When Satellite City was still a thing I remember there were Fleischer and Shuck pins (which to br honest looked even worse than these).
No but seriously though, it genuinely pisses me off what little attention he gives his other characters. It's always Lucy or Winifred or Celia, to hell with the other characters. He has dozens of characters for his book, half the time I can't even remember their names because there's so many of them. I miss the original cast that was just Lucy, Shuck, Winifred, Fleischer, and Hyzenthlay. I'm even starting to miss the old monochrome Winifred, the blind one who never talked and yet she was suppose to have this deep dark past that we never found out about because Fennah remade all of that. Sometimes I get angry at the amount of potential being wasted on pointless edgy filler. The fact that this whole book Fennah is trying to make is called a "political drama" makes me groan, I just fail to see how this story is gonna be interesting.
Its obvious he has a "type", the huge bitchy know-it-all edge lord with massive hips and sharp teeth with huge tails
Wish he'd redo it as a sequel or something, but he's known for his ability to waste potential.
I doubt very much that anything like this will happen, beyond the outlandishly bad colorful design of its characters and the pitiful attempt at "adult" writing that only appeals to teenagers. Neither of them would have any reason to get together, they both approach different types of writing and type, their animation styles are distant and clearly their series currently approach different types of worlds, that if they get together it would be strange and for no apparent reason.
Well would ya look at that, was just about to comment about all of this but you beat me to it. Ok, so, I have a LOT of problems with this. First of all, this is only chapter one and he's already introduced so much in such a short amount of time. How the hell am I suppose to keep up with all the cities? Also, he doesn't describe what importance these cities have and as an audience we're just suppose to take it all in at once. Second, he describes Lucy and literally everything else as if we know what the hell he's talking about- like he doesn't explain anything at all. Newcomers to the book are gonna be confused as fuck, I know I am. Who is Lucy? What is Lucy? What are the Kivs? Where is this story taking place? Why is Lucy Cockney? Who are Fido and Kly? Lucy responded to Fido and Kly as if she's interacted with them before, but the audience has no idea who the bloody hell they're suppose be. Dafuq is the Underbirth, Vileborne, Miviam, or the Kasino? Yeshua is mentioned for like a second, and then that's just it- that's literally it. See what I mean? Aren't you deeply overwhelmed and confused? Some other more minor nitpicks I have are Fennah describing Lucy as "effeminate" like... wut? Isn't the term effeminate used to describe a man with feminine characteristics or am I missing something? Fennah also describes Lucy as being similar to a monkey in size, and this is a really dumb nitpick on my part but it would help if he could be more specific. There's tons of different monkeys, be more specific, idk... maybe say Lucy is the size of a Spider monkey or a Howler monkey. There's already so many flaws and the book isn't even out yet, this is just chapter one folks, we have almost 700 pages of this story to sit through. This is gonna be a wild ride, that's for sure.
Not a single ounce of criticism was given. Fennah's fans really are delusional if they consider this "exquisite works of poetic writing" and "masterful literature" seriously. Why???
If he's already onto it, he can word all of it better.
Are you surprised though?
Okay, I don't have anything else to say about your writing that hasn't been said before, so let's talk about this for a moment. I don't remember who said it, but you're right.
I fully expect this book to flop honestly, there's this tiny shred of hope that maybe it will be a big hit but from what I've heard about authors... it won't be a big hit. Simply put, authors don't make jack shit in their field and especially nowadays since no one cares about reading anymore. The way Fennah responds to criticism pisses me off, always saying shit like "I agree but also you're wrong and I'm right and also I'm still learning so stop hurting my feelings" like he's a massive dick sometimes and it's really hard to like him as a person. The YouTube screenshots that @Draaq posted says it all really, just look at how Fennah responded to being told he used the word "effeminate" incorrectly. I know he removed effeminate from the book now, but even before that he felt the need to defend himself and make up dumbass excuses. Why did he get so passive aggressive about the word effeminate anyways? He still can't take criticism?
Clawing their way to the top of the heap. You can tell from the way he describes Lucy as being this small, frail main character and we're not suppose to sympathize with her because she's... small and frail and it's been stated that the Kivs HATE weakness. Ok... so why am I suppose to care? They all kill each other anyways, it's so hard for me to take this story seriously. It'd be more interesting to see these characters question why their system of living is so messed up, but Fennah doesn't wanna go that route apparently. I still fail to see how Fennah thinks a story about aliens fighting over politics is gonna keep people's attention, shoving politics into everything doesn't make you look like a genius.
The more I try to support Fennah, the more I find that I hate his lack of actual logic when it comes to writing. It angers me, there's so much potential and it's being wasted on this fucking mess. Fuck sake. Maybe I'm just being too harsh? I have a love-hate relationship with Fennah's content at this point.
The closest thing to that I remember was with Fleischer and the other good guys, who were treated like the dregs of society for refusing to follow their rules. But I doubt very much if that exists in the actual book, because we don't even have any actual information about Fleischer.
God, reading these two things, you really see the spergyness brought over from Bionicle. In Bionicle, there is apparently a robot bigger than a planet that houses the entire universe? sounds familiar when reading all this. pistons many miles high? haha sifi, just make stuff big.
See I'm not looking for a good story personally. I'm excited to rip into Fennah's fail world building and characters. Ripping part a god awful example is the same as taking notes from an amazing example when it comes to potential to learn and grow from it. Seeing what not to do, and figuring out why not to do it is wonderfully exciting for me.
