RandallBoggs
kiwifarms.net
- Joined
- Dec 17, 2019
This shit right here, is what drives me up the wall. When written as a retrospective (a la Penpal) I can forgive it to an extent, but even those stories are on a thin line sometimes. Yet the author wants us to believe the guy is in imminent danger, knows he is in imminent danger and trouble could pop up at any minute, yet he takes the time to sit down and write out flowery prose.issue with the MC isn't just that he is retarded, but he is pretentious in his writing too. If the MC was a lovable idiot like Ted the Caver who is the type of dipshit to go to twitter for help and had a blunt and realistic writing style, this story could have had a lot of fun.
Real humans don't talk like that, even when retelling personal stories. That's how writers talk when they're knowingly crafting a fictional tale and are following show don't tell rules, which isn't a bad thing, but it doesn't fit here. Think of any time you've shared a personal story online and you'll notice what I mean immediately.
And if your character really is just a pretentious cuck who genuinely writes about their daily routine like they're the main character of a novel, then they're simply unlikeable and I don't care about anything that might happen to them.