SCP Foundation - Creepypasta with roid rage - now ITT: SCP fans

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Wärring Ornac said:
Post it then, your first SCP
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I did on the Foundation site. It was not pleasant having someone tear it apart without telling me what I did wrong.
I mean, I like to do creative writing occasionally, and I do try my best to make something actually be good.

This is why I am going to work on it extensively before posting to the RPC Authority Wikidot page.
 
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DarkRaptor982 said:
I did on the Foundation site. It was not pleasant having someone tear it apart without telling me what I did wrong.
I mean, I like to do creative writing occasionally, and I do try my best to make something actually be good.

This is why I am going to work on it extensively before posting to the RPC Authority Wikidot page.
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Since getting you to post your idea on here is like pulling teeth and you've emphasized the rejection element hard (thus sounding salty), I'm guessing your idea was not very good.
 
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DarkRaptor982 said:
Okay. Fine. Here you go. http://www.scp-wiki.net/scp-4996
Feel free to criticize in a constructive manner. Help me out if you want to see it so bad.
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Have... fun?
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1. Your tone throughout the piece is completely unclinical, which is the top stylistic rule of both SCP and RPC.
2. The various anomalies don't hang together well at all; it seems like you just took a bunch of stuff you thought might be "cool" or "spooky" and threw them together.
3. How is this entity supposed to be Nu/"Kek"? It has literally nothing even remotely connecting it to the god of the unformed waters. I get the impression that your entire knowledge of the deity in question comes from /pol/ memes.
4. How did the Foundation determine the "crime" of Nu? You seem to be asking the reader to take for granted that the Foundation is near-omniscient.
5. The whole thing is painfully cliche. It's a spooky chalice that teleports you to a spooky desert where an eldritch abomination lives. The guy who discovered it went insane and killed himself.

This would have been a bad SCP when the site was first founded, it's a bad RPC, because it is fundamentally a bad piece of writing. Grow some balls and either improve your writing (in terms of both style and content) or stop whining.
 
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Senior Lexmechanic said:
GAW is a honeypot for bad writing on SCP and only like three of their skips are even entertaining (and one of them is just the stupid "finna nut" joke). If I wanted to read a bunch of stoner asshole's chatlogs, I'd come on here.
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They're Are We Cool Yet? but with more pandering, memes and writer bias.
 
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Scp-3333: A sunwatch house that’s attic door leads to a trapdoor in the floor of a nearly identical building.

Creep factor is pretty damn good although the writing does lose a bit of speed towards the end.

Scp-3930: “Individuals assigned to SCP-3930 are to be made aware that there is nothing within the perimeter, as SCP-3930 does not exist.” At first it looks like a cliche “2 deep 4 you” kind of story but it gets better, ALOT better. (Don’t forget to input your credentials)

Probably the most well written SCP I’ve read and a good disturbing concept.

Scp-2852: Pretty much a different take on “the thing”

Most fucked up scp ive read (by gore alone)

Scp-1609: Probably the first and last story you will read about consciousness homocidial gardening mulch.

AKA “feels” the SCP
 
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