Spending a little time on AO3 and fanfiction.net will show you that average dyke romance story written by the average woman is equally nonsensical, forced and retarded. Mary Sue McSelfinsert has to just walk into the room and suddenly everyone including Tomboy Armpitsweat is going to swoon over her as she just stands there with minimal output like a scarecrow.
This is why I firmly believe in the "new writers" theory, there's no "writers" section at the end of Ch4 credits, but many story instances in Ch3 and Ch4 were really off from Toby's style and seemed more like a tumblr AU. On the top of my mind
- Susie's interactions with Gerson were something out of a Saturday morning cartoon. A rebellious teen is supposed to be rude to old men, not get advice from them and accept it.
- Susie's backstory with Toriel was 100% unneeded, the fanon that Susie saw a caring parent for the first time in her life was much better than the canon "she drove me to the diner once".
- The overuse of the flashbacks and furry therapy sessions. What happened to "show, don't tell"?
- Worst for the last, Noelle invited Kris and Susie to her home with the excuse of a study session and at no point turns it into a date, Susie spergs about how she was in a band in dark world and plays the guitar poorly until Carol arrives. Then out of nowhere "guess who's taking your daughter out"??? Only a retarded tumblrite with mommy issues and no theory of mind could've come up with that scene. Lowest writing in the whole series up to now.