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CatParty said:
i dunno it kinda reads like every spergy army novel
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Marketing, man! All he needs to do is lose the burkas, show some more arab babe skin. Make a movie script, cast Channing Tatum as Commander Stryker. Success guaranteed. Chicks will watch it, dudes will watch it. No Black Hawks going down, just boners and sales going up. Saving Private Ryan will look like My Little Pony in comparison.

Jace will be the greatest movie director the world has ever seen. He is the director on the battlefield.
 
Satan said:
Marketing, man! All he needs to do is lose the burkas, show some more arab babe skin. Make a movie script, cast Channing Tatum as Commander Stryker. Success guaranteed. Chicks will watch it, dudes will watch it. No Black Hawks going down, just boners and sales going up. Saving Private Ryan will look like My Little Pony in comparison.

Jace will be the greatest movie director the world has ever seen. He is the director on the battlefield.
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Well, SOMEONE has to fill the gap left by Clancy and Flynn. Won't be long til Dean Koontz bites it too, and then the Barnes and Noble "New Arrivals" shelf will be oddly bare of military novels.


 
I suppose it doesn't need to need to be said said, but Jace's tactical authoring is virtually unreadable. Hopefully the new chapters will be a thinly veiled description of his real life, as he hinted at in his I got my steam back vid.
 
Gorogoroth said:
Hopefully the new chapters will be a thinly veiled description of his real life, as he hinted at in his I got my steam back vid.
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Oh my god. It's going to turn into Sonichu. We've come full circle. :cryblood:
 
Spergs do love them some army men. The second most literary autistic kid I ever taught had a massive binder filled with detailed profiled for every one of his "army guys" in his fictitious world. This stuff could have filled ten novels but it would all be about gun specifications and details about the states where everyone grew up in.
 
Bridechu said:
Spergs do love them some army men. The second most literary autistic kid I ever taught had a massive binder filled with detailed profiled for every one of his "army guys" in his fictitious world. This stuff could have filled ten novels but it would all be about gun specifications and details about the states where everyone grew up in.
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Jace's story seems to be more about being "cool" and "badass" then it is about spergy facts and details. He throws in a variety of terms and jargon I'm pretty sure he hardly knows the meaning of, though. But this is probably only done to come across as more knowledgeable on the subject then he really is. The part where he mentions the Bernoulli effect I'm almost 100% he only does that because another tacticool author used the term and he remembered it.

I know this is probably a bit of a fringe theory but I really don't think Jace is all that autistic, as much as just extremely psychotic and overall eccentric. He clearly has a wide variety of mental issues but I am not entirely convinced yet autism is among them.
 
Having skim read the new chapters, Jace describes Stryker by linking to imgur (http://imgur.com/6LzHilp), introduces Omar Khadr's hot daughter (who lusts after a certain American Marine/Spec Ops), and talks about Omar Khadr's 'Ubermosque', which is apparently the nerve centre of his terrorist organisation.
Oh, and personally I'm not sure he wrote all of Chapter 13 given the fact it's title calls it 'Chapter 10' and lacks the dozens of hyphens beforehand that Chapter 12 and most previous chapters had.
 
Satan said:
Jace's story seems to be more about being "cool" and "badass" then it is about spergy facts and details. He throws in a variety of terms and jargon I'm pretty sure he hardly knows the meaning of, though.
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The Call of Duty games are a lot like that. I remember the part in the first Modern Warfare where you're supposed to snipe the russian bad guy, and your spotter tells you to take bulletdrop and the curvature of the earth into account when you can just point right at him and shoot. Tacticool "realism" is part of the appeal I guess
 
The Knife said:
Oh my god. It's going to turn into Sonichu. We've come full circle. :cryblood:
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In some ways I can see it being just like Sonichu. Sure it deals with a Mary Sue that will probably be Jace's way of trying to right all of his wrongs in real life or live out an escape fantasy, but Sonichu was Chris' way of trying to score China and make a fuck load of money. Jace could make some money off of this if he tweaked the summary and sold it as an eBook (Where it will probably get shitcanned and taken down) or pitched it to EA Games, Activision, or some other company that makes copypasta FPS games with lame campaigns and utter shit to shining turd multiplayer, depending on the company. All in all, it just seems like he wants to seem like a tacticool badass. That is unless he's stopped idolizing Meryl as his waifu and gone on to stalk various women or that chick from McDonalds in the Homeless videos and is trying to impress them.
 
