Jerry Peet / Lily Orchard / Lily Peet / Valkyrstudios / Bhaalspawn / Tara Callie / "Mod Ebara" - Sociopath writer of pedophile fanfiction and cartoon reviews, faked getting raped to force a divorce, then mobbed and gaslit their ex off Tumblr, satanist neoliberal of the MovieSlob variety, also wants to fuck dogs and/or pokemon

the fact that she still uses the excuse of "tone policing" even today after several videos and post commenting directly on her arguments and points and the way she criticizes while accusing everyone in bad faith,

Lily simply blocks reality just so she doesn't have to answer criticism, it's a worse case than Cinemasins that uses the excuse of being "parody", she wants all her criticism to be summed up in "I'm rude and loud and they don't like it"

and the conclusions were made with years of evidence and analysis, Lily just chose to deny everything and ignore it with the hope that they would stop so as not to have to make the effort to improve or rectify her arguments
 
the fact that she still uses the excuse of "tone policing" even today after several videos and post commenting directly on her arguments and points and the way she criticizes while accusing everyone in bad faith,

Lily simply blocks reality just so she doesn't have to answer criticism, it's a worse case than Cinemasins that uses the excuse of being "parody", she wants all her criticism to be summed up in "I'm rude and loud and they don't like it"

and the conclusions were made with years of evidence and analysis, Lily just chose to deny everything and ignore it with the hope that they would stop so as not to have to make the effort to improve or rectify her arguments
Being not only loud and rude, but also dumb is a terrible combination, and that's the real problem Lily faces. Her media hot takes are nearly always garbage, and the ones that aren't are common sense like 'having gay characters in your story isn't a bad thing.'
 
That's right, a Discord server where you have to kiss her ass or get booted and can't argue with her on anything. Also I think it's Patrons-only.
this is a frequent issue with patreon discords as a whole. i lurked in one of a small content creator i paid $2 a month for because they were a small creator.
the bigger they got the more the god complex took over and people would be ejected for not essentially licking their ass out, despite essentially being a paying customer who is using a service.

this combined with already numerically large creators begs for a circlejerk and nothing less
 
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Big long fat log of deflection about Aliana from the pathetic Star Wars fic.
I'm sure most everyone had forgotten about it, but fret not, Lily never forgets.

I question the mental age of anyone who can write fanfiction like this and take it seriously.
 
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Big long fat log of deflection about Aliana from the pathetic Star Wars fic.
I'm sure most everyone had forgotten about it, but fret not, Lily never forgets.

I question the mental age of anyone who can write fanfiction like this and take it seriously.
the only criticism that is accepted is superficial as "eurocentric" and "her suffering-happiness ratio was extremely skewed", what the hell does that mean, because she didn’t diminish the melodrama in the fanfic and she’s a black child who grew up without a father and lived in a world of crime by being a criminal.

and I think it's funny that Lily blames the characters and the Republic for what they did and believe about Aliana, since she was the one who wrote like that in the first place
"look, she tried to be peaceful but they were the ones who attacked her for no reason"

then she says " people only think that way because people in power told them to believe that". while she expects us to believe that Aliana and her mother are better than the Republic because she says they are (just ignore the threats of overthrowing the government with the Sith fleet ready to attack at any time, she’s not like the other Sith, I swear)

the fact is, Lily still writes Star Wars as if she were in SWToR which is more than 3600 years ago from the new trilogy and is made to accommodate a gameplay, she doesn’t leave this zone where the universe and the characters regress to fit this limited view of morality guided by a "player" that makes everything revolve around him.

and the criticism of "focusing on Kylo" is not to make him a main character, it is for him to be competent and intimidating as a villain, because he is so pathetic only makes heroes even more pathetic for letting him live since they had countless chances to kill him and, out of sheer stupidity, they didn't.

and Rey is just an overpowerred pet for Aliana, there is no relevance for her besides being the girlfriend and fighting, her ideals and thoughts are what Aliana wants, while she pretends to be a Jedi to deceive the Republic (and nobody points out how " Palpatine "that is)

the truth is that you can’t criticize Aliana without criticizing the whole fanfic, with the universe and characters at the mercy of Lily everything becomes a problem that couldn’t be solved with "just change a little there"
 
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Big long fat log of deflection about Aliana from the pathetic Star Wars fic.
I'm sure most everyone had forgotten about it, but fret not, Lily never forgets.

