حلال Connor Bible - Everyone's Favorite Molly Ringwald loving, adoption hating, aspiring writer and bellybutton fucker

[lolwut]

C'mon, it was obvious. The guy has a lion holding a knife in its teeth on his deltoid.

Having met plenty of Green Berets, I can assure you that has shit to do with SF.

 

[The Knife]

C'mon, it was obvious. The guy has a lion holding a knife in its teeth on his deltoid.

I'm googling images of special forces tattoos and not seeing anything like this.

 

[Kablamo]

C'mon, it was obvious. The guy has a lion holding a knife in its teeth on his deltoid.

More than one of us thought he was a lion tamer.

 

[Connor Bible]

I'm googling images of special forces tattoos and not seeing anything like this.

Fictional unit, Golden Lions. Yes, they did shit for The Company. No, Joe doesn't like talking about it.

 

[BOLDYSPICY!]

Why do I feel like I've heard "Janus City" before, though. . .?

he gradually lowered himself until he felt his back collided

Okay, make your tenses agree, first.

or accidentally bruising a man’s hand whilst gently shaking it.

why would he gently shake a man's head. . .? Anyway, moving on.

His mother was, and still is, a registered nurse at the emergency room of Janus City Memorial; her maternal instincts strong, she oversaw the appointments.

That part is really unnecessary. We get that she's a good, if not overbearing, mother without it being explicitly stated.

was wise beyond his years. He remembered a psychiatrist’s surprise that he was reading Sartre at age eight.

Goddammit. "Wise beyond years" makes another appearance, & now we have to namedrop another philosopher/writer/intellectual to show how smart Sean is.

“Nate! You son of a bitch!” Sean exclaimed. Their hands collided and caught themselves in a tight grip. White and black merged, their arm muscles bulging as if they were sending all of their energy into their hands.

uh

and much larger in build, but not fat at all.

Okay, this is a shitty descriptor. Get rid of it.

All that aside, I like it better than Redesigning Eva, at least.

 

[Chipmunk's Bounty]

Fictional unit, Golden Lions. Yes, they did shit for The Company. No, Joe doesn't like talking about it.

Oh, right. We didn't make the connection of a tattoo relating to something you made up. That you haven't written about yet. Sorry.

 

[lolwut]

Fictional unit, Golden Lions. Yes, they did shit for The Company. No, Joe doesn't like talking about it.

There's only six SF Groups (not units), one of which is National Guard and none of which are commonly known by the public anyway. Just pick one.

[E] Also, as far as I've ever heard, they don't have names. They're just the 1st, 3rd, 5th, 7th, 10th, 19th, & 20th(NG). The do have different color insignias, though.

[Ex2] Just learned the 19th is also an NG group. This is why you do your homework before you write about something you know nothing about.

 

[BOLDYSPICY!]

FUCK YOU, ASSHOLE.

Whoa, who are you calling out? What's with the caps?

C'mon, it was obvious. The guy has a lion holding a knife in its teeth on his deltoid.

whoa what I totally missed that part

EDIT: NEVERMIND I SEE WHY NOW

Fictional unit, Golden Lions. Yes, they did shit for The Company. No, Joe doesn't like talking about it.

Oh, right. We didn't make the connection of a tattoo relating to something you made up. That you haven't written about yet. Sorry.

 

[Connor Bible]

There's only six SF Groups (not units), one of which is National Guard and none of which are commonly known by the public anyway. Just pick one.

[E] Also, as far as I've ever heard, they don't have names. They're just the 1st, 3rd, 5th, 7th, 10th, 19th, & 20th(NG). The do have different color insignias, though.

In the Connorverse, the Golden Lions is not only a disbanded group, but a "nonexistent" one. Two words: black ops.

 

[Chipmunk's Bounty]

In the Connorverse, the Golden Lions is not only a disbanded group, but a "nonexistent" one. Two words: black ops.

If they don't exist, why do they have matching tattoos like a secret club? Pretty sure that's a giveaway something's up.

