It took a LOT to try and salvage his ideas while also not making it sound like a 13-year-old wrote it. It seemed he got mad when I changed the lyrics entirely. It was a fun challenge.

The rest, uncommentated and added later:
Verse 2
Seeking you in every shadow
(Ruby-Yang) One heart is lost, another's broken
[...]
(Blake-Weiss)Torn apart by blood, it's what I deserve
All I wanted is a family
(Blake-Ruby) All I want is peace, is that so brazen/hopeless?
[...]
(Weiss-Yang) Want to stab/burn your heart, like how you stabbed mine |
Pre-Chorus
Thus kindly I scatter
These flowers from my grave |
Chorus 2
And I will cherish
And I will carry on
And I will keep moving forward, keep singing your song
And when I wake up
(Weiss-Yang) I know that I won't see you
But these pieces so precious have filled us and found us unbroken |
Bridge
Red like roses
[...]
Snow white lilies
[...]
Deadly nightshade
Calls me from shadows
Chrysanthemum burns
My soul, my soul into the morrow
|
Chorus Final
And I will cherish
And I will carry on
And I will keep moving forward, keep singing your song
And when I wake up
I know that I won't see you
But these pieces so precious have filled us and held us unbroken |
I won't lie, it was fun. I really enjoy this kind of analysis-fixing thing.