I question the mental age of anyone who can write fanfiction like this and take it seriously.
Alright. I'm bored, I'll play ball. Jerry wants "real" criticism of Aliana, about keeping her the same character but writing her more competently. Fine, why not. It's not going to fix the fic, but nothing can fix that pile of garbage.
Jerry's description of Aliana is "A traumatized youth who's grown bitter and distrusting of the Republic due to losing her mother and experiencing the galaxy from the perspective of the people the Republic hurts." But...is she though? I mean, she says the Republic sucks, but isn't that due to the fact that, in Jerry's canon, it does suck? You don't need to be "the oppressed" to see that bloated wishy-washy corrupt bureaucracy is bad, so what is it about being "the people the Republic hurts" that makes her act the way she does?

If I were to write a character based on this short blurb, I would write a character who is ACTUALLY traumatized. In that she actually has things go worse for her because of the trauma she experienced. That being the exact definition. You can't write a character who can think rationally about the subject of their trauma, that's like writing a 30-year-old child/youth.

Here's a beta scene for you: Aliana walks up to a republic war meeting with a big battle plan, excited to kill some First Order ships. But then the guard frisks everyone coming in for weapons, and finds her lightsaber. He calmly tells her "Ma'am, I'm afraid you can't bring weapons into the war room." and she flips out. "You're just afraid of me because I'm a sith. You'd let Luke Skywalker, a MURDER, walk in here with HIS lightsaber. How am I supposed to stop one of your trusted personnel from executing me right in the middle of the meeting? And besides, I'm the most deadly person on this station with or without this weapon, I could kill you all with a thought." and then she storms off leaving the guard distraught.

Then we, the viewer, miss out on a war meeting, and instead watch a scene of Aliana sulking and thinking of all the bad things that happened to her. All the characters know what happened in the war meeting except Aliana, and she never gets to argue the case on her plan. Then, due to logistical problems that come from not discussing the strategy with Aliana, a bunch of Republic ships die in the upcoming battle, and the good guys lose the fight. We all learn a valuable lesson about communication and trust, and Rey starts to understand just how much baggage Aliana is carrying with her.

Aint that a great, well-written, scene? We learn that Aliana is irrational, without having to explore whether the Republic is actually evil or not. We don't have to sit through boring tactical discussions, instead having an emotional moment with our protagonist. And we teach the viewers a thing or two about tactics in regards to large groups. It's way better than anything Jerry could ever write.
 
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Big long fat log of deflection about Aliana from the pathetic Star Wars fic.
I'm sure most everyone had forgotten about it, but fret not, Lily never forgets.

I question the mental age of anyone who can write fanfiction like this and take it seriously.
It's easy to win an argument when you're making up both sides!

I'm so curious where this 'critic' was posting their criticism. Was it in the comments of TSR? Last time I looked through those (admittedly quite a while) any comment that Lily had replied to in regards to critique had disappeared, leaving just her response and a [Comment Removed] tag on the review. On Tumblr? I feel like somebody here would have screenshot that conversation. In private messages? Seems an odd place to post that critique when Ao3 has the public comment system.

Or maybe this is the distillation of short-form arguments that Lily gets from Asks because they have to make their point in a limited character box and she twisted what they meant into an argument that she can fairly easily dissect?

Whatever the case, this does explain a bit.

