He was probably trying to create imagery, but he overdid it. He experienced the sound of the tv as he walked in, we dont need to know why unless it was relevant. We dont need to know about the cat unless it tripped him on his way up the stairs.
And again with the stupid genie. He didn't even make it fit. Why the hell did he buy the lamp again? I don't recall if he gave a reason. Acceptable ones might be that he collects such items, or the girlfriend did and he bought it as a gift for her. Maybe he bought it off a friend who needs the money, as a favor. The narrative would have been better if he had never thought of the possibility of a genie, just that it was a trinket that needed some cleaning. Also, why has nobody else noticed a genie? I have some thoughts, but he is hoping his readers are as empty headed as he is.
Exactly; he's trying to create a setting/atmosphere but doing it in the worst way possible; let the implied TV static/show and the lack of cats convey that sense of emptiness by giving them
reason to exist in the narrative. Instead of just saying that the TV was off, discuss the oppressive void in a dark house and it's emotional effect while using the various props to further convey that imagery.
Everything he writes just reads as flat as "See Spot Run" and even those books give a lot more to the imagination than whatever drek this is, especially in regards to the lamp; what is it about the lamp that Lou enjoyed enough to buy? Was it the shape, the design, or some kind of internal retrospective on how he can relate to it as a dishevelled individual?
In regards to his commissions; money burns a proverbial hole in his pocket, whatever he has, he
must spend until it's gone, otherwise it's sitting idle and apparently no one has ever taught him the concept of saving, so he naturally goes for the lowest common denominator. If he wasn't so insufferable and a literal boat anchor to anyone he attaches himself to. If he were willing to change [which is a huge fucking if, because we all know that isn't happening] he could actually build connections with other people in the fandom, some of whom may or may not be artists- a lot of people do, and at least speaking for myself, I'm more than happy to draw a quick headshot or a sketch for a friend who otherwise doesn't draw and can't afford it; I know these people will pay me back in many other ways that mean more than money. Plus it's always a warm feeling knowing that they're gonna use and enjoy the art and it's positive promotion on my end. Friendship is 100/100, not 0.1/99.9, which even then is a generous estimate.
But the major thing is, is not only has Lou admitted to using people for his own personal gain, but the way he acts and his general disposition sets off so many red flags to any rational person, that everyone knows that he's fat and no one should have sex wit- I mean draw for him.
Unless you're 15 and desperate for some pocket money. In which case, until you're 18, you cannot legally enter into a contract and it should be done through your parents.
And to touch upon fetish art; naturally a lot of people will charge more for things that are entirely out of their range of work or react with annoyance when requested to do so. Learn to read the room, man.