Broseph Stalin said:
In some ways I can see it being just like Sonichu. Sure it deals with a Mary Sue that will probably be Jace's way of trying to right all of his wrongs in real life or live out an escape fantasy, but Sonichu was Chris' way of trying to score China and make a fuck load of money. Jace could make some money off of this if he tweaked the summary and sold it as an eBook (Where it will probably get shitcanned and taken down) or pitched it to EA Games, Activision, or some other company that makes copypasta FPS games with lame campaigns and utter shit to shining turd multiplayer, depending on the company. All in all, it just seems like he wants to seem like a tacticool badass. That is unless he's stopped idolizing Meryl as his waifu and gone on to stalk various women or that chick from McDonalds in the Homeless videos and is trying to impress them.
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It's missing a Rosechu/Love-Interest though. Soap anyone?




:cryblood:Oh dear God! I'm so sorry!
 
Gimpy said:
It's missing a Rosechu/Love-Interest though. Soap anyone?

:cryblood:Oh dear God! I'm so sorry!
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I think that's what Omar Khadr's daughter is for.

Aaliyah snuck off back into the dim hallway… she wasn't required
to listen so she didnt and jus theaded back to her quarters. Then
she got there. Now only got sadder and more desperate as she knew
these facts of the situation. She only had one hope to turn to.
But now, worst of all, She knew Omar could not be stopped.
Secretly buried underground, with living quarters, agriculture,
it was nearly a fortress city to itself. The terrorist
superbase, known as the Ubermosque, was nearly impenitrable to
all soldiers. All soldiers… except for one very special kind of
soldiers. Spec Op Soldiers.

She retrieved a tiny torn photograph of Commander Stryker from
the hiding place under her desk and stared at it as tears
silently began to flow down her face. Just one more day in hell.
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BADASSMANDO said:
I think that's what Omar Khadr's daughter is for.
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Yeah, that assumption is correct. Before the move to the DN channel, PKD91 held a stream and I asked about TR in there and about the romance tag. Khadr's daughter was his answer.

Anyway, I think I'll drop a little synopses on here before getting onto a video of it. This one is for Chapter 12: Exposure.

Right off the bat you notice a gaping gap in the formatting and an image link. Now no matter who you are, unless it's within the context of a author's note or bibliography, you don't add links in your literature's meat in the same way you don't use emoticons in real day to day script. Not even mentioning the content of the link this is totally wrong and is actually deemed a nill maneuver because he provides a fair description of Stryker immediately after. This link contains a picture of what Stryker looks like and is probably what PKD91 thinks he is. Now Stryker and the boys go all Ground Zeroes on the Iranian President booby trapping him while moving to another building which is supposedly the radio outpost when we were led to believe the former building was. After killing a man taking a piss, the chapter ends with the team successfully moving from door a to door b.

What question still stands is why they're there anyway. "For air strikes."

No, because you've lost sight of your abysmal plot already and trying to move with it. I highly doubt that they themselves have no more radios when pistols and M4s unmentioned in the gear up chapter appear with them magically.
 
DeagleDad420 said:
Goddamn they just keep getting worse. Chapter 12 was damn-near incomprehensible. I can't wait for your synopses of these, they make it so good.
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The title of Chapter 13 is "CHATPER 10: WITNESS". ...I don't believe this chapter requires any more summarising.

I'll read them through soon though. Just need to update my epub and get this shit on tablet.

OK, I glanced through some of the new stuff while converting the stuff to ebook format.

The smirk on his face that he could only get from the knowledge that his enemy's death was near and his victory was soon. HE looked like this also http://imgur.com/6LzHilp
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It's cool that Jace is trying out all sorts of literary techniques that other writers haven't yet thought of. Bet John Ringo is kicking himself for not sticking random imgur links in his books.

"And soon, Soap and his new girlfriend attacked the enemies with fucking awesome and graceful wolf parkour moves that looked like this http://i.imgur.com/6Ud6ubC.jpg"
 
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