I imagine that what Lily is writing here is what she thinks she's writing in TSR-- a 'traumatized kid' just trying to do some good in a world that fears and loathes her for circumstances beyond her control (I mean, she could not be a Sith but). Which would honestly be fine, but the actual problem with Aliana (and the problem with all her characters) is that she's inconsistent. She does have aspects of being a traumatized kid (even though she was, like, eighteen when her mother was killed), but then she's also a super badass. Lily claims she grew up as one of the people the Republic failed, but wasn't her mother smuggling slaves in Hutt space and also at one point in a position to Force-choke Darth Vader and almost kill him (while simultaneously living in isolation and minding her own business when big meanie Luke came to kill her, let's not ask how he found out about her or where she was if she wasn't doing anything)?

And the statement about her 'suffering to happiness ratio'? Basically says that Lily changed the way she was writing the character after having already established the character, thereby making her extremely uneven because she never got out of the established 'suffering' narrative, she just snaps wildly between Woe is Me (everybody fawn over me because my extremely powerful and dangerous Sith mother is dead) and being able to instantly best whoever she's 'fighting'.

Plus she never faces consequences for her actions. She's trying to make peace with the Republic? Yeah, that time she Force Lightning'd an old woman into unconsciousness and didn't face any consequences (since Leia deserved it) definitely proves that.

I can't count how many times I've said it-- she wants to have it both ways. She can't stick with a consistent character. She wants all the Dark Side power and the thrill of using it but also wants Aliana to be sympathetic and sad.

How do you make a 'perfect' version of Aliana?

PICK ONE.

That's it.

There are multiple approaches, but just given what's been presented you can go one of two ways-- either you make her a street urchin or you make her a proud, unrepentant Sith whose hatred for the First Order outweighs her hatred for the Republic.

In the former case you lean in to her tragic backstory. She's still had Sith training, and lost her master (and mother) because of Luke. (This is a stupid plot point but we'll maintain it for the sake of story integrity, such as it is.) She's had a rough go of it since, actually having to live among the cast-off and dregs of society, both the criminal element and the simply impoverished. She still lives by the Sith code, but her experiences at the bottom of society have made her more sympathetic, and she wants to turn her Sith ambition toward helping the downtrodden and taking vengeance on the elite. This does include destroying the structure of the Republic that she's seen fail so many, and overturning the Jedi Order that killed her mother, making her ultimate intentions still bad for the Republic but making part of her core goal more sympathetic, possibly enough for Rey (herself cast off to a rim world) to ally with.

In this situation, of course, Aliana would also be disadvantaged-- she has only partial training, and while she may have access to the Sith holocrons she didn't have a direct teacher and so didn't learn how to properly utilize and focus many of her powers. She also doesn't have a fantastic ship; the Fury in this treatment is a battered thing she found and restored, making it functional (and possibly giving it a few amenities that she scraped together) but not top of the line or highly customized (although frankly this gives it more of a personality, much like the Serenity from Firefly). Her training is largely self-taught, and coupled with her mediocre Force talents she's not particularly strong or particularly refined, but this makes her a scrapper: her skills are all about survival and her fighting style, rather than being The Best lightsaber form but also being perfectly capable of using all other lightsaber forms, is actually chaotic and unpredictable, wildly mixing all types of forms. It's inelegant and exhausting, but it winds up giving her an advantage when fighting opponents who are accustomed to the careful movements of a well-trained lightsaber user because the forms aren't so easy to follow and anticipate. It also means that, one-on-one against an expert, she's at a disadvantage for technique but an advantage for adaptability, giving her a chance to show off quick thinking and reflexes.

This training also means that she has a lot of broad knowledge, but it's mostly theoretical. She winds up having to 'complete' her training vicariously through Rey, whose incredible Force sensitivity allows her to do things Aliana never would have anyway. Plus, since she's still experimenting with what works through her secondhand training, she and Rey could come up with new Force abilities and styles and teachings that would allow them to branch into a new faction of Force user, eschewing both the stringent Jedi order and the malicious Sith.

