the terrace alerted. As he reaches the fire exit stairs, Batman did a backflip kicking the man in the face and vaulting himself up to the terrace. The man was dazed and reached for his fallen gun before getting his hand stamped by a dark figure. His scream was muffled by a gloved hand shoved into his mouth. The Batman bent down on him, knee on chest and broke his elbow.
and this is my attempt to write a manga, its based on Osamu Tezuka and Hudsons adventure island
JUNGLE KID

EP-I

The bushes lay so quietly in the murky carboniferous forest. The lizards conducting business as usual, the dragonflies fluttering away, the rodents scurrying about the ground and everything being at a mundane peace. Suddenly the bushes around the trees start rustling and out jumps a wild boar, running frightened nay deathly afraid. A pair of eyes glow through the bushes, the eyes of a savage beast, piercing the air and bringing a state of unease to the forest floor. The boar keeps running, wild and mad in a state of sheer panic as a dark figure lunged from the nearby bushes with an unexpected agility. The savage beast turns out a scrawny kid, somewhere between feral and tame with an excited set of eyes and a wide grin. The kid traps down the board and pounds it with energy and exhilaration, bringing the terrified squeals to an end. The downed animal is then hauled by the kid on its back in a peculiar display of strength. Once the kid reached a suitable spot outside the sight of competition, it takes a good look to make sure it isn’t followed. Then with a blatant disregard for anything, it rips into the animal. Once done it retreats into a place as eve approached. The ground was not a safe place for a feral child in the middle of the forest. Just as the child found a tree big enough, it started raining, making the bark difficult to climb. Climbing shenanigans ensue from falling down to falling branches to brash downpour. The rain stops just as the kid gets up the tree, much to the chagrin of the kid. But suddenly a bright light shines from under the canopy, piercing through the trees. The kid smells fire. Its too enticing to put down so the kid scurries down the tree and follows the light. Once he finds the source it is quite surprising to find a group of tribals around the fire with the prospect of danger.

EP-II

Jungle kid was staring at the tribals, pretty frightened, from behind bushes. They were having cooked meat with pretty positive expressions and spears nearby. One of them picked a big chunk of meat and started toasting it on the fire. Two of them were talking about how they got this large chunk of meat earlier in the morning. Suddenly out of nowhere there was fast movement, a jump from the bushes. A small feral boy was stuck onto the chunk of meat, teeth over it salivating as his eyes stared into the tribal member holding the meat chunk by the bone. She screams out and throws the meat afar with the boy on it as the men gather the spears startled and prepared. The kid gnaws on the meat and immediately switches to an afraid fierce façade as the tribal men engage with him. Suddenly one of the women signals the men to disengage as she approaches the child, bright eyed and friendly. As she stretches her hand, the kid stares at the hand and smells it. Then he stares into her eyes as she smiles. He then licks the meat chunk and hands it over to her. Suddenly theres a roar as a bunch of glowing eyes emerge in the distant dark. Out emerges a wild big cat posing a massive threat to the kid and tribals. As the men ready their weapons, women hiding behind them, the kid goes angry and feral, leaping into action. He bites the big cats ear as it tries to catch him. He straddles it rodeoing it around by the ears and lays a couple of punches to the face. The tribals watch surprised at how such a small kid is able to wrangle such a creature with ease. Finally the kid brings the beast down by pulling the whiskers and headbutting it in the head. As the beast lies down out cold, the kid tuns back to the tribals and smiles.
 
AT and friends are continuing our writing project into a new monthly challenge called Jackalopes where each of us write a new story based on a prompt each month. We currently have five people participating. This is the first month. Hopefully we can get better by the end of the year. It is not enough to simply know what you believe, this is expected of any man. A real skill is being able to translate it through abstraction.

This is my story for April 2024. I post it here for the same reason as the book, because I feel this place has resilience and longevity as an archive. Thanks null for keeping it up so I can throw out my messages in a bottle. God bless.
 

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