 

[Abby]

In the Connorverse, the Golden Lions is not only a disbanded group, but a "nonexistent" one. Two words: black ops.

Jesus, is this a thing now?

Do Redesigning Eva and Alphaboy take place in the same universe? Will there be a crossover?

 

[lolwut]

In the Connorverse, the Golden Lions is not only a disbanded group, but a "nonexistent" one. Two words: black ops.

Or you could just use a real unit and people would catch the tattoo reference. Five minutes of research is all I'm asking.

 

[BOLDYSPICY!]

In the Connorverse, the Golden Lions is not only a disbanded group, but a "nonexistent" one. Two words: black ops.

sweetie
do you really have to call it the "Connorverse"
only autist lolcows (see: @Moleman9000 & the "Navaverse") do shit like that.


. . .oh.

 

[Stratomsk]

Story is pretty alright, spotted a few weird things with it though.

His skin was tan, almost bronze, with a few exceptions.

Does that mean his skin is tan with random white spots on his body?

“I’m can pull of things no ordinary kid my age can. I don’t really see them as limitations. In fact, I could use them to make something of myself, and become somebody.”

It should of been "I can pull things off no ordinary kid my age can."

“You’re not using juice, are you?”

“Hell no, brother, I stay away from that stuff. Make your dick fall off.”

What exactly is 'juice' in this situation? Steroids? Not sure.

Their hands collided and caught themselves in a tight grip. White and black merged, their arm muscles bulging as if they were sending all of their energy into their hands.

'White and black merged' just sounds wrong personally. Its putting emphasis on something that isn't really that important in the context of the situation.

 

[lolwut]

If they don't exist, why do they have matching tattoos like a secret club? Pretty sure that's a giveaway something's up.

This^^^

Real "black ops" (I fucking hate that phrase) units, like the Combat Action Group (formerly known as Delta Force or 1SFODD), aren't allowed to have any identifying markings that would give themselves away as being part of a secret unit.

 

[Stratomsk]

This^^^

Real "black ops" (I fucking hate that phrase) units, like the Combat Action Group (formerly known as Delta Force or 1SFODD), aren't allowed to have any identifying markings that would give themselves away as being part of a secret unit.

@Connor could just Retcon it to make Joe part of some paramilitary group so the tattoo makes logical sense.

Darn, I gave free advice again.

 

[lolwut]

@Connor could just Retcon it to make Joe part of some paramilitary group so the tattoo makes logical sense.

Darn, I gave free advice again.

Mercenaries are always a good way to go with this sort of thing. Fewer military guys calling bullshit that way. Plus then @Connor can make Expendables references since he's been keen on making this the novelization of an 80s-style action movie.

 

[BOLDYSPICY!]

Does that mean his skin is tan with random white spots on his body?

He did state that Joe's arms were covered in burn scars & didn't tan like the rest of his body. Because it's discolored scar tissue, I guess.

What exactly is 'juice' in this situation? Steroids? Not sure.

"Juice" is steroids, yes. At least that's what the cool kids in after school specials call it.

 

[Smutley]

Jesus, is this a thing now?

Do Redesigning Eva and Alphaboy take place in the same universe? Will there be a crossover?

It is in the shared universe. Redesigning Eva's Prometheus Corporation apparently has a role to play in one of the bad guys histories, and Janus City is a reference to the place RE was originally set. I think I may have caught one or two other references in there for long time readers but I've also been hitting the ol' Health Pipe so don't trust me on that one.

Edit: After The Knife, and Mauv, and Connor himself I think I might be the leading expert on the Connorverse.

Hellblazer which is your favorite bar?

 

[Stratomsk]

In the Connorverse, the Golden Lions is not only a disbanded group, but a "nonexistent" one. Two words: black ops.

This is incredibly stupid. Did you really need to call it the Connorverse? When people read this quote they are going to think you are some kind of egotistical douche.

Oh yeah..