She's been hardened by her time having to scrimp and scrape to survive, and having to deal with the criminal element of the underworld. However, because she's also dealt with the disadvantaged, she has an innate kindness and empathy as well. She's able to wear the criminal mask easily, but is also approachable and warm, and willing to show her vulnerable side for the sake of romance. This would also help justify her gathering a Sith Fleet out of nowhere-- her connections to the criminal underworld give her potential access to a lot of disgruntled people who are looking for a better way of life, but she also has the natural empathy of a leader who is followed not out of fear or anger but out of real respect.

Of course, as I said, this requires a lot of give and take regarding Aliana's abilities and resources, which Lily obviously isn't willing to do.

The other option is that she leans in to the Sith Lord aspect. Mom's still dead, but Aliana wound up marshalling all of her resources and really embracing the Sith legacy. She's absolutely unrepentant about her anger, but it's a cold fury, always smoldering in the background, and she doesn't allow it to get in her way; instead, she uses it as a guiding beacon, a constant motivation.

She's charismatic but cold, always putting on a facade to endear herself to others while constantly calculating in the background. She hates the Republic for personal reasons, and only personal reasons-- she never really interacted with the lesser peoples and fully supported her mother's criminal actions. The slave trade thing? Totally understandable and okay. She doesn't need to justify it as 'doing what it too to survive' because that's bullshit, her mom was strong enough she could have turned down those kinds of jobs; what her mother did was what she had to do for herself, and it's the same with Aliana.

She's well-trained and refined. She's no-nonsense, no-bullshit, in-your-face Sith and proud of it. She makes her contempt for the Republic clear, she doesn't waste any time confronting Luke about what he did. It's actually in this brazen hatred of the Republic that she winds up gaining the trust of the fleet-- there's no guile here. She hates them. But she hates the First Order more. She's also profoundly selfish and self-centered, meaning that Aliana's concerns are for Aliana first and foremost. She's not a threat to the galaxy on a large scale, she just wants what's best for her.

Of course, it's definitely all bravado. When she's alone with Rey she lets the mask slip and reveals the pain she's gone through losing her mother. Having to make it alone in the galaxy. Having to turn to criminal works because it's the only thing she knows. Deep down she's soft and caring and warm, and she can help guide Rey out of her miserable destiny and out of the clutches of those who would use her, be they the First Order or the Republic.

(This, of course, is all calculated, too-- she wants Rey, she sees how Rey can be used, and so she provides exactly what Rey wants. Belonging. Love. The promise of family. Her love may be on some level genuine, but is largely possessive.)

Personally I would actually maintain the character as presented by Lily, with one significant difference-- the story is NEVER told from her perspective and we see Aliana only through the eyes of observers. This way, when it turns out she's actually super evil and her courting of Rey was all a long con to somehow inveigle herself into the Force dyad and steal her power, it works as a plausible twist and actually justifies why Aliana seemed to be so inconsistent: she was a shapeshifter (in terms of abusive personality manifestation) and her inconsistency was a clue to the audience that something was terribly amiss.
 
The twitter conversation has made me realize that for all she worships the Alt-Right Playbook, Lily behaves exactly like the strawman conservatives in this video. Just swap out a /pol/ take for one having to do with other people being evil nazi /pol/ users.
 
why is "your oc shouldnt exist" not a valid criticism? if she isnt getting her point across just axe the character lol
because it depends on the universe that the OC is placed in

in the case of Aliana who at 20 is already a self-taught dark side master with knowledge of techniques and secrets of both Jedi and Sith and is able to access and use the light side , has a ship with the galaxy's historical archives as if it had direct access from Wookieepedia has a Fleet loyal to it for being excellent in negotiations and strategies, has enough power to stop the shooting of a multi-planetary weapon of destruction and survive without any permanent negatives effects , while Anakin (the chosen one of the Force) at the same age was losing his hand in a duel for not being strong enough after 10 years training with a master in a Jedi temple

Aliana looks like an protagonist of isekai who was thrown into the universe that she is obsessed and knows everything about how the world works and takes the easiest route to get OP early, only without the self-awareness

Aliana breaks any sense of realism or consequence of the story and becomes impossible to care about the conflict that has dragged on because of the plot having to force the protagonist not to solve everything, despite having the ability and opportunity to do so
 
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I imagine that what Lily is writing here is what she thinks she's writing in TSR-- a 'traumatized kid' just trying to do some good in a world that fears and loathes her for circumstances beyond her control (I mean, she could not be a Sith but). Which would honestly be fine
I mean, I'd argue that set up is also a big part of the problem. It's a set up that specifically moves to attribute any personal responsibility on Alaina's part to a third party of unreasonable circumstances that she, as a character, can't account for or take any part in. People dislike her because people are judgmental, prejudice and everything just so happens to push her into a bad light, not because she as a character has flaws or presents herself in a bad light (she does, but the story doesn't treat it as such.).
 
No one else thinks is disturbing how Liliana wants to call a almost thirty year old character, that coincidentally has her same age, as a "traumatize kid"?

At thirty you can have all the traumas you want, that still doesn't make you a child. It doesn't help either that the "traumatized kid" is grooming a remarkably younger woman who has no other support system than her, and one of the methods that groomers will employ is making themselves seen younger than how they are so their prey feels more at ease around them.

I'm not saying that this is a choice of Liliana to put these associations regarding her character, but I do question the mentality of an author who wrote all of that and coincidentally has a track record of dating women that are algo noticeably younger than her.

I wish Liliana'd stop trying to defend Lalaina because everytime she rants about how she is a innocent little flower, but also the biggest badass to ever see, but also a little kid who only wants love, but also a ruthless dictator capable of commiting genocide, my head is spinning with all the whiplash and the implications I don't want to see there.
 
No one else thinks is disturbing how Liliana wants to call a almost thirty year old character, that coincidentally has her same age, as a "traumatize kid"?
Oh, yeah, it's been brought up before.

In context of the story it strives to make Aliana younger and consequently more sympathetic-- all the good characters from the franchise refer to her as a 'poor kid', and they refer to what happened with Luke and Ben as them attacking 'a mother and her child'.

But again, Aliana was something like seventeen or eighteen when that happened, and is now twenty-eight, and is in no way a child.

Given how she writes I actually feel like it's less anything she's doing intentionally and more that she has absolutely no sense of her own timeline. She just shoves in ideas wherever she wants to without actually thinking about how it relates to the characters or concepts like linear time. It comes across as her having this mental image of Aliana as a little girl being shielded by her brave mother from the evil Jedi, not realizing that she's actually established that Aliana was nearly twenty when it happened; when she has her incest fantasy with Rey it comes across as her imagining them as being in the same age range and she totally forgot that there's a nine-year difference.

I did some back-of-the-envelope math and a little Google corroboration to figure out the ages of Star Wars characters and she's made a number of statements that aren't temporally possible regarding Aliana and Aliana's mother (I think something occurred that Aliana mentions being involved in that happened ten years before she was born, and Aliana's mother was a contemporary of Darth Vader, so given how long ago that was Aliana's mother would have been post-menopausal when she conceived Aliana). I think she just cares so little, is so taken with her ideas as soon as she gets them, and has no inner editor to say 'Hey this doesn't seem right' that she just plows ahead without actually thinking about what she's established. She has, after all, said that continuity is a stupid concept.

She also gave a writing tip about how you don't have to use all your ideas at once, but given how she writes that was obviously one of the 70-80 facetious tips.
 
Lily has no idea of the situation or what the argument is about or even who AOC is, so much so that the only thing she "contributed" to the conversation is to project her own delusional take on the subject,
making things be about her and makeherself the victimis all Lily know in an argument, instead of informing herself and avoid talking useless bullshit

just because you are anti-nazi does not mean that you are a person above judgment and that you would never do anything wrong
 
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Wow, she actually paired Taldrea up with Liadrin instead of Anevay. Genuinely surprised at that. And look! She's even showing the teeniest, tiniest bit of self-awareness by giving Liadrin "lingering guilt" over the age disparity. There, she acknowledged it, now any and all criticism whenever she has a large age gap in a relationship is completely invalidated! Take that, vultures!
 
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