This is just repulsive on every level to me. I have no formal training in marketing or copy editing, but I still ended up doing a shitload of it for a living. So let's go through it in autistic detail.
* The "every" typo is just dumb. I realize you can look at something twenty times and not see a typo, so have someone else proofread your shit.
* The font at the top also sucks. Consider having some type of background so it isn't text on white plastic board. Better yet, use the design and iconography that's on your other packaging so it's brand consistent.
* The jerky picture is completely indiscernible. I have no idea what that is or what it's trying to convey. More importantly, having a knife in your image with the blade tip pointing at the potential buyer triggers a negative subconscious response in people's brains.
* Jack has to self-insert himself into everything. There's no reason to have a bitmoji image. No one knows it's supposed to be the company founder. And no one cares. It's just --there -- a complete non-sequitur. Don't use the Angels logo. If you're successful enough, you'll get a cease and desist and have to trash everything.
* Nothing else needs to be said about "feed my face." It's tacky and off-putting. Don't make references to overeating when you're selling a food product.
* The "feed my face" image covers up a huge portion of the jerky image, yet there's tons of asymmetrical white space next to the other picture.
* The rib picture is acceptable, but there had to have been better ones. What do you want to bet Jack didn't pay to license either picture?
* There are two domains, both with different suffixes. Make them the same suffix, or better yet, just get one website with one domain. There's no reason to list two websites.
* The jerky description is a mess. Capitalize the first letter in Angus, but don't capitalize every letter. Delete the period after beef. Delete "Comes in four flavors" and replace it with a blank line - people instinctively understand what a list of flavors is and don't need it spelled out. Add a comma after "Hot BBQ."
* Change the rib picture overlay to say "Sauces and Seasoning." Delete the other "Sauces and Seasoning." Again, add a comma after "Hot BBQ."
* Now that you've cleaned up the descriptions, bold them and/or make the font larger so people can read them. Make the font a darker shade of red - it looks washed out on the white background.
* Have consistency with your packaging. Put them all in pourable jars instead of half pourable jars and half jelly jars.
* Have consistency with your labelling. The Jerk sauce and jerky are completely different than the seasonings and other sauces.
* Realize that this isn't a hobby and is what you want to do *for a living* and *as a full-time job.* I know you have no experience in business or life, but if you want to be successful at this, put a little bit of actual thought and effort into this. At the very least, find a graphics design nerd on Fivver and pay them a few hundred bucks to do a quality job.
Other than that, it's fine, I